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bohat yaad voh aaye......ek nayi Ghazal - 29th April 2006, 09:36 PM

dostoN ki shikayat thi ke maikash miyaaN aap kuch post nahiiN karte to ek taaza Ghazal mehfil ki nazar kar raha huuN, ummiid hai ke kam se kam paras aur pulkit saahab ko ab koi gilaa na rahega

mulaii'zaa farmaayeN :-


matla pesh-e-khidmat hai :-

1.
reh reh ke bohat yaad voh aaye tam'aam shab
mar mar ke maine lamhe bitaaye tam'aam shab

*tam'aam shab = saari raat


2.
kam ho saka na dard-e-juda'ii ka aNdhera
humne charaaGh-e-ashk jalaaye tam'aam shab


3.
aisii bhi ko'ii raat muqaddar meiN kaash ho
hum rooTh jaayeN ko'ii manaaye tam'aam shab


4.
hoti rahi barsaat aaNsuuyoN ki saari raat
baadal GhamoN ke dil pe the chhaye tam'aam shab


5.
raatoN ko jaagne ka mujhe shauq to nahiiN !!
kambakht dil ka zaKhm sataaye tam'aam shab


6.
zaalim hai teri tara'h, terii yaad bhi jaanaaN
ashkoN ka zehar mujhko pilaaye tam'aam shab


7.
voh khwaab ki duniya meN thi,baiThaa tha maiN yahaaN
palkoN ko raaste pe bichhaye tam'aam shab


8.
kaise maiN maan luuN ke buri hai sharaab, yeh
marham mere zaKhmoN pe lagaaye tam'aam shab


ab maqta haazir hai :-

9.
"maikash" likhi gayi nahiiN hai yuuN hi yeh Ghazal
kaGhaz pe baDe ashk bahaaye tam'aam shab


apni aara se zaruur nawaazeN

rab raakha
maikash


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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai

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29th April 2006, 09:58 PM

maikash ji bhaut hi umda gazal hai padh kar bhaut achha laga tmamam shab
har ek sher apne aap mai gazab hai

aisii bhi ko'ii raat muqaddar meiN kaash ho
hum rooTh jaayeN ko'ii manaaye tam'aam shab

piyaar ki umeeden bhaut achhe se jatayi hai

umeed hai aapko padhne ka mouka milta rahega

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Re: bohat yaad voh aaye......ek nayi Ghazal - 30th April 2006, 04:45 AM

Maikash sahab,

Beautifully written... and yes we will now not complain so often... but we would like to see you around more often...

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Re: bohat yaad voh aaye......ek nayi Ghazal - 30th April 2006, 08:33 AM

Vaise kam hi padhne ko milta hai aapka par jab bhi milta hai ....padhne mein maza aa jata hai


"voh khwaab ki duniya meN thi,baiThaa tha maiN yahaaN
palkoN ko raaste pe bichhaye tam'aam shab"


Ye sher kuch jayada hi acha laga.... vaise sabhi sher bohat
ache hai lekin jaha naye khayal dikhte hai mujhe waha kincha chala jata hu.....ye sher alag laga....


Aur ishe padhkar Meri Fav. Abida jee ki gazal yaad aa gayi vaise aapki gazal kaafi alag lekin "tamaam shab" dekhar vaisi lagi


"Aapki yaad aati rahi raat bhar
Chandni dil dukhti rahi raat bhar "


Yahi umeed hai hamein aapka likha jalad hi aur padhne ko milega


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Quote:
Originally posted by maikasH
dostoN ki shikayat thi ke maikash miyaaN aap kuch post nahiiN karte to ek taaza Ghazal mehfil ki nazar kar raha huuN, ummiid hai ke kam se kam paras aur pulkit saahab ko ab koi gilaa na rahega

mulaii'zaa farmaayeN :-


matla pesh-e-khidmat hai :-

1.
reh reh ke bohat yaad voh aaye tam'aam shab
mar mar ke maine lamhe bitaaye tam'aam shab

*tam'aam shab = saari raat


2.
kam ho saka na dard-e-juda'ii ka aNdhera
humne charaaGh-e-ashk jalaaye tam'aam shab


