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Sharab de do.... - 18th July 2010, 11:52 AM

Namaskaar Dosto.N !

Aj Bazm me.N sharaab par kuch alfaaz baya.N karne ja rahi hooN. ummeed hai aap tak pahuchegi meri ye "Sharab"...
Is ghazal ko keval sharab ke sandarbh me.N na paDh kar uske saNdarbh me.N padhiye jise aap sabse jyada chahte haiN..... success...happiness...love...friendship....SDC...y a aur kuch....

"MaiN sharabi hooN mujhe thoDi sharab de do,
Acchi nahi to kya hua,ghatiya bekar de do...

Jo dekhta hai meri oar GhraNa ki badboo aati hai use,
jara nighahe.N uhta kar apni thoDi khushboo udhar de do...

Kal jab maiN sahi tha tab to mujhpe haNste the,
Aj jab galat hooN to apni ek hasi.N shaam de do...

Tum chaho to aaj chhoD du maiN isse,
Zindgi bhar sath nibhane ka vada de do...

Har kisi ne dutkara mujhe is moD pe la khaDa kiya,
Tut raha hooN har pal jara palko.N ka sahara de do...

Mana ke yeh sharab maar dalegi mujhe ek din,
Gar na piyu.N toh amar hone ka vishvas de do...

MaiN sharabi hooN mujhe thodi sharab de do..."

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wow ritu jee, aap sharaab pe likhengi umeed na thi. Kya khoob likha hai maza aa gaya. Nasha ho gaya hai mujhe padkar.



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wow ritu jee, aap sharaab pe likhengi umeed na thi. Kya khoob likha hai maza aa gaya. Nasha ho gaya hai mujhe padkar. Keep it up.



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21st July 2010, 07:57 PM

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22nd July 2010, 02:17 AM

Ritu jee AadaaB!


Haaaaannnnnn......... ,............ ritu jee aap bhi yahaaN aa gayi ab to gine chune hi log bache hoge yahaaN is mehfil se ........

Achchi koshish hai ........ per ise sharabi thread meiN post karne jaise sirf do sher lage mujhe ......

Shayad Zidd sahab isiliye hase.........

Wel is achchi koshish per daad hazir hai..........

Khush rahiye.....
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25th July 2010, 12:02 PM

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Haaaaannnnnn......... ,............ ritu jee aap bhi yahaaN aa gayi ab to gine chune hi log bache hoge yahaaN is mehfil se ........

Achchi koshish hai ........ per ise sharabi thread meiN post karne jaise sirf do sher lage mujhe ......

Shayad Zidd sahab isiliye hase.........

Wel is achchi koshish per daad hazir hai..........

Khush rahiye.....
Khuda Hafez......

Sameer jee,

bina piye likhi thi shayad isliye jyada relevent nahi.N hai 'sharab' se..
next time isse acchi likhne ki koshish karuNgi.
Waqt dene ka tah-e-dil se shukriya.
God Bless You,
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25th July 2010, 05:36 PM

Wow ritu ji!

Itna zabardast lagaav sharaab se!

aapkii sharab ham tak pahunch gayii hai. bhejne ka bahut bahut shukriya.

abhii toh filhaal iskii bekhudii ka lutf utha raha hoon.. ....
   
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Itna zabardast lagaav sharaab se!

aapkii sharab ham tak pahunch gayii hai. bhejne ka bahut bahut shukriya.

abhii toh filhaal iskii bekhudii ka lutf utha raha hoon.. ....
Shukriya mann jee.....................................
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bahut hi achi rachna hai. padh kar acha laga.
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Shukriya Pali jee.

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Adaab Mohtrma Ritu Sahiba!

I'll be frank..I liked the spirit behind the penning this work of yours!

Khush Rahein!


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Adaab Mohtrma Ritu Sahiba!

I'll be frank..I liked the spirit behind the penning this work of yours!

Khush Rahein!

Thanks a lot EnigmA!!

God Bless You

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Love taareef - 13th December 2011, 03:30 PM

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13th December 2011, 08:07 PM

Okay.. on a frank and honest note, I didn't understand anything and it was bit vague. Things were not connecting fine. Thoughts are confused. Ritu, you have a rhythm. Try to think of short but clean thoughts. Try to write and then read and then rework on your works. You'd love to see your own final creation.

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13th December 2011, 11:36 PM

Hello Ritu jee !!
Aapne jo apni nazm se pahle likha ki ise kis sandarbh mein dekhna hai, agar mai us sandarbh mein dekhta hoon to mujhe sab theek dikhta hai ... Sivaay ek sher ke jisme thodi confusion si ho gayi hai shayad

Kal jab maiN sahi tha tab to mujhpe haNste the,
(Ek tarah se matlab ye ki Sahi tha to log majjak banaate the, ya sath mein haste the? )
Aj jab galat hooN to apni ek hasi.N shaam de do...
(Aaj jab galat hoon, to sath de do, matlab ye ki koi sath nahi hai tumhi sath de do)

To saara mudda pahli line ke meaning pe atak gaya hai ... uska meaning aisa nikal raha hai ki majjak banate the, us se doosri line ka sense nahi ban raha.... Aur agar pahli line ka matlab ye hai ki jab mai sahi tha to log mere sath haste the, to aapne jo word choose kiya hai ki "mujhpar haste the" wo thoda galat ho gaya hai ....

Ye meri soch hui jo mujhe padh ke lagi ... Aapne kya soch ke likhi ho sakta hai kuch alag ho ... please don't mind ....
But mujhe theme aapki sahi lagi, jo mai samajh saka, bas ek sher thoda confusing hai ...
Good Work ... Keep writing ... :-)


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