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Badal tab aur ab - 21st July 2010, 10:36 AM

BADAL TAB AUR AB



Badal pahle Jab bhi ate the,

khil jate the man, kavitao'n ke saath,
shayrana khayal late the.

Kagaz ki kashtio'n ke jamaana tha,
gaddho'n ke pani me chhapak chhapak kood kar,
nanga nahana tha,

kook uthti thi koylen masti mei,
jashan ka mahoul rang bhar deta tha kachhi basti me,

Barsaat me hum se mile tum sajan tum se mile hum, kahte the,
ye un dino ki baat hai jab hamare nadya naale bhi tarteeb se bahte the.

Badal Ab Bhi ate hai,
umdte ab bhi hai, ghumdte ab bhi hain,

Ab romance ki jagah man me hoti hai paida dahshat,
badal ke garjte hi basti me failti hai bahshat,

Bijli ki gad gadahat se jab badal garj jate hain,
to pakke gharondo'n ke dil bhi laraz jate hain,

Baadh ke tassavur se hi baichain ho jate hai'n log,
chhato'n pe saman rakhte hain utha kar aur ghabraate hain log,

Vaha najayaj kabje hai'n jaha se naale bahte the,
darya yahaan se gujrta tha ye hamare buzurag kahte the,

Doobna hi hai hamari kismat, hamne daryao'n ke raste rok dale hain,
Apni kismat ki takhti, me barbaadio'n ke keel thok daale hain,

Karte jaiye najayaj kabje kudrat ke nizam par,ek din aisa bhi aaega
jab har jatan ke baad bhi, gussail bandha hua darya hame nigal jaega.

Parveen Komal
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21-07-2010
10.29.AM

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21st July 2010, 10:46 AM

komalji zindabaad ,zindabaad , zindabaad......
nigam commisioner istifaa do , istifaa do , istifaa do...

mera yakeen hai komalji aap agar koi political party join karlen to apki party sloganeering se hi jeet jayegi....

aap bahut alag likhte hai......
agar ehsaans bayaan kare ....to aapki tarah kare.....
bahot khoob.....
zarur kahunga ki dil ko chu gaya......agar aisi koi cheeez hoti hai to.....

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21st July 2010, 10:49 AM

Komal jee:

namaste!

bahot hi saHeeH baat kahii hay aapne.. ab ki baariSh aur pehle ki baariSh mei.n baRaa hi farq haii.. insaan apne faa'iide ke liye kudrat ko bhee nahii.n baKShtaa.. yeh baat har aik ko samjhni chaahiye..bahot bahot ShuKriyaa'h! yuuNhi liKhate rahe.n ..!dil se daad!


KhuSh rahe.n... apnaa Khayaal raKhe.n

duaao.n ke saath ijaazat

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21st July 2010, 10:52 AM

Zidd bhai aap bhi Zindabaad, Apka bhi andaz-e-bayan , Andaj-e-daad , Janaab Ghalib ki tarah alag hi hota hai,
Zabardast toophani daad ke lie shukria janaab
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21st July 2010, 10:56 AM

Dhaval ji aap ne hamesha mera housla badhaya hai aapka tah-e-dil se maskoor hoon. shukria
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21st July 2010, 11:08 AM

komal ji, aapne apni poetry se hamara dil moh liya, aapki poetry mein ek karnti hai, ek josh hai jo hume behad pasand aaya...ek karara tamacha aaj ke selfish samaj/sarkaar ke chehre par.

hats off to ur poetry.

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21st July 2010, 11:17 AM

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komal ji, aapne apni poetry se hamara dil moh liya, aapki poetry mein ek karnti hai, ek josh hai jo hume behad pasand aaya...ek karara tamacha aaj ke selfish samaj/sarkaar ke chehre par.

hats off to ur poetry.

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Aap jaise dost kuchh is tarah mohabbat ka pata dete hain,
toote hue tare ko phir se bulandio'n pe pahuncha dete hain.
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parveen komal ji aapki kaveetaein padhkar ek bat to saaf ho gai hai jitni bkhubi se aap naye shabdo ka istemaal karte hai utni achi tarah yaha koi nahi karta bhot khub

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Shukria pawan bhai, apki is tareef ko mai sir jhuka kar kabool karta hoon.
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21st July 2010, 01:58 PM

I completely agree with what Zidd saheb had said..........I won't be able to describe this work any better.


