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har ghaDee dil se nikaltaa huaa armaaN hai yahee - 4th September 2011, 06:08 PM

aadaab o taslimaat!
mahinoN baad chand sher hue haiN so pesh kar rahaa huN. tarHee misra darj sher se
liyaa gayaa hai jo mujhe azeez to hai, magar shaayar kaa naam ahbaab hee bataa sakte hai .

"yeh jo soorat hai tiree soorat e jaanaaN hai yahee,
yahee naqshaa hai, yahee rang hai, saamaaN hai yahee!"


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har ghaDee dil se nikaltaa huaa armaaN hai yahee,
"ye jo soorat hai tiree, soorat e jaanaaN hai yahee!"

is faqeeraanaa tabeeyat ko tasaw'wur bhee tiraa,
hij'r meN vas'l hai, sehraa meN gulistaaN hai yahee!

teree chaukhaT pe tiraa khan'ah-badosh aisaa rukaa,
jaise ab dair o haram, kaabaa o iimaaN hai yahee!

jaz'b e ishq, zabaaN-bandee, taDap, zab't e alam!
teree jan'nat ke talabgaar kaa saamaaN hai yahee!

aadamee, aadamee, bas aadamee! taa-had'd e nazar?
kisko dekhe se lage "haaN! ki bas insaaN hai yahee"?

duniya aayeenaa hai aur iske sivaa kuchh bhee naheeN,
hai jo aayeene meN mailaa, woh girebaaN hai yahee!

mas'alaa sun ke kis andaaz se bahlaataa hai "dheer"!
ab ke ban aayee jo khud pe to pareshaaN hai yahee!
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is faqeeraanaa tabeeyat ko tasaw'wur bhee tiraa,
hij'r meN vas'l hai, sehraa meN gulistaaN hai yahee!

teree chaukhaT pe tiraa khan'ah-badosh aisaa rukaa,
jaise ab dair o haram, kaabaa o iimaaN hai yahee!

duniya aayeenaa hai aur iske sivaa kuchh bhee naheeN,
hai jo aayeene meN mailaa, woh girebaaN hai yahee!


Waah ! Dheer Bhai !! Kamaal Ke Ashaar Nikaale HaiN ... Bahut Hi Umdaa !

Sar Se Paa Tak Behtreen Ghazal Hui .... Dilee Daad Aur Mubaaraqbaad !

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[QUOTE=dheer;430058]aadaab o taslimaat!
mahinoN baad chand sher hue haiN so pesh kar rahaa huN. tarHee misra darj sher se
liyaa gayaa hai jo mujhe azeez to hai, magar shaayar kaa naam ahbaab hee bataa sakte hai .

"yeh jo soorat hai tiree soorat e jaanaaN hai yahee,
yahee naqshaa hai, yahee rang hai, saamaaN hai yahee!"


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dheer bhayee adaab , kaise haiN aap .......
umeed hai sehat-mand honge



har ghaDee dil se nikaltaa huaa armaaN hai yahee,
"ye jo soorat hai tiree, soorat e jaanaaN hai yahee!"

thodaa uljh gaya maiN .......... nikltaa huaa armaan....... kuch khul nahi raha hai............ ho saktaa hai lekin tarahi misraa hai.... so benefit of doubt de sakte haiN
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is faqeeraanaa tabeeyat ko tasaw'wur bhee tiraa,
hij'r meN vas'l hai, sehraa meN gulistaaN hai yahee!

mujeh aisa lag raha hai ki oolaa mai BHI lafz ne thodaa gadbad si ki.... bharti ka lafz sa laga ....bhee se misre ka maanhi kuch alag sense mai aa raha hai
aisa mujhe lag raha hai

teree chaukhaT pe tiraa khan'ah-badosh aisaa rukaa,
jaise ab dair o haram, kaabaa o iimaaN hai yahee!

bhayeee olaa ka to koe jawaab nahi hai........ bahut acha laga
saani bhi khoob hai..

kaaba ke sath imaan ..... thoda jach nahi raha .... yaa imaaN ke saath kaabaa ...

jaz'b e ishq, zabaaN-bandee, taDap, zab't e alam!
teree jan'nat ke talabgaar kaa saamaaN hai yahee!

acha hai daaaaaad

aadamee, aadamee, bas aadamee! taa-had'd e nazar?
kisko dekhe se lage "haaN! ki bas insaaN hai yahee"?

