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31st March 2005, 08:50 AM
HI FRNDS,
EK LADKI KI ZUBAAN HAI YE DOSTON TO PLZ READ
WO MILA BHI HUMSE AUR CHALA BHI GAYA,
ZINDAGI KA SILSILA MAGAR CHALTA HI GAYA,
CHAHA JITNA BHULA DU USE,
WO DIL ME UTNA BASTA HI GAYA,
BHULE TO NAHI MAGAR CHUPA DIYA HUMNE,
KAHE TO SHAYAD SAB KUCH LOOTA DIYA HUMNE,
SAMJHAYA BHI KHUD KO KI WO BEWAFA THA,
MAGAR WO BEWAFA HUMEIN WAFA SIKHA GAYA,
WAFA BHI AISI JO SIRF USKE LIYE THI,
MAGAR USSE DOOR REHNA HI HAMARI KISMAT THI,
CHAHA BAHUT BULA LU USE USI WAQT AWAAZ DEKAR,
MAGAR YE WAQT BHI RETH SA HATHON SE FISALTA GAYA,
GINE TO NAHI MAGAR KAI DAUR GUZAR GAYE,
DOST BADLE,PYAR BADLA AUR MANJAR BADAL GAYE,
SOCHTE THE HUM KAISE JEE SAKENGE TERE BINA,
MAGAR TERA INTEZAR HUME JINA BHI SIKHA GAYA.
main aur meri tanhayee..............
I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying
jootha hi sahi,
kaash koi mujhe bhi pyar karta.......
«´¨`·..¤-JuBin-¤..·´¨`»
(¸.·'´(¸.·'´* ¤ *`'·.¸)`'·.¸)
log dil ko dard samajhte hai,
ham dard ko dil samajhte hai.....
hui humse ye nadani ki teri mehfil me aa baithe,
ho ke zameen ki khakh aasmaan se dil laga baithe
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Bahot badiya -
31st March 2005, 10:11 AM
Kya likha hai mere Dost....
Bilkul lajawaab kar diya......
Mujhe bahot pasand aaya....
Aise hi likhte rehna......
Ajmal
Dil to kya Cheez hai, Hum Rooh mein Utre Hote...
Tumne Chaha hi nahin Chahne Walon ki Tarha...
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Re: Bahot badiya -
31st March 2005, 10:15 AM
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Kya likha hai mere Dost....
Bilkul lajawaab kar diya......
Mujhe bahot pasand aaya....
Aise hi likhte rehna......
Ajmal
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ajmal ji aapko mera likha pasand aaya jaan kar khushi hui
thanks for the compliments
bas aapka saath raha to zaroor likhenge
thanks again
keeeeeep reading
main aur meri tanhayee..............
I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying
jootha hi sahi,
kaash koi mujhe bhi pyar karta.......
«´¨`·..¤-JuBin-¤..·´¨`»
(¸.·'´(¸.·'´* ¤ *`'·.¸)`'·.¸)
log dil ko dard samajhte hai,
ham dard ko dil samajhte hai.....
hui humse ye nadani ki teri mehfil me aa baithe,
ho ke zameen ki khakh aasmaan se dil laga baithe
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Hiiiii Dard -
31st March 2005, 10:28 AM
I m here dard
Wah .. umda peshkash hai
GINE TO NAHI MAGAR KAI DAUR GUZAR GAYE,
DOST BADLE,PYAR BADLA AUR MANJAR BADAL GAYE,
SOCHTE THE HUM KAISE JEE SAKENGE TERE BINA,
MAGAR TERA INTEZAR HUME JINA BHI SIKHA GAYA.
la-jawaab
jeene waalon se kaho,chaand sitaaron ke liye
jeena padta hai kuch zakhm uthane ke liye
izzajat
karan.q
Fainsle Qayamat taq multavee ho gaye
Sach kahe na gaye to shayri ho gaye
Mai or samander,do gehre khwaab khuda ke.....
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31st March 2005, 04:56 PM
Jubinn ji!
bahot dilkash aur behtarin....rachna hai!
sachh bahot bahott,,,umda!
GINE TO NAHI MAGAR KAI DAUR GUZAR GAYE,
DOST BADLE,PYAR BADLA AUR MANJAR BADAL GAYE,
SOCHTE THE HUM KAISE JEE SAKENGE TERE BINA,
MAGAR TERA INTEZAR HUME JINA BHI SIKHA GAYA.
i jst luved this one....though the whole gazal is js FAB!
tc..keep it up
komal!
