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do saavan - 30th August 2005, 11:50 AM

meri hi gujrati kavita ka bhvanuwaad hai yah kavita.

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ujaas ko aate dekh
raat sharmaai, sakuchaai
hirni ki tarah bhagi
pal mai n janae kaha ja samaai
ujaas has pada... or
sara aashmaan chalak-chalak
hava ne aa kar..
joro se khatkhataye
mere ghar ke daro deewar
sath hi.. yaha dekha n vaha
daraar paar kar k aa hi gayi
mere aangan mai
hare patte ke kaan mai kuch kaha
or chal padi saraar-sar
mai to abudh si bawri si
dekhti hi rahi jhum oothe patte ko
or achank tumne aa kar
meri julf ko sahlate huae
muje chumte huae kaha, samji?
mausam aane ko hai savan ka
mai sharmaai sakuchaai
tumhari baanho mai ja samaai
tum has pade.. or
humara aangan chalak-chalak
aashmaan mushkura ootha
or baras pada dharti par
dharti bhi bhig gayi
or hum dono bhi bhigte rahe
pyaar se chalak- chalak
dharti bhi maheki
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30th August 2005, 02:19 PM

Meri pyaaru Guruji,

wowwwwwwwwwww.. yet another master piece from u... u always out do urself..

the personification was jus excellent.

it was full of love..

i loved it...

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Meri pyaaru Guruji,

wowwwwwwwwwww.. yet another master piece from u... u always out do urself..

the personification was jus excellent.

it was full of love..

i loved it...

sacchi



bau gamiyu mane..

Keep writing

and more importantly ...

.. keep smiling

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yep it is full of love

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ujaas ko aate dekh
raat sharmaai, sakuchaai
hirni ki tarah bhagi
pal mai n janae kaha ja samaai
ujaas has pada... or
sara aashmaan chalak-chalak
hava ne aa kar..
joro se khatkhataye
mere ghar ke daro deewar
sath hi.. yaha dekha n vaha
daraar paar kar k aa hi gayi
mere aangan mai
hare patte ke kaan mai kuch kaha
or chal padi saraar-sar
mai to abudh si bawri si
dekhti hi rahi jhum oothe patte ko
or achank tumne aa kar
meri julf ko sahlate huae
muje chumte huae kaha, samji?
mausam aane ko hai savan ka
mai sharmaai sakuchaai
tumhari baanho mai ja samaai
tum has pade.. or
humara aangan chalak-chalak
aashmaan mushkura ootha
or baras pada dharti par
dharti bhi bhig gayi
or hum dono bhi bhigte rahe
pyaar se chalak- chalak
dharti bhi maheki
or maheka humara rishta
ke aaj to do savan sath barse
ek aashmaan mai
ek jameen par


Didi!

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31st August 2005, 07:37 PM

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sirf smile thi yah ya kuch milavat bhi hai is mai majaak ki?


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Didi!

Bahut bahut bahut pyaari rachna hai.... Bahut hi acche se express kiya hai aapne.... Mujhe bhaut accha laga padhkar... Aise pyaar pyaara likhti rahiye...Apna khayaal bhi rakhiye

Luv you

mere pulkit,

ek baat kahu...
insaan ki fitart hoti hai .. jise apna samajte hai oon k liye koi ashubh na soon pate hai na dekh pate na maan paate hai.

par jivan ka jaise yah pahlu hai ... jis mai pyaar hai, khushi hai... yah jitna sach hota hai ootna hi sach nafrat, ghum, dard ka bhi pahlu hota hai. dard na hota to pyaar ko kon jaanta kaho to bhala?

so kabhi apno k dard ko bhi pyaar se padhna sikhna...
oos mai se baahar aane ka yahi sachha tarika hota hai k oose swikarna hota hai.



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take care!

priy parul,


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1st September 2005, 10:34 AM

meena

simply bohat khoobsurat.

bohat hi lateef shaffaaff aur behad dil ko tamaniyet dena wala ehsaas jaaga hai tumhari is nazm se.

meri dua hai ke hamesha amli zindagi mein bhi aise hi bahaar tumhari zindagi mein qaayem o dayem rahe.

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Re: do saavan - 1st September 2005, 12:07 PM

Hi Coffee Mitr...,

Too Good... Bahut hi acha likha hai...
Bhav aur vatavaran ka mail hua hai jaise koi geet ho...
Sur aur Sargam ka bahut badhiya mail hai...

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Hi Coffee Mitr...,

Too Good... Bahut hi acha likha hai...
Bhav aur vatavaran ka mail hua hai jaise koi geet ho...
Sur aur Sargam ka bahut badhiya mail hai...

