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hmmm bado ko paranaam aur dosto ko namaste. meri di ne kaha ki iss gazal ko dard forum me post karo to ise mein yahan lekar hazir hu.
PAHALA SHER DILIP JI KA HAI----------GAUR FARMAIYE
mohabbat ki hawa chalati hai, har patte ko hawaa lagti hai,
inkar kare wo chaahe kitna, seene main aag to sulagti hai...
tere naam se saans chati hai,yaadon me shaam dhalti hai,
kabhi wafaon ki doli utthi, kabhi armanon ki artthhi sajti hai..
saaki hum tere dar pe ate hai, pine nahi use bhulne ate hai,
aur tu deke du'haai usi be'wffa yaar ki, har jaam bharti hai...
katl karna tha to khanjar se kiya hota, jaan nikalti ek hi bar,
til-til marta dekh hanske kahate hai log, lash bhi marti hai....
are bedardi!! chala to gaya magar khata kya hui ye batata,
kami thi meri wafa me? ye saval kar kar ke ruh pighalti hai..
sarmaya de gaya dukhon ka, khushiyan uu’dhaar le gaya,
na aana samne, tujhe dekhne se nazar bhi sharm karti hai…
tabaahii kaa aalam dekh dekh tuu muskuaata raha wahan,
sab jal gayaa “pooja”,rakh karke ab sirf dhunva utth'ti hai..
grazie
aapki dost
pooja
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8th November 2006, 02:56 PM
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hmmm bado ko paranaam aur dosto ko namaste. meri di ne kaha ki iss gazal ko dard forum me post karo to ise mein yahan lekar hazir hu.
PAHALA SHER DILIP JI KA HAI----------GAUR FARMAIYE
mohabbat ki hawa chalati hai, har patte ko hawaa lagti hai,
inkar kare wo chaahe kitna, seene main aag to sulagti hai...
tere naam se saans chati hai,yaadon me shaam dhalti hai,
kabhi wafaon ki doli utthi, kabhi armanon ki artthhi sajti hai..
saaki hum tere dar pe ate hai, pine nahi use bhulne ate hai,
aur tu deke du'haai usi be'wffa yaar ki, har jaam bharti hai...
katl karna tha to khanjar se kiya hota, jaan nikalti ek hi bar,
til-til marta dekh hanske kahate hai log, lash bhi marti hai....
are bedardi!! chala to gaya magar khata kya hui ye batata,
kami thi meri wafa me? ye saval kar kar ke ruh pighalti hai..
sarmaya de gaya dukhon ka, khushiyan uu’dhaar le gaya,
na aana samne, tujhe dekhne se nazar bhi sharm karti hai…
tabaahii kaa aalam dekh dekh tuu muskuaata raha wahan,
sab jal gayaa “pooja”,rakh karke ab sirf dhunva utth'ti hai..
grazie
aapki dost
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dil se nikali daad kubul kijieynga............pooja ji
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8th November 2006, 03:36 PM
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hmmm bado ko paranaam aur dosto ko namaste. meri di ne kaha ki iss gazal ko dard forum me post karo to ise mein yahan lekar hazir hu.
PAHALA SHER DILIP JI KA HAI----------GAUR FARMAIYE
mohabbat ki hawa chalati hai, har patte ko hawaa lagti hai,
inkar kare wo chaahe kitna, seene main aag to sulagti hai...
tere naam se saans chati hai,yaadon me shaam dhalti hai,
kabhi wafaon ki doli utthi, kabhi armanon ki artthhi sajti hai..
saaki hum tere dar pe ate hai, pine nahi use bhulne ate hai,
aur tu deke du'haai usi be'wffa yaar ki, har jaam bharti hai...
katl karna tha to khanjar se kiya hota, jaan nikalti ek hi bar,
til-til marta dekh hanske kahate hai log, lash bhi marti hai....
are bedardi!! chala to gaya magar khata kya hui ye batata,
kami thi meri wafa me? ye saval kar kar ke ruh pighalti hai..
