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achchhi gazal hai ritu ji ...aisa hi ho
Namastey Sakhi jee.

Sath dene ka tah-e-dil se shukriya,
yun hi aati rahiye.
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Ritu saheba aadab,

Achi khaawish pe dad ,, qayal kaafi umda hain .. Mai mahezoz howa .. Allah apko khush rakhe .. Zoor-e-Qalam aur ziyadah..


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jee bahut bahut shukriya.......................................... ..


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Bahut khoob Ritu ji....
Apne ehsaason ko badi khoobsoorti ke saath jis andaaz mein aapne alfaazon mei taraasha hai taareef-e-qabil hai...

mohabbat bhari is rachna ko humaare saath share karne ka bahut bahut shukriya...

Duaaon k saath....
Jee apna keemti waqt dene ke liye aur is hosla afja'ii ke liye tah-e-dil se shukriya.
Khush rahe.N
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khubsurat pehskesh laziz alfaaz kamal rahi ye peshkesh

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Is hosla afja'ii ka bahut bahut Shukriya Pawan jee.
Yun hi aate rahiye,
God Bless you.
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Ritu saheba aadab,

Achi khaawish pe dad ,, qayal kaafi umda hain .. Mai mahezoz howa .. Allah apko khush rakhe .. Zoor-e-Qalam aur ziyadah..


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Abdul jee,
bahut bahut shukriya apna waqt is post par najar karne ka.
Khuda ki nemat aap par barse.
Aameen!
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21st September 2010, 08:31 PM

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Namaskaar Dosto.N,

Aaj bazm me.N hazir hooN ek choti si koshish le kar.
Meri ye rachna adhoori hai,kacchi hai aur is layak nahi.N hai ke SDC par post ki jaye par fir bhi maiN aap sabke samne apni ye koshish "yeh bhi to ho sakta hai.." rakh rahi hooN.
Galtiya.N jaruur bataiyega.
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Pesh hai :

Yeh bhi to ho sakta hai….

Chupke chupke mujhe dekhna adat me shamil uski,
Mujhko apna maan liya ho,yeh bhi to ho sakta hai….

Meri khushiyo.N ki parwaah mujhse jyada karta hai,
Jajbaato.n ko jaan liya ho,yeh bhi to ho sakta hai…

Kal tak mujhse laDna milna itna hi to kaam tha uska,
Mera sapna dekh liya ho,yeh bhi to ho sakta hai…

Aj suna hai dilli(Delhi) ko jaanewala hai vo shehjada,
Kuch man me.N Thaan liya ho,yeh bhi to ho sakta hai…````

Uske baad kaise jee pauNgi darti rehti hooN,
Vo bhi meri yaad me.N taDpe,yeh bhi to ho sakta hai…

Ek jhalak pane ko pahunchi uske ghar chupke se,
Usne mujhko dekh liya ho,yeh bhi to ho sakta hai…

-Ritu
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Apki yeh rachna qabile taarif hai,bahot khoobsurat hai..........................
..... shayri ke lihaz se bhi kuchh misre wazn (behr) me hain......jaise
Mujhko apna maan liya ho,yeh bhi to ho sakta hai….
Jajbaato.n ko jaan liya ho,yeh bhi to ho sakta hai…
azad ghazal ke lihaaz se ak achhi koshish hai........
aise hi likhti rahiye...
khush rahiye......
apka dost
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Apki yeh rachna qabile taarif hai,bahot khoobsurat hai..........................
..... shayri ke lihaz se bhi kuchh misre wazn (behr) me hain......jaise
Mujhko apna maan liya ho,yeh bhi to ho sakta hai….
Jajbaato.n ko jaan liya ho,yeh bhi to ho sakta hai…
azad ghazal ke lihaaz se ak achhi koshish hai........
aise hi likhti rahiye...
khush rahiye......
apka dost
Fezan
Fezan jee,

Bahut bahut shukriya apna khaas waqt meri iss koshish ko dene ke liye.
Khush rahiye,
Aate rahiye,
God Bless You,
Aapki dost,
Ritu


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26th January 2012, 11:55 AM

very nice line ritu ji..... shayad hi isse pahle maine itna accha kuch pdha ho..truely very touchable lines.....


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very nice lines ritu ji..... lagta hai kuch bhut accha pdha hai maine.. really too good


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very nice line ritu ji..... shayad hi isse pahle maine itna accha kuch pdha ho..truely very touchable lines.....
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very nice lines ritu ji..... lagta hai kuch bhut accha pdha hai maine.. really too good
Shukriya Richa Ji.

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Aadaab Ritu ji......

Behad naazuk, narm ehsaasoN se labrez kalaam likhaa hai aapne....

takheer se pesh hone ke liye maazrat chahta hoon.. aapki kavita ka ek ek lafz apne aap me muqammal hai aur behad touchy hai......

aur jaisaa ke aapne kahaa hai ke kuch problem ho to bataaeN.... wese ye ek zaraa si chook hai kisi se bhi ho sakti hai..... lekin ek zara sa daag bhi khoobsurti to dabaa deta hai.... bas isi liye bata raha hoon taaki ise agli baar kalaamon me shamil na kiya jaae.....



Chupke chupke mujhe dekhna adat me shamil uski,
Mujhko apna maan liya ho,yeh bhi to ho sakta hai….

Meri khushiyo.N ki parwaah mujhse jyada karta hai,
Jajbaato.n ko jaan liya ho,yeh bhi to ho sakta hai…



agar in do sher ko dekha jaae to qaafiya "maan aur jaan" nazar aata hai aur radeef hai "liya ho,yeh bhi to ho sakta hai"

lekin agar in do aashar ko dekha jaae

Kal tak mujhse laDna milna itna hi to kaam tha uska,
Mera sapna dekh liya ho,yeh bhi to ho sakta hai

Ek jhalak pane ko pahunchi uske ghar chupke se,
Usne mujhko dekh liya ho,yeh bhi to ho sakta hai



isme qaafiya badal gaya hai aur jaan , maan se na milta hua qaafiya aapne "dekh" istemal kiya hai jo ki sahi nahi mana ajaega....


agar ek aur sher dekheN.....

Uske baad kaise jee pauNgi darti rehti hooN,
Vo bhi meri yaad me.N taDpe,yeh bhi to ho sakta hai



isme qaafiya ke sath sath radeef bhi badal gaya hai.....

"liya ho" lafz radeef me se gayab hai aur qaafiya me aapne tadpe istemaal ki ya hai jo jaan, maan ki hum-aawaaz nahi hai.....

ummeed hai aapko meri baaton ka zara sa bhi bura nahi laga hoga.... aur bas ye sunne bataane walaa, seekhne sikhane waala silsilaa chalta rahe.... ummeed hai aage se in choti moti chooNk ko aap nazar andaaz nahi karengi aur aise hi pyare pyare meethe meethe ehsaas hamaare saath bantegi....

aapko padhna bahot accha lagaa..... yoon hi aati raheN... likhti raheN..... khush raheN....

Shaad....


Shaad...

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