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mehke mehke shabaab ki baateN...(Ghazal) -
28th September 2006, 07:17 AM
aadaab aur SSA dosto
kuch arsaa qabl maine ek qitaa post kiya tha jo ke kaafi dinoN se zehan meiN karvateiN le raha tha....usii behr aur zamiin meiN ye Ghazal kehne ki koshish ki hai..... mulai'zaa kijiye :- mehke mehke shabaab ki baateN uski baateN , gulaab ki baateN usko khona tha baat kismat ki uska milna hai khwaab ki baateN aaj dil khol kar pilaa saaqi kal kareNge hisaab ki baateN kaun sunta hai yaar duniya meiN humse khaana kharaab ki baateN hum gareeboN se puuch kar dekho aalam-e-izteraab* ki baateN izteraab = ghabraahaT , anxiety ya karo zikr unkii aaNkhoN ka ya to jaam-e-sharaab ki baateN bewafaa keh rahe haiN vo humko tauba tauba !! janaab ki baateN Ghazal-e-"maikash" meiN aur hoga kya dard-o-Gham aur sharaab ki baateN apnii araa se zaruur nawaazeN khair aNdesh maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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28th September 2006, 08:05 AM
[QUOTE]Originally posted by maikasH
mehke mehke shabaab ki baateN uski baateN , gulaab ki baateN usko khona tha baat kismat ki uska milna hai khwaab ki baateN waah kya baat hai aaj dil khol kar pilaa saaqi kal kareNge hisaab ki baateN kaun sunta hai yaaro duniya meiN humse khaana kharaab ki baateN hum gareeboN se puuch kar dekho aalam-e-izteraab* ki baateN izteraab = ghabraahaT , anxiety ya karo zikr unkii aaNkhoN ka ya to jaam-e-sharaab ki baateN bewafaa keh rahe haiN vo humko tauba tauba !! janaab ki baateN behad umda sher hai waah Ghazal-e-"maikash" meiN aur hoga kya dard-o-Gham aur sharaab ki baateN janab maikash sahab aadab janab maine aapko jab se padna shuru kiya hai, aapli shayri main maine ek alag hi nasha paya hai.. ek ajeeb si kashish hoti hai aapki shayri main. or har sher behad umda hota hai. sabse sanjeeda baat jo mujhe nazar aati hai wo ye ki aapki gazal main ek rawangi hoti hai ek continuity hoti hai.... janab bahut hi behtreen gazal likhi hai aapne har baar ki tarah ek dam juda....... dil se daad hazir hai janab kabool farmaiyega........ ek begana sa dost dilip  " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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Re: mehke mehke shabaab ki baateN...(Ghazal) -
28th September 2006, 10:14 AM
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maikash ji namaskar...! bahut umda likha hai aapne, aapke ke likhney ka tareeka sab se alag hai, aapki rachna dil ko chu gaye. aur kuch share to bahut laajwaab lagey, jaise ki : usko khona tha baat kismat ki uska milna hai khwaab ki baateN aaj dil khol kar pilaa saaqi kal kareNge hisaab ki baateN yu hi likhtey rahiye....! aapki dost  .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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28th September 2006, 11:33 AM
maikash ji """" KEM CHHO??????????""""
kaise ho janab aap? pasand aaya bahot hi likhga hua bas aise hi likhte rahiye janab aapko padhna achha lagta hai aapka dost dhaval |
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28th September 2006, 11:54 AM
ya karo zikr unkii aaNkhoN ka
ya to jaam-e-sharaab ki baateN bewafaa keh rahe haiN vo humko tauba tauba !! janaab ki baateN Ghazal-e-"maikash" meiN aur hoga kya dard-o-Gham aur sharaab ki baateN janaab sandhu sahib sat sri akaal ji..... appki gazal hai ya heera koi tarasha hua, andhere main chehra nazar aane laaga raat ka...... jab kabhi chalti hai teri kalam bekhudi main, wo waqt hota hai lafzon se misre ki mulakaat ka...... janaab jiyada to nahi kahounga bass yahi kehta hoon ki appki kalam yu hee rawa rahe or hum pyaso ki pyaas bhujati rahe.......take care........raj....... ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj) |
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Re: mehke mehke shabaab ki baateN...(Ghazal) -
29th September 2006, 02:50 PM
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aapke is sher ne dil pe kya qehar kiya hai batana mushkil hai ... bohat hi umda gazal ko mera salaam... aap apna khayal rakhiye aapka apna Kunal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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29th September 2006, 08:43 PM
pranam maikash ji.
