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30th August 2005, 11:50 AM
meri hi gujrati kavita ka bhvanuwaad hai yah kavita.
http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthr...threadid=10733
ujaas ko aate dekh
raat sharmaai, sakuchaai
hirni ki tarah bhagi
pal mai n janae kaha ja samaai
ujaas has pada... or
sara aashmaan chalak-chalak
hava ne aa kar..
joro se khatkhataye
mere ghar ke daro deewar
sath hi.. yaha dekha n vaha
daraar paar kar k aa hi gayi
mere aangan mai
hare patte ke kaan mai kuch kaha
or chal padi saraar-sar
mai to abudh si bawri si
dekhti hi rahi jhum oothe patte ko
or achank tumne aa kar
meri julf ko sahlate huae
muje chumte huae kaha, samji?
mausam aane ko hai savan ka
mai sharmaai sakuchaai
tumhari baanho mai ja samaai
tum has pade.. or
humara aangan chalak-chalak
aashmaan mushkura ootha
or baras pada dharti par
dharti bhi bhig gayi
or hum dono bhi bhigte rahe
pyaar se chalak- chalak
dharti bhi maheki
or maheka humara rishta
ke aaj to do savan sath barse
ek aashmaan mai
ek jameen par
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30th August 2005, 02:19 PM
Meri pyaaru Guruji,
wowwwwwwwwwww.. yet another master piece from u... u always out do urself..
the personification was jus excellent.
it was full of love..
i loved it...
sacchi
bau gamiyu mane..
Keep writing
and more importantly ...
.. keep smiling
Aapki Shishya
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30th August 2005, 03:54 PM
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Meri pyaaru Guruji,
wowwwwwwwwwww.. yet another master piece from u... u always out do urself..
the personification was jus excellent.
it was full of love..
i loved it...
sacchi
bau gamiyu mane..
Keep writing
and more importantly ...
.. keep smiling
Aapki Shishya
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dear niral,
yep it is full of love
maa
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31st August 2005, 12:43 PM
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Chaand
Sachh bolne ka hausla to, hum bhi rakhte haiN lekin
Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN.
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31st August 2005, 02:38 PM
ujaas ko aate dekh
raat sharmaai, sakuchaai
hirni ki tarah bhagi
pal mai n janae kaha ja samaai
ujaas has pada... or
sara aashmaan chalak-chalak
hava ne aa kar..
joro se khatkhataye
mere ghar ke daro deewar
sath hi.. yaha dekha n vaha
daraar paar kar k aa hi gayi
mere aangan mai
hare patte ke kaan mai kuch kaha
or chal padi saraar-sar
mai to abudh si bawri si
dekhti hi rahi jhum oothe patte ko
or achank tumne aa kar
meri julf ko sahlate huae
muje chumte huae kaha, samji?
mausam aane ko hai savan ka
mai sharmaai sakuchaai
tumhari baanho mai ja samaai
tum has pade.. or
humara aangan chalak-chalak
aashmaan mushkura ootha
or baras pada dharti par
dharti bhi bhig gayi
or hum dono bhi bhigte rahe
pyaar se chalak- chalak
dharti bhi maheki
or maheka humara rishta
ke aaj to do savan sath barse
ek aashmaan mai
ek jameen par
Didi!
Bahut bahut bahut pyaari rachna hai.... Bahut hi acche se express kiya hai aapne.... Mujhe bhaut accha laga padhkar... Aise pyaar pyaara likhti rahiye...Apna khayaal bhi rakhiye
Luv you
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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31st August 2005, 07:37 PM
Dearest Meena di,
Very well, with strong feelings...
take care!
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1st September 2005, 09:13 AM
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mere chaand,
sirf smile thi yah ya kuch milavat bhi hai is mai majaak ki?
tumhari meena
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Didi!
