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de gaya bewafai ka zakham wo de gaya (gazal) - 6th November 2006, 04:04 PM

दोस्तो अपने नये कलाम के साथ आपकी महफ़िल में शिरकत कर रहा हूँ उम्मीद करता हूँ की आपका प्यार मिलेगा....

दे गया बेवफ़ाई का ज़खम वो दे गया
बिन मांगे आँखों में शबनम वो दे गया ....

तेरा नज़राना भी ज़ालिम तेरी तरह
ढक के ख़ुशियों से ग़म वो दे गया ....

देखकर वो मेरे ज़ख़्मों की जलन
ज़हर में मिलाके मरहम वो दे गया ....

छीनकर मुझसे वो मेरी ज़िंदगी
ज़िंदा रहने की कसम वो दे गया ....

चले जाना उसका सदमे से कम नही
रो उंगा उम्र भर ऐसा मातम वो दे गया ....

देके आँसू तन्हाई और सिसकियाँ
फिर भी कुश लगता है कम वो दे गया .....

छुड़ाके हाथ बीच राह में दोस्तो
दर्द का सफ़र मेरी कलम को दे गया ...

याद में उसकी गुनगुनायगा 'वीर'
मेरे होंठों को ऐसी नज़म वो दे गया ...

आपके जवाब का मुंतज़िर आपका.......राज.......

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dosto apne naye kalaam ke saath apki mahfil mein shirkat kar raha hoon ummeed karta hoon ki apka pyar milega....

de gaya bewafai ka zakham wo de gaya
bin mange aankhon mein shabnam wo de gaya ....

tera nazraana bhee zalim teri trah
dhak ke khushiyon se gam wo de gaya ....

dekhkar wo mere zakhmon ki jalan
zahar mein milake marham wo de gaya ....

cheenkar mujhse wo meri zindagi
zinda rahne ki kasam wo de gaya ....

chale jana uska sadme se kam nahi
ro unga umr bhar aisa matam wo de gaya ....

deke aansu tanhai aur siskiyan
phir bhee kush lagta hai kam wo de gaya .....

chudaake haath beech raah mein dosto
dard ka safar meri kalm ko de gaya ...

yaad mein uski gungunaayga 'veer'
mere honthon ko aisee nazam wo de gaya ...

apke jawaab ka muntzir apka.......raj.......


un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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6th November 2006, 04:11 PM

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दोस्तो अपने नये कलाम के साथ आपकी महफ़िल में शिरकत कर रहा हूँ उम्मीद करता हूँ की आपका प्यार मिलेगा....

दे गया बेवफ़ाई का ज़खम वो दे गया
बिन मांगे आँखों में शबनम वो दे गया ....

तेरा नज़राना भी ज़ालिम तेरी तरह
ढक के ख़ुशियों से ग़म वो दे गया ....

देखकर वो मेरे ज़ख़्मों की जलन
ज़हर में मिलाके मरहम वो दे गया ....

छीनकर मुझसे वो मेरी ज़िंदगी
ज़िंदा रहने की कसम वो दे गया ....

चले जाना उसका सदमे से कम नही
रो उंगा उम्र भर ऐसा मातम वो दे गया ....

देके आँसू तन्हाई और सिसकियाँ
फिर भी कुश लगता है कम वो दे गया .....

छुड़ाके हाथ बीच राह में दोस्तो
दर्द का सफ़र मेरी कलम को दे गया ...

याद में उसकी गुनगुनायगा 'वीर'
मेरे होंठों को ऐसी नज़म वो दे गया ...

आपके जवाब का मुंतज़िर आपका.......राज.......

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dosto apne naye kalaam ke saath apki mahfil mein shirkat kar raha hoon ummeed karta hoon ki apka pyar milega....

de gaya bewafai ka zakham wo de gaya
bin mange aankhon mein shabnam wo de gaya ....

tera nazraana bhee zalim teri trah
dhak ke khushiyon se gam wo de gaya ....

dekhkar wo mere zakhmon ki jalan
zahar mein milake marham wo de gaya ....

cheenkar mujhse wo meri zindagi
zinda rahne ki kasam wo de gaya ....

chale jana uska sadme se kam nahi
ro unga umr bhar aisa matam wo de gaya ....

deke aansu tanhai aur siskiyan
phir bhee kush lagta hai kam wo de gaya .....

chudaake haath beech raah mein dosto
dard ka safar meri kalm ko de gaya ...

yaad mein uski gungunaayga 'veer'
mere honthon ko aisee nazam wo de gaya ...

apke jawaab ka muntzir apka.......raj.......

rajveer ji namaskaaR....!
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"cheenkar mujhse wo meri zindagi
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bahut khoob.............!

yu hi likhtey rahiye aur dua hai ki aap sadha kush rahey. yeh dard aapki zindgi se sadha door rahey.

aapki dost


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6th November 2006, 04:17 PM

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दोस्तो अपने नये कलाम के साथ आपकी महफ़िल में शिरकत कर रहा हूँ उम्मीद करता हूँ की आपका प्यार मिलेगा....

