yeh kaisi fitrat ki zabardasti hai

[zidd]

ahl e bazm ko mera aadab,
doston ek naye koshish peshe kidmat hai....
beher ka thoda ilm hua hai.....us knowledge ko istemal karne ki koshish ki hai hai....
aap me se jinke paas time ho bataye ki thoda bahut kamyaab hua ya nahi...

yeh kaisi fitrat ki zabardasti hai
zindagi ghaTTti hai to umr baDti hai

rubaru tasvir hi aaine me dhalti hai
kisliye har gadi tu aaina badalti hai

hairaan hai ishraaq khud apni visat par
dekh,kaise andheroN se roshni ladti hai

lafz baratenge hum thoda peene ke baad
shayri khumaar me purjor nikalti hai

ab meri jaan choRde zidd tu bhi
teri zidd par ab jaan nikalti hai

ishraaq-dawn
visat- capacity

[kwahish]

Kya baat hai Zidd sahaB

Chalte chalte aapka kalam dekha wakai aapne kamyabi ki raah pakad li hai...

behad achchi aur khobsuraat ahsaas wale is kalam ko dil se daad hazir hai.......
sabhi sher ek se badh ke ek lage......
per yeh sher bahut achcha laga aur doutful bhi laga.... shayad meri samajh mein baraber nahi aaya ho...

hairaan hai ishraaq khud apni visat par
dekh,kaise andheroN se roshni ladti hai

Ishraaq ki visat kaha hai isliye shayad confuse hun agar ishraaq ki hi visat ki baat hai to sahi lagta hai sher per agar aaftaab ke visat ki baat hai to phir confusion zaruri hai... hai naa.....

Kyunki aaftaab ki visat itni kaam nahi hai iska andaaza humse behtar woh andhere jante hai jo aaftaab ke aane ke baad jane kahan chale jate hai....

Well ek behtin post per phir se daad kabool kare.......

[zidd]

Originally Posted by kwahish

Kya baat hai Zidd sahaB

Chalte chalte aapka kalam dekha wakai aapne kamyabi ki raah pakad li hai...

behad achchi aur khobsuraat ahsaas wale is kalam ko dil se daad hazir hai.......
sabhi sher ek se badh ke ek lage......
per yeh sher bahut achcha laga aur doutful bhi laga.... shayad meri samajh mein baraber nahi aaya ho...

hairaan hai ishraaq khud apni visat par
dekh,kaise andheroN se roshni ladti hai

Ishraaq ki visat kaha hai isliye shayad confuse hun agar ishraaq ki hi visat ki baat hai to sahi lagta hai sher per agar aaftaab ke visat ki baat hai to phir confusion zaruri hai... hai naa.....

Kyunki aaftaab ki visat itni kaam nahi hai iska andaaza humse behtar woh andhere jante hai jo aaftaab ke aane ke baad jane kahan chale jate hai....

Well ek behtin post per phir se daad kabool kare.......

kyu apne kaan -fuse kar iye? bhaiyya
saaf to kaha hai-
ishraaq khud apni visaat par...aftaab ka to zikr hai nahi kahi

[naresh_mehra110]

Originally Posted by zidd

yeh kaisi fitrat ki zabardasti hai
zindagi ghaTTti hai to umr baDti hai

rubaru tasvir hi aaine me dhalti hai
kisliye har gadi tu aaina badalti hai

hairaan hai ishraaq khud apni visat par
dekh,kaise andheroN se roshni ladti hai

lafz baratenge hum thoda peene ke baad
shayri khumaar me purjor nikalti hai

ab meri jaan choRde zidd tu bhi
teri zidd par ab jaan nikalti hai

ishraaq-dawn
visat- capacity

Zidd Sahab ...... matle se maqte tak ......ek se badh ek Ashaar kahe hai aapne ...... samaa baandh diya ..... bahut luft aaya aapki yeh peshkash padhke.... bahut khoob .... SuperB Creation Indeed ! yunhi likhte rahiye aage bhi ... khush rahen....

duaaon ke saath....