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Post ...Aapke aane se!! - 22nd July 2002, 02:56 AM

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Aapke aane ke baad,
kuch mehsoos kiya hai maine.
Jaise baadal chaakar,
paani barsaane lage hon sukhi dharti par.
Uss dharti par,
jise intezaar tha uss paani ka
jo upja sake meri tammana ko.
Uss tammana ko,
jo poora kar sake mere vishvaas ko.
Uss vishvaas ko,
jo kiya tha maine khud par kayi samay se.
Uss samay se,
jis pal se dekha tha meri nazron ne aapko.


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SORRY FRIENDS, I'M WEAK IN URDU
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Thumbs up Re: ...Aapke aane se!! - 22nd July 2002, 03:46 PM

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Aapke aane ke baad,
kuch mehsoos kiya hai maine.
Jaise baadal chaakar,
paani barsaane lage hon sukhi dharti par.
Uss dharti par,
jise intezaar tha uss paani ka
jo upja sake meri tammana ko.
Uss tammana ko,
jo poora kar sake mere vishvaas ko.
Uss vishvaas ko,
jo kiya tha maine khud par kayi samay se.
Uss samay se,
jis pal se dekha tha meri nazron ne aapko.


......Vipin
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SORRY FRIENDS, I'M WEAK IN URDU
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wlel keep it up man u r bad in urdu but keep it up i understood it good shaayri good 1,keep it up.


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Keep It up - 22nd July 2002, 11:04 PM

This is great yaar. You are not bad in Urdu. Actually, I have no understanding of Urdu, so I am not to judge. But keep it up.


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Not bad my dear friend, your hindi is better and that is enough.
   
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Post 30th July 2002, 05:38 PM

Thanx my dear bachelordotcom,
Thanx for yr advise....n' hausla afjahi



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31st July 2002, 01:59 AM

Wow....very very nice sher. I really like it.

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Post 2nd August 2002, 03:04 AM

Thanx Sonal26, thanx a lotttttt!!!!!!
Why don't u try to write? C'mon go ahead and write your imaginations.

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Bahut achche - 2nd August 2002, 11:31 PM

Bahut achcha shayri likhte hai Vipin Ji


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Post 3rd August 2002, 02:17 PM

Shukriya mere dost Kafila......

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hi vipin
how are you? vipin i asked you about your email address. so please do send it.
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Post 11th August 2002, 03:41 AM

Hello rini,
already sent u my email address.......pls go n' check yr private message.
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Thanks about that but i can't write good stuff.

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12th August 2002, 05:55 PM

Hi Vipin,

Urdu se jazbaat ka taluk nahi jo aapne bayan kee hai.
Laajwaab hai yeh rachna.

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Post 13th August 2002, 04:54 AM

Dhanyawaad Rami ji,

Khusi hui jaankar ki aapne meri rachna ko pehchaana.

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Post 13th August 2002, 05:03 AM

Arre mere dost Bachelor saab........salute mujhe nahin apne aap ko kariye.......Aap logon ki badaulat hi tow main yahan hoon.

"THANX TO ALL READERS, WRITERS, ADVISERS, VIEWERS AND SHAYRI.COM"..... THANX FOR THAT HONOUR BUT BELIEVE ME I'M NOT FIT FOR THAT COZ I'M A "MAMOOLI WRITER".

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Hello Sonal ji,

Ofcoz u can ........

" Kalam ka sahara lekar likh dalo saare jazbaaton ko"

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Post 16th August 2002, 02:54 AM

Sonal ji,

Thanx for that shayri u sent to me......it was really a nice one.....and i mean it.

Take care & keep writing

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aapki baaton mein shayad kuch aur hi chupa hai.
anyway,keep it up.
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Post 19th August 2002, 04:05 AM

shaheen , Aapne theek hi socha hai.....meri baaton mein aapko ek gareeb lekhak nazar aayega.

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cool, that one is very nice.

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aapki shayri lajawaab hai, hamesha aisa hi kuch likhna.
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Hello vipin

Shayad aapko yaad hoga maine kaha tha aapki yeh lines ek din top per hongi. and that is in front of us. so please never stop writtting...ok?
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Wowwwwwwwwwwwwww. FIVE START, good vipin, u desreve it,
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Thanx rahul,

Mayank,
Meri koshish yeh rahegi ki main kuch alag likh sakun.
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Rini,
Haan Rini mujhe aapki kahi baat abhi bhi yaad hai.....woh tow aap log meri kuch rachnayein perr lete ho varna main ek Mamooli sa writer hoon.
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Aapse hi kuch alag parne ke milta hai vipin, accha likhte ho aap

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lajawaab - 3rd September 2002, 01:57 AM

aapki shayri ki badai karte hue main apne apko aaj bahut hi garib mahsoos kar raha hoon.
ek garib jiske paas shabd nahi apki badai ke liye

kya likon aapki shayri ke baare mein apne to misaal hi kayam kar di hai
ek ke baad ek tohfa diya hai aapne hume
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Arre mere dost(dil ke tukre)...

Why u r making my fun? coz I'm not fit for that much of honour.
Main ek seeda- saada sa journalist hoon mere dost.

Agar aapne jhooti taarif bhi kari hai tow woh bhi mere liye Honour hai. Jise se hamesha sambhaal ke rakhunga.

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Vipin

Heyyyyyy, still in No.1 ????
Good, keep it up

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Bahut aacha - 11th September 2002, 10:26 AM

Hi!!! Vipin ji

Bahut hi khub likha hai. Good & keep it up.

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Shaheen aur Gam saab,

Aap logon ko meri lines pasand aayee, jo ki mere chaand chune ke barabar hai

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Dosotn, main aap sab ka shukrgujaar hoon jo aapne meri Rachna ko para.


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Smile Good Job - 26th September 2002, 02:17 PM

Helllo vipin

I'm reading your all shayri's/kavita's from last two hours. You are really a great. That's why people respond you. Mujhe mehsoos hua hai ki aap koi aashiq ya dewana nahin ho. Aap ek deshpremi ho. Aapki har ek kavita mein kuch chupa hua hai jise parne ke liye shayad humhe kuch aur aankhon ki jaroorat parti hai. Ek saaf dil ka insaan hi aapki kavita samaj sakta hai.
I'm a muslim girl but i don't believe in Hindi-Muslim nonsence. Because i'm pure Indian.

Aapki likhi baaton mein kuch alag hi baat hai. You are great Vipin, you are great and I mean it.

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Bahut bahut Dhanyavaad Shaheen,

Mujhe khusi hai ki aapne mujh gareeb lekhak ki sab kavitaon par apni nazar daali. Khusi hui ki aapko yeh pasand aayi.

Vaise mujhe apka address mil gaya hai, main jald hi apni kitaab bhejne ki koshish karoonga.

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Namaskaar Shaheen ji,

Maine aapke bataye address par apni kitaab post kar di hai.

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