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28th May 2010, 12:11 PM
Frnds,
fir se ek koshish ke sath pesh hai meri ye koshish.......
plz meri kamiyo ko ignore mt karna.....mujhe aur behtar likhne me meri help jarur karna.....aapke comments mujhe likhne k liye prerit karte hai.......................
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Apne jajbaato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Aaj apni baato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Apne dard ko kalam se likhkar
Apne ehsaaso ko jtaane ki koshish ki hai
Nahi jaante duniya kya smjhegi ise
Humne to mohbbat nibhane ki koshish ki hai
Dard ko seene me chupana hai mushkil
Dard ko likhkar mitaane ki koshish ki hai
Tu mujhse door hai chaahe jitna bhi
Har waqt tere paas aane ki koshish ki hai
Nafrat se bhare tere be-dard dil me
Humne pyar badhaane ki koshish ki hai
Apne jajbaato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Aaj apni baato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
KAVITA NEGI
Hame ehbab ki lambi qataron sy nahi matlab..........!!
Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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28th May 2010, 12:33 PM
Bohat Bohat Bohat he behtarni likha hai apne, Is tarah likhte rahiyega mustakbil apka hai us roshan kariye apni kalam se....
Keep up the good work your friend..
SamandaroN mieN muaafiq havaa chalaata hai...
Jahaaz khud nahiiN chalte Khudaa chalaataa ha...
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28th May 2010, 01:08 PM
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Frnds,
fir se ek koshish ke sath pesh hai meri ye koshish.......
plz meri kamiyo ko ignore mt karna.....mujhe aur behtar likhne me meri help jarur karna.....aapke comments mujhe likhne k liye prerit karte hai.......................
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Apne jajbaato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Aaj apni baato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Apne dard ko kalam se likhkar
Apne ehsaaso ko jtaane ki koshish ki hai
Nahi jaante duniya kya smjhegi ise
Humne to mohbbat nibhane ki koshish ki hai
Dard ko seene me chupana hai mushkil
Dard ko likhkar mitaane ki koshish ki hai
Tu mujhse door hai chaahe jitna bhi
Har waqt tere paas aane ki koshish ki hai
Nafrat se bhare tere be-dard dil me
Humne pyar badhaane ki koshish ki hai
Apne jajbaato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Aaj apni baato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
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kavitaa jee
radhe radhe
ahsaas achhe hain par pahle sher yaani matle ko kuchh is tarah bhi likh sakte the mujhe aisa lagta hai jaroori nahi ki mai sahi hoon
"Apne jazbaaton ko samjhaane ki koshish ki hai
Aaj apni baaton se lubhaane ki koshish ki hai"
duaon ke saath
Aapka Apna Ishk
'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है
इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है
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28th May 2010, 01:12 PM
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Bohat Bohat Bohat he behtarni likha hai apne, Is tarah likhte rahiyega mustakbil apka hai us roshan kariye apni kalam se....
Keep up the good work your friend..
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Mujhe padhne ka aur ehsaaso ko smjhne ka bahut bahut Shukriya Tausif ji........
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28th May 2010, 01:15 PM
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kavitaa jee
radhe radhe
ahsaas achhe hain par pahle sher yaani matle ko kuchh is tarah bhi likh sakte the mujhe aisa lagta hai jaroori nahi ki mai sahi hoon
"Apne jazbaaton ko samjhaane ki koshish ki hai
Aaj apni baaton se lubhaane ki koshish ki hai"
duaon ke saath
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radhe radhe ishq ji,
dis se dhanyawad aapka jo aapne mujhe padha aur saraha......waise pahle sher ko kai trah se likha ja skta tha...... aapne jo btaaya wo b khoobsurut ehsaas hai.....isi trah mera sath dete rahe.......
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28th May 2010, 04:18 PM
haan bahut hi acha likha hai, koshish hi ek ummid hai jo hame apni manjil dila pati hai.
khush rahiye hamsha duaon ke sath
vese ek baat kahu dil se mat lagana, per font size thodi kam kardo na to padhne walon aur bhi acha mehshoosh hoga.
