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7th July 2009, 02:48 PM
Iss tarah meri wafa ka haq woh ada kar raha hai
Mera humnawa hi meri marne ki dua kar raha hai
Sar-basar mit gaye hum jab chhod diya usne saath
Apni yaadon se bhi mujhe woh juda kar raha hai
Zarurat nahi use kisi khanjar ya teer-e-kamaan ki
Muskura kar mera dili sukun woh tabah kar raha hai
Kaise samjhaye hum aisi alam mein dil-e-nadaan ko
Use aaj bhi chahne ki kambakat gunaah kar raha hai
Socha jab bhul gaye woh hume toh gile shikwe kaisi
Khata iss dil ki hai jo pyaar use bepanah kar raha hai
_______________________________________________ PRANEETA
Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
Ananthpak
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7th July 2009, 03:13 PM
Nice work Praneeta Jee..............
Jhoot kehdu yeh meri fitrat me nahi shamil
Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta...
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8th July 2009, 06:28 AM
Iss tarah meri wafa ka haq woh ada kar raha hai
Mera humnawa hi meri marne ki dua kar raha hai
Pari ............ outstanding ...................
jaise kuch foot gaya ho.... yun hi nikla gayee ho baat... baat nikli magar seedha dil se ho......
Sar-basar mit gaye hum jab chhod diya usne saath
Apni yaadon se bhi mujhe woh juda kar raha hai
again awesome ..... !!
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8th July 2009, 12:17 PM
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Originally Posted by Praneeta
Iss tarah meri wafa ka haq woh ada kar raha hai
Mera humnawa hi meri marne ki dua kar raha hai
Sar-basar mit gaye hum jab chhod diya usne saath
Apni yaadon se bhi mujhe woh juda kar raha hai
Zarurat nahi use kisi khanjar ya teer-e-kamaan ki
Muskura kar mera dili sukun woh tabah kar raha hai
Kaise samjhaye hum aisi alam mein dil-e-nadaan ko
Use aaj bhi chahne ki kambakat gunaah kar raha hai
Socha jab bhul gaye woh hume toh gile shikwe kaisi
Khata iss dil ki hai jo pyaar use bepanah kar raha hai
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Praneeta......2 gud..sabhi sher achhe lage khaas kar
Socha jab bhul gaye woh hume toh gile shikwe kaisi
Khata iss dil ki hai jo pyaar use bepanah kar raha hai
if possible get the poem checked for correct hindi words like aisi,kaisi...........nice work..keep writing
Thanks & Regards
Aapka
Tanha _dil
Duniya mein dard-e-dil ki dawa hoti to pee gaye hote
Zindagi itni aasaan hoti .....to jee gaye hote.
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9th July 2009, 03:54 PM
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Originally Posted by sajid_ghayel
Nice work Praneeta Jee..............
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shukriya dost............................
Regards
_______________________________________________ PRANEETA
Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
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9th July 2009, 04:46 PM
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Originally Posted by Praneeta
Iss tarah meri wafa ka haq woh ada kar raha hai
Mera humnawa hi meri marne ki dua kar raha hai
Sar-basar mit gaye hum jab chhod diya usne saath
Apni yaadon se bhi mujhe woh juda kar raha hai
Zarurat nahi use kisi khanjar ya teer-e-kamaan ki
Muskura kar mera dili sukun woh tabah kar raha hai
Kaise samjhaye hum aisi alam mein dil-e-nadaan ko
Use aaj bhi chahne ki kambakat gunaah kar raha hai
Socha jab bhul gaye woh hume toh gile shikwe kaisi
Khata iss dil ki hai jo pyaar use bepanah kar raha hai
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Kaise samjhaye hum aisi alam mein dil-e-nadaan ko
Use aaj bhi chahne ki kambakat gunaah kar raha hai
mujhe ye words bahut pasand aaye , ye pyar bhi ajeeb chiz hai koi kitna bhi door chala jaye ye dil use ko pyar karna nahi chhodta..............
keep it up................
