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4th March 2013, 10:35 PM
Samajh jaaegaa Dil ko samjhaa ke dekho,
Agar Na-samajh hai to Dhamkaa ke dekho.
SimaTnee lagee ab hayaa bhi Tumhaari,
Na aise hame , haaye Sharmaa ke dekho.
Falak bhi jhukegaa gale se lagaane,
Zaraa deyr BaahoN ko Phailaa ke dekho.
DhaDaktaa hai dil ab teraa naam Leke,
Nahii Maante to qareeb aa ke dekho.
Ye Be-damm FizaaeN abhi jee utheNgee,
Hawaa me Dupatte ko Lehraa ke dekho.
Ye patthar kaheeN ho na jaaeN Sahem kar,
Kabhi Aankh se Momm Pighlaa ke dekho.
Shaad...
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4th March 2013, 10:57 PM
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Originally Posted by sameer'shaad'
Samajh jaaegaa Dil ko samjhaa ke dekho,
Agar Na-samajh hai to Dhamkaa ke dekho.
SimaTnee lagee ab hayaa bhi Tumhaari,
Na aise hame , haaye Sharmaa ke dekho.
Falak bhi jhukegaa gale se lagaane,
Zaraa deyr BaahoN ko Phailaa ke dekho.
DhaDaktaa hai dil ab teraa naam Leke,
Nahii Maante to qareeb aa ke dekho.
Ye Be-damm FizaaeN abhi jee utheNgee,
Hawaa me Dupatte ko Lehraa ke dekho.
Ye patthar kaheeN ho na jaaeN Sahem kar,
Kabhi Aankh se Momm Pighlaa ke dekho.
Shaad...
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Masha Allah bohat khoob shaad sahab..bohat hi khoobsurat kalaam hai...
Dil se dheroN daad qubool kijiye....
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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5th March 2013, 01:28 PM
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Originally Posted by zainy
Masha Allah bohat khoob shaad sahab..bohat hi khoobsurat kalaam hai...
Dil se dheroN daad qubool kijiye....
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behad shukrguzaar hoon aapka Zainy saahibaa.... tashreef laati raheN.... khush raheN...
Shaad...
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5th March 2013, 03:15 PM
Shaad Bhai Aadaab... !
Kyaa baat hai janab waaH dil shaad ho gaya aapki kalaam padhkar..
bade hi khoobsurat ahsaas O khayaal rahe janab...
Aur kafi nasihat bhari kalaam kahi hai aapne...
Meri hazaaroN dili daad O mubbarakbad kabul kijiye...
Likhate rahiye... bazm ko aabaad karte rahiye...
Khuda Hafez...
Quote:
Originally Posted by sameer'shaad'
Samajh jaaegaa Dil ko samjhaa ke dekho,
Agar Na-samajh hai to Dhamkaa ke dekho.
Hahahahahaha Janab achcha matla hai... agar nasamjh hai toH dhamka ke dekho...
SimaTnee lagee ab hayaa bhi Tumhaari,
Na aise hame , haaye Sharmaa ke dekho.
kya kahne janab waaH bada achcha sher hai daad...
Falak bhi jhukegaa gale se lagaane,
Zaraa deyr BaahoN ko Phailaa ke dekho.
Achcha sher hai janab apke is sher se mujhe Javed Akhtar ka khayaal yaad aa gaya...
AasmaaN simat aayeNga tumhare aaghosh meiN
Chahat ki baaheN failaa kar to dekho
DhaDaktaa hai dil ab teraa naam Leke,
Nahii Maante to qareeb aa ke dekho.
WaaH waaH janab bada achcha khayaal kaha hai, hum bhi khud ko kaheNge kabhi aazmaa ke dekho...
Ye Be-damm FizaaeN abhi jee utheNgee,
Hawaa me Dupatte ko Lehraa ke dekho.
Kya baat hai janab... aap bhi badi ishqiyaaN shayari karte hai...
Ye patthar kaheeN ho na jaaeN Sahem kar,
Kabhi Aankh se Momm Pighlaa ke dekho.
Hmmmm Bhai yeH sher meri samjh ke upar se gaya...
Shaad...
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5th March 2013, 03:24 PM
sameer jee kya rumani khyaal liye aapka kalaam hai......bahut khoob.
एक हाथ में दिल उनके एक हाथ में खंजर था
चेहरे पे दोस्त का मुखौटा अजीब सा मंजर था
Arvind Saxena
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5th March 2013, 04:28 PM
Samajh jaaegaa Dil ko samjhaa ke dekho,
Agar Na-samajh hai to Dhamkaa ke dekho.
Hahahahahaha Janab achcha matla hai... agar nasamjh hai toH dhamka ke dekho...
BEhad shukriyaa bhaijaan..... aap aaye bahaar aai...
SimaTnee lagee ab hayaa bhi Tumhaari,
Na aise hame , haaye Sharmaa ke dekho.
kya kahne janab waaH bada achcha sher hai daad...
