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masoodhassas jee ke saath Guftagu...! -
31st August 2011, 10:32 AM
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Namskaar aur Aadaab!! Shayri Parivaar ki aur se aap sabhi ko Eid MubaaraK..! Shayri Parivaar ka yaadgaar rehne waalaa yeh safar ab aur bhee aage baDh rahaa haii ..aap sab dostoN ka saath bhee mil rahaa hai.. bahot bahot Shukriyaa'h aap sabhee ka! tou ees baar sawaaloN ke Ghere meiN aane waale hain "masoodhassas bhaa'ii" ..bahot hi behterin Shaayar hai Shayri Parivaar ke.. masood bhaa'ii maiN aapka tah-e-dil se ShuKraGuzaar huuN ki aap Guftagu ke liye raazee huye! masood bhaa'ii: kuChh sawaal aapke liye! 1: apne baare meiN kuChh bataa'iiye..Family.. Friends ? 2: Shayri Parivaar meiN aap kaise pahuunche? 3: aap kab se Shayri kar raheN haiN ? 4: Shayri Parivaar meiN aapke pasandeeda Shaayar kaun kaun se haiN? masoodhassas's Profile: click here unki kuChh GhazleN.... Merey naseeb me aisee bhi subh ho yaa rab mujhe sataati hai teree judaayi har lamha Dil ka qaraar ek bataa Teen kar gayaa aankheN kaheen ye dil hi na lele koi qaraar ghalat Best of Luck!! duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~Dhaval |
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31st August 2011, 10:39 AM
The right person at the right time for Guftagu..
Dhaval, if you link the Shayar/Shayara's name with the profile, it'd help everybody know who they're. Even the newbies.. It's easier than to to search their name. Another thing, do share couple of their quotes, parts of nazms in the very first post so they're honored more..  ****** Your attitude towards life decides Life's attitude towards you... |
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31st August 2011, 01:31 PM
chalo i retire now
   all the best Masood sahab Regards _______________________________________________ PRANEETA
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31st August 2011, 01:54 PM
masood bhai assalamwalekum ,,
wah ab ayega maza .....bahut si chizen sikhne ko milengi ,,,,,,,,,mai apko dil ki tamamtar gaheraiyun se mubarak baad pesh karta hon ,,,apsi aala tareen shaqsiyat ko sawal kiye jaayen bhai ,,,apki ilmi shaqsiyat kissi tauruf ki mahutaj to nahi ,,,,agar me ye kahon ke is ahd ke kuna mashqs shaair hazrat me apka shumaar hai to baat galat nahi hogi ,,,Ab sawal ye paida hota hai ke ap se sawal kia kiye jaaye.N ,,,,Do misron pora jahan ko simet leene wale shaqs aage koi sawal kya maaine rakh sakta hai ,,,Rasm puch leta hon ,,, Janab Manzar bhopali sahab ne kaha ke Aadmi se insaan tak pahunch gaye to pata chalega ..Diye ke niche raushni kyun nahi hoti ( Sher thik se yaad nahi ) 1 - Diye ke niche raushni kyun nahi hoti ? 2 - Watan se doori ko Ap kiss nigah se dekhte hain ? 3 - Lafz maa.N ko apne Ahesasat me baaya.N kare.N 4 - Idhar se Udhar chaar din ki bahar hai duniya ....zindagi naam rakh diya kisne maut ka intezaar hai duniya ? apka kya khiyal hai ... Filhal mai zahen qasir hon ,,,Allah apko hamesha khush rakhe ..Apse bahut sikha hai humne ,,,Aur inshallah aage bhi sikhte rahenge ,... Apka bhai Qadeertoopchi |
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31st August 2011, 02:21 PM
Masood ji aapko aur SDC pariwaar ke sabhi members ko EID mubarak
Masoos jii aapka es guftagu ke silsiley meiN dil se suwagat hai...umeed hai aap bhi es guftagu ko dil se enjoy karenge...wish u all d best .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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31st August 2011, 04:23 PM
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tamaam doston ko meraa aadaab / nemastey main ek faqeer numaa aadmee hun magar aap logon ki mohabbat ne mujhey dunyaa ka sab se ameer insaan banaa diyaa merey dil ki khetee jo ki sookhe ki kagaar pe thee usy aap logon ki apnaaiyat ne lahlahaa diyaa ehsaas ke chaman me khezaaN ka deraa thaa magar aap logon ki ulfat ki wajah se ab bahaaroN ka deraa hai ,,, main ki muskuraana mujhe naseeb nahi thaa magar merey PARIVAAR ne qahqahoN ka lebaas pahnaa diyaa main ki dunyaa me akela thaa magar merey GHAR waloN ne mujhe galey milne ka FAN sikhaa diyaa ,,, main ki wo bachha thaa jo apney giroh se hat ke akel tanhaa khaDaa thaa magar meree FAMLY ne mujhe wo mahaol diyaa jahaan har ek ke saath main baith ke apney khiloanoN ki numaayish kar saktaa hun aor un ke pankh me rang bhi bhar saktaa hun aor un se man ki baat bhi kar saktaa hun main shukr adaa kartaa hun is FAMLY ke eyk eyk shakhs kaa jin se mujhe itna apeyaar milaa ki ab main jahaan jaataa hun un ki mohabbat merey sar pe chhaayaa ban ke chalaa kartee hai aor un ki neyk tamannaayen meree jaan w rooh ko hara bharaa rakhtee hain aor un ki doaayen har balaa se meree hefaazat kartee rahtee hain MOHTARAM JANAAB DHAVAL BHAI MAIN IS PRIVAR KE EYK EYK SADASYE KE SAATH KHAAS TAOR PE AAP KAA SHUKR ADAA KARUN GAA JIN KI MOHABBATON KI BADAOLAT AAJ MAIN WAHAAN PE HUN JAHAAN KI LOG TAMANNAA KIYAA KARTEY HAIN BEHAD SHUKRIYAH MEREY BHAI |
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31st August 2011, 04:25 PM
ye merey liye kis qadar khushi ka moqaam hai ki aaj EID ke din sabhi log meree khushiyon me shareek ho rahey hain ..... pooree dunyaa se alah thalag apnee waife aor bachhon se door ek taareek kamrey me baithaa insaan is PARIVAR ki mohabbat se jagmaagaa gayaa aor usee jagmagaahat ko le ke aap sab ko EID ki mobaarak baad detaa hai tamaam ahbaab ko dil ki athaah gahraaiyon se EID mobaarak |
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31st August 2011, 04:34 PM
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dhaval bhai aap ka shukriya aada kartaa hun ki aap ne mujhey is laayeq jaanaa aor hazaar izzat se nawaazaa meraa rom rom aap ki mohabbaton ka qarz daar hai waisy aap ka shukriya kiya aadaa karun aap merey dil me us moqaam pe hain jahaan baat shukriyah se bahot aage jaa chukee hai mere nazdeek APNON ka shukriya nahi ada akiyaa jaataa haan magar rasmo riwaaj ko poora akarne ke liye achhey sanskaar phailaane ke liye shukriya aadaa karnaa bhi zarooree hai is liye abhi bas shukriya hi adaakarun gaa agey dherey dheerey aap ke sawaalon ka tafseelee jawaab bhi detaa rahun gaa tah e dil se shukriya aap ka bhai masood |
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31st August 2011, 04:50 PM
Masood Bhai !