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Keep it up -
10th July 2009, 08:56 PM
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Originally Posted by Praneeta
Iss tarah meri wafa ka haq woh ada kar raha hai
Mera humnawa hi meri marne ki dua kar raha hai
Sar-basar mit gaye hum jab chhod diya usne saath
Apni yaadon se bhi mujhe woh juda kar raha hai
Zarurat nahi use kisi khanjar ya teer-e-kamaan ki
Muskura kar mera dili sukun woh tabah kar raha hai
Kaise samjhaye hum aisi alam mein dil-e-nadaan ko
Use aaj bhi chahne ki kambakat gunaah kar raha hai
Socha jab bhul gaye woh hume toh gile shikwe kaisi
Khata iss dil ki hai jo pyaar use bepanah kar raha hai
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Dear Pari
etna dard hairaani ho rahi hai, ki pari ka dil dard se bhara hua hai....socha na tha aisa.
khair shayri ki baat karuN to bahut khoob likha hai, sacchi kehti hoon mujhe sabhi sher bahut acche lage....kisi ek sher ki tareef nahi kar sakti.
good work
keep it up
tumahri diii
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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11th July 2009, 10:08 AM
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Originally Posted by Praneeta
Iss tarah meri wafa ka haq woh ada kar raha hai
Mera humnawa hi meri marne ki dua kar raha hai
Sar-basar mit gaye hum jab chhod diya usne saath
Apni yaadon se bhi mujhe woh juda kar raha hai
Zarurat nahi use kisi khanjar ya teer-e-kamaan ki
Muskura kar mera dili sukun woh tabah kar raha hai
Kaise samjhaye hum aisi alam mein dil-e-nadaan ko
Use aaj bhi chahne ki kambakat gunaah kar raha hai
Socha jab bhul gaye woh hume toh gile shikwe kaisi
Khata iss dil ki hai jo pyaar use bepanah kar raha hai
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Parneeta ji.......itna dard.........meri aankho ne muddato baad mehsus kiya hai.......aapki nazm se....sabhi sher umda hai...kisi ek sher ki taarif kar ke .....aur shero ke saath be-insaafi hogi..........very nice creation.......vaise bhi aap bahut acha likhti hai........
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
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12th July 2009, 04:13 PM
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Originally Posted by janumanu
Iss tarah meri wafa ka haq woh ada kar raha hai
Mera humnawa hi meri marne ki dua kar raha hai
Pari ............ outstanding ...................
jaise kuch foot gaya ho.... yun hi nikla gayee ho baat... baat nikli magar seedha dil se ho......
Sar-basar mit gaye hum jab chhod diya usne saath
Apni yaadon se bhi mujhe woh juda kar raha hai
again awesome ..... !!
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shukriya.......yeh aap ki sabse badi compliment hai mere liye...thnx 1s again
Regards
_______________________________________________ PRANEETA
Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
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12th July 2009, 04:23 PM
Zarurat nahi use kisi khanjar ya teer-e-kamaan ki
Muskura kar mera dili sukun woh tabah kar raha hai
nice one praneeta...........ye sher bohat accha hai....yuhi likhti raho...
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
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13th July 2009, 03:30 PM
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Praneeta......2 gud..sabhi sher achhe lage khaas kar
Socha jab bhul gaye woh hume toh gile shikwe kaisi
Khata iss dil ki hai jo pyaar use bepanah kar raha hai
if possible get the poem checked for correct hindi words like aisi,kaisi...........nice work..keep writing
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shukriya dost......
i got spell check done by zainy...........thnx 2 her
below is the corrected version
Iss tarah meri wafa ka haq woh adaa kar raha hai
Mera humnawa hi mere marne ki dua kar raha hai
Sar-basar mit gaye hum jab chhod diya usne saath
Apni yaadon se bhi mujhe woh judaa kar raha hai
Zarurat nahi usay kisi khanjar ya teer-e-kamaan ki
Muskura kar mera dili sukun woh tabah kar raha hai
Kaise samjhaye hum ayse alam mein dil-e-nadaan ko
Usay aaj bhi chahne ka kambaqt gunaah kar raha hai
Socha jab bhul gaye woh hume, toh gilay shikwe kaise
Khata iss dil ki hai jo pyaar usay bepanah kar raha hai
Regards
_______________________________________________ PRANEETA
Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
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13th July 2009, 05:15 PM
Parii Dear.......
