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Post ghazal - tujhe yaad karte karte kahiN shaam dhal na jaaye ! - 23rd July 2009, 05:44 PM

haaziraat e buzm ko mera sallam !

merii jaanib aapki masroofiyaat kii chaahat ke silsile kuch ashaar ke zariye aapse arz e tamanna huN ..

mulaahza farmaaeiN !


tujhe yaad karte karte kahiN shaam dhal na jaaye
tere intzaar meiN hi ye samaaN badal na jaaye

mujhe waQt rahte mil lo mere paas aa ke baitho
kahiN raat dhalte dhalte mera dam nikal na jaaye

tujhe haQ diya hai maine mere saath dillagii ka
mere dil se khel jab tak tera dil bahal na jaaye

zaraa ban ke sakht dil tum mere faatihe pe aana
mujhe dekh khaak hote kahiN dil pighal na jaaye

meri khaak se sharaare uRR uRR ke phir rahe haiN
meri gor pe na aana kahiN paaNv jal na jaaye

kabhi sochna safar meiN , jo bana tha tera saathii
kamii uss ki tujh ko manzil pe aa ke khal naa jaaye ...


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23rd July 2009, 06:22 PM

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haaziraat e buzm mera ko mera sallam !

merii jaanib aapki masroofiyaat kii chaahat ke silsile kuch ashaar ke zariye aapse arz e tamanna huN ..

mulaahza farmaaeiN !


tujhe yaad karte karte kahiN shaam dhal na jaaye
tere intzaar meiN hi ye samaaN badal na jaaye

mujhe waQt rahte mil lo mere paas aa ke baitho
kahiN raat dhalte dhalte mera dam nikal na jaaye

tujhe haQ diya hai maine mere saath dillagii ka
mere dil se khel jab tak tera dil bahal na jaaye

zaraa ban ke sakht dil tum mere faatihe pe aana
mujhe dekh khaak hote kahiN dil pighal na jaaye

meri khaak se sharaare uRR uRR ke phir rahe haiN
meri gor pe na aana kahiN paaNv jal na jaaye

kabhi sochna safar meiN , jo bana tha tera saathii
kamii uss ki tujh ko manzil pe aa ke khal naa jaaye ...
kshitiz sahab....aadaab,

ab kaise tarif karun ye samj hi nahin aata mujhe..............
jo bi kahunga kam hi hoga............
mujhe apki ye sabse behtarin ghazal lagi................
ab apki sabhi ghazal lajawab hai to iski tarif karne me ap samaj sakte hai ki mujko shabd dhundne ke liye mujhe kitne taklif hogi
is ghazal ki rawani bahut khaas hai....bahut kam dekne ko milti hai
jaise ek harf dusre se milne ko betaab hai....lad raha hai ho jaise

uu hi likte rahiye.......
   
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23rd July 2009, 06:34 PM

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haaziraat e buzm mera ko mera sallam !

merii jaanib aapki masroofiyaat kii chaahat ke silsile kuch ashaar ke zariye aapse arz e tamanna huN ..

mulaahza farmaaeiN !


tujhe yaad karte karte kahiN shaam dhal na jaaye
tere intzaar meiN hi ye samaaN badal na jaaye

mujhe waQt rahte mil lo mere paas aa ke baitho
kahiN raat dhalte dhalte mera dam nikal na jaaye

tujhe haQ diya hai maine mere saath dillagii ka
mere dil se khel jab tak tera dil bahal na jaaye

zaraa ban ke sakht dil tum mere faatihe pe aana
mujhe dekh khaak hote kahiN dil pighal na jaaye

meri khaak se sharaare uRR uRR ke phir rahe haiN
meri gor pe na aana kahiN paaNv jal na jaaye

kabhi sochna safar meiN , jo bana tha tera saathii
kamii uss ki tujh ko manzil pe aa ke khal naa jaaye ...
Wah Kshitiz Sahab....

Dil se har sher per sirf wah nikal rahi hai, Masha Allah bahut khoob behad umda Gazal kahi hai aapne ...... Ek lambi kahani ko chand asharon mein samaa liya aapne...
Ko'ii ek sher pasand aaye hota to aur baat hoti magar sare ke sare sher hiumda ho to Tariff karne mein bahut mushkiil jati hai..

Aapki is Gazal kii kitni bhi tariff karun to Nacheez ke alfaaz kaam pad jayenge..

Ek behtreen peshkash per dil se nikali daad kabool kijiye....

Likhaye rahiye..
Khush rahiye...
Khuda Hafez.....