Aadaab !! Eid MubaaraK ... ! Guftagu MeN Aapka Tahe Dil SwaaghaT Hai ... Bahut Mubaaraq Mauke Par Aapke Interview Kaa Aaghaaz Huaa Hai .. Behad Khushi Ho Rahi Hai Aapko Yahaa Dekhkar ... YuuN Toh Aap Se Aksar FB Aur Online Guftagu Hoti Hai ... Parantu Iss Khaas Jagah Par Khaas BaaTeN Karne Kaa Apnaa Hii Ek Aanand Hogaa .. ! Vaise Toh Bahut Kuch Hume Aapke Baare MeN Jaankaari Hai Hii ... Yahaa Guftagu MeN Aur Bhi Nazdiik Se Jaanne Kaa Maukaa Milegaa Aapko ... Jo Ho Saktaa Abhi Tak Hum Se KahiN Chhupaa Aur ChhuuTaa Reh Gayaa Ho ... ! Ummeed Kartaa Hoon Aapka Humare Saath Yahaa Shaandaar Yaadghaar Aur Kaamiyaab Waqt Guzregaa .... Inn AashaaoN Ke Saath Phir Milte HaiN ... ! Abhi Ke Liye Bas Itnaa Hii ... ! Khush RaheN ... ! Apnaa Theek Se KhayaaL RakheN ... ! DuaaoN Ke Saath .... !  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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aadaab shaayad ki aap se pahlee baar mokhaatab ho rahaa hun magar ye ehsaas kitnaa sweer hai ki aap se baat kar rahaa hun umeed ki ye aapsee baat bahot der tak chaley gee aor ham apnee har khushi aor gham ko ek doosrey se share karen gey The right person at the right time for Guftagu.. aap ke is ek jumle se jo kholoos chhalak rahaa hai us ne bahot der muskuraane pe majboor kar diyaa badee baat hai ,,,, sach badee baat hai ... kisee ko is tarah se izzat wahee detey hain jo khud me itney badey hon jo khushiyaan baaNt ke doosron ka jeeney ka haosla detey hain badee nawaazish hai aap ki aap yahaan aayeen aisaa lagaa maano EID ke din koi apsaraa ek haath me kheer ka katoraa aor doosrey haath me DEEP leke ayee ho doa hai ye DEEP yun hi jalta arahey aor is ki lao me ham ek doosrey ke saath khushgawaar safar tai karen shukriya aor b epanaah shukriya aap ke tashreef laane kaa |
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31st August 2011, 05:00 PM
masood bhai aapka swagat hai is guftgu me asha karta hoon aapka ye safar bahut sundar guzrega
radhe radhe Aapka Apna Ishk 'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है email: rkm179@gmail.com 
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31st August 2011, 05:02 PM
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achhaa ji aap aap ho...... aap ke saath baat me jo maza aayaa wo to ham jaison se bat kar ke nahi aa saktaa naa aap ki doa ka be had shukriya aatee rahiye gaa shukriya |
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31st August 2011, 05:16 PM
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namaste! aapke sujhaav sar'aaNKhoN par..! bahot bahot Shukriyaa'h! KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khyaal raKheN duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~Dhaval |
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31st August 2011, 05:35 PM
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w salaam w rmatullah w bar kaatuh badey bhai aap ne jo taareef ki main us ka mustahiq bilkul nahi hun ,,,, magar is se aap ki mohabbat aor kholoos juDaa hai is liye main is ki dilo jaan se qadr kartaa hun ..... aap bazaat e khud ek achey insaan ke saath jazbaat ke shahenshaah hain aap ki ghazlon me jozbon ki goonj saaf sunaayee detee hai aor khaas taor pe aap ne MAAN ke liye kaafe sher kahen hain jis se aap ki rawadaare ke saath achhi soch ka isharah milta hai ;;; ye mere liye khushi ki baat hai ki aap jaisey log merey doasta ahbaab me aatey hain jin se main kaafee kuchh seekhtaa rahtaa hun jin ki fikr se mujhe roshnee mitee hai jis ke alfaaz merey liye roshnee ka zariya ban jaayaa kartey hain main sameem e qalb se aap ka shukr guzaar hun aor bahot hi apnaaiyat ke saath aap ko EID ki mobaarakbaad pesh kartaa hun main is baat se sao feesad muttafiq hun ki aap ke saath ye guftagoo khushgawaar rahe gee inshallaah janaab manzar bhopaalee se aake miltaa hun aor aap ke sawaalaat ka jawaab bhi detaa hun aor ye bhi baTaTa hun ki roshnee kahan kahan tak jaatee hai aor jahaan nahi jaatee wahaan kiun nahi jaatee aor jahaan jaate hai wahaan kiun jaatee hai aor kis raah se jaatee hai kis tarah se jaatee hai kahaan tak jaatee hai aataa hun bhai |
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31st August 2011, 06:39 PM
