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Ghazal: ye ishq agar jo nahiN hai aasaan to aap-beeti meri talab hai... -
5th November 2011, 12:42 AM
Dosto aadaab,
ek ghazal pesh kar rahaa hun..aap ki raey ka intezaar rahega..
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ye ishq agar jo nahiN hai aasaan, to aap-beeti meri talab hai
sabaq mujhe bhi mile to apnaa, khuda ka warna diyaa to sab hai
meri nazar maiN chubhe gareebi, tujhe falak se dikhega kaise
bana ke ghar fir yahiN basar kar tabhi kahuN iss jahan ka rab hai
kahin ubhar kar maiN aa na jaaun, mujhe duba do kisi khushi meiN
jo nikla dil se to ro padunga, maiN gham hun mera yehi sabab hai
sune hai insaan teri hi charche, nakaabo waala tu jaadugar hai
palak jhapakte hi rang badle, teri upaj kya teri nasab hai
kahaan se aaya kahaan chalaa hun, yahaan ruka kyun pataa nahin kuch
meri pasand ka nahin zamaana, mujhe thikaane pe aana kab hai?
sadaa ye dil ki, nazar ki baatieN, kabhi kabhi ye bhi kaar gar ho
agar magar kar zabaan jo boli, hua tamaasha bada ajab hai!
tere munaafe ki baat keh dun, bhulaa de maazii ko apne bismil
na jee sakaa hai na mar sake ga, yeh bojh tab tha yeh bojh ab hai
Pradhyuman - Bismil
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gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai?
musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai?
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5th November 2011, 12:14 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by Pradhyuman
Dosto aadaab,
ek ghazal pesh kar rahaa hun..aap ki raey ka intezaar rahega..
behr:
12122 12122
12122 12122
ye ishq agar jo nahiN hai aasaan, to aap-beeti meri talab hai
sabaq mujhe bhi mile to apnaa, khuda ka warna diyaa to sab hai
meri nazar maiN chubhe gareebi, tujhe falak se dikhe nahin hai
yahin pe ghar kar yahin pe daftar tabhi kahun iss jahaan ka rab hai
kahin ubhar kar maiN aa na jaaun, mujhe duba do kisi khushi meiN
jo nikla dil se to ro padunga, maiN gham hun mera yehi sabab hai
sune hai insaan teri hi charche, nakaabo waala tu jaadugar hai
palak jhapakte hi rang badle, teri upaj kya teri nasab hai?
kahaan se aaya kahaan chalaa hun, yahaan ruka kyun pataa nahin hai
meri pasand ka nahin zamaana, mujhe bataa do ki jaana kab hai?
diloeN ki baate nazar ki bhasha, kabhi kabhi ye bhi kaar gar ho
agar magar kar zabaan hai boli, hua tamaasha bada ajab hai!
tere munaafe ki baat keh dun, bhulaa de maazii ko apne bismil
na jee sakaa hai na mar sake ga, yeh bojh tab tha yeh bojh ab hai
Pradhyuman - Bismil
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bhayee bismil ............ kamaal kiyaa hai is baar............. asal shayri hai...... jo chahaaa thaa... wo de diyaa tumne ............. man khush ho gaya hai..
meri nazar maiN chubhe gareebi, tujhe falak se dikhe nahin "KYUN "
yahin pe ghar kar yahin pe daftar tabhi kahun iss jahaan ka rab hai
bana ke ghar fir yahiN basar kar jab hi kahuN is jahan ka rab hai
diloeN ki baate nazar ki bhasha, kabhi kabhi ye bhi kaar gar ho
agar magar kar zabaan hai boli, hua tamaasha bada ajab hai!
dilo ki baateN "zubaaN" nazar ki... kabhi kabhi ho ye karagar bhi ..
"agar magar kar ke baat boli..... "
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sune hai insaan tere hi charche, nakaabo waala tu jaadugar hai
palak jhapakte hi rang badle, teri upaj kya teri nasab hai?
sune hai insaan tere bhi charche, nakaabo waala tu jaadugar hai
palak jhapakte hi rang badle, teri upaj kya teri nasab hai?
? ye hata do..... interrogative mat banao.... hairaani wala expression lao... jydaa khilega mere hisaab se
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kahaan se aaya kahaan chalaa hun, yahaan ruka kyun pataa nahin Kuch
meri pasand ka nahin zamaana, mujhe bataa do ki jaana kab hai?
ek soorat saaani ki ..
zamana mujhko na raas aye.. khudaa batao ki aanaa kab hai
ab is sanai ke hisaab se oolaa chaho to ek baar thoda aur soch sakte ho....
