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Ghazal: Zaraa Saa....! -
26th July 2011, 07:36 PM
Salaam...!
Ek lambe arse ke baad aaya huN bazm maiN.. aur likh bhi arse baad hi raha huN.. Aur behr bhi ye pehli baar use kar raha huN .. aur badi jaldi main likh ke le aaya huN ...umeed hai aap sab apni aara se nawaazeNge.. aur khamiyoN ko behichak bayaan karenge ... ======================= हमको है हमसे शिकवा ज़रा सा ... होता है सब कुछ, मिलता ज़रा सा ... होती है फितरत, दुनिया मे सबकी ... बातें बड़ी पर, जज्बा ज़रा सा... तौबा का कोई, मतलब नहीं अब ... पहले खुदा से, डरता ज़रा सा ... है पास मंजिल, गर सामने तो ... कटता नहीं क्यूँ, रस्ता ज़रा सा .. मर जायेंगे अब, आशिक यहाँ पर.. रुख पे करो तुम, पर्दा ज़रा सा,, मिलना बिछड़ना, मुझसे तू अक्सर... रिश्ता तू चाहे, रखना ज़रा सा... और ....! आलम 'सिफ़र' की, ग़ज़लों का आला ... बाहर बहर से, मक्ता ज़रा सा... ------------------------- Humko hai humse, shikwa zara saa… Hota hai sab kuch, milta zara saa… Hoti hai fitrat, duniaa main sabki BaateN badi par, jazba zara saa … Tauba ka koi, matlab nahi ab .. Pehle khuda se, darta zara saa… Hai paas manzil, gar samne to.. Kat-ta nahi kyuN, Rasta zaraa saa.. Mar jaayeNge ab, Aashiq yahaN par.. Rukh pe karo tum, Parda Zara saa,… Milna bichadna, mujhse tu aksar.. Rishta tu chaahe, Rakhna zara saa.. Aur ..! Aalam ‘sifar’ ki, ghazloN ka aalaa… Baahar beh’r se, maqta zara saa… =========================== Kunaal:- 26-07-2011 =========================== Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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26th July 2011, 09:25 PM
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बातें बड़ी पर, जज्बा ज़रा सा... bahut acha kaha hai bhayee .... मर जायेंगे अब, आशिक यहाँ पर.. रुख पे करो तुम, पर्दा ज़रा सा,, are yaar, maarnaa chahte ho kyaa maktaa acha laga uske liye khaas daad |
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26th July 2011, 11:34 PM
kunaal bhai
radhe radhe मर जायेंगे अब, आशिक यहाँ पर.. रुख पे करो तुम, पर्दा ज़रा सा,, bahut khooooooooob ...........  Aapka Apna Ishk 'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है email: rkm179@gmail.com 
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27th July 2011, 07:53 AM
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रिश्ता तू चाहे, रखना ज़रा सा.. kyun sitam dhaate ho kunnu...uff salaam hai tumhari is creation ko...pata nahi tumhe yaad ho na ho july mein tumne meri ek nazm mein likhaa tha ki bhai itni soch aur gehraayi kaha se laate ho kaash mein bhi itni soch laa paata likhne mein aaj mujhe us baat ka jawaab dena ka matlab nazar nahiN aata bas faqr hai tumpar yunhi likhte raho -tumhara apnaa Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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27th July 2011, 12:52 PM
Mar jaayeNge ab, Aashiq yahaN par..
Rukh pe karo tum, Parda Zara saa,… Aalam ‘sifar’ ki, ghazloN ka aalaa… Baahar beh’r se, maqta zara saa… Very Impressive ... Good Expression ... Kunaal Ji !!  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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27th July 2011, 12:55 PM
Aalam ‘sifar’ ki, ghazloN ka aalaa…
Baahar beh’r se, maqta zara saa… hasi nahi ruk rahi hai....jis spot par beher toDa hai kamaal hai..... very nice trick.... maqta aur khas taur se uska saani bahut accha laga |
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28th July 2011, 11:47 AM
Aadaab Kunaal Sahab
Janaab kafi arse ke baad aapka kalaam padhkar inteha hi khushi mili aapke kalaam padhna hamesha hi accha lagta hai ese hi apni shayri se mehfil men chaar-chaand lagate rahiye duaa ke saath daad hazir hai kubool kare..T C Quote:
Dunia ke sitam ki koi perwah nahi mujhko, wo kyoun mujhpe ungliya uthaye ja rahe hain. Jis shaks ko janta tha ek chehre se ''kashif'' Uske kitne chehre samne laye ja rahe hain.  |
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28th July 2011, 12:17 PM
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28th July 2011, 12:32 PM
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Radhika  Seene Me Zakham Utarey Chale Gaye Jo Humpe Guzari Guzarey Chale Gaye Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye E-mail : radhika.nm2@gmail.com |
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30th July 2011, 12:20 PM
हमको है हमसे शिकवा ज़रा सा ...