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31st March 2005, 04:56 PM
WO MILA BHI HUMSE AUR CHALA BHI GAYA,
ZINDAGI KA SILSILA MAGAR CHALTA HI GAYA,
CHAHA JITNA BHULA DU USE,
WO DIL ME UTNA BASTA HI GAYA,
BHULE TO NAHI MAGAR CHUPA DIYA HUMNE,
KAHE TO SHAYAD SAB KUCH LOOTA DIYA HUMNE,
SAMJHAYA BHI KHUD KO KI WO BEWAFA THA,
MAGAR WO BEWAFA HUMEIN WAFA SIKHA GAYA,
WAFA BHI AISI JO SIRF USKE LIYE THI,
MAGAR USSE DOOR REHNA HI HAMARI KISMAT THI,
CHAHA BAHUT BULA LU USE USI WAQT AWAAZ DEKAR,
MAGAR YE WAQT BHI RETH SA HATHON SE FISALTA GAYA,
GINE TO NAHI MAGAR KAI DAUR GUZAR GAYE,
DOST BADLE,PYAR BADLA AUR MANJAR BADAL GAYE,
SOCHTE THE HUM KAISE JEE SAKENGE TERE BINA,
MAGAR TERA INTEZAR HUME JINA BHI SIKHA GAYA.
Behad khoobsurat Jubin!!
U r writing more n more beautiful every day... Meri daad kubool kar lena.... Doo keep writing.... TC
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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Re: Hiiiii Dard -
31st March 2005, 06:35 PM
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Originally posted by karan q
I m here dard
Wah .. umda peshkash hai
GINE TO NAHI MAGAR KAI DAUR GUZAR GAYE,
DOST BADLE,PYAR BADLA AUR MANJAR BADAL GAYE,
SOCHTE THE HUM KAISE JEE SAKENGE TERE BINA,
MAGAR TERA INTEZAR HUME JINA BHI SIKHA GAYA.
la-jawaab
jeene waalon se kaho,chaand sitaaron ke liye
jeena padta hai kuch zakhm uthane ke liye
izzajat
karan.q
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thanks karan thanks
main aur meri tanhayee..............
I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying
jootha hi sahi,
kaash koi mujhe bhi pyar karta.......
«´¨`·..¤-JuBin-¤..·´¨`»
(¸.·'´(¸.·'´* ¤ *`'·.¸)`'·.¸)
log dil ko dard samajhte hai,
ham dard ko dil samajhte hai.....
hui humse ye nadani ki teri mehfil me aa baithe,
ho ke zameen ki khakh aasmaan se dil laga baithe
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31st March 2005, 06:36 PM
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Jubinn ji!
bahot dilkash aur behtarin....rachna hai!
sachh bahot bahott,,,umda!
GINE TO NAHI MAGAR KAI DAUR GUZAR GAYE,
DOST BADLE,PYAR BADLA AUR MANJAR BADAL GAYE,
SOCHTE THE HUM KAISE JEE SAKENGE TERE BINA,
MAGAR TERA INTEZAR HUME JINA BHI SIKHA GAYA.
i jst luved this one....though the whole gazal is js FAB!
tc..keep it up
komal!
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thanks for the support and compliments komal
keeeeeeeeep reading
main aur meri tanhayee..............
I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying
jootha hi sahi,
kaash koi mujhe bhi pyar karta.......
«´¨`·..¤-JuBin-¤..·´¨`»
(¸.·'´(¸.·'´* ¤ *`'·.¸)`'·.¸)
log dil ko dard samajhte hai,
ham dard ko dil samajhte hai.....
hui humse ye nadani ki teri mehfil me aa baithe,
ho ke zameen ki khakh aasmaan se dil laga baithe
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31st March 2005, 06:37 PM
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Behad khoobsurat Jubin!!
U r writing more n more beautiful every day... Meri daad kubool kar lena.... Doo keep writing.... TC
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thanks pukit sahab
thanks a lot
main aur meri tanhayee..............
I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying
jootha hi sahi,
kaash koi mujhe bhi pyar karta.......