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23rd July 2009, 08:45 PM

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meri gor pe na aana kahiN paaNv jal na jaaye
Kshitiz Bhai...

Ek arse baad Bazm mein aaya ...aur tumhari ghazal padi.... wohi dard-o-gam..wohi tez dhaar abhi bhi barkaraar hai...

Kush Raho.......



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23rd July 2009, 09:01 PM

Shitiz jiiiiii..................bahut khoobbbbbbbbb aapne bahut hi jabardast likha hai, har sher khud bolta lagta hai, ahsaas to masha-allah !



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bahut dino baad aapki koi gazal padne ko miili bahut accha laga padkar.

kush rahiye
bazm mein aate rahiye


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24th July 2009, 08:26 AM

Kshitiz jee...

kaise hain aap?

Mah sha allah .... Ghazal behterreen lagii ... har sher dil mein chu sa gaya ho ... Hamesha ki tarah

Kisi ek sher ko chunn te toh na insaafi hogii ..

Yu hi likhte rahye ..mehfil sajate rahye


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Kshitiz Ji.......bahut khub likha hai aapne......Ghazal ke ehsaas ulfat ka dard bayaan karte lagte hai......har ek sher taarif ka hakdaar hai......maine bahut time baad itni umda ghazal padhi hai.....main aapki Ghazal ke sabhi shero ko dil se daad deta hu......kabul kijiye..........the best........




YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...

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25th July 2009, 01:15 AM

kshitiz bhai...

Mujhe ab tumhari burai karni hai... kabhi kuch aisa likha .. mujhe nahi kehna har baar ki isse accha kahiN nahi .. sach kahuN pehle sher ko padh ke laga tha mauka mil gaya .. par mera mauka hoton se nikal ke muskaan maiN badalta chala gaya padhte padhte ..... bohat hi umda .. lajawaab...

Bas dil jeet liya

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simply great, wonderful, superb, mind blowing... kshitiz jii...

sare words chhote lagte hain aapki taareef ke liye...

mujhe apki ye ghazal behadd pasand aayi.... hats of to u...
saare ehsaas naye se lage... or waise bhi aapka kopi jawab nhi hai...

so thanks to u ki aapne itni ghazal humse share ki...

khush rahiye ..

apna khayal rakhiye...

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25th July 2009, 10:28 AM

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haaziraat e buzm ko mera sallam !

merii jaanib aapki masroofiyaat kii chaahat ke silsile kuch ashaar ke zariye aapse arz e tamanna huN ..

mulaahza farmaaeiN !


tujhe yaad karte karte kahiN shaam dhal na jaaye
tere intzaar meiN hi ye samaaN badal na jaaye

mujhe waQt rahte mil lo mere paas aa ke baitho
kahiN raat dhalte dhalte mera dam nikal na jaaye

tujhe haQ diya hai maine mere saath dillagii ka
mere dil se khel jab tak tera dil bahal na jaaye

zaraa ban ke sakht dil tum mere faatihe pe aana
mujhe dekh khaak hote kahiN dil pighal na jaaye

meri khaak se sharaare uRR uRR ke phir rahe haiN
meri gor pe na aana kahiN paaNv jal na jaaye

kabhi sochna safar meiN , jo bana tha tera saathii
kamii uss ki tujh ko manzil pe aa ke khal naa jaaye ...
Bahot khoob Kshitiz bhai,

bahot hi umda peshkash....yeh sher dil ke qareeb raha

tujhe haQ diya hai maine mere saath dillagii ka
mere dil se khel jab tak tera dil bahal na jaaye


god bless u..dil se daad kubool kijiye.

cheers,
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mujhe waQt rahte mil lo mere paas aa ke baitho
kahiN raat dhalte dhalte mera dam nikal na jaaye

tujhe haQ diya hai maine mere saath dillagii ka
mere dil se khel jab tak tera dil bahal na jaaye



wow!!....this one is really superb......hamesha ki tarah, behad khoobsurat ehsaas hain hai....dil se daad qubool kijiye kshitiz jee...yuhi likhte rahiye..