AankheN khuleeN to jaag uTheeN hasrateN tamaam Uss ko bhi kho diyaa jissay paya thaa khwaab mein
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28th May 2010, 04:43 PM
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haan bahut hi acha likha hai, koshish hi ek ummid hai jo hame apni manjil dila pati hai.
khush rahiye hamsha duaon ke sath
vese ek baat kahu dil se mat lagana, per font size thodi kam kardo na to padhne walon aur bhi acha mehshoosh hoga.
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ha ha ha ..... sahi kaha dinesh ji,,,, font size kam hi karna tha....wo jayada ho gya....ab kya karu.....????
kher aage se dhyan dungi,,,,,,,,,
dil se shukriya mujhe padhne ka...... !!!
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28th May 2010, 04:49 PM
its ok, vese me kuch hu to nahi me bhi apki tarah ek member hu, per apne likha tha ki meri kamiya ko igonre mat karna. to muje laga ki apki gazal ki font size thodi jyada hai to keh diya. vese app gazal bahut achi likhte ho.
AankheN khuleeN to jaag uTheeN hasrateN tamaam Uss ko bhi kho diyaa jissay paya thaa khwaab mein
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28th May 2010, 04:57 PM
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its ok, vese me kuch hu to nahi me bhi apki tarah ek member hu, per apne likha tha ki meri kamiya ko igonre mat karna. to muje laga ki apki gazal ki font size thodi jyada hai to keh diya. vese app gazal bahut achi likhte ho.
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Dhanyawad Dinesh ji....................
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28th May 2010, 05:12 PM
kavita ji namskaar........
Bahut hi achhi koshish,
yuN hi likhte raheN.
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28th May 2010, 05:18 PM
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kavita ji namskaar........
Bahut hi achhi koshish,
yuN hi likhte raheN.
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Thanks a lot... Rajeev ji......
mujhe padhne aur sarhaane ka dil se dhanyawaad......
KAVITA NEGI
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Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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28th May 2010, 07:27 PM
Nice..........Keep Trying.......I mean Koshish karti rahe.
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28th May 2010, 07:39 PM
Achhi koshish ki hai....!
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28th May 2010, 08:22 PM
Kavita Ji.....aap ki yeh peshkash ... mujhe pasand aai....yunhi aur behtar koshish ke saath likhte rahen....khush rahen....
apna khayal rakhen...
duaaon ke saath....
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
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28th May 2010, 09:06 PM
kavita jee...
aapki ghazal ke ehsaas bahut seedhey or saaf hain..
jo dil pe asar karne me kamyaab rahe..
jaise ki abhi shuruaat hai to ghazal me nikhaar wakt ke sath hi aayega..
par ye koshish bhi bahut khoob rahi..
mujhe ghazal likhne ka koi tajurba nahi hai isliye hum jyada nhi keh sakenge
likhti rahiye aise hi
bhagwan aapki kalam ko rawaangi de
aakash
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28th May 2010, 09:18 PM
Apne jajbaato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Aaj apni baato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Apne dard ko kalam se likhkar
Apne ehsaaso ko jtaane ki koshish ki hai
Nahi jaante duniya kya smjhegi ise
Humne to mohbbat nibhane ki koshish ki hai
Dard ko seene me chupana hai mushkil
Dard ko likhkar mitaane ki koshish ki hai
Tu mujhse door hai chaahe jitna bhi
Har waqt tere paas aane ki koshish ki hai
Nafrat se bhare tere be-dard dil me
Humne pyar badhaane ki koshish ki hai
Apne jajbaato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Aaj apni baato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
kavita ji,
aapki koshish achhi lagi, daad qubuul kijiyega....
jaise ki aapne kaha hai ki aapki khamiyoN ko nazaraNdaaz na kiya jaye i'sliye aapko kehna chahta hooN ki jo shabd "j" ya "z" se shuru hote haiN uNke talafuz samjhne ki koshish kijiye, jaise ki aapne likha hai "jajbaato", jabki sahi hota hai...."jazbaatoN"....
aapka dost,
vikram...