दे गया बेवफ़ाई का ज़खम वो दे गया
बिन मांगे आँखों में शबनम वो दे गया ....

तेरा नज़राना भी ज़ालिम तेरी तरह
ढक के ख़ुशियों से ग़म वो दे गया ....

देखकर वो मेरे ज़ख़्मों की जलन
ज़हर में मिलाके मरहम वो दे गया ....

छीनकर मुझसे वो मेरी ज़िंदगी
ज़िंदा रहने की कसम वो दे गया ....

चले जाना उसका सदमे से कम नही
रो उंगा उम्र भर ऐसा मातम वो दे गया ....

देके आँसू तन्हाई और सिसकियाँ
फिर भी कुश लगता है कम वो दे गया .....

छुड़ाके हाथ बीच राह में दोस्तो
दर्द का सफ़र मेरी कलम को दे गया ...

याद में उसकी गुनगुनायगा 'वीर'
मेरे होंठों को ऐसी नज़म वो दे गया ...

आपके जवाब का मुंतज़िर आपका.......राज.......

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dosto apne naye kalaam ke saath apki mahfil mein shirkat kar raha hoon ummeed karta hoon ki apka pyar milega....

de gaya bewafai ka zakham wo de gaya
bin mange aankhon mein shabnam wo de gaya ....

tera nazraana bhee zalim teri trah
dhak ke khushiyon se gam wo de gaya ....

dekhkar wo mere zakhmon ki jalan
zahar mein milake marham wo de gaya ....

cheenkar mujhse wo meri zindagi
zinda rahne ki kasam wo de gaya ....

chale jana uska sadme se kam nahi
ro unga umr bhar aisa matam wo de gaya ....

deke aansu tanhai aur siskiyan
phir bhee kush lagta hai kam wo de gaya .....

chudaake haath beech raah mein dosto
dard ka safar meri kalm ko de gaya ...

yaad mein uski gungunaayga 'veer'
mere honthon ko aisee nazam wo de gaya ...

apke jawaab ka muntzir apka.......raj.......

pranaam mere big B

wah kya baat hai yaar apki ye gazal to jaise dard ko hi dard de rahi hai!!!!!!!!!

big b dil ko chhu gayipuri peshkas aur kabiletarif aapka andaz-e-bayan,aur ye sher mujhe bahot hi pasand aaya

tera nazraana bhee zalim teri trah
dhak ke khushiyon se gam wo de gaya ....

mere big b dard aapki zindagi se door rahe yehhi dua karta hu khuda se

is dard ko dard dene wali peshkas ke liye dil se nikali daad kubul kijiye


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bahut khub - 6th November 2006, 04:46 PM

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दोस्तो अपने नये कलाम के साथ आपकी महफ़िल में शिरकत कर रहा हूँ उम्मीद करता हूँ की आपका प्यार मिलेगा....

दे गया बेवफ़ाई का ज़खम वो दे गया
बिन मांगे आँखों में शबनम वो दे गया ....

तेरा नज़राना भी ज़ालिम तेरी तरह
ढक के ख़ुशियों से ग़म वो दे गया ....

देखकर वो मेरे ज़ख़्मों की जलन
ज़हर में मिलाके मरहम वो दे गया ....

छीनकर मुझसे वो मेरी ज़िंदगी
ज़िंदा रहने की कसम वो दे गया ....

चले जाना उसका सदमे से कम नही
रो उंगा उम्र भर ऐसा मातम वो दे गया ....

देके आँसू तन्हाई और सिसकियाँ
फिर भी कुश लगता है कम वो दे गया .....

छुड़ाके हाथ बीच राह में दोस्तो
दर्द का सफ़र मेरी कलम को दे गया ...

याद में उसकी गुनगुनायगा 'वीर'
मेरे होंठों को ऐसी नज़म वो दे गया ...

आपके जवाब का मुंतज़िर आपका.......राज.......