Really outsanding.... feelings expressed by you.......
I think some sher I ll never forget in my whole life.......
Directly touched to my heart........
Well keep it up.. and hurt all of heart's....
Keep smiling........
God Bless you......
Sirf Teri bad-dua.oN ka asar lagata hai
Nakamiyan mere gunahoN ka ajer lagata hai
Kat nahi paunga ek kadam ka rasta bhi
Behad mushkeel zindagi ka safar lagata hai
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14th July 2009, 02:08 PM
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Kaise samjhaye hum aisi alam mein dil-e-nadaan ko
Use aaj bhi chahne ki kambakat gunaah kar raha hai
mujhe ye words bahut pasand aaye , ye pyar bhi ajeeb chiz hai koi kitna bhi door chala jaye ye dil use ko pyar karna nahi chhodta..............
keep it up................
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shukriya padhne ke liye..........sach farmaya aap ne. yaad aane wale yaad aate hi rahte hai fir chahe koi kuch kar le....hmm
take care
Regards
_______________________________________________ PRANEETA
Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
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18th July 2009, 07:23 AM
Dear Parii..
kaise hain aap?
Ghazal is awesome ...
har ek lafz dil ko chuu gaya hain ...likhti raho
take care
tumharii
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18th July 2009, 09:23 AM
Iss tarah meri wafa ka haq woh ada kar raha hai
Mera humnawa hi meri marne ki dua kar raha hai
Sar-basar mit gaye hum jab chhod diya usne saath
Apni yaadon se bhi mujhe woh juda kar raha hai
Zarurat nahi use kisi khanjar ya teer-e-kamaan ki
Muskura kar mera dili sukun woh tabah kar raha hai
Kaise samjhaye hum aisi alam mein dil-e-nadaan ko
Use aaj bhi chahne ki kambakat gunaah kar raha hai
Socha jab bhul gaye woh hume toh gile shikwe kaisi
Khata iss dil ki hai jo pyaar use bepanah kar raha hai..
bahut hi dil ko choo jane wali poem hai PRANEETA JI
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18th July 2009, 11:21 AM
Praneeta ji,
ishq me jab choth lagti hai, toh dard ki inteha ho jaati hai........., apki gazal ka pehla sher hi mere dil ko choo gaya, aaj toh is gazal ka matlab bhi ba-khoobhi samajh aa raha hai, padke aisa laga jaise koi mere dil ka haal bayan kar raha hai.............
aaj sirf daad se kaam nahi chalega, daad ke saath saath dil se ek dua hai apke liye, ki ap hamesha khush rahein..........
Rep ++ for u.....
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Praneeta
Iss tarah meri wafa ka haq woh ada kar raha hai
Mera humnawa hi meri marne ki dua kar raha hai
Sar-basar mit gaye hum jab chhod diya usne saath
Apni yaadon se bhi mujhe woh juda kar raha hai
Zarurat nahi use kisi khanjar ya teer-e-kamaan ki
Muskura kar mera dili sukun woh tabah kar raha hai
Kaise samjhaye hum aisi alam mein dil-e-nadaan ko
Use aaj bhi chahne ki kambakat gunaah kar raha hai
Socha jab bhul gaye woh hume toh gile shikwe kaisi
Khata iss dil ki hai jo pyaar use bepanah kar raha hai
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Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe
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21st July 2009, 02:00 PM
hello diiiiiiiiii
shukriya aap ko yaha aane ke liye...khushi hui aap ko dekh kar
dard ke baare mein kya kahu......yeh woh hai jo nazar aate hai
ab bhi kai dard hai jo chipe huwe hai
waqt ke saath shayad saamne aa jaye
uffff.................main yeh kya le kar baith gayi
thnx diiiiiiiiii for your encouragememt
Love n Regards
_______________________________________________ PRANEETA
Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
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21st July 2009, 02:06 PM
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Parneeta ji.......itna dard.........meri aankho ne muddato baad mehsus kiya hai.......aapki nazm se....sabhi sher umda hai...kisi ek sher ki taarif kar ke .....aur shero ke saath be-insaafi hogi..........very nice creation.......vaise bhi aap bahut acha likhti hai........
