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10th May 2015, 09:55 PM
Mere Pyaare dostoN:
Namaskaar aur Aadaab!!
aik lambe arse baad kuChh liKhne ki koShiSh kii haii... wo ehsaas aap sab ke saath baaNT rahaa huuN... ummid kartaa huuN hameShaa ki tarah jo aapka Pyaar aur saath mujhe milaa haii ees baar bhee Zaruur milengaa... mulA'iizaa farmA'iiye...!
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Yaa dagaa kar Yaa wafaa kar tuu
Jo bhi kar dil se ataa kar tuu
maiN bhi tanhaa tuu bhi tanhaa haii
dooriyoN ko kam zaraa kar tuu
iShQ haii kyaa yeh samajhnaa ho
raat bhar taare ginaa kar tuu
deKh kar tujh ko Qaraar aaya
yuuNhi KhwaaboN meiN milaa kar tuu
haii Zarooree iShQ se dooree
rog Zaalim haii bachaa kar tuu
Khaar laaKhoN chubh gaye dil meiN
Kho gayii kyuuN Gul diKhaa kar tuu
Humsafar Qaatil banaa kaise
Qatl kar ke yeh pataa kar tuu
Baat itnii sii nahiiN dilbar
zaKhm gehraa haii dawaa kar tuu
meri GhazloN meiN hai Shaamil tuu
narm hoNThon se paDhaa kar tuu
"JOSH" har pal KhuSh rahaa kaise?
dil ko thoDaa Ghumzadaa kar tuu
"JOSH" dil kii baat dil meiN raKh
Haalat-e-dil Khud sunaa kar tuu
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*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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10th May 2015, 10:44 PM
ji dhaval sir namskar..
behad khoobsurat mujhe bahut hi achhi lagi...
~ : JYOTIBA ASHOK
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10th May 2015, 11:22 PM
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Originally Posted by Dhaval
Mere Pyaare dostoN:
Namaskaar aur Aadaab!!
aik lambe arse baad kuChh liKhne ki koShiSh kii haii... wo ehsaas aap sab ke saath baaNT rahaa huuN... ummid kartaa huuN hameShaa ki tarah jo aapka Pyaar aur saath mujhe milaa haii ees baar bhee Zaruur milengaa... mulA'iizaa farmA'iiye...!
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Yaa dagaa kar Yaa wafaa kar tuu
Jo bhi kar dil se ataa kar tuu
maiN bhi tanhaa tuu bhi tanhaa haii
dooriyoN ko kam zaraa kar tuu
iShQ haii kyaa yeh samajhnaa ho
raat bhar taare ginaa kar tuu
deKh kar tujh ko Qaraar aaya
yuuNhi KhwaaboN meiN milaa kar tuu
haii Zarooree iShQ se dooree
rog Zaalim haii bachaa kar tuu
Khaar laaKhoN chubh gaye dil meiN
Kho gayii kyuuN Gul diKhaa kar tuu
Humsafar Qaatil banaa kaise
Qatl kar ke yeh pataa kar tuu
Baat itnii sii nahiiN dilbar
zaKhm gehraa haii dawaa kar tuu
meri GhazloN meiN hai Shaamil tuu
narm hoNThon se padhaa kar tuu
"JOSH" har pal KhuSh rahaa kaise?
dil ko thoDaa Ghumzadaa kar tuu
"JOSH" dil kii baat dil meiN raKh
Haalat-e-dil Khud sunaa kar tuu
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Waaaaah...pahli baar aapko padhne ki khushkismti huyi hai dhaval jii...bahut hee khoobsoorat ehsaas hain ghazal ke..ppurasar andaaz hai aapka..bahut khoob...
Likhte rahein....
अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी
आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे
madhu..
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11th May 2015, 12:46 AM
Dhaval bhai ..
MaiN unn aihsaasoN ki gahraaiyoN ko beshak mahsoos kar raha hu..
Jin mein doob kar ye alfaaz paida hue
Mere khyaal se apne juzbaat ki raah se kisi k guzarne jaisa
Kuch nahi ho Sakta
Halaki kahiN kahiN mazmoon aur saaf ho sakta tha par jitna bhi tha chal gaya
Baki
Behtareen ashaar haiN
Daad qubool kijiye
Apna khyaal rakhiye
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11th May 2015, 12:52 AM
Dhaval bhai ..
MaiN unn aihsaasoN ki gahraaiyoN ko beshak mahsoos kar raha hu..