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dosto apne naye kalaam ke saath apki mahfil mein shirkat kar raha hoon ummeed karta hoon ki apka pyar milega....

de gaya bewafai ka zakham wo de gaya
bin mange aankhon mein shabnam wo de gaya ....

tera nazraana bhee zalim teri trah
dhak ke khushiyon se gam wo de gaya ....

dekhkar wo mere zakhmon ki jalan
zahar mein milake marham wo de gaya ....

cheenkar mujhse wo meri zindagi
zinda rahne ki kasam wo de gaya ....

chale jana uska sadme se kam nahi
ro unga umr bhar aisa matam wo de gaya ....

deke aansu tanhai aur siskiyan
phir bhee kush lagta hai kam wo de gaya .....

chudaake haath beech raah mein dosto
dard ka safar meri kalm ko de gaya ...

yaad mein uski gungunaayga 'veer'
mere honthon ko aisee nazam wo de gaya ...

apke jawaab ka muntzir apka.......raj.......
hi Raj ji
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aapka naya kalam bahut pasand aya, yu to maine aapke bahut se kalam pade hai, magar bahut kam tarif kar payi hu, . magar me regularly aapke kalam padti ho. aapki ye lines
chale jana uska sadme se kam nahi
ro unga umr bhar aisa matam wo de gaya
muje behad pasand aayi, aur mere dil ko gahrai tak chu gayi...
sach hai kisi ka chale jana sadam hi to hota hai.. jis kabi ubra nahi ja sakta.
agle kalam ke intezar rehega...
aapki dost
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very beautiful gazal - 6th November 2006, 05:19 PM

mere veer ji.............saadar pranaam,

veer ji fir ek khuubsurat kalaam..........wah...........tarif ke liye shabd nahi hai........kya kahu....har baar aap nishabd karke chhod dete ho hume........bas har ek sher bahot pyara hai......meri dil se daad kabuul kijiye ji..........

grazie

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दोस्तो अपने नये कलाम के साथ आपकी महफ़िल में शिरकत कर रहा हूँ उम्मीद करता हूँ की आपका प्यार मिलेगा....

दे गया बेवफ़ाई का ज़खम वो दे गया
बिन मांगे आँखों में शबनम वो दे गया ....

तेरा नज़राना भी ज़ालिम तेरी तरह
ढक के ख़ुशियों से ग़म वो दे गया ....

देखकर वो मेरे ज़ख़्मों की जलन
ज़हर में मिलाके मरहम वो दे गया ....

छीनकर मुझसे वो मेरी ज़िंदगी
ज़िंदा रहने की कसम वो दे गया ....

चले जाना उसका सदमे से कम नही
रो उंगा उम्र भर ऐसा मातम वो दे गया ....

देके आँसू तन्हाई और सिसकियाँ
फिर भी कुश लगता है कम वो दे गया .....

छुड़ाके हाथ बीच राह में दोस्तो
दर्द का सफ़र मेरी कलम को दे गया ...

याद में उसकी गुनगुनायगा 'वीर'
मेरे होंठों को ऐसी नज़म वो दे गया ...

आपके जवाब का मुंतज़िर आपका.......राज.......

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dosto apne naye kalaam ke saath apki mahfil mein shirkat kar raha hoon ummeed karta hoon ki apka pyar milega....

de gaya bewafai ka zakham wo de gaya
bin mange aankhon mein shabnam wo de gaya ....

tera nazraana bhee zalim teri trah
dhak ke khushiyon se gam wo de gaya ....

dekhkar wo mere zakhmon ki jalan
zahar mein milake marham wo de gaya ....

cheenkar mujhse wo meri zindagi
zinda rahne ki kasam wo de gaya ....

chale jana uska sadme se kam nahi
ro unga umr bhar aisa matam wo de gaya ....

deke aansu tanhai aur siskiyan
phir bhee kush lagta hai kam wo de gaya .....

chudaake haath beech raah mein dosto
dard ka safar meri kalm ko de gaya ...

yaad mein uski gungunaayga 'veer'
mere honthon ko aisee nazam wo de gaya ...

apke jawaab ka muntzir apka.......raj.......