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tah dil se aap ka shukriya dost...............u have always encouraged me. i really liked your last few words and i hope to keep up to them
thanks a lot
Regards
_______________________________________________ PRANEETA
Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
Ananthpak
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21st July 2009, 02:09 PM
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Originally Posted by zainy
Zarurat nahi use kisi khanjar ya teer-e-kamaan ki
Muskura kar mera dili sukun woh tabah kar raha hai
nice one praneeta...........ye sher bohat accha hai....yuhi likhti raho...
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thanks zainy..................thanks 4 being there 4 me
u have been very kind n nice 2 me
looking forward for your continued support n guidance
Love n Regards
_______________________________________________ PRANEETA
Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
Ananthpak
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21st July 2009, 02:18 PM
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Originally Posted by kwahish
Parii Dear.......
Really outsanding.... feelings expressed by you.......
I think some sher I ll never forget in my whole life.......
Directly touched to my heart........
Well keep it up.. and hurt all of heart's....
Keep smiling........
God Bless you......
Sirf Teri bad-dua.oN ka asar lagata hai
Nakamiyan mere gunahoN ka ajer lagata hai
Kat nahi paunga ek kadam ka rasta bhi
Behad mushkeel zindagi ka safar lagata hai
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shukriya............par main iska matlab nahi samjh payi........"hurt all of hearts"
shayad aap jo kahena chahte hai woh main samajh nahi paayi
khair jo bhi ho shukriya
izzhaar-e-mohobbat mein yu nakaam hue hai
apno ki hi mehafil main hum badnaam hue hai
wafaa ka chiraag jo kabhi jalaya tha dil mein
sar mere wahi aag lagane ka ilzaam hue hai
Regards
_______________________________________________ PRANEETA
Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
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21st July 2009, 02:58 PM
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Iss tarah meri wafa ka haq woh ada kar raha hai
Mera humnawa hi meri marne ki dua kar raha hai
Sar-basar mit gaye hum jab chhod diya usne saath
Apni yaadon se bhi mujhe woh juda kar raha hai
Zarurat nahi use kisi khanjar ya teer-e-kamaan ki
Muskura kar mera dili sukun woh tabah kar raha hai
Kaise samjhaye hum aisi alam mein dil-e-nadaan ko
Use aaj bhi chahne ki kambakat gunaah kar raha hai
Socha jab bhul gaye woh hume toh gile shikwe kaisi
Khata iss dil ki hai jo pyaar use bepanah kar raha hai
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Hi Praneeta,
Aapne ehsaasaat bahut khoobi se bayaan kiye hain... accha laga aapko padhkar... Mujhe lagta hai aap thhoda sa dhyaan roman par den to aur bhi zyada khoobsurat likh paayengi...
Dil se daad kubool kijiye... likhti rahiye...
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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21st July 2009, 03:07 PM
pari sweety,
bahot achhi ghazal hai.........har sher dilko chhu gaya......ehesaas jo bayaan kiya hai tumne usko wah wah kahna gunah hoga ..........kisine sach kaha hai ......dil ka halat mahfil mein bayaan karo to .......wah wah hi milta hai .........
ghazal ko dard ke rang mein jo tumne piroya hai vo achha laga
khus raho
with love
Diya
Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz.
Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai
Goodbye SDC
Diya
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26th July 2009, 01:00 PM
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Originally Posted by mann_chand
Dear Parii..
kaise hain aap?
Ghazal is awesome ...
har ek lafz dil ko chuu gaya hain ...likhti raho
take care
tumharii
mandeep
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hello Mandeep ji
kaise hain aap?
main toh thik hi hun
shukriya padhne ke liye
saath banaye rakhiye
aur apna khayal rakhiye
Love n Regards
_______________________________________________ PRANEETA
Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
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26th July 2009, 01:56 PM
Praneeta ji..
aap k yeh sher diL pe kafi gehra aasar chhodte hain..
bahut badiya likhaa hai aapne...Daad Qabool kijiyega..
muskurahto aur duao k sath..
