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Ghazal: Kis baat se naraaz tha kis baat ko kehtaa rahaa... -
18th September 2011, 11:53 AM
aadaab dosto,
phir ek baar aap ke saamne apni nayi ghazal rakh rahaa hun..iss baar behr ka bhi dhyaan rakha hai...to kahin galti dikhe to zaroor bata dijiyega.. 2212 / 2212 / 2212 / 2212 aapki raaey ka intezaar rahega.. woh aap meiN mashgool tha maiN soch mein dooba rahaa kya waqt tha mehboob tha kya ishq ka jalwaa rahaa ro lenge teri yaad meiN aansu ki kyaa keemat rahi ehsaas bhi nahin tujhe dariyaa kahin behtaa rahaa do roz ki hai zindagi har roz ka phir maajraa jaisa tha kal waisa hi hun poocha hi kyun kaisaa rahaa pehchaan hai meri mujhe tasweer de na jao tum ab maiN woh chehraa nahi ab to bas aainaa rahaa yun hi nahi bismil tujhe ahabaab ne ghaafil kahaa Kis baat se naraaz tha kis baat ko kehtaa rahaa Pradhyuman - Bismil gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai? musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai? -------------------------------------------------- |
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18th September 2011, 12:02 PM
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yaaaaaaaaaaaar katl.............. bahut kuch kahnaa tha .... par ek dam jana pad raha hai..... bahut khoob ho sake to sunaa dena phone  |
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18th September 2011, 12:37 PM
Nice work. Thanks for sharing.....................
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18th September 2011, 05:40 PM
ro lenge teri yaad meiN aansu ki kyaa keemat rahi
ehsaas bhi nahin tujhe dariyaa kahin behtaa rahaa pehchaan hai meri mujhe tasweer de na jao tum ab maiN woh chehraa nahi ab to bas aainaa rahaa Waah ! Pradhyuman Ji ! Laaaaaaaaaaajawaab Sher Aadaa Hue HaiN !!!! BehtreeNNNNNNNNN Ghazal Huii ... Janaab ! Dilee Daad Aur Mubaaraqbaad .... !  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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19th September 2011, 09:10 PM
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aapko ghazal sunaani thi phone par..magar phir socha kahaan phone karke aapko disturb karun..aap jab online aayenge tab baat karta hun.. aapka dost, Pradhyuman gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai? musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai? -------------------------------------------------- |
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19th September 2011, 11:28 PM
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radhe radhe bahut sundar .... badiya ghazal banaai hai ... dil se daad .... likhte rahiye ... duaaon ke saath .... Aapka Apna Ishk 'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है email: rkm179@gmail.com 
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20th September 2011, 04:52 PM
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Aadaab Bismil Ji….! Shayad Aaj Pehli Dafa Aap Ko Parha Hai…. Or Parhna Acha Laga….Boht Boht Khoob Rahi Aap Ki Ye Ghazal. ro lenge teri yaad meiN aansu ki kyaa keemat rahi ehsaas bhi nahin tujhe dariyaa kahin behtaa rahaa yun hi nahi bismil tujhe ahabaab ne ghaafil kahaa Kis baat se naraaz tha kis baat ko kehtaa rahaa Ye 2 Ashaar Boht Pasand Aaye…. Boht Rawani Me Hain Or Maf'hoom Bhi Acha Hai…. pehchaan hai meri mujhe tasweer de na jao tum ab maiN woh chehraa nahi ab to bas aainaa rahaa Bismil Ji… Is Sab Ke Sath Sath… Mujhy Is Sher Ka dusra Misra Apni Behr Se Hat'ta Nazar Aa Raha Hai… Is Me Balance Nahi Lag Raha…. Parhnay Me Bhi Rawani Nahi Aa Rahi…. Agr Ho Sakay ToIs Pr Dobara Ghor Farma Lijiye Ga…. Aap Ko Meri Taraf Se Is Khubsurat Kalaam Pr Mubarakbaad…… Qabool Farmayen… Ay Chaara-Saaz Dil Pe M're Daal Ik Nazar Mujhko Bas Aik Jism Ka Aazaar Hee Nahi AHMAD ALI SHAKIL |
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20th September 2011, 05:03 PM
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waah waah kiya abaat hai bhai bahot khoob yaar is dushwaar bahr me achhy achhy log ghazal kahtey kaanp jaatey hain yahee wajah hai ki aaj kal ki ghazlen is bahr me kam miltee hain khud aaj tak main ne kabhi is bahr me ghazal na kahee hai ,,,, is se badaa kamaal ye hai ki aap ne bahr se insaaf bhi kiyaa achhy mazoo laaye achhaa nibhaayaa bahot bahot khoob daad hi daad |
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20th September 2011, 05:57 PM
mittal_pali ji bahot bahot shukriya ghazal pasand karne ke liye..god bless
Naresh ji aap ko pasand tab aata hai jab ehsaas bayaan karne mein kaamyaab rehta hun..isliye bahot khushi hoti hai aap ke comments dekh kar..aapke saath ki aage bhi umeed rahegi..aapki daad dil se kubool hai..khush rahiye..god bless ishq_ik_ibaadat ji: radhe radhe..bahot bahot shukriyaa..aapki daad dil se kubool hai sahaab..god bless ahamad bhai: pehle to inn maumooli ashaaroeN ko padhne aur saraahne ke liye bahot bahot shukriya..jis misre ki aap baat kar rahe hain woh mujhe bhi khatak raha tha..aapne sahi farmaaaya..issme balance nahi hai..use dobaara likha hai...aapki raey chahunga..haalaaki iss soorat meiN misre ka matlab change ho jaata hai 2212 / 2212 / 2212 / 2212 main2 ab2 to1 woh2 cheh 2 raa 2 na 1 hiN2 hun2 keh2 jo1 aa 2 i 2 naa 2 ra1haa2 pehchaan hai meri mujhe tasweer de na jao tum main ab to woh chehraa nahi hun keh jo aainaa rahaa gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai? musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai? -------------------------------------------------- |