Bahut bahut bahut pyaari rachna hai.... Bahut hi acche se express kiya hai aapne.... Mujhe bhaut accha laga padhkar... Aise pyaar pyaara likhti rahiye...Apna khayaal bhi rakhiye
Luv you
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mere pulkit,
ek baat kahu...
insaan ki fitart hoti hai .. jise apna samajte hai oon k liye koi ashubh na soon pate hai na dekh pate na maan paate hai.
par jivan ka jaise yah pahlu hai ... jis mai pyaar hai, khushi hai... yah jitna sach hota hai ootna hi sach nafrat, ghum, dard ka bhi pahlu hota hai. dard na hota to pyaar ko kon jaanta kaho to bhala?
so kabhi apno k dard ko bhi pyaar se padhna sikhna...
oos mai se baahar aane ka yahi sachha tarika hota hai k oose swikarna hota hai.
di
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1st September 2005, 09:25 AM
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Dearest Meena di,
Very well, with strong feelings...
take care!
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1st September 2005, 10:34 AM
meena
simply bohat khoobsurat.
bohat hi lateef shaffaaff aur behad dil ko tamaniyet dena wala ehsaas jaaga hai tumhari is nazm se.
meri dua hai ke hamesha amli zindagi mein bhi aise hi bahaar tumhari zindagi mein qaayem o dayem rahe.
God bless you meena.
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Re: do saavan -
1st September 2005, 12:07 PM
Hi Coffee Mitr...,
Too Good... Bahut hi acha likha hai...
Bhav aur vatavaran ka mail hua hai jaise koi geet ho...
Sur aur Sargam ka bahut badhiya mail hai...
Apna khayal rakhiye
Rohin
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1st September 2005, 12:23 PM
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Hi Coffee Mitr...,
Too Good... Bahut hi acha likha hai...
Bhav aur vatavaran ka mail hua hai jaise koi geet ho...
Sur aur Sargam ka bahut badhiya mail hai...
Apna khayal rakhiye
Rohin
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shukria.
tumhari coffee mitr
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Re: do saavan -
3rd September 2005, 10:07 AM
aashmaan mushkura ootha
or baras pada dharti par
dharti bhi bhig gayi
or hum dono bhi bhigte rahe
pyaar se chalak- chalak
dharti bhi maheki
or maheka humara rishta
ke aaj to do savan sath barse
ek aashmaan mai
ek jameen par
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Meedi Hi..
Behad sunder shabdon se sawanra hai aapne..
auir najuki se bhi...badi pyari kavita ban padi hai...
wishes & Love,
-vij
tp://www.shayri.com/forums/newreply.php?s=&action=newreply&postid=149624#
http://www.shayri.com/forums/newrepl...postid=149624#
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Originally posted by meena chheda
meri hi gujrati kavita ka bhvanuwaad hai yah kavita.
http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthr...threadid=10733
ujaas ko aate dekh
raat sharmaai, sakuchaai
hirni ki tarah bhagi
pal mai n janae kaha ja samaai
ujaas has pada... or
sara aashmaan chalak-chalak
hava ne aa kar..
joro se khatkhataye
mere ghar ke daro deewar
sath hi.. yaha dekha n vaha
daraar paar kar k aa hi gayi
mere aangan mai
hare patte ke kaan mai kuch kaha
or chal padi saraar-sar
mai to abudh si bawri si
dekhti hi rahi jhum oothe patte ko
or achank tumne aa kar
meri julf ko sahlate huae
muje chumte huae kaha, samji?
mausam aane ko hai savan ka
mai sharmaai sakuchaai
tumhari baanho mai ja samaai
tum has pade.. or
humara aangan chalak-chalak
aashmaan mushkura ootha
or baras pada dharti par
dharti bhi bhig gayi
or hum dono bhi bhigte rahe
pyaar se chalak- chalak
dharti bhi maheki
or maheka humara rishta
ke aaj to do savan sath barse
ek aashmaan mai
ek jameen par
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6th September 2005, 06:39 PM
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Originally posted by meena chheda
meri hi gujrati kavita ka bhvanuwaad hai yah kavita.
http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthr...threadid=10733
ujaas ko aate dekh
raat sharmaai, sakuchaai
hirni ki tarah bhagi
pal mai n janae kaha ja samaai
ujaas has pada... or
sara aashmaan chalak-chalak
hava ne aa kar..