kyaa khoob sher hai bhayeee waah

duniya aayeenaa hai aur iske sivaa kuchh bhee naheeN,
hai jo aayeene meN mailaa, woh girebaaN hai yahee!


bahut acha ...... bahut hi aaachaaa

mas'alaa sun ke kis andaaz se bahlaataa hai "dheer"!
ab ke ban aayee jo khud pe to pareshaaN hai yahee!


maqtaa haasil e ghazal kahun to koe galat nahi hogaa ...
khoob kaha hai............

khoob ghazal hi kahiyee ....
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5th September 2011, 08:48 AM

Dheer Bhaiya:

Pranaam!

baDe dinoN baad aapki ko'ii Ghazal paDhne ko milii aaj bahot hi KhuShi hu'ii.. dil-kaSh Ghazal kahi hay aapne.. dil se daad aur duaaeN

KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

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aadaab o taslimaat!
mahinoN baad chand sher hue haiN so pesh kar rahaa huN. tarHee misra darj sher se
liyaa gayaa hai jo mujhe azeez to hai, magar shaayar kaa naam ahbaab hee bataa sakte hai .

"yeh jo soorat hai tiree soorat e jaanaaN hai yahee,
yahee naqshaa hai, yahee rang hai, saamaaN hai yahee!"


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har ghaDee dil se nikaltaa huaa armaaN hai yahee,
"ye jo soorat hai tiree, soorat e jaanaaN hai yahee!"

is faqeeraanaa tabeeyat ko tasaw'wur bhee tiraa,
hij'r meN vas'l hai, sehraa meN gulistaaN hai yahee!

teree chaukhaT pe tiraa khan'ah-badosh aisaa rukaa,
jaise ab dair o haram, kaabaa o iimaaN hai yahee!

jaz'b e ishq, zabaaN-bandee, taDap, zab't e alam!
teree jan'nat ke talabgaar kaa saamaaN hai yahee!

aadamee, aadamee, bas aadamee! taa-had'd e nazar?
kisko dekhe se lage "haaN! ki bas insaaN hai yahee"?

duniya aayeenaa hai aur iske sivaa kuchh bhee naheeN,
hai jo aayeene meN mailaa, woh girebaaN hai yahee!

mas'alaa sun ke kis andaaz se bahlaataa hai "dheer"!
ab ke ban aayee jo khud pe to pareshaaN hai yahee!
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apne taassuraat se nawaaziyegaa, aisee iltejaa hai.

shukriyaa!
dheer ji bahut khoob har sher bahut khoobsurat hua hai.dil se daad hazir hai kubool farmayen.sher jo dil ko chhoo gya.

aadamee, aadamee, bas aadamee! taa-had'd e nazar?
kisko dekhe se lage "haaN! ki bas insaaN hai yahee"?

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aadaab o taslimaat!
mahinoN baad chand sher hue haiN so pesh kar rahaa huN. tarHee misra darj sher se
liyaa gayaa hai jo mujhe azeez to hai, magar shaayar kaa naam ahbaab hee bataa sakte hai .

dheer bhai namaste...ek arse baad aapko padhne ka mauka milaa hai..badi khushi hui aapki yeh ghazal dekh kar..


"yeh jo soorat hai tiree soorat e jaanaaN hai yahee,
yahee naqshaa hai, yahee rang hai, saamaaN hai yahee!"


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har ghaDee dil se nikaltaa huaa armaaN hai yahee,
"ye jo soorat hai tiree, soorat e jaanaaN hai yahee!"

yeh meri kam ilmi hi ho sakti hai ki mujhe pehle aur doosre misre mein rabt nahi nazar aa rahaa..doneoN apne aap mein mukammal hai magar ek doosre se jude nahi lag rahe..aap hi kuch roshni daalen

is faqeeraanaa tabeeyat ko tasaw'wur bhee tiraa,
hij'r meN vas'l hai, sehraa meN gulistaaN hai yahee!

bahot ache..

teree chaukhaT pe tiraa khan'ah-badosh aisaa rukaa,
jaise ab dair o haram, kaabaa o iimaaN hai yahee!

main iss sher par aisaa rukaa...ki bas ruka hua hun abhi bhi..waahh bahot ache..daad

jaz'b e ishq, zabaaN-bandee, taDap, zab't e alam!
teree jan'nat ke talabgaar kaa saamaaN hai yahee!

kya baat kahi hai dheer bhai..

aadamee, aadamee, bas aadamee! taa-had'd e nazar?
kisko dekhe se lage "haaN! ki bas insaaN hai yahee"?