Daad ke liye tahe dil se mashkoor hoon aapka....
Falak bhi jhukegaa gale se lagaane,
Zaraa deyr BaahoN ko Phailaa ke dekho.
Achcha sher hai janab apke is sher se mujhe Javed Akhtar ka khayaal yaad aa gaya...
AasmaaN simat aayeNga tumhare aaghosh meiN
Chahat ki baaheN failaa kar to dekho
Bhai main sach kahun to is isher se bilkul anjaan thaa.. ye mahez ek ittefaaq hai jo javed saahab ke khayaal se hamaare shaayd 2,4 % mil rahe hain... baaki hamaari koi bisaat kahaan jo hum un jaise khyaaalon ko apne sheroN me dhaal saken..... waise shukriyaa jo aapne is sher ko itnii tavajjoh dee....
DhaDaktaa hai dil ab teraa naam Leke,
Nahii Maante to qareeb aa ke dekho.
WaaH waaH janab bada achcha khayaal kaha hai, hum bhi khud ko kaheNge kabhi aazmaa ke dekho...
Zaroor bhai Zaroor.. kehte hain na, sacche pyaar me jab tak aazmaaish ke mauqe na aayen, ishq muqammal nahi hotaa.... main to kehta hoon aaj hi jaaiye aur aazmaaish de aaiye..
Ye Be-damm FizaaeN abhi jee utheNgee,
Hawaa me Dupatte ko Lehraa ke dekho.
Kya baat hai janab... aap bhi badi ishqiyaaN shayari karte hai...
Kya karen saahab , aap jaise doston ki sohbat me haiN to thodaa bahot seekh rahe hain.. aur jo kuch bhi seekha hai wo aap sab ki duaaon ka silaa hai.... shukriyaa...
Ye patthar kaheeN ho na jaaeN Sahem kar,
Kabhi Aankh se Momm Pighlaa ke dekho.
Hmmmm Bhai yeH sher meri samjh ke upar se gaya...
Bhai bahot simple sa sher hai... ke koi apna gham duniya ke saamne ro dho kar jata leta hai.. aur koi aisa hota hai jo lakh koshishon ke bavjood bhi unhe kisi ke saamne nahi aane detaa..
to bas si sher me ye kaha hai ke ab to Ro lo warna kahin ye aankhen jamm ke pathar na ho jaaeN, mom pighalne se matlab yahaaN hai aansuon ka aaana...
hope ke ab main samjha saktne me qamyab hau hounga....
shukriyaa bhai....
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Originally Posted by kwahish
Shaad Bhai Aadaab... !
Kyaa baat hai janab waaH dil shaad ho gaya aapki kalaam padhkar..
bade hi khoobsurat ahsaas O khayaal rahe janab...
Aur kafi nasihat bhari kalaam kahi hai aapne...
Meri hazaaroN dili daad O mubbarakbad kabul kijiye...
Likhate rahiye... bazm ko aabaad karte rahiye...
Khuda Hafez...
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Aadaab Sameer saahab....
Awwal to khush aamdeed to arse baad aap bazm me tashreef laaye...
Baad iske kalaam ki pazeeraai aur pasandeedgii pe main aapka trahe dil se mashkoor o mamnoon huaa...
meri khushnaseebi jo aapko ye adna se alfaaz mutmaeen kar sake... guzaarish hai aage bhi yuNhi hauslaa-afzaai aapki taraf se miltii rahe.. aate rahen bhai.. apna khyaal rakkheN....
Allaah hafiz........
Shaad....
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6th March 2013, 11:21 AM
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Originally Posted by sameer'shaad'
Samajh jaaegaa Dil ko samjhaa ke dekho,
Agar Na-samajh hai to Dhamkaa ke dekho.
SimaTnee lagee ab hayaa bhi Tumhaari,
Na aise hame , haaye Sharmaa ke dekho.
Falak bhi jhukegaa gale se lagaane,
Zaraa deyr BaahoN ko Phailaa ke dekho.
DhaDaktaa hai dil ab teraa naam Leke,
Nahii Maante to qareeb aa ke dekho.
Ye Be-damm FizaaeN abhi jee utheNgee,
Hawaa me Dupatte ko Lehraa ke dekho.
Ye patthar kaheeN ho na jaaeN Sahem kar,
Kabhi Aankh se Momm Pighlaa ke dekho.
Shaad...
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Nihaayat UmdaaH Ashaar Se Aarasata
Khoobsurat Ghazal Huii ... Shaad Bhai
Dilee Mubaaraqbaad !!!
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
---Naresh Mehra----
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7th March 2013, 08:11 AM
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Originally Posted by aru
sameer jee kya rumani khyaal liye aapka kalaam hai......bahut khoob.
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bahot bahot shukriyaa Aru bhai... meri khushnaseebi hai jo ye kalaam aapkko pasand aaya......
aate rahen.... padhte rahen
Shaad...