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tere munaafe ki baat keh dun, bhulaa de maazii ko apne bismil
na jee sakaa hai na mar sake ga, yeh bojh tab tha yeh bojh ab hai
bhulaa de maazi .... maazi jydaa khil raha hai
naa jee saka aur na mar sakegaa .. ye bojh tab tha ye bojh ab hai
bhayee maqtaaa to bas jaan hai.......... kamaal hai... saari hi gahzal.....
ise gaate raho..... abhi kuch nikhergaa ..... bahut khaas ghazal hai ye ........
repss meri taraf se duayeN bhi
baki fir dekhte haiN ..
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5th November 2011, 01:38 PM
bahot shukriya janumanu bhai...kuch soorateiN aapne jo di hai mujhe bahot pasand aayi to woh udhaar le rahaa hun aapse..yunhi saath dete rahiyega..aapka sahyog rahaa to ek din zaroor asli shayri karne lagunga...kuch baateiN apni hai jo badalna nahi chahta..aap zaroor samjhenge..god bless
revised one:
ye ishq agar jo nahiN hai aasaan, to aap-beeti meri talab hai
sabaq mujhe bhi mile to apnaa, khuda ka warna diyaa to sab hai
meri nazar maiN chubhe gareebi, tujhe falak se dikhega kaise
bana ke ghar fir yahiN basar kar tabhi kahuN iss jahan ka rab hai
kahin ubhar kar maiN aa na jaaun, mujhe duba do kisi khushi meiN
jo nikla dil se to ro padunga, maiN gham hun mera yehi sabab hai
sune hai insaan teri hi charche, nakaabo waala tu jaadugar hai
palak jhapakte hi rang badle, teri upaj kya teri nasab hai
kahaan se aaya kahaan chalaa hun, yahaan ruka kyun pataa nahin kuch
meri pasand ka nahin zamaana, mujhe thikaane pe aana kab hai?
sadaa ye dil ki, nazar ki baatieN, kabhi kabhi ye bhi kaar gar ho
agar magar kar zabaan jo boli, hua tamaasha bada ajab hai!
tere munaafe ki baat keh dun, bhulaa de maazii ko apne bismil
na jee sakaa hai na mar sake ga, yeh bojh tab tha yeh bojh ab hai
reps aur daad ke liye mamnoon hun..
regards
Pradhyuman - Bismil
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gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai?
musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai?
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5th November 2011, 05:02 PM
wallaah ... zabardast ghazal kahi hai bismil miyaan apney. waah har sher pur asar hai. bahaut hi roohaanee khayalon ko itne personal tareekey se kaha hai yeh khaas laga. waah waah, daad aur mubarakbaad.
Quote:
Originally Posted by Pradhyuman
Dosto aadaab,
ek ghazal pesh kar rahaa hun..aap ki raey ka intezaar rahega..
behr:
12122 12122
12122 12122
ye ishq agar jo nahiN hai aasaan, to aap-beeti meri talab hai
sabaq mujhe bhi mile to apnaa, khuda ka warna diyaa to sab hai
meri nazar maiN chubhe gareebi, tujhe falak se dikhega kaise
bana ke ghar fir yahiN basar kar tabhi kahuN iss jahan ka rab hai
kahin ubhar kar maiN aa na jaaun, mujhe duba do kisi khushi meiN
jo nikla dil se to ro padunga, maiN gham hun mera yehi sabab hai
sune hai insaan teri hi charche, nakaabo waala tu jaadugar hai
palak jhapakte hi rang badle, teri upaj kya teri nasab hai
kahaan se aaya kahaan chalaa hun, yahaan ruka kyun pataa nahin kuch
meri pasand ka nahin zamaana, mujhe thikaane pe aana kab hai?
sadaa ye dil ki, nazar ki baatieN, kabhi kabhi ye bhi kaar gar ho
agar magar kar zabaan jo boli, hua tamaasha bada ajab hai!
tere munaafe ki baat keh dun, bhulaa de maazii ko apne bismil
na jee sakaa hai na mar sake ga, yeh bojh tab tha yeh bojh ab hai
Pradhyuman - Bismil
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5th November 2011, 08:40 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by Pradhyuman
Dosto aadaab,
ek ghazal pesh kar rahaa hun..aap ki raey ka intezaar rahega..