--> OMi
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Originally Posted by Praneeta
Iss tarah meri wafa ka haq woh ada kar raha hai
Mera humnawa hi meri marne ki dua kar raha hai
Kaise samjhaye hum aaise alam mein dil-e-nadaan ko
Use aaj bhi chahne ka kambakat gunaah kar raha hai
Socha jab bhul gaye woh hume toh gile shikwe kaise
Khata iss dil ki hai jo pyaar use bepanah kar raha hai
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Ek InteZaar si ban gayi hai Zindagi,
Har pal tere aane ki Aash mein.......
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28th July 2009, 12:46 PM
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bahut hi dil ko choo jane wali poem hai PRANEETA JI
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shukriya sahab............dil se
Regards
_______________________________________________ PRANEETA
Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
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29th July 2009, 12:46 PM
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Praneeta ji,
ishq me jab choth lagti hai, toh dard ki inteha ho jaati hai........., apki gazal ka pehla sher hi mere dil ko choo gaya, aaj toh is gazal ka matlab bhi ba-khoobhi samajh aa raha hai, padke aisa laga jaise koi mere dil ka haal bayan kar raha hai.............
aaj sirf daad se kaam nahi chalega, daad ke saath saath dil se ek dua hai apke liye, ki ap hamesha khush rahein..........
Rep ++ for u.....
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shukriya dost ghazal padhne ke liye aur samajhne ke liye
thanks for the reps too
keep in touch
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30th July 2009, 12:25 AM
Hiiiiiiiiii
Praneeta,,,
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Bahot Achha Laga Padh Ke Tumhari Shayri sach me.....
ye tumhare liye....
Dur Hain Aap Se Kabhi Shikwa Nahi Karenge,
Tum Khush Raho Hum Bas Yahi Duaa Karenge,
Vaada Kiya Tha Jisne Kabhi Saatn Nibhane Ka,
Bas Unke Aane Ka Hum Yuhi Ab Intzaar Karenge.
Haatho Ki In Lakeero Pe Kabhi Aitbaar Karlena Tum,
Khushiya De Jo Humse Jyada Usase Pyar Karlena Tum,
Mil Ke Bichhadna To Naseebo Ka Khel Hain Shona,
Par Kabhi Dil Pukare To Hume Yaad Karlena Tum.
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4th August 2009, 12:39 PM
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Hi Praneeta,
Aapne ehsaasaat bahut khoobi se bayaan kiye hain... accha laga aapko padhkar... Mujhe lagta hai aap thhoda sa dhyaan roman par den to aur bhi zyada khoobsurat likh paayengi...
Dil se daad kubool kijiye... likhti rahiye...
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shukriya Pulkit ji
sahi farmaya aap ne meri roman kachchi hai par aap dost hai mujhe correct karne ke liye...in fact zainy ne corrections ki bhi hai
shukriya aap ke response ke liye
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4th August 2009, 12:42 PM
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pari sweety,
bahot achhi ghazal hai.........har sher dilko chhu gaya......ehesaas jo bayaan kiya hai tumne usko wah wah kahna gunah hoga ..........kisine sach kaha hai ......dil ka halat mahfil mein bayaan karo to .......wah wah hi milta hai .........
ghazal ko dard ke rang mein jo tumne piroya hai vo achha laga
khus raho
with love
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hello diya doll
kaisi ho? tum kitni achchi tarah mere feelings ko samajh jati ho
shukriya dost
love n regards
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4th August 2009, 12:42 PM
very good praneeta ji bahut accha likha hai .....
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4th August 2009, 12:45 PM
shukriya Omi......................
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4th August 2009, 12:46 PM
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Hiiiiiiiiii
Praneeta,,,
z
Bahot Achha Laga Padh Ke Tumhari Shayri sach me.....
ye tumhare liye....