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7th March 2013, 04:27 PM
bahut achhi ghazal kahii sameer saaheb..
kuch ashaar to bahut hi achhe ban pare
daad humaarii jaanib se bhi
Qubool farmaaeiN
apna khyaal rakheiN
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7th March 2013, 05:07 PM
aadaab Shaad miyaaN
bhai ek aur gohar Tapkaa hai aapki qalam se
yaqeenan aapka sukhan laayaq-e-tahseen hai aur meri taraf se dheroN mubarakbaad qabool kariyega
maqta jamaa kar dete to aur acha rehta
rab raakha
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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7th March 2013, 07:43 PM
Samajh jaaegaa Dil ko samjhaa ke dekho,
Agar Na-samajh hai to Dhamkaa ke dekho.
wahh....kamaal hai ye sher.....!!!
SimaTnee lagee ab hayaa bhi Tumhaari,
Na aise hame , haaye Sharmaa ke dekho.
Behad khubsurat.....!!!
Falak bhi jhukegaa gale se lagaane,
Zaraa deyr BaahoN ko Phailaa ke dekho.
Good one.......!!!
DhaDaktaa hai dil ab teraa naam Leke,
Nahii Maante to qareeb aa ke dekho.
Lvly........!!!
Ye Be-damm FizaaeN abhi jee utheNgee,
Hawaa me Dupatte ko Lehraa ke dekho.
Nice one....!!!
Ye patthar kaheeN ho na jaaeN Sahem kar,
Kabhi Aankh se Momm Pighlaa ke dekho.
Shaad jee, bahut hi khoobsurat ghazal likhi hai apnee......!! dil se dher sari duaaaein & daad hazir hai....qabool kijiyega....!! Aise hi likhte rahiyeee.......!!! Khush rahiyee......!!!
KAVITA NEGI
Hame ehbab ki lambi qataron sy nahi matlab..........!!
Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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7th March 2013, 08:22 PM
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Originally Posted by sameer'shaad'
Samajh jaaegaa Dil ko samjhaa ke dekho,
Agar Na-samajh hai to Dhamkaa ke dekho.
SimaTnee lagee ab hayaa bhi Tumhaari,
Na aise hame , haaye Sharmaa ke dekho.
Falak bhi jhukegaa gale se lagaane,
Zaraa deyr BaahoN ko Phailaa ke dekho.
DhaDaktaa hai dil ab teraa naam Leke,
Nahii Maante to qareeb aa ke dekho.
Ye Be-damm FizaaeN abhi jee utheNgee,
Hawaa me Dupatte ko Lehraa ke dekho.
Ye patthar kaheeN ho na jaaeN Sahem kar,
Kabhi Aankh se Momm Pighlaa ke dekho.
Shaad...
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Tasleemaat Muhataram Janaab Sameer Shaad Bhaaee!! Maazratkhwaa hoon taakheer e haazree kay liayay! Bhaee ayk aalaatareen ghazal ki takmeel par dhayron mobarakbaad! Aapki is tehreer nay hamay masroor kiya khoon tou bayhad choti baat hogee! Buhat aala takhayyul wa andaaz e bayaan! Janaab ham is kashmakash mayn mubtela hayn ki itnee khoobsoorat tehreer ka shayri e dard section mayn kya kaam?? Aksariyat e ashaar muhabbat kay samandar mayn gharq karnay walay hayn! Aap behter jaantayn hayn, dhayraon daad bayshumaar daad hamri jaanib say saahab!
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7th March 2013, 10:19 PM
Shaad bhaii:
namaste!
bahot hi Khoob Ghazal kahii hai aapne... dil Shaad-Shaad ho gayaa ! yuuNhi bazm ki Shaan ko baDhaate rahiye aage bhee... KhuSh rahiye... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
aapka
~Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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8th March 2013, 12:09 PM
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Nihaayat UmdaaH Ashaar Se Aarasata
Khoobsurat Ghazal Huii ... Shaad Bhai
Dilee Mubaaraqbaad !!!
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Behad masarrat haasil hui aapki aamad dekh kar Mehra saab.... aur usse bhi zyaada khushi ye dekh kar ke aapko ye koshish pasand aai...
hausla afzaai ka behad shukriyaa.. aate raheN...
Shaad...
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8th March 2013, 12:11 PM
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Originally Posted by kshitiz
bahut achhi ghazal kahii sameer saaheb..
kuch ashaar to bahut hi achhe ban pare
daad humaarii jaanib se bhi
Qubool farmaaeiN
apna khyaal rakheiN
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Bazm me tashreef laane ke liye awwal to shukrguzaar hoon aapka Andaaz saahab... khushnaseebi meri jo aapko ye kalaam pasand aaya.... aage bhi tashreef laate rahen... apna khyaal rakhen..
Shaad...
