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GHAZAL - urz kar denge hunar aakh bhar aaye pehle -
24th February 2005, 04:15 PM
Sabhi DostoN ko Adaab ..
kayi bateiN aisi hoti haiN jo kah kar bhi unkahi rah jati haiN aur kayi baar unkahi kisi bhi kahi gayi baat se jiyada asardaar hoti hai .. innhi koshishoN ke darmiyaN .. Muaafi ke sath .. urz kar denge hunar aakh bhar aaye pehle jinse shikve haiN unhe paas bulayeiN pehle faasle zindgi se aur badhaa denge tiri khud ko aihsaan tire yaad dilayeiN pehle Soz E dil se mire shamsheer pighal jayegi GO mire kutl ko vo hath uthayeiN pehle Hasrat E yaar jalana hai to jal jaunga Aag daman se mire khud vo lagayeiN pehle Aaj sun le haQ E narazgi rakhne wale pyaar kitna hai unhe mujhse dikhayeiN pehle yaa ki bas ek takalluf hai hai ye rishta apna Aur ye sochna hum unko manayeiN pehle Haay mazbooriyaN shayar ki zamane waloN HumGhazal ho bhi to khud ko rulayeiN pehle Jinse kahni haiN hume pyaar ki bateiN apni Unko ye shauk KSHITIZ sher sunayeiN pehle ... |
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24th February 2005, 05:16 PM
urz kar denge hunar aakh bhar aaye pehle
jinse shikve haiN unhe paas bulayeiN pehle faasle zindgi se aur badhaa denge tiri khud ko aihsaan tire yaad dilayeiN pehle Waaaaaaah! Pehle sher si ghayal kar diya janab!! Soz E dil se mire shamsheer pighal jayegi GO mire kutl ko vo hath uthayeiN pehle Hasrat E yaar jalana hai to jal jaunga Aag daman se mire khud vo lagayeiN pehle Bahut Khooobb...!! Aaj sun le haQ E narazgi rakhne wale pyaar kitna hai unhe mujhse dikhayeiN pehle yaa ki bas ek takalluf hai ye rishta apna Aur ye sochna hum unko manayeiN pehle Wah Wah aur sirf Waah! Haay mazbooriyaN shayar ki zamane waloN HumGhazal ho bhi to khud ko rulayeiN pehle Jinse kahni haiN hume pyaar ki bateiN apni Unko ye shauk KSHITIZ sher sunayeiN pehle ... Very Nice Expression!! Kshistij Bhai! Kitni khushi ho rahi thhi tumhari post dekhkar... Aur ise padhkar Dil aur khush ho gya hai... Bahut his sundar alfaazon se sajaayon hai aapne kahyalon ko tumne... Humsha ki tarah  Is umda kalaam par meri dher saari daad... Dil khush ho gaya ise padhkar..Bhai ummeed hai tum aage bhi aise hi likhtye rahoge... aur humare saath share karte rahoge...Ab to hum hain naa aapke dost is site par... Ab to regular aya karo... Bhai Apna khyal rakhna aur Likhte rehna Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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Re: GHAZAL - urz kar denge hunar aakh bhar aaye pehle -
24th February 2005, 05:20 PM
Bahoot khoob dost....
badhiya likha hai aapne.. daad kabul kariye.. aapka vij.. Quote:
Dhoop Mai.N Baitha Hai Khud Pedh Lagaane Wala http://artwanted.com/vijen http://vijendrasvij.com |
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24th February 2005, 07:42 PM
Namaskar Kshitiz ji
Bahut pyari si Rachna hay yaa ki bas ek takalluf hai hai ye rishta apna Aur ye sochna hum unko manayeiN pehle Haay mazbooriyaN shayar ki zamane waloN HumGhazal ho bhi to khud ko rulayeiN pehle Aapkey is Rachna se mughey ek geet yaad aa gaya ........punjabi song hay je Aapan doyein Rus(Gussa) jaye taan manaye kaun way...........Hamesha ruthey huaon ko mana lena chahiye issey dost paas rehtey hain............Theek kaha na...... Keep Smiling |
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Re: GHAZAL - urz kar denge hunar aakh bhar aaye pehle -
24th February 2005, 08:18 PM
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mere nawaab [mere chhote bachae], kis sher par taarif karu.....??? poori gajal dil maie ootar gayi... humesha ki tarah.... yaha par taarif ki koi gumjaaish nahi hai... gajal khud maie taarif hai. tumhari di |
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Re: GHAZAL - urz kar denge hunar aakh bhar aaye pehle -
25th February 2005, 12:14 AM
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kshitiz bhai ... kunal ka aadaab aapko aur aapki gazal ko bhi .... sach jo aaina aapne yahaN rakha hai .... kabile tareef hai... par ye sher dil maaiN gad sa gaya hai ... meri daad teh dil se kabool farmayeN janaab .... aadat se majboor gazal maiN ek sher jode ja raha huN ... aapke kalaam ko kahiN badnuma na kar de dar hai! par phir bhi likhne se rok na paya ... yahi khak alfaaz likh paya unke aaNsu bhi dekh nahi sakta bechara dil... ashq ho aNkhoN maiN to khud ko dafnayeN pehle... aapka bhai kunal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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25th February 2005, 03:11 PM