sarmaya de gaya dukhon ka, khushiyan uu’dhaar le gaya,
na aana samne, tujhe dekhne se nazar bhi sharm karti hai…
tabaahii kaa aalam dekh dekh tuu muskuaata raha wahan,
sab jal gayaa “pooja”,rakh karke ab sirf dhunva utth'ti hai..
grazie
aapki dost
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meri pyari gudiya....!
tumne yeh bahut accha kiya jo meri baat maan kar es gazal ko jaha post kiya, yehi eski sahi jagah hai. aur ek baar phir se es khoobsurat gazal ke liye mubarakbaad hazir hai. kabool kijiye matko ji.
yu hi likhti raho aur sadha kush raho.
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9th November 2006, 12:15 PM
tere naam se saans chati hai,yaadon me shaam dhalti hai,
kabhi wafaon ki doli utthi, kabhi armanon ki artthhi sajti hai..
pooooooja kya likha hai tumne......itna dard or itni safai se kagaz pe utara tumne ki dil tareef kiye bagair reh hee nahi paya.....bhut umda kalaam pesh kiya hai tumne....yu hee likhti raho hamari duaa tere saath hai.....take care.....raj.......
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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9th November 2006, 08:12 PM
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hmmm bado ko paranaam aur dosto ko namaste. meri di ne kaha ki iss gazal ko dard forum me post karo to ise mein yahan lekar hazir hu.
PAHALA SHER DILIP JI KA HAI----------GAUR FARMAIYE
mohabbat ki hawa chalati hai, har patte ko hawaa lagti hai,
inkar kare wo chaahe kitna, seene main aag to sulagti hai...
tere naam se saans chati hai,yaadon me shaam dhalti hai,
kabhi wafaon ki doli utthi, kabhi armanon ki artthhi sajti hai..
saaki hum tere dar pe ate hai, pine nahi use bhulne ate hai,
aur tu deke du'haai usi be'wffa yaar ki, har jaam bharti hai...
katl karna tha to khanjar se kiya hota, jaan nikalti ek hi bar,
til-til marta dekh hanske kahate hai log, lash bhi marti hai....
are bedardi!! chala to gaya magar khata kya hui ye batata,
kami thi meri wafa me? ye saval kar kar ke ruh pighalti hai..
sarmaya de gaya dukhon ka, khushiyan uu’dhaar le gaya,
na aana samne, tujhe dekhne se nazar bhi sharm karti hai…
tabaahii kaa aalam dekh dekh tuu muskuaata raha wahan,
sab jal gayaa “pooja”,rakh karke ab sirf dhunva utth'ti hai..
grazie
aapki dost
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dard per itne gahre tumne dard ko baya,n kiya hai ki bas maan gaye yaar.
ek nayi unchai mil gayi yaar mere shaer ko
tum hamesha isse bhi behtar likhti raho bus yshi dua hai meri
aur haan khoobsurat gazal per meri daad ek baar fir se kabool farmao yaar
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10th November 2006, 11:33 AM
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hmmm bado ko paranaam aur dosto ko namaste. meri di ne kaha ki iss gazal ko dard forum me post karo to ise mein yahan lekar hazir hu.
PAHALA SHER DILIP JI KA HAI----------GAUR FARMAIYE
mohabbat ki hawa chalati hai, har patte ko hawaa lagti hai,
inkar kare wo chaahe kitna, seene main aag to sulagti hai...
tere naam se saans chati hai,yaadon me shaam dhalti hai,
kabhi wafaon ki doli utthi, kabhi armanon ki artthhi sajti hai..
saaki hum tere dar pe ate hai, pine nahi use bhulne ate hai,
aur tu deke du'haai usi be'wffa yaar ki, har jaam bharti hai...
katl karna tha to khanjar se kiya hota, jaan nikalti ek hi bar,
til-til marta dekh hanske kahate hai log, lash bhi marti hai....