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9th March 2013, 11:40 AM
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Originally Posted by maikasH
aadaab Shaad miyaaN
bhai ek aur gohar Tapkaa hai aapki qalam se
yaqeenan aapka sukhan laayaq-e-tahseen hai aur meri taraf se dheroN mubarakbaad qabool kariyega
maqta jamaa kar dete to aur acha rehta
rab raakha
maikash
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aadaab o tasleemaat Maikash saahab...
aapki nazroN ka taqaaza hai janaab warnaa khaaaksaaar ki na to auqaat hai na bisaat koi.. aapki deedaae zauq ka shukrguzaar hoon.... tashreef laate raheN... apna khyaal rakkhen..
Shaad...
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9th March 2013, 10:12 PM
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Originally Posted by Kavita Negi
Samajh jaaegaa Dil ko samjhaa ke dekho,
Agar Na-samajh hai to Dhamkaa ke dekho.
wahh....kamaal hai ye sher.....!!!
SimaTnee lagee ab hayaa bhi Tumhaari,
Na aise hame , haaye Sharmaa ke dekho.
Behad khubsurat.....!!!
Falak bhi jhukegaa gale se lagaane,
Zaraa deyr BaahoN ko Phailaa ke dekho.
Good one.......!!!
DhaDaktaa hai dil ab teraa naam Leke,
Nahii Maante to qareeb aa ke dekho.
Lvly........!!!
Ye Be-damm FizaaeN abhi jee utheNgee,
Hawaa me Dupatte ko Lehraa ke dekho.
Nice one....!!!
Ye patthar kaheeN ho na jaaeN Sahem kar,
Kabhi Aankh se Momm Pighlaa ke dekho.
Shaad jee, bahut hi khoobsurat ghazal likhi hai apnee......!! dil se dher sari duaaaein & daad hazir hai....qabool kijiyega....!! Aise hi likhte rahiyeee.......!!! Khush rahiyee......!!!
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Bahot bahot shukriyaa aaapka Kavita jii.............
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13th March 2013, 04:18 PM
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Tasleemaat Muhataram Janaab Sameer Shaad Bhaaee!! Maazratkhwaa hoon taakheer e haazree kay liayay! Bhaee ayk aalaatareen ghazal ki takmeel par dhayron mobarakbaad! Aapki is tehreer nay hamay masroor kiya khoon tou bayhad choti baat hogee! Buhat aala takhayyul wa andaaz e bayaan! Janaab ham is kashmakash mayn mubtela hayn ki itnee khoobsoorat tehreer ka shayri e dard section mayn kya kaam?? Aksariyat e ashaar muhabbat kay samandar mayn gharq karnay walay hayn! Aap behter jaantayn hayn, dhayraon daad bayshumaar daad hamri jaanib say saahab!
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ahmad saahab aadaab...
janaab aapki beenaai aur pazeeraai pe sadqe jaauN... kamaal ka zauq rakhte hain aap... asal me ye kalaam muhabbat me saarabor hai magar dil me kahin na kahin wo kasak wo tees baaki hi hai to nazar amooman nahi aati....
aapko kalaam pasand aaya ye meri khushnaseebi hai.... aur aage bhi ummeed karunga ke aap bazm me tashreef laate rahenge... shukriyaa bhaai....
Shaad...
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13th March 2013, 04:20 PM
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Originally Posted by Dhaval
Shaad bhaii:
namaste!
bahot hi Khoob Ghazal kahii hai aapne... dil Shaad-Shaad ho gayaa ! yuuNhi bazm ki Shaan ko baDhaate rahiye aage bhee... KhuSh rahiye... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
aapka
~Dhaval
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bahot bahot shukriyaa Dhaval bhai jo aapk nacheez ka ye adna sa kalaam umda nazar aaya..... aur shaad shaad ke to kya kehne wahhhh
apni duaaoN me yaad rakhiyegaa bhai...... shukiyaa
Shaad....
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16th March 2013, 10:42 AM
Sameer
aaj pehli baar aap ki post per haazir huaahoon.
behad khoobsurat ashaar se aaraasta aap ka yeh kalaam parh ke mein mehwe hairat hoon.
bohat hi behtreen ashaar, khoobsurat andaaz-e-bayaan,
aap ne behad muttassir kiya hai mujhe.
matla aap ki qaabliyet ki daastaan sunaa raha hai. tashbih aur istuaraat ka khoobsurat istemaal isey hi kehte hain.
dua go hoon aap ke zoar-e-qalam ke liye.
God bless you.
musharrafhusain
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17th March 2013, 10:14 PM
Samajh jaaegaa Dil ko samjhaa ke dekho,
Agar Na-samajh hai to Dhamkaa ke dekho.
Saani zaraa munaasib nahi lagta mujhe.....,
Ziddi ko dhamkana to durust, magar nasamjh ko raah par laane ke liye lafz ‘dhamkana’ sahi nisbat nahi .
Ab bhale hi vo dil kyu na ho.