Jin mein doob kar ye alfaaz paida hue
Mere khyaal se apne juzbaat ki rash she kisi k guzarne jaisa
Kuch nahi ho Sakta
Halaki kahiN kahiN mazmoon aur saaf ho sakta that
Behtareen ashaar
Daad qubool ho
Apna khyaal rakhiye
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11th May 2015, 07:44 AM
Bahut achchi ghazal hui Dhaval sahib , dheroN daad kabool kareiN.
Hamdam
khone Pane ki daur mein yun uljha hai har bashar ,
Isee kashmeqash mein kat raha Zindagee ka safar.
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11th May 2015, 09:37 AM
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Originally Posted by Dhaval
Mere Pyaare dostoN:
Namaskaar aur Aadaab!!
aik lambe arse baad kuChh liKhne ki koShiSh kii haii... wo ehsaas aap sab ke saath baaNT rahaa huuN... ummid kartaa huuN hameShaa ki tarah jo aapka Pyaar aur saath mujhe milaa haii ees baar bhee Zaruur milengaa... mulA'iizaa farmA'iiye...!
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Yaa dagaa kar Yaa wafaa kar tuu
Jo bhi kar dil se ataa kar tuu
maiN bhi tanhaa tuu bhi tanhaa haii
dooriyoN ko kam zaraa kar tuu
iShQ haii kyaa yeh samajhnaa ho
raat bhar taare ginaa kar tuu
deKh kar tujh ko Qaraar aaya
yuuNhi KhwaaboN meiN milaa kar tuu
haii Zarooree iShQ se dooree
rog Zaalim haii bachaa kar tuu
Khaar laaKhoN chubh gaye dil meiN
Kho gayii kyuuN Gul diKhaa kar tuu
Humsafar Qaatil banaa kaise
Qatl kar ke yeh pataa kar tuu
Baat itnii sii nahiiN dilbar
zaKhm gehraa haii dawaa kar tuu
meri GhazloN meiN hai Shaamil tuu
narm hoNThon se paDhaa kar tuu
"JOSH" har pal KhuSh rahaa kaise?
dil ko thoDaa Ghumzadaa kar tuu
"JOSH" dil kii baat dil meiN raKh
Haalat-e-dil Khud sunaa kar tuu
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waaahh wwaaahhhhh mere yaar bas kamaal hi kamaal likh diyaa tumne......
mazaa aa gayaa aisaa dilkash aur roohaani kalaam padh kar..... behad gahre ehsaasaat aur ummdaah andaaze bayaan ke bas padhte hi banaa........
har sher apne aap me muqammal hai aur jo sabse nayee cheez dekhne mili wo aapke takhallus ka do do baar istemaal....... bahot accchaa rahaa aapka likhnaa..... likhte rahiye... khussh rahiye
Duaaon ke saath..........
aapka bhai..
shaad....
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11th May 2015, 09:38 AM
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11th May 2015, 03:36 PM
Bht achi koshish hai chotu yunhi likhte raho bht arse baad likha kch tum ne acha likha hai khush raho
Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
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11th May 2015, 08:55 PM
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Originally Posted by Dhaval
Mere Pyaare dostoN:
Namaskaar aur Aadaab!!
aik lambe arse baad kuChh liKhne ki koShiSh kii haii... wo ehsaas aap sab ke saath baaNT rahaa huuN... ummid kartaa huuN hameShaa ki tarah jo aapka Pyaar aur saath mujhe milaa haii ees baar bhee Zaruur milengaa... mulA'iizaa farmA'iiye...!
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Yaa dagaa kar Yaa wafaa kar tuu
Jo bhi kar dil se ataa kar tuu
maiN bhi tanhaa tuu bhi tanhaa haii
dooriyoN ko kam zaraa kar tuu
iShQ haii kyaa yeh samajhnaa ho
raat bhar taare ginaa kar tuu
deKh kar tujh ko Qaraar aaya
yuuNhi KhwaaboN meiN milaa kar tuu
haii Zarooree iShQ se dooree
rog Zaalim haii bachaa kar tuu
Khaar laaKhoN chubh gaye dil meiN
Kho gayii kyuuN Gul diKhaa kar tuu
Humsafar Qaatil banaa kaise
Qatl kar ke yeh pataa kar tuu
Baat itnii sii nahiiN dilbar
zaKhm gehraa haii dawaa kar tuu
meri GhazloN meiN hai Shaamil tuu
narm hoNThon se paDhaa kar tuu
"JOSH" har pal KhuSh rahaa kaise?
dil ko thoDaa Ghumzadaa kar tuu
"JOSH" dil kii baat dil meiN raKh
Haalat-e-dil Khud sunaa kar tuu
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Dhaval mere chhotu sabse pehle to namaskaar, Gazal ke kyaa kehne kasam se dil nikaal ke rakh diya tumne. Har ashaar dil frabe or purkashish, bhut khub dono haatho se dher saari daad kabool karna...Raj.
