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27th January 2006, 09:57 PM
Dard itna hay Ankhon mein chupaon kaise
Keh kar begana apna tughey banaon main kaise Mumkin hay Zindagi thodi hay Jaaney walon ko hath pakad bulaon main kaise Jab bhi dhuundi manzil kho gayi Kismat hi ruuthti humse chali gayi Kuch Sansein thami hay Jaatey Sanson ko rok paon main kaise Dard aur sukun ke beech janey ek rekha hay Issey par aaj karun main kaise Muskaan aur Ansuon ki janey ek Rekha hay Ankhon ko yeh samghaon main kaise Likh gayi na jaaney kya khud ko yeh samghaon main kaise Tanha safer mein chod jaatey hain sab khuda aaj mann ko shant karun main kaise Jalta hay diya roshani kay liye Khud ko Zindagi ka yeh sabab sikhaon main kaise Ankhein Num hay apnon ke liye Khud ko Zindagi ki yeh Sachai samghaon main kaise |
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27th January 2006, 10:09 PM
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itni sunder kavita likhi aapne aur is kavita ke madhyam se mera dil cheen liya aapne is dil ko wapas lau kaise wo chahat hamesha tum hogi ab to chahna hi reh gaya hai zindagi main na jane yeh chahat kab puri hogi |
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29th January 2006, 02:57 PM
Bahout acha lagaa aap ke iss kalaam ko padhkar...Sukanya Ji !
Jalta hay diya roshani kay liye Khud ko Zindagi ka yeh sabab sikhaon main kaise Ankhein Num hay apnon ke liye Khud ko Zindagi ki yeh Sachai samghaon main kaise Upar wale panktiyan kuch khaas lage Ek geet bhi yaad aagaya jo youn hai : Jab jab jo jo hona hai tab tab so so hota hai Apna dard choupaana ho to geet khushi ke gaana Younhi likhte rahiye aur apna khayaal bhi rakhiyega  Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai 
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29th January 2006, 06:20 PM
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aaj bahut arse baad aapko parhne ka mauka mila but na jane kyu i cudnt stop my tears while reading each word of urs. na jaane kyu kismat mein gamn naam ka taufa khuda ne bakhsha hai, but one thing bahut bakhoobhi se aapne zindagi ki sachai ko motiyon saman shabdon mein piroya hai. di remember one thing we cum alone in this world n wud leave this bitter world alone. yeh rishte naate sab yahi reh jaate hai, but ek aisi maya aur kashish hai is jeewan mein which makes us say tht cum wat may life has to move on. zindagi ka safar hai yeh kaisa safar, koi samjha nahi koi jaana nahi. u knw sumtimes i feel isnt it better that we shud have no get close to any one, becoz wen we drift apart we are shattered, but yes god made us emotional fools, full of emotions. so we cant be cold hearted any how. neways ur kalam made me go deep in it n touched my soul. thx for sharing among us. keep penning down ur thoughts ahead too n keep sharing with us. take care n may god bless u with his finnest glitters. with love urs roshani |
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Re: Dard itna hay Ankhon mein chupaon kaise -
29th January 2006, 06:35 PM
Dard itna hay Ankhon mein chupaon kaise
Keh kar begana apna tughey banaon main kaise Mumkin hay Zindagi thodi hay Jaaney walon ko hath pakad bulaon main kaise dard ko chhupaane ki jaroorat hi nahi hai.. baahar nikaal dijiye khushi aapse aap aa jayegi Jab bhi dhuundi manzil kho gayi Kismat hi ruuthti humse chali gayi Kuch Sansein thami hay Jaatey Sanson ko rok paon main kaise too good, lekin jaroorat kya hai... jo beet raha hai beetane dijiye.. jo aayega usaki chinta nahi hai.. jo hai us pal ko jeete jaaiye Dard aur sukun ke beech janey ek rekha hay Issey par aaj karun main kaise Muskaan aur Ansuon ki janey ek Rekha hay Ankhon ko yeh samghaon main kaise hmm, no comments Likh gayi na jaaney kya khud ko yeh samghaon main kaise Tanha safer mein chod jaatey hain sab khuda aaj mann ko shant karun main kaise shayad unhe aapki pehchaan nahi isliye chhod jaate hai...better aap khood ko majboot rakh ke aage badhte rahiye kal wo khood aapke paas daude aayenge Jalta hay diya roshani kay liye Khud ko Zindagi ka yeh sabab sikhaon main kaise Ankhein Num hay apnon ke liye Khud ko Zindagi ki yeh Sachai samghaon main kaise didi aapko to pata hai warna aap likh nahi paati.. bas khood par vishwaas kar lijiye... Didi ur poem is really too good.. feelings bhi dil ko jhakjhod dene waali hai.. isliye chhoti bachi is jhakjhod se bachane ke liye apane comments deti chali gayi.. kahi jyaada bola ho to maafi chahti hoon with lots of love Garima |
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29th January 2006, 09:43 PM
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read u after a long time...n its wonderful... u r a wonderful poet... take care sis Chaandni mere pyaar ki kyun uspar na rang laayi Kyun bas kami hi meri ibaadat me usko nazar aayi Thaa laakh bura sahi main. sacchi meri chaahat thi Kyun meri bhaavnaon ko woh samajh nahi paayi... Dekhna chahta hun.. Tere tasveer ko khwab banake dekhna chahta hun Aur us khwab mein apne aap ko khona chahta hun I envy the words, which took the form of my emotions I love my poetry… Which has turned the tears of pain in to the pearls of love… |
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29th January 2006, 09:45 PM
sukanya ji...