So agar saani aisa sa ho...to ziyada munasib hai
Samajh jaaegaa Dil ko samjhaa ke dekho,
Agar Na-samajh hai to bahkaa ke dekho.
....yaar ,dil ko mithaii dekar bahkaoo,...use daraoo nahi..
Bus ,isliye kah raha hu ki ek acche qalaam me ye aib nazar aa raha hai.
SimaTnee lagee ab hayaa bhi Tumhaari,
Na aise hame , haaye Sharmaa ke dekho.
Ye sher mujhe bahut vague lagta hai....
ulaa aur saani alag alag baat kah rahe hai...
Jabki sher ke design se ye to pata lag raha hai ki aap kya kahna chahte hai, magar mere hisaab se
Alfaaz saath nahi de rahe hai..
Ek surat mai batata hu...maine ise aisa hi samjha hai,,,koi aur matlab ho to aap bata sakte hai.
SimaTnee lagee hai hayaa bhi Tumhaari,
ab itna bhi humko na Sharma ke dekho
Falak bhi jhukegaa gale se lagaane,
Zaraa deyr BaahoN ko Phailaa ke dekho.
sahab, bus ye kahunga ki is tarah ka personification mere taste ka nahi...itna visible personification ulaa me...aur phir wahi premise bana saani ka idea complete karne ke liye...
magar filmi style to hai hi...geet ka...
DhaDaktaa hai dil ab teraa naam Leke,
Nahii Maante to qareeb aa ke dekho.
yaha adressal gadbad ho gaya...ghazal ka radeef 'dekho' hai....so 'tumhaari' adressal hai.
waise bhi ek dusre sher me aapne 'tumhari' adressal directly istemaal kiya hai....
so yaha 'tera ' nahi khapega.
yu ho sakta hai....
=tumhare liye hi dhadakta hai ab dil
=dhadakta hai dil naam hi se tumhaare.
ek clean aur saaf sher hai ye...bus general hai.
magar jab bhi suno aisa sher accha hi lagta hai.
Ye Be-damm FizaaeN abhi jee utheNgee,
Hawaa me Dupatte ko Lehraa ke dekho.
'bedam' aur 'jee' accha rabta hai....aur ek tarah se bedam ko jee ne bacha liya....
ye sher mujhe accha laga.
meri taraf se daad sahab .
Ye patthar kaheeN ho na jaaeN Sahem kar,
Kabhi Aankh se Momm Pighlaa ke dekho.
ankho me asar ho ke mom pighal jaaye....ab usse ankhe sahm kar pattahr na ho...iska matlab.
ye baat alag ke mai aapki baat samh gaya...magar vo maine samjha hai..aapne kaha nahi.
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aapko to pata hi hai ki mai aapka kitna bada fan hu. aapki ghazal mujhe roughly hamesha hi acchi lagti hai.
magar ye rough cut hai. mujhe yakeen hai aapne isme koi kaam nahi kiya...yaha bhi khaka ek bahut acchi ghazal ka hai...bus aap sunane me jaldbaazi kar gaye.
waise bhi galib sahab ne 10000 sher likhe..magar generally sabko vo saare dus hazaar pasand nahi...bus kuch 10 -20 sher hai jinse log unko yaad karte hai.
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ek baat aur, ye kahne ki zarurat nahi ki ye mera personal opinion hai.
so zaair hai bilkul galat bhi ho sakta hai....aur mai ye baat ek yaha ke takiya kalaam ki tarah nahi kah raha hu. bahut sincerely kah raha hu...
kabhi kabhi logo ko bus kuch accha lagta hai...wajah ki zarurat nahi...ye ghazal unme se ek bhi ho sakti hai.
regards.
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18th March 2013, 08:35 AM
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Samajh jaaegaa Dil ko samjhaa ke dekho,
Agar Na-samajh hai to Dhamkaa ke dekho.
Saani zaraa munaasib nahi lagta mujhe.....,
Ziddi ko dhamkana to durust, magar nasamjh ko raah par laane ke liye lafz ‘dhamkana’ sahi nisbat nahi .
Ab bhale hi vo dil kyu na ho.
So agar saani aisa sa ho...to ziyada munasib hai
Samajh jaaegaa Dil ko samjhaa ke dekho,
Agar Na-samajh hai to bahkaa ke dekho.
....yaar ,dil ko mithaii dekar bahkaoo,...use daraoo nahi..
Bus ,isliye kah raha hu ki ek acche qalaam me ye aib nazar aa raha hai.
SimaTnee lagee ab hayaa bhi Tumhaari,
Na aise hame , haaye Sharmaa ke dekho.
Ye sher mujhe bahut vague lagta hai....
ulaa aur saani alag alag baat kah rahe hai...
Jabki sher ke design se ye to pata lag raha hai ki aap kya kahna chahte hai, magar mere hisaab se
Alfaaz saath nahi de rahe hai..
Ek surat mai batata hu...maine ise aisa hi samjha hai,,,koi aur matlab ho to aap bata sakte hai.