joro se khatkhataye
mere ghar ke daro deewar
sath hi.. yaha dekha n vaha
daraar paar kar k aa hi gayi
mere aangan mai
hare patte ke kaan mai kuch kaha
or chal padi saraar-sar
mai to abudh si bawri si
dekhti hi rahi jhum oothe patte ko
or achank tumne aa kar
meri julf ko sahlate huae
muje chumte huae kaha, samji?
mausam aane ko hai savan ka
mai sharmaai sakuchaai
tumhari baanho mai ja samaai
tum has pade.. or
humara aangan chalak-chalak
aashmaan mushkura ootha
or baras pada dharti par
dharti bhi bhig gayi
or hum dono bhi bhigte rahe
pyaar se chalak- chalak
dharti bhi maheki
or maheka humara rishta
ke aaj to do savan sath barse
ek aashmaan mai
ek jameen par
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7th September 2005, 12:26 AM
Dear Didi,
Aapne bahaut accaha likha hai. Gujrati to hume samajh nahi aati hai par iska yeh hindi version was too good...bahaut accaha laga padhkar...
Take good care of urself!
Luv ya
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7th September 2005, 09:16 AM
[QUOTE]Originally posted by vijen
[B]aashmaan mushkura ootha
or baras pada dharti par
dharti bhi bhig gayi
or hum dono bhi bhigte rahe
pyaar se chalak- chalak
dharti bhi maheki
or maheka humara rishta
ke aaj to do savan sath barse
ek aashmaan mai
ek jameen par
......................................
Meedi Hi..
Behad sunder shabdon se sawanra hai aapne..
auir najuki se bhi...badi pyari kavita ban padi hai...
wishes & Love,
-vij
mere vij,
shukria.
sneh k sath ..
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7th September 2005, 09:19 AM
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Dear Didi,
Aapne bahaut accaha likha hai. Gujrati to hume samajh nahi aati hai par iska yeh hindi version was too good...bahaut accaha laga padhkar...
Take good care of urself!
Luv ya
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meri palak,
shukria... tumne ise pasand kiya.
khush raho
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7th September 2005, 09:52 AM
pyaar se chalak- chalak
dharti bhi maheki
or maheka humara rishta
ke aaj to do savan sath barse
ek aashmaan mai
ek jameen par
kya baat hai! meena jeeeeeeeeeee...
badi mast rachna hai...kahiye kahiye...mazaa aagaya padhkar...ek narm saa sparsh dil pe kar jaati hai...daad kabuul farmaayein...
apki paras
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
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7th September 2005, 10:04 AM
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pyaar se chalak- chalak
dharti bhi maheki
or maheka humara rishta
ke aaj to do savan sath barse
ek aashmaan mai
ek jameen par
kya baat hai! meena jeeeeeeeeeee...
badi mast rachna hai...kahiye kahiye...mazaa aagaya padhkar...ek narm saa sparsh dil pe kar jaati hai...daad kabuul farmaayein...
apki paras
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meri paras,
ek narm saa sparsh ...
haan ... or yah sparsh .... ko dard naam k pahlu se koi sarokaar nahi.. yah bas mahkana janta hai.
tumhari meena
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Re: do saavan -
16th September 2005, 09:27 PM
Quote:
Originally posted by meena chheda
meri hi gujrati kavita ka bhvanuwaad hai yah kavita.
http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthr...threadid=10733
ujaas ko aate dekh
raat sharmaai, sakuchaai
hirni ki tarah bhagi
pal mai n janae kaha ja samaai
ujaas has pada... or
sara aashmaan chalak-chalak
hava ne aa kar..
joro se khatkhataye
mere ghar ke daro deewar
sath hi.. yaha dekha n vaha
daraar paar kar k aa hi gayi
mere aangan mai
hare patte ke kaan mai kuch kaha
or chal padi saraar-sar
mai to abudh si bawri si
dekhti hi rahi jhum oothe patte ko
or achank tumne aa kar
meri julf ko sahlate huae
muje chumte huae kaha, samji?
