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Re: Re: Re: hi -
7th September 2006, 12:01 PM
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5th sher
her ek juwa.N per hai dastan-e- mohbbat meri
jabki aaj jindgi meri mujhse hee parai huie hai....
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6th share
vaise to hanstey dikhtey hai sab ke chehary,
gaur se dekho to har dil par udhasi chaei hue hai...
-sunita virender
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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hi -
8th September 2006, 10:27 AM
6th share
vaise to hanstey dikhtey hai sab ke chehary,
gaur se dekho to har dil par udhasi chaei hue hai...
-sunita virender
7th share
saath chalna magar milna nahi kahin bhe humne,
kaya gilha humne kinaro ki taseer payee huie hai......
'veer'
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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Re: hi -
8th September 2006, 10:56 AM
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Originally posted by rajveeer
6th share
vaise to hanstey dikhtey hai sab ke chehary,
gaur se dekho to har dil par udhasi chaei hue hai...
-sunita virender
7th share
saath chalna magar milna nahi kahin bhe humne,
kaya gilha humne kinaro ki taseer payee huie hai......
'veer'
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8th share
tumse milna chahtey hai hum bhi magar kaya karey,
tumse na milney ki kasam bhi humney khai hue hai....
-sunita virender
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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hi -
8th September 2006, 12:13 PM
1st share
mehndi ne azaab dono taraf aag lagai huie hai,
udhar haatho pe to idhar dil main lagai huie hai.....
'veer'
2nd share
unke hatho main Laga hain mere lahoo ka rang ,
duniya ki nazar me unho ne mehandi rachai huie hai.....
dilip
3rd share
rishton ko kaya khub nibhaya hai humne taumar,
dekho hamari mayat main zindagi bhe aiye huie hai....
'veer'
4th share
unke chahrey pe dekho aaj bhi mere pyar ki parchaei,
meri mohabat mitne ke baad bhi rang laye huie hai...
-sunita virender
5th sher
her ek zuba.N per hai dastan-e- mohbbat meri
jabki aaj zindgi meri mujhse hee prayee huie hai....
dilip
6th share
dikhne me to hanstey dikhtey hai sab ke chehary,
gaur se dekho to har dil par udaasi chayee huie hai...
-sunita virender
7th share
saath chalna magar milna nahi kahin bhe humne,
kaya gilha humne kinaro ki taseer payee huie hai......
'veer'
8th share
tumse milna chahtey hai hum magar kaya karey,
tumse na milney ki kasam humney khai hue hai....
-sunita virender
wah sunita ji kaya anjaam tak pouchaya hai appne is gazal ko.....or dilip ji app bhee kush kam nahi ho.......yeh gazal to apni manzil pa gai.....ab koi nai rah dhundhte hai.......raj.......
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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hi -
8th September 2006, 05:04 PM
dosto ek nai gazal ka aagaaz karne ja raha hoon.....appka saath chhahta hoon....
1st share
mere bimaar-e-dil ki dawa kare koi,
unki yaddon se mujhe juda kare koi......
'veer'
dosto is gazal main kafiya hai.....khuda....gilla.....waffa.....bewafa....dil ruba....duaa....fanna....silla......or isme radeef hai.......kare koi......bass ab app isko poora kare.......raj......
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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Re: hi -
9th September 2006, 09:56 AM
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mere bimaar-e-dil ki dawa kare koi,
unki yaddon se mujhe juda kare koi......
'veer'
2nd sher
jindgi ho gayi fanaa abto,tere bina
mujhe mout mile jaye,duaa kare koi...
'dilip'
" Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab
Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai
mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya
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hi -
11th September 2006, 11:21 AM
1st share
mere bimaar-e-dil ki dawa kare koi,
unki yaddon se mujhe juda kare koi......
'veer'
2nd sher
jindgi ho gayi fanaa abto,tere bina
mujhe mout mile jaye,duaa kare koi...
'dilip'
3rd share
meri deewangi chhahat ki inteha hai,
ab to ibadaton ka haq adda kare koi.....
'veer'
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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Re: hi -
11th September 2006, 11:35 AM
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Originally posted by rajveeer
1st share
mere bimaar-e-dil ki dawa kare koi,
unki yaddon se mujhe juda kare koi......
'veer'
2nd sher
jindgi ho gayi fanaa abto,tere bina
mujhe mout mile jaye,duaa kare koi...