SimaTnee lagee hai hayaa bhi Tumhaari,
ab itna bhi humko na Sharma ke dekho
Falak bhi jhukegaa gale se lagaane,
Zaraa deyr BaahoN ko Phailaa ke dekho.
sahab, bus ye kahunga ki is tarah ka personification mere taste ka nahi...itna visible personification ulaa me...aur phir wahi premise bana saani ka idea complete karne ke liye...
magar filmi style to hai hi...geet ka...
DhaDaktaa hai dil ab teraa naam Leke,
Nahii Maante to qareeb aa ke dekho.
yaha adressal gadbad ho gaya...ghazal ka radeef 'dekho' hai....so 'tumhaari' adressal hai.
waise bhi ek dusre sher me aapne 'tumhari' adressal directly istemaal kiya hai....
so yaha 'tera ' nahi khapega.
yu ho sakta hai....
=tumhare liye hi dhadakta hai ab dil
=dhadakta hai dil naam hi se tumhaare.
ek clean aur saaf sher hai ye...bus general hai.
magar jab bhi suno aisa sher accha hi lagta hai.
Ye Be-damm FizaaeN abhi jee utheNgee,
Hawaa me Dupatte ko Lehraa ke dekho.
'bedam' aur 'jee' accha rabta hai....aur ek tarah se bedam ko jee ne bacha liya....
ye sher mujhe accha laga.
meri taraf se daad sahab .
Ye patthar kaheeN ho na jaaeN Sahem kar,
Kabhi Aankh se Momm Pighlaa ke dekho.
ankho me asar ho ke mom pighal jaaye....ab usse ankhe sahm kar pattahr na ho...iska matlab.
ye baat alag ke mai aapki baat samh gaya...magar vo maine samjha hai..aapne kaha nahi.
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aapko to pata hi hai ki mai aapka kitna bada fan hu. aapki ghazal mujhe roughly hamesha hi acchi lagti hai.
magar ye rough cut hai. mujhe yakeen hai aapne isme koi kaam nahi kiya...yaha bhi khaka ek bahut acchi ghazal ka hai...bus aap sunane me jaldbaazi kar gaye.
waise bhi galib sahab ne 10000 sher likhe..magar generally sabko vo saare dus hazaar pasand nahi...bus kuch 10 -20 sher hai jinse log unko yaad karte hai.
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ek baat aur, ye kahne ki zarurat nahi ki ye mera personal opinion hai.
so zaair hai bilkul galat bhi ho sakta hai....aur mai ye baat ek yaha ke takiya kalaam ki tarah nahi kah raha hu. bahut sincerely kah raha hu...
kabhi kabhi logo ko bus kuch accha lagta hai...wajah ki zarurat nahi...ye ghazal unme se ek bhi ho sakti hai.
regards.
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Aadaab janaab Zidd saahab...
aap jaise aala shora mehfil me tashreeef laate hain to sach maniye tabiyat khil uthtii hai... aur jab tabsiraa aap farmaaeN to lillaah kya kehne....
mere paas aapki baat kaatne ka ek lafz bhi nahi hai na hauslaa.... bas itna jaaanta hoon aapne kaha hai to sach hi hai....
ek baat aur kehnaa hai....
Aapki nazroN se bach paana Mushkil hi nahi, namumkin hai saahab....
insha Allah agli dafaa se aisi choti moti bhool chook na hoN ye main koshish karoonga.....
Shukriyaa jo aap tashreef laaye.....
Shaad...
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18th March 2013, 08:38 AM
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Sameer
aaj pehli baar aap ki post per haazir huaahoon.
behad khoobsurat ashaar se aaraasta aap ka yeh kalaam parh ke mein mehwe hairat hoon.
bohat hi behtreen ashaar, khoobsurat andaaz-e-bayaan,
aap ne behad muttassir kiya hai mujhe.
matla aap ki qaabliyet ki daastaan sunaa raha hai. tashbih aur istuaraat ka khoobsurat istemaal isey hi kehte hain.
dua go hoon aap ke zoar-e-qalam ke liye.
God bless you.
musharrafhusain
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Assalamoalaikum Mushi bhai.....
Behad khushnaseebi janaab hamaari jo aap aaj bazm me pahli dafaa tashreef laye.... yaqeen maniye yoon lag raha hai ke likhne ka silaa mil gaya ho....
behad masarrat ka sabab hai jo aapne matle ki pazeeraai farmaai...... aur jo bhi bas thoda bahot toota phoota likh paat ahoon wo sab aap dostoN ki duaaon ka nateeja hai......
tashreef laate rahen.... apna khayal rakhen
Shaad...
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23rd March 2013, 02:01 PM
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Originally Posted by sameer'shaad'
Samajh jaaegaa Dil ko samjhaa ke dekho,
Agar Na-samajh hai to Dhamkaa ke dekho.
SimaTnee lagee ab hayaa bhi Tumhaari,
Na aise hame , haaye Sharmaa ke dekho.