«´¨`·..¤-JuBin-¤..·´¨`»
(¸.·'´(¸.·'´* ¤ *`'·.¸)`'·.¸)
log dil ko dard samajhte hai,
ham dard ko dil samajhte hai.....
hui humse ye nadani ki teri mehfil me aa baithe,
ho ke zameen ki khakh aasmaan se dil laga baithe
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31st March 2005, 07:54 PM
HEY JUBIN NICE AGAIN BUDDY
SACH MEIN KAISE LIKHTE HU ITNA ACHA KUCH RAAZ HUME BHI BATA DO REALLY JUBIN UR WORDS WAS REALLY HEART TOUCHING.
HAR GUM MEIN MUSKURANA SIKHA DIYA HUME TUNE
HAR MUSHKIL MEIN HASANA SIKHA DIYA TUNE
WAFA KI BAATEIN KARTE THE HUM
AB BEWAFAI KA AFSANA KEHNA SIKHA DIYA TUNE
UNFORGETABLE SIMRAN
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unforgetable simran
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Ju PaL mIlE uSs PaL kO jEe lO
sHaYaD kAl Ho Na Ho......
love is seeing yourself in someone's
eyes and finding yourself in somebody's heart!!!!!(*-*)
(¨`·.·´¨) Always
`·.¸(¨`·.·´¨) Keep
(¨`·.·´¨)¸.·´ Smiling!
`·.¸.·´
ITS STATE OF MIND.....
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1st April 2005, 09:26 AM
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HEY JUBIN NICE AGAIN BUDDY
SACH MEIN KAISE LIKHTE HU ITNA ACHA KUCH RAAZ HUME BHI BATA DO REALLY JUBIN UR WORDS WAS REALLY HEART TOUCHING.
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arre simran ji kyu sharminda kar rahe ho hame
thanks for the compliments
ham to aap logon ke saamne kuch nahi hai
keeeeeep reading
main aur meri tanhayee..............
I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying
jootha hi sahi,
kaash koi mujhe bhi pyar karta.......
«´¨`·..¤-JuBin-¤..·´¨`»
(¸.·'´(¸.·'´* ¤ *`'·.¸)`'·.¸)
log dil ko dard samajhte hai,
ham dard ko dil samajhte hai.....
hui humse ye nadani ki teri mehfil me aa baithe,
ho ke zameen ki khakh aasmaan se dil laga baithe
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1st April 2005, 05:22 PM
hey jubin
awesome...!!
is ladki mein main khud ko paati hoon
tumne aisa kuch kaha hai jo mein mehsoos karti hoon
sonal
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1st April 2005, 05:53 PM
its ur thinking jubin aap humse acha hi likhte hai
lakin ek baat hai dard duno ka barabar hai
unforgetable simran
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unforgetable simran
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Ju PaL mIlE uSs PaL kO jEe lO
sHaYaD kAl Ho Na Ho......
love is seeing yourself in someone's
eyes and finding yourself in somebody's heart!!!!!(*-*)
(¨`·.·´¨) Always
`·.¸(¨`·.·´¨) Keep
(¨`·.·´¨)¸.·´ Smiling!
`·.¸.·´
ITS STATE OF MIND.....
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1st April 2005, 06:00 PM
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hey jubin
awesome...!!
is ladki mein main khud ko paati hoon
tumne aisa kuch kaha hai jo mein mehsoos karti hoon
sonal
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sonal ji thanks for the compliments
mujhe khushi hai ki main aisa kuch likh paya jo aapse relate karta hai
main aur meri tanhayee..............
I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying
jootha hi sahi,
kaash koi mujhe bhi pyar karta.......
«´¨`·..¤-JuBin-¤..·´¨`»
(¸.·'´(¸.·'´* ¤ *`'·.¸)`'·.¸)
log dil ko dard samajhte hai,
ham dard ko dil samajhte hai.....
hui humse ye nadani ki teri mehfil me aa baithe,
ho ke zameen ki khakh aasmaan se dil laga baithe
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1st April 2005, 06:02 PM
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its ur thinking jubin aap humse acha hi likhte hai
lakin ek baat hai dard duno ka barabar hai
unforgetable simran
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ok simran ji ab is baat par behes yahi khatam kar dete hai
ha dard ke daur se to dono guzre hai
to dard ek tarah ka hi hoga na
thanks again
main aur meri tanhayee..............
I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying
jootha hi sahi,
kaash koi mujhe bhi pyar karta.......