Waah...raajveer saheb harash ka adaab

bahoot hi sunder our oomda kalaam pesh kiya aapne

hameshaan ki tarah....umeed hai isi tarah ka ka stuff aage bhi padne ko milta rahega..

chale jana uska sadme se kam nahi
ro lunga umr bhar aisa matam wo de gaya ....waah kya khoob
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dosto apne naye kalaam ke saath apki mahfil mein shirkat kar raha hoon ummeed karta hoon ki apka pyar milega....

de gaya bewafai ka zakham wo de gaya
bin mange aankhon mein shabnam wo de gaya ....

tera nazraana bhee zalim teri trah
dhak ke khushiyon se gam wo de gaya ....

dekhkar wo mere zakhmon ki jalan
zahar mein milake marham wo de gaya ....

cheenkar mujhse wo meri zindagi
zinda rahne ki kasam wo de gaya ....

chale jana uska sadme se kam nahi
ro unga umr bhar aisa matam wo de gaya ....

deke aansu tanhai aur siskiyan
phir bhee kush lagta hai kam wo de gaya .....

chudaake haath beech raah mein dosto
dard ka safar meri kalm ko de gaya ...

yaad mein uski gungunaayga 'veer'
mere honthon ko aisee nazam wo de gaya ...

apke jawaab ka muntzir apka.......raj.......

janab veer saheb
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aapki gazal padi. yakeen maniye main galat tha us din jis din aapne ise mujhe sunaya tha. bakai jis line ko main kah raha tha ki kuch atpata lag raha hai yahan poori gazal padane per wahi line mujhe bahut achci lag rahi hai.
wanki gazal to aapki hai hi bahut khoobsurat. ye maine aapko usi din kah diya tha . aage daad hazir hai kabool farmaiye janab

dekhkar wo mere zakhmon ki jalan
zahar mein milake marham wo de gaya

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7th November 2006, 10:41 AM

Rajveer ji...namaskaar


veer ji isme koi shak nahi ki aapke har kalaam dard se lipte hote hai...ham aapke her kalaam ko padte hai...bahut dard bhara hota hai aur hamesha hi hamare dil ki gehri parto ko chhoo jata hai....aap bahut achha likhte hai...aur ham khuda se dua karte hai ki ji aap likhte hai vo aapki zindgi ka such kabi b na ho...sirf likhne tak aur khayaalaat tak hi ho....baki khuda aapko sakoon de....aur khush rakhe...

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दोस्तो अपने नये कलाम के साथ आपकी महफ़िल में शिरकत कर रहा हूँ उम्मीद करता हूँ की आपका प्यार मिलेगा....

दे गया बेवफ़ाई का ज़खम वो दे गया
बिन मांगे आँखों में शबनम वो दे गया ....

तेरा नज़राना भी ज़ालिम तेरी तरह
ढक के ख़ुशियों से ग़म वो दे गया ....

देखकर वो मेरे ज़ख़्मों की जलन
ज़हर में मिलाके मरहम वो दे गया ....

छीनकर मुझसे वो मेरी ज़िंदगी
ज़िंदा रहने की कसम वो दे गया ....

चले जाना उसका सदमे से कम नही
रो उंगा उम्र भर ऐसा मातम वो दे गया ....

देके आँसू तन्हाई और सिसकियाँ
फिर भी कुश लगता है कम वो दे गया .....

छुड़ाके हाथ बीच राह में दोस्तो
दर्द का सफ़र मेरी कलम को दे गया ...

याद में उसकी गुनगुनायगा 'वीर'
मेरे होंठों को ऐसी नज़म वो दे गया ...

आपके जवाब का मुंतज़िर आपका.......राज.......

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dosto apne naye kalaam ke saath apki mahfil mein shirkat kar raha hoon ummeed karta hoon ki apka pyar milega....

de gaya bewafai ka zakham wo de gaya
bin mange aankhon mein shabnam wo de gaya ....

tera nazraana bhee zalim teri trah
dhak ke khushiyon se gam wo de gaya ....

dekhkar wo mere zakhmon ki jalan
zahar mein milake marham wo de gaya ....

cheenkar mujhse wo meri zindagi
zinda rahne ki kasam wo de gaya ....

chale jana uska sadme se kam nahi
ro unga umr bhar aisa matam wo de gaya ....

deke aansu tanhai aur siskiyan
phir bhee kush lagta hai kam wo de gaya .....

chudaake haath beech raah mein dosto
dard ka safar meri kalm ko de gaya ...

yaad mein uski gungunaayga 'veer'
mere honthon ko aisee nazam wo de gaya ...

apke jawaab ka muntzir apka.......raj.......

veer raye to de di thi mager yahan parrh ker doobara reply kernay ko dil kia bohat acha likha hai aap ne

chale jana uska sadme se kam nahi
ro unga umr bhar aisa matam wo de gaya ....

chudaake haath beech raah mein dosto
dard ka safar meri kalm ko de gaya ...

ye do sher bohat achay lagay ...khush rahain humari duayain aap ke saath hain


Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin
ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin

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shukria - 9th November 2006, 11:33 AM

rajveer ji namaskaaR....!
aapki gazal paddi bahut acchi laggi, ab eski tareef mai.n kaya kahu, aapki gazal ka ek ek shawad kuad bol raha hai. rajveer ji yeh agar mahaz ek shayri hai to behad khoobsurat hai aur agar yeh reailty hai to bahut dukhbhari hai. har ek sher dil ko tadpa gaya.