are bedardi!! chala to gaya magar khata kya hui ye batata,
kami thi meri wafa me? ye saval kar kar ke ruh pighalti hai..
sarmaya de gaya dukhon ka, khushiyan uu’dhaar le gaya,
na aana samne, tujhe dekhne se nazar bhi sharm karti hai…
tabaahii kaa aalam dekh dekh tuu muskuaata raha wahan,
sab jal gayaa “pooja”,rakh karke ab sirf dhunva utth'ti hai..
grazie
aapki dost
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pooja kia likha hai bohat acha likha hai sweety itni chotti umer main itna dard mazak ker rahi hoon zaroori nahi insaan ko dard ho tab hi woh ghamgheen shayri likhay..............bohat acha likha hai aur ye ash'aar kia kahoon bas dil per asar kia hai
katl karna tha to khanjar se kiya hota, jaan nikalti ek hi bar,
til-til marta dekh hanske kahate hai log, lash bhi marti hai....
are bedardi!! chala to gaya magar khata kya hui ye batata,
kami thi meri wafa me? ye saval kar kar ke ruh pighalti hai..
sarmaya de gaya dukhon ka, khushiyan uu’dhaar le gaya,
na aana samne, tujhe dekhne se nazar bhi sharm karti hai…
keep writing sweety and takecare of urself
Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin
ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin
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10th November 2006, 12:33 PM
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Originally Posted by pooja4588
hmmm bado ko paranaam aur dosto ko namaste. meri di ne kaha ki iss gazal ko dard forum me post karo to ise mein yahan lekar hazir hu.
PAHALA SHER DILIP JI KA HAI----------GAUR FARMAIYE
mohabbat ki hawa chalati hai, har patte ko hawaa lagti hai,
inkar kare wo chaahe kitna, seene main aag to sulagti hai...
tere naam se saans chati hai,yaadon me shaam dhalti hai,
kabhi wafaon ki doli utthi, kabhi armanon ki artthhi sajti hai..
saaki hum tere dar pe ate hai, pine nahi use bhulne ate hai,
aur tu deke du'haai usi be'wffa yaar ki, har jaam bharti hai...
katl karna tha to khanjar se kiya hota, jaan nikalti ek hi bar,
til-til marta dekh hanske kahate hai log, lash bhi marti hai....
are bedardi!! chala to gaya magar khata kya hui ye batata,
kami thi meri wafa me? ye saval kar kar ke ruh pighalti hai..
sarmaya de gaya dukhon ka, khushiyan uu’dhaar le gaya,
na aana samne, tujhe dekhne se nazar bhi sharm karti hai…
tabaahii kaa aalam dekh dekh tuu muskuaata raha wahan,
sab jal gayaa “pooja”,rakh karke ab sirf dhunva utth'ti hai..
grazie
aapki dost
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dard kitna gahra hai ye to kuch shabdoin s epata lagta hai .gazal mein bas dard basa hai. acha likha hai is dard ko poja apne.
bas likhte raho. acha liiho aur hamesha lekin khush raho yahi dua hai meri.
sakhi with love
कुछ ऐसे पल जिनको संजोना है ,
शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे
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10th November 2006, 05:24 PM
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dil se nikali daad kubul kijieynga............pooja ji
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thanku once again...........
grazie
aapki dost
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10th November 2006, 05:27 PM
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meri pyari gudiya....!
tumne yeh bahut accha kiya jo meri baat maan kar es gazal ko jaha post kiya, yehi eski sahi jagah hai. aur ek baar phir se es khoobsurat gazal ke liye mubarakbaad hazir hai. kabool kijiye matko ji.
yu hi likhti raho aur sadha kush raho.
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ha di apki hi baat maan ke yahan post kiya ise
thanku once again
grazie
aapki gudiya rani
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10th November 2006, 05:30 PM
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tere naam se saans chati hai,yaadon me shaam dhalti hai,
kabhi wafaon ki doli utthi, kabhi armanon ki artthhi sajti hai..
pooooooja kya likha hai tumne......itna dard or itni safai se kagaz pe utara tumne ki dil tareef kiye bagair reh hee nahi paya.....bhut umda kalaam pesh kiya hai tumne....yu hee likhti raho hamari duaa tere saath hai.....take care.....raj.......