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geet nazm kavita ghazal ya kuch aur ... kyuNki isme mujhe saare hi rang nazar aa gaye .. ab daad duN ya nahi ye samajh nahi aa raha .. samajh nahi aata kya kahuN ...

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Aap jaise dost kuchh is tarah mohabbat ka pata dete hain,
toote hue tare ko phir se bulandio'n pe pahuncha dete hain.


ParveeN jii, shukriya aapne hamare liye etna umda sher likha, hum dua karte haiN ki aap bulandi par raheN, bas bulandi par jakar zameeN ko mat bhoolna.....shayarana andaaz aur baaki shayroN se adab se pesh aana yeh ek shayar ki khoobi aur uska aaina hota hai.....aur ParveeN ji aaina kabhi jooth nahi bolta....hai na

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Praveen Ji.....aapki tehreer ka yeh andaaz pasand aaya......daad !




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BADAL TAB AUR AB



Badal pahle Jab bhi ate the,

khil jate the man, kavitao'n ke saath,
shayrana khayal late the.

Kagaz ki kashtio'n ke jamaana tha,
gaddho'n ke pani me chhapak chhapak kood kar,
nanga nahana tha,

kook uthti thi koylen masti mei,
jashan ka mahoul rang bhar deta tha kachhi basti me,

Barsaat me hum se mile tum sajan tum se mile hum, kahte the,
ye un dino ki baat hai jab hamare nadya naale bhi tarteeb se bahte the.

Badal Ab Bhi ate hai,
umdte ab bhi hai, ghumdte ab bhi hain,

Ab romance ki jagah man me hoti hai paida dahshat,
badal ke garjte hi basti me failti hai bahshat,

Bijli ki gad gadahat se jab badal garj jate hain,
to pakke gharondo'n ke dil bhi laraz jate hain,

Baadh ke tassavur se hi baichain ho jate hai'n log,
chhato'n pe saman rakhte hain utha kar aur ghabraate hain log,

Vaha najayaj kabje hai'n jaha se naale bahte the,
darya yahaan se gujrta tha ye hamare buzurag kahte the,

Doobna hi hai hamari kismat, hamne daryao'n ke raste rok dale hain,
Apni kismat ki takhti, me barbaadio'n ke keel thok daale hain,

Karte jaiye najayaj kabje kudrat ke nizam par,ek din aisa bhi aaega
jab har jatan ke baad bhi, gussail bandha hua darya hame nigal jaega.

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BADAL TAB AUR AB




Badal pahle Jab bhi ate the,
khil jate the man, kavitao'n ke saath,
shayrana khayal late the.

Kagaz ki kashtio'n ke jamaana tha,
gaddho'n ke pani me chhapak chhapak kood kar,
nanga nahana tha,

kook uthti thi koylen masti mei,
jashan ka mahoul rang bhar deta tha kachhi basti me,

Barsaat me hum se mile tum sajan tum se mile hum, kahte the,
ye un dino ki baat hai jab hamare nadya naale bhi tarteeb se bahte the.

Badal Ab Bhi ate hai,
umdte ab bhi hai, ghumdte ab bhi hain,

Ab romance ki jagah man me hoti hai paida dahshat,
badal ke garjte hi basti me failti hai bahshat,

Bijli ki gad gadahat se jab badal garj jate hain,
to pakke gharondo'n ke dil bhi laraz jate hain,

Baadh ke tassavur se hi baichain ho jate hai'n log,
chhato'n pe saman rakhte hain utha kar aur ghabraate hain log,

Vaha najayaj kabje hai'n jaha se naale bahte the,
darya yahaan se gujrta tha ye hamare buzurag kahte the,

Doobna hi hai hamari kismat, hamne daryao'n ke raste rok dale hain,
Apni kismat ki takhti, me barbaadio'n ke keel thok daale hain,

Karte jaiye najayaj kabje kudrat ke nizam par,ek din aisa bhi aaega
jab har jatan ke baad bhi, gussail bandha hua darya hame nigal jaega.