behr:
12122 12122
12122 12122
ye ishq agar jo nahiN hai aasaan, to aap-beeti meri talab hai
sabaq mujhe bhi mile to apnaa, khuda ka warna diyaa to sab hai
meri nazar maiN chubhe gareebi, tujhe falak se dikhega kaise
bana ke ghar fir yahiN basar kar tabhi kahuN iss jahan ka rab hai
kahin ubhar kar maiN aa na jaaun, mujhe duba do kisi khushi meiN
jo nikla dil se to ro padunga, maiN gham hun mera yehi sabab hai
sune hai insaan teri hi charche, nakaabo waala tu jaadugar hai
palak jhapakte hi rang badle, teri upaj kya teri nasab hai
kahaan se aaya kahaan chalaa hun, yahaan ruka kyun pataa nahin kuch
meri pasand ka nahin zamaana, mujhe thikaane pe aana kab hai?
sadaa ye dil ki, nazar ki baatieN, kabhi kabhi ye bhi kaar gar ho
agar magar kar zabaan jo boli, hua tamaasha bada ajab hai!
tere munaafe ki baat keh dun, bhulaa de maazii ko apne bismil
na jee sakaa hai na mar sake ga, yeh bojh tab tha yeh bojh ab hai
Pradhyuman - Bismil
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what to say.. literally speechless .. every line is beautiful...
waisey to saara ka saara hi bahut pasand aaya aur kisi ek sher ki tareef karna mushkil hai magar fir bhi ye ek sher dil ko chhu gaya kahi andar tak
kahin ubhar kar maiN aa na jaaun, mujhe duba do kisi khushi meiN
jo nikla dil se to ro padunga, maiN gham hun mera yehi sabab hai
shuru se lekar anta tak yun laga koi dastaan samete huye hai ye..
jitni taareef karu utni kam hai
Thanks to share such a wonderful creation
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5th November 2011, 09:36 PM
With this ghazal, you have surpassed yourself, Pradhyuman Ji...! The structure is well defined & above all the substance has been well conveyed...!
Your best creation as far, I must say...!
Dher saare daad qabuul kareiN...!
With blessings
Jeene ke liye mujhe ek sapna dedo
Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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6th November 2011, 12:34 AM
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Originally Posted by zarraa
wallaah ... zabardast ghazal kahi hai bismil miyaan apney. waah har sher pur asar hai. bahaut hi roohaanee khayalon ko itne personal tareekey se kaha hai yeh khaas laga. waah waah, daad aur mubarakbaad.
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bahot shukriya zarra s'b..aapki daad dil se kubool hai..khush rahiye..god bless
aapka dost,
Pradhyuman
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gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai?
musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai?
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6th November 2011, 06:30 AM
Behad Shayeraanaa Andaaz MeN Poori Hui Hai Ghazal ... Pradhyuman Ji !
Laajawaab Ashaar .... Asardaar Peshkash .... !
Good Expressions .... SuperB CreatioN .... !
Dilee Daad O Mubaaraqbaad ... !!!
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
---Naresh Mehra----
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6th November 2011, 12:47 PM
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what to say.. literally speechless .. every line is beautiful...
waisey to saara ka saara hi bahut pasand aaya aur kisi ek sher ki tareef karna mushkil hai magar fir bhi ye ek sher dil ko chhu gaya kahi andar tak
kahin ubhar kar maiN aa na jaaun, mujhe duba do kisi khushi meiN
jo nikla dil se to ro padunga, maiN gham hun mera yehi sabab hai
shuru se lekar anta tak yun laga koi dastaan samete huye hai ye..
jitni taareef karu utni kam hai
Thanks to share such a wonderful creation
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shweta ji, thanks for reading and appreciating it..
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gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai?
musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai?
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6th November 2011, 04:03 PM
amanush ji,
yeh to aapki zara nawazi hai sahaab..daad ke liye mamnoon hun.
i hope i keep surpassing myself with every creation..thanks once again for your wishes & blessings..
god bless..take care
aapka dost,
Pradhyuman
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gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai?
musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai?
