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Mai or Mera yaar -
22nd January 2005, 03:07 PM
DostoN ek baar phir apne hi khayaaloN ka taana-baana...aap sabhi ke saamne pesh kar raha hooN...sochta hooN ise kya kahooN..koi ghazal ya kavita ki tachnicalities to nahi isme...bas...ek tukbandi si keh sakta ho.
Mai or mera Yaar Ek khaamosh sard-dhundhli si shaam Mai or mera yaar phir ek saath, Kuchh apne hi khayaaloN me khoye se JubaaN bhi khaamosh or jeboN me haath, Phir kuchh sochkar meine san.naate ko toda Or chubhta hi sahi vyang sa ek teer chhoda, Ek umr hui Bachpan gujaare Per jawaani ka koi mousam nazar nahi aaya, Log kehte haiN..mohobbat ki bhi umr aati hai Per abtak …kisi ne darwaja nahi khatkhataya, Wo mujhe dekhkar, pehle to kuchh muskuraaya Phir bolne se pehle chehra, kuchh gambheer banaya, Achanak tum ye kya…rog laga baithe..! Ya aaj tumbhi…subhe hi ‘charha’ baithe? MOHOBBAT..ye apne khelne ke khilone KahaaN Or tum ye nawaabi shauk bhi, aajmaa baithe, Ey Dil….Zara hosh me aao Ye waqt in bekaar ki baatoN me na gaNwaao, Ghar me CHOOLHA kal se thanda pada hai Uski khaatir kuchh lakdiyaaN jutaao, Sunder chehroN se dil lagaane me Bas…mohobbat keh ke muskurane me, Ye jindagi gujar nahi jaati Romaani se geetoN ko gungunaane me, Mohobbat me KAD ko kuchh uthana padta hai Bataane or jataane ka hunar kamaana padta hai Gar kaheen hausla ban bhi gaya bataane ka To Jataane ke saadhan kahaaN se jutaaoge? Mai Sone-Chaandi ki baat nahi karta Per sirf Mohobbat se bhi to pet nahi bharta, Socho jise itna tootkar chaahoge Kya Khule aasmaan ke neeche..use CheethroN me sulaaoge? Mann to baawla or naadaan hai Wo tumhe baadloN ke jahaaN me le jaayega, Apne khwaaboN ko kuchh sankuchit banaao Unhe apne daayroN me rehna sikhaao! Mai apne yaar ko dekhkar muskuraaya Pheeka hi sahi…Apna aaswaasan dohraaya, Are ..! hame kahaaN kisi se dil lagaana tha Ye to bas…baat chhedne ka ek bahaana tha, Mai apni ‘Jameen’ per hi khush hooN, ey dost Bas is ‘Chaand’ ko, mere aasmaan per na chhana tha. Chaand *DostoN se anurodh hai ki ye sirf khayaalat haiN so parheN per..dil se na lagaaeiN.  Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN. - Chaand |
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22nd January 2005, 06:58 PM
chand bhai ...
aaj tumhara ye kalaam jab parha .. sach aaya to tha ki ek naya post kar duN .. na jane kyuN pulkit bhai ki bat yaad thi ki .. kuch league se hat kar likhna hai ... aur likh bhi liya tha ... par na jane kyuN aapka kalaam parh baitha ... aur chonk gaya ... ki mere khyal aapke kalaam maiN pehle hi saj chuke the ... sach mere kalaam ka title yahi tha "gham ki wajah ishq hi nahi ,...." jisme maine kuch yahi socha tha ki ek aise dil ka haal likhna hai .. jise jamane ke baki ghamoN ko bhi sameta hua hai .... par bhai ... sach mujhe khushi bhi hai ki mere aur mere bhai ki soch itni milti hai ... aapka kalaam wakai bohat touchy hai .,... maiN aapko teh dil se badhai deta huN iske liye ... aur apna kalaam ab aapke kalaam ke kuch din baad hi yahaN lauNga ... taki aapke kalaam ka luft log bhapoor utha sake .. aur ek si cheezOn se pareshan na ho ... aise hi likhte rahiye aur apna khayal rakhiye apka bhai kunal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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Re: Mai or Mera yaar -
22nd January 2005, 09:20 PM
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mere chaand, tumhare kahne se dil par nahi lagaaungi itni sidhi bhi nahi hu maie ..... tumne aaj shayed muje jaan hi liya k kisi k dabaav maie nahi aati maie.. lol tumhari meena |
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22nd January 2005, 10:56 PM
Hi Chand
No words to express... Just Outstanding... Regards इस भरे शहर में हम Dard-e-Sush, जो न पाया उसे भी खोते हैं! lab pe muskaan ko liye ae dost, kandhon pe laash apni dhote hein is bhare sheher me ham dard-e-sush, jo na paaya use bhi khote hein |
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22nd January 2005, 10:57 PM
chand ji....