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kaisee hain aap zamna baad aaj aap se baat ho rahee hai wo bhi ittefaaq se aaj APNEY GHAR me hi ho rahee hai aap ka aabhaare ehun ki aap aayeen aor achey lafzom se nawaaza is himmat badhaane ke liye main aap ka shukr adaa na karun to zeyaadtee ho gee hai ki nahi ji ji main full enjoy karun gaa but aisaa na ho ki aap kabhi kabhaar aayen aatee rahiye gaa main intezaar karun gaa shukriya |
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kaisey han aap aor maata ji ki tabiat ab kaisee hai ? aap ne sawaagat kiyaa badaa achhaa lagaa kiunki jab ghar ka badaa swaagat karey to aor achhaa lagtaa hai ,,,,,,, are are aap fikr na karen main baDaa hi kah rahaa hun is ka matlab ye nahi ki aap ko jawaan nahi kah rahaa hun aap abhi bhi jawaan hain aor khodaa karey ye jawaanee sadaa bahaar ho jaaye ji haan ham f b aor yahoo pe mil chukey hain aor ab yahaan ki baat hi kuch aor hogee yahaan wo saare raaz khol diye jaayen gey jo ab tal dhandh ki chaadar me liptey they ji baDey bhai is mulaaqaat ko shaandaar aor khoobsoorat tareen banane ke liye aap jaison ka honaa zaroori hai jin ke paas tajurba bhi ho khiyaal bhi aor guftagoo ka saleeqa bhi bhi aor adab ka sho'oor bhi behad shukriya |
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31st August 2011, 06:53 PM
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aadab badey bhai aap kaa sawaagat karnaa dil ko khush kar gayaa waisey bhi EID ke din sawaagat aor mazaa detaa hai aap ki ashaa ooopar waalaa safal karey yahee meree dilee doaa hai aap aayn ge to mahfil aor jawaan ho jaayaa kare gee delhi me aap se na mil paane ka jo gham hai wo bhi kam ho jaaye gaa apnaa khiyaal rakhiye gaa aor apnaa chhotaa bhai samajh ke jo sawaal man me ho zaroor kijiye gaa taaki aap se khoob seekhne ko mil paaye achhaa chalta hun phir miltey hain zaraa der baad |
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31st August 2011, 07:48 PM
masood bhayee Eid mubarak
aapka interview mai swagat hai aapse ek bar kaha tha ye apnaa lahjaa mujhe de deN woh to milaa nahi. khair aapse eid pe ye zaroor kahungaa ye jo lahjaa aap mujhe na de paye, umr bhar woh aapkaa sath na chhode maiN bahut kam logo se zindgi mai mutazsir hota hun ya hona chahtaa hun unme se ek aap hai khush raheN |
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31st August 2011, 07:57 PM
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Jiss Roop MeN Aap MohabbaT Rakhnaa Chaahae Woh Khaas Hai Humare Liye ... Bachpan Jawaani Bujurgh BaDhe Bhaii Yeh Toh Um'r Ke PaDhaav HaiN ... Mujhe Naa Phele aetraaz Thaa Naa Ab Hai ... ! Par Har Sambodhan AvasThaa Ke MuTaabiq Kiyaa Jaye Toh Behtar Lagtaa Hai ... Kahne MeN Bhi Aur Sunne MeN Bhi ... ! Agar Iss Baat Ko Parihaas Se JoDhkar ... Har Baar Dekhenge ... Tab Ho Saktaa Hai ... Kisi Waqt Mujhe Bhi Theek Naa Lage ... ! Khair ... ! Ek Sawaal Aapke Liye ............... Ek Shayer Ke Mann MeN Kaun Kaun Se Kaarak UtPann Hote HaiN ... Jiss Ke Phalswaroop Woh Ghazal Kaa Nirmaan Kar Paataa Hai ? Apna Nazariyaa RakheN ... ! YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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31st August 2011, 09:12 PM
[QUOTE=masoodhassas;429928]w salaam w rmatullah w bar kaatuh
badey bhai aap ne jo taareef ki main us ka mustahiq bilkul nahi hun ,,,, Badey bhai  ? YE kahe ke apni zumedariyun se haat nahi dhu sakte app .. Waise mai har aitbaar me apse chuta ho.N ,,,Ilm hoke umr ,,,Shairi ko ke nacr ,,Aql hoke Taqat ,, ,,,Pcuha bhi issi liya hai ke manzar sahab ko puchne ka khuch faida nahi ..chunke unhone kaha tha kissi se sher kahena mera kaam wazahat mai nahi kar sakta ,,,, Mere nazdeek ap shair bhi hain aur adeeb bhi ,,,Aur eak ache nacr nigaar bhi ,,,Allah apko mazeed nawaze ,,,,Aur apki rahenumai hum pe khayam rahe ....Kahin koi galti sarzad hogai ho imle to Mauf kar dena ... Apka bhai Qadeertoopchi |
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1st September 2011, 12:09 AM
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Masood jiii...mai aati rrahti hu aur poori gufatagu padti hu...par mere paas sawaaloN ki hamesha kami rahti hai so maiN sawaal nahi karti...haan baaki members ke sawaal ko interview ka saamna kar rhe member ke jawaab jaroor padti hu :-) ham es safar meiN aapke saath hai...aap bas chalte rahiye hamara saath aapke saath hai...! god bless u .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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1st September 2011, 12:24 AM
Masood Bhai !
