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shehar hans rahaa hai - 5th September 2015, 12:33 AM

Kuch likha hai jo aap sab ke saath share kar rahi hu. please suggestion dijiyega agar kuch kamii reh gayi ho...................

Shehar hans rahaa hai, nagar hans raha hai
Meri galtiyo.n par safar hans raha hai

jahaa.n tak nazar meri jaati hai dekha
ye barbaadiyon ka kehar hans raha hai

Ye jeewan kathin hai yahi soch kar hum
jo marne chale to zehar hans raha hai

Zamee.n bhi hai chup aur chup aasmaa.n bhi
ye khamoshiyon ka bhanwar hans rahaa hai

Bohut shounk tha humko shayar banenge
Ghazal jo likhi to behar hans raha hai............


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5th September 2015, 05:23 AM

aadaab-o-namaste Sarika jee

aapki yeh Ghazal padhi aur majbooran, ba'daulat aapke sukhan, aapko daad-o-mubarakbaad diye bina "champat hona " gaNwara na hua to khaaksaar ki duaayeN aur daad tasleem farmaiiye


aapki Ghazal "taqreeban" beher meiN hai iske liye "alag se" khaas mubarakbaad qabuul farmaiiye, do-ek baateiN jo zabaan aur takkhayul-o-taGhazzul se ta'lluq rakhtii haiN aapse kehna chaahuNgaa, kabhi waqt ne ijaazat di to


ba-har-haal, Ghazal par aapki fiqr aur mehnat saaf zaahir ho rahi hai aur aap bilaa-shaq mubarakbaad ki haqdaar haiN, qabuul kijiye


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Love dil se pasand aaye gazal - 5th September 2015, 09:17 AM

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Kuch likha hai jo aap sab ke saath share kar rahi hu. please suggestion dijiyega agar kuch kamii reh gayi ho...................

Shehar hans rahaa hai, nagar hans raha hai
Meri galtiyo.n par safar hans raha hai

jahaa.n tak nazar meri jaati hai dekha
ye barbaadiyon ka kehar hans raha hai

Ye jeewan kathin hai yahi soch kar hum
jo marne chale to zehar hans raha hai

Zamee.n bhi hai chup aur chup aasmaa.n bhi
ye khamoshiyon ka bhanwar hans rahaa hai

Bohut shounk tha humko shayar banenge
Ghazal jo likhi to behar hans raha hai............


areeee wahhhhh bahut khoob

Bhabhi, likha hai jo tune fasana apne dil ka,
usey padke mand-mand dil mera hans raha hai

Pyari Sarika...bahuttttt khoobsurat likha hai tumne, padne meiN bhi majja aaya, bade flow meiN padi gye gazal...dil se pasand aaye sabhi ashiyaar.

yu hi liklhti rho aur bazm ki ronak badati rho.

pyar ke saath


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5th September 2015, 10:37 AM

ghazal dil se nikle aur dil tak na pahunche aisa nahi ho sakta kabhi...bahut alag andaaz aur khayaal rahe sarika....aur jis tarah aapne pesh kiya hai....har ek sher dil chhoo gaya....

Daad qubool kijiyega....
Aati rahiye..
Likhti rahiye....aur khush rahiye.



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aadaab-o-namaste Sarika jee

aapki yeh Ghazal padhi aur majbooran, ba'daulat aapke sukhan, aapko daad-o-mubarakbaad diye bina "champat hona " gaNwara na hua to khaaksaar ki duaayeN aur daad tasleem farmaiiye


aapki Ghazal "taqreeban" beher meiN hai iske liye "alag se" khaas mubarakbaad qabuul farmaiiye, do-ek baateiN jo zabaan aur takkhayul-o-taGhazzul se ta'lluq rakhtii haiN aapse kehna chaahuNgaa, kabhi waqt ne ijaazat di to


ba-har-haal, Ghazal par aapki fiqr aur mehnat saaf zaahir ho rahi hai aur aap bilaa-shaq mubarakbaad ki haqdaar haiN, qabuul kijiye


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Main humesha sochti thi ki aap kabhi to aaoge kuch bhi kehne aur phir lagta tha ki shayad aapko mera likha kuch bhi pasand nahi aata hoga iss liye itne saalo.n mein aap kabhi bhi nahi aaye.