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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11th May 2015, 11:12 PM
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Originally Posted by Dhaval
Mere Pyaare dostoN:
Namaskaar aur Aadaab!!
aik lambe arse baad kuChh liKhne ki koShiSh kii haii... wo ehsaas aap sab ke saath baaNT rahaa huuN... ummid kartaa huuN hameShaa ki tarah jo aapka Pyaar aur saath mujhe milaa haii ees baar bhee Zaruur milengaa... mulA'iizaa farmA'iiye...!
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Yaa dagaa kar Yaa wafaa kar tuu
Jo bhi kar dil se ataa kar tuu
maiN bhi tanhaa tuu bhi tanhaa haii
dooriyoN ko kam zaraa kar tuu
iShQ haii kyaa yeh samajhnaa ho
raat bhar taare ginaa kar tuu
deKh kar tujh ko Qaraar aaya
yuuNhi KhwaaboN meiN milaa kar tuu
haii Zarooree iShQ se dooree
rog Zaalim haii bachaa kar tuu
Khaar laaKhoN chubh gaye dil meiN
Kho gayii kyuuN Gul diKhaa kar tuu
Humsafar Qaatil banaa kaise
Qatl kar ke yeh pataa kar tuu
Baat itnii sii nahiiN dilbar
zaKhm gehraa haii dawaa kar tuu
meri GhazloN meiN hai Shaamil tuu
narm hoNThon se paDhaa kar tuu
"JOSH" har pal KhuSh rahaa kaise?
dil ko thoDaa Ghumzadaa kar tuu
"JOSH" dil kii baat dil meiN raKh
Haalat-e-dil Khud sunaa kar tuu
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Dhaval bhai
armaan to laakhon ke haazir hote hai
kya hulchal machaa gaye mehfil mein
dil ki baat to sab log kiya karte haiN
kyun aag laga gaye mehfil mein
Bahut khoob behad umdaa khayaalat se humhe rubaroo karwaaya hai aapne. Meri taraf se daad ka bhandar qubool farmaayein aur yunhi likhte raheiN.
Qasid
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नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं
क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ
रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है
'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें
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12th May 2015, 10:34 AM
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Originally Posted by Dhaval
Mere Pyaare dostoN:
Namaskaar aur Aadaab!!
aik lambe arse baad kuChh liKhne ki koShiSh kii haii... wo ehsaas aap sab ke saath baaNT rahaa huuN... ummid kartaa huuN hameShaa ki tarah jo aapka Pyaar aur saath mujhe milaa haii ees baar bhee Zaruur milengaa... mulA'iizaa farmA'iiye...!
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Yaa dagaa kar Yaa wafaa kar tuu
Jo bhi kar dil se ataa kar tuu
maiN bhi tanhaa tuu bhi tanhaa haii
dooriyoN ko kam zaraa kar tuu
iShQ haii kyaa yeh samajhnaa ho
raat bhar taare ginaa kar tuu
deKh kar tujh ko Qaraar aaya
yuuNhi KhwaaboN meiN milaa kar tuu
haii Zarooree iShQ se dooree
rog Zaalim haii bachaa kar tuu
Khaar laaKhoN chubh gaye dil meiN
Kho gayii kyuuN Gul diKhaa kar tuu
Humsafar Qaatil banaa kaise
Qatl kar ke yeh pataa kar tuu
Baat itnii sii nahiiN dilbar
zaKhm gehraa haii dawaa kar tuu
meri GhazloN meiN hai Shaamil tuu
narm hoNThon se paDhaa kar tuu
"JOSH" har pal KhuSh rahaa kaise?
dil ko thoDaa Ghumzadaa kar tuu
"JOSH" dil kii baat dil meiN raKh
Haalat-e-dil Khud sunaa kar tuu
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Chottu.....deir baad likha hai par likha kamaal ka hai, har sher bahut gehra hai, ehsaas dil ke kareeb rhe sabhi...muje dil se pasand aaye tumhari yeh gazal...!
yu hi likhte rho aur bazm ki ronak badate rho.
bahut saare pyar ke saath
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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12th May 2015, 07:00 PM
Dhaval ji pehli baar aapko padaa.yakeen maniye bohu pasand ayaa.