होता है सब कुछ, मिलता ज़रा सा ... kunaal bhai namaskaar..bahot dinoeN baad aapka likha padh raha hun... pehla misra keh raha hai aapko aapse shikwa hai...lekin doosra misra uss baat ko compliment nahi kar raha..doosra misra yeh ho sakta hai ki "chahe jo sab kuch, milta zaraa sa"..halaaki aap iss sher ke maalik hai to aap meri gustaakhi to chota bhai samjh kar mauf kar dijiyega.. होती है फितरत, दुनिया मे सबकी ... बातें बड़ी पर, जज्बा ज़रा सा... wahhh..bahot hi badhiya khyaal hai..daad तौबा का कोई, मतलब नहीं अब ... पहले खुदा से, डरता ज़रा सा ... bahot ache..doosra misra aise bhi kahaa ja sakta hai -> pehle khuda se dar tha saraa sa है पास मंजिल, गर सामने तो ... कटता नहीं क्यूँ, रस्ता ज़रा सा .. pehla misraa stretched hai thoda sa..hai paas manzil gar saamne to..donoeN ek hi baat hai..aap dekh lijieyegaa.. मर जायेंगे अब, आशिक यहाँ पर.. रुख पे करो तुम, पर्दा ज़रा सा,, wahhh...awwal..daad मिलना बिछड़ना, मुझसे तू अक्सर... रिश्ता तू चाहे, रखना ज़रा सा... yeh sher haasil-e-ghazal hai mere hisaab se..bahot hi umda और ....! आलम 'सिफ़र' की, ग़ज़लों का आला ... बाहर बहर से, मक्ता ज़रा सा... behr ki jaankaari mujhe itni hai nahi..magar aapki ghazaloeN ka aalam bahot aala hai sach meiN...mujhe intezaar rehta hai aapki creations ka..kuch kahin zyaada bol gaya hun to apna samjh kar mauf kar dijiyega..khush rahiye..god bless u ------------------------- Humko hai humse, shikwa zara saa… Hota hai sab kuch, milta zara saa… Hoti hai fitrat, duniaa main sabki BaateN badi par, jazba zara saa … Tauba ka koi, matlab nahi ab .. Pehle khuda se, darta zara saa… Hai paas manzil, gar samne to.. Kat-ta nahi kyuN, Rasta zaraa saa.. Mar jaayeNge ab, Aashiq yahaN par.. Rukh pe karo tum, Parda Zara saa,… Milna bichadna, mujhse tu aksar.. Rishta tu chaahe, Rakhna zara saa.. Aur ..! Aalam ‘sifar’ ki, ghazloN ka aalaa… Baahar beh’r se, maqta zara saa… =========================== Kunaal:- 26-07-2011 ===========================[/SIZE] gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai? musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai? -------------------------------------------------- |
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26th August 2015, 06:57 PM
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Kunaal ji....aapki yeh 4 saal purani gazal par aaj nazar gye, pta nahi kaise reh gye meri nazaroN se, yu to aapki har gazal ham padte haiN aap jaise umda shayroN ko padna accha lagta hai, hamsha ki tarah yeh gazal bhi behad khoobsurat bani hai aur jo sher meri mutabik gazal ki jaan rha wo yeh hai.Milna bichadna, mujhse tu aksar.. Rishta tu chaahe, Rakhna zara saa.. bazm meiN aate rhiye aur apni tazza gazloN se es bazm ko rangeen banate rhiye. .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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Waah -
26th August 2015, 11:09 PM
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बाहर बहर से, मक्ता ज़रा सा... Waah Kunal Bhai kya kehne! manziloN ne sun liya toh aur woh badh jaayeNgi |
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