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Exclamation saaNseN jism ko SATAAYEN to kya kareN...!! - 27th May 2009, 11:22 AM
Bazm ko ek baar fir is nacheez ka salaam, muddatoN baad nazm sa kuch likhne ki kosish ki hai umeed karta hooN jyada niraash nahiN kiya hoga, khaamiyoN ke liye maafi ka talabgaar hooN...!!


Waqt ki saakh se chand lamheN churaa loon, fir itminaan se khud ko sambhaalooN,, koi to bataaye mujhe is jahaaN men, marz-e-mohabbat ki kaun si davaa loon,, koi nahi milta hai isme sivaa tere, ab tu hi bata dil-e-khangushta ko aur kitna khangalooN,, mohabbat jab hui thi, tab to roka na tune, ab kaise ise duniyaa se chipaa loon,, waqt ki saakh se chand lamheN churaa loon………….




Mohabbat ki maiyyat pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….


Haalat-e-ishq dekh ke dang reh gaya,
Mehboob ka daaman jo tang reh gaya.
Jis khusboo ke peeche deewana tha main,
Wo phool hi ab fakat ek rang reh gaya.
Us khusboo ki yaad me kho raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….


Ashq palkoN ko sajaayeN to kya kareN,
SaaNseN jism ko sataayeN to kya kareN,
AansuoN me baha bhula dete ghum unka,
Gir ke tasveer unki banaayeN to kya kareN….
Un tasveeroN ko kaaNdhe pe dho raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….


Zakhm, ashq, zillat aur hum,
Rahe saath jaise humdum..
Socha tha thoda aur jee looN,
Par tumne de di apni kasam.
Un kasmoN aur vaadoN pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….


Mohabbat ki maiyyat pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….

HaaN sach apni maiyyat pe ro raha tha..........


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Mohabbat ki maiyyat pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….


Haalat-e-ishq dekh ke dang reh gaya,
Mehboob ka daaman jo tang reh gaya.
Jis khusboo ke peeche deewana tha main,
Wo phool hi ab fakat ek rang reh gaya.

Waah kya baat hai .....

Us khusboo ki yaad me kho raha tha,

beautiful .........
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….


Ashq palkoN ko sajaayeN to kya kareN,
SaaNseN jism ko sataayeN to kya kareN,
AansuoN me baha bhula dete ghum unka,
Gir ke tasveer unki banaayeN to kya kareN….

Katl .......... yaar katl .....

Un tasveeroN ko kaaNdhe pe dho raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….


Zakhm, ashq, zillat aur hum,
Rahe saath jaise humdum..
Socha tha thoda aur jee looN,
Par tumne de di apni kasam.

best of poem ..............


Apne dil ke ukdoN ko piroo raha tha,

but is baar yeh line poori tarah justify ni lag rahi ... jo upar ki 4 line ka
conclusion ho

tumhari nazm mai khaas yahi baat hai ki isme nazm ke jo do part hai . poori tarah sahi hai ....

pahli 4 line ... jisme jo do sher ko job ke banti hai... woh poora mukamal hai aur usme 5th line . jo 4 line aur most of last 2 line ko ek dam " Triveni " style bana de ..

keep it maan .... good going

bahut dino baad yaha mukammal poem padhi hai



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27th May 2009, 11:44 AM
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Bazm ko ek baar fir is nacheez ka salaam, muddatoN baad nazm sa kuch likhne ki kosish ki hai umeed karta hooN jyada niraash nahiN kiya hoga, khaamiyoN ke liye maafi ka talabgaar hooN...!!


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Jis khusboo ke peeche deewana tha main,
Wo phool hi ab fakat ek rang reh gaya.


