bismil sahab aadaab....
aapne bahut hi kaamyaab koshish ki hai....wakai dekh kar dil khush ho gaya.
maine ise gaake likha hai.. to kaise kiya woh bhi likh detaa hun..sahi hai yaa galat pataa nahin..maine unn words ko bhi highlight karr diya hai jahaan mujhe doubt hai..dhun mein to aa jaata hai magar comfortably nahin
un he kya ka heN ke ka haa jaa sa ke
la laa laa la laa la
a la laa la la laa( matlab aapka beher hai 122 122 122 12..badan pe sitaare lapete huye)
aapne takhti thodi galat ki hai magar misra perfect wazn me hai !!jaha takhti galat hai waha mark kar deta hu...magar takhti se ka?...aapka wazn to sahi hai
kyu khaa mo shi ko na su naa jaa sa ke
la laa laa la laa la la laa la la laa
bus pahla takhta out hai...baki perfect hai
aise kar sakkte hai...kyu ko aagee kar dijiye
khamoshi ko kyu naa suna jaa sake( kuch log 'naa' par aitraaz kar sakte hai....magar daag sahab,hasrat mohani sahab ne kiya hai to koi aur kaise galat?)
aha khaamoshi ka 'kha' chota hai
wo dil meiN ba se to ra haa jaa sa ke
la laa laa la laa la la laa la la laa
bulls eye
ze hen se na hiN to bhu laa jaa sa ke
la laa laa la laa la la laa la la laa
asl lafz zehn hai(21)...magar aam taur se 'zehan' istemaal hota hai....
aapka misra perfect beher me hai...
mu ho bbat tu aii si ho aa
saan ke hum
la laa laa la laa la la laa la la laa
perfect bhai perefet.....bus aasaa padiye ,aasaan padne ki zarurat nahi
a ke le ji yeiN aur ji yaa jaa sa ke
la laa laa la laa la la laa la la laa
perfect
wo man zil ki
umm ee d kar te ra hen
la laa laa la laa la la laa la la laa
perfect
na jaa na ke kyun na cha la jaa sa ke
la laa laa la laa la la laa la la laa
perfect sir....kya baat hai
mi te gaa ye saa yaa bu jhe gi
sha maa
la laa laa la laa la la laa la la laa
wah....flawless
waise pahle bhi sahi tha( ye lau)
(yaabu ko saath gaaya..short short..aur sha
mmaa ko stress nahi kiya..phir kyaa sahi pronounciation hai ke nahi?
dono lafz sahi hai..shama bhi aur shamma bhi
ra ha kuch jo “maiN” to ja laa ja sa ke
la laa laa la laa la la laa la la laa
smooth...bhai aap to chaa gaye
na rakh naa za maa ne se rish taa bhi koi
la laa laa la laa la la laa la la laa
bus 'bhi'nikal dijiye....baki perfect hai
yun Bis mil ma gar ho ke aa jaa sa ke
la laa laa la laa la la laa la la laa
flawless hai bhai...
pahli koshish me itna perfection hai...you are a natural.....
tarannum kabhi fail nahi hota....thodi practice ho jaaye to misra bilkulsahi beher hi me adaa hota hai.......