3.
aisii bhi ko'ii raat muqaddar meiN kaash ho
hum rooTh jaayeN ko'ii manaaye tam'aam shab


4.
hoti rahi barsaat aaNsuuyoN ki saari raat
baadal GhamoN ke dil pe the chhaye tam'aam shab


5.
raatoN ko jaagne ka mujhe shauq to nahiiN !!
kambakht dil ka zaKhm sataaye tam'aam shab


6.
zaalim hai teri tara'h, terii yaad bhi jaanaaN
ashkoN ka zehar mujhko pilaaye tam'aam shab


7.
voh khwaab ki duniya meN thi,baiThaa tha maiN yahaaN
palkoN ko raaste pe bichhaye tam'aam shab


8.
kaise maiN maan luuN ke buri hai sharaab, yeh
marham mere zaKhmoN pe lagaaye tam'aam shab


ab maqta haazir hai :-

9.
"maikash" likhi gayi nahiiN hai yuuN hi yeh Ghazal
kaGhaz pe baDe ashk bahaaye tam'aam shab


apni aara se zaruur nawaazeN

rab raakha
maikash


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kabhi humne yu khud ko harata naa dekha


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K Sab Kuch Milta Nahi Chah Lene Se Ish Zamane Mein..... "Diggaj"
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30th April 2006, 11:14 AM

reh reh ke bohat yaad voh aaye tam'aam shab
mar mar ke maine lamhe bitaaye tam'aam shab

kam ho saka na dard-e-juda'ii ka aNdhera
humne charaaGh-e-ashk jalaaye tam'aam shab

Bahut khoob bhai....


aisii bhi ko'ii raat muqaddar meiN kaash ho
hum rooTh jaayeN ko'ii manaaye tam'aam shab

hoti rahi barsaat aaNsuuyoN ki saari raat
baadal GhamoN ke dil pe the chhaye tam'aam shab

nice expression...


raatoN ko jaagne ka mujhe shauq to nahiiN !!
kambakht dil ka zaKhm sataaye tam'aam shab

zaalim hai teri tara'h, terii yaad bhi jaanaaN
ashkoN ka zehar mujhko pilaaye tam'aam shab

Waaaahh... I love the way u address jaanaa...


voh khwaab ki duniya meN thi,baiThaa tha maiN yahaaN
palkoN ko raaste pe bichhaye tam'aam shab

kaise maiN maan luuN ke buri hai sharaab, yeh
marham mere zaKhmoN pe lagaaye tam'aam shab

waaaaahhh... yahaan sharaab ke baad 'yeh' me thehraav accha laga... aur pehla sher bhi khoob hai...


"maikash" likhi gayi nahiiN hai yuuN hi yeh Ghazal
kaGhaz pe baDe ashk bahaaye tam'aam shab

kahut khooob....

Dear Maiksash bhai,

Its good to see your post here... bahut hi khoobsurat andaaz me haal-e-dil bayana kiya hai aapne... Sabhi sehr bahut pasand aaye mujhe...meri dil se daad kubool kijiyega... Likhte rahiye yun hi aur sahre bhi kate rahiye yahaan.... apna khayal rakhiyega...

Ab itni khoobsurat ghazalon se mehroom rehna padhe to complaints to hongi hi naa....


Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai

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30th April 2006, 01:59 PM

aisii bhi ko'ii raat muqaddar meiN kaash ho
hum rooTh jaayeN ko'ii manaaye tam'aam shab

hoti rahi barsaat aaNsuuyoN ki saari raat
baadal GhamoN ke dil pe the chhaye tam'aam shab


Namaskar Maikash ji

Ek bahut khoobsurat nazm hay.......Hamare daad kabul kijeyega....Asha kartey hain aap aagey bhi apney khoobsurat qalam parhney ka mauqa daingey ki hum bhi kuch seekh sakein aapse...