'dilip'
3rd share
meri deewangi chhahat ki inteha hai,
ab to ibadaton ka haq adda kare koi.....
'veer'
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4th share
mere dil ko kahi bhi karaar nahi hai
mere dard-e-dil ki dawa kare koi......
-sunita virender
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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hi -
11th September 2006, 12:17 PM
4th share
mere dil ko kahi bhi karaar nahi hai
mere dard-e-dil ki dawa kare koi......
-sunita virender
sunita ji appka share bhut pyara hai...meri himmat nahi ho rahi ki main koi panga lu.....lakin ek halki c gustakhi kar raha hoon....maafi chhahta hoon......raj.......
4th share
mere dil ko kahi bhi karaar nahi hai
mere beqraar dil ki dawa kare koi......
-sunita virender
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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Re: hi -
11th September 2006, 12:27 PM
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4th share
mere dil ko kahi bhi karaar nahi hai
mere dard-e-dil ki dawa kare koi......
-sunita virender
sunita ji appka share bhut pyara hai...meri himmat nahi ho rahi ki main koi panga lu.....lakin ek halki c gustakhi kar raha hoon....maafi chhahta hoon......raj.......
4th share
mere dil ko kahi bhi karaar nahi hai
mere beqraar dil ki dawa kare koi......
-sunita virender
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thanks rajveer ji, mujhe accha lagga ki aapne mere likhey share ko aapne aur khoobsurat banna diya.
appki dost
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Re: hi -
11th September 2006, 01:27 PM
1st share
mere bimaar-e-dil ki dawa kare koi,
unki yaddon se mujhe juda kare koi......
'veer'
2nd sher
jindgi ho gayi fanaa abto,tere bina
mujhe mout mile jaye,duaa kare koi...
'dilip'
3rd share
meri deewangi chhahat ki inteha hai,
ab to ibadaton ka haq adda kare koi.....
'veer'
4th share
mere dil ko kahi bhi karaar nahi hai
mere beqraar dil ki dawa kare koi......
-sunita virender
5th sher
mujse har kadam pe ki hai bewafai
kaise us bewafa se wafa kare koi...
dilip
" Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab
Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai
mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya
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11th September 2006, 01:38 PM
5th sher
mujse har kadam pe ki hai bewafai
kaise us bewafa se wafa kare koi...
dilip
dilip ji appke share main bhee kush chhekhani karne ja raha hoon....plzzzz bura mat manna...mujhe maaf kar dena.....raj.....
5th sher
jisne har kadam pe ki hai bewafai,
kaise us bewafa se wafa kare koi...
dilip
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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Re: hi -
11th September 2006, 05:01 PM
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5th sher
mujse har kadam pe ki hai bewafai
kaise us bewafa se wafa kare koi...
dilip
dilip ji appke share main bhee kush chhekhani karne ja raha hoon....plzzzz bura mat manna...mujhe maaf kar dena.....raj.....
5th sher
jisne har kadam pe ki hai bewafai,
kaise us bewafa se wafa kare koi...
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raj sahab aapke thode se fer badal se is sher main char chand lag gaye..... shukriya........
dilip
" Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab
Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai
mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya
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hi -
11th September 2006, 05:03 PM
5th sher
jisne har kadam pe ki hai bewafai,
kaise us bewafa se wafa kare koi...
dilip
6th share
tujhe milkar wo khushi mili mujhko,
keh do ab na humse mila kare koi......
'veer'
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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Re: hi -
11th September 2006, 05:24 PM
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5th sher
jisne har kadam pe ki hai bewafai,
kaise us bewafa se wafa kare koi...
dilip
6th share
tujhe milkar wo khushi mili mujhko,
keh do ab na humse mila kare koi......
'veer'
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7th share
tumse milkar lut gaya sabar-o-qarar,
aaye dil ko qarar duaa kare koi.......