«´¨`·..¤-JuBin-¤..·´¨`»
(¸.·'´(¸.·'´* ¤ *`'·.¸)`'·.¸)
log dil ko dard samajhte hai,
ham dard ko dil samajhte hai.....
hui humse ye nadani ki teri mehfil me aa baithe,
ho ke zameen ki khakh aasmaan se dil laga baithe
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hi -
1st April 2005, 08:09 PM
wah bahut hi khoob likha aapne..
BHULE TO NAHI MAGAR CHUPA DIYA HUMNE,
KAHE TO SHAYAD SAB KUCH LOOTA DIYA HUMNE,
SAMJHAYA BHI KHUD KO KI WO BEWAFA THA,
MAGAR WO BEWAFA HUMEIN WAFA SIKHA GAYA,
kuch kahunga ispar sirf post reply hi samjhiyega
Agar Seekh li hoti tumne wafa to hum bewafa na kahlate,
Aaye the tere dar par wafa lekar, bewafai saath na liye jaate...
bye tanha
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1st April 2005, 08:39 PM
zubin ...
koi shaq naHI accha likha hai ....
bohat accha lag raha hau tumhara yahan aise likhna
tumhare kalaam ko padh ke kuch yaad aa gaya .,... suna tha yahiN kahiN
khwab dekhe bhi nahi aur toot gaye
wo humse mile bhi nahi aur rooth gaye..
hum jaagte rahe aur duniya soti rahi..
ek barish thi jo satn humare roti rahi...
shayad aapko pasand aaye ... meri daad teh dil se kabool karna ... apna khayal rakhte hue likhte rehna
aapka apna
kunal
KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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1st April 2005, 10:07 PM
Nice one Jubin, I think you sent this to me before right! I like reading it again... keep writing* TC
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Re: hi -
2nd April 2005, 10:19 AM
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wah bahut hi khoob likha aapne..
BHULE TO NAHI MAGAR CHUPA DIYA HUMNE,
KAHE TO SHAYAD SAB KUCH LOOTA DIYA HUMNE,
SAMJHAYA BHI KHUD KO KI WO BEWAFA THA,
MAGAR WO BEWAFA HUMEIN WAFA SIKHA GAYA,
kuch kahunga ispar sirf post reply hi samjhiyega
Agar Seekh li hoti tumne wafa to hum bewafa na kahlate,
Aaye the tere dar par wafa lekar, bewafai saath na liye jaate...
bye tanha
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thanks tanha sahab
apna naam zaroor bataye
nice words by u too
keeeeeeeep reading and writing
main aur meri tanhayee..............
I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying
jootha hi sahi,
kaash koi mujhe bhi pyar karta.......
«´¨`·..¤-JuBin-¤..·´¨`»
(¸.·'´(¸.·'´* ¤ *`'·.¸)`'·.¸)
log dil ko dard samajhte hai,
ham dard ko dil samajhte hai.....
hui humse ye nadani ki teri mehfil me aa baithe,
ho ke zameen ki khakh aasmaan se dil laga baithe
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2nd April 2005, 10:22 AM
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zubin ...
koi shaq naHI accha likha hai ....
bohat accha lag raha hau tumhara yahan aise likhna
tumhare kalaam ko padh ke kuch yaad aa gaya .,... suna tha yahiN kahiN
khwab dekhe bhi nahi aur toot gaye
wo humse mile bhi nahi aur rooth gaye..
hum jaagte rahe aur duniya soti rahi..
ek barish thi jo satn humare roti rahi...
shayad aapko pasand aaye ... meri daad teh dil se kabool karna ... apna khayal rakhte hue likhte rehna
aapka apna
kunal
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kunal ji aap khush to main khush
aapko mera likha pasand aaya jaan kar bahut khushi hui
aapki daad kabul ki kunal ji
kalam ne saath diya to likhte rahenge
arz hai-
saath dete vo agar to hamari zindagi sawar gayi hoti
khushiyo se hamne apni khali jholi bhar li hoti
unki bewafai ke baad socha tha mar jaye
par saath kalam na deti to shayad hamne khudkhushi kar li hoti....
main aur meri tanhayee..............
I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying
jootha hi sahi,
kaash koi mujhe bhi pyar karta.......