AApne yaha.n aakar mujhe kitna motivate kiya hai aap ko andaaza nahi hai. main iske liye aapki shukrguzaar hun.

aapko jab bhi waqt mile to mujhe zaroor sikhaiyega mujhe bohut khushi hogi aur main apki shukrguzaar rahungi.


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areeee wahhhhh bahut khoob

Bhabhi, likha hai jo tune fasana apne dil ka,
usey padke mand-mand dil mera hans raha hai

Pyari Sarika...bahuttttt khoobsurat likha hai tumne, padne meiN bhi majja aaya, bade flow meiN padi gye gazal...dil se pasand aaye sabhi ashiyaar.

yu hi liklhti rho aur bazm ki ronak badati rho.

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yunhi aate rahiye aur housla badaate rahiye.


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nayaab , ajoobaa mojezaaaa..... waah waahh wahhhh kyaa kyaa kah doon samajh me nahii aa raha hai......

bahut accchaa lagaa aapka ye andaaz.... aur jaisaa ke bade bhai ne farmaaya muqammal behar me likha gayaa kalaam hai.......


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Allah kare ho zoore qaam aur zyaadaa,.... khush rahen, salaamat rahen......

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ghazal dil se nikle aur dil tak na pahunche aisa nahi ho sakta kabhi...bahut alag andaaz aur khayaal rahe sarika....aur jis tarah aapne pesh kiya hai....har ek sher dil chhoo gaya....

Daad qubool kijiyega....
Aati rahiye..
Likhti rahiye....aur khush rahiye.
Madhu aapke dil ko chuu gayi to matlab mera likhna safal raha.

Isi tarah aati raho aur apni meethi baaton se mehfil mein madhu gholti raho.


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5th September 2015, 11:34 PM

Ye jeewan kathin hai yahi soch kar hum
jo marne chale to zehar hans raha hai

Bohut shoq tha humko shayar banenge
Ghazal jo likhi to behar hans


Sarika jee..

Kia kahoon....! Aap ne kehny ky liye koi lafz chhodhy hon to kuch kahoon!

Tamam ghazal behtareen khayalaat aur ehsaasat ka majmoo'a hy...
Lajawab peshkash..

Wese to saary ashaar dil se nikly hue lagty hain
Lekin quoted ashaar jigar ky aar paar gaye..

Likhty rahiye.

Salamat rahiye..

Aapka.,


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Kuch likha hai jo aap sab ke saath share kar rahi hu. please suggestion dijiyega agar kuch kamii reh gayi ho...................

Shehar hans rahaa hai, nagar hans raha hai
Meri galtiyo.n par safar hans raha hai

jahaa.n tak nazar meri jaati hai dekha
ye barbaadiyon ka kehar hans raha hai

Ye jeewan kathin hai yahi soch kar hum
jo marne chale to zehar hans raha hai

Zamee.n bhi hai chup aur chup aasmaa.n bhi
ye khamoshiyon ka bhanwar hans rahaa hai

Bohut shounk tha humko shayar banenge
Ghazal jo likhi to behar hans raha hai............
Very nice creation, Sarika Ji...! PaDh kar bahut accha lagaa, tah-e-dil se daad qabool kareiN...!

Ye sochkar har shay kis kadar haNs raha hai
Amanush bhi khushi se idhar haNs raha hai...!




Likhti raheiN aur apna khayaal rakheiN, ok...!

DuaaoN ke saath




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Bohat khoob! - 7th September 2015, 08:34 PM

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Kuch likha hai jo aap sab ke saath share kar rahi hu. please suggestion dijiyega agar kuch kamii reh gayi ho...................

Shehar hans rahaa hai, nagar hans raha hai
Meri galtiyo.n par safar hans raha hai

jahaa.n tak nazar meri jaati hai dekha
ye barbaadiyon ka kehar hans raha hai

Ye jeewan kathin hai yahi soch kar hum
jo marne chale to zehar hans raha hai

Zamee.n bhi hai chup aur chup aasmaa.n bhi
ye khamoshiyon ka bhanwar hans rahaa hai

Bohut shounk tha humko shayar banenge
Ghazal jo likhi to behar hans raha hai............
Aadab Sarika ji

Bohat umda kalaam se nawaaza aapne bazm ko. Mubarakbaad! Padhi to iss par likhe bina raha nahiiN gaya.