bahaut hi accha likkha hai aapne..kaafi waqt baad aapne padhne ka mauka mila hai....dard aur khushi aankhon me chipti kam aur bayaan zyada hojati hain.........   Subha Kii Gard MeiN Naa Kho JaayeiN Aa ! Tere Gham MeiN Jaagtii AankheiN Kam Se Kam Aik Raat So JaayeiN." **~*FaRhAnA*~** |
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Re: Dard itna hay Ankhon mein chupaon kaise -
30th January 2006, 08:27 AM
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aaj aapko pahli baar padhne ka muka mila .achha laga aapko padhkar isi tarah likhte rahiye shrdh 
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31st January 2006, 06:09 PM
Hello Mehul
Thanks ki tumhey kavita achi lagi.....bas dil se likhi thi kavita.And the words that u have added are even quite good.I have read one or two of ur creations and they r quite beautiful.I come to site once or twice so excuse me if I am not able to reply. Regards |
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31st January 2006, 06:12 PM
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Aapney jo lines yahan quote ki hain unhey panktiyoon mein meri sari kavita ka saraansh hay.Haan jab jab jo jo hona hay tab tab so so hota hay aur waqt aur kismat donon par hamara bas nahin chalta.hosla badhaney ka shukriya. Take Care |
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31st January 2006, 06:21 PM
Hi My Dear Roshani
Haan kayi din baad likha shayad tumhara diya hua hosla tha isliye kuch post kiya.Roshani tumney iss kavita ki sachai kaisey jaaney mein soch kar hairaan thi.shayad isliye ki tumharey dil mein di ke liye ek khas jagah hay.Haan jab apney iss duniya ko chod kar chaley jatey hain bahut dukh hota hay.iss sachai ko manney ka mann nahin hota.par insaan uss waqt kuch nahin kar pata.Tumney yeh naya naam Roshani acha lagta hay Asha ki ek kiran.yuun hi apni Asha ki kiran bikhartey rehna.Di ko sada apney paas paogey.aur tumharey Ansuun aa gaye yeh kavita padh yeh suun mughey acha nahin laga mere pyari chotti gudiya roye mughey acha nahin lagega. Apna khyal rakhna |
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31st January 2006, 06:23 PM
Hello Garima
Tumhara reply bahut acha laga mughey pulkit ke reply ki yaad aa gayi woh bhi di ki har rachna ka aisey hi reply karta hay.jyada kuch nahin kahungi.bas tum bhi likhti raho aur apney kalam se duniya ko roshan karo. Apna khyal rakhna |
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31st January 2006, 06:25 PM
Hello Karthik
Ur words are short but impressive.read my poetry after a long time.wonderful poet to pata nahin bas dil bahut udas tha to likh diya. Apna khyal rakhna Di |
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31st January 2006, 06:27 PM
Namaskar farhana
kaise hain aap.hamey padney ka aur hosla badhaney ka shukriya.Aap ka likhney ka andaz bhi mughey bahut acha lagta hay.keep up the good work. Take Care |
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31st January 2006, 06:30 PM
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Pehli baar padha mughey.Waise shrdh jab naya naya site join kiya tha then I used to write quite frequently.Abb likhna thoda kam kar diya hay.It seems u have recently joined site.u learn alot on shayri.com and learning is a never ending process.keep writing. God bless you |
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2nd February 2006, 01:05 PM
Dard itna hay Ankhon mein chupaon kaise
Keh kar begana apna tughey banaon main kaise Mumkin hay Zindagi thodi hay Jaaney walon ko hath pakad bulaon main kaise Waaaaaaaaaahhhh...kya baat kahi hai didi...! Jab bhi dhuundi manzil kho gayi Kismat hi ruuthti humse chali gayi Kuch Sansein thami hay Jaatey Sanson ko rok paon main kaise Beautifulll... so very well said...! Dard aur sukun ke beech janey ek rekha hay Issey par aaj karun main kaise Muskaan aur Ansuon ki janey ek Rekha hay Ankhon ko yeh samghaon main kaise Likh gayi na jaaney kya khud ko yeh samghaon main kaise Tanha safer mein chod jaatey hain sab khuda aaj mann ko shant karun main kaise Nice words...! Jalta hay diya roshani kay liye Khud ko Zindagi ka yeh sabab sikhaon main kaise Ankhein Num hay apnon ke liye Khud ko Zindagi ki yeh Sachai samghaon main kaise Waaaaaaah......! Didi, Kaisi hain? ummed hai sab bahut acche se hoga... bahut hi khoobsurat ehsaas aapne is kavita me utaare hain... har aashaar khoobsurat hai...really very wll expressed...I just loved it... bass aise hi likhti rahiye... apna khayal rakhiyega... Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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3rd February 2006, 09:21 PM
Hello Pulkit My sweet brother
Kaise ho?Kayi din baad tumharey naam ke sath computer wala avtaar dekha...acha lagta hay yeh wala avtaar..tumhey di ki rachna achi lagi thanks...I read ur poetry someday and it took me into beautiful good old memories.....it was nice one. Apna khyal Rakhna God bless you di |
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4th February 2006, 12:06 AM
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4th February 2006, 07:07 PM
Hello Sukanya jee...
Bahoot hi achchha likha hai.. Aaghaz hi itna khoobsoorat hai to anzam to khoobsoorat hona hi hai... Maine kaha tha na aap se.. Agar aap likh sakti haiN to zaroor post kijiye.... Achchha likhti haiN aap... Daad kabool kijiye.... MayanK |
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