BaTaur Shayer .. Aap Ek Kalaatmak Aur Vyavsaayik Ghazal MeN Khaas Fark Kyaa Dekhte HaiN ... ? Zaraa Vistaar Se ... ! YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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aao ji aao tum aa gaye ho soroor aa gaya ahai EID aap ko bhi mobaarak ho bhai aor SOOFI ko meree jaanib se kiss karnaa ANDAAZ ,,, LEHJA lehjaa kiyaa maangtey ho ye dil haazir hai ,,,sab tumhaaraa hai jo dil me aaye le jaao ji bhar ke le jaao ,,,waisey is khoobsoorat andaaz e taareef pe kaon na jaan de de qalam me jot jagaa detey ho bhai khoob aor bahot khoob aap mujh se muta'assir hain aor main aap se ,, pata hai oopar waale ne har kisee me koi na koi khaas cheez dee hai aor aap ki saadgee aap kaa kholoss aap ki saaf saaf kahne ki adaa man mohnee hai yaar shukriya |
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1st September 2011, 01:06 AM
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aap ka badakpan hai mehraa ji aap to hamaarey liye har roop me mohtaram hain aap ki doaa ka aasraa rahtaa hai aap ki muskuraahat se murdah dilon me jaan aa jaatee hai maataa ke baare me jaan ke achhaa lagaa mehraa ji main aap se ek khaas baat kahnaa chaahta hun ki aap wo khaas shakhs hain jo hindee me maahir hone ke saath saath urdu me itnaa maahir hain ki jab baat kartey hain to har us shabd ko use kar jaatey hain jo kisee urdu jaanney waale ke liye fakhr hotaa hai aap ka ilm baDaa gahraa hai jis me tarah tarah ke phool khiltey hain aap ki soch baDee oonchi hai jis ki parwaaz aasmaan me basy sitaaron se baat kartee hai aor jab ki main sirf urdu jaantaa hun kiun ki meree taaleem urdu se rahee hai jis me arbee faarsee kaa kaafee hisaa rahaa hai hindi se bas meraa itnaa hi ta'alluq hai ki main us ka text to parh letaa hun magar us ke khaas khaasalfaaz nahi samajh saktaa aap se itnee see darkhowaast hai ki plz meree naa jaankaaree ko saamne rakh ke aise aasaan lafzon me guftagoo ko jaaree rakhen jo mujh jaisaa kam ilm samajh sake aor us kaa bhar poor lutf le sakey aap ne jo likha hai us me se bahot kam main samajh paayaa hun is liye kuchh kah bhi nahi saktaa mujhe ummeed hai ki aap zaraa aasaan lafzon ka istemaal kartey huye guftagoo ko aage badhaayen gey aor agar meree baat kisee tarah se bhi aap ke man ko dukhaane ka sabab banee hon gee to apnaa chhotaa bhai samajh ke maaf karen gey ham to har haal me har roop me aap ko apna badaa maantey hain aor aap ki doaaon ki talaash me rahtey hain Ek Shayer Ke Mann MeN Kaun Kaun Se Kaarak UtPann Hote HaiN ... Jiss Ke Phalswaroop Woh Ghazal Kaa Nirmaan Kar Paataa Hai ? Apna Nazariyaa RakheN ... is ko main jitnaa samajh paayaa hun us ka matlab ye hai ki kin khiyaalon me kho ke yaa kin bunyaad pe ek shaayir ghazal kahta ahai ? kiyaa aap yahee poochnaa chaah rahey hain ? agar yahee hai to bataa dijiye gaa taaki main is pe apnee raaye de sakun aap ka chhota abhai masood |
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aadaab dhavl bhai nemaskaar aap ka ye andaaz badaa peyaaraa lagaa is me aap ke saath pallavi ji ka bhi shukr adaa karnaa chaahiye 1: apne baare meiN kuChh bataa'iiye..Family.. Friends ? aap ke swaalon ka jawaab dene ki koshish kartaa hun ummeed hai ki meree baaton se aap log bor nahi hon ge main india u p santh kabeer nagar ka rahne waalaa hun ,,, jahaan ki khaas baat ye hai ki hamaarey ghar se 8 k m door mashhoor kavi janaab kabeer daas ka mazaar hai jis pe hazaaron log phool charaane ke liye aatey hain jin me kisee mazhab zaat yaa chhote baDe ki koi qad nahi hai ye wahi kabeer daas hain jin ke DOHE aisaa dil ko bhatey hain ki saalon saal baad bhi ham un ko apnee khaas baat ko samjhane ke liye istemaal kartey hain jo kisee se dhakaa chupaa nahi hai ham 3 bhai 4 bahen hain sabhi shaadee shudah hain ammi hamaree abhi baa hayaat hain jabki waalid 4 saal pahley inteqaal kar gaye oopar waalaa un ko shaantee de apnee khaas rahmat se nawaaze main apne bahen bhaiyon me 5ven number pe hun meree shaadee 1994 me huyi aor aaj main aap logon ki doa se do betey aor do betiyon ka abbu jaan kahlaataa hun baDaa laDkaa 7th me hai jabki us se chhotee deti 4th me aor us se chhotaa betaa 1th me hai sab se chhotee abhi ghar me hai school baig le ke ghootee rahtee hai aor sab ki book phaaD ke rakh detee hai kamaal ye hai ki jo bhi us ko apnee book parhne ke liye na dey us se wo naaraaz ho jaatee hai aor baat cheet band kar detee hai 1994 me meree shaadee huyi aor 2002 me ham thane maharastara ( mumbara ) me shift ho gaye 1994 ke shuroo me hi main ne arbi se M. A . kiyaa aor 1994 me hi main mumbai job pe aa gayaa 1996 me dubai aayaa aor wahaan se oman gayaa omaan se waapas aa key kuwait me rahaa 3 saal pahle main us compny ko chhor ke apnaa karobaar shuroo kiyaa hai jo ki abhi bhi shuruaat me hai freinds .... waqt ke etebaar se mukhtalif rahe ,,,, bussness me kuchh aor hain shaairee me kuchh aor gaon ke kuchh aor abhi to sab se zeyaadah dostee PARIVAR ke logon se hi hai haan magar kuchh baDey naam aor hain jo meree zindagee me bahot aham hain jin me se nadeem siddeequi jameel morassa poori kamaal balyaavi afroz aalam aor bahot saarey log hain 2: Shayri Parivaar meiN aap kaise pahuunche? isee parivar ke aslam bhai le ke aaye hain main un ka shukr adaa kartaa hun ki un ki wajah se main is khoobsoorat PARIVAR ka hissa ban sakaa 3: aap kab se Shayri kar raheN haiN ? shairee to main 13 saal ki oumr se kar rahaa hun ye alag baat hai ki wo tuk bandee thee magar us waqt bhi meree shaairee bahot hi kam wazn se baahar hotee thee kiun ki us waqt ki ek do ghazlen jo ittefaaq se kaheen mileen to ab dekhtaa hun ki wo tab bhi bahr me theen aap bhi sun len too meree neeNd ko kiun churaane lagee har ghaDee kiun teree yaad aane lagee main ne maaNgaa kabhi teree tasweer thaa too hazaaroN bahaane banaane lagee tere haNsne me taaseer ye thee sanam pattharoN ki kalee muskuraane lagee ek doosree ghazal ka eyk sher *********** sanam merey hain jo ki is tarah se shaam kartey hain lagaa kar phool zulfoN me wo qatl e aam karte hain aaj jis jagah pe main hun to kah saktaa hun ki wazn jaise kisee ne mujh me daal diyaa ho aor ye sirf oopar waalaa hi kar saktaa hai ******************* kuwait aane ke baad anjuman arbaab e fikr o fan ke cheif ne 2005 me mulaaqaat ki aor ek do maah me batayaaa ki qaafiya radeef bhi hotaa hai tab mujhe ehsaas huwaa ki ghazal kahne