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pranaam veer ji,
haaa veer ji unhi likhti rahungi. shukriya veer ji............
grazie
aapki dost
pooja
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10th November 2006, 05:32 PM
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pooja
dard per itne gahre tumne dard ko baya,n kiya hai ki bas maan gaye yaar.
ek nayi unchai mil gayi yaar mere shaer ko
tum hamesha isse bhi behtar likhti raho bus yshi dua hai meri
aur haan khoobsurat gazal per meri daad ek baar fir se kabool farmao yaar
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achha.................aisa laga apko........????
apki daad sa'ankho pe ji.........
grazie
aapki dost
pooja
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10th November 2006, 05:36 PM
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pooja kia likha hai bohat acha likha hai sweety itni chotti umer main itna dard mazak ker rahi hoon zaroori nahi insaan ko dard ho tab hi woh ghamgheen shayri likhay..............bohat acha likha hai aur ye ash'aar kia kahoon bas dil per asar kia hai
katl karna tha to khanjar se kiya hota, jaan nikalti ek hi bar,
til-til marta dekh hanske kahate hai log, lash bhi marti hai....
are bedardi!! chala to gaya magar khata kya hui ye batata,
kami thi meri wafa me? ye saval kar kar ke ruh pighalti hai..
sarmaya de gaya dukhon ka, khushiyan uu’dhaar le gaya,
na aana samne, tujhe dekhne se nazar bhi sharm karti hai…
keep writing sweety and takecare of urself
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haan ji mujhe koi dard nahi bas dilip ji ke sher ko maukaam diya hai.
shukriya ise pasand karne ke liye.
grazie
aapki sweety
pooja
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10th November 2006, 05:37 PM
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dard kitna gahra hai ye to kuch shabdoin s epata lagta hai .gazal mein bas dard basa hai. acha likha hai is dard ko poja apne.
bas likhte raho. acha liiho aur hamesha lekin khush raho yahi dua hai meri.
sakhi with love
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sukriya sakhi ji.....
grazie
aapki dost
pooja
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10th November 2006, 07:38 PM
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hmmm bado ko paranaam aur dosto ko namaste. meri di ne kaha ki iss gazal ko dard forum me post karo to ise mein yahan lekar hazir hu.
PAHALA SHER DILIP JI KA HAI----------GAUR FARMAIYE
mohabbat ki hawa chalati hai, har patte ko hawaa lagti hai,
inkar kare wo chaahe kitna, seene main aag to sulagti hai...
tere naam se saans chati hai,yaadon me shaam dhalti hai,
kabhi wafaon ki doli utthi, kabhi armanon ki artthhi sajti hai..
saaki hum tere dar pe ate hai, pine nahi use bhulne ate hai,
aur tu deke du'haai usi be'wffa yaar ki, har jaam bharti hai...
katl karna tha to khanjar se kiya hota, jaan nikalti ek hi bar,
til-til marta dekh hanske kahate hai log, lash bhi marti hai....
are bedardi!! chala to gaya magar khata kya hui ye batata,
kami thi meri wafa me? ye saval kar kar ke ruh pighalti hai..
sarmaya de gaya dukhon ka, khushiyan uu’dhaar le gaya,
na aana samne, tujhe dekhne se nazar bhi sharm karti hai…
tabaahii kaa aalam dekh dekh tuu muskuaata raha wahan,
sab jal gayaa “pooja”,rakh karke ab sirf dhunva utth'ti hai..
grazie
aapki dost
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hi pooja jee, it is teally amazing, sach mein aap bahut accha likhti hain,i feel vey ,,,,,,,,,,,i hv no wirds, daad kubool kijuyega
एक हाथ में दिल उनके एक हाथ में खंजर था
चेहरे पे दोस्त का मुखौटा अजीब सा मंजर था
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13th November 2006, 04:21 PM
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hi pooja jee, it is teally amazing, sach mein aap bahut accha likhti hain,i feel vey ,,,,,,,,,,,i hv no wirds, daad kubool kijuyega
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shukriya aru ji,
aapki daad sarankho pe humare..........
grazie
aapki dost
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27th November 2006, 09:56 PM
Bahot khoob likha hai chhoti dost. Aise hi likhte rehna. Sach me bahot achha likha hai.
