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11th June 2006, 12:34 PM
Dosto...
Malum nahin kya kya likh gayi hoon...ek sailaab aaya...behne diya..."duusron ki jai se pehle khud ko jai karein"...kuchh aisa hi khayaal thaa dil mein... Bheekh maangu tujhse raahat ki Hargiz meri aadat nahin Dard lekar aaye tu roz naye Khushi dene ki tujhmein jurrat nahin? Parkha hai dekha hai tujhe bahut Tu koyi dil fareyb murat nahin Bhar lete tujhko baahon mein Par aisee ab chahat nahin Mehaka na saki meri saanson ko Teri raakh ki bhi zaroorat nahin Raushan hai meri aas ka tara kya sehar ki meri koyi surat nahin? Dol jaaon teri ik halchal se Kya mujhmein koyi taaqat nahin? De aag tau aur nikhar jaaongi Jalegi ruuh main aur sanwar jaaongi Inteha se teri hai bana Astitva mera Main tujhko hi maat kar jaaongi…main tujhkho maat kar jaaongi gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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11th June 2006, 01:05 PM
Raushan hai meri aas ka tara
kya sehar ki meri koyi surat nahin? Dol jaaon teri ik halchal se Kya mujhmein koyi taaqat nahin? Namaskar Paras ji Aapke in shabdon ko padh ek lafz zubaan se nikla beautiful words with the boldness of thoughts......kafi samey ke bad aapka aisa qalam padha bahut acha laga.....yuun hi likhti rahiye Take care |
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11th June 2006, 04:21 PM
Bheekh maangu tujhse raahat ki
Hargiz meri aadat nahin Dard lekar aaye tu roz naye Khushi dene ki tujhmein jurrat nahin? hmmmm... nice expression... Parkha hai dekha hai tujhe bahut Tu koyi dil fareyb murat nahin Bhar lete tujhko baahon mein Par aisee ab chahat nahin waaaah... very welll expressed... Mehaka na saki meri saanson ko Teri raakh ki bhi zaroorat nahin Raushan hai meri aas ka tara kya sehar ki meri koyi surat nahin? beautifulll... Dol jaaon teri ik halchal se Kya mujhmein koyi taaqat nahin? De aag tau aur nikhar jaaongi Jalegi ruuh main aur sanwar jaaongi Inteha se teri hai bana Astitva mera Main tujhko hi maat kar jaaongi…main tujhkho maat kar jaaongi waaaaaah... Dear Paras, This one is very well written.. It's different... Ek to tumne is baar ehsaasaatko baandha nahin... you just let them flow... which adds to the expressiveness plus ek alag si arrogance hai isme.... rebelling thoughts... Mujhe to bahut accha laga... do keep writing different things... take care  Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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12th June 2006, 10:36 AM
paras meri behna
haan yeh baat hui naan;;; is kalam mein hamari behan ek mazboot, aur buhaadur larki ke roop mein saamne aayee hai. apna tashakkhus, apni khudi, apni anaa, apni rivayet sab ki paasdaari ki hai tum ne apne is nazm mein. go ke apna dard tum is mein bhi chupaa to naheen saki ho mager tum ne is mein apni khuddaari aur apni shakhsiyet ki mazbooti ko bohat khoobsurti se bayaan kiyaa hai. shabaash. meri dua hai ke tum isi tarah mazboot aur tawaana raho aur zindagi ki her odds aur her mushkilaat ko khatem ker ke zindagi ki haqiqi khushiyaan haasil karo. musharrafhusain |
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13th June 2006, 10:12 AM
bahut khoob.....bahut khoob.....!!
paras ji dard k baad use jhel kar itni bahaduri se seena taan kar fir se andhiyo.n ka saamna karne ki taakat..... ye to hame aap se seekhna chahiye....such me hame jine ki raah dikhate hai aap k is tareh k kalaam....aur hame bhi josh se bher dete hai.... bahut kam log hote hai jo gamo k baad muskura paate hai...aur vo zazba..vo jindadili...hamne aapke kai kalaamo me ya u kahiye..her kalaam me mehsoos ki hai...bhagwaan aapko aisi adrishye shakti se u hi nawaaze rakhe...aur aap apne aap ko is duniya k julmo-karam se khud ko isi tareh se mehfooz rakhe...ye hamari dua hai.. hame b aapke kalaam se dukho ko sehne ka hausla mila...thanks for sharing this... |
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13th June 2006, 04:37 PM
Dard lekar aaye tu roz naye
Khushi dene ki tujhmein jurrat nahin? Parkha hai dekha hai tujhe bahut Tu koyi dil fareyb murat nahin Bhar lete tujhko baahon mein Par aisee ab chahat nahin Mehaka na saki meri saanson ko Teri raakh ki bhi zaroorat nahin Raushan hai meri aas ka tara kya sehar ki meri koyi surat nahin? priye paaras kya baat hai...!!! wah...>!!!! magar "dard" par "wah" keh raha hoon..!!! bahoot purasar kalaam likha hai tumne...khuddari aur faqr ka jazbba jhalakta hai.... "hamse jamana khud hai jamane se ham nahin" yeh line tumhare kalaam par yaad aa gayi...ek dil se nikle kalaam par meri daad kubool kijiye apna khayal rkahiye. -MANOJ karte hai jo "kureel" se gila karte rahein. |
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13th June 2006, 06:27 PM
meri Paras,
tumhari meena |
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13th June 2006, 06:45 PM
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Par aisee ab chahat nahin Mehaka na saki meri saanson ko Teri raakh ki bhi zaroorat nahin kya baat hai aapa bahut khub yuhi likhte rahiye. sakhi with love शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे |
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14th June 2006, 03:56 AM
Paras di
the best thing is u let the feeling that run deep flow so smoothly, which isnt an easy task to do Dard lekar aaye tu roz naye Khushi dene ki tujhmein jurrat nahin? wah, this one has so much dard chipa in it do....intense lines and an attitude...ki hame to dard ki aadat hi pad gayi hai, par tujh me zindagi himmat nahi, hame khushi de sake Luv ya Priya ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Jisnu Lagey, ohi'yo jaane, Kaun Jaane peer parayi! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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14th June 2006, 10:51 AM
Pranaam Paras Ji
Kisi vishay ka varnan karne mein aapka koi saani nahin. Bahaut alag andaaz mein aap ehsaason ko shabd deti hain jinhe parhkar aapse bahaut kuch seekhney ko dil karta hai. v i p i n 
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19th June 2006, 12:09 PM
Sukanya...