Falak bhi jhukegaa gale se lagaane,
Zaraa deyr BaahoN ko Phailaa ke dekho.
DhaDaktaa hai dil ab teraa naam Leke,
Nahii Maante to qareeb aa ke dekho.
Ye Be-damm FizaaeN abhi jee utheNgee,
Hawaa me Dupatte ko Lehraa ke dekho.
Ye patthar kaheeN ho na jaaeN Sahem kar,
Kabhi Aankh se Momm Pighlaa ke dekho.
Shaad...
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laajawaab
dil se daad shaad ji
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25th March 2013, 12:20 PM
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laajawaab
dil se daad shaad ji
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Behad shukriyaa aapka Neetu jee............... aati rahiyega....
Shaad...
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26th March 2013, 02:43 PM
shaad bhai,
jitni pasand mujhe aapki ye ghazal aayi utna hi pasand zidd ka uspe tabsera..maano jaise heere ko taraasha ho..meri request hai aapse ke iss version ko hi aap apna version bataaiye..zidd ko credit na bhi dijiye chalega..lol..maiN ye isliye keh raha hun ki yeh wo ghazal hai jisme bahot potential hai popular hone ka..saral hai..aur log relate bhi kar paayenge..bilkul jagjit singh sahaab ki aawaaz ki tarah
Pradhyuman - Bismil
Quote:
Originally Posted by zidd
Samajh jaaegaa Dil ko samjhaa ke dekho,
Agar Na-samajh hai to Dhamkaa ke dekho.
Saani zaraa munaasib nahi lagta mujhe.....,
Ziddi ko dhamkana to durust, magar nasamjh ko raah par laane ke liye lafz ‘dhamkana’ sahi nisbat nahi .
Ab bhale hi vo dil kyu na ho.
So agar saani aisa sa ho...to ziyada munasib hai
Samajh jaaegaa Dil ko samjhaa ke dekho,
Agar Na-samajh hai to bahkaa ke dekho.
....yaar ,dil ko mithaii dekar bahkaoo,...use daraoo nahi..
Bus ,isliye kah raha hu ki ek acche qalaam me ye aib nazar aa raha hai.
SimaTnee lagee ab hayaa bhi Tumhaari,
Na aise hame , haaye Sharmaa ke dekho.
Ye sher mujhe bahut vague lagta hai....
ulaa aur saani alag alag baat kah rahe hai...
Jabki sher ke design se ye to pata lag raha hai ki aap kya kahna chahte hai, magar mere hisaab se
Alfaaz saath nahi de rahe hai..
Ek surat mai batata hu...maine ise aisa hi samjha hai,,,koi aur matlab ho to aap bata sakte hai.
SimaTnee lagee hai hayaa bhi Tumhaari,
ab itna bhi humko na Sharma ke dekho
Falak bhi jhukegaa gale se lagaane,
Zaraa deyr BaahoN ko Phailaa ke dekho.
sahab, bus ye kahunga ki is tarah ka personification mere taste ka nahi...itna visible personification ulaa me...aur phir wahi premise bana saani ka idea complete karne ke liye...
magar filmi style to hai hi...geet ka...
DhaDaktaa hai dil ab teraa naam Leke,
Nahii Maante to qareeb aa ke dekho.
yaha adressal gadbad ho gaya...ghazal ka radeef 'dekho' hai....so 'tumhaari' adressal hai.
waise bhi ek dusre sher me aapne 'tumhari' adressal directly istemaal kiya hai....
so yaha 'tera ' nahi khapega.
yu ho sakta hai....
=tumhare liye hi dhadakta hai ab dil
=dhadakta hai dil naam hi se tumhaare.
ek clean aur saaf sher hai ye...bus general hai.
magar jab bhi suno aisa sher accha hi lagta hai.
Ye Be-damm FizaaeN abhi jee utheNgee,
Hawaa me Dupatte ko Lehraa ke dekho.
'bedam' aur 'jee' accha rabta hai....aur ek tarah se bedam ko jee ne bacha liya....
ye sher mujhe accha laga.
meri taraf se daad sahab .
Ye patthar kaheeN ho na jaaeN Sahem kar,
Kabhi Aankh se Momm Pighlaa ke dekho.
ankho me asar ho ke mom pighal jaaye....ab usse ankhe sahm kar pattahr na ho...iska matlab.
ye baat alag ke mai aapki baat samh gaya...magar vo maine samjha hai..aapne kaha nahi.
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aapko to pata hi hai ki mai aapka kitna bada fan hu. aapki ghazal mujhe roughly hamesha hi acchi lagti hai.
magar ye rough cut hai. mujhe yakeen hai aapne isme koi kaam nahi kiya...yaha bhi khaka ek bahut acchi ghazal ka hai...bus aap sunane me jaldbaazi kar gaye.
waise bhi galib sahab ne 10000 sher likhe..magar generally sabko vo saare dus hazaar pasand nahi...bus kuch 10 -20 sher hai jinse log unko yaad karte hai.