Jaisa ke Maikash sahab ne kaha aapki Ghazal taqreeban behr meiN hai aur aapki sanwarti ghazalgoi ki misaal bhi hai. Haan ek do observations maiN aapse abhi share karna chaahuuNga.

Matle ke pehle misre meiN lafz shahar fit nahiiN ho raha hai kyuNki sahi lafz Shahr(without "a") hota hai aur aise meiN aapka misra bahr se Khaarij ho jaata hai. YahaN ke liye koi aur lafz socheN. Lafz 'galti' nahiN Ghalati hai. Misra bahr meiN hai. Khayal bohat achcha hai.


Teesre she ke Doosre misre meiN bhi lafz Zahr (without "a") hona chahiye. Isse karne se bahr ka masla ho jaata hai. Iss par bhi ghour kareN. Ye bhi khayal bohat achcha hai.


Aakhiri sher meiN shounk ko shauq kar leN. Aur agla misra badleN. Bahr "hota" nahiiN "hoti" hai.

Maine itna sab issliye likha ki aapke fikr aur lehje se maiN kaafi mutassir hua aur laga ke kyuN na ek khoobsoorat kalaam ko aur khoobsoorat banane ki baat ki jaaye. Ummed karta huuN aap tanqeed ka bura na maneiN gi. Mujhe ek umda shayra in the making dikh rahi hai.

Abhi filhaal yahi.

DuaoN ke saath

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manziloN ne sun liya toh aur woh badh jaayeNgi

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Shehar hans rahaa hai, nagar hans raha hai
Meri galtiyo.n par safar hans raha hai

jahaa.n tak nazar meri jaati hai dekha
ye barbaadiyon ka kehar hans raha hai

Ye jeewan kathin hai yahi soch kar hum
jo marne chale to zehar hans raha hai

Zamee.n bhi hai chup aur chup aasmaa.n bhi
ye khamoshiyon ka bhanwar hans rahaa hai

Bohut shounk tha humko shayar banenge
Ghazal jo likhi to behar hans raha hai............
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Shehar hans rahaa hai, nagar hans raha hai
Meri galtiyo.n par safar hans raha hai

jahaa.n tak nazar meri jaati hai dekha
ye barbaadiyon ka kehar hans raha hai

Ye jeewan kathin hai yahi soch kar hum
jo marne chale to zehar hans raha hai

Zamee.n bhi hai chup aur chup aasmaa.n bhi
ye khamoshiyon ka bhanwar hans rahaa hai

Bohut shounk tha humko shayar banenge
Ghazal jo likhi to behar hans raha hai............
Wah Sarika ji Wah bahut Khubsurat Ghazal Inayat Ki Appne. Iss Purasar intekhaab par merii jaanib se Dili Daad Qubool Kijiye, Umeed karta huN aise hi ahsaas baar bar padne ko mileNge...

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18th September 2015, 08:23 AM

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Bohut shounk tha humko shayar banenge
Ghazal jo likhi to behar hans raha hai............

bahut khoob Sarika ji daad hazir hai.

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nayaab , ajoobaa mojezaaaa..... waah waahh wahhhh kyaa kyaa kah doon samajh me nahii aa raha hai......

bahut accchaa lagaa aapka ye andaaz.... aur jaisaa ke bade bhai ne farmaaya muqammal behar me likha gayaa kalaam hai.......


kuch sher dil ke bheetar tak samaa gaye mere..... aur kaafi der tak unhe mahsoos kiyaa hai maine yaqeen maniyegaa......

Allah kare ho zoore qaam aur zyaadaa,.... khush rahen, salaamat rahen......

Aur likhtii rahen....

Shaad.....
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Isii tarah housla badhaate rahiye.

Bohut acha lagaa apko yahaa dekh kar.


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Ye jeewan kathin hai yahi soch kar hum
jo marne chale to zehar hans raha hai

Bohut shoq tha humko shayar banenge
Ghazal jo likhi to behar hans


Sarika jee..

Kia kahoon....! Aap ne kehny ky liye koi lafz chhodhy hon to kuch kahoon!

Tamam ghazal behtareen khayalaat aur ehsaasat ka majmoo'a hy...
Lajawab peshkash..

Wese to saary ashaar dil se nikly hue lagty hain
Lekin quoted ashaar jigar ky aar paar gaye..

Likhty rahiye.

Salamat rahiye..