ke liye osool zaroori hai us waqt tak main 50-60 ghazlen kah chuka thaa magar us me qaafiya radef ki aazaadee thee is liye wo sab kaat ke raddee me daal diyaa aor us ke baad india gayaa to ek kitaab milee jis se mujhe kaafee madad milee waheen se mujhe taqtee aayee aor main ne ghazal kahnaa seekhaa is ka matlab ye huwaa ki main 2006 se ghazal go shaayir kahaa ja saktaa hun khaas moD meree zindagee me tab aayaa jab main ne MAZAAH kalaam likhaa aot kuwait se baahar meree pahchaan banee us ki khaas wajah ye thee ki yahaan ek baDee sansathaa hai wo open ground me program karwaatee hai aor c d taiyaar kar ke markeet me daaltee hai,,,, us progeram me mujhe baar baar bulaayaa gayaa us se mujhe kaafee shohrat milee 4: Shayri Parivaar meiN aapke pasandeeda Shaayar kaun kaun se haiN? is baare me main itnaa hi kahun gaa ki mujhe sabhi ache lagtey hain main kisee ka naam nahi le saktaa har kisee ke yahaan kuchh mil jaataa hai tamaam log hi apne apne khiyaalaat aor alfaaz me alag alag hain aor har koi do chaar baat aisee kah detaa hai ki wo dimaagh me raqs kartaa rahtaa hai yaheen ke bahot saare log aisey hain jin ka kalaam parh ke main ne pooree pooree ghazal kahee hai jis ke liye main s d c ka shukr guzaar hun |
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1st September 2011, 05:02 AM
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1st September 2011, 08:15 AM
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1st September 2011, 09:08 AM
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shukriya vikas bhai main shukr guzaar hun aap kaa magar merey yaar unhon ne aor bhi kuchh poochaa hai zaraa mehraa ji ki puraanee post dekh ke us ko bhi isee tarh se bataa do jab tak main is kaa jawaab liktaa hun |
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1st September 2011, 09:12 AM
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vikas bhai main is psot ke baare me kahnaa chaah raha thaa aap is ko dekh ke bataa den plz |
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1st September 2011, 09:50 AM
Ek Sawaal Aapke Liye ............... Ek Shayer Ke Mann MeN Kaun Kaun Se Kaarak UtPann Hote HaiN ... Jiss Ke Phalswaroop Woh Ghazal Kaa Nirmaan Kar Paataa Hai ? Apna Nazariyaa RakheN ... ![/QUOTE] aadaab mehraa ji pahle to main maafee chahtaa hun ki meree kam ilmee ki wajah se aap ko pareeshaanee uthaanee apDee ... bhai vikas ka shukriya ki unhon ne mujhe bataayaa aap ka net kharaab hai oopar waalaa us ko sahee kar de aap ne vikas bhai ko phon kar ke ye sab likhne ko kahaa ...meree nigaah me aap MAHAAN hain kiun ki is se pataa chaltaa hai ki aap s d c pe shaairee hi nahi kartey balki is ko ibaadat samajhte hain aor is ko utnee hi lagan aor chaao se apne time pe karne ki koshsih kartey hain jitnee ki poojaa paat mehraa ji aap ke charnon ko salaam ab aataa hun aap ke sawaal ki taraf agar main chaahun to mukhtasar sa jawaab de ke aage barh saktaa hun magar nahi ....aap ne mohabbat se kahaa hai ki tafseel se jawaab den to main aap ke hukm ka paalan kartey huye apne khiyaalaat ko rakhta hun umeed hai ki aap doa den gey har shaayer pe alag alag waqt me alag alag wajah se sher aatey hain kuchh log aisey hotey hain jo kisee khaas waaqeaa ki wajah se sher kah letey hain kuchh aisey hotey hain jo jaan boojh kar qalam kaagaz le ke baithTe hain aor tarhee ghazal ki tarah ghazal ko tarashtey hain kuch aisey hotey hain jo kisee haadasa ki wajah se sher kah letey hain kuchh aisey hote hain jo khushi ki wajah se sher kahtey hain kuchh PEE ke mast hone ke baad sher kahte hain yahee wajah hai ki hamaare samaaj me tarah tarah ke sher miltey hain misaal ke taor pe shaadee ke maoqe pe SEHRAA likha jaata hai is ka sabab khushi hai kisee ki maot pe MARSIYA likhaa jaataa hai to is kaa sabab gham huwaa koi chalte hclate kisee haseena ke naonon ka shikaar ho gayaa to GHAZAL kahta hai is ka sabab ek waaqea hai ( yaad rahe ghazal se muraad qadeem ghazlen hain na ki jadeed warna nayee ghazlon me har topic pe kalaam milta ahai ) isee tarah se koi bahot baDaa haadsa ho jaaye to us pe bhi sher ho jaate hain jaise ki abhi abhi aap ne dekhaa ki aazaadee ke din baar baar ZARAA AANKH ME BHAR LO PAANEE ki goonj sunaayee de rahee thee in tamaam baaton ka itna ahi matlab hai ki alag alag wajhen hotee hain haan ek baat me sabhi log ek jaisey hote hain sher jab zehn me aa rahaa hotaa hai us waqt ki haalat kaifiyat sab ki eyk jaisee hotee hai kaafee dinon pahle main ne paDhaa thaa ab ye yaad nahi rahaa hai ki wo JAALINOS ne kaha hai yaa ARASTOO ne bahar haal kisee ne bhi kaha ho magar pate ki baat kahee hai ( ki eyk shaair pe jab sher utar rahaa hotaa hai to us ghaDee wo apne areeb qareeb dunyaa jahaan se kat jaataa hai aor us ka ta'alluq oopar waale se juD jaataa hai ) aor isee baat ko GHAALIB ne yun kaha hai aatey hain ghaib se ye mazaameeN khiyaal me ghaalib saareer e khaama nawaaye sarosh hai main apnee taraf se zaraa tafseel kartaa chalun ki jis bandey ki soch jitnee gahree hotee hai wo utnaa hi apne areeb qareeb se kat jaataa hai aap ke saath bhi huwaa ho gaa ki aap kisee sher kahne ke liye soch me doobey hain aor aap ko koi aawaaz detaa hai to chaonk paDte hain apna ek sher aap ki nazar isee maoqa ke liye chaoNk uThtey haiN woh khayaalon se jo khayaalon me gharq hotey hain gharq ( doobaa huwaa honaa ) pahle misrey me khiyaalon kahaa gayaa hai ,,,, ji haan khiyaal se bhi chaoNkaa jaataa hai ... wo aisey ki aap ek misraa kah ke doosrey ke liye soch rahe hain soch rahe hain ki achaanak ek khiyaal janm letaa hai ki aap chaoNk jaatey hain aor muskuraahat aa jaatee hai ki kiyaa khoob khiyaal ho gayaa aor meraa sher mokammal bhi ho gayaa ummeed ki aap ki is baat ka tafseelee jawaab ho gaya hogaa koi baat ho to us ko dobara kah lijiye gaa taaki is tarah guftagoo ka silsila chaltaa rahe |
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1st September 2011, 09:58 AM
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achhi baat hai deedee aap aayeen apr aap ne himmat baDhaayee aor doa dee yahee merey liye bahot hai but deedee ab aisaa bhi kiyaa ki aap chup chaap parh ke chalee jaaya karen gee ,,,arey ,,, sawaal na sahee kabhi kabhaar aake koi phuljhaDee chhoD ke mahfil garmaa ke chalee jaaya karen aap ka bhai masood |
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1st September 2011, 08:57 PM
Masood Bhai !