DARPAN. THE MIRROR.......
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Bahot khoob likha hai chhoti dost. Aise hi likhte rehna. Sach me bahot achha likha hai.
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hello ji
haan ji aapki is chhoti dost ne shayad itna achha to likha hi hai ke aap yahan aye hai...hai na......well thanks for ur reply........bahot bahot shukriya ji
grazie
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2nd May 2007, 12:24 AM
Pooja jee,
Bahut bahut acha likha aapne. Jyada Tareef nahin karunga warna aap hi kahengi...
Dard chipta nahin, har sans aah bharte hein
Keise Bedard log! waah waah karte hein!
Warm Regards & best wishes
Susheel
लब पे मुस्कान को लिए ऐ दोस्त, काँधों पे लाश अपनी ढोते हैं,
इस भरे शहर में हम Dard-e-Sush, जो न पाया उसे भी खोते हैं!
lab pe muskaan ko liye ae dost, kandhon pe laash apni dhote hein
is bhare sheher me ham dard-e-sush, jo na paaya use bhi khote hein
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2nd May 2007, 01:33 PM
wah likhte rahiye bahut khoob,,,,,
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Dil Itna Naazuk Hota Hai Ke,
Isski Tootne Ki Awaaz Bilkul Nahi Aathi,
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MEIN TUJHKO BHOOL JAUN YE KISSS KITAAB MEIN LIKHA HAI.
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socha tha woh hame tut kar chahenge
par chaha bhi hami ne aur tute bhi hum
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2nd May 2007, 07:23 PM
haaye!!!
Dard bhi nikle dil se aur waah bhi...
Bahut khoob Gudiya!!!
Humesha khush raho..
~Priya
"Dikha kar khawaab in aankhon ko, De gaye aansoon in mein Tum..
Kaise chalka doo yeh aansoon, In mein bhi To rehTe ho Tum.."
~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ Sirf Tanu Ki ChaahaT...... ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~
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2nd May 2007, 07:50 PM
wah behad khubsurat poojaji behad khubsurat. kya kahu shabd nahi hai tareef ke liye. bas itna kahungi dil ko behad pasand aayi aapki ye gazal. lagta hai dard bhari kalam se likhi hai ye gazal.
uhi llikhti rahiyega.
reena
aksar yaad karte hain un guzre hue lamho ko
aksar yaad karte hain un tere diye zakmhon ko
kuch na baaki bacha hai jeevan mein hamaare
jo jeene ko saathi tu na raha
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2nd May 2007, 09:39 PM
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Originally Posted by pooja4588
hmmm bado ko paranaam aur dosto ko namaste. meri di ne kaha ki iss gazal ko dard forum me post karo to ise mein yahan lekar hazir hu.
PAHALA SHER DILIP JI KA HAI----------GAUR FARMAIYE
mohabbat ki hawa chalati hai, har patte ko hawaa lagti hai,
inkar kare wo chaahe kitna, seene main aag to sulagti hai...
tere naam se saans chati hai,yaadon me shaam dhalti hai,
kabhi wafaon ki doli utthi, kabhi armanon ki artthhi sajti hai..
saaki hum tere dar pe ate hai, pine nahi use bhulne ate hai,
aur tu deke du'haai usi be'wffa yaar ki, har jaam bharti hai...
katl karna tha to khanjar se kiya hota, jaan nikalti ek hi bar,
til-til marta dekh hanske kahate hai log, lash bhi marti hai....