Aur abhi ek do din pehle hi anu aur main yahi discuss kar rahe the ki kya aapne likhna chod diya hai. Aapne hum dono ke sawaalon ka jawaab badi khudsoorati se diya hai.
Aage bhi likhte rahiye.
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13th May 2015, 04:08 AM
Hello Dhaval,
Sabse pahle yeh batao..dard bhari shayri likhna kab kam karoge...lagta hai ghar pe thik se dhokla faafda khane ko nhi milta to vo dard shayri me likh dete ho... ... Hehehe dont mind yaar ... Tumko chhedne me maza aata hai..purani aadat hai...
Anyways... Shayri me bahottt achhe hogaye ho... Bahot achhi ghazal likhi hai..maine adhi padh li thi jab tumno bataya tha tb.. Puri aaj padhi... Dekho kaha tha na aaj pakka aungi... So aagai...
Tum Ek ehsaas se Josh kab hogaye khabar hi nhi.... Kafi saalo tak gayab rahi hu yaha se to kuch ata pata nhi... Kisi ko pdha bhi nhi kaafi time se...
Par aaj tumko padhke achha lagaa... Purane din yaad agaye...
Mujhe is ghazal ka duzra jumla bahot pasand aaya... Chalo purane dino me jese hum tarif karte the.. Wese aaj bhi kar deti hu jo janaab Dhaval jee... Deepika ki taraf se tariff qubool kijiye..or aap puri tarha daad ke haq'daar hain...
Aise hi likhte raho...
Tumhari dost
Pooja
Grazie (dont u dare to make fun of my grazie over here)
===========Deepika=========== Pyaar Hai Yaa sazaa ayi mere Dil bataa Toot'ta Kyu.N naHi.N Dard Kaa Silsilaa
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13th May 2015, 07:20 AM
Dhaval bahut achhaa likhaa hai man ko bahut achhaa lagaa
mere ashar ko mahoob samjh ke chhoomte the jo
kho gaye hain woh log ab un kee justzoo hai
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13th May 2015, 10:28 AM
meri GhazloN meiN hai Shaamil tuu
narm hoNThon se paDhaa kar tuu
waaaaaaahh!! Dhaval bhai ...
Pehle to gilla is baat ka ky aap ne meHfil ko apne shandaar kalaamoN se mehroom rakha...
Aap ne aik pur-asar ghazal meHfil ko inayat kii hy ...
dil se daad haazir hy ... iss beshqeemati majmooye per ..
salamat rahen ..
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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15th May 2015, 11:45 AM
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ji dhaval sir namskar..
behad khoobsurat mujhe bahut hi achhi lagi...
~ : JYOTIBA ASHOK
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Namaste sir
Aapko meri yeh koshish pasand aayiin khushii huii aage mehnat aur zaaree rahegii...shukriyaah
Aapka
Dhaval
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15th May 2015, 11:48 AM
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Waaaaah...pahli baar aapko padhne ki khushkismti huyi hai dhaval jii...bahut hee khoobsoorat ehsaas hain ghazal ke..ppurasar andaaz hai aapka..bahut khoob...
Likhte rahein....
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Namaste
Aapne mujhe pehli baar paDhaa aur merii koshish ko pasand kiyaa tah-e-dil se shukraguzaar huu aapka... yuunhi saath dete rahiye aage bhee
Aapka
Dhaval
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15th May 2015, 11:50 AM
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Dhaval bhai ..
MaiN unn aihsaasoN ki gahraaiyoN ko beshak mahsoos kar raha hu..
Jin mein doob kar ye alfaaz paida hue
Mere khyaal se apne juzbaat ki raah se kisi k guzarne jaisa
Kuch nahi ho Sakta
Halaki kahiN kahiN mazmoon aur saaf ho sakta tha par jitna bhi tha chal gaya
Baki
Behtareen ashaar haiN
Daad qubool kijiye
Apna khyaal rakhiye
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Kshitiz bhaiya
Namaste
Aapse bahot kuchh seekhaa hai aur aapki baaton kaa khayaal rakhungaa.... aapko Ghazal ke ehsaas pasand aaye jaan kar behad khushii ho rahii hay... saath dete rahiyegaa aage bhee
Aapka
Dhaval
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15th May 2015, 11:52 AM
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Bahut achchi ghazal hui Dhaval sahib , dheroN daad kabool kareiN.