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Re: bohat yaad voh aaye......ek nayi Ghazal - 30th April 2006, 05:46 PM

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dostoN ki shikayat thi ke maikash miyaaN aap kuch post nahiiN karte to ek taaza Ghazal mehfil ki nazar kar raha huuN, ummiid hai ke kam se kam paras aur pulkit saahab ko ab koi gilaa na rahega

mulaii'zaa farmaayeN :-


matla pesh-e-khidmat hai :-


1.
reh reh ke bohat yaad voh aaye tam'aam shab
mar mar ke maine lamhe bitaaye tam'aam shab

*tam'aam shab = saari raat

waah waa maikhash bhaita ghazab likha hai

2.
kam ho saka na dard-e-juda'ii ka aNdhera
humne charaaGh-e-ashk jalaaye tam'aam shab

bahut khoooooob

3.
aisii bhi ko'ii raat muqaddar meiN kaash ho
hum rooTh jaayeN ko'ii manaaye tam'aam shab

wow nice wording maikashbhaiya


4.
hoti rahi barsaat aaNsuuyoN ki saari raat
baadal GhamoN ke dil pe the chhaye tam'aam shab

ufffffffff ye line to...........................

5.
raatoN ko jaagne ka mujhe shauq to nahiiN !!
kambakht dil ka zaKhm sataaye tam'aam shab

dil ko chhoooo gayi ye bhi

6.
zaalim hai teri tara'h, terii yaad bhi jaanaaN
ashkoN ka zehar mujhko pilaaye tam'aam shab

zalim tere kalaam ne kya kya sitam dhaaye hai
Padhkar mere sine ke zakhm mushkuraaye hai

7.
voh khwaab ki duniya meN thi,baiThaa tha maiN yahaaN
palkoN ko raaste pe bichhaye tam'aam shab

Socha kare tere khyaal ko, khwaabo ko is tarah
Ankho se neend ke sabhi raaste bhulaaye hai

8.
kaise maiN maan luuN ke buri hai sharaab, yeh
marham mere zaKhmoN pe lagaaye tam'aam shab


bahut achhae

ab maqta haazir hai :-

9.
"maikash" likhi gayi nahiiN hai yuuN hi yeh Ghazal
kaGhaz pe baDe ashk bahaaye tam'aam shab

Jo bhi padhe deewaana ho jaaye tamaam shab
Aap ki is ghazal koi na bhul paaye tamaam shab


apni aara se zaruur nawaazeN

rab raakha
maikash

bahut khubsurat likha hai maikshbhiya aap ne har ek share khud mai bahtareen hai

take care
wid regards
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1st May 2006, 06:21 AM

shrdh sahiba

aapne Ghazal pasaNd farmaayi aur daad bhi ataa ki bohat shukriya jee aapka...ummiid hai aap aa'iiNdaa bhi yuuN hi hausla badhaati raheNgii


khair aNdesh
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1st May 2006, 06:27 AM

Rohin saahab

i'm well aware of the fact that u r a busy man and i sincerely appreciate ur time ... i've been around quite regularly recently but only tending to my admin duties and i sure will try my best to share some of my work as often as possible


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1st May 2006, 11:03 AM

Arre Waah! Maikash Mian aapki kalam tau qahar dhaati hai dilon par...jee hamein koyi gila nahin...infact hamara keyboard ek gustakhi kar gaya aapke inn dil lazeez ashaaron par...gar ijazzat ho tau....

milein na kyun phir kisi bahane se tumko jaanaa
rahe jhuuthe waadon se dil ko behlaaye tamaam shab

jo jhaanke koyi khayalon mein hongi badi ruswaayiaan
ki aake shokh adaaon se wo humko sataaye tamaam shab

khush rahiye...yeh silsila jaari rakhiye


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1st May 2006, 11:40 AM

hoti rahi barsaat aaNsuuyoN ki saari raat
baadal GhamoN ke dil pe the chhaye tam'aam shab

bahut khub...........

raatoN ko jaagne ka mujhe shauq to nahiiN !!
kambakht dil ka zaKhm sataaye tam'aam shab

pehali baar aapko pada ...bahut khubsurat likha hai aapne.....

pad ke bahut accha laga.........

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kya kahen maikash ji,aaj pehli baar aapko padha hai aur padhte hi aapki shayri ke dewaane hogaye.bahut acha likha aapne.khas kar yeh sher to behad pasand aaya hamein,

aisii bhi ko'ii raat muqaddar meiN kaash ho
hum rooTh jaayeN ko'ii manaaye tam'aam shab.


isi tarah likhte rahiye aur is mehfil ki shaan badhaaye.