wahhh..kya soch hai..yeh sher mere hisaab se haasil-e-ghazal rahaa

duniya aayeenaa hai aur iske sivaa kuchh bhee naheeN,
hai jo aayeene meN mailaa, woh girebaaN hai yahee!

umdaa..suni kahi hui baat hai...magar aapne jis tarah kaha hai woh bahot bhaayaa

mas'alaa sun ke kis andaaz se bahlaataa hai "dheer"!
ab ke ban aayee jo khud pe to pareshaaN hai yahee!

umdaa..

aapki ghazal dil mein ghar kar gayi..

yunhi aate rahiye aur humein apne ehsaasoen se rubaruu karwaate rahiye..god bless u wid all d happiness and success

aapka dost,
Pradhyuman


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Dheer saahab ko shaad ka aadaab.. Baraae karam jo muddat ke baad aapki ruhaani tahrEer hum sabke saamne aapne pesh ki.. Aapke kalaam ke waais koi misaal to nahi magar itnaa hi kahungaa ke har kalaam me aapne kalam tod dee hai.. Behad ummdah kheyaal o alfaaz.. daad ka nazraana peshe khidmat hain.. Aaindah ke liye bhi muntazir rahungaa..

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aadaab o taslimaat!
mahinoN baad chand sher hue haiN so pesh kar rahaa huN. tarHee misra darj sher se
liyaa gayaa hai jo mujhe azeez to hai, magar shaayar kaa naam ahbaab hee bataa sakte hai .

"yeh jo soorat hai tiree soorat e jaanaaN hai yahee,
yahee naqshaa hai, yahee rang hai, saamaaN hai yahee!"


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har ghaDee dil se nikaltaa huaa armaaN hai yahee,
"ye jo soorat hai tiree, soorat e jaanaaN hai yahee!"

is faqeeraanaa tabeeyat ko tasaw'wur bhee tiraa,
hij'r meN vas'l hai, sehraa meN gulistaaN hai yahee!

teree chaukhaT pe tiraa khan'ah-badosh aisaa rukaa,
jaise ab dair o haram, kaabaa o iimaaN hai yahee!

jaz'b e ishq, zabaaN-bandee, taDap, zab't e alam!
teree jan'nat ke talabgaar kaa saamaaN hai yahee!

aadamee, aadamee, bas aadamee! taa-had'd e nazar?
kisko dekhe se lage "haaN! ki bas insaaN hai yahee"?

duniya aayeenaa hai aur iske sivaa kuchh bhee naheeN,
hai jo aayeene meN mailaa, woh girebaaN hai yahee!

mas'alaa sun ke kis andaaz se bahlaataa hai "dheer"!
ab ke ban aayee jo khud pe to pareshaaN hai yahee!
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shukriyaa!
bahut khoob dheer bhai lajawaab hai..........daad
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is faqeeraanaa tabeeyat ko tasaw'wur bhee tiraa,
hij'r meN vas'l hai, sehraa meN gulistaaN hai yahee!

teree chaukhaT pe tiraa khan'ah-badosh aisaa rukaa,
jaise ab dair o haram, kaabaa o iimaaN hai yahee!

duniya aayeenaa hai aur iske sivaa kuchh bhee naheeN,
hai jo aayeene meN mailaa, woh girebaaN hai yahee!


Waah ! Dheer Bhai !! Kamaal Ke Ashaar Nikaale HaiN ... Bahut Hi Umdaa !

Sar Se Paa Tak Behtreen Ghazal Hui .... Dilee Daad Aur Mubaaraqbaad !

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Naresh ji,
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aadaab o taslimaat!
mahinoN baad chand sher hue haiN so pesh kar rahaa huN. tarHee misra darj sher se
liyaa gayaa hai jo mujhe azeez to hai, magar shaayar kaa naam ahbaab hee bataa sakte hai .

"yeh jo soorat hai tiree soorat e jaanaaN hai yahee,
yahee naqshaa hai, yahee rang hai, saamaaN hai yahee!"