«´¨`·..¤-JuBin-¤..·´¨`»
(¸.·'´(¸.·'´* ¤ *`'·.¸)`'·.¸)
log dil ko dard samajhte hai,
ham dard ko dil samajhte hai.....
hui humse ye nadani ki teri mehfil me aa baithe,
ho ke zameen ki khakh aasmaan se dil laga baithe
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2nd April 2005, 10:24 AM
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Nice one Jubin, I think you sent this to me before right! I like reading it again... keep writing* TC
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thanks parul ben for reading it again mara dhyaan ma thi nikdi gayu ke me tamne pella aa molki hati
thanks again
main aur meri tanhayee..............
I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying
jootha hi sahi,
kaash koi mujhe bhi pyar karta.......
«´¨`·..¤-JuBin-¤..·´¨`»
(¸.·'´(¸.·'´* ¤ *`'·.¸)`'·.¸)
log dil ko dard samajhte hai,
ham dard ko dil samajhte hai.....
hui humse ye nadani ki teri mehfil me aa baithe,
ho ke zameen ki khakh aasmaan se dil laga baithe
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Re: Ek Ladki Ki Zubaan......do Read Frnds Its A Request.....imp -
3rd April 2005, 08:22 AM
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Originally posted by dard_thesorrow
HI FRNDS,
GINE TO NAHI MAGAR KAI DAUR GUZAR GAYE,
DOST BADLE,PYAR BADLA AUR MANJAR BADAL GAYE,
SOCHTE THE HUM KAISE JEE SAKENGE TERE BINA,
MAGAR TERA INTEZAR HUME JINA BHI SIKHA GAYA.
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wow jubin ji,
i wish i could write like you, bohot acha likha hai,
wht i have gotten from life is to try to forgetthe person jisne meray saath bewafaii ki, pehle tho aisa meri zindagi main nahin tha, laikin koi 2 weeks pehle ki baat hai jab kisi nain meray saath bhi bewafayee ki...i was completely depressed, but im trying to get my life back on track without that person
*(`'·.¸(`'·.¸*¤*¸.·'´) ¸.·'´)*
»~:¤.·º`·.»WARDA«.·´º·.¤:~«
*(¸.·'´(¸.·'´*¤*`'·.¸)`'·.¸)*
I'm a wanderer...on the roads of life,
marveling at the different plants and flowers
on the way....some hurt, yet some love...
~*~Ek Nanny Si Jaan...Chotta Sa Bacha...Thas Me!~*~
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Re: Re: Ek Ladki Ki Zubaan......do Read Frnds Its A Request.....imp -
3rd April 2005, 08:27 AM
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wow jubin ji,
i wish i could write like you, bohot acha likha hai,
wht i have gotten from life is to try to forgetthe person jisne meray saath bewafaii ki, pehle tho aisa meri zindagi main nahin tha, laikin koi 2 weeks pehle ki baat hai jab kisi nain meray saath bhi bewafayee ki...i was completely depressed, but im trying to get my life back on track without that person
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mukhra ji kyu sharminda kar rahi hai hame aap
ham kaha itna accha likhte hai
acchi likhawat padhni hai to
rohin sahab,pulkit sahab,kunalji,meenaa didi in ki padhiye
ham to jazbaat bayaan karte hai vo to aisa likhte hai ki kalam rone par majboor ho jati hai
ha ab to zindagi chal rahi hai unki yaad me
par i will get back to normalcy again
thanks mukhra ji
main aur meri tanhayee..............
I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying
jootha hi sahi,
kaash koi mujhe bhi pyar karta.......
«´¨`·..¤-JuBin-¤..·´¨`»
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log dil ko dard samajhte hai,
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hui humse ye nadani ki teri mehfil me aa baithe,
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3rd April 2005, 08:42 AM
jubin ji,
your shayri is very good, yes rohin bhai, meena di, and all are good, but you are good too
you have written wht was in your heart, and you never know when it could turn into something completely spectacular
aur main tho abhi sirf shayri ki duniya main new hoon, so i have a long way to go
take care
mukhra
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Re: Ek Ladki Ki Zubaan......do Read Frnds Its A Request.....imp -
3rd April 2005, 11:15 AM
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HI FRNDS,
EK LADKI KI ZUBAAN HAI YE DOSTON TO PLZ READ
WO MILA BHI HUMSE AUR CHALA BHI GAYA,
ZINDAGI KA SILSILA MAGAR CHALTA HI GAYA,
CHAHA JITNA BHULA DU USE,
WO DIL ME UTNA BASTA HI GAYA,
BHULE TO NAHI MAGAR CHUPA DIYA HUMNE,
KAHE TO SHAYAD SAB KUCH LOOTA DIYA HUMNE,
SAMJHAYA BHI KHUD KO KI WO BEWAFA THA,
MAGAR WO BEWAFA HUMEIN WAFA SIKHA GAYA,
WAFA BHI AISI JO SIRF USKE LIYE THI,
MAGAR USSE DOOR REHNA HI HAMARI KISMAT THI,
CHAHA BAHUT BULA LU USE USI WAQT AWAAZ DEKAR,
MAGAR YE WAQT BHI RETH SA HATHON SE FISALTA GAYA,
GINE TO NAHI MAGAR KAI DAUR GUZAR GAYE,
DOST BADLE,PYAR BADLA AUR MANJAR BADAL GAYE,
SOCHTE THE HUM KAISE JEE SAKENGE TERE BINA,
MAGAR TERA INTEZAR HUME JINA BHI SIKHA GAYA.