Dur Hain Aap Se Kabhi Shikwa Nahi Karenge,
Tum Khush Raho Hum Bas Yahi Duaa Karenge,
Vaada Kiya Tha Jisne Kabhi Saatn Nibhane Ka,
Bas Unke Aane Ka Hum Yuhi Ab Intzaar Karenge.
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hi
thnx a lot for ur compliments
thnx 4 the beautiful lines
Regards
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4th August 2009, 12:48 PM
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very good praneeta ji bahut accha likha hai .....
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shukriya Deep ji...................
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9th August 2009, 04:09 PM
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Iss tarah meri wafa ka haq woh ada kar raha hai
Mera humnawa hi meri marne ki dua kar raha hai
Sar-basar mit gaye hum jab chhod diya usne saath
Apni yaadon se bhi mujhe woh juda kar raha hai
Zarurat nahi use kisi khanjar ya teer-e-kamaan ki
Muskura kar mera dili sukun woh tabah kar raha hai
Kaise samjhaye hum aisi alam mein dil-e-nadaan ko
Use aaj bhi chahne ki kambakat gunaah kar raha hai
Socha jab bhul gaye woh hume toh gile shikwe kaisi
Khata iss dil ki hai jo pyaar use bepanah kar raha hai
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bahut khoob pari..
bahut hi sundar peshkash hai ye aapki..
saare hi sher dil ke kareeb rahe..
really its outstanding from ur side..
bahut hi acha flow hai isme..
hatts off to u this time.
take care
with love and regards
ur frnd
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12th August 2009, 01:19 PM
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bahut khoob pari..
bahut hi sundar peshkash hai ye aapki..
saare hi sher dil ke kareeb rahe..
really its outstanding from ur side..
bahut hi acha flow hai isme..
hatts off to u this time.
take care
with love and regards
ur frnd
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hello vicky
shukriya dost aap ki response ke liye
yuhi saath nibhate rahiyen
muskurate rahiyen
mehafil mein aate rahiyen
Love n Regards
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12th August 2009, 03:29 PM
Praneeta ji,
Ham yahan naye aaye hain. Aapki shayri padhkar bahut achcha laga...kafi touchy sher the...
Umeed hai aap hameshi aise hi mehfil ko roshan karti rahe...
Tahe dil se aapke fan ki ham daad dete hain...Aur yeh duya karte hain ki bhagwaan aapko hamesha khush rakhe...
Apka naya dost
Amit
Mohabbat ki raahon mein chalna sambhal ke
Yahan jo bhi aaya...gaya haath mal ke..!
Log kehte hain Sher kehta hun .
Apne Zhakhmon se khelta hoon main!!!
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16th August 2009, 03:08 PM
Namaste Amit ji
shukirya aap ke comment ke liye..........hum apki dil se shukrguzar hai ki aap ko humari peshkash achchi lagi aur hum aap ki nayi dost hone ki haisiyat se aap ka SDC par swagat karte hai.....aap ki kuch poems humne padhi hai aur aapni views bhi diya hai aur aage bhi dete rahungi
apna khayal rakhiyen aur mahefil mein aate rahiyen
Regards
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9th November 2010, 03:44 AM
jane kyun aaj bhi yeh dil unse wafa kar raha hai
jab ki wo har kadam par mujhe tabah kar raha hai
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9th November 2010, 11:39 AM
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Iss tarah meri wafa ka haq woh ada kar raha hai
Mera humnawa hi meri marne ki dua kar raha hai
Sar-basar mit gaye hum jab chhod diya usne saath
Apni yaadon se bhi mujhe woh juda kar raha hai
Zarurat nahi use kisi khanjar ya teer-e-kamaan ki
Muskura kar mera dili sukun woh tabah kar raha hai
Kaise samjhaye hum aisi alam mein dil-e-nadaan ko
Use aaj bhi chahne ki kambakat gunaah kar raha hai
Socha jab bhul gaye woh hume toh gile shikwe kaisi
Khata iss dil ki hai jo pyaar use bepanah kar raha hai
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radhe radhe
bahut khoob.................................
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