Aapka.,

shukriya Hassan ji

Aap ne meri choti si koshis2h ki itni tareef ki ki dil khush ho gaya.

Umeed hai ki aapka saath aur prem isi tarah bana rahega.

Waise kaafi dino.n se apka koi kalaam humein padhne ko nahi mila to jald apni attendance lagaiye, humein intezaar rahega.



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Very nice creation, Sarika Ji...! PaDh kar bahut accha lagaa, tah-e-dil se daad qabool kareiN...!

Ye sochkar har shay kis kadar haNs raha hai
Amanush bhi khushi se idhar haNs raha hai...!




Likhti raheiN aur apna khayaal rakheiN, ok...!

DuaaoN ke saath


Shukriya Amanush ji

Apki tareef se ek nayi urjaa mehsoos ki maine. Housla badhaane ke liye shukriya.

aate Rahiye,likhte rahiye.


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Wah Sarika ji.
Bohot baDhiya kalaam hua hai.
Daad qubuul farmeiN.
Aise he likhte rahiye.


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Ahaaa......................

Somebody should pinch me today.........................

Maikash bhaiyaa

Main humesha sochti thi ki aap kabhi to aaoge kuch bhi kehne aur phir lagta tha ki shayad aapko mera likha kuch bhi pasand nahi aata hoga iss liye itne saalo.n mein aap kabhi bhi nahi aaye.


AApne yaha.n aakar mujhe kitna motivate kiya hai aap ko andaaza nahi hai. main iske liye aapki shukrguzaar hun.

aapko jab bhi waqt mile to mujhe zaroor sikhaiyega mujhe bohut khushi hogi aur main apki shukrguzaar rahungi.

Namaste Sarika behn,


ab dekho, is forum ka ithihaas gawaah hai ke maine aaj taq kisi bhi post par "rasmii" waah-waah darj nahiiN ki hai, picchle kuch saaloN se haalaat kuch aise rahe haiN, kuch kaarobaari aur kuch sehat ke mas'aley, ke forum par ba'qaayda haaziri nahiiN de paa raha hooN lekin phir bhi koshish karta hooN ke gaah-e-ba-gaahe aata rahuuN

sach maano, maine nazar-aNdaaz nahiiN kiya aur yeh tasleem karte hue mera kaleja phaTT raha hai ke maine tumhe pehle bohat hi kamm paDha hai,ab is meiN jo nuqsaan hua hai voh sar-a-sar mera hai tumhaara nahiiN hai kyoNke maiN tumhaari behtareen kaavishoN se mehroom raha, ek baat to tay hai ke gustaakhi dobaara bilkul bhi nahiiN hogi!

maiN tumhaari yeh Ghazal paDh kar jitna hairaan hua us se kahiiN zyada, bohat hi zyada, khush hua hooN

mashq jaari rakkho, mehnat aur lagan ek din raNg zaroor laate haiN


khush raho, bacchoN ko pyaar dena aur bhai saahab ko DaaNT


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goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai

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Aadab Sarika ji

Bohat umda kalaam se nawaaza aapne bazm ko. Mubarakbaad! Padhi to iss par likhe bina raha nahiiN gaya.

Jaisa ke Maikash sahab ne kaha aapki Ghazal taqreeban behr meiN hai aur aapki sanwarti ghazalgoi ki misaal bhi hai. Haan ek do observations maiN aapse abhi share karna chaahuuNga.

Matle ke pehle misre meiN lafz shahar fit nahiiN ho raha hai kyuNki sahi lafz Shahr(without "a") hota hai aur aise meiN aapka misra bahr se Khaarij ho jaata hai. YahaN ke liye koi aur lafz socheN. Lafz 'galti' nahiN Ghalati hai. Misra bahr meiN hai. Khayal bohat achcha hai.


Teesre she ke Doosre misre meiN bhi lafz Zahr (without "a") hona chahiye. Isse karne se bahr ka masla ho jaata hai. Iss par bhi ghour kareN. Ye bhi khayal bohat achcha hai.


Aakhiri sher meiN shounk ko shauq kar leN. Aur agla misra badleN. Bahr "hota" nahiiN "hoti" hai.

Maine itna sab issliye likha ki aapke fikr aur lehje se maiN kaafi mutassir hua aur laga ke kyuN na ek khoobsoorat kalaam ko aur khoobsoorat banane ki baat ki jaaye. Ummed karta huuN aap tanqeed ka bura na maneiN gi. Mujhe ek umda shayra in the making dikh rahi hai.