"cheenkar mujhse wo meri zindagi
zinda rahne ki kasam wo de gaya"

bahut khoob.............!

yu hi likhtey rahiye aur dua hai ki aap sadha kush rahey. yeh dard aapki zindgi se sadha door rahey.

aapki dost


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hi - 9th November 2006, 11:58 AM

pranaam mere big B

wah kya baat hai yaar apki ye gazal to jaise dard ko hi dard de rahi hai!!!!!!!!!

big b dil ko chhu gayipuri peshkas aur kabiletarif aapka andaz-e-bayan,aur ye sher mujhe bahot hi pasand aaya

tera nazraana bhee zalim teri trah
dhak ke khushiyon se gam wo de gaya ....

mere big b dard aapki zindagi se door rahe yehhi dua karta hu khuda se

is dard ko dard dene wali peshkas ke liye dil se nikali daad kubul kijiye


aapka chhotu
dhaval

mere chhotu ko raj ka bhut bhut pyaar.......tumko apne big b ki ye gazal pasand i iske liye main tera shukria aada karta hoon umeed hai tum yu hee hamesha mere saath rahoge.....apna khyaal rakhna.......raj.....


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shukria - 9th November 2006, 12:00 PM

hi Raj ji
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aapka naya kalam bahut pasand aya, yu to maine aapke bahut se kalam pade hai, magar bahut kam tarif kar payi hu, . magar me regularly aapke kalam padti ho. aapki ye lines
chale jana uska sadme se kam nahi
ro unga umr bhar aisa matam wo de gaya
muje behad pasand aayi, aur mere dil ko gahrai tak chu gayi...
sach hai kisi ka chale jana sadam hi to hota hai.. jis kabi ubra nahi ja sakta.
agle kalam ke intezar rehega...
aapki dost
Rajni.......

rajni appko raj ka pyar bhara namaskaar......app meri post par i mujhe itne gaur se parha or apne khyalon se wakif karwaya main tahe dil se appka shukar guzaar hoon.....umeed karta hoon yu hee appka saath milta rahega......apna khyaal rakhiyega........raj......


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hi - 11th November 2006, 12:45 PM

mere veer ji.............saadar pranaam,

veer ji fir ek khuubsurat kalaam..........wah...........tarif ke liye shabd nahi hai........kya kahu....har baar aap nishabd karke chhod dete ho hume........bas har ek sher bahot pyara hai......meri dil se daad kabuul kijiye ji..........

grazie

aapki gudiya
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pooooooooja kaise ho?tumko raj ka pyar bhara namaskaar.....tumne mujhe parha mere jajbaaton ko samjha or is gazal ki tareef ki ....is sabke liye main tera tahe dil se shukar guzaar hoon....umeed karta hoon yu hee appka saath milta rahega....take care ........raj.....


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shukria - 13th November 2006, 05:59 PM

Waah...raajveer saheb harash ka adaab

bahoot hi sunder our oomda kalaam pesh kiya aapne

hameshaan ki tarah....umeed hai isi tarah ka ka stuff aage bhi padne ko milta rahega..

chale jana uska sadme se kam nahi
ro lunga umr bhar aisa matam wo de gaya ....waah kya khoob
God bless you always

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harash ji ko raj ka namaskaar......appka meri post par ana mere kalaam ki khushnaseebi hai....sahi mayno me mujhe ehsaas hota hai ki haan maINE kush aisa likha hai jo saach me acha hai....yu hee appka saath chhahta hoon.....take care......raj......


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Raj Bhai...

No Offence... No Comments... Hats Off!!!

Thats All...

Abrar...




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minb blowin poetry there raj ji. janaab bahut hi umda likha hai, jitni tareef ho, utni kam. pehle sher se lekar aakri sher thak, sab k sab tareef-e-kabil hain. yeh andaaz aapka humein bahut pasand aaya. daad hajir hai janab, kabul kijiye.

yuhin likte rahein aur khush rahein

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