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6th November 2011, 04:36 PM
ye ishq agar jo nahiN hai aasaan, to aap-beeti meri talab hai
sabaq mujhe bhi mile to apnaa, khuda ka warna diyaa to sab hai
meri nazar maiN chubhe gareebi, tujhe falak se dikhega kaise
bana ke ghar fir yahiN basar kar tabhi kahuN iss jahan ka rab hai
kahin ubhar kar maiN aa na jaaun, mujhe duba do kisi khushi meiN
jo nikla dil se to ro padunga, maiN gham hun mera yehi sabab hai
sune hai insaan teri hi charche, nakaabo waala tu jaadugar hai
palak jhapakte hi rang badle, teri upaj kya teri nasab hai
kahaan se aaya kahaan chalaa hun, yahaan ruka kyun pataa nahin kuch
meri pasand ka nahin zamaana, mujhe thikaane pe aana kab hai?
sadaa ye dil ki, nazar ki baatieN, kabhi kabhi ye bhi kaar gar ho
agar magar kar zabaan jo boli, hua tamaasha bada ajab hai!
tere munaafe ki baat keh dun, bhulaa de maazii ko apne bismil
na jee sakaa hai na mar sake ga, yeh bojh tab tha yeh bojh ab hai
wah bahut khoob bismil saheb maza aa gaya padh kar...
bahut umda khayaalaat pesh kiye haiN aap ne is ghazal ke zariye...
daad aur mubaarqbaad hazir haiN, qubuul kijiyega....
aapka dost,
vikram
'E Taahire Laahuti!!!
Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali
Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho
Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi....
vikramjethi@gmail.com
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10th November 2011, 09:45 PM
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ye ishq agar jo nahiN hai aasaan, to aap-beeti meri talab hai
sabaq mujhe bhi mile to apnaa, khuda ka warna diyaa to sab hai
meri nazar maiN chubhe gareebi, tujhe falak se dikhega kaise
bana ke ghar fir yahiN basar kar tabhi kahuN iss jahan ka rab hai
kahin ubhar kar maiN aa na jaaun, mujhe duba do kisi khushi meiN
jo nikla dil se to ro padunga, maiN gham hun mera yehi sabab hai
sune hai insaan teri hi charche, nakaabo waala tu jaadugar hai
palak jhapakte hi rang badle, teri upaj kya teri nasab hai
kahaan se aaya kahaan chalaa hun, yahaan ruka kyun pataa nahin kuch
meri pasand ka nahin zamaana, mujhe thikaane pe aana kab hai?
sadaa ye dil ki, nazar ki baatieN, kabhi kabhi ye bhi kaar gar ho
agar magar kar zabaan jo boli, hua tamaasha bada ajab hai!
tere munaafe ki baat keh dun, bhulaa de maazii ko apne bismil
na jee sakaa hai na mar sake ga, yeh bojh tab tha yeh bojh ab hai
wah bahut khoob bismil saheb maza aa gaya padh kar...
bahut umda khayaalaat pesh kiye haiN aap ne is ghazal ke zariye...
daad aur mubaarqbaad hazir haiN, qubuul kijiyega....
aapka dost,
vikram
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bahot shukriya vikram bhai..daad ke liye aapka tahe-dil se mamnoon hun...khush rahiye..
aapka dost,
Pradhyuman
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gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai?
musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai?
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11th November 2011, 02:25 AM
kahin ubhar kar maiN aa na jaaun, mujhe duba do kisi khushi meiN
jo nikla dil se to ro padunga, maiN gham hun mera yehi sabab hai
wah bahot khub
bahot badiya expressions
Regards
_______________________________________________ PRANEETA
Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
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11th November 2011, 08:41 AM
kahin ubhar kar maiN aa na jaaun, mujhe duba do kisi khushi meiN
jo nikla dil se to ro padunga, maiN gham hun mera yehi sabab hai
sadaa ye dil ki, nazar ki baatieN, kabhi kabhi ye bhi kaar gar ho
agar magar kar zabaan jo boli, hua tamaasha bada ajab hai!
waahhh.. nice lines pradhyuman.... congratulations for this post...
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2nd December 2012, 04:10 PM
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kahin ubhar kar maiN aa na jaaun, mujhe duba do kisi khushi meiN
jo nikla dil se to ro padunga, maiN gham hun mera yehi sabab hai
sadaa ye dil ki, nazar ki baatieN, kabhi kabhi ye bhi kaar gar ho
agar magar kar zabaan jo boli, hua tamaasha bada ajab hai!
waahhh.. nice lines pradhyuman.... congratulations for this post...
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shukriyaa shaad bhai..kaise ho? umeed hai khairiyat se honge..der se reply karne ke liye maufi chaahta hun
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gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai?
musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai?
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