Abhi filhaal yahi.

DuaoN ke saath

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Aapne itna waqt nikala mujhe samjhaane ke liye, iske liye main aapki aabhaari. pichle ek mahine se thodi busy ho gayi hoon to computer se log in nahi kar paa rahi thi. aur mobile se zyada type nahi ho paata.

aapne jo kuch mujhe samjhaya wo mujhe samajh mein aaya aur waqt milte hi aise edit bhi karungi. tab tak aap bhi mujhe suggest kijiye agar correction aapke dimaag mein aaye koi.

isi tarah aate rahiye aur samjhaate rahiye. aap sabki nishaandehi hi to humein acha likhne ke liye prerit karti hai.

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Namaste Rajinder ji..

Bohut shukriya pasandagi ke liye.

Aate rahiye.

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Wah Sarika ji Wah bahut Khubsurat Ghazal Inayat Ki Appne. Iss Purasar intekhaab par merii jaanib se Dili Daad Qubool Kijiye, Umeed karta huN aise hi ahsaas baar bar padne ko mileNge...
Shuriya Harsh Sir.

Bohut khushi hoti hai jab aap aate hain aur tareef karte hain.

Mujhe acha laga ki aap ko pasand aayi meri koshish.

Mujhe khed hai ki aapka interview beech mein ruk gaya . mere sawaal karne ka mouka hi nahi aaya...


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Ise kehte hai shayri .. bohat hi aala .. bohat hi shaandaar.. praveen ji ki baaton se main ittefaq rakhta hun .. par wo language ki jaankaari ka abhaav se hai.. jise samajhne main waqt lagta hai.. beharhaal .. maine takneek pe nhi taula ise kyunki hindvi ke hisaab main aaj kal ki bhasha pe lete hue ye lajawab hai aur bohat hi kamaal hai.. meri aur se dher saari mubarakbaad

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Bohut shounk tha humko shayar banenge
Ghazal jo likhi to behar hans raha hai............

bahut khoob Sarika ji daad hazir hai.

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Bohut Bohut Shukriya Rajinder ji

Aap yaha aaye aur mera badaa housla badhaaya.

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Bohot baDhiya kalaam hua hai.
Daad qubuul farmeiN.
Aise he likhte rahiye.
Bohut shukriya Saagar ji

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Bohut acha laga.

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Namaste Sarika behn,


ab dekho, is forum ka ithihaas gawaah hai ke maine aaj taq kisi bhi post par "rasmii" waah-waah darj nahiiN ki hai, picchle kuch saaloN se haalaat kuch aise rahe haiN, kuch kaarobaari aur kuch sehat ke mas'aley, ke forum par ba'qaayda haaziri nahiiN de paa raha hooN lekin phir bhi koshish karta hooN ke gaah-e-ba-gaahe aata rahuuN

sach maano, maine nazar-aNdaaz nahiiN kiya aur yeh tasleem karte hue mera kaleja phaTT raha hai ke maine tumhe pehle bohat hi kamm paDha hai,ab is meiN jo nuqsaan hua hai voh sar-a-sar mera hai tumhaara nahiiN hai kyoNke maiN tumhaari behtareen kaavishoN se mehroom raha, ek baat to tay hai ke gustaakhi dobaara bilkul bhi nahiiN hogi!

maiN tumhaari yeh Ghazal paDh kar jitna hairaan hua us se kahiiN zyada, bohat hi zyada, khush hua hooN

mashq jaari rakkho, mehnat aur lagan ek din raNg zaroor laate haiN


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Kaise hain Bhaiyya,

Suna tha aapki tabiyat ke baare mein, apna khyaal rakhiye.

Arrey main gilaa nahi kar rahi thi apni khushi bayaa.n kar rahi thi. aapka aana mere liye bohut matter karta hai kyunki aap jaante hain ki main aur anu aapke kitne bade fan hoon...................

seriously, aap jo bhi likhte hain mere dil ki gehraaiyon ko choota hai. iss liye mann mein ye chahat hona to lazmi hai ki aap kabhi aayein chaahe daantne ke liye hi sahi, chahe sikhaane ke liye ya phir samjhaane ke liye hi sahi.

isi liye us din aapko dekh kar senti ho gayi thi........

Rab Raakha...........


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