Apna khayal rakhiye
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Re: do saavan - 3rd September 2005, 10:07 AM

aashmaan mushkura ootha
or baras pada dharti par
dharti bhi bhig gayi
or hum dono bhi bhigte rahe
pyaar se chalak- chalak
dharti bhi maheki
or maheka humara rishta
ke aaj to do savan sath barse
ek aashmaan mai
ek jameen par
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Meedi Hi..
Behad sunder shabdon se sawanra hai aapne..
auir najuki se bhi...badi pyari kavita ban padi hai...
wishes & Love,
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meri hi gujrati kavita ka bhvanuwaad hai yah kavita.

http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthr...threadid=10733


ujaas ko aate dekh
raat sharmaai, sakuchaai
hirni ki tarah bhagi
pal mai n janae kaha ja samaai
ujaas has pada... or
sara aashmaan chalak-chalak
hava ne aa kar..
joro se khatkhataye
mere ghar ke daro deewar
sath hi.. yaha dekha n vaha
daraar paar kar k aa hi gayi
mere aangan mai
hare patte ke kaan mai kuch kaha
or chal padi saraar-sar
mai to abudh si bawri si
dekhti hi rahi jhum oothe patte ko
or achank tumne aa kar
meri julf ko sahlate huae
muje chumte huae kaha, samji?
mausam aane ko hai savan ka
mai sharmaai sakuchaai
tumhari baanho mai ja samaai
tum has pade.. or
humara aangan chalak-chalak
aashmaan mushkura ootha
or baras pada dharti par
dharti bhi bhig gayi
or hum dono bhi bhigte rahe
pyaar se chalak- chalak
dharti bhi maheki
or maheka humara rishta
ke aaj to do savan sath barse
ek aashmaan mai
ek jameen par


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Re: do saavan - 6th September 2005, 06:39 PM

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meri hi gujrati kavita ka bhvanuwaad hai yah kavita.

http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthr...threadid=10733


ujaas ko aate dekh
raat sharmaai, sakuchaai
hirni ki tarah bhagi
pal mai n janae kaha ja samaai
ujaas has pada... or
sara aashmaan chalak-chalak
hava ne aa kar..
joro se khatkhataye
mere ghar ke daro deewar
sath hi.. yaha dekha n vaha
daraar paar kar k aa hi gayi
mere aangan mai
hare patte ke kaan mai kuch kaha
or chal padi saraar-sar
mai to abudh si bawri si
dekhti hi rahi jhum oothe patte ko
or achank tumne aa kar
meri julf ko sahlate huae
muje chumte huae kaha, samji?
mausam aane ko hai savan ka
mai sharmaai sakuchaai
tumhari baanho mai ja samaai
tum has pade.. or
humara aangan chalak-chalak
aashmaan mushkura ootha
or baras pada dharti par
dharti bhi bhig gayi
or hum dono bhi bhigte rahe
pyaar se chalak- chalak
dharti bhi maheki
or maheka humara rishta
ke aaj to do savan sath barse
ek aashmaan mai
ek jameen par


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7th September 2005, 12:26 AM

Dear Didi,

Aapne bahaut accaha likha hai. Gujrati to hume samajh nahi aati hai par iska yeh hindi version was too good...bahaut accaha laga padhkar...

Take good care of urself!

Luv ya
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[QUOTE]Originally posted by vijen
[B]aashmaan mushkura ootha
or baras pada dharti par
dharti bhi bhig gayi
or hum dono bhi bhigte rahe
pyaar se chalak- chalak
dharti bhi maheki
or maheka humara rishta
ke aaj to do savan sath barse
ek aashmaan mai
ek jameen par
......................................
Meedi Hi..
Behad sunder shabdon se sawanra hai aapne..
auir najuki se bhi...badi pyari kavita ban padi hai...
wishes & Love,
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Dear Didi,

Aapne bahaut accaha likha hai. Gujrati to hume samajh nahi aati hai par iska yeh hindi version was too good...bahaut accaha laga padhkar...

Take good care of urself!

Luv ya
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shukria... tumne ise pasand kiya.
khush raho

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pyaar se chalak- chalak
dharti bhi maheki
or maheka humara rishta
ke aaj to do savan sath barse
ek aashmaan mai
ek jameen par

kya baat hai! meena jeeeeeeeeeee...

badi mast rachna hai...kahiye kahiye...mazaa aagaya padhkar...ek narm saa sparsh dil pe kar jaati hai...daad kabuul farmaayein...

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pyaar se chalak- chalak
dharti bhi maheki
or maheka humara rishta
ke aaj to do savan sath barse
ek aashmaan mai
ek jameen par

kya baat hai! meena jeeeeeeeeeee...

badi mast rachna hai...kahiye kahiye...mazaa aagaya padhkar...ek narm saa sparsh dil pe kar jaati hai...daad kabuul farmaayein...