Hamdam
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Sanjay bhai
Daad sar aankhon par... padhte rahiye saath dete rahiye
Aapka
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15th May 2015, 11:54 AM
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waaahh wwaaahhhhh mere yaar bas kamaal hi kamaal likh diyaa tumne......
mazaa aa gayaa aisaa dilkash aur roohaani kalaam padh kar..... behad gahre ehsaasaat aur ummdaah andaaze bayaan ke bas padhte hi banaa........
har sher apne aap me muqammal hai aur jo sabse nayee cheez dekhne mili wo aapke takhallus ka do do baar istemaal....... bahot accchaa rahaa aapka likhnaa..... likhte rahiye... khussh rahiye
Duaaon ke saath..........
aapka bhai..
shaad....
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baDe bhaii
Namaste
Badii hi khushii hotee hai jab koii Ghazal ko itnaa dil se pasand kartaa hai to samjho koshish kaamyaab huii... bas jo dil me aataa hai kaaGaz pe laa detaa huun...dil se shukriyaah
Aapka
Dhaval
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15th May 2015, 11:56 AM
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Arre waah...dhanyawaad 😊😊😊.............
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18th May 2015, 09:28 AM
Dear Dhaval,
dil ki bhavnaao ko shbado me bayan ker aapne bahut khusurat sa pal apani jindagi ke aham hisse me jod diya hai. yah khusurat lamha hai jo vakt ke sath aur kimati hota jayega.. ya kahu ki anmol... aapki ghazal per apni bebaak raay jaahir ker raha hu...
Yaa dagaa kar Yaa wafaa kar tuu
Jo bhi kar dil se ataa kar tuu
uljhan me me kashmkash ko shabd rupi juban de di hai ... bahut khub..
maiN bhi tanhaa tuu bhi tanhaa haii
dooriyoN ko kam zaraa kar tuu
yea aarju hai ya vinati.. yah to samajhane vaale ke uper...jaise ki, maano to main Ganga maa hu naa maano bahta hua paani....behtarin
iShQ haii kyaa yeh samajhnaa ho
raat bhar taare ginaa kar tuu
.. ishk ki kya mishal di jaaye!!! yah to bas nibhane vaale per hai..bahut achchhe..
deKh kar tujh ko Qaraar aaya
yuuNhi KhwaaboN meiN milaa kar tuu
.. nishchhal prem ki laalach hai..dil ki baat juban per hai..sachchi baat
haii Zarooree iShQ se dooree
rog Zaalim haii bachaa kar tuu
.. anubhav hai yah per nashedi (premi) ko rog se dar nahi lagta..,, jo samjhega ese pyaar nahi hoga.. jise pyar hoga vo samjhega hi nahi..
Khaar laaKhoN chubh gaye dil meiN
Kho gayii kyuuN Gul diKhaa kar tuu
.. marmspersi line hai...yah mahsus kerne ki cheej hai..
Humsafar Qaatil banaa kaise
Qatl kar ke yeh pataa kar tuu
pyaar ka junoon hai.. jo katil bana deta hai..
Baat itnii sii nahiiN dilbar
zaKhm gehraa haii dawaa kar tuu
.. kuchh pal aur jindagi ke baat lu shayad...esliye dava ker tu..
meri GhazloN meiN hai Shaamil tuu
narm hoNThon se paDhaa kar tuu
meri ruh me shamil hai tu.. her taraf tera hi bimb hai..
"JOSH" har pal KhuSh rahaa kaise?
dil ko thoDaa Ghumzadaa kar tuu
berukhi hai.. per naaraajgi nahi..
"JOSH" dil kii baat dil meiN raKh
Haalat-e-dil Khud sunaa kar tuu
.. kabhi khud se mil..
dhaval bhaai yahi kahunga ki yah dil se likha gaya hai.. daad kabul kareiN..
Shubhkamnao sahit
Akant...
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आहट सी कोइ आये तो समझ लेना कि तुम हो...
AahaT si koi aaye to samajh lena ki tum ho...
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18th May 2015, 03:49 PM
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Mere Pyaare dostoN:
Namaskaar aur Aadaab!!
aik lambe arse baad kuChh liKhne ki koShiSh kii haii... wo ehsaas aap sab ke saath baaNT rahaa huuN... ummid kartaa huuN hameShaa ki tarah jo aapka Pyaar aur saath mujhe milaa haii ees baar bhee Zaruur milengaa... mulA'iizaa farmA'iiye...!