BaTaur Shayer .. Aap Ek Kalaatmak Aur Vyavsaayik Ghazal MeN Khaas Fark Kyaa Dekhte HaiN ... ? Zaraa Vistaar Se ... ! As a ghazal writer,what is the main difference between classical and commercial ghazals ? Elaborate it. YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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is baat ko do teen tarah se kahnaa chaahun gaa kiun ki is baarey me har time logon ka aapas me ikhtelaaf rahaa hai kiun ki ham sabhi log jaante hain ki na chaahtey huye bhi shoraa hazraat giroh bandee ka shikaar ho jaatey hain ye hamaare daor me bhi ho rahaa hai aor aaj ke pahle bhi huwaa hai isee liye in do tarah ki ghazlon ki TAAREEF me alag alag tarah ki raaye aayee hai pahlee baat adab do tarah ka hotraa hai no 1 adab baraay e adab ye wo qism hai ki jis me mazmoon (topic) pe kam nigaah rakkhi jaatee hai balki seedhey dekhaa jaataa hai ki alfaaz pe giraft / pakaD kaisee hai aor sher kahne ke jo osool hain wo kis had tak sahee istemaal kiye gaye hain ghazal goyee me jitne bhi osool hain un se ghazal paak hai ki nahi hai us ka maqasad sirf aor sirf lafzon ki khoobsoortee ke saath maozoo se insaaf hotaa hai mazmoon bhale hi kamzor ho magar lafozon ko is tarah barta gaya ho ki wo DEKHNE me bhi ghazal nazar aaye isee ko classical kahtey hain no 2 adab baraaye zindagee ye wo qism hai ki is me lafzon se zeyaadah is baat pe nazar rakhi jaatee hai ki kahne waale ne KIYAA kahaa hai ,, KAISEY kahaa hai is pe bahas agar hotee bhi hai to maamoolee see ,,,, yahaan tak ki agar kisee ne zindagee ke kisee aisey mazmoon ko baaNdhaa hai jo bahot hi aham hai pahlee nigaah me samajh me bhi aa jaataa hai to bhale hi us ghazal me koi khaamee ho us ko bhi peechhey chhor diyaa jaataa hai ise commercial kahtey hain doosree jaanib ek aor tareeqey se is baat ko jaanaa jaa sakta hai KI IN DONON ME KIYA AFARQ HAI ... jab hama ghazal ki taareekh pe nigaah daaltey hain to ghazal ke do daor nazar aatey hain no 1 wo daor jis me ghazal ,, ghazal ke mana me hotee thee ( ghazal ke mana mahbooba ki taareef yaa us se mut'alliq koi baat ) ye puraaney zamaaney ke logon me aam see baat thee ki wo ghazal ko isee maanaa me letey they aor kahtey bhi the ,,,,,jise classical kahaa jaata hai aor is daor ko QADEEM RIWAAYATEE DAOR mana jaata ahai no 2 ghazal me itnaa phailaao le aanaa ki wo mahbooba ki zulf se chal ke us ke kaandhey pe phisal jaaye aor seeney pe safar kartee huyee kamar se lipat ke zaano (leg)ka gheraao kartee huyee qadmon ke paazeb ko sahlaa ke choom le aor aor phir us ke naionon aor badan ki khushboo se bahot aagey jaa ke zindagee se mulaaqaat kare jis me zindagee ki har meethee aor talkh sachchaayee se roo baroo ho jaaye shaayad momin ka sher hai naazukee us ke lab ki kiyaa kahye paNkhaDee ik gulaab ki see hai se aagey baDh ke kahey intee pardes se na kar ulfat ho na jaaye kaheen watan khaalee is daor ko dar e JADEED kaha jaata hai aor is mazmoon ko sametTi huyi ghazlon ko commercial kaha jaataa hai ek aor bhi tareeqa hai no 1 apne man me doob ke jo shaairee ki jaaye wo ghazal classical kahlaatee hai jis me sirf apne aap se mokhaatab huwaa gaya ho aor apnee baat apnee man se kahi gayee ho jaisey apne man me dob ke paa jaa soraagh e zindagee too agar meraa na bantaa hai na ban apnaa to ban soraagh ( pata ) is tarah ki ghazal ko aap classical kahen gey no 2 wo ghazlen jo customer ko saamney rakh ke kahee jaatee hon aor un se paisaa kamaanaa yaa shahrat kamaanaa maqsad ho to wo commercial kahlaatee hain aaj kal ke moshaaeron me kavi sammelanon me yaa filmon me isee ki bhar maar hai ye teen tareeqa meree nigaah me hai jis se main mahsoos kartaa hun ki kaon se ghazal classical hai aor kaon see commercial ummeed hai ki main apnee baat ka kahne me kaamyaab rahaa hun gaa |
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2nd September 2011, 03:33 PM
masood sahab aadaab...