bahot hi khub aur sabse hat ke apki likhvat hai...padh kar bahot bahot bahotttttttttttttt hi achha laga ....laga jese padhte hi rahe ......sach me apki nazm pasand ayi hume.... aap ese hi likhte rahiye aur hum ese bas padhte hi rahenge....... mira......... |
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23rd January 2005, 12:02 PM
Hi Chaand Bhai,
Bhai mein toh isse aapka masterpiece hi kahunga. Its so beautiful in all its simplicity but yet so much depth in it. Dil khush ho gaya isse parh ke. Sach bhai, a really soulful piece of work. Salim If there are no tears in the eyes, there will be no rainbow in the soul Happiness is a butterfly, which, when pursued, is always just beyond your grasp, but which, if you sit down quietly, may alight upon you. We come to love not by finding a perfect person but by learning to see an imperfect person perfectly |
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24th January 2005, 08:52 PM
Kunal Mere Bhai, ............
Ek mohobbat hi ka gam tanha nahi Or Bhi hai gam...Ey Yaar is jamaane me, kaheeN parha tha ..or bahut sahi parha shaayad. Shukriya dost..tumne meri koshish ko itni tawajjo di, achchha laga..or haaN dil mile hoN jahaaN to wahaN rachnaaeiN mil jaana to ek chhoti si baat hoti hai, Mujhe khushi hogi tumhaari wo rachna parhkar bhi jald hi post karna....mai intzaar karooNga... Tumhara Chaand Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN. - Chaand |
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24th January 2005, 08:59 PM
Meena ji...jo kaha so kaha...per aapki pratikriya per mai or kya kahooN....ek kaam kijiyaa aaj aap mera maun parh lijiye.
.............  Aapka Chaand Dard-e-sash ji... Tahe dil se shukrgujaar hooN mai aapka...meri is adna si koshish...or bhaavnaaON ko aapne itna mehtwa or sam.maan diya...jaankar bahut khushi hui... Shukriya Chaand Shukriya Mira ji... shaayad jitni khushi aapko meri rachna parhkar nahi hui hogi us.se adhik khushi mujhe hui...aapka ye reply parhkar...bahut achchha lagta hai jab ..aap log itna sam.maan dete haiN mere in khayaalat ko. Tahe dil se shukrgujaar aapka bhi. Chaand Salim...............mere dost, or kya kahooN...tumhaare replies parhkar jo khushi milti hai...wo mai bayaaN nahi kar sakta...bas itna hi kahooNga...ke jis tarah se aap dost mujhe hausla dete ho, to lagta hai ki...shaayad meri koshish kuchh keh paane ki kuchh kaamyaab ho gai. Shukriya mere dost. Chaand Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN. - Chaand |
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25th January 2005, 02:30 PM
bhut hi khuub likha hia chand ji..... dil de daad kabul kijiye...... sari rachna bhut hi sunder thi lekin kuch lines jo mujhko bhut hi achi lagi likh rha hu
Mohobbat me KAD ko kuchh uthana padta hai Bataane or jataane ka hunar kamaana padta hai Gar kaheen hausla ban bhi gaya bataane ka To Jataane ke saadhan kahaaN se jutaaoge wah kya umda likha hain aap ne .... keep it up ... aap ka dost ham ne apanaa hii intazaar kiiyaa ab naa maangenge zindagii yaa rab! ye gunaah ham ne ek baar kiiyaa |
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25th January 2005, 02:45 PM
chaand bhai,
achchhi rachana hai..per main esper comment nahi ker pa raha.. well likhate rahiye, Akant... आहट सी कोइ आये तो समझ लेना कि तुम हो... AahaT si koi aaye to samajh lena ki tum ho... |
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25th January 2005, 04:25 PM
Ek khaamosh sard-dhundhli si shaam
Mai or mera yaar phir ek saath, Kuchh apne hi khayaaloN me khoye se JubaaN bhi khaamosh or jeboN me haath, Phir kuchh sochkar meine san.naate ko toda Or chubhta hi sahi vyang sa ek teer chhoda, Ek umr hui Bachpan gujaare Per jawaani ka koi mousam nazar nahi aaya, Log kehte haiN..mohobbat ki bhi umr aati hai Per abtak …kisi ne darwaja nahi khatkhataya, Wo mujhe dekhkar, pehle to kuchh muskuraaya Phir bolne se pehle chehra, kuchh gambheer banaya, Achanak tum ye kya…rog laga baithe..! Ya aaj tumbhi…subhe hi ‘charha’ baithe? MOHOBBAT..ye apne khelne ke khilone KahaaN Or tum ye nawaabi shauk bhi, aajmaa baithe, Ey Dil….Zara hosh me aao Ye waqt in bekaar ki baatoN me na gaNwaao, Ghar me CHOOLHA kal se thanda pada hai Uski khaatir kuchh lakdiyaaN jutaao, Sunder chehroN se dil lagaane me Bas…mohobbat keh ke muskurane me, Ye jindagi gujar nahi jaati Romaani se geetoN ko gungunaane me, Mohobbat me KAD ko kuchh uthana padta hai Bataane or jataane ka hunar kamaana padta hai Gar kaheen hausla ban bhi gaya bataane ka To Jataane ke saadhan kahaaN se jutaaoge? Mai