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shaKhs voh mehbuub sa jab se be'gaana ho gaya -
20th April 2005, 07:50 PM
ek taaza Ghazal bazm ki nazar :
mulaizaa farmaayeN shaKhs voh mehbuub sa jab se be'gaana ho gaya saaGhar-o-meena se apna dostaana ho gaya jo kabhi rehtaa tha aaNkhoN meiN khwaaboN ki tarah usko dekhe dosto ab ik zamaana ho gaya sun'ne laga tha voh meri fariyaad lekin haaye haaye lab hilaaye the ki kehta hai, kahaa na, ho gaya jab talak the aashna tum raasta humvaar tha ab to na'mumkin hi qadmoN ko badhaana ho gaya ko'ii to ho mujhse kahe jo aa ke maikhaane meiN yaar ab chalo ghar bhi bohat peena-pilaana ho gaya yuuN bhi to barbaad hona hi tha mujhko ai nadeem uskaa bichadd jaana faqat achchaa bahaana ho gaya ab sar-e-mehfil hamaare zikr pe kehte haiN voh choRiye jee ab to yeh qissa puraana ho gaya hai koi allah ka baNda jo kahe jaa kar unheiN aapse ho kar judaa "maikash" diwaana ho gaya maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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20th April 2005, 08:00 PM
welcome maikash
bahut time baad dekha aapko yaha, dil khush hua aapko phir dekh kar.. u r a writer of shayri.com that i admire a lot right from beginning.. once again a great peice of work by you. words jo sochne par majbur kar de... jo kabhi rehtaa tha aaNkhoN meiN khwaaboN ki tarah usko dekhe dosto ab ik zamaana ho gaya ---> dil se aaah nikalti hai........ yuuN bhi to barbaad hona hi tha mujhko ai nadeem uskaa bichadd jaana faqat achchaa bahaana ho gaya --> hai maikashji...unka bichad jana ek bahana ho gaya .... ab sar-e-mehfil hamaare zikr pe kehte haiN voh choRiye jee ab to yeh qissa puraana ho gaya hai koi allah ka baNda jo kahe jaa kar unheiN aapse ho kar judaa "maikash" diwaana ho gaya kya kahe aapke har shabd padhkar aah nikalti hai dil se....sochne par majbur kar deta hai kuch baatain.....deep writing as always....thx for sharing with us best Priya ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Jisnu Lagey, ohi'yo jaane, Kaun Jaane peer parayi! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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20th April 2005, 08:30 PM
[color=dark red] ab sar-e-mehfil hamaare zikr pe kehte haiN voh
choRiye jee ab to yeh qissa puraana ho gaya hai koi allah ka baNda jo kahe jaa kar unheiN aapse ho kar judaa "maikash" diwaana ho gaya[/color] Maikash SahaaB.. Aadaab! YuN to puri ghazal hi lajawaab hai… Par yah 2 sher tou padh kar dil ke puraane zakhmoN ek baar fir se hare ho gaye.. Ek dard ki lehar doud jaati hai.. Taareef Kabul kijiye… MayanK |
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Re: shaKhs voh mehbuub sa jab se be'gaana ho gaya -
20th April 2005, 08:52 PM
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bohat hi umda likha hai aapne koi shaq nahi ... aur bohat hi khyali bhi ... upar jo quote kiye maine ... behad pasand aaya ... aapki kalam chalegi par itni jaldi idhar ka rukh hoga socha hi nahi tha .. umeed hai aap phir se apne chahne waloN ko nirash nahi kareNge ... aur lunhe aise hi dil azeez kalamoN se roobroo karate raheNge ... umeed hai aapse bhi rabta bana rahega ... meri daad kabool kijiyega ... apna khayal rakhiyega aapka apna kunal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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20th April 2005, 09:13 PM
maikash ji,
yunh to poori gajal maie jadoo hai par n jaane kyun yah sher dil maie sama gaya..... ko'ii to ho mujhse kahe jo aa ke maikhaane meiN yaar ab chalo ghar bhi bohat peena-pilaana ho gaya shukriaa fir ek baar aapko padhna naseeb huaa. yunhi aate rahna khush raho meena |
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20th April 2005, 10:26 PM
Maikash Sahab...