------------------------------------
ek baat aur, ye kahne ki zarurat nahi ki ye mera personal opinion hai.
so zaair hai bilkul galat bhi ho sakta hai....aur mai ye baat ek yaha ke takiya kalaam ki tarah nahi kah raha hu. bahut sincerely kah raha hu...
kabhi kabhi logo ko bus kuch accha lagta hai...wajah ki zarurat nahi...ye ghazal unme se ek bhi ho sakti hai.
regards.
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gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai?
musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai?
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28th March 2013, 11:03 AM
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shaad bhai,
jitni pasand mujhe aapki ye ghazal aayi utna hi pasand zidd ka uspe tabsera..maano jaise heere ko taraasha ho..meri request hai aapse ke iss version ko hi aap apna version bataaiye..zidd ko credit na bhi dijiye chalega..lol..maiN ye isliye keh raha hun ki yeh wo ghazal hai jisme bahot potential hai popular hone ka..saral hai..aur log relate bhi kar paayenge..bilkul jagjit singh sahaab ki aawaaz ki tarah
Pradhyuman - Bismil
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aadaab janaab bismil saahab...
behad khushi ho rahi hai aapko bazm me maujood paakar aur ye jaan kar ke apako ye koshish pasand aayee....
sach kahun to zidd sahaab ka kisi ki post par jaana hi apne aap me haoulsa afzaai hai.. aur uupar se jab wo aapko aise tabsire se nawaazeN to smajah jaiye ke is baar kuch ghazab kar gaye hum,.....
wallaah main khushi se jhoom uthaa unki baaton ko padh kar aur jawaab dete na ban paa rahaa tha.. bas jo kaha huzoor ne, humne fouran haami bhar dee....
aur rahi baat credit dene ki.. hahahhaha bhai aap bhi na mazaaq karte ho bahot... zidd sahab ki lines ko apni line bataane kahaousl nahi hai mujhme...
log fauran pakad lenge meri chorii...
baharhaal jis bhi surat me thii aapko pasand aayee... aur aage se koshish rehgii ke posting se pahle thodii aur mashakkat ki jaae.. jaise ke zidd sahab ne bhi farmaya...
shukriyaa aap dono hazraat ka ek baar fir.. tashreef laate raheN...
Shaad...
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2nd April 2013, 11:33 PM
SimaTnee lagee ab hayaa bhi Tumhaari,
Na aise hame , haaye Sharmaa ke dekho.
wow.. woww... wowww.........
awesome lines bro...
keep the good work up!
regards!
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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3rd April 2013, 11:16 AM
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Originally Posted by Hassan
SimaTnee lagee ab hayaa bhi Tumhaari,
Na aise hame , haaye Sharmaa ke dekho.
wow.. woww... wowww.........
awesome lines bro...
keep the good work up!
regards!
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Nacheez tahe dil se mashkoor O mamnoon hai Hassan bhai.....
aapki daad sar aankhon par.... jazaaq Allah khair..
Shaad...
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3rd April 2013, 01:02 PM
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Originally Posted by sameer'shaad'
Samajh jaaegaa Dil ko samjhaa ke dekho,
Agar Na-samajh hai to Dhamkaa ke dekho.
SimaTnee lagee ab hayaa bhi Tumhaari,
Na aise hame , haaye Sharmaa ke dekho.
Falak bhi jhukegaa gale se lagaane,
Zaraa deyr BaahoN ko Phailaa ke dekho.
DhaDaktaa hai dil ab teraa naam Leke,
Nahii Maante to qareeb aa ke dekho.
Ye Be-damm FizaaeN abhi jee utheNgee,
Hawaa me Dupatte ko Lehraa ke dekho.
Ye patthar kaheeN ho na jaaeN Sahem kar,
Kabhi Aankh se Momm Pighlaa ke dekho.
Shaad...
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Shaad Sahab, Bahot Shaukh Andaaz Me Kahi Gayi Ye Ghazal Achi Lagi.... Dheron Daaad Qabool Farmaaiye
Likhtay Rahiye
Khush Rahiye
Ay Chaara-Saaz Dil Pe M're Daal Ik Nazar
Mujhko Bas Aik Jism Ka Aazaar Hee Nahi
AHMAD ALI SHAKIL
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4th April 2013, 01:15 PM
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Shaad Sahab, Bahot Shaukh Andaaz Me Kahi Gayi Ye Ghazal Achi Lagi.... Dheron Daaad Qabool Farmaaiye
Likhtay Rahiye
Khush Rahiye
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Aadaab o tasleemaat mere bhai ahmad shakil..... arse baad aapko mehfil me paaya behad khushi hui.. aapko ye kalaam pasand aaya behad khushnaseebi meri... saath banaae rakkheN... daad ke liye nacheez mashkoor hai..
shukriyaa
Shaad...
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