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Ghayal Sahab,

lajawaab likha hai aapne...gehre ehsaas the...dil se daad kubool kijeye..

upar quote kiya gaya ash'ar to mujhe bahot pasand aaya...lekin aapko nahin lagta ki uski yeh soorat honi chahiye:

Jiski khusboo ke peeche deewana tha main,
Wo phool hi ab fakat ek rang reh gaya.

yunhin likhte rahiye khush rahiye..

aapka dost,
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27th May 2009, 11:57 AM
Ghaayal bhaa'ii:

namaste!

arse baad fir se aapko paRhne kaa mauQaa milaa.. KhuShii hu'ii.. aik achchhi peShkaSh !

YuuNhi liKhate raheN aage bhee ! daad!

KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

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Mohabbat ki maiyyat pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….


Haalat-e-ishq dekh ke dang reh gaya,
Mehboob ka daaman jo tang reh gaya.
Jis khusboo ke peeche deewana tha main,
Wo phool hi ab fakat ek rang reh gaya.

Waah kya baat hai .....

Us khusboo ki yaad me kho raha tha,

beautiful .........
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….


Ashq palkoN ko sajaayeN to kya kareN,
SaaNseN jism ko sataayeN to kya kareN,
AansuoN me baha bhula dete ghum unka,
Gir ke tasveer unki banaayeN to kya kareN….

Katl .......... yaar katl .....

Un tasveeroN ko kaaNdhe pe dho raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….


Zakhm, ashq, zillat aur hum,
Rahe saath jaise humdum..
Socha tha thoda aur jee looN,
Par tumne de di apni kasam.

best of poem ..............


Apne dil ke ukdoN ko piroo raha tha,

but is baar yeh line poori tarah justify ni lag rahi ... jo upar ki 4 line ka
conclusion ho

tumhari nazm mai khaas yahi baat hai ki isme nazm ke jo do part hai . poori tarah sahi hai ....

pahli 4 line ... jisme jo do sher ko job ke banti hai... woh poora mukamal hai aur usme 5th line . jo 4 line aur most of last 2 line ko ek dam " Triveni " style bana de ..

keep it maan .... good going

bahut dino baad yaha mukammal poem padhi hai



Mohabbat ki maiyyat pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
Shukriya bhai jaan, waise aapki shikayat maine turant hi door kar di thi, umeed hai aapko av vo shikayat nahiN hogi, aur aapki tareef humare sar aankhoN pe, bas yuNhi saath nibhaate rahiye...!!


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Bazm ko ek baar fir is nacheez ka salaam, muddatoN baad nazm sa kuch likhne ki kosish ki hai umeed karta hooN jyada niraash nahiN kiya hoga, khaamiyoN ke liye maafi ka talabgaar hooN...!!


Waqt ki saakh se chand lamheN churaa loon, fir itminaan se khud ko sambhaalooN,, koi to bataaye mujhe is jahaaN men, marz-e-mohabbat ki kaun si davaa loon,, koi nahi milta hai isme sivaa tere, ab tu hi bata dil-e-khangushta ko aur kitna khangalooN,, mohabbat jab hui thi, tab to roka na tune, ab kaise ise duniyaa se chipaa loon,, waqt ki saakh se chand lamheN churaa loon………….




Mohabbat ki maiyyat pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….


Haalat-e-ishq dekh ke dang reh gaya,
Mehboob ka daaman jo tang reh gaya.
Jis khusboo ke peeche deewana tha main,
Wo phool hi ab fakat ek rang reh gaya.
Us khusboo ki yaad me kho raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….


Ashq palkoN ko sajaayeN to kya kareN,
SaaNseN jism ko sataayeN to kya kareN,
AansuoN me baha bhula dete ghum unka,
Gir ke tasveer unki banaayeN to kya kareN….
Un tasveeroN ko kaaNdhe pe dho raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….


Zakhm, ashq, zillat aur hum,
Rahe saath jaise humdum..
Socha tha thoda aur jee looN,
Par tumne de di apni kasam.
Un kasmoN aur vaadoN pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….


Mohabbat ki maiyyat pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….

HaaN sach apni maiyyat pe ro raha tha..........