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21-07-2010 ko jo aapne rachna likhi, aaj television pe leh mein aaye khatarnaak saylaab se panpi dehshat ki kuch tasveeren samne ayi, to qaabil-e-tawajjo lagi..
ek dam hoobahoo tasveer dekhne ko mili apki rachna mein jo padha tha..
aakhir ki lines qaabil-r-tareef hain -- Insaan agar isi tarah qudrat ke khilaaf jaakar junglon ko tabaah karke aashiyane banata rahega to ek din aisa zarur ayega jab khuda bhi naraaz qudrat ko nahin rok payega !!

khuda aise hi aapki kalam ki dhaar bnaye rakhe..
koi shak nahin aapki rachnayen bohat zabardast kisam ki hoti hain ..
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[ quote=kunaal;403076]geet nazm kavita ghazal ya kuch aur ... Kyunki isme mujhe saare hi rang nazar aa gaye .. Ab daad dun ya nahi ye samajh nahi aa raha .. Samajh nahi aata kya kahun ...

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BADAL TAB AUR AB



Badal pahle Jab bhi ate the,

khil jate the man, kavitao'n ke saath,
shayrana khayal late the.

Kagaz ki kashtio'n ke jamaana tha,
gaddho'n ke pani me chhapak chhapak kood kar,
nanga nahana tha,

kook uthti thi koylen masti mei,
jashan ka mahoul rang bhar deta tha kachhi basti me,

Barsaat me hum se mile tum sajan tum se mile hum, kahte the,
ye un dino ki baat hai jab hamare nadya naale bhi tarteeb se bahte the.

Badal Ab Bhi ate hai,
umdte ab bhi hai, ghumdte ab bhi hain,

Ab romance ki jagah man me hoti hai paida dahshat,
badal ke garjte hi basti me failti hai bahshat,

Bijli ki gad gadahat se jab badal garj jate hain,
to pakke gharondo'n ke dil bhi laraz jate hain,

Baadh ke tassavur se hi baichain ho jate hai'n log,
chhato'n pe saman rakhte hain utha kar aur ghabraate hain log,

Vaha najayaj kabje hai'n jaha se naale bahte the,
darya yahaan se gujrta tha ye hamare buzurag kahte the,

Doobna hi hai hamari kismat, hamne daryao'n ke raste rok dale hain,
Apni kismat ki takhti, me barbaadio'n ke keel thok daale hain,

Karte jaiye najayaj kabje kudrat ke nizam par,ek din aisa bhi aaega
jab har jatan ke baad bhi, gussail bandha hua darya hame nigal jaega.

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komal bhai
radhe radhe

bahut khoob achha laga aapki rachna ko padhkar
likhte rahiye
duaon ke saath


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ishk bhai jai shri radhe!
Apne parotsahit kia apka behad shukria ada karta hoo'n.
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thanks sandeep ji............................


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21-07-2010 ko jo aapne rachna likhi, aaj television pe leh mein aaye khatarnaak saylaab se panpi dehshat ki kuch tasveeren samne ayi, to qaabil-e-tawajjo lagi..
ek dam hoobahoo tasveer dekhne ko mili apki rachna mein jo padha tha..
aakhir ki lines qaabil-r-tareef hain -- Insaan agar isi tarah qudrat ke khilaaf jaakar junglon ko tabaah karke aashiyane banata rahega to ek din aisa zarur ayega jab khuda bhi naraaz qudrat ko nahin rok payega !!

khuda aise hi aapki kalam ki dhaar bnaye rakhe..
koi shak nahin aapki rachnayen bohat zabardast kisam ki hoti hain ..
aise hi likhte rahen..
khuda khair..
shukria abhinav ji! der se jawab dene ke lie muafi chahta hoo.n. purani post dekh raha tha to aapki daad ka pata chala. thanks


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Komal ji,

superb creation..... ehsaas aur andaaz-e-bayaan kamaal hai... dil se daad....likhte rahiye.... khush rahiye...


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superb creation..... ehsaas aur andaaz-e-bayaan kamaal hai... dil se daad....likhte rahiye.... khush rahiye...
thanks lamha ji . aap bhut achhi daad dete hai.n . i like and daad for your daad


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komalji zindabaad ,zindabaad , zindabaad......
nigam commisioner istifaa do , istifaa do , istifaa do...

mera yakeen hai komalji aap agar koi political party join karlen to apki party sloganeering se hi jeet jayegi....

aap bahut alag likhte hai......
agar ehsaans bayaan kare ....to aapki tarah kare.....
bahot khoob.....
zarur kahunga ki dil ko chu gaya......agar aisi koi cheeez hoti hai to.....

regards
agar ehsaans bayaan kare ....to aapki tarah kare.....
bahot khoob.....
zarur kahunga ki dil ko chu gaya......agar aisi koi cheeez hoti hai to.....


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