kaise hai aap........... aaj dil khol kar pilaa saaqi kal kareNge hisaab ki baateN kya maikash ji aap to maikhane ka divala nikalvaoge........... Unhi agar hissab ki baten aap kal par chhodne lage to koi sakhi aapko jam nahi degi sochlijiyega janaab. Un to aapne ye line bahot achhi likhi hai ,sachchi. bewafaa keh rahe haiN vo humko tauba tauba !! janaab ki baateN Tauba tauba !! maikash ji ki gazal. Ye thhoda sa funny laga. Maffkijiye ise funny bolne ke liye, lekin jo laga bol diya. jo nahi laga vo kaise bol den hum. hum gareeboN se puuch kar dekho aalam-e-izteraab* ki baateN janaab aapne bhi apna naam ''maikash'' soch samajh ke rakha. har baar sharaab ka jikar. wah wah.... ab thhodi tariff bhi karni chahiye aapki, aapne bahot achha likha hai. mujhe to bas tarif me yahi kahana ata hai. bas mein isi kadar achhe kalaam ki tarif karti hu. ab agar aapko kuchh bura laga to dant lijiye saath me hume gustakhi ke liye maaf bhi kar dijiyega. ab hum ijajat chahenge ji aapse......apne is khoobsoorat gazal se iss mehafiil ko roshan karne ke liye shukriya ji. ok ji bye bye graze aapki dost pooja  ===========Deepika=========== Pyaar Hai Yaa sazaa ayi mere Dil bataa Toot'ta Kyu.N naHi.N Dard Kaa Silsilaa
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29th September 2006, 08:58 PM
mehke mehke shabaab ki baateN
uski baateN , gulaab ki baateN usko khona tha baat kismat ki uska milna hai khwaab ki baateN bahut khoob janaab... aaj dil khol kar pilaa saaqi kal kareNge hisaab ki baateN kaun sunta hai yaar duniya meiN humse khaana kharaab ki baateN kya baat hai... hum gareeboN se puuch kar dekho aalam-e-izteraab* ki baateN ya karo zikr unkii aaNkhoN ka ya to jaam-e-sharaab ki baateN whaaa... bahut khoob... bewafaa keh rahe haiN vo humko tauba tauba !! janaab ki baateN Ghazal-e-"maikash" meiN aur hoga kya dard-o-Gham aur sharaab ki baateN Kya baat hai.... bahut hi khoobusrat aashaar hain... Dear Maikash bhai, Adaab, kaise hain? Ummeeed hai sab acche se hoga.... Bahut hi khoobsurat aur asardaar ghazal likhi hai aapne... padhakr bahut hi accha laga... meri daad kubool kijiyega... isi tarah likhte rahiye... khayal rakhiyega apna... Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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Re: Re: mehke mehke shabaab ki baateN...(Ghazal) -
30th September 2006, 04:31 AM
[QUOTE]Originally posted by dilip200
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aadaab miyaaN aapne apna qeemati waqt kharch kiya is haqeer si Ghazal pe tabsiraa karne ke liye , bada maskhuur huuN aapka bhai koshish to yahi rehti hai ke wazam meiN she'r kahuuN, aapko Ghazal ravaaN lagii samajhiye mujhe meri mehnat ka silaa mil gaya aapki daad sar aaNkhoN par saahab aur izzat afza'ii ke saath saath hauNslaa badhaane ke liye mera shukriya alag se qabuul farmaaiye ummiid hai aayiiNda bhi aapka saath milta rahega rab raakha maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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30th September 2006, 05:39 AM
sunita jee
namashkaar ye aap jaise dosto ki murravat hai jo itna hausla badhaate haiN, aapko mere sukhan meiN nayapan nazar aaya, jaan kar achcha lagaa, koshish karta huuN ke urdu ke mushkil alfaaz baratne se parhez karuuN aur jitna ho sake wazan meiN kehne ki koshish karuuN aapne Ghazal ke chaNd ash'aar khusuusan pasaNd farmaaye, behadd shukurguzaar huuN aapka rab raakha maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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30th September 2006, 05:43 AM
dhaval bhai
jai shri krishna bhai manne gujrati nathi aavde chhe...!! mere ek bohat ache dost ka naam bhi dhaval hai, ahmedabad se hai aur aaj kal london meiN hai uska sirname barot hai, aapse baat karte hue uski yaad aa jaati hai maiN khairiiyat se huuN aur ummiid hai ke aapke mijaaz-e-giraami bhi ba'kahir hoNge Ghazal ki pazira'ii ke liye shukriya qabuul kijiye saahab rab raakha maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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2nd October 2006, 04:36 AM
sir, kaise hain aap? umeed hai khairiyat se hi honge.........