are bedardi!! chala to gaya magar khata kya hui ye batata,
kami thi meri wafa me? ye saval kar kar ke ruh pighalti hai..
sarmaya de gaya dukhon ka, khushiyan uu’dhaar le gaya,
na aana samne, tujhe dekhne se nazar bhi sharm karti hai…
tabaahii kaa aalam dekh dekh tuu muskuaata raha wahan,
sab jal gayaa “pooja”,rakh karke ab sirf dhunva utth'ti hai..
grazie
aapki dost
pooja
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Pooja di ko Shaan ka salam,
..tabaahii kaa aalam dekh dekh tuu muskuaata raha wahan,
sab jal gayaa Pooja, rakh karke ab sirf dhunva utth'ti hai......
Bhut khoob, bahut achee ashaar hain..
thanx
Hamesha hanste or muskurati rahen
t.k.
SHAAN
Gamo ki kader karo or unke sath jiyu,
Gam kabi fareb na denge khushi ki tarah.
........Shaan......
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6th May 2007, 01:32 PM
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Pooja jee,
Bahut bahut acha likha aapne. Jyada Tareef nahin karunga warna aap hi kahengi...
Dard chipta nahin, har sans aah bharte hein
Keise Bedard log! waah waah karte hein!
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sushil ji namskaar,
janaab aap aaye, bahot khushi hui. ek purane member ko yaha dekh kar. ji apko pasand aai ye koshish khush'kismati hai meri.
dilip ji ne shuruaat hi itni pyari di thi ke aage likha to aap sab ka saath nasiib hua.
saath dete rahiyega
grazie
aapki dost
pooja
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kishor ji -
11th May 2007, 11:48 PM
Namskaar,
Apka saath paa'kar achha laga. Apne saraaha, pasand kiya is kalaam ko, shukriya bahot bahot.
Saath dete rahiyega.
Grazie
Apki dost
Pooja
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priya di -
15th May 2007, 09:11 PM
Namskaar,
Dard nahi hai ab mujhe aap wah wah kar saktin hain
Shukriya apko pasand ayaa.
Saath deti rahiyega
Grazie
Apki gudiya
Pooja
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16th May 2007, 05:02 AM
pooja g,
namaskar,
bahut achi gazal hai yhe. app ne apne jazbaaton ko bahut achi tarah se pesh kiya hai. bahut dard hai is gazal mein. dil mayoos sa ho gaya, aakri sher padte padte. bahut umda gazal hai yhe. aap aise hi likthe rahein.
god bless u
manish
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Darkness falls on me like rain... just one drop at a time....
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Reena ji -
16th May 2007, 11:10 AM
Namskaar,
Apko ye koshish pasand aai, shukriya. Ehasaas mere dost Dilip ji ke thhe, unhone hi shuruaat di thhi. Mujhe achha laga sher to aage badhaa diiyaa.
Saath detii rahiiyegaa.
Grazie
Apki dost
Pooja
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Shaan ji -
20th May 2007, 12:56 AM
Adaab,
Kaise hain aap?
Apne pasand kiya, saraaha is koshish ko, shukriya dil se.
Saath dete rahiyega.
Grazie
Apki dost
Pooja
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20th May 2007, 01:10 AM
Aadab Pooja ji....
tere naam se saans chati hai,yaadon me shaam dhalti hai,
kabhi wafaon ki doli utthi, kabhi armanon ki artthhi sajti hai..
katl karna tha to khanjar se kiya hota, jaan nikalti ek hi bar,
til-til marta dekh hanske kahate hai log, lash bhi marti hai....
are bedardi!! chala to gaya magar khata kya hui ye batata,
kami thi meri wafa me? ye saval kar kar ke ruh pighalti hai..
Aapke yeh teen Ashaar hame behad pasand aaye.... Raha nahi gaya... Kuch kuch humari kahani se milte hai... Shukriya ise likhne ke liye...
Apka Dost Abrar...
Ijazat....