aapko yaha dekhkar bahut accha laga.... kya puchu aapse ye to ab tak samjh nahi aaya.... magar...ye classical aur commercial ka farq jaisa aapne bataya ,mai bahut hadd tak ittefaaq nahi rakhta( ye bhi nahi kah raha hu ki bilkul nahi) jaha tak ghazal ka sawaal hai( sirf ghazal ke hawaale se kah raha hu...kyui aapne naresh sahab ko jawaab ghazal ke hawaale se diya hai).....mere khayaal se aisa distinction banana theek sa nahi....kyuki mujhe koi filmi ghazal nahi pata jo ghazal ke usoolo ko todti hai..... aur agar aisa hi hai ....to commercial aur classical kya? mujhe lagta hai classical/commercial lafzo ke pehlu me ghazal shamilnahi hai. ghazal to bus ghazal hai... shayad commercial /classical jaise lafz ke dayre me music indutry/ filmi geet/gaane etc aaye .... ----------------- aapke khayaal me ghazal kaisi honi chaiye?....lafzo ke baratna jyada zaruri hai ya koi great idea hona jyada zaruri?...agar koi great idea par ek sher ho aur uski wajah se ghazal banaana...matlab baki qafiyo ka istemaal karna imaandaari hai aapki nazar me? jawaab dijiye...phir wapas aunga regards |
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3rd September 2011, 05:01 AM
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aap ko yahaan dekh ke baDee khushi milee jo bayaan se baahar hai zidd bhai aap ne bahot baDee baat kahee hai ye wahee kah saktaa hai jis ke paas jigar gurda ho jab aap ne kah hi diyaa hai to aaj main bhi khul ke kah deta hun ki janaab main aap ki baat se sao feesad 100% ittefaaq kartaa hun aap jo soch rahe hain wahee meraa bhi mannaa hai ye alag baat hai ki aap ne kah diyaa aor main sharmaa hozooree me rah gayaa sach yahee hai ki ye sab lafzon ka her fer hi hai is ke sewaa kuchh nahi haan magar is baat ko bhi nazar andaaz nahi kiya ajaa saktaa ki classical/commercial koi cheez hi nahi hai,,,,,,kiun ki hamaarey hi jaise is dunya ke hazaaron karoDon log is baat ko maantey hain aor donon me farq bhi kartye hain .... ab agar itne saarey log ( jo ki dunya ki nigaah me qad waale bhi hain )kah rahey hain to us me bhi kuchh haqeeqat to ho gee hi chaahe wo hamaarey nazriyaat se mokhaalif hi kiun na ho dunyaa me bahot saare nazriyaat aise paaye jaatey hain jin se ham zehnee ikhtelaaf rakhtey to hain magar kabhi bhi us ka mokammal inkaar bhi nahi kar saktey isee bunyaad pe classical/commercial ke maozoo ( topic) pe ham ko baat karnee chaahiye aor us ki tahqeeq me apnaa waqt bitaa ke dunyaa ke saamne laanaa chaahiye ki aakhir is ki haqeeqat kiya hai aor us haqeeqat ko ujaagar karne se pahle zaroori ho gaa ki ham ye jaan len ki aayaa classical/commercial hai kiyaa cheez aor isee ibtedaayee / shuruaatee baat ko yahaan bayaan kar ne ki koshish ki gayee hai haan ye baat zaroor hai ki main ne classical/commercial ko samajhne ka jo tareeqa bataayaa hai ,, ho saktaa hai ki us me koi khaamee ho yaa khaamee na ho magar is se bhi zeyaadah kuchh aor tareeqey bhi hon ... magar ye baat zaroor hai ki classical/commercial ek aisaa mazoo hai jis pe baat ki jaa saktee hai aapke khayaal me ghazal kaisi honi chaiye?....lafzo ke baratna jyada zaruri hai ya koi great idea hona jyada zaruri?...agar koi great idea par ek sher ho aur uski wajah se ghazal banaana...matlab baki qafiyo ka istemaal karna imaandaari hai aapki nazar me? merey khiyaal me ghazal sirf achhi soch hi nahi ache alfaaz ko is tarah se taraashney kaa naam hai ki donon hi cheezen eyk doosrey ke saath aisey mil jaayen ki jaise doodh aor cheenee yaa raam lakahn ki joDee ab aataa hun is sawaal ke doosrey hissey ki taraf meraa apna akhiyaal hai ki agar achaanak koi bahot hi achhaa khiyaal mil jaaye aor us pe sher bhi ban gaya ho to koshish karnee chaahiye ki usee zameen pe dher saarey sher kahey jaayen is se eyk taraf jahaan shaayir ki mashq taraqqee kartee hai waheen itne ashaar mil jaatey hain ki chaaNt phaTak ke 4 - 6 sher aisey nikal aatey hain ki ghazal damdaar ban jaatee hai lekin agar us zameen me usee takkar ke aor sher na ban paa rahey hon to kam se kam ek sher aor kah ke usey QITA banaa denaa chaahiye aor agar wo bhi na ban paa rahaa ho to usee pe bas karnaa chaahiye matlab saaf hai ki haar ke hathiyaar nahi daalnaa chaahiye soch ke daraichon ko khoob phailaanaa chaahiye aor akheer me faislaa lenaa chaahiye ki kiyaa khoyaa kiyaa paayaa waiasy bhi hazaaron aisee ghazlen hain ki jin ke ek hi sher ko zindagee milee hai aor pooree ghazal kaheen almaaree me dhool chaaT rahee hai aap ka kiya kahnaa aap bhi zaraa apne khiyaal se roo baroo kar waaiye gaa intezaar rahe gaa aap ka bhai masood |
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3rd September 2011, 10:54 AM
Masood Bhai ! Aadaab !