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Diggaj_Dave saahab


namaste


miyaaN aapne to lajawaab kar diyaa....!!

aapko ek she'r khasuusan pasaNd aaya, dil ko tassalli ho gayi ke mehnat zaya na gayi........aapki muhabbat ka maskoor-o-mamnuun huuN saahab.....


jis Ghazal ka matla aapne arz kiya usii zamiin meN maine bhi ek GHazal kahi hai kabhi post karuNgaa.....




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Re: bohat yaad voh aaye......ek nayi Ghazal - 2nd May 2006, 09:27 AM

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dostoN ki shikayat thi ke maikash miyaaN aap kuch post nahiiN karte to ek taaza Ghazal mehfil ki nazar kar raha huuN, ummiid hai ke kam se kam paras aur pulkit saahab ko ab koi gilaa na rahega

mulaii'zaa farmaayeN :-


matla pesh-e-khidmat hai :-

1.
reh reh ke bohat yaad voh aaye tam'aam shab
mar mar ke maine lamhe bitaaye tam'aam shab

*tam'aam shab = saari raat


2.
kam ho saka na dard-e-juda'ii ka aNdhera
humne charaaGh-e-ashk jalaaye tam'aam shab


3.
aisii bhi ko'ii raat muqaddar meiN kaash ho
hum rooTh jaayeN ko'ii manaaye tam'aam shab


4.
hoti rahi barsaat aaNsuuyoN ki saari raat
baadal GhamoN ke dil pe the chhaye tam'aam shab


5.
raatoN ko jaagne ka mujhe shauq to nahiiN !!
kambakht dil ka zaKhm sataaye tam'aam shab


6.
zaalim hai teri tara'h, terii yaad bhi jaanaaN
ashkoN ka zehar mujhko pilaaye tam'aam shab


7.
voh khwaab ki duniya meN thi,baiThaa tha maiN yahaaN
palkoN ko raaste pe bichhaye tam'aam shab


8.
kaise maiN maan luuN ke buri hai sharaab, yeh
marham mere zaKhmoN pe lagaaye tam'aam shab


ab maqta haazir hai :-

9.
"maikash" likhi gayi nahiiN hai yuuN hi yeh Ghazal
kaGhaz pe baDe ashk bahaaye tam'aam shab


apni aara se zaruur nawaazeN

rab raakha
maikash


Mere maikash,

dard ko shabd mai sahaj pirona...
n raah nazar aati hai na manjil... jaha tak nazar pahunch paaye .. dard bichha nazar aata hai ..

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2nd May 2006, 06:08 PM

khoob kahi ye Ghazal bhi Maikash sahab..

kabhi waqt mile to aapse iski beher ke mu'tallik baat hogi

khyaal rakhiyega

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maikashji,
bahut khuubsurti ke saath apne ehsaasat ko aapne
kagaz pe uutara hai,

"kaise main maan luun ke buri hai sharaab,yeh
"marham mere zakhmon pe lagaaye tammam shab"

aapko padhne ke mauke jaldi diya kijiye....shukriyaa
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2nd May 2006, 07:20 PM

maikash saheb

ek au rkhoobsurat ghazel takhleeq ki hai aap ne.
nihaayet mauzoon alfaaz se aaraasta yeh ek shahkaar ghazel hai.
aap ke bare mein akser saathiyon se kehta hoon ke is forum per ager kisi ko achchi shayri parhna hai to maikash saheb ko parhe.
her shayr ek mukammil daastaan hai soaz o gudaash ki, pyaar ki , khushbu ki.
bohat pasand aayee aap ki yeh ghazel.

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2nd May 2006, 07:38 PM

Pulkit saahab


Ghazal ki pazi'raii ke liye behadd shukurguzaar huuN aapka......janaab koshish karta rahuNga ke gaahe-ba-gaahe kuch na kuch post karta rahuN ...ummiid hai aa'iiNda aapko shikayat ka mauqa na milega


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2nd May 2006, 08:43 PM

Wow...