Luckyjee,

Jab bhi aap bazm mei.N aate hai... chha jate hai.......Yeh lines mujhe behad pasand aayi hai...


Ashq palkoN ko sajaayeN to kya kareN,
SaaNseN jism ko sataayeN to kya kareN,
AansuoN me baha bhula dete ghum unka,
Gir ke tasveer unki banaayeN to kya kareN….

Yunhi likhte rahiye aur.. Bazm roushan karte rahiye

Khush rahiye

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Lucky jii Aadab,

Jii janab aapki nazam bhi ghayal kar dene wali hai aapke takhallus ki tarha...

Janab wakai aapka ghayal andaz pasand aata hai mujhe, jabki main jyada
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kalam padhne ko jii chahata hai yeh baat mere khud samajh nahi aati.....

Bahut hi umda khayal hai behad dil ko chirne wale lafz lage, yunhi likhate rahiye..

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ghayal dost

Hope and wish you are fine and doing well.

aap ki nazm bohat zabardast hai, bharpoor daad qubool karein.
Aaj yahan aa ker bohat khushi hui, aap aur maikash donon saathiyon ke khoobsurat kalam parhne ko mile.
is tarah ki takhliqaat yahan likhi jaati raheen to yaqeenan hem jaise bekaar magar shayr o adab se raghbat rakhne wale loag phir yahan se mustafeez hona shru karein ge.
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Ghayal Sahab,

lajawaab likha hai aapne...gehre ehsaas the...dil se daad kubool kijeye..

upar quote kiya gaya ash'ar to mujhe bahot pasand aaya...lekin aapko nahin lagta ki uski yeh soorat honi chahiye:

Jiski khusboo ke peeche deewana tha main,
Wo phool hi ab fakat ek rang reh gaya.

yunhin likhte rahiye khush rahiye..

aapka dost,
Pradhyuman - Bismil

janaab ye humari khushnaseebi ki aapko humare jazbaat pasand aaye umeed karta huN ki aap aage v yuNhi humara saath nibhaate raheNge......!!


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Ghaayal bhaa'ii:

namaste!

arse baad fir se aapko paRhne kaa mauQaa milaa.. KhuShii hu'ii.. aik achchhi peShkaSh !

YuuNhi liKhate raheN aage bhee ! daad!

KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

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Luckyjee,

Jab bhi aap bazm mei.N aate hai... chha jate hai.......Yeh lines mujhe behad pasand aayi hai...


Ashq palkoN ko sajaayeN to kya kareN,
SaaNseN jism ko sataayeN to kya kareN,
AansuoN me baha bhula dete ghum unka,
Gir ke tasveer unki banaayeN to kya kareN….

Yunhi likhte rahiye aur.. Bazm roushan karte rahiye

Khush rahiye

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Bazm ko ek baar fir is nacheez ka salaam, muddatoN baad nazm sa kuch likhne ki kosish ki hai umeed karta hooN jyada niraash nahiN kiya hoga, khaamiyoN ke liye maafi ka talabgaar hooN...!!


Waqt ki saakh se chand lamheN churaa loon, fir itminaan se khud ko sambhaalooN,, koi to bataaye mujhe is jahaaN men, marz-e-mohabbat ki kaun si davaa loon,, koi nahi milta hai isme sivaa tere, ab tu hi bata dil-e-khangushta ko aur kitna khangalooN,, mohabbat jab hui thi, tab to roka na tune, ab kaise ise duniyaa se chipaa loon,, waqt ki saakh se chand lamheN churaa loon………….




Mohabbat ki maiyyat pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….


Haalat-e-ishq dekh ke dang reh gaya,
Mehboob ka daaman jo tang reh gaya.
Jis khusboo ke peeche deewana tha main,
Wo phool hi ab fakat ek rang reh gaya.
Us khusboo ki yaad me kho raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….