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meri paras,

ek narm saa sparsh ...
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Re: do saavan - 16th September 2005, 09:27 PM

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meri hi gujrati kavita ka bhvanuwaad hai yah kavita.

http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthr...threadid=10733


ujaas ko aate dekh
raat sharmaai, sakuchaai
hirni ki tarah bhagi
pal mai n janae kaha ja samaai
ujaas has pada... or
sara aashmaan chalak-chalak
hava ne aa kar..
joro se khatkhataye
mere ghar ke daro deewar
sath hi.. yaha dekha n vaha
daraar paar kar k aa hi gayi
mere aangan mai
hare patte ke kaan mai kuch kaha
or chal padi saraar-sar
mai to abudh si bawri si
dekhti hi rahi jhum oothe patte ko
or achank tumne aa kar
meri julf ko sahlate huae
muje chumte huae kaha, samji?
mausam aane ko hai savan ka
mai sharmaai sakuchaai
tumhari baanho mai ja samaai
tum has pade.. or
humara aangan chalak-chalak
aashmaan mushkura ootha
or baras pada dharti par
dharti bhi bhig gayi
or hum dono bhi bhigte rahe
pyaar se chalak- chalak
dharti bhi maheki
or maheka humara rishta
ke aaj to do savan sath barse
ek aashmaan mai
ek jameen par
wah wah.. kya khoob kaha.. dono saawan..

so sweet ma bahoot pyaari rachana hai ye aapki

bahoot bahoot pyaari rachana ke liye pyaar se badhaayi. aur bas aap isi pyaar me sarobaar raho yehi kahungee..

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Re: Re: do saavan - 29th September 2005, 03:14 PM

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wah wah.. kya khoob kaha.. dono saawan..

so sweet ma bahoot pyaari rachana hai ye aapki

bahoot bahoot pyaari rachana ke liye pyaar se badhaayi. aur bas aap isi pyaar me sarobaar raho yehi kahungee..

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priy garima,

shukria....

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Re: do saavan - 21st March 2006, 11:42 AM

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meri hi gujrati kavita ka bhvanuwaad hai yah kavita.

http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthr...threadid=10733


ujaas ko aate dekh
raat sharmaai, sakuchaai
hirni ki tarah bhagi
pal mai n janae kaha ja samaai
ujaas has pada... or
sara aashmaan chalak-chalak
hava ne aa kar..
joro se khatkhataye
mere ghar ke daro deewar
sath hi.. yaha dekha n vaha
daraar paar kar k aa hi gayi
mere aangan mai
hare patte ke kaan mai kuch kaha
or chal padi saraar-sar
mai to abudh si bawri si
dekhti hi rahi jhum oothe patte ko
or achank tumne aa kar
meri julf ko sahlate huae
muje chumte huae kaha, samji?
mausam aane ko hai savan ka
mai sharmaai sakuchaai
tumhari baanho mai ja samaai
tum has pade.. or
humara aangan chalak-chalak
aashmaan mushkura ootha
or baras pada dharti par
dharti bhi bhig gayi
or hum dono bhi bhigte rahe
pyaar se chalak- chalak
dharti bhi maheki
or maheka humara rishta
ke aaj to do savan sath barse
ek aashmaan mai
ek jameen par
Meena ji
Namastey
bohat bohat acha laga aaj bi aapko padkar. iski tarif ke liy lafz bi nehi hein mere pas. bas padti reh gyi mein.

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Re: do saavan - 21st March 2006, 10:13 PM

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Originally posted by meena chheda
meri hi gujrati kavita ka bhvanuwaad hai yah kavita.

http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthr...threadid=10733


ujaas ko aate dekh
raat sharmaai, sakuchaai
hirni ki tarah bhagi
pal mai n janae kaha ja samaai
ujaas has pada... or
sara aashmaan chalak-chalak
hava ne aa kar..
joro se khatkhataye
mere ghar ke daro deewar
sath hi.. yaha dekha n vaha
daraar paar kar k aa hi gayi
mere aangan mai
hare patte ke kaan mai kuch kaha
or chal padi saraar-sar
mai to abudh si bawri si
dekhti hi rahi jhum oothe patte ko
or achank tumne aa kar
meri julf ko sahlate huae
muje chumte huae kaha, samji?
mausam aane ko hai savan ka
mai sharmaai sakuchaai
tumhari baanho mai ja samaai
tum has pade.. or
humara aangan chalak-chalak
aashmaan mushkura ootha
or baras pada dharti par
dharti bhi bhig gayi
or hum dono bhi bhigte rahe
pyaar se chalak- chalak
dharti bhi maheki
or maheka humara rishta
ke aaj to do savan sath barse
ek aashmaan mai
ek jameen par
Adab Meena ji
kya khoob keh gayi hain aap. .....lajawaab hai yeh
yuhin likhti rahiyega.

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13th November 2007, 03:35 PM

diiiiii........bahut khoob....majja aa gaya padkar...ek komal sa ahsaas jagga gaye aapki yeh nazam.

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