aapka mujhe padhna hamesha mere liye garv kee baat rahi hai...kyunki mujhe malum hai ki kis shiddat se aap padhti hain har kalaam ko...shukria hausla afzaayi ke liye... apna bhi khayaal rakhiye...fall ke baad spring ka aana bhi laazmi hai...aapki post dekh kar likh diya...gaya waqt waapis tau nahin aata magar ek renewal hamesha hoti rehti hai zindagi mein...hai na... gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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19th June 2006, 12:11 PM
Sweet Pulkit...
And I thought you could never tell...the Arrogant and Rebellious Paras...  that is megayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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19th June 2006, 12:51 PM
Lol Bhayyia...
Kitne khush hain na iss ruup mein apni Behan ko dekh kar...Good. Main aapko khush hee dekhna chahti hoon...lekin mera tau haal kuchh yeh hai ki... merii himmat dekhanaa merii tabiiyat dekhanaa jo sulajh jaatii hai gutthii phir se ulajhaataa huu.N mai.n Jigar muradabadi gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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wow.......Great .......! |
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19th June 2006, 05:15 PM
Paras ji
aapko maine padda bahut hai, par appki tareef karney ko mere paas shabad hi nahi hai. so har baar pad kar hi rah jatti hu. mujhe samaj nahi aata ki kin shabdo mai appko kahu ki bahut badiya likhti hai app. mujhe shayri jayada nahi aati par shayri pasand bahut hai, kyuki esks ek ek shabad dil ke kareeb hota hai. mai dua karti hu ki app hamesha yu hi likhti rahey, all the best. .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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20th June 2006, 08:35 AM
Gam-e-lashkar ji...
Itni khuubsurat daad aap deinge tau samajhiye ki hamein tau ek award hi mil gaya...agar yeh kalaam padhne waalon mein josh bharta hai tau mera likhna waqayi mein kaamyaab hua...apki dua bhi sar aankhon par...bhawaan yeh adrishye shakti hum sabko dein...kyunki zindagi sehal nahin hai...aap apna khayaal rakhieyga...aur yoonhi hamara saath dete rahieyga... gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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20th June 2006, 08:39 AM
Priye Manoj...
Shukr hai...ki iss kalaam mein tumhein koyi dikkat pesh nahin aayi ...lol...aur tum samajh paaye ki main kya kehna chahti hoon...mujhe padhne aur daad dene ke dil se shukriyaa... gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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22nd June 2006, 08:00 PM
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Aapne hamare post ko parha aur saraha bahut kushi hui...and thanks for the lovely and inspirational words... Take care |
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24th June 2006, 12:15 PM
Meri Pyaari Meena ji…
Chiin se laut aayin Madam…ek tukra Great Wall ka laayi ki nahin…mujhe padhne ke liye shukriyaa… ------ Arre Sakhi, meri Gudiya… Kaisee ho…tumhein pasand aaya yeh kalaam…khushi huyi jaankar…khayaal rakhna apna…luv you --------- Ohh Priya Priya… Tum jab bhi mere kalaam pe jawaab deti ho…dil khush ho jaata hai..yup Di has an attitude…you like that? Don’t you?…me too luv you… gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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24th June 2006, 12:18 PM
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aapki inaayat hai jo aap ko hamari koshishein pasand aati hain...warna tau jo khud seekh raha ho wo kya kisi ko sikhaayega...khayal rakhieyga apna... gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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Aapke jaise sarahne waale hon tau jee bhi karega ki likhte raho...beauty is in the eyes of a beholder...do keep coming...take care gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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25th June 2006, 01:09 AM
Hi Dearest Dearest Paras Jee!
"De aag tau aur nikhar jaaongi Jalegi ruuh main aur sanwar jaaongi Inteha se teri hai bana Astitva mera Main tujhko hi maat kar jaaongi…main tujhkho maat kar jaaongi" The Divine is always unexpressable..... What u wrote is just what the divine is all about.... Anything but not expectations.... This is how It gotta be.... Divine feelings indeed.... Touched deep inside.... Trust me Warmest Regards Yours' Sush इस भरे शहर में हम Dard-e-Sush, जो न पाया उसे भी खोते हैं! lab pe muskaan ko liye ae dost, kandhon pe laash apni dhote hein is bhare sheher me ham dard-e-sush, jo na paaya use bhi khote hein |
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27th June 2006, 07:39 PM
paras dd,
kya baat hain tumhare ke iss kalam ki, bahot khoob. achha laga parh ke. keep writting. take care! |
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28th June 2006, 04:33 AM
Dear Sush...
how nice to see you again over here...i m glad my poem touched you the way it did...and you felt like commenting upon it...take care of yourself...millions banane ki zidd mein hamein bhuul nahin jaana ok? gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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28th June 2006, 04:35 AM
Shukriya Parul...
Tumne itna busy hote huye bhi di ke liye waqt nikala...bahut achha laga...khush raho..khilkhilaati raho tumhari di gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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