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Yaa dagaa kar Yaa wafaa kar tuu
Jo bhi kar dil se ataa kar tuu
maiN bhi tanhaa tuu bhi tanhaa haii
dooriyoN ko kam zaraa kar tuu
iShQ haii kyaa yeh samajhnaa ho
raat bhar taare ginaa kar tuu
deKh kar tujh ko Qaraar aaya
yuuNhi KhwaaboN meiN milaa kar tuu
haii Zarooree iShQ se dooree
rog Zaalim haii bachaa kar tuu
Khaar laaKhoN chubh gaye dil meiN
Kho gayii kyuuN Gul diKhaa kar tuu
Humsafar Qaatil banaa kaise
Qatl kar ke yeh pataa kar tuu
Baat itnii sii nahiiN dilbar
zaKhm gehraa haii dawaa kar tuu
meri GhazloN meiN hai Shaamil tuu
narm hoNThon se paDhaa kar tuu
"JOSH" har pal KhuSh rahaa kaise?
dil ko thoDaa Ghumzadaa kar tuu
"JOSH" dil kii baat dil meiN raKh
Haalat-e-dil Khud sunaa kar tuu
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Dhaval ji, bohot umdaah peshkash.
Lajawaab. Aapko itna zyada nahi paDha hai, par aaj paDh kar bohot achha laga. Likhte raheiN..
Sagar Aashna
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1st June 2015, 11:38 PM
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Bht achi koshish hai chotu yunhi likhte raho bht arse baad likha kch tum ne acha likha hai khush raho
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Aapko meri koshish par dekh kar hameshaa khushii hotee haii padhte rahiye
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1st June 2015, 11:41 PM
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Dhaval mere chhotu sabse pehle to namaskaar, Gazal ke kyaa kehne kasam se dil nikaal ke rakh diya tumne. Har ashaar dil frabe or purkashish, bhut khub dono haatho se dher saari daad kabool karna...Raj.
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Pranaam
Aapki daad sar aankho par... bas aise hi saath dete rahiye aage bhee... mehnat aage bhee zaaree rahegii
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1st June 2015, 11:43 PM
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Dhaval bhai
armaan to laakhon ke haazir hote hai
kya hulchal machaa gaye mehfil mein
dil ki baat to sab log kiya karte haiN
kyun aag laga gaye mehfil mein
Bahut khoob behad umdaa khayaalat se humhe rubaroo karwaaya hai aapne. Meri taraf se daad ka bhandar qubool farmaayein aur yunhi likhte raheiN.
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Aapne to sher pesh kar ke dil looT liyaa... koshish aapko pasand aayii jaan kar bahot khushii huii... mehnat aage bhee kartaa rahungaa
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1st June 2015, 11:46 PM
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Chottu.....deir baad likha hai par likha kamaal ka hai, har sher bahut gehra hai, ehsaas dil ke kareeb rhe sabhi...muje dil se pasand aaye tumhari yeh gazal...!
yu hi likhte rho aur bazm ki ronak badate rho.
bahut saare pyar ke saath
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2nd June 2015, 10:45 AM
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Mere Pyaare dostoN:
Namaskaar aur Aadaab!!
aik lambe arse baad kuChh liKhne ki koShiSh kii haii... wo ehsaas aap sab ke saath baaNT rahaa huuN... ummid kartaa huuN hameShaa ki tarah jo aapka Pyaar aur saath mujhe milaa haii ees baar bhee Zaruur milengaa... mulA'iizaa farmA'iiye...!
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Yaa dagaa kar Yaa wafaa kar tuu
Jo bhi kar dil se ataa kar tuu
maiN bhi tanhaa tuu bhi tanhaa haii
dooriyoN ko kam zaraa kar tuu
iShQ haii kyaa yeh samajhnaa ho
raat bhar taare ginaa kar tuu
deKh kar tujh ko Qaraar aaya
yuuNhi KhwaaboN meiN milaa kar tuu
haii Zarooree iShQ se dooree
rog Zaalim haii bachaa kar tuu
Khaar laaKhoN chubh gaye dil meiN
Kho gayii kyuuN Gul diKhaa kar tuu
Humsafar Qaatil banaa kaise
Qatl kar ke yeh pataa kar tuu
Baat itnii sii nahiiN dilbar
zaKhm gehraa haii dawaa kar tuu
meri GhazloN meiN hai Shaamil tuu
narm hoNThon se paDhaa kar tuu
"JOSH" har pal KhuSh rahaa kaise?
dil ko thoDaa Ghumzadaa kar tuu
"JOSH" dil kii baat dil meiN raKh
Haalat-e-dil Khud sunaa kar tuu
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likhte rahen
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12th July 2015, 10:49 AM
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Dhaval ji pehli baar aapko padaa.yakeen maniye bohu pasand ayaa.