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21st September 2011, 01:09 AM
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daad qabul farmayen Regards _______________________________________________ PRANEETA
 Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota Ananthpak |
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21st September 2011, 11:30 AM
pehchaan hai meri mujhe tasweer de na jao tum
main ab to woh chehraa nahi hun keh jo aainaa rahaa Sir Ye Sher Bilkul Theak Laga Or Matlab Bhi Ba-Aasani Samajh Aa Raha Hai.. Aap Ka Mashkoor Hun Ke Aap Ne Is Na-Cheeez Ki Raaye Ko Tawajjo Di.... Khush Rahen... Ay Chaara-Saaz Dil Pe M're Daal Ik Nazar Mujhko Bas Aik Jism Ka Aazaar Hee Nahi AHMAD ALI SHAKIL |
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24th September 2011, 11:33 AM
wonderful... the best part is you shared the behr.... do keep writing... maybe i can learn something...
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4th November 2011, 04:14 PM
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Mehfil ki raunak baDhaate rahiyega aur apna khayaal rakheiN, ok...? With blessings Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai 
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'Bismil'
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4th November 2011, 06:38 PM
Amanush ji shukriya...
sir yeh to aapka badappan hai jo aap aisa keh rahe hain..aap bhi apna khyaal rakhiyega ok? god bless u aapka dost, Pradhyuman gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai? musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai? -------------------------------------------------- |
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4th November 2011, 06:42 PM
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thank you for the appreciation..sorry for the delay in replying back.. take care...there is no may be...if you can't learn how to write shayri (by going through my work) you can definetely learn how not to write shayri lolgod bless aapka dost, Pradhyuman gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai? musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai? -------------------------------------------------- |
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4th November 2011, 09:28 PM
good one Pradhyuman,
this one was beautiful do roz ki hai zindagi har roz ka phir maajraa jaisa tha kal waisa hi hun poocha hi kyun kaisaa rahaa and this one too yun hi nahi bismil tujhe ahabaab ne ghaafil kahaa Kis baat se naraaz tha kis baat ko kehtaa rahaa किसी में शाम न मिली तो किसी में सहर नहीं |
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5th November 2011, 08:47 PM
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gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai? musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai? -------------------------------------------------- |
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20th May 2013, 02:35 PM
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bahot bahot shukriya..abhi nazar padhi aapki comment par..bhai aap jo bhi likhte ho poetry lagta hai..aap ko kuch napasand ho aur wo zaahir kiya to woh bhi padhna acha hi lagta hai..kamaal hai...taarefoeN ke pool baandhna to koi aapse seekhe.. aur haan aap to chalti phirti urdu ki dictionary ho..aapke comments mein hi kuch nayaa seekh leta hun god bless u aapka dost, Pradhyuman - Bismil gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai? musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai? -------------------------------------------------- |
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20th May 2013, 08:07 PM
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behad khuubsurat ghazal hui bismil saahab... kya baateN kahi hain, ek se badhkar ek... waaahhhhhh dusre sher me saani misra behar se shayad hatt raha hai.. ek baar dekh len... shukriyaa... likhte rahiye... Shaad.... |
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21st May 2013, 01:49 PM
bahut umda ghazal kahi hai bilmil saaheb, khayal bhi ahche the, maza aaya padh kar, par doosre sher meN saani beh'r se baahar ho raha nahiN lafz pe, zara uspe gaur farmaaiyega...!! yuNhi likhte rahiye aur bazm ki raunak badhaate rahiye...
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ http://alfaaz-e-taish.blogspot.in/ Ishq hota tha, ishq karte haiN, Vo zamana tha, ye zamana hai... ----Taish ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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