'E Taahire Laahuti!!!
Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali
Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho
Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi....
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29th May 2010, 10:32 AM
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Nice..........Keep Trying.......I mean Koshish karti rahe.
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Dhanyawad Ghayel ji,,,,
Bilkul koshish jaari rahegi.............
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29th May 2010, 10:33 AM
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Achhi koshish ki hai....!
Mann
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Thanx a lot mann ji.................
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29th May 2010, 10:34 AM
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Kavita Ji.....aap ki yeh peshkash ... mujhe pasand aai....yunhi aur behtar koshish ke saath likhte rahen....khush rahen....
apna khayal rakhen...
duaaon ke saath....
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Naresh Ji,
Bahut bahut shukriya mujhe padhne aur srahaane ka........
KAVITA NEGI
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Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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29th May 2010, 10:35 AM
Shukriya Aakash ji,
bilkul sahi farmaaya aapne ki gazal me nikhaar wakt ke sath hi aayega....koshish jaari rahegi.....isi trah sath dete rahe............
KAVITA NEGI
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Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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29th May 2010, 10:51 AM
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Apne jajbaato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Aaj apni baato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Apne dard ko kalam se likhkar
Apne ehsaaso ko jtaane ki koshish ki hai
Nahi jaante duniya kya smjhegi ise
Humne to mohbbat nibhane ki koshish ki hai
Dard ko seene me chupana hai mushkil
Dard ko likhkar mitaane ki koshish ki hai
Tu mujhse door hai chaahe jitna bhi
Har waqt tere paas aane ki koshish ki hai
Nafrat se bhare tere be-dard dil me
Humne pyar badhaane ki koshish ki hai
Apne jajbaato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Aaj apni baato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
kavita ji,
aapki koshish achhi lagi, daad qubuul kijiyega....
jaise ki aapne kaha hai ki aapki khamiyoN ko nazaraNdaaz na kiya jaye i'sliye aapko kehna chahta hooN ki jo shabd "j" ya "z" se shuru hote haiN uNke talafuz samjhne ki koshish kijiye, jaise ki aapne likha hai "jajbaato", jabki sahi hota hai...."jazbaatoN"....
aapka dost,
vikram...
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Vikram ji,
Aapki daad dil se qubool hai ji.....aage se j nd z me difference ka dhyaan rakhungi...isi trah sath dete rahiye,,,,,,,
Thanx a lot ......
KAVITA NEGI
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Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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29th May 2010, 11:32 AM
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Nahi jaante duniya kya smjhegi ise
Humne to mohbbat nibhane ki koshish ki hai
Tu mujhse door hai chaahe jitna bhi
Har waqt tere paas aane ki koshish ki hai
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kavita ji apki koshish bahut acchi rahi..........upar likhe 2 sher mere dil ke kafi karib rahe kafi sukun mila unhe pad kar aage bhi issi tarah koshish karti rahiye
apka.
Na tha main to khuda tha, kuch na hota to khuda hota?
mitaya mujh ko hone ne, na hota main to kya hota !! (NM)
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29th May 2010, 11:39 AM
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kavita ji apki koshish bahut acchi rahi..........upar likhe 2 sher mere dil ke kafi karib rahe kafi sukun mila unhe pad kar aage bhi issi tarah koshish karti rahiye
apka.
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Dil se dhanyawaad aapka......
koshish jaari rahegi...aapki duaoo ki sath chaiye.....!!!!
Regards,
Kavita
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31st May 2010, 08:13 AM
Kavita jee,
Kasie hain aap? Shayad aaj aapko phelii baar padha hain... aur lagta hain meine aapki likhi hu ghazal's padh naa sakii per ab koshish karugii un sab ko padh sakugii ...
