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Love Bas Tu Yeh Aakhri Fariyaad Kar Le - 4th October 2009, 08:28 AM
Mehafil ko salam,

Ik choti si koshish pesh kar rahi hun iss ummid ke saath ki pasand aaye.
Galatiyon (spelling, grammar, etc) ko maaf kijeyega.

Shukriya

Ghamon se hi tute dil ko shaad kar le
Mumkin ho toh khud ko barbaad kar le

Kahete hai guzre zamaane aate nahi
Chal beete lamhon ko phir yaad kar le

Yaad kar ke toh sirf dard hoga haasil
Har dard se ab khud ko azaad kar le

Jeete ji toh naa hui kabhi kadar teri
Yaad tujhe woh shayad tere baad kar le

Aur bhi hai bandde khuda ke darbaar mein
Bas 'pari' tu yeh aakhri fariyaad kar le

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4th October 2009, 10:34 AM
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Ghamon se hi tute dil ko shaad kar le
Mumkin ho toh khud ko barbaad kar le

Kahete hai guzre zamaane aate nahi
Chal beete lamhon ko phir yaad kar le

Yaad kar ke toh sirf dard hoga haasil
Har dard se ab khud ko azaad kar le

Jeete ji toh naa hui kabhi kadar teri
Yaad tujhe woh shayad tere baad kar le

Aur bhi hai bandde khuda ke darbaar mein
Bas 'pari' tu yeh aakhri fariyaad kar le
Praneeta ji....waha...kiya khub likha hai.....matle se maqte tak....sabhi sher zindgi ke bahut kareeb rahe....bahut acha likha hai aapne.....aise hi likhte rahiye....khush rahiye....

chhoti ...magar .... superB creation....
dil se daad....
kabul kare....

aur aap apna khayal rakhiyega...
duaaon ke saath....




YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...

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4th October 2009, 03:19 PM
Yaad kar ke toh sirf dard hoga haasil
Har dard se ab khud ko azaad kar le

Jeete ji toh naa hui kabhi kadar teri
Yaad tujhe woh shayad tere baad kar le

Pari Ji,

Adaab!

Kia kehnay janab, boht hi zaberdast kawish rahi aap ki

Aisay hi likhtay rahiye,

GOD BLESS YOU,

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Praneeta ji....waha...kiya khub likha hai.....matle se maqte tak....sabhi sher zindgi ke bahut kareeb rahe....bahut acha likha hai aapne.....aise hi likhte rahiye....khush rahiye....

chhoti ...magar .... superB creation....
dil se daad....
kabul kare....

aur aap apna khayal rakhiyega...
duaaon ke saath....

shukriya Naresh ji

aap ke comments ki mujhe har waqt intezaar raheti hai
bahot encouragement milti hai mujhe aap se...aur iski ummid mujhe aap se aage bhi rahegi.........shurkiya dil se

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5th October 2009, 02:02 PM
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Ghamon se hi tute dil ko shaad kar le
Mumkin ho toh khud ko barbaad kar le

Kahete hai guzre zamaane aate nahi
Chal beete lamhon ko phir yaad kar le

Yaad kar ke toh sirf dard hoga haasil
Har dard se ab khud ko azaad kar le

Jeete ji toh naa hui kabhi kadar teri
Yaad tujhe woh shayad tere baad kar le

Aur bhi hai bandde khuda ke darbaar mein
Bas 'pari' tu yeh aakhri fariyaad kar le
Pari ji aadaab,

kaise haiN aap? umeed hai khairiyat se hi honge.. aapki ghazal par meri do-kaudi ki nazar padi...achi koshish hai..

mujhe pehla sher kuch samajh nahin aaya..ho sake to aap uspar roshni daaliyega...

yeh sher acha laga:

Kahete hai guzre zamaane aate nahi
Chal beete lamhon ko phir yaad kar le

kuch bhi galat keh gaya hun to maaf kar dijiyega..khush rahiye..god bless u.. aage aur bhi acha likheN yahi Khuda se dua karta hoon...

aapka dost,
Pradhyuman

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gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai?
musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai?
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5th October 2009, 03:28 PM
pari sweety,
yun to tumhari har ghazal dard mein hi bayaan hoti hai
magar is ghazal mein ek khas baat hai ........
har aashar mein ek ek tips jo diye ho
isse mein jarur yaad rakhungi

yeh sher dil ki kareeb laga


Yaad kar ke toh sirf dard hoga haasil
Har dard se ab khud ko azaad kar le


apna khayal rakhna
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5th October 2009, 10:47 PM
Dearest Angel (Pari),

Kaise ho? Aaj bahut dino baad aapki ghazal padh kar aacha laga ....Like always dard ko naye naye andaaz se pesh kartii hain .. aur ghazal behaat pasand aayii ...