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haaziraat e buzm ko mera sallam !

merii jaanib aapki masroofiyaat kii chaahat ke silsile kuch ashaar ke zariye aapse arz e tamanna huN ..

mulaahza farmaaeiN !


tujhe yaad karte karte kahiN shaam dhal na jaaye
tere intzaar meiN hi ye samaaN badal na jaaye

mujhe waQt rahte mil lo mere paas aa ke baitho
kahiN raat dhalte dhalte mera dam nikal na jaaye

tujhe haQ diya hai maine mere saath dillagii ka
mere dil se khel jab tak tera dil bahal na jaaye

zaraa ban ke sakht dil tum mere faatihe pe aana
mujhe dekh khaak hote kahiN dil pighal na jaaye

meri khaak se sharaare uRR uRR ke phir rahe haiN
meri gor pe na aana kahiN paaNv jal na jaaye

kabhi sochna safar meiN , jo bana tha tera saathii
kamii uss ki tujh ko manzil pe aa ke khal naa jaaye ...



kshitiz saheb


aadaab aur namaste


aapki yeh Ghazal padhi aur bhai yaqeen kijiyega aakhirii she'r paDhne ke baad jo jumlaa zabaan par tha yeh tha ke "Kshitiz miyaaN ab kiyaa aapne insaaf lukhnow ki mitti ke saath"


subhaan allah....kya kehne haiN is Ghazal ke....dheroN daad qabuul ho bhai


allah kare zor-e-qalam aur ziyaada...!!!


aapki kaavisheN dhooNdnii padeNgii, dekheN to kaun-kaun se gohar chhupa ke rakkhe haiN aapne hamari nazar se !!


aap par nazar rahegi aage se


jeete rahiye
rab raakha
maikash


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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai

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mashaa ALLAH ...


kiyaa kahoN kuch smajh nahieN aa raha ...wallah ! bahut khoob . kshitiz saaHeh wallah kamal likha hai app ne . zor-e-kalam aur ziyaadah ...






kiyoN keh is thread per jitne bhi aHbaab aaye sabhi ko bahut pasand aaya kshitiz saaheb ka kalam isi baat ko mad e nazar rakhte huwe
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26th July 2009, 08:15 PM

Mere Navab,

Bahut khub. arsa ho gaya yaha aaye huae aur arsa ho gaya tumhe bhi padhe huae. par aaj aa kar wahi sama bandh gaya... jo kabhi humare aaspaas charo pahar rahta tha.

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haaziraat e buzm ko mera sallam !

merii jaanib aapki masroofiyaat kii chaahat ke silsile kuch ashaar ke zariye aapse arz e tamanna huN ..

mulaahza farmaaeiN !


tujhe yaad karte karte kahiN shaam dhal na jaaye
tere intzaar meiN hi ye samaaN badal na jaaye

mujhe waQt rahte mil lo mere paas aa ke baitho
kahiN raat dhalte dhalte mera dam nikal na jaaye

tujhe haQ diya hai maine mere saath dillagii ka
mere dil se khel jab tak tera dil bahal na jaaye

zaraa ban ke sakht dil tum mere faatihe pe aana
mujhe dekh khaak hote kahiN dil pighal na jaaye

meri khaak se sharaare uRR uRR ke phir rahe haiN
meri gor pe na aana kahiN paaNv jal na jaaye

kabhi sochna safar meiN , jo bana tha tera saathii
kamii uss ki tujh ko manzil pe aa ke khal naa jaaye ...
Kshitiz bhai,

Bayaani to humesha ki tarah hi dil ko chhoo lene waali hai... har sher apne aap me mukammal laga mujhe.... Magar main tumhaara dost hoon, isiliye tumhe padhkar mann yeh sochne pe majboor ho gaya ke aise khayaal tumhaare zehan me aaye kaise...

Ho sakta hai ke main zyada soch raha hoon, but mujhe aisa lagaa ke tumhaare andar ek badhaa gubaar hai jo is bayaani me jhalakta hai...

Aur kya kahoon... bass duaa karoonga ke tum humesha khush raho aur muskuraate raho...

tujhe haQ diya hai maine mere saath dillagii ka
mere dil se khel jab tak tera dil bahal na jaaye
-- Yeh sher bass dil ke aar paar ho gaya...


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27th July 2009, 02:58 PM

kshitiz bhaaii,

kaise ho?

aapki Ghazal meN tagazzul aur tafakkur ka imtezaaj hai. asha’ar kya haiN aap ne alfaz ke moti pro diye haiN. Ghazal behad pasand aayee, aur kuchh sher ko waqaii qaatilaana hai, un ke liye alag se daad haazir hai...

mujhe waQt rahte mil lo mere paas aa ke baitho
kahiN raat dhalte dhalte mera dam nikal na jaaye

tujhe haQ diya hai maine mere saath dillagii ka
mere dil se khel jab tak tera dil bahal na jaaye

bohat khuub!