rahi baat kalaam ki, to yakeenan bahut hi umda kalaam hai.aur har aasaar pukhta hai khud me.bahut hi aam lafzon me bahut kuch keh raha hai ye kalaam............ ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ http://alfaaz-e-taish.blogspot.in/ Ishq hota tha, ishq karte haiN, Vo zamana tha, ye zamana hai... ----Taish ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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3rd October 2006, 12:30 PM
Maikash Sahib...
Aap tau jo bhi likh dein...seedhe dil pe chot hoti hai...yeh kalaam bhi saaf, saada aur khuub asardaar raha...yoon tau saare ashaar ek se ek badhkar hain...lekin ek sher ko baar baar padhne ko jee chahaa... usko khona tha baat kismat ki uska milna hai khwaab ki baateN Waah! Bus is sher ne tau jaan hi le lee...phir se hamari mehfil sajaane ke liye bahut bahut shukriyaa... gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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5th October 2006, 08:39 AM
rajveer saahab
Sat Sri Akaal aapko ye haqeer si Ghazal pasaNd aayi yeh mere liye khushi ki baat hai, koshish karuNga ke aa'iiNda bhi aapki ummiidoN par khara utar ke dikhaa sakuN rab raakha maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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miyaaN aapka ye bayaan padh kar yuuN lagaa goya aap aur maiN ek hi marz ke sataaye hue haiN  aapka salaam tasleem hazrat bohat shukriya rab raakha maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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9th October 2006, 09:01 AM
_/|\_ Sat Shri Akal Veer ji
usko khona tha baat kismat ki uska milna hai khwaab ki baateN ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~ ishq aakhda eh tera kakh reheN ve nai dena, chup reheN ve ne dena, tay kuch keheN ve nai dena. |
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baaqi gallaN baad wich, pehlaaN eh dasso ke tusi aine din rahe kitthe....? maiN keha si ke mainu khabar zaruur karna jadoN UK aao taaN, tusaaN saar vi nai layi...... veer da haal chaal vi puchhnoN gaye hun te......!!! khush raho rab raakha maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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31st October 2006, 10:50 AM
Sat Shri Akaal _/|\_
Jis din thwadi eh bhen apne pyare veer nu phul jaaye ge, oh din meri zindagi da aakhri din hove ga. Asi UK aan da zikar thwanu email vich tay offline ve keeta se, Lakin thwada koi jawab nai aaya. Fir soochiya ke shyaad veer he apni bhen nu bhul gaya hove ga... email zaroor karna... Thwadi shoti bhen ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~ ishq aakhda eh tera kakh reheN ve nai dena, chup reheN ve ne dena, tay kuch keheN ve nai dena. |
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1st November 2006, 12:50 AM
Beauiful Shayris.........keep On Posting
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1st November 2006, 10:41 AM
Fantastic.....!!!
jitni baar padha jaye... utna man karta hai!!! Maikash sahab .. Sir jukaate hai aapki kalam k Dabaar mein!!!! |
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