LIkhtey raye..

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Yaad kar ke toh sirf dard hoga haasil
Har dard se ab khud ko azaad kar le

Jeete ji toh naa hui kabhi kadar teri
Yaad tujhe woh shayad tere baad kar le

Pari Ji,

Adaab!

Kia kehnay janab, boht hi zaberdast kawish rahi aap ki

Aisay hi likhtay rahiye,

GOD BLESS YOU,
Adaab huzur

ab kya kahu main? shukriya aap ki comments ke liye
achcha lagta hai aapki replies padh kar
shukriya dil se

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6th October 2009, 01:27 PM
Hi Dost

Kaisi ho tum??

Is ghazal ka matla aur maqta dono opposite meaning ke hai… ek taraf tum barbaad hone ki baat kar rahi ho dusri taraf apne aap ko housla de rahi ho….. Ummid karti hoon meri baat ka bura nahi manogi. Agar bura laga to please mauf kar dena apni dost ko…………

Baki ke 3 sher mashallah - bahot acche hai……………………………..Daad dil se
Khush raho

Tumhari dost

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Mehafil ko salam,

Ik choti si koshish pesh kar rahi hun iss ummid ke saath ki pasand aaye.
Galatiyon (spelling, grammar, etc) ko maaf kijeyega.

Shukriya

Ghamon se hi tute dil ko shaad kar le
Mumkin ho toh khud ko barbaad kar le

Kahete hai guzre zamaane aate nahi
Chal beete lamhon ko phir yaad kar le

Yaad kar ke toh sirf dard hoga haasil
Har dard se ab khud ko azaad kar le

Jeete ji toh naa hui kabhi kadar teri
Yaad tujhe woh shayad tere baad kar le

Aur bhi hai bandde khuda ke darbaar mein
Bas 'pari' tu yeh aakhri fariyaad kar le



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Pari ji aadaab,

kaise haiN aap? umeed hai khairiyat se hi honge.. aapki ghazal par meri do-kaudi ki nazar padi...achi koshish hai..

mujhe pehla sher kuch samajh nahin aaya..ho sake to aap uspar roshni daaliyega...

yeh sher acha laga:

Kahete hai guzre zamaane aate nahi
Chal beete lamhon ko phir yaad kar le

kuch bhi galat keh gaya hun to maaf kar dijiyega..khush rahiye..god bless u.. aage aur bhi acha likheN yahi Khuda se dua karta hoon...

aapka dost,
Pradhyuman
Pradhyuman ji adaab

maafi chahungi der se reply karne ke liye
well pahela sher

Ghamon se hi tute dil ko shaad kar le
ghamon se bhala koi dil ko shaad kar sakte hai? par insaan ko sirf gham hi hasil ho toh us mein hi khushi dhundni padti hai...ye mera khayaal ya fir experience kahiyen
Mumkin ho toh khud ko barbaad kar le
aur agar ghamon se dil ko shaad nahi kar sakte toh chal khud ko barbaad kar le...is paar ya uss paar

yahi matlab maine nikala hai...baaki aap ke hawale hai yeh ghazal

padhne ke liye shukriya aur aap beshak mujhe kuch bhi reply kar sakte hai after all its for my betterment
thnx dost

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Mehafil ko salam,

Ik choti si koshish pesh kar rahi hun iss ummid ke saath ki pasand aaye.
Galatiyon (spelling, grammar, etc) ko maaf kijeyega.

Shukriya

Ghamon se hi tute dil ko shaad kar le
Mumkin ho toh khud ko barbaad kar le

Kahete hai guzre zamaane aate nahi
Chal beete lamhon ko phir yaad kar le

Yaad kar ke toh sirf dard hoga haasil
Har dard se ab khud ko azaad kar le

Jeete ji toh naa hui kabhi kadar teri
Yaad tujhe woh shayad tere baad kar le

Aur bhi hai bandde khuda ke darbaar mein
Bas 'pari' tu yeh aakhri fariyaad kar le
praneeta jee
radhe radhe

bahut khoob.....bade hi khoob ehsaason se ru baru karaya aapne
daad dil se
duaon ke saath

Aapka Apna
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Good work Praneeta jee aapne galtiyaa.N maaf karne ki guzarish ki hai isiliye aapki galtiyaa.N aapko bata nahi sakte..........qke aap kahe aur hum aapko maaf na kare aisa ho sakta hai bhala.

Jhoot kehdu yeh meri fitrat me nahi shamil

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