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Bujurag - 4th August 2010, 06:13 PM

Yah kavita meri samrpit hai sabhi bado keliye aur

jaha bujurago ki izzat hoty hai wah ghar kya kai mene likha hai

aap padhiyega



hamari sachchi saan hai
sadiyo ka bhara gyan hai

jo dikhte hai, dharti par
bujurg to bhagvaan hai


saath rahlo seva karlo
ye bas duao ki khan hai

ye he to vipdaye kam hai
har pal sukh saman hai

behadd he inme anubav

sujhavo ki khadaan hai

inke aaspass hone se hi

jivan me rahti jaan hai

inhe sachcha samaan mile

to ghar ho jata vardan hai

jo inko bas bojh samjhe


wah yuva bas naadan hai

jaha inhe dutkaar mile


ghar nahi samsaan hai

dr shakuntala vyas




aaj kal samaj mai bujurago ki halat kya hai

hum sabka kya kartavy hai

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Apne Maa-Baap .... Dada-Dadi ... Aur Nana-Nani ke Prati ... Sammaan ka Paath seekhaati aapki kavitaa ke ehsaas bahut khoobsurat lage.mujhe...

iski saarthaktaa tab aur bad jayegi.....jab isse padhke log apne bujurogoN ke prati apna kartavye samjhne lage....!

Very Very Nice Creation........Shakuntala Ji !


khush rahen...
apna khayal rakhen...
duaaon ke saath....




YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...

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4th August 2010, 11:30 PM

aapki yeh rachna bahut hi achchi lagi.
thanks for sharing it dd

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khwaabo.n ke par kabhii kaTne na denaa
inke sahaaron me raahai.n rahe.ngii

lage.nge ye lejaa rahe alag raste
un raston pe bhii kai seekhai.n to ho.ngii

ye seekhai.n hameshaa sameTe rakhnaa
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apne maa-baap .... Dada-dadi ... Aur nana-nani ke prati ... Sammaan ka paath seekhaati aapki kavitaa ke ehsaas bahut khoobsurat lage.mujhe...

iski saarthaktaa tab aur bad jayegi.....jab isse padhke log apne bujurogon ke prati apna kartavye samjhne lage....!

very very nice creation........shakuntala ji !


khush rahen...
apna khayal rakhen...
duaaon ke saath....

narashji

tahedil se suker guzar hu

apne pasand kiya hamara likhana safal hua

ish jamane mai bujurgo ki dasha kai jagah kharab dekhy hai

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yah sab dekh kar bahut dard hota hai

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dete rahe meri poem sikh denewali hoty hai

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shakuntla jee
radhe radhe

bahut sachchi baat kahi hai aapne bahut sundar dil se daad aise hi likhti rahen
duaon ke saath


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shakuntla jee
radhe radhe

bahut sachchi baat kahi hai aapne bahut sundar dil se daad aise hi likhti rahen
duaon ke saath

tahedil se suker guzar hu

yese hi sath dete rahe

sada khush rahe


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Mahutram Shakuntala saheba aadab ,,

Apke Kalam ne pori tahezib ko apne hisaar me le rakha hai ..jaise ke apne farmaya hai ..waqai apki taqleeq sabaq amez hai .. Iska ajar apko malik hi de sakta hai ..dad filhal qubool karen .. aur bujrugo.N ko Buzrugo.N kar len ..Umid hai apke kalamo.N se hum jaise nau amoz mustafeed hote rahenge .. inayath farmate rahen ..


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Mahutram Shakuntala saheba aadab ,,

Apke Kalam ne pori tahezib ko apne hisaar me le rakha hai ..jaise ke apne farmaya hai ..waqai apki taqleeq sabaq amez hai .. Iska ajar apko malik hi de sakta hai ..dad filhal qubool karen .. aur bujrugo.N ko Buzrugo.N kar len ..Umid hai apke kalamo.N se hum jaise nau amoz mustafeed hote rahenge .. inayath farmate rahen ..


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Yah kavita meri samrpit hai sabhi bado keliye aur

jaha bujurago ki izzat hoty hai wah ghar kya kai mene likha hai

aap padhiyega



hamari sachchi saan hai
sadiyo ka bhara gyan hai

jo dikhte hai, dharti par
bujurg to bhagvaan hai


saath rahlo seva karlo
ye bas duao ki khan hai

ye he to vipdaye kam hai
har pal sukh saman hai

behadd he inme anubav

sujhavo ki khadaan hai

inke aaspass hone se hi

jivan me rahti jaan hai

inhe sachcha samaan mile

to ghar ho jata vardan hai

jo inko bas bojh samjhe


wah yuva bas naadan hai

jaha inhe dutkaar mile


ghar nahi samsaan hai

dr shakuntala vyas




aaj kal samaj mai bujurago ki halat kya hai

hum sabka kya kartavy hai

aap pasand karenge
aapne bahut acha likha hai, sach bhi hai
lekin mujhe lagta hai ek tarfa sach hai ab . baat bahut nazuk hai, shyed naagvaar bhi guzre

lekin iske liye sirf yuva hi to kasoorvaar nahi hai
maiN apne buzurgoN ko bahut miss karta huN.............

mere dada dadi naani ........

ppar jab aaj ke buzurgoN se milta huN , to dukh hota hai ........mujhe ab koe buzurg nahi milta ......


buzurg humare neta hai jo...... sirf seat chahte haiN .....

buzurg humeN kya de raheN hai, ye bhi to sochte haiN yuvaa ........

bas yahi karan hai ki,

yuva aur buzurg ke beech itna faasla badhta ja raha hai ...