mausam aane ko hai savan ka
mai sharmaai sakuchaai
tumhari baanho mai ja samaai
tum has pade.. or
humara aangan chalak-chalak
aashmaan mushkura ootha
or baras pada dharti par
dharti bhi bhig gayi
or hum dono bhi bhigte rahe
pyaar se chalak- chalak
dharti bhi maheki
or maheka humara rishta
ke aaj to do savan sath barse
ek aashmaan mai
ek jameen par
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wah wah.. kya khoob kaha.. dono saawan..
so sweet ma bahoot pyaari rachana hai ye aapki
bahoot bahoot pyaari rachana ke liye pyaar se badhaayi. aur bas aap isi pyaar me sarobaar raho yehi kahungee..
aapki ladli
Garima
Anant se bhi aage... itni si khwahish hai :)
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29th September 2005, 03:14 PM
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wah wah.. kya khoob kaha.. dono saawan..
so sweet ma bahoot pyaari rachana hai ye aapki
bahoot bahoot pyaari rachana ke liye pyaar se badhaayi. aur bas aap isi pyaar me sarobaar raho yehi kahungee..
aapki ladli
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priy garima,
shukria....
maa
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21st March 2006, 11:42 AM
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Originally posted by meena chheda
meri hi gujrati kavita ka bhvanuwaad hai yah kavita.
http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthr...threadid=10733
ujaas ko aate dekh
raat sharmaai, sakuchaai
hirni ki tarah bhagi
pal mai n janae kaha ja samaai
ujaas has pada... or
sara aashmaan chalak-chalak
hava ne aa kar..
joro se khatkhataye
mere ghar ke daro deewar
sath hi.. yaha dekha n vaha
daraar paar kar k aa hi gayi
mere aangan mai
hare patte ke kaan mai kuch kaha
or chal padi saraar-sar
mai to abudh si bawri si
dekhti hi rahi jhum oothe patte ko
or achank tumne aa kar
meri julf ko sahlate huae
muje chumte huae kaha, samji?
mausam aane ko hai savan ka
mai sharmaai sakuchaai
tumhari baanho mai ja samaai
tum has pade.. or
humara aangan chalak-chalak
aashmaan mushkura ootha
or baras pada dharti par
dharti bhi bhig gayi
or hum dono bhi bhigte rahe
pyaar se chalak- chalak
dharti bhi maheki
or maheka humara rishta
ke aaj to do savan sath barse
ek aashmaan mai
ek jameen par
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Meena ji
Namastey
bohat bohat acha laga aaj bi aapko padkar. iski tarif ke liy lafz bi nehi hein mere pas. bas padti reh gyi mein.
Aapki
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21st March 2006, 10:13 PM
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Originally posted by meena chheda
meri hi gujrati kavita ka bhvanuwaad hai yah kavita.
http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthr...threadid=10733
ujaas ko aate dekh
raat sharmaai, sakuchaai
hirni ki tarah bhagi
pal mai n janae kaha ja samaai
ujaas has pada... or
sara aashmaan chalak-chalak
hava ne aa kar..
joro se khatkhataye
mere ghar ke daro deewar
sath hi.. yaha dekha n vaha
daraar paar kar k aa hi gayi
mere aangan mai
hare patte ke kaan mai kuch kaha
or chal padi saraar-sar
mai to abudh si bawri si
dekhti hi rahi jhum oothe patte ko
or achank tumne aa kar
meri julf ko sahlate huae
muje chumte huae kaha, samji?
mausam aane ko hai savan ka
mai sharmaai sakuchaai
tumhari baanho mai ja samaai
tum has pade.. or
humara aangan chalak-chalak
aashmaan mushkura ootha
or baras pada dharti par
dharti bhi bhig gayi
or hum dono bhi bhigte rahe
pyaar se chalak- chalak
dharti bhi maheki
or maheka humara rishta
ke aaj to do savan sath barse
ek aashmaan mai
ek jameen par
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kya khoob keh gayi hain aap. .....lajawaab hai yeh
yuhin likhti rahiyega.
sabka
Saathi
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diiiiii........bahut khoob....majja aa gaya padkar...ek komal sa ahsaas jagga gaye aapki yeh nazam.
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