Maikash ji,

Itne dinon baad phir se aap ko parh ke bahut achha laga, what can say about this creation, it's fantastic, an amazing...

reh reh ke bohat yaad voh aaye tam'aam shab
mar mar ke maine lamhe bitaaye tam'aam shab

kam ho saka na dard-e-juda'ii ka aNdhera
humne charaaGh-e-ashk jalaaye tam'aam shab

voh khwaab ki duniya meN thi,baiThaa tha maiN yahaaN
palkoN ko raaste pe bichhaye tam'aam shab


I like this sher a lot... keep writting & keep coming. take care!


   
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3rd May 2006, 07:40 AM

sukanya jee

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aapne Ghazal ke chaNd ash'aar pasaNd farmaaye bohat shukriya, ummiid hai aap yuuN hi hausla badhaati raheNgi



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Adaab Maikash ji
Ek zamaane ke baad yahan ek behtareen ghazal ko padney ka lutf uthaya. Daad qubul kijiyega janaab.


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manu sahab

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bhai aap jis tarha daad ataa farmaate hai khud pe guruur hone lagta hai


bohat shukriya miyaaN


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pehle to aapke khat ka jawaab dene meiN hui ta'khiir ke liye mazrat chahta huuN,rozi-roti ke mas'alley ne is qadar baaNdhaa hua hai ke puuchiye mat....khair....daad ke liye shukriya aur mohtarma lafz-e-gustaakhi aapne fazuul meiN kharch kiya, jo dil meN kehna chahiye aur wahi aapne kiya maiN mamnoon huuN aapka


aati jaati raha kareiN

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Re: bohat yaad voh aaye......ek nayi Ghazal - 29th May 2006, 07:19 PM

Quote:
Originally posted by maikasH
dostoN ki shikayat thi ke maikash miyaaN aap kuch post nahiiN karte to ek taaza Ghazal mehfil ki nazar kar raha huuN, ummiid hai ke kam se kam paras aur pulkit saahab ko ab koi gilaa na rahega

mulaii'zaa farmaayeN :-


matla pesh-e-khidmat hai :-

1.
reh reh ke bohat yaad voh aaye tam'aam shab
mar mar ke maine lamhe bitaaye tam'aam shab

*tam'aam shab = saari raat


2.
kam ho saka na dard-e-juda'ii ka aNdhera
humne charaaGh-e-ashk jalaaye tam'aam shab


3.
aisii bhi ko'ii raat muqaddar meiN kaash ho
hum rooTh jaayeN ko'ii manaaye tam'aam shab


4.
hoti rahi barsaat aaNsuuyoN ki saari raat
baadal GhamoN ke dil pe the chhaye tam'aam shab


5.
raatoN ko jaagne ka mujhe shauq to nahiiN !!
kambakht dil ka zaKhm sataaye tam'aam shab


6.
zaalim hai teri tara'h, terii yaad bhi jaanaaN
ashkoN ka zehar mujhko pilaaye tam'aam shab


7.
voh khwaab ki duniya meN thi,baiThaa tha maiN yahaaN
palkoN ko raaste pe bichhaye tam'aam shab


8.
kaise maiN maan luuN ke buri hai sharaab, yeh
marham mere zaKhmoN pe lagaaye tam'aam shab


ab maqta haazir hai :-

9.
"maikash" likhi gayi nahiiN hai yuuN hi yeh Ghazal
kaGhaz pe baDe ashk bahaaye tam'aam shab


apni aara se zaruur nawaazeN

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Maikash ji ... honestly speaking, aapne is dauran jitni bhi gazale likhi sab behad umda aur khoobsoorat... but this one made me reply here... ab exam se thodi fursat mili hai to isse aaj fir padha ... dilfareb gazal hai ye ... hamaari tahe dl se daal qubool farmaiyega...
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ranju saahab

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bhai shukr hai aapne padha to sahi vagarna aise ehbaab bhi haiN jo kambakht padhte bhi nahiiN

aapko kaavish pasaNd aayi, meri khushnasiibi, ummiid hai aayiiNda bhi yuuN hi aap hausla badhaate raheNge


shukriya

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