faasle zindgi se aur badhaa denge tiri
khud ko aihsaan tire yaad dilayeiN pehle Kshitiz bhai...... bade dinon ke baad koi kalam pesh kiya hai tumne...... magar hum sab aapko "Pakde hue hain" yun nahi jaane denge..... sunaenge hum bhi ashkon se bhara haal-e-dil...... kutch apni daastan-e-majboori vo sunaayen pehle..... yahi khak likh paya tumhare liye mere bhai..... **(*·.¸(`·.¸ ¸.·´)¸.·*)** *·.¸Paigaam -e- Aman¸.·* **(¸.·´(¸.·* *·.¸)`·.¸)** ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* inhan ankhaaon vicho kadi, tere hanju vaghe si..... aaj ki hoye, jehda ^AMAN^ da lahoo vagda ae...... AMAN RAHI |
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25th February 2005, 05:34 PM
Pulkit Bhai ..
Kaun kambhakht mahroom rahna chaahta hai yahaN aane se magar mazbooriyaN jo naa karaye vo thoda .. kahte haiN naa vo apne ghar ki Qaid se mazboor ho gaye Hum Bewafa ke naam se mash hoor ho gaye Khair .. Ab to lagta hai ki kuch din tak inn mulakaatoN ka silsila bana rahega .. Tareef ke liye shukrguzar Tumhara |
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25th February 2005, 05:42 PM
Vijen Bhai ..
aapki mauzoodgi hamesha se hi kuch khamosh juzbatoN ka aihsaas karaya karti haiN .. Aur Dil me khoobsorat khayaal banaya karte haiN .. Aap yahaN aaye kuch likha humare liye .. bahut fakr hua khud pe Apna khyaal rakhiye .. Sukanya jee Namaskaar .. Shayad aap se pehli martaba baat ho rahi hai .. bahut achhi baat kahi hai aapne .. roothe hue jab apne ho to unhe daud ke manana chahiye .. magar Apne roothte hi kyoN haiN ? Khair .. Aapki tareef ka bahut shukrguzar huN Apna khyaal rakhiye |
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25th February 2005, 05:52 PM
Bhai Jaan ..
ek Qata urz karta huN Humne dar pe mire ek shama jala rakhi hai Aur hawaoN se ye shart laga rakhi hai Jis gulli se aayenge bhai jaan mire har vo gulli phooloN se saja rakhi hai ... yaad nahi aa raha thaa kaise thaa magar aaj aapko reply karte hue kabhi padha gaya ye Qata khyaal aa gaya .. Aise hi bachhe par dhyaan diye rahiyega Aur sunaiye sab khairiyat to hai naa .. Ummeed karta huN sab kuch behad achha chal raha hoga .. Apna khyaal rakhiye |
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26th February 2005, 06:28 AM
faasle zindgi se aur badhaa denge tiri
khud ko aihsaan tire yaad dilayeiN pehle Soz E dil se mire shamsheer pighal jayegi GO mire kutl ko vo hath uthayeiN pehle Kshitiz Sahib... yeh ashaar bus seene ke aar paar ho gaye...soz e dil se shamsheer ka pighal jaana...ek ajeeb sa mazza de gaya......bahut khuub Aaj sun le haQ E narazgi rakhne wale pyaar kitna hai unhe mujhse dikhayeiN pehle uff...yeh andaaz aapki shayri ka... yaa ki bas ek takalluf hai hai ye rishta apna Aur ye sochna hum unko manayeiN pehle waah! bus hum tau be-zubaan se ho gaye... kshitiz...aapko yahan jaldi jaldi aana chahiye...taki yeh mehfil bus jhuum uthe aapki ghazalon se...delhi ki yaadon mein kho kar, mein bus imagine kar rahi thee ki kshitiz kis tarah se, kaise iss ghazal ko bhi gayeinge... choti see daad meri bhi kabool kar lijiey... paras gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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Mere Bhai..... |
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Mere Bhai..... -
26th February 2005, 09:34 AM
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Mere bhai Kshitiz...... Shukriya.....bahut aacha sher pesh kiya hai...... aur bhaion ka pyar aur saath hamesha rahega...... apna khayal rakhna aur aa-qaaedah aate rehna...... tumahra bhai...... **(*·.¸(`·.¸ ¸.·´)¸.·*)** *·.¸Paigaam -e- Aman¸.·* **(¸.·´(¸.·* *·.¸)`·.¸)** ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* inhan ankhaaon vicho kadi, tere hanju vaghe si..... aaj ki hoye, jehda ^AMAN^ da lahoo vagda ae...... AMAN RAHI |
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26th February 2005, 10:49 AM
vo apne ghar ki Qaid se mazboor ho gaye
Hum Bewafa ke naam se mash hoor ho gaye Waaahhhh! Bahut khoob kshitij bhai!! Mulakaaton ka silila zaari rahega to humen sabse zayada khushi hogi Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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26th February 2005, 12:21 PM
Kunal Bhai ..