Aapki ghazal yahan dekhkar hamari subah tau mukkamal ho gayi...lekin phir wahi dard se sarobaar yeh ashaar...kya kahein... sun'ne laga tha voh meri fariyaad lekin haaye haaye lab hilaaye the ki kehta hai, kahaa na, ho gaya uff!!! yeh dil pe chot... ko'ii to ho mujhse kahe jo aa ke maikhaane meiN yaar ab chalo ghar bhi bohat peena-pilaana ho gaya hmmn koyi tokne waali honi hee chahiye... yuuN bhi to barbaad hona hi tha mujhko ai nadeem uskaa bichadd jaana faqat achchaa bahaana ho gaya waise tau tumhin ne mujhe barbaad kiya hai.... ilzaam kisi aur ke sar jaaye tau achhaa... yoonhi yaad aa gaya...bahut hee asardaar likha hai...bahut bahut shukriya...ise mehfil mein rakhne kaa... paras gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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21st April 2005, 10:11 AM
shaKhs voh mehbuub sa jab se be'gaana ho gaya saaGhar-o-meena se apna dostaana ho gaya Gum-e-zindagi mein ek yahi sahara hai..... sun'ne laga tha voh meri fariyaad lekin haaye haaye lab hilaaye the ki kehta hai, kahaa na, ho gaya bewfaai ka ik aur nazraana..... yuuN bhi to barbaad hona hi tha mujhko ai nadeem uskaa bichadd jaana faqat achchaa bahaana ho gaya Kismat mein tabahi likhi hi thi.....bus ek zariya chahiye tha.... ab sar-e-mehfil hamaare zikr pe kehte haiN voh choRiye jee ab to yeh qissa puraana ho gaya bewfa husn ki to yahi fitrat hoti hai....jaane kitne hi dil toote honge is nakaam dil ke siwa.... hai koi allah ka baNda jo kahe jaa kar unheiN aapse ho kar judaa "maikash" diwaana ho gaya Janaab Maikash Sahab.....SSA...... kaafi arse ke baad aapka naya kalaam padne ko mila.... kutch yaaden phir se taaza ho gayin..... aapka shukragujaar hoon ki aapne naye kalaam se ru-b-ru karwaya...... dil se daal kabool kijiye...... aapka apna..... **(*·.¸(`·.¸ ¸.·´)¸.·*)** *·.¸Paigaam -e- Aman¸.·* **(¸.·´(¸.·* *·.¸)`·.¸)** ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* inhan ankhaaon vicho kadi, tere hanju vaghe si..... aaj ki hoye, jehda ^AMAN^ da lahoo vagda ae...... AMAN RAHI |
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21st April 2005, 10:16 AM
ABHEY!