" kamiyaaN tumme bhi hongi buzurgo
mutaasir tumse jo bacchy nahi hote "

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bhot sanjida mudda hai bada najuk mudda hai kuch kehna bhi cahe to jaban sath nahi de rahi ,m totally agree with janumanu.sometimes seniors(bujurg) of our family never try to understand what there child wants. sometime ve apni self prestiage ke liye manmani karte hai.lekin fir bhi main ye kehta hu k bujurg bhala hi cahte hai

vese aapki rachna kafi khubsurat hai

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aapne bahut acha likha hai, sach bhi hai
lekin mujhe lagta hai ek tarfa sach hai ab . baat bahut nazuk hai, shyed naagvaar bhi guzre

lekin iske liye sirf yuva hi to kasoorvaar nahi hai
maiN apne buzurgoN ko bahut miss karta huN.............

mere dada dadi naani ........

ppar jab aaj ke buzurgoN se milta huN , to dukh hota hai ........mujhe ab koe buzurg nahi milta ......


buzurg humare neta hai jo...... sirf seat chahte haiN .....

buzurg humeN kya de raheN hai, ye bhi to sochte haiN yuvaa ........

bas yahi karan hai ki,

yuva aur buzurg ke beech itna faasla badhta ja raha hai ...

" kamiyaaN tumme bhi hongi buzurgo
mutaasir tumse jo bacchy nahi hote "

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mene jo bhi likha yah vradh logo ki halat jo he samaj me hamare bujurag

hai unke bare mai jinhe hum logo ki dekhbal ki jarurat hai


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neta aur unki baat nahi hai ish poem mai

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aapki yeh rachna bahut hi achchi lagi.
thanks for sharing it dd

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bhot sanjida mudda hai bada najuk mudda hai kuch kehna bhi cahe to jaban sath nahi de rahi ,m totally agree with janumanu.sometimes seniors(bujurg) of our family never try to understand what there child wants. sometime ve apni self prestiage ke liye manmani karte hai.lekin fir bhi main ye kehta hu k bujurg bhala hi cahte hai

vese aapki rachna kafi khubsurat hai

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Shakuntala jee AadaaB!

Aapki bayaani aur khayaal bahut umdaa rahe dil se daad hazir hai......
Behad khoob kaha hai aapne aur waqai ek waqt ki sachai hai is kalaam meiN aur aapke khayaaloN meiN......

MaiN aapke khayaal se sahmat huN per jaise Vikas Bhai ne kaha hai ke aajkal ke bujurg to shayad hi aaj ke bujurg in khayaloN per puri tarha sahiN se utarte hai......

But mera jitna Ilm hai ke buzurg jo hate hai aapki is gazal ke har khayaal ke jaise hi hote hai ..........
Aapki is khubsurat aur zahin creation per dil se daad hazir hai.......


Aise hi likhate rahiye....
Khush rahiye.......
Khuda Hafez.........


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shakuntala jee aadaab!

aapki bayaani aur khayaal bahut umdaa rahe dil se daad hazir hai......
behad khoob kaha hai aapne aur waqai ek waqt ki sachai hai is kalaam mein aur aapke khayaalon mein......

main aapke khayaal se sahmat hun per jaise vikas bhai ne kaha hai ke aajkal ke bujurg to shayad hi aaj ke bujurg in khayalon per puri tarha sahin se utarte hai......

but mera jitna ilm hai ke buzurg jo hate hai aapki is gazal ke har khayaal ke jaise hi hote hai ..........
aapki is khubsurat aur zahin creation per dil se daad hazir hai.......


aise hi likhate rahiye....
khush rahiye.......
khuda hafez.........
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liye mene yah kavita bahut bujurag jo budhape mai kya halat

hoty hai ush per likhi hai


budhapa jub aata hai aur koi na ho jo unki dekhbhal kare aur

vradha asharam mai bheje maa baap ko dada dadi ko bahut hi

dardnak hota hai jub unko ghar me koi adar nahi diya jata

agar hum sab samjhe ki yah din hamare jivan mai aayega

sarir kamjor hoga, dimag bhi sath kum dega kai vradho ke pas

to paise bhi nahi bachate hai ush umer tuk unki halat bahut

bekar dekh sakte hai hum samaj mai

hum sab keval hamare budhape ko nazar mai rakhe aur yah nek kaam kare jo vradh hamare ghar mai hai aur jiski bhi madad kar

sake jivan mai bahut khusi hoty hai jub hum kisi kamjor aur jaratman ki madad karte hai

sada khush rahe

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