Ghazal bahut pasand aayii har sher dil ke kareeb rahe hain ...
likhtey rahe ... aur mehfil ko saajatey rahe..
Take care
aapki dost
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31st May 2010, 10:25 AM
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Kavita jee,
Kasie hain aap? Shayad aaj aapko phelii baar padha hain... aur lagta hain meine aapki likhi hu ghazal's padh naa sakii per ab koshish karugii un sab ko padh sakugii ...
Ghazal bahut pasand aayii har sher dil ke kareeb rahe hain ...
likhtey rahe ... aur mehfil ko saajatey rahe..
Take care
aapki dost
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Dear Mann ji,
mai abhi new hu is SDC parviar me.... maine abhi tak 2-3 gazal hi likhi hai....jayada nahi....... aapka shukriya jo aapne mujhe padha aur pasand kiya.........
Aapka Dil se shukriya
Kavita
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31st May 2010, 10:35 AM
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Frnds,
fir se ek koshish ke sath pesh hai meri ye koshish.......
plz meri kamiyo ko ignore mt karna.....mujhe aur behtar likhne me meri help jarur karna.....aapke comments mujhe likhne k liye prerit karte hai.......................
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Apne jajbaato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Aaj apni baato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Apne dard ko kalam se likhkar
Apne ehsaaso ko jtaane ki koshish ki hai
Nahi jaante duniya kya smjhegi ise
Humne to mohbbat nibhane ki koshish ki hai
Dard ko seene me chupana hai mushkil
Dard ko likhkar mitaane ki koshish ki hai
Tu mujhse door hai chaahe jitna bhi
Har waqt tere paas aane ki koshish ki hai
Nafrat se bhare tere be-dard dil me
Humne pyar badhaane ki koshish ki hai
Apne jajbaato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Aaj apni baato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
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Bahut achhi koshish kari hai aapne.
Kaafi achhi lagi pad kar. yun hi likhte rahiyega...
Badnaseeb bhi nahi par mera naseeb bhi nahi Maana ke main ameer nahi par gareeb bhi nahi Dil ki gehraaiyon mein chhipaya hai jise Woh door bhi nahi mujhse par kareeb bhi nahi Chahta to hoon dena usko khushiyan saare jahan ki par mil jaayein unke gham "Jasdeep" itna khushnaseeb bhi nahi
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31st May 2010, 11:09 AM
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Bahut achhi koshish kari hai aapne.
Kaafi achhi lagi pad kar. yun hi likhte rahiyega...
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Jasdeep ji,
Aapka tehdil se shukriya........Aapki duaao k sath yun he likhne ki koshish jaari rahegi.....
Regards,
Kavita
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31st May 2010, 11:18 AM
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Frnds,
fir se ek koshish ke sath pesh hai meri ye koshish.......
plz meri kamiyo ko ignore mt karna.....mujhe aur behtar likhne me meri help jarur karna.....aapke comments mujhe likhne k liye prerit karte hai.......................
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Apne jajbaato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Aaj apni baato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Apne dard ko kalam se likhkar
Apne ehsaaso ko jtaane ki koshish ki hai
Nahi jaante duniya kya smjhegi ise
Humne to mohbbat nibhane ki koshish ki hai
Dard ko seene me chupana hai mushkil
Dard ko likhkar mitaane ki koshish ki hai
Tu mujhse door hai chaahe jitna bhi
Har waqt tere paas aane ki koshish ki hai
Nafrat se bhare tere be-dard dil me
Humne pyar badhaane ki koshish ki hai
Apne jajbaato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Aaj apni baato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
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Namaskaar Kavita jee,
kaisi ho?
Ab jyada kya,hume.N to bilkul knowledge nahi.N hai ghazal ke technical area ki.lekin ehsaaso.N ki jitni knowledge hai.............. uske hisab se bahut bahut bahut khoob likha hai........
Mujhe bhi thoDi training de dijiye apni tarah accha achha likhne ki....
aur kya kahu?
Khush Rahiye,
Bahut si duao.N ke sath,
Aapki Dost
ritu
"Life laughs at you when you are unhappy...
Life smiles at you when you are happy..
But,
Life salutes you when you make others happy!!"
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31st May 2010, 11:24 AM
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Namaskaar Kavita jee,
kaisi ho?
Ab jyada kya,hume.N to bilkul knowledge nahi.N hai ghazal ke technical area ki.lekin ehsaaso.N ki jitni knowledge hai.............. uske hisab se bahut bahut bahut khoob likha hai........
Mujhe bhi thoDi training de dijiye apni tarah accha achha likhne ki....
aur kya kahu?
Khush Rahiye,
Bahut si duao.N ke sath,
Aapki Dost
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Ritu ji,,,,,
Mai khud aap sabse hi seekhi hu...... jo dil me aaya wo likh diya..... choti moti galtiya ki....dosto ne smjhaaya aur maine sudhar laane ki koshish ki hai bs....aapka shukriya jo aapko meri ye koshish pasand aai......
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Kavita
KAVITA NEGI
Hame ehbab ki lambi qataron sy nahi matlab..........!!
Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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3rd June 2010, 02:01 AM
Dard ko seene me chupana hai mushkil
Dard ko likhkar mitaane ki koshish ki hai
Yeh sher bohat pasand aaya mujhe kavita jii..
ghazal meiN thodi bohat technical faults haiN...I am sure ahista ahista aap inhe sudhar lengi......
yuhi likhti rahiye...................
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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3rd June 2010, 10:07 AM
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Dard ko seene me chupana hai mushkil
Dard ko likhkar mitaane ki koshish ki hai
Yeh sher bohat pasand aaya mujhe kavita jii..
ghazal meiN thodi bohat technical faults haiN...I am sure ahista ahista aap inhe sudhar lengi......
yuhi likhti rahiye...................
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Shukriya Zainy ji,,,,
bilkul sahi kaha Zainy ji, ahista ahista hi sudhar aayega.....!!! aap sab ka sath chaiye bs.....!!! meri kamiyo ko sudharne me madad karte rahe....!!!
KAVITA NEGI
Hame ehbab ki lambi qataron sy nahi matlab..........!!
Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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3rd June 2010, 11:15 AM
Kavita jee:
namaste!
aik achChhi koShiSh.... yuuNhi liKhate rahiye aage bhee.. dil se daad!
KhuSh rahe.n... apnaa Khayaal raKhe.n
duaao.n ke saath ijaazat
aapka
~ Dhaval
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3rd June 2010, 11:34 AM
kavita ji mujhe aapki ye koshish bht achi lgi...aapko pd kr acha lga yuhin likhte rhe
khush rhe
loveleen
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3rd June 2010, 11:41 AM
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Kavita jee:
namaste!
aik achChhi koShiSh.... yuuNhi liKhate rahiye aage bhee.. dil se daad!
KhuSh rahe.n... apnaa Khayaal raKhe.n
duaao.n ke saath ijaazat
aapka
~ Dhaval
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Shukriya Dhaval ji...............
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Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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3rd June 2010, 11:42 AM
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kavita ji mujhe aapki ye koshish bht achi lgi...aapko pd kr acha lga yuhin likhte rhe
khush rhe
loveleen
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meri koshish ko sarahane ki liye Dhanyawad loveleen ji,,,,,,,,
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3rd June 2010, 12:39 PM
achchi koshish hai aap ki
keep sharing
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_______________________________________________ PRANEETA
Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
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3rd June 2010, 01:59 PM
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achchi koshish hai aap ki
keep sharing
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Mujhe padhane aur sarahaane ka bahut bahut shukriya praneeta ji,,,,,,
Regards,
Kavita
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Hame ehbab ki lambi qataron sy nahi matlab..........!!
Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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