itne dinon se kahaan the yaar? rahii ghazal kii baat, uskii to aar-paar sab ne kar dii par yeh zaroor kahuun gaa kii aapke shabdon mein ab bhii wahii dard hai jo kuch saal pehle huaa kartaa thaa. far'k sirf itna hai kii pehle aap yaar ko paane kii ghazalein likhaa karte the, aur ab yaar ke kho jaane kii.. lutf ke saath dard bhii bahot uthaa shuk'rguzaar rahoon gaa main aapkaa ..aur umiid hai kii isii tarah aur bhii ghazalein padne kaa mauka miltaa rahe gaa chalta hoon "je tu akhiiyaaN de saamne naii rehnaa, te bibba saada dil moD de..!" kya karooN? aisa hi hooN maiN.. |
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21st April 2005, 10:34 AM
Hi Maikash Ji,
Nice 2 cu back here after all this time. But u have returned with such a heart rendering piece of work. Absolutely luved and enjoyed reading it. Take care and do keep posting more so. Salim If there are no tears in the eyes, there will be no rainbow in the soul Happiness is a butterfly, which, when pursued, is always just beyond your grasp, but which, if you sit down quietly, may alight upon you. We come to love not by finding a perfect person but by learning to see an imperfect person perfectly |
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21st April 2005, 05:44 PM
priya jee
namaste bas aap jaise dostoN ki muravvat hai jo yahaaN kheeNch laati hai vagarna ab to mahiinoN biit jaate haiN kisi bazm maiN shirkat kiye hue paziraa'i ke liye behadd mashkoor huuN aapka bohat shukriya maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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24th April 2005, 05:54 PM
mayank saahab
aadaab aapne Ghazal ke do-ek she'r pasaNd farmaaye ......bohat shukriya aapka maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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24th April 2005, 06:04 PM
kunal saahab
aadaab aur namaste miyaaN ab yahaaN aa hi gaye the to socha bazm ki nazar kuch kiya jaaye to yeh Ghazal isi ka nateeja thi.....aapko Ghazal achchi lagi mujhe khushi hui bhai ab koshish to yahi rahegi ke baqaayida haaziri lagvaata rahuuN lekin phir kuch haalaat bhi aise ban jaate haiN ki chaahte hue bhi nahiiN aa paata lekin koshish barqaraar rahegi itna vaayda to kar hi sakta huuN shukriya maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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24th April 2005, 06:05 PM
meena jee
daad ka behadd shukriya jee baqaayda aane ki koshish karta rahuNga shukriya maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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24th April 2005, 08:19 PM
maikash
how r u? bohat khub likha hay bhai.... aap k ilfazon ko parhe to ab zmana guzar jata hay magar aap hain k bas... any way hamesha ki tarah bohat hi achi gazal keep sharing yar khan agar mohabbat hay to judai kiyon or judai main mohabbat kasi???? |
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24th April 2005, 08:57 PM
hi maikash brov
hw r u god aapki nazam bi aapki tarah hi hai bilkul diwaani si bhut dard hai aapki is nazam mai hamesha ki tarah although its nice to read ur shayri par bhai dard aapko kiyo nahi chorta. neway ab aaye hai to jana nahi apna gham hum saathiyo ke saath banto ge to shiyaad kuch kam ho jaye. neway keep on writing take care bye |
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24th April 2005, 09:06 PM
hello maikashje..
bahut waqt ke baad yaha ka rukh kiya..??aap to moderator hain..aap hi gayab rahenge to ajeeb sa lagega na....aur apki nazm bhi kamal ki hain.....apne aap mein ek chubhan liye...... shaKhs voh mehbuub sa jab se be'gaana ho gaya saaGhar-o-meena se apna dostaana ho gaya jo kabhi rehtaa tha aaNkhoN meiN khwaaboN ki tarah usko dekhe dosto ab ik zamaana ho gaya mausam Jaane kya samjhi main useN Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se |
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25th April 2005, 09:16 AM
paras jee
namaste aapki dariya-dilii hai jo aapne si tukbandii ko qaabil-e-gaur samjha daad ke liye bohat shukriya maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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Re: shaKhs voh mehbuub sa jab se be'gaana ho gaya -
27th April 2005, 04:10 PM
Waaaaah...badi hi umda Gazal padi hai aapne Maikash
saheb... Daal kabul farmata hun... -vij Quote:
Dhoop Mai.N Baitha Hai Khud Pedh Lagaane Wala http://artwanted.com/vijen http://vijendrasvij.com |
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16th May 2005, 05:08 PM
maikashji
aapne bahut hi acha likha hai padhke acha laga sonal There would come a time when we have to stop loving a person not because that person started hating us ..... but because we found out that they'd be happier if we let me go..... |
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2nd July 2005, 12:27 AM
Is Ghazal ne bhi sunn karr diyaa..
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