Ashq palkoN ko sajaayeN to kya kareN,
SaaNseN jism ko sataayeN to kya kareN,
AansuoN me baha bhula dete ghum unka,
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HaaN sach apni maiyyat pe ro raha tha..........
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Jii janab aapki nazam bhi ghayal kar dene wali hai aapke takhallus ki tarha...

Janab wakai aapka ghayal andaz pasand aata hai mujhe, jabki main jyada
dard per likhane ka aur padhne ka shauk nahi rakhata, per phir bhi aapke
kalam padhne ko jii chahata hai yeh baat mere khud samajh nahi aati.....

Bahut hi umda khayal hai behad dil ko chirne wale lafz lage, yunhi likhate rahiye..

Khush rahiye duaOn ke sath... Daad kabool kijiye..

Aadaab janaab, kaise haiN aap...?? umeed karta huN tandrust hi hoNga, ye humari khusnaseebi hai ki aap hume padhne ki jehmiyt har baar uthaa lete haiN, bas umeed karta huN ki aap yuNhi duaayeN dete rahiye aur hum jaise nadaanon ko pahte rahiye...!!

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Hope and wish you are fine and doing well.

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is tarah ki takhliqaat yahan likhi jaati raheen to yaqeenan hem jaise bekaar magar shayr o adab se raghbat rakhne wale loag phir yahan se mustafeez hona shru karein ge.
God bless you.
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are wah aaj to kismat hi khul gayi, janaab kabhi kabhar bhole bhatke mehfil me v aa jaaya karo. maiN durust huN aap apni tabiyat bataayeN...!! aur kahaaN rahe itne dino, aapko jazbaat pasand aaye bas dil ko tasalli mili, bas yuNhi aage v likhte aur padhte rahiye...!!

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Zakhm, ashq, zillat aur hum,
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Socha tha thoda aur jee looN,
Par tumne de di apni kasam.
Un kasmoN aur vaadoN pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….


Mohabbat ki maiyyat pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….


ghayal ji,

hmm.....wakhay ghayal lag rahe ho aap kisi ke pyaar me...,....bohat dard chupa hai aapki is nazm me, mehfil me sabko ghayal kar rahi hai aapki yeh nazm........ehsaas aur alfaaz behad acche lage mujhe,....ab ye bhi nahi keh sakti yuhi likhte rahiye...yeh kahungi likhiye zarur per dard se hatkar......

der se reply karne ke liye maafi ki talabgaar huuN,

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aapki nazm padhi...mera mann shabnam ki boondon se sarabor ho gaya...aapki Ghazal ke ehsaas jazbaat dil ko chhoo gaye....nazm ke sabhi sher umdaa lage ....vaise bhi aapki kalam ka koi jawab nahi...taarif ke liye mere paas shabd hi kaha reh jaate hai....aap se roshan rahe ye bazm sada.....aisi duaa hum humesha karte hai....
aapki duaa aur taareef humari sar aankhoN par, ye to aapka baddapan hai jo is nacheez ko itni izzat baksh di, dekhne vaale ka nazariya hi hota hai jo kisi cheez ko khubsurat banata hai, bas isiliye aapko humara likha pasand aa gaya. bas yuNhi is nacheez ko padhne ki takleef uthaate rahiye...!!

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Par tumne de di apni kasam.
Un kasmoN aur vaadoN pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….


Mohabbat ki maiyyat pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….


ghayal ji,

hmm.....wakhay ghayal lag rahe ho aap kisi ke pyaar me...,....bohat dard chupa hai aapki is nazm me, mehfil me sabko ghayal kar rahi hai aapki yeh nazm........ehsaas aur alfaaz behad acche lage mujhe,....ab ye bhi nahi keh sakti yuhi likhte rahiye...yeh kahungi likhiye zarur per dard se hatkar......

der se reply karne ke liye maafi ki talabgaar huuN,

DUAON KE SAATH

Zainy ji ab ghayal naam hai to dard pe kaise na likhuN ye hi samjha dijiye...!! waise jaan kar khushi hui ki aapko ehsash pasand aaye...!!

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