2 sher hai.n jin ki behr par aap phir se nazar kar leeejiyega

meri khaak se sharaare uRR uRR ke phir rahe haiN

meri gor pe na aana kahiN paaNv jal na jaaye


kabhi sochna safar meiN , jo bana tha tera saathii

kamii uss ki tujh ko manzil pe aa ke khal naa jaaye ...

kuch Ghalat kah gaya huu.n to mazrat chaahu.ngaa...
ek khuubsuurat Ghazal par phir se ek baar daad haazir hai..yuu.n hi likhte rahe.n.

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kshitiz jee,
kya kahu kuchh samjh meiN nahi aarahi hai ...roz ek bar aati hun is ghazal ko padhti hu reply dene ki koshish karti hun fir labz hi kam pad jate hain aur main wapas chali jati hun

bahot hi khubsoorat ghazal hai
har sher dil ko chhu gayi

kuchh chune hue phool meiN bani hui guldasta hai yeh ghazal

dil se daad kabool kijiye

aapki agli ghazal k intezaar meiN

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haaziraat e buzm ko mera sallam !

merii jaanib aapki masroofiyaat kii chaahat ke silsile kuch ashaar ke zariye aapse arz e tamanna huN ..

mulaahza farmaaeiN !


tujhe yaad karte karte kahiN shaam dhal na jaaye
tere intzaar meiN hi ye samaaN badal na jaaye

mujhe waQt rahte mil lo mere paas aa ke baitho
kahiN raat dhalte dhalte mera dam nikal na jaaye

tujhe haQ diya hai maine mere saath dillagii ka
mere dil se khel jab tak tera dil bahal na jaaye

zaraa ban ke sakht dil tum mere faatihe pe aana
mujhe dekh khaak hote kahiN dil pighal na jaaye

meri khaak se sharaare uRR uRR ke phir rahe haiN
meri gor pe na aana kahiN paaNv jal na jaaye

kabhi sochna safar meiN , jo bana tha tera saathii
kamii uss ki tujh ko manzil pe aa ke khal naa jaaye ...
Bahot khoob kshitiz jii

Mashaallah bahot hi khoobsurat likhte hain aap..........................................
Dil se daad qubool kijiye................................
sabhi ashaar lajawaab hain...................................
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aapko parhkar bahaut accha laga. khaaskar yeh sher...
"tujhe haQ diya hai maine mere saath dillagii ka / mere dil se khel jab tak tera dil behal na jaaye"
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haaziraat e buzm ko mera sallam !

merii jaanib aapki masroofiyaat kii chaahat ke silsile kuch ashaar ke zariye aapse arz e tamanna huN ..

mulaahza farmaaeiN !


tujhe yaad karte karte kahiN shaam dhal na jaaye
tere intzaar meiN hi ye samaaN badal na jaaye

mujhe waQt rahte mil lo mere paas aa ke baitho
kahiN raat dhalte dhalte mera dam nikal na jaaye

tujhe haQ diya hai maine mere saath dillagii ka
mere dil se khel jab tak tera dil bahal na jaaye

zaraa ban ke sakht dil tum mere faatihe pe aana
mujhe dekh khaak hote kahiN dil pighal na jaaye

meri khaak se sharaare uRR uRR ke phir rahe haiN
meri gor pe na aana kahiN paaNv jal na jaaye

kabhi sochna safar meiN , jo bana tha tera saathii
kamii uss ki tujh ko manzil pe aa ke khal naa jaaye ...


kshitiz jii....
ek behad khoobsoorat nazm pe dil se daad kubool kijiye....
likhte rahiye...
khush rahiye...

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kshitiz sahab....aadaab,

ab kaise tarif karun ye samj hi nahin aata mujhe..............
jo bi kahunga kam hi hoga............
mujhe apki ye sabse behtarin ghazal lagi................
ab apki sabhi ghazal lajawab hai to iski tarif karne me ap samaj sakte hai ki mujko shabd dhundne ke liye mujhe kitne taklif hogi
is ghazal ki rawani bahut khaas hai....bahut kam dekne ko milti hai
jaise ek harf dusre se milne ko betaab hai....lad raha hai ho jaise

uu hi likte rahiye.......
maneesh saahib !

jee tareef ke liye behad shukrguzaar huN ... kalaam pe aapne apnaa keemtii waQt diya aur ghaur farmaya ...

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Wah Kshitiz Sahab....

Dil se har sher per sirf wah nikal rahi hai, Masha Allah bahut khoob behad umda Gazal kahi hai aapne ...... Ek lambi kahani ko chand asharon mein samaa liya aapne...
Ko'ii ek sher pasand aaye hota to aur baat hoti magar sare ke sare sher hiumda ho to Tariff karne mein bahut mushkiil jati hai..

Aapki is Gazal kii kitni bhi tariff karun to Nacