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Kali khili kusum saje... - 20th July 2010, 08:22 PM

Namaskaar Dosto.N,

Gopal Das Neeraj jee ke "karwaN gujar gaya, gubar dekhte rahe.." ke pattern per ek koShiSh pesh kar rahi hooN. Apki ra'i ka intjar rahega.
Yeh rachna 2 phases me.n divided hai.
Pehle me.n ishq ki khumari aur dusre hisse me.n virah ki peedha!

Aap tak pahuche toh suchit kijiyega..

kali khili kuSum saje, Sitare jhilmila uthe,
Dil mile tere mere ke bhanwre geet ga uthe..

Yun laga ki jaise preet mil gayi hai ab mujhe,
le chaluN aa le chaluN un ghataoN ke taley..

Hath thaam kar ke sath chal diye vo chal diye,
paaT paaT jugnuo.N ke jaise jal rahe diye..

Raah thi kaThin magar sath woh jo mil gaya,
jaise sookhTe huye suman ko praan mil gaya..

is qadar thi khushi ke raat bhi dhali nahi.N,
subah ki talash me.N saaNjh Gunguna uthi..

SaNwar SaNwar nikhar nikhar chirag jhilmila uthe,
kali khili kuSum saje sitare jagmaga uthe..!!


~~Ishq ke badal hat gaye aur virah ki bela aa gayi~~

Rukh badal liya tha jaise waqT ki hawao.N ne,
Dard jaisa dikh raha tha un ghani ghatao.N me.n..

Hum abhi SiSak SiSak raaT kat,Te rahe,
Mil rahi thi woh saja jisse bhagte rahe..

KaaT kar din kabhi raaT ki panaah me.N,
Gum huye andhero.N me.n ujalo.n ki chaah me.N..

Baadlo.N ke beech woh dhua.n sa uTh raha,
Jaise shwet chaaNd ki chaNdni ko dho raha..

utha gubar yaado.N ka to raah dagmaga uThi,
khaDa tha mehel jaha.N woh neev charmara uthi..

Aas jaise mit gayi chah jaise mar gayi,
Chahto.n ke iss bhanwar me.N Aah ghar kar gayi..

Hum abhi darey darey kud ko thamte rahey,
yaado.N ke jharokhey se door jhaNkTe rahey..

Kaale kaale megh saare tab hi gaDgadha uthe,
kali khili kuSum saje sitare jagmaga uthe..


~ritu~
...Ek mausam


"Life laughs at you when you are unhappy...
Life smiles at you when you are happy..
But,
Life salutes you when you make others happy!!"
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Namaskaar Dosto.N,

Gopal Das Neeraj jee ke "karwaN gujar gaya, gubar dekhte rahe.." ke pattern per ek koShiSh pesh kar rahi hooN. Apki ra'i ka intjar rahega.
Yeh rachna 2 phases me.n divided hai.
Pehle me.n ishq ki khumari aur dusre hisse me.n virah ki peedha!

Aap tak pahuche toh suchit kijiyega..

kali khili kuSum saje, Sitare jhilmila uthe,
Dil mile tere mere ke bhanwre geet ga uthe..

Yun laga ki jaise preet mil gayi hai ab mujhe,
le chaluN aa le chaluN un ghataoN ke taley..

Hath thaam kar ke sath chal diye vo chal diye,
paaT paaT jugnuo.N ke jaise jal rahe diye..

Raah thi kaThin magar sath woh jo mil gaya,
jaise sookhTe huye suman ko praan mil gaya..

is qadar thi khushi ke raat bhi dhali nahi.N,
subah ki talash me.N saaNjh Gunguna uthi..

SaNwar SaNwar nikhar nikhar chirag jhilmila uthe,
kali khili kuSum saje sitare jagmaga uthe..!!


~~Ishq ke badal hat gaye aur virah ki bela aa gayi~~

Rukh badal liya tha jaise waqT ki hawao.N ne,
Dard jaisa dikh raha tha un ghani ghatao.N me.n..

Hum abhi SiSak SiSak raaT kat,Te rahe,
Mil rahi thi woh saja jisse bhagte rahe..

KaaT kar din kabhi raaT ki panaah me.N,
Gum huye andhero.N me.n ujalo.n ki chaah me.N..

Baadlo.N ke beech woh dhua.n sa uTh raha,
Jaise shwet chaaNd ki chaNdni ko dho raha..

utha gubar yaado.N ka to raah dagmaga uThi,
khaDa tha mehel jaha.N woh neev charmara uthi..

Aas jaise mit gayi chah jaise mar gayi,
Chahto.n ke iss bhanwar me.N Aah ghar kar gayi..

Hum abhi darey darey kud ko thamte rahey,
yaado.N ke jharokhey se door jhaNkTe rahey..

Kaale kaale megh saare tab hi gaDgadha uthe,
kali khili kuSum saje sitare jagmaga uthe..


~ritu~
...Ek mausam
ritu jee
radhe radhe

badi purjor koshish rahi aapki dil se daad vaise mujhe virah ki peeda me anand jyada aata hai
yun hi likhti rahiye
duaon ke saath


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Namaskaar Dosto.N,

Gopal Das Neeraj jee ke "karwaN gujar gaya, gubar dekhte rahe.." ke pattern per ek koShiSh pesh kar rahi hooN. Apki ra'i ka intjar rahega.
Yeh rachna 2 phases me.n divided hai.
Pehle me.n ishq ki khumari aur dusre hisse me.n virah ki peedha!

Aap tak pahuche toh suchit kijiyega..

kali khili kuSum saje, Sitare jhilmila uthe,
Dil mile tere mere ke bhanwre geet ga uthe..

Yun laga ki jaise preet mil gayi hai ab mujhe,
le chaluN aa le chaluN un ghataoN ke taley..

Hath thaam kar ke sath chal diye vo chal diye,
paaT paaT jugnuo.N ke jaise jal rahe diye..

Raah thi kaThin magar sath woh jo mil gaya,
jaise sookhTe huye suman ko praan mil gaya..

is qadar thi khushi ke raat bhi dhali nahi.N,
subah ki talash me.N saaNjh Gunguna uthi..

SaNwar SaNwar nikhar nikhar chirag jhilmila uthe,
kali khili kuSum saje sitare jagmaga uthe..!!


~~Ishq ke badal hat gaye aur virah ki bela aa gayi~~

Rukh badal liya tha jaise waqT ki hawao.N ne,
Dard jaisa dikh raha tha un ghani ghatao.N me.n..

Hum abhi SiSak SiSak raaT kat,Te rahe,
Mil rahi thi woh saja jisse bhagte rahe..

KaaT kar din kabhi raaT ki panaah me.N,
Gum huye andhero.N me.n ujalo.n ki chaah me.N..

Baadlo.N ke beech woh dhua.n sa uTh raha,
Jaise shwet chaaNd ki chaNdni ko dho raha..

utha gubar yaado.N ka to raah dagmaga uThi,
khaDa tha mehel jaha.N woh neev charmara uthi..

Aas jaise mit gayi chah jaise mar gayi,
Chahto.n ke iss bhanwar me.N Aah ghar kar gayi..

Hum abhi darey darey kud ko thamte rahey,
yaado.N ke jharokhey se door jhaNkTe rahey..

Kaale kaale megh saare tab hi gaDgadha uthe,
kali khili kuSum saje sitare jagmaga uthe..


~ritu~
...Ek mausam

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aapki yeh koshish bahut dilkash rahi.....
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daad kabool kijiye madam don


bus interval me popcorn aur icecream nahi mila

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Hath thaam kar ke sath chal diye vo chal diye,
paaT paaT jugnuo.N ke jaise jal rahe diye..

utha gubar yaado.N ka to raah dagmaga uThi,
khaDa tha mehel jaha.N woh neev charmara uthi..

Its Too Good ........Ritu Ji ! Very Impressive Creation... !

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Tahe dil daad hazir hai...
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Aisi kavitaaein paDhne ko bahut kam milti hai aur aapki mehnat hameiN behtareen lagi, Ritu Ji...!

Dil se daad kabuul karein aur apna khayaal rakheiN, ok...?

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ritu jee
radhe radhe

badi purjor koshish rahi aapki dil se daad vaise mujhe virah ki peeda me anand jyada aata hai
yun hi likhti rahiye
duaon ke saath
Ishk Jee,
bahut khushi hui apka reply dekh kar.
Yaha jyada aana nahi ho pata, jab bhi waqt milta hai, hazir ho jati hu. Bahut bahut dhanyavad hosla afja'ii ke liye.
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Daad aur daad hi de sakta huN is umdaa kavita ke liye aur sach meiN aap meiN bahut achcha aur mahaan kavi hai aap yehi rhytm meiN rahiye...
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aapki yeh koshish bahut dilkash rahi.....
interval ke pahle bhi aur interval ke baad bhi....
daad kabool kijiye madam don


bus interval me popcorn aur icecream nahi mila

very good work though.....

regards
Ziddii bhai,

Aap bhi aa gaye humari post par..arrey waah!!
Aur lag raha hai aap ko pasaNd aaya humara show..so thank u sooooooooooooo muchhhhh!!!!
Keep visiting.......
Aur haan,
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God Bless you.
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Namaskaar Dosto.N,

Gopal Das Neeraj jee ke "karwaN gujar gaya, gubar dekhte rahe.." ke pattern per ek koShiSh pesh kar rahi hooN. Apki ra'i ka intjar rahega.
Yeh rachna 2 phases me.n divided hai.
Pehle me.n ishq ki khumari aur dusre hisse me.n virah ki peedha!

Aap tak pahuche toh suchit kijiyega..

kali khili kuSum saje, Sitare jhilmila uthe,
Dil mile tere mere ke bhanwre geet ga uthe..

Yun laga ki jaise preet mil gayi hai ab mujhe,
le chaluN aa le chaluN un ghataoN ke taley..

Hath thaam kar ke sath chal diye vo chal diye,
paaT paaT jugnuo.N ke jaise jal rahe diye..

Raah thi kaThin magar sath woh jo mil gaya,
jaise sookhTe huye suman ko praan mil gaya..

is qadar thi khushi ke raat bhi dhali nahi.N,
subah ki talash me.N saaNjh Gunguna uthi..

SaNwar SaNwar nikhar nikhar chirag jhilmila uthe,
kali khili kuSum saje sitare jagmaga uthe..!!


~~Ishq ke badal hat gaye aur virah ki bela aa gayi~~

Rukh badal liya tha jaise waqT ki hawao.N ne,
Dard jaisa dikh raha tha un ghani ghatao.N me.n..

Hum abhi SiSak SiSak raaT kat,Te rahe,
Mil rahi thi woh saja jisse bhagte rahe..

KaaT kar din kabhi raaT ki panaah me.N,
Gum huye andhero.N me.n ujalo.n ki chaah me.N..

Baadlo.N ke beech woh dhua.n sa uTh raha,
Jaise shwet chaaNd ki chaNdni ko dho raha..

utha gubar yaado.N ka to raah dagmaga uThi,
khaDa tha mehel jaha.N woh neev charmara uthi..

Aas jaise mit gayi chah jaise mar gayi,
Chahto.n ke iss bhanwar me.N Aah ghar kar gayi..

Hum abhi darey darey kud ko thamte rahey,
yaado.N ke jharokhey se door jhaNkTe rahey..

Kaale kaale megh saare tab hi gaDgadha uthe,
kali khili kuSum saje sitare jagmaga uthe..


~ritu~
...Ek mausam
bahut hi acha likha ji

kamal kar diya

daad hajir hai

kaise ho

sada khush raho

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utha gubar yaado.N ka to raah dagmaga uThi,
khaDa tha mehel jaha.N woh neev charmara uthi..

Its Too Good ........Ritu Ji ! Very Impressive Creation... !

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Tahe dil daad hazir hai...
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hello ritu jee, bahut hee khoobsoorat ehsaas hain, dil ko choo jaati hain aapki rachnayein. Yun hee likhti rahiye aur mehfil ko sajati rahiye. Daad kubool kijiyega.
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Hum tak bhi aapki rachna pahuNchi so aapko suchit kar rahe heiN...!

Aisi kavitaaein paDhne ko bahut kam milti hai aur aapki mehnat hameiN behtareen lagi, Ritu Ji...!

Dil se daad kabuul karein aur apna khayaal rakheiN, ok...?

Duaaon ke saath

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namaskaar dosto.n,

gopal das neeraj jee ke "karwan gujar gaya, gubar dekhte rahe.." ke pattern per ek koshish pesh kar rahi hoon. Apki ra'i ka intjar rahega.
Yeh rachna 2 phases me.n divided hai.
Pehle me.n ishq ki khumari aur dusre hisse me.n virah ki peedha!

Aap tak pahuche toh suchit kijiyega..

Kali khili kusum saje, sitare jhilmila uthe,
dil mile tere mere ke bhanwre geet ga uthe..

Yun laga ki jaise preet mil gayi hai ab mujhe,
le chalun aa le chalun un ghataon ke taley..

Hath thaam kar ke sath chal diye vo chal diye,
paat paat jugnuo.n ke jaise jal rahe diye..

Raah thi kathin magar sath woh jo mil gaya,
jaise sookhte huye suman ko praan mil gaya..

Is qadar thi khushi ke raat bhi dhali nahi.n,
subah ki talash me.n saanjh gunguna uthi..

Sanwar sanwar nikhar nikhar chirag jhilmila uthe,
kali khili kusum saje sitare jagmaga uthe..!!


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rukh badal liya tha jaise waqt ki hawao.n ne,
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Hum abhi sisak sisak raat kat,te rahe,
mil rahi thi woh saja jisse bhagte rahe..

Kaat kar din kabhi raat ki panaah me.n,
gum huye andhero.n me.n ujalo.n ki chaah me.n..

Baadlo.n ke beech woh dhua.n sa uth raha,
jaise shwet chaand ki chandni ko dho raha..

Utha gubar yaado.n ka to raah dagmaga uthi,
khada tha mehel jaha.n woh neev charmara uthi..

Aas jaise mit gayi chah jaise mar gayi,
chahto.n ke iss bhanwar me.n aah ghar kar gayi..

Hum abhi darey darey kud ko thamte rahey,
yaado.n ke jharokhey se door jhankte rahey..

Kaale kaale megh saare tab hi gadgadha uthe,
kali khili kusum saje sitare jagmaga uthe..


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Ritu jee:

namaste!

aapki yeh koShiSh bahot hi Khoob rahii.n.. yuuN hi bazm ki Shaan ko baRhaate rahe.n! .. dil se daad!

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Aap kafi bade kavi ki tarha ubhari hai is kavita se....... Kya kahuN bahut jyda umdaa rahi aapki yeh kavita..... dono hi pahelu ko aapne bayaan bhi bahut achche se kiya hai...........

Daad aur daad hi de sakta huN is umdaa kavita ke liye aur sach meiN aap meiN bahut achcha aur mahaan kavi hai aap yehi rhytm meiN rahiye...
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Khush rahiye......
Khuda hafez........

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bahut hi acha likha ji

kamal kar diya

daad hajir hai

kaise ho

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Namastey shakun Di,
Main Bilkul theek hu apki dua se.
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Hello Ritu Ji ... bahot hi pyaara likha hai aapne ... kitane seedhe aur saaf shabdo se sajaaya hai aap ne apni is rachanaa ko ... Ji humaare dil tak to zaroor pahonch gayi hai aap ki koshish .... Very nice...

aur aap ne dono hi parts bahot khoobi se bayaan kiye hai ... ishq ki khumaari ka andaaze bayaan bhi khoob raha .. aur virah ki peeda ka bhi ..... Hume bahot pasand aaya aap ka likha ... yunhi likhati rahiye ...

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namaste!

aapki yeh koShiSh bahot hi Khoob rahii.n.. yuuN hi bazm ki Shaan ko baRhaate rahe.n! .. dil se daad!

KhuSh rahe.n... apnaa Khayaal raKhe.n

duaao.n ke saath ijaazat

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Khush rahe.N
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Namaskaar Dosto.N,

Gopal Das Neeraj jee ke "karwaN gujar gaya, gubar dekhte rahe.." ke pattern per ek koShiSh pesh kar rahi hooN. Apki ra'i ka intjar rahega.
Yeh rachna 2 phases me.n divided hai.
Pehle me.n ishq ki khumari aur dusre hisse me.n virah ki peedha!

Aap tak pahuche toh suchit kijiyega..

kali khili kuSum saje, Sitare jhilmila uthe,
Dil mile tere mere ke bhanwre geet ga uthe..

Yun laga ki jaise preet mil gayi hai ab mujhe,
le chaluN aa le chaluN un ghataoN ke taley..

Hath thaam kar ke sath chal diye vo chal diye,
paaT paaT jugnuo.N ke jaise jal rahe diye..

Raah thi kaThin magar sath woh jo mil gaya,
jaise sookhTe huye suman ko praan mil gaya..

is qadar thi khushi ke raat bhi dhali nahi.N,
subah ki talash me.N saaNjh Gunguna uthi..

SaNwar SaNwar nikhar nikhar chirag jhilmila uthe,
kali khili kuSum saje sitare jagmaga uthe..!!


~~Ishq ke badal hat gaye aur virah ki bela aa gayi~~

Rukh badal liya tha jaise waqT ki hawao.N ne,
Dard jaisa dikh raha tha un ghani ghatao.N me.n..

Hum abhi SiSak SiSak raaT kat,Te rahe,
Mil rahi thi woh saja jisse bhagte rahe..

KaaT kar din kabhi raaT ki panaah me.N,
Gum huye andhero.N me.n ujalo.n ki chaah me.N..

Baadlo.N ke beech woh dhua.n sa uTh raha,
Jaise shwet chaaNd ki chaNdni ko dho raha..

utha gubar yaado.N ka to raah dagmaga uThi,
khaDa tha mehel jaha.N woh neev charmara uthi..

Aas jaise mit gayi chah jaise mar gayi,
Chahto.n ke iss bhanwar me.N Aah ghar kar gayi..

Hum abhi darey darey kud ko thamte rahey,
yaado.N ke jharokhey se door jhaNkTe rahey..

Kaale kaale megh saare tab hi gaDgadha uthe,
kali khili kuSum saje sitare jagmaga uthe..


~ritu~
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magar aap kaa ye kalaam kalaam is qadar dil ko bhaayaa ki maano saans lenaa bhool gayaa
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Hello Ritu Ji ... bahot hi pyaara likha hai aapne ... kitane seedhe aur saaf shabdo se sajaaya hai aap ne apni is rachanaa ko ... Ji humaare dil tak to zaroor pahonch gayi hai aap ki koshish .... Very nice...

aur aap ne dono hi parts bahot khoobi se bayaan kiye hai ... ishq ki khumaari ka andaaze bayaan bhi khoob raha .. aur virah ki peeda ka bhi ..... Hume bahot pasand aaya aap ka likha ... yunhi likhati rahiye ...

Bhagwaan Ji aap ko har khushi de,

Aapki Dost: Gudia

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Gudiya jee,
Namaskaar!

Maafi chahuNgi itne der se reply karne ke liye...

Aapna kimti waqt meri adna si koshish ko dene ke liye bahut bahut shukriya.Yun hi sath dete rahiye.

Khush rahiye,
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