-sunita virender
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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12th September 2006, 01:02 AM
tam'aam shareek-e-bazm ehbabb ko aadaab aur SSA
bhai mujh na'ehl ka ek choTa sa sujhaav hai voh yeh ki ho sake to aap agli Ghazal ka aaGhaaz ek tarhi misre se kijiye....yaani ke kisi naamvar shayar ki likhi hui koi line chuniye aur uski behar pe apne she'r kahiye.....maiN ye nahiiN keh raha ki aap wazan meiN hi likhiye...koshish kijiye Ghalati ho jaaye to koi muzayka nahiiN....iss se kam-az-kam mujh jaise naalaayaq bhi is silsile ko aage badhaane meiN madaddgaar saabit ho sakte haiN...!!
shukriya
rab raakha
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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12th September 2006, 10:12 AM
Kya Baat hai janaab...Agar Maikash Sahib iss kuuchhe mein shirkat karein tau baat hi kyaa...tau lijiey aapka sujhaav humne maana hai...aur Daagh Sahib ki ghazal mein se Tarahi Misra chuna hai maine...kis behr mein hai wo aap samjha dijiey...
'Aafat tau yeh huyi ki wo mil kar juda hua'
Radeef = 'a' hua
kaafiya = adaa, khuda, mita, ataa vagairah vagairah
kyun na daagh sahib ka poora sher hi yahan keh doon...
begana thaa tau koyi shikayat na thee hamein
Aafat tau yeh huyi ki wo mil kar juda hua
chaliye aap sab doston se guzaarish hai ki iss taraahi misre ko zehan mein rakh kar ek poori ghazal kahein, aapko apni ghazal mein paanch sher kehne honge aur ek sher mein taraahi misre ka hona zaroori hai'Aafat tau yeh huyi ki wo mil kar juda hua'...it would be an interesting challenge...best of luck to all of you...
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
--Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan
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13th September 2006, 11:55 AM
paras ji app tak raj ka dil ki gehriyon se salaam pounche.....appne bhut pyari c gazal shuru ki hai....chalie hum kush gustakhi karte hai......
1st share
begana thaa tau koyi shikayat na thee hamein
Aafat tau yeh huyi ki wo mil kar juda hua....
'daagh'
2nd share
mujhe sadiyon mere haal pe rulata raha kambakth,
ek lamha teri judai ka meri dehleez pe thaira hua......
'veer'
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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13th September 2006, 02:22 PM
lijiye paras saahiba maikash khaana-kharaab haazir hai
mere khayaal se aap chahti thiiN ke tam'aam dost is beh'r par ek muqammal Ghazal kaheiN lekin ab rajveer saahab ne puraana silsila aage badhaa diya hai to meri jaanib se do misre haazi haiN....puuri Ghazal kisi roz post karuNga......
1st share
begana thaa tau koyi shikayat na thee hamein
Aafat tau yeh huyi ki wo mil kar juda hua....
'daagh'
2nd share
mujhe sadiyon mere haal pe rulata raha kambakth,
ek lamha teri judai ka meri dehleez pe thaira hua......
"rajveer"
3rd she'r :-
phirte haiN is qadar liye seene meiN dil ko hum
aNgaar ko'ii jaise haath par dharaa huaa
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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[QUOTE]Originally posted by maikasH
[B]lijiye paras saahiba maikash khaana-kharaab haazir hai
mere khayaal se aap chahti thiiN ke tam'aam dost is beh'r par ek muqammal Ghazal kaheiN lekin ab raajveer saahab ne puraana silsila aage badhaa diya hai to meri jaanib se do misre haazi haiN....puuri Ghazal kisi roz post karuNga......
1st share
begana thaa tau koyi shikayat na thee hamein
Aafat tau yeh huyi ki wo mil kar juda hua....
'daagh'
2nd share
mujhe sadiyon mere haal pe rulata raha kambakth,
ek lamha teri judai ka meri dehleez pe thaira hua......
"rajveer"
3rd she'r :-
phirte haiN is qadar liye seene meiN dil ko hum
aNgaar ko'ii jaise haath par dharaa huaa
maikash
4th share
uski kushi ke liye humney luta the apni har kushi,
phir bhi kush hu ki waffa ka farz to adda hua.......
-sunita virender
paras ji aapne mujhe invite kiya es ke liye aapka bahut bahut shukriya, main to vaise bhi es post par regular aati hu, par aapka msg par kar aane ka majja hi kuch aur hai. thanks alot.
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13th September 2006, 03:11 PM
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begana thaa tau koyi shikayat na thee hamein
Aafat tau yeh huyi ki wo mil kar juda hua....
'daagh'
2nd share
mujhe sadiyon mere haal pe rulata raha kambakth,
ek lamha teri judai ka meri dehleez pe thaira hua......