Aur abhi ek do din pehle hi anu aur main yahi discuss kar rahe the ki kya aapne likhna chod diya hai. Aapne hum dono ke sawaalon ka jawaab badi khudsoorati se diya hai.
Aage bhi likhte rahiye.
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Namaste
Jee haan likhne kaa dil nahiin kar rahaa thaa to kaafi waqt se bandh sa ho chukaa thaa... par koshish karungaa ki ho sake utnaa bazm ko raushan kartaa rahuun... aapko meri yeh koshish pasand aayi jan kar khushii huii... padhte rahiye aage bhee
Duaaon ke saath ijaazat
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12th July 2015, 10:59 AM
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Hello Dhaval,
Sabse pahle yeh batao..dard bhari shayri likhna kab kam karoge...lagta hai ghar pe thik se dhokla faafda khane ko nhi milta to vo dard shayri me likh dete ho... ... Hehehe dont mind yaar ... Tumko chhedne me maza aata hai..purani aadat hai...
Anyways... Shayri me bahottt achhe hogaye ho... Bahot achhi ghazal likhi hai..maine adhi padh li thi jab tumno bataya tha tb.. Puri aaj padhi... Dekho kaha tha na aaj pakka aungi... So aagai...
Tum Ek ehsaas se Josh kab hogaye khabar hi nhi.... Kafi saalo tak gayab rahi hu yaha se to kuch ata pata nhi... Kisi ko pdha bhi nhi kaafi time se...
Par aaj tumko padhke achha lagaa... Purane din yaad agaye...
Mujhe is ghazal ka duzra jumla bahot pasand aaya... Chalo purane dino me jese hum tarif karte the.. Wese aaj bhi kar deti hu jo janaab Dhaval jee... Deepika ki taraf se tariff qubool kijiye..or aap puri tarha daad ke haq'daar hain...
Aise hi likhte raho...
Tumhari dost
Pooja
Grazie (dont u dare to make fun of my grazie over here)
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Dear pooja
Tumhara jawaab padh ke bahot khushii huii... apni dost ko yahaan dekh kar hameshaa khushii hotee hay... ghazal pasand aayii thank uuu... aur jahaan tak dardpar likhne kaa sawaal hay... dard ghazal mein aa hi jaataa hay... aur ek ehsaas se josh ka takhallus maikash bhaiya ne diyaa hay...daad sar aanlhon par... padhtee rehnaa aage bhee
Grazie
Tumhara dost
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12th July 2015, 11:02 AM
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Dhaval bahut achhaa likhaa hai man ko bahut achhaa lagaa
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Aapka koshish par aanaa hi badi baat hai
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12th July 2015, 11:04 AM
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meri GhazloN meiN hai Shaamil tuu
narm hoNThon se paDhaa kar tuu
waaaaaaahh!! Dhaval bhai ...
Pehle to gilla is baat ka ky aap ne meHfil ko apne shandaar kalaamoN se mehroom rakha...
Aap ne aik pur-asar ghazal meHfil ko inayat kii hy ...
dil se daad haazir hy ... iss beshqeemati majmooye per ..
salamat rahen ..
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12th July 2015, 03:10 PM
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Dear Dhaval,
dil ki bhavnaao ko shbado me bayan ker aapne bahut khusurat sa pal apani jindagi ke aham hisse me jod diya hai. yah khusurat lamha hai jo vakt ke sath aur kimati hota jayega.. ya kahu ki anmol... aapki ghazal per apni bebaak raay jaahir ker raha hu...