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dear jubin,
first of all very srry for replying u late. i was in hell of a condition so was unable to reply u before. aaj tumhara yeh kalam pada,acha laga.sach mein dil ko chu gaya.is kalam ne mujhe mere dost se bhichadne yaad dilaya, so felt like replying u ahead. really awesome n well written dear. i had read it before too. u posted it on the other site too. well wow wat a depth of thoughts in ur post. sach mein jab pehle padi thi tab iska ehsaas kuch kam hua tha, magar aaj is kalam ko pad ke sach mein aapne dost ko khone ka gam ka ehsaas hua.gr8 as usual n one more thing buddy.its gud to see tht u are writing so well n watever u wished tht all shud reply u,look now everyone has showered their love for u. keep going buddy. all the best for future too.
aap kya jano kya hota hai dard judai ka
humse yeh poocho kaisa haal hota hai tanhai ka
maut ko laga lete hai majboor hokar gale yaaron
aisa hota hai hasher jab bhi hota hai,ruswai ka!
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3rd April 2005, 09:14 PM
bahut khoob likha hai dost bakayi dil se likha hai
please keep it up
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3rd April 2005, 09:59 PM
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jubin ji,
your shayri is very good, yes rohin bhai, meena di, and all are good, but you are good too
you have written wht was in your heart, and you never know when it could turn into something completely spectacular
aur main tho abhi sirf shayri ki duniya main new hoon, so i have a long way to go
take care
mukhra
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i agree mukhra ji
khair is behes ko yahi khatam karte hai
aur aapse bas itni hi guzarish hai saaath dete rehna
main aur meri tanhayee..............
I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying
jootha hi sahi,
kaash koi mujhe bhi pyar karta.......
«´¨`·..¤-JuBin-¤..·´¨`»
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log dil ko dard samajhte hai,
ham dard ko dil samajhte hai.....
hui humse ye nadani ki teri mehfil me aa baithe,
ho ke zameen ki khakh aasmaan se dil laga baithe
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Re: Re: Ek Ladki Ki Zubaan......do Read Frnds Its A Request.....imp -
3rd April 2005, 10:01 PM
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dear jubin,
first of all very srry for replying u late. i was in hell of a condition so was unable to reply u before. aaj tumhara yeh kalam pada,acha laga.sach mein dil ko chu gaya.is kalam ne mujhe mere dost se bhichadne yaad dilaya, so felt like replying u ahead. really awesome n well written dear. i had read it before too. u posted it on the other site too. well wow wat a depth of thoughts in ur post. sach mein jab pehle padi thi tab iska ehsaas kuch kam hua tha, magar aaj is kalam ko pad ke sach mein aapne dost ko khone ka gam ka ehsaas hua.gr8 as usual n one more thing buddy.its gud to see tht u are writing so well n watever u wished tht all shud reply u,look now everyone has showered their love for u. keep going buddy. all the best for future too.
aap kya jano kya hota hai dard judai ka
humse yeh poocho kaisa haal hota hai tanhai ka
maut ko laga lete hai majboor hokar gale yaaron
aisa hota hai hasher jab bhi hota hai,ruswai ka!
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thanks for the reply jas
thanks for all the support and love u have given me
thanks
main aur meri tanhayee..............
I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying
jootha hi sahi,
kaash koi mujhe bhi pyar karta.......