"rajveer"
3rd she'r :-
phirte haiN is qadar liye seene meiN dil ko hum
aNgaar ko'ii jaise haath par dharaa huaa
'maikash'
sandhu saab kamaal kar dita yaar.....
4th share
ajj bhe urra phirta hoon waqt ki aandhiyon main,
jaise kisi shaakh se patta koi toota hua.......
'veer'
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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13th September 2006, 03:50 PM
rajveer saahab
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janaab maiN koshish keeti si tuhade pm da jawaab den di par tuhaada mailbox full hai...tusi kuj megs delete kar deo maiN kamm to aa ke tuhaade pm da jawaab zaruur deyaNgaa
rab raakha
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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13th September 2006, 05:33 PM
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begana thaa tau koyi shikayat na thee hamein
Aafat tau yeh huyi ki wo mil kar juda hua....
'daagh'
2nd share
mujhe sadiyon mere haal pe rulata raha kambakth,
ek lamha teri judai ka meri dehleez pe thaira hua......
"rajveer"
3rd she'r :-
phirte haiN is qadar liye seene meiN dil ko hum
aNgaar ko'ii jaise haath par dharaa huaa
maikash
4th share
uski kushi ke liye humney luta the apni har kushi,
phir bhi kush hu ki waffa ka farz to adda hua.......
-sunita virender
5th share
ajj bhe urra phirta hoon waqt ki aandhiyon main,
jaise patta koi kisi shaakh se toota hua.......
'veer'
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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14th September 2006, 11:10 AM
pasar ji namaskar
yadpi ye nalayak yaha kuch likhne ki himakat kar raha hai........ per kya karoo.n sunita didi ne jo aadat daal di hai ab wo ese hi to nahi chootne wali..... mujhe nahi maloom maine jo gazal likhi hai wo thik hai ya nahi ......... maine daagh sahab ke tarahi misre ko use karke maine gazal likhi hai.....kis behar main hai mujhe nahi maloom.. agr koi galti hui ho to aap sabhi saheban se main muaafi ka talabgar hoo.n
Dastane mohabbat hai dil se ek gubar sa uthata hua
Seene mai.N Bhi lagta hai ek shool sa chubhta hua
Rahe Safar mai.N Yu.n to milte the hazaaro rahgeer
Koi hamsafar mila yaha.N ye pahle martaba hua……..
Jana tha to chala jata, kareeb aaya kyoun wo mere
Aafat tau yeh huyi ki wo mil kar juda hua…….
uski khushoo se dooba khat jo seene se lagata hoo.n
Lagta hai jaise rakha ho dil , dil per dhadkata hua…
Duniya ki mujhe parwah nahi per aaj wo jo rutha hai
Aisa Lagta hai jaise Mujhse begana mera khuda hua
ek begana sa dost
dilip
" Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab
Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai
mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya
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14th September 2006, 03:56 PM
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Dastane mohabbat hai dil se ek gubar sa uthata hua
Seene mai.N Bhi lagta hai ek shool sa chubhta hua
Rahe Safar mai.N Yu.n to milte the hazaaro rahgeer
Koi hamsafar mila yaha.N ye pahle martaba hua??..
Jana tha to chala jata, kareeb aaya kyoun wo mere
Aafat tau yeh huyi ki wo mil kar juda hua??.
uski khushoo se dooba khat jo seene se lagata hoo.n
Lagta hai jaise rakha ho dil , dil per dhadkata hua?
Duniya ki mujhe parwah nahi per aaj wo jo rutha hai
Aisa Lagta hai jaise Mujhse begana mera khuda hua
ek begana sa dost
dilip
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Dilip jee:
maiN aap ko ess koSHish par dili daad aur mubaarak baad dena chaahta huuN.. qubool keejiye.. Achchhi koShiSh hai...
-Mayank
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14th September 2006, 04:19 PM
Dastane mohabbat hai dil se ek gubar sa uthata hua
Seene mai.N Bhi lagta hai ek shool sa chubhta hua
Rahe Safar mai.N Yu.n to milte the hazaaro rahgeer
Koi hamsafar mila yaha.N ye pahle martaba hua……..