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dheer bhayee adaab , kaise haiN aap .......
umeed hai sehat-mand honge

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Vikas bhaai! namaste. maiN changa huN ji. aap kahiye, kaise mizaaj hai. pichhlee martabaa roo-ba-roo mulaaqaat kyaa hee khoob thee. ummeed hai silsilah chalta rahegaa.
har ghaDee dil se nikaltaa huaa armaaN hai yahee,
"ye jo soorat hai tiree, soorat e jaanaaN hai yahee!"

thodaa uljh gaya maiN .......... nikltaa huaa armaan....... kuch khul nahi raha hai............ ho saktaa hai lekin tarahi misraa hai.... so benefit of doubt de sakte haiN

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tarhee misraa mujhe yuN bhee pasand hai ke ye : ek teer se do shikaar: jaisee bunat liye hue hai aur :yahee: radeef hee donoN misroN meN rab't Dhaal rahaa hai.
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is faqeeraanaa tabeeyat ko tasaw'wur bhee tiraa,
hij'r meN vas'l hai, sehraa meN gulistaaN hai yahee!

mujeh aisa lag raha hai ki oolaa mai BHI lafz ne thodaa gadbad si ki.... bharti ka lafz sa laga ....bhee se misre ka maanhi kuch alag sense mai aa raha hai
aisa mujhe lag raha hai

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teree chaukhaT pe tiraa khan'ah-badosh aisaa rukaa,
jaise ab dair o haram, kaabaa o iimaaN hai yahee!

bhayeee olaa ka to koe jawaab nahi hai........ bahut acha laga
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kaaba ke sath imaan ..... thoda jach nahi raha .... yaa imaaN ke saath kaabaa

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kyaa kahte hoN Vikas bhaayee . is sher meN lafzoN ko baratne meN bohot dimaagee kasrat huee hai. koee misaal to yaad naheeN yaad aa rahee magar ek qawwaalii kaa mukhDaa kuchh yuN hai,
ai jalwa e jaanaaN qadam qadam,
maiN kaise jaauN soo e haram,
meraa kaabaa o iimaaN to hai sanam........................
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jaz'b e ishq, zabaaN-bandee, taDap, zab't e alam!
teree jan'nat ke talabgaar kaa saamaaN hai yahee!

acha hai daaaaaad

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Dheer Bhaiya:

Pranaam!

baDe dinoN baad aapki ko'ii Ghazal paDhne ko milii aaj bahot hi KhuShi hu'ii.. dil-kaSh Ghazal kahi hay aapne.. dil se daad aur duaaeN

KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

aapka

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aajkal Udaipur hee hoN ? bhaayee ! is dili daad ke liye behad shukriyaa. hameshaa khush rahoN.

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dheer ji bahut khoob har sher bahut khoobsurat hua hai.dil se daad hazir hai kubool farmayen.sher jo dil ko chhoo gya.

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aapkee daad "qabool hai. qabool hai, qabool hai" . ummeed hai aagey bhee daur chalte rahenge.

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Pradhyuman bhaai.
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kaise haiN aap? ghazal kee pazeraayee ke liye behad mamnoon huN. yeh baDee baat hai ke aapko amuman saare sher pasand aaye. ek sher par aapne tawajjo chaahee hai so arz kar rahaa huN.


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har ghaDee dil se nikaltaa huaa armaaN hai yahee,
"ye jo soorat hai tiree, soorat e jaanaaN hai yahee!"

yeh meri kam ilmi hi ho sakti hai ki mujhe pehle aur doosre misre mein rabt nahi nazar aa rahaa..doneoN apne aap mein mukammal hai magar ek doosre se jude nahi lag rahe..aap hi kuch roshni daalen
donoN misroN meN rab't to hai, magar pehla misra haalee soorat meN kamzor hai. :se nikaltaa huaa: ko :meN machalta huaa: paRhiye. rab't yuN hai keh,
pehle misre meN ek hasrat kaa zikr hai. aur woh hasrat kyaa hai, yeh doosraa misraa zaahir kartaa hai. yahaaN radeef ne rab't nibhaayaa hai.
har GhaDee dil meN jo armaan machaltaa hai woh yahee hai. yaanee teree soorat! aur yeh teree soorat hee hai jo mujhe soorat e jaanaaN see azeez hai.


shaad raheN. aabaad raheN.

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Dheer saahab ko shaad ka aadaab.. Baraae karam jo muddat ke baad aapki ruhaani tahrEer hum sabke saamne aapne pesh ki.. Aapke kalaam ke waais koi misaal to nahi magar itnaa hi kahungaa ke har kalaam me aapne kalam tod dee hai.. Behad ummdah kheyaal o alfaaz.. daad ka nazraana peshe khidmat hain.. Aaindah ke liye bhi muntazir rahungaa..