«´¨`·..¤-JuBin-¤..·´¨`»
(¸.·'´(¸.·'´* ¤ *`'·.¸)`'·.¸)
log dil ko dard samajhte hai,
ham dard ko dil samajhte hai.....
hui humse ye nadani ki teri mehfil me aa baithe,
ho ke zameen ki khakh aasmaan se dil laga baithe
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3rd April 2005, 10:02 PM
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bahut khoob likha hai dost bakayi dil se likha hai
please keep it up
naresh
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naresh ji thanks for the compliments
keeeeeeep reading
main aur meri tanhayee..............
I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying
jootha hi sahi,
kaash koi mujhe bhi pyar karta.......
«´¨`·..¤-JuBin-¤..·´¨`»
(¸.·'´(¸.·'´* ¤ *`'·.¸)`'·.¸)
log dil ko dard samajhte hai,
ham dard ko dil samajhte hai.....
hui humse ye nadani ki teri mehfil me aa baithe,
ho ke zameen ki khakh aasmaan se dil laga baithe
{nt mine}
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Re: Ek Ladki Ki Zubaan......do Read Frnds Its A Request.....imp -
4th April 2005, 02:43 PM
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HI FRNDS,
EK LADKI KI ZUBAAN HAI YE DOSTON TO PLZ READ
WO MILA BHI HUMSE AUR CHALA BHI GAYA,
ZINDAGI KA SILSILA MAGAR CHALTA HI GAYA,
CHAHA JITNA BHULA DU USE,
WO DIL ME UTNA BASTA HI GAYA,
BHULE TO NAHI MAGAR CHUPA DIYA HUMNE,
KAHE TO SHAYAD SAB KUCH LOOTA DIYA HUMNE,
SAMJHAYA BHI KHUD KO KI WO BEWAFA THA,
MAGAR WO BEWAFA HUMEIN WAFA SIKHA GAYA,
WAFA BHI AISI JO SIRF USKE LIYE THI,
MAGAR USSE DOOR REHNA HI HAMARI KISMAT THI,
CHAHA BAHUT BULA LU USE USI WAQT AWAAZ DEKAR,
MAGAR YE WAQT BHI RETH SA HATHON SE FISALTA GAYA,
GINE TO NAHI MAGAR KAI DAUR GUZAR GAYE,
DOST BADLE,PYAR BADLA AUR MANJAR BADAL GAYE,
SOCHTE THE HUM KAISE JEE SAKENGE TERE BINA,
MAGAR TERA INTEZAR HUME JINA BHI SIKHA GAYA.
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fantastic
~~~~~~~Khushiii~~~~~~~
smile n make others also smile
those sparkling eyes
A 100 watt smile
the majestic walk
the cheerful talk
truly charming personality
Guess,thats enough abt me :D
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thaank u for rating it to this extent khushiii ji
keeeeeeeeeep reading.......aur bhi posts hai
main aur meri tanhayee..............
I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying
jootha hi sahi,
kaash koi mujhe bhi pyar karta.......
«´¨`·..¤-JuBin-¤..·´¨`»
(¸.·'´(¸.·'´* ¤ *`'·.¸)`'·.¸)
log dil ko dard samajhte hai,
ham dard ko dil samajhte hai.....
hui humse ye nadani ki teri mehfil me aa baithe,
ho ke zameen ki khakh aasmaan se dil laga baithe
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9th April 2005, 04:35 PM
HuM Ne To KhaiR TuJh Se ShiKaYaT KaBhi Na ki
AiSa Nahi Ke Dil Ne BaGhaWaT KaBhi Na Ki
KiS HaaL MaiN Hai TeRe SaTaYe HoYe GhaReeB
TuNe Yeh PooChNe Ki ZehMaT KaBhi Na Ki
MehSooS Kia KaRe Ga Woh AuRoN Ke DaRD Ko
JiS Ne KhuD ApNe Aap Se UlFaT{MuHaBbat } KaBhi Na Ki.......... .
ApNA AsGheR......
Where we live is home, Home that our feet may
leave, But not our hearts.
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HuM Ne To KhaiR TuJh Se ShiKaYaT KaBhi Na ki
AiSa Nahi Ke Dil Ne BaGhaWaT KaBhi Na Ki
KiS HaaL MaiN Hai TeRe SaTaYe HoYe GhaReeB
TuNe Yeh PooChNe Ki ZehMaT KaBhi Na Ki
MehSooS Kia KaRe Ga Woh AuRoN Ke DaRD Ko
JiS Ne KhuD ApNe Aap Se UlFaT{MuHaBbat } KaBhi Na Ki.......... .
ApNA AsGheR......
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asgher sahab
aapki tareef me to shabd bhi kam padh jaye
bahut khooob isi tarah likhte rehna
main aur meri tanhayee..............
I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying
jootha hi sahi,
kaash koi mujhe bhi pyar karta.......
«´¨`·..¤-JuBin-¤..·´¨`»
(¸.·'´(¸.·'´* ¤ *`'·.¸)`'·.¸)
log dil ko dard samajhte hai,
ham dard ko dil samajhte hai.....
hui humse ye nadani ki teri mehfil me aa baithe,
ho ke zameen ki khakh aasmaan se dil laga baithe
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9th April 2005, 07:00 PM
its my pleasure to have u here sir
thanks for the compliments
ye to aap logon ka saath hai is liye ham yaha hai
bas saath dete rehna
main aur meri tanhayee..............
I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying
jootha hi sahi,
kaash koi mujhe bhi pyar karta.......
«´¨`·..¤-JuBin-¤..·´¨`»
(¸.·'´(¸.·'´* ¤ *`'·.¸)`'·.¸)
log dil ko dard samajhte hai,
ham dard ko dil samajhte hai.....
hui humse ye nadani ki teri mehfil me aa baithe,
ho ke zameen ki khakh aasmaan se dil laga baithe
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18th April 2005, 03:48 PM
Bahut khub...........bahut sahi farmaaya aapne Jubin ji
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hi -
18th April 2005, 08:29 PM
too good .........sachchai hai iss poem main ...........
sabka gum dekh ke hum apna gum bhull gaye ...............
++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++==
har khushi ek dard ke saaye main hota hai
har gum ek khushi ke saaye maine hota hai
jaise subhh ke baad raat or raat ke baad savera hota hai
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Bada hua to kya hua jaisay paid khajoor,
Panthi ko chhaya nahin, phal laagen ati door.
Nahaye dhoye kya bhala jo man ka mail na jaay
Meen sada jal mein rahe par tan ki baas na jaay
Akath Kahani Prem Ki, Kutch Kahi Na Jaye
Goonge Keri Sarkara, Baithe Muskae
.................................bye and tc ..................
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Bahut khub...........bahut sahi farmaaya aapne Jubin ji
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thanks nimishaji thanks alot
keep reading
main aur meri tanhayee..............
I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying
jootha hi sahi,
kaash koi mujhe bhi pyar karta.......
«´¨`·..¤-JuBin-¤..·´¨`»
(¸.·'´(¸.·'´* ¤ *`'·.¸)`'·.¸)
log dil ko dard samajhte hai,
ham dard ko dil samajhte hai.....
hui humse ye nadani ki teri mehfil me aa baithe,
ho ke zameen ki khakh aasmaan se dil laga baithe
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Re: hi -
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too good .........sachchai hai iss poem main ...........
sabka gum dekh ke hum apna gum bhull gaye ...............
++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++==
har khushi ek dard ke saaye main hota hai
har gum ek khushi ke saaye maine hota hai
jaise subhh ke baad raat or raat ke baad savera hota hai
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chandsi ji
thaks for reading
main aur meri tanhayee..............
I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying
jootha hi sahi,
kaash koi mujhe bhi pyar karta.......
«´¨`·..¤-JuBin-¤..·´¨`»
(¸.·'´(¸.·'´* ¤ *`'·.¸)`'·.¸)
log dil ko dard samajhte hai,
ham dard ko dil samajhte hai.....
hui humse ye nadani ki teri mehfil me aa baithe,
ho ke zameen ki khakh aasmaan se dil laga baithe
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19th April 2005, 05:05 PM
ek behtareeen pic
which i thought matches with the lines above
do tell me u r views
main aur meri tanhayee..............
I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying
jootha hi sahi,
kaash koi mujhe bhi pyar karta.......
«´¨`·..¤-JuBin-¤..·´¨`»
(¸.·'´(¸.·'´* ¤ *`'·.¸)`'·.¸)
log dil ko dard samajhte hai,
ham dard ko dil samajhte hai.....
hui humse ye nadani ki teri mehfil me aa baithe,
ho ke zameen ki khakh aasmaan se dil laga baithe
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