Jana tha to chala jata, kareeb aaya kyoun wo mere
Aafat tau yeh huyi ki wo mil kar juda hua…….
uski khushoo se dooba khat jo seene se lagata hoo.n
Lagta hai jaise rakha ho dil , dil per dhadkata hua…
Duniya ki mujhe parwah nahi per aaj wo jo rutha hai
Aisa Lagta hai jaise Mujhse begana mera khuda hua
dilip yaar sorry main late ho gaya lakin tum late bilkul nahi ho kaya sahi time par kaya dil kash qalaam pesh kiya hai.....yaar itna acha likha hai ki puccho mat har ek share mukamal or bhut gehre ehsaas liye huye hai meri daad kabool karna.....raj.....
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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14th September 2006, 04:23 PM
dilip bhai maine to aapko pm pe hi kaha tha k sab ko passand
aayegi mere dost
bahot hi achha likha hai mujhe to bahot pasand aayi ...
ye dost sath hai aapke
aapka dost
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*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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14th September 2006, 08:10 PM
Paras jee:
well, Chaliye aap kee taraahi misre ko co-operative shayri meiN he tabdiil kar diya gaya hai.. ess liye socha ke ek Sher ham bhee baaNtle aap sab se.. ab agli baar koii aasaan se se beh'r ho tau mazza aa jaaye.. [taa'ke GhaltiyaaN bhee na ho ] aur Shaayad zeyaadah ehbaab hissa leN.. ShukriYa..
-Mayank
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1st sher
begana thaa tau koyi shikayat na thee hamein
Aafat tau yeh huyi ki wo mil kar juda hua....
-daagh
2nd sher
mujhe sadiyon mere haal pe rulata raha kambakth,
ek lamha teri judai ka meri dehleez pe thaira hua......
-Rajveer"
3rd she'r :-
phirte haiN is qadar liye seene meiN dil ko hum
aNgaar ko'ii jaise haath par dharaa huaa
-maikash
4th sher
uski kushi ke liye humney luta the apni har kushi,
phir bhi kush hu ki waffa ka farz to adda hua.......
-sunita virender
5th sher
ajj bhe urra phirta hoon waqt ki aandhiyon main,
jaise patta koi kisi shaakh se toota hua.......
-Rajveer
6th Sher
jis ne kiya hai jaisa bharega voh waisa hee,
dekha hai dost hamne voh sar ek jhukaa huaa..
-Mayank
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15th September 2006, 02:19 PM
1st sher
begana thaa tau koyi shikayat na thee hamein
Aafat tau yeh huyi ki wo mil kar juda hua....
-daagh
2nd sher
mujhe sadiyon mere haal pe rulata raha kambakth,
ek lamha teri judai ka meri dehleez pe thaira hua......
-Rajveer"
3rd she'r :-
phirte haiN is qadar liye seene meiN dil ko hum
aNgaar ko'ii jaise haath par dharaa huaa
-maikash
4th sher
uski kushi ke liye humney luta the apni har kushi,
phir bhi kush hu ki waffa ka farz to adda hua.......
-sunita virender
5th sher
ajj bhe urra phirta hoon waqt ki aandhiyon main,
jaise patta koi kisi shaakh se toota hua.......
-Rajveer
6th Sher
jis ne kiya hai jaisa bharega voh waisa hee,
dekha hai dost hamne voh sar ek jhukaa huaa..
-Mayank
7th share
jiski mahfil main jana na tha kabhi gavara humko,
wahi shakas ab janey kaise dosto, mera kudha hua
-sunita virender
barso baad ek shakas dekha apne mahboob sa,
ab phir satane lagga uska har nakash mita hua
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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15th September 2006, 02:20 PM
1st sher
begana thaa tau koyi shikayat na thee hamein
Aafat tau yeh huyi ki wo mil kar juda hua....
-daagh
2nd sher
mujhe sadiyon mere haal pe rulata raha kambakth,
ek lamha teri judai ka meri dehleez pe thaira hua......
-Rajveer"
3rd she'r :-
phirte haiN is qadar liye seene meiN dil ko hum
aNgaar ko'ii jaise haath par dharaa huaa
-maikash
4th sher
uski kushi ke liye humney luta the apni har kushi,
phir bhi kush hu ki waffa ka farz to adda hua.......
-sunita virender
5th sher
ajj bhe urra phirta hoon waqt ki aandhiyon main,
jaise patta koi kisi shaakh se toota hua.......
-Rajveer
6th Sher
jis ne kiya hai jaisa bharega voh waisa hee,
dekha hai dost hamne voh sar ek jhukaa huaa..