Hum to pattharon se mohabbat ka hunar rakhte hain,
Tum to phir bhi moom ho "Abrar" ke gale lag kar pighal jaoge...
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20th May 2007, 07:49 AM
hi pooja ji
kese ho aap?
aapko bhi hamara sadar pranaam
priya ji pehla sher dilip ji ka hai to mein pehle dilip ji ka sukhriya ada karna chahta hu ki itni achchhi suruaat ki, bahut khub
priya ji aapne jo ye ek sher se puri gazal ko apne dil ke ehsaason se sajaya bara hi achchha laga,
har line mein ek dard jalakta hai aapki rachna mein se, bahut achchhe
khas karke wo ek hi vaar mein mar dene wali baat
ese hi likhte rahe
aapka dost
Merul
Quote:
Originally Posted by pooja4588
hmmm bado ko paranaam aur dosto ko namaste. meri di ne kaha ki iss gazal ko dard forum me post karo to ise mein yahan lekar hazir hu.
PAHALA SHER DILIP JI KA HAI----------GAUR FARMAIYE
mohabbat ki hawa chalati hai, har patte ko hawaa lagti hai,
inkar kare wo chaahe kitna, seene main aag to sulagti hai...
tere naam se saans chati hai,yaadon me shaam dhalti hai,
kabhi wafaon ki doli utthi, kabhi armanon ki artthhi sajti hai..
saaki hum tere dar pe ate hai, pine nahi use bhulne ate hai,
aur tu deke du'haai usi be'wffa yaar ki, har jaam bharti hai...
katl karna tha to khanjar se kiya hota, jaan nikalti ek hi bar,
til-til marta dekh hanske kahate hai log, lash bhi marti hai....
are bedardi!! chala to gaya magar khata kya hui ye batata,
kami thi meri wafa me? ye saval kar kar ke ruh pighalti hai..
sarmaya de gaya dukhon ka, khushiyan uu’dhaar le gaya,
na aana samne, tujhe dekhne se nazar bhi sharm karti hai…
tabaahii kaa aalam dekh dekh tuu muskuaata raha wahan,
sab jal gayaa “pooja”,rakh karke ab sirf dhunva utth'ti hai..
grazie
aapki dost
pooja
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!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!
Dhoka diya tha jab tumne mujhe,
Tab dil se me naraz tha,
Phir socha ki dil se tumhe nikal du,
Magar woh kambakth dil bhi tumhare paas tha.
Merul~~~~~~~~~~>
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21st May 2007, 05:02 PM
Namaste,
Aap aaye khushi hui. Saraahane ke liye shukriya janaab.
Saath dete rahiyega.
Grazie
Apki dos
Pooja
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21st May 2007, 05:04 PM
Salaam,
Shukriya tashriiff laane ke liye, aur ise pasand farmaane ke liye. Ummid karti hu apka saath yunhi aage bhi milta rahega.
GRazie
Apki dost
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21st May 2007, 05:07 PM
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Originally Posted by Merul
hi pooja ji
kese ho aap?
aapko bhi hamara sadar pranaam
priya ji pehla sher dilip ji ka hai to mein pehle dilip ji ka sukhriya ada karna chahta hu ki itni achchhi suruaat ki, bahut khub
priya ji aapne jo ye ek sher se puri gazal ko apne dil ke ehsaason se sajaya bara hi achchha laga,
har line mein ek dard jalakta hai aapki rachna mein se, bahut achchhe
khas karke wo ek hi vaar mein mar dene wali baat
ese hi likhte rahe
aapka dost
Merul
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Mera naam POOJA hai............Priya meri Di ka naam haiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii..Merul ji aap jyadaa'tar naam galat hi bolte hain.......hahahahah
Jii beshak aap unhe daad dijiye pahali. Maine bhi Dilip ji ko hi daad di thhi sabse pahale. Sunaa dilip ji.......hmm gum hain koi faayda nahi chillane ka.
Ek baar fir shukriya Merul ji.
Grazie
Apki dost
Pooja
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