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kaise haiN aap? bhaai! jin alfaaz meN aapne kalaam kee pazeraayee kii hai, mujhe Dar hai ki kaheeN maiN chane ke jhaaD par nah chaDh jaauN .

nawaazish , karam, shukriya, meh'rbaanee .

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bahut khoob dheer bhai lajawaab hai..........daad
radhe radhe
bohot shukriyaa Ishq bhaai!

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aajkal Udaipur hee hoN ? bhaayee ! is dili daad ke liye behad shukriyaa. hameshaa khush rahoN.

tumhara khairandesh,
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Dheer bhaiya:

Pranaam!

paDhaaii poorii ho gayii Udaipur se.. to waapis Ghar aa chukaa huuN.. aapse mulaaqaat nahiiN ho paayii udaipur meiN.. chalo koii baat nahiiN udaipur ki yaadeN dil meiN basii huii hai.. bahot si yaadeN liye Ghar waapis aaya thaa.. aur udaipur aana jaana lagaa rahengaa aapse Zaruur mil paaunga .. Bhaiya aapko aik PM kiyaa hai maine...duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

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Pradhyuman bhaai.
namaskaar.
kaise haiN aap? ghazal kee pazeraayee ke liye behad mamnoon huN. yeh baDee baat hai ke aapko amuman saare sher pasand aaye. ek sher par aapne tawajjo chaahee hai so arz kar rahaa huN.




donoN misroN meN rab't to hai, magar pehla misra haalee soorat meN kamzor hai. :se nikaltaa huaa: ko :meN machalta huaa: paRhiye. rab't yuN hai keh,
pehle misre meN ek hasrat kaa zikr hai. aur woh hasrat kyaa hai, yeh doosraa misraa zaahir kartaa hai. yahaaN radeef ne rab't nibhaayaa hai.
har GhaDee dil meN jo armaan machaltaa hai woh yahee hai. yaanee teree soorat! aur yeh teree soorat hee hai jo mujhe soorat e jaanaaN see azeez hai.


shaad raheN. aabaad raheN.

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dheer bhai namaste,

yeh "yahee" waali karaamat khoob rahi..ab sher khula hai mujh pe..magar phir bhi kisi ki soorat dil mein machalta hua armaan hona thoda stretched hai..baaki sheroeN ki tulnaa mein matla itna impactful nahi..mere hisaab se..magar mere hisaab se kya hota hai..aap hi maalik hai poori ghazal ke..

lekin yeh radeef se rabt nikaalna..ispar meri daad haazir hai

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waise toh aapki gazal ka har sher qabile tareef hai par issey kuch zyada nazdiki mehsoos kar raha hun..
aadamee, aadamee, bas aadamee! taa-had'd e nazar?
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dheer ji, salaa'm.
waise toh aapki gazal ka har sher qabile tareef hai par issey kuch zyada nazdiki mehsoos kar raha hun..
aadamee, aadamee, bas aadamee! taa-had'd e nazar?
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daad qubool farmayein.
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jaz'b e ishq, zabaaN-bandee, taDap, zab't e alam!
teree jan'nat ke talabgaar kaa saamaaN hai yahee!

aadamee, aadamee, bas aadamee! taa-had'd e nazar?
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WAH!!.. kya baat hai Dheer ji...behad khoobsurat ghazal hai..........




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liyaa gayaa hai jo mujhe azeez to hai, magar shaayar kaa naam ahbaab hee bataa sakte hai .

"yeh jo soorat hai tiree soorat e jaanaaN hai yahee,
yahee naqshaa hai, yahee rang hai, saamaaN hai yahee!"


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har ghaDee dil se nikaltaa huaa armaaN hai yahee,
"ye jo soorat hai tiree, soorat e jaanaaN hai yahee!"

is faqeeraanaa tabeeyat ko tasaw'wur bhee tiraa,
hij'r meN vas'l hai, sehraa meN gulistaaN hai yahee!

teree chaukhaT pe tiraa khan'ah-badosh aisaa rukaa,
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jaz'b e ishq, zabaaN-bandee, taDap, zab't e alam!
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aadamee, aadamee, bas aadamee! taa-had'd e nazar?
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duniya aayeenaa hai aur iske sivaa kuchh bhee naheeN,
hai jo aayeene meN mailaa, woh girebaaN hai yahee!

mas'alaa sun ke kis andaaz se bahlaataa hai "dheer"!
ab ke ban aayee jo khud pe to pareshaaN hai yahee!
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