-Mayank
7th share
jiski mahfil main jana na tha kabhi gavara humko,
wahi shakas ab janey kaise dosto, mera kudha hua
-sunita virender
dosto galti se do share post ho gaye thy, maaf kijiyega.
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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15th September 2006, 06:09 PM
Na jaanae kis wajah sae wo mujh sae khafa hua
Ab door mujh sae daekho koi bae wajah hua
Ulfat ka hai nasha,jo kae aankhoan pae cha giya
Palkoan ker ab hisaar main her mae-kada hua
Ho ker juda jo mil jaatae kuch aur baat thi
aafat to ae hoi hai kae wo mil ker juda hua
Wo ghum jisae samajhtae thae dushman hai jaan ki
Ab wo hi sub ko choar kae mujh per fida hua
Choada tha hum nae saara jahan jis kae waastae
Dil maera us nae toada,wahi bae-wafa hua
Seenae main jis nae RAZ kae her RAZ ko rakha
Maeri nazar main aaj wahi maera khuda hua
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15th September 2006, 07:06 PM
Lijiye meri jaanib se ek hakeer see koshish...
Zaa.iqaa talkh nahii.n, tau dil ka matam kya hua
Kaash hota iss Mai me.n bhi zahar ghula hua
Yeh ranj-o-gham tere, ye jaur-o-sitam JaanaaN
Ehsaan tera maanoon jo bhi tujhse ataa hua
Chala jaata, na paas aata, na manaata mujhko
Aafat tau yeh huyi ki wo milkar juda hua
Pehle se marasim nahii.n tau koyi baat nahii.n
Baat yeh hai ki tu aaj bhi iss dil me.n basa hua
Lab-e-Paras pe aa gaya thaa yuuNhi naam tera
Taashna labi ko kya khabar, tuu naa-aashna hua
Baaki dosto ki peshkash ka intezaar hai...
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
--Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan
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19th September 2006, 10:37 AM
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es taraf se gujrey hai kafiley baharo ke,
ajj tak sulgtey hai jakham rah-gujaro ke..
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19th September 2006, 01:13 PM
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es taraf se gujrey hai kafiley baharo ke,
ajj tak sulgtey hai jakham rah-gujaro ke..
2nd share
yu bayaa kiya usne dar-e-dil mere samne,
nayan ashakbaar ho gaye mere aasharo ke.........
'veeer'
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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Re: hi -
19th September 2006, 01:24 PM
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es taraf se gujrey hai kafiley baharo ke,
ajj tak sulgtey hai jakham rah-gujaro ke..
2nd share
yu bayaa kiya usne dar-e-dil mere samne,
nayan ashakbaar ho gaye mere aasharo ke.........
'veeer'
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3rd sher
isharo hi isharo me baat unse hoti thi magar
ab koi jawab dete nahi wo mere un isharo ke...
dilip
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19th September 2006, 02:10 PM
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3rd sher
isharo hi isharo me baat unse hoti thi magar
ab koi jawab dete nahi wo mere un isharo ke...
dilip
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har sahara mujse mera chuda gaya hai woh,
dosto hum marey huey hai apne hi saharo ke...
-sunita virender
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21st September 2006, 12:44 PM
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har sahara mujse mera chuda gaya hai woh,
dosto hum marey huey hai apne hi saharo ke...
-sunita virender
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pls continue it.........!
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21st September 2006, 01:28 PM
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har sahara mujse mera chuda gaya hai woh,
dosto hum marey huey hai apne hi saharo ke...
-sunita virender
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5th sher
dunia ke diye jakhamo ki parwah kya kare.n
hum to ghayal hain apno ke chalaye teero ke........
dilip
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21st September 2006, 02:36 PM
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5th sher
dunia ke diye jakhamo ki parwah kya kare.n
hum to ghayal hain apno ke chalaye teero ke........
dilip
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hum to diwangi ka dum kabhi bhartey na thy,
ab jane kyu hum diwane ho gaye uske isharo ke....
-sunita virender
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21st September 2006, 03:16 PM
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hum to diwangi ka dum kabhi bhartey na thy,
ab jane kyu hum diwane ho gaye uske isharo ke....
-sunita virender
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7th sher
har ek nazar jara si thirchi karke jo usne dali,
ek pal main deewane ho gaye unki nazaro.n ke
dilip
" Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab
Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai
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