tum apni baheiN humare hathoN se jod kar humari pahuch badhao isse jiyada khushi ki baat kya ho sakti .. tumhara ashaar Bahut khoobsorat hai .. tareef mujhse bhi Qabool karo Aise hi khyaal farmate rahna .. Apna khyaal rakho |
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bahut khoob |
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bahut khoob -
26th February 2005, 12:56 PM
Aaj sun le haQ E narazgi rakhne wale
pyaar kitna hai unhe mujhse dikhayeiN pehle Bahut khoob mere yaar ...yooN to tum kuchh likho or wo pasand na aaye ye hota nahi....per ye line to khaas taur per pasand aai... sahi kaha mere dost...expect karna aasaan hai aaj ke daur me...per kisi dusre ki expectations per khara utarna...waakai bahut mushkil. achchha sawaal hai tumhaara. Shukriya mere dost...itni achchhi rachna ham dostoN se sher karne ke liye. Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN. - Chaand |
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27th February 2005, 09:28 AM
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Kshitiz bhai , wah bahoot mast gazal pesh ki hai aapne,,,, isake liye tah-e-dil se shukriya kabool kijiye. garima |
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hi -
27th February 2005, 04:16 PM
kshtiz
kaise ho? aap ki is ghazal ko parh bohat acha laga aik gahazal ki ander zarori tmama lwazmat milte hainis main.... har sher aik mukamal kahani byan karta hay balanced,or tasulsal ka khiyal rkaha gya hay parh kar andaza hwa k aap itne dino bad kiyon post karte ho...koi shahkar lekar ate ho har bar...tareef bohat ki khub bhai bohat hi khub apna khyal rkahiye ga khan agar mohabbat hay to judai kiyon or judai main mohabbat kasi???? |
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27th February 2005, 09:47 PM
Paras Sahiba ..
Kaisi haiN aap .. ummeed kata huN sab kuch khairiyat ke sath hoga .. kayi baar aisa hota hai jab waQt guzar jata hai aur hum uski yadoN ke giraft se nahi nikal pate haiN .. wazah ye dil bahut najuk hota hai jo bhi achha lagta hai usse chorne ko taiyaar hi nahi hota hai .. hai ki nahi agar kismat meiN raha to agli mulakaat meiN isse bhi gaa kar suna denge .. tareef Qabool hai Apna khyaal rakhiye |
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27th February 2005, 09:53 PM
Aman Bhai ..
Hum to pakde hue haiN abhi tak kya bataye .. he he aapki badi yaad aati hai fir ye soch kar dil ko bahla lketa hUN ki bahut jaldi aap se dubara mulakaat ho jayegi .. Tareef ke liye bahut bahut shukriguzar huN ye humari khushnasibi hai ki aapko humari kalam ka safar achha laga .. apna khyaal rakhiye Pulkit Bhai .. kabhi kabhi to mujhe mazboori lafz khudgarzi ka dosra naam lagta hai .. fir sochta huN dosroN ko ilzaam dena apne azaar ka charagar nahi ban sakta .. take care |
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27th February 2005, 09:58 PM
Chand BHai ..
kya baat hai upar wala chand to kabhi kabhi rahta hai magar aap to hamesha hi badaloN meiN nazar aate haiN .. Bhai humare paas ek chota saa cell fon bhi hai kabhi kabhi uspe bhi apni nazareiN inayat kar diya karo .. khair kaise ho ye batao .. ummeed karta huN din achhe guzar rahe honge .. baki tareef ke liye shukriya Apna khyaal rakhna Garima jee Tareef ke liye shukriya Aap yahaN aayi hume izzat bakhshi .. Behad khushi hui Apna khyaal rakhiye |
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11th June 2010, 11:35 PM
kShitiz bhaa'i:
namaste! umdaa'h koShiSh aur laa-jawaab andaaz-e-bayaa.N dil se daad KhuSh rahe.n.. duaao.n ke saath ijaazat aapka ~Dhaval |
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