Sone-Chaandi ki baat nahi karta Per sirf Mohobbat se bhi to pet nahi bharta, Socho jise itna tootkar chaahoge Kya Khule aasmaan ke neeche..use CheethroN me sulaaoge? Mann to baawla or naadaan hai Wo tumhe baadloN ke jahaaN me le jaayega, Apne khwaaboN ko kuchh sankuchit banaao Unhe apne daayroN me rehna sikhaao! Mai apne yaar ko dekhkar muskuraaya Pheeka hi sahi…Apna aaswaasan dohraaya, Are ..! hame kahaaN kisi se dil lagaana tha Ye to bas…baat chhedne ka ek bahaana tha, Mai apni ‘Jameen’ per hi khush hooN, ey dost Bas is ‘Chaand’ ko, mere aasmaan per na chhana tha. Chaand Bhai!! Kya kahoon aapke is post ke jawaab me.... Waah to meri humesha hi aapke saath hai... Ek ek shabd seedha dil me utar gaya hai.... Sunder chehroN se dil lagaane me Bas…mohobbat keh ke muskurane me, Ye jindagi gujar nahi jaati Romaani se geetoN ko gungunaane me, Mohobbat me KAD ko kuchh uthana padta hai Bataane or jataane ka hunar kamaana padta hai Gar kaheen hausla ban bhi gaya bataane ka To Jataane ke saadhan kahaaN se jutaaoge? Yeh lines to jaise chho gayin hain dil ko... Bahut hi khoobssorat tareeke se pesh kiya hai aapne.... Meri dil se daad kubool karna..... Aage bhi aise hi likhte rehna... apna khyal rakhna Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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28th January 2005, 10:55 AM
Ham-Tum ji tahe dil se shukriya aapko meri ye koshish pasand aayi...aapki is hausla afzaai ke liye ye Chaand aapka ek baar phir shukriya ada karta hai.
Chaand Akant, aapki presence hi kya koi kam hai dost..shabdoN ki jaroorat nahi kisi taareef ke liye aap dost...mujhe parhte ho ye bhi bahut hai. Chaand Pulkit Dost...shukriya...is zar.ra nawaazi ke liye...tumne mere in ehsaasoN ko parha...samjha....jaankar bahut achchha laga... aksar ...achchha lagta hi hai jab koi aapko wahaaN jaakar parhta hai ....jahaaN aap doobe haiN... Khushi hui tumhaara reply parhkar. Chaand Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN. - Chaand |
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28th January 2005, 11:45 AM
Gar dil par dimaad ke pahare hote,
kyon kar dil tootate aur tajmahal ban-te. Dil kitanaa bhi jameen par rahe, Iskq kaa badal use dhood hi leta hai barase naa barase alag baat hai sir par kuch der madharaata hai. safar-e-iskq bhi kafee hai ek dil ke liye mazil-e-iskq koi jaroorii to nahi, chand kahan sabko milataa hai ,chand, chatt par sabke ho roshanii ye jaroorii to nahi. aamin. it becomes more and more universal. |
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29th January 2005, 05:21 PM
hello chandjee...
kaise hain aap.............mere paas to tarif karne ke liye words hi nahin hain....................bahut hi khubsurat ehsaas hain khud se baat karneka.....hume behad pasand aaya... apna khyal rakhiyega... mausam Jaane kya samjhi main useN Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se |
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3rd February 2005, 09:02 PM
Paplupopat saahab...aapka reply ka ye andaaz bahut pasand aaya...
bahut khoob likha hai aapne. Tahe dil se shukriya..ise hamse share karne ke liye. Chaand Hello mausam, mai achchha hooN or aapki khushhaali ki kaamna karta hooN. aapko meri ye khudse hi guftgu itni pasand aayi...jaankar bahut achchha laga.. Tahe dil se shukriya meri is hausla-afzaai ke liye. Shukriya... Chaand Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN. - Chaand |
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5th February 2005, 11:59 AM
Are ..! hame kahaaN kisi se dil lagaana tha
Ye to bas…baat chhedne ka ek bahaana tha, Mai apni ‘Jameen’ per hi khush hooN, ey dost Bas is ‘Chaand’ ko, mere aasmaan per na chhana tha. lol... chaand shukr hai ki aapne yeh last para likh diya...warna hum tau ghabra jaane wale thhe...ki aap itne gambhir ho chale hain... achhe khayalaat hain... paras gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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5th February 2005, 04:58 PM
Ji shukriya Paaras saahiba ...ab ghabraane ki jaroorat nahi....ye Chaand bas yooN hi likh diya karta hai...
Tahe dil se shukriya aapke is reply ke liye. Khush rahiye.. Chaand Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN. - Chaand |
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5th February 2005, 05:03 PM
Chaand bhai,
Bahut khoob likha hai.... Aapki guzarish ko hum man na sake humne to dil se isse laga liya hai.... bahut khoob likha hai.... Yunhi likhte raha karein Thanks Rohin |
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