Yaa dagaa kar Yaa wafaa kar tuu
Jo bhi kar dil se ataa kar tuu
uljhan me me kashmkash ko shabd rupi juban de di hai ... bahut khub..
maiN bhi tanhaa tuu bhi tanhaa haii
dooriyoN ko kam zaraa kar tuu
yea aarju hai ya vinati.. yah to samajhane vaale ke uper...jaise ki, maano to main Ganga maa hu naa maano bahta hua paani....behtarin
iShQ haii kyaa yeh samajhnaa ho
raat bhar taare ginaa kar tuu
.. ishk ki kya mishal di jaaye!!! yah to bas nibhane vaale per hai..bahut achchhe..
deKh kar tujh ko Qaraar aaya
yuuNhi KhwaaboN meiN milaa kar tuu
.. nishchhal prem ki laalach hai..dil ki baat juban per hai..sachchi baat
haii Zarooree iShQ se dooree
rog Zaalim haii bachaa kar tuu
.. anubhav hai yah per nashedi (premi) ko rog se dar nahi lagta..,, jo samjhega ese pyaar nahi hoga.. jise pyar hoga vo samjhega hi nahi..
Khaar laaKhoN chubh gaye dil meiN
Kho gayii kyuuN Gul diKhaa kar tuu
.. marmspersi line hai...yah mahsus kerne ki cheej hai..
Humsafar Qaatil banaa kaise
Qatl kar ke yeh pataa kar tuu
pyaar ka junoon hai.. jo katil bana deta hai..
Baat itnii sii nahiiN dilbar
zaKhm gehraa haii dawaa kar tuu
.. kuchh pal aur jindagi ke baat lu shayad...esliye dava ker tu..
meri GhazloN meiN hai Shaamil tuu
narm hoNThon se paDhaa kar tuu
meri ruh me shamil hai tu.. her taraf tera hi bimb hai..
"JOSH" har pal KhuSh rahaa kaise?
dil ko thoDaa Ghumzadaa kar tuu
berukhi hai.. per naaraajgi nahi..
"JOSH" dil kii baat dil meiN raKh
Haalat-e-dil Khud sunaa kar tuu
.. kabhi khud se mil..
dhaval bhaai yahi kahunga ki yah dil se likha gaya hai.. daad kabul kareiN..
Shubhkamnao sahit
Akant...
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12th July 2015, 03:12 PM
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Dhaval ji, bohot umdaah peshkash.
Lajawaab. Aapko itna zyada nahi paDha hai, par aaj paDh kar bohot achha laga. Likhte raheiN..
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Ghazal ki pazeeraaii ke liye main aapka shukraguzaar huun... aage bhee saath dete rahen
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12th July 2015, 03:13 PM
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bahut khoob dhaval bhai khoob sama baandha hai aapne
likhte rahen
duaon ke saath
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Shukriyaah aapka ghazal ko pasand karne liye... saath nibhaate rahen
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23rd July 2015, 06:43 PM
Dhaval ji,
Bahaut khoobsurti se bayaan kiya hai aapne...loved the whole ghazal...these 2 shers were close to my heart.
Yaa dagaa kar Yaa wafaa kar tuu
Jo bhi kar dil se ataa kar tuu
maiN bhi tanhaa tuu bhi tanhaa haii
dooriyoN ko kam zaraa kar tuu
Jiya :-)
Zindagi wahi jise khul ke Jiya jaaye, apne armaanon ko pankh lagaa udhne do...
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24th July 2015, 07:08 PM
Shukriyaah jiyaa... Ghazal ko pasand karne ke liye .. padhte raho aage bhee
Duaaon ke saath ijaazat
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24th July 2015, 11:45 PM
Dhaval dost,
Aapke ehsaas aur aashaar dono hi bahut khoobsurat lage mujhe. Yeh do sher khaas pasand aaye:
meri GhazloN meiN hai Shaamil tuu
narm hoNThon se paDhaa kar tuu
"JOSH" har pal KhuSh rahaa kaise?
dil ko thoDaa Ghumzadaa kar tuu
Yunhi likhte raho. Meri dil se daad kubool karo, apna khayal rakho.
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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28th July 2015, 09:05 PM
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Dhaval dost,
Aapke ehsaas aur aashaar dono hi bahut khoobsurat lage mujhe. Yeh do sher khaas pasand aaye:
meri GhazloN meiN hai Shaamil tuu
narm hoNThon se paDhaa kar tuu
"JOSH" har pal KhuSh rahaa kaise?
dil ko thoDaa Ghumzadaa kar tuu
Yunhi likhte raho. Meri dil se daad kubool karo, apna khayal rakho.
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Namaste
Ghazal ki pasandagee ke liye main aapka shukraguzaar huub... padhte rahiye aage bhee
Aapka
Dhaval
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