Hume YahaaN SawaaloN Se Jyadaa Aapke Jawaab PaDhke Bahut Aanand Aa Raha Hai ... ! Aise Hi Majedaar BaatoN Kaa Daur Aage BaDhtaa Rahe ... Ab Hume Kuch ... Apne ... Bachpan ... School ... College ... Ke Khaas Waaqiyaat Se Taaroof KaraayeN ... Jo Aaj Bhi Zahan MeN Taazaa Ho Aate Ho ... Aur Phir Se Unn LamhoN Ko Jeene Kaa Mann Kartaa Ho ... ? YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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4th September 2011, 03:46 AM
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mehraa ji aap ne bahot saaree yaaden taazah kardeen kiya kiya kahun ye bhi dar lagtaa hai ki kaheen aap log bor na ho jaayen magar aap ka hukm sar aankhon pe do waaqeaa likh rahaa hun ummeed ki enjoy karen gey hamaaraa gaoN ek uttar dakkhin ki saDak pe is tarah basaa huwa hai ki aap chaltey jaayen aor tamaam ghar daayeN baayeN aatey rahen gey yahaan tak ki gaaoN khatm ho jaaye gaa saDak ke daayeeN jaanib jo ghar aatey hain us ke peechey khetoN ka silsilaa hai jab ki baayeeN taraf jo ghar aatey hain us ke peechey utnaa hi baDaa taalaab hai jitnaa baDaa ki gaoN hai aaj ke 20 saal pahle isee taalaab me kapDey dhoye jaatey they mard log nahaatey bhi they ,,, us me khiley huey KANWAL ke phool se ham maalaa banaa ke khush bhi huwa akartey they aor KANAWAL ke daane khoob maze le ke khaatey bhi they garmiyoN ke dinoN me jab taalaab ka ek hisaa sookh jaata thaa to us ki mittee nikaal ke aorteN apne sar ke baal dhotee theeN aor ghar ki lipaayee potaayee ke bhi kaam aatee thee aor usee se ham bachhey apney man pasand khilaoney bhi banaayaa kartey they ek din main ne usee taalaab ki mittee le ke jab bail gaaDee banaayee yahaan tak ki mitti ke pahiye bhi banaaye saath hi us ko kheeNchne ke liye muh pe eyk dhaagaa bhi lagaayaa aor sookhne ke liye ghar ke qareeb baagheechey me rakh diyaa doosrey din wo sookh gayee to main khushi se us ko le ke chalaa us ke pahiye kee raftaar ke saath meree khushee bhi apney pankh phailaa letee thee main zor ki aawaaz nikaaltaa shor machaataa us bail gaaDee ko le ke gaoN ki aklaotee saDak pe gayaa aor wahaan se dhool laad ke laayaa jis ko ghar ke qareeb un load kar diyaa ye zindagee ki pahlee kamaayee thee jis pe main khushi se phoolaa na samaayaa aor daoR ke doosree khep le ne ke liye gayaa magar is baar waapsee me meree bail gaaDee dhool ka bojh na sah sakee aor beech se toot gayee jis ke do pahiye to merey saath chale aaye magar do pahiye waheen ruk gaye apnee mohnee bail gaaDee ki ye haalat dekh meraa dil bhi toot gayaa aor gaalon pe aaNsoo ki ek lakeer see ban gayee ammi ko baDaa taras aayaa aake gale se lagaayaa aor mashwara diyaa ki aisee cheez banaao jo zameen pe doDaayee na jaaye balki khelee jaaye kaafee soch bichaar ke baad moortee banaane ki thaanee aor jhat se jaa ke taalab se mittee le aayaa ( zaahir hai free ki thee us pe m.c.d. charg bhi nahi le rahee thee ) is baar ek moorat banaaney ki koshsish ki ammi saamne khaat pe baithee theeN jabki do baDee bahneN un ke sar ke baal theek karne me lagee theeN sab se pahle main ne mitti se dhaD banaayaa sar aor haath bhi banaa diyaa aor ek taraf se do taaNg banaa ke us ke paaoN baney ab baaqee bachaa thaa naak naqsha to wo bhi ho gayaa magar mujhe kuchh kamee mahsoos ho rahee thee ghaor se dekhaa to us ki naaf ( navel) nahi banaaya thaa aor saahab jaisey hi main ne navel banaayaa ammi aor bahnoN ka haNs haNs ke buraa haal ho gayaa thoDee der baad un ki haNsee thamee to main ne un ko haNsaane ke liye use mitaa ke dobaarah banayaa ek baar phir qahqaha gooNjaa is tarah main us waqt tak karta araha jab tak ki un ki haNsee ka silsilaa chaltaa rahaa doosraa qisaa hamarey gaon tak jo sadak pahonchtee hai usee pe gaon se zaraa pahle ek badaa saa baagh hai jis me aam mahuwaa sheesham ki taadaad zeyaadah hai jis pe basera karne ke liye lakhon totey ( parrot ) shaam dhale aa jatey they ( is baar meraa jaanaa huwa to dekhaa totey ab nahee aatey ) usee baagh me voting ho rahee thee main aor meraa dost pappu apne apne chhaD ( ek gol saa sariya jisey teelee ki madad se chalaatey hain ) le ke ghoom rahe they jahaan pe mom phalee ke saath kachaaloo ( chaat ) aor julebee liye kuchh log apnee apnee khaat lagaaye baithey they ghoom ghoom ke thak jaatey to qareeb school ke nalke pe paanee pee ke aa jatey isee ghoomney me hamaarey paas jo chaar aanah thaa us ki mom phalee bhi le ke ham mazey uDaa chkye they ab paisaa bhi nahi thaa magar ghoomne ki aarzoo ab bhi jawaan thee ittefaaq se ek jagah aathannee dikhaayee dee aor main ne jhat uthaa ke mutthee me daab lee magar pappu kahne lagaa ki saath main bhi ghoom rahaa thaa to is pe meraa bhi haq hai jab ki main akele hi us pe apnaa qazja jamaanaa chaah rahaa thaa khair kaafee bahas ke baad ye tai huwaa ki chal ke juleebi letey hain magar pappu ko zaraa kam miley gee is tarah ham ne julebi bhi khaalee ek baar phir ham ghoomne me masroof ho chuke they doarte daortey kabhi kisee se takraa jaatey to kabhi sipaahi ( police )se lag ke guzar jaatey ek jagah zaraa saaNs lene ke liye rukey to pappu kahtaa hai abey saarey masudaa kaouno aisaa rastaa bataa na ki mahun kaan ik thoo athannee mil jaaye ( abe saale masood mujhe bhi koi raasta aisaa bataa na ki wahaan se mujhe bhi athannee mal jaaye ) wo waaqea jab bhi yaad aataa hai apppu ki hasrat pe muskuraa detaa hun J |
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4th September 2011, 09:44 AM
Masood Bhai !
Guzre Zamaane Ke Mashahoor ShayeroN Ki Shayri Ke Mazameen MeN Aur Aaj Ke Daur Ke ShayeroN Ki Shayri Ke Mazameen MeN Kyaa Khaasaa FarK DekhTe HaiN .... ? Aur Yeh Bhi BataayeN Ki ... Kyaa Waqt Ke SaaTh Shayri Pehale Se BehTar Hui Hai ... Yaa Koi Aur Pahaloo Bhi Aap Dekhte HaiN ... ? YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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4th September 2011, 10:04 PM
Masood jii accha lga rha hai aapke bare mei jaan.na aur aapke vichaar padna :-)
.....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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5th September 2011, 01:56 AM
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shukriya didi aap aayeen bahaar aayee wo kiya kahtey hain kiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii tum aa gaye ho soroor aa gayaa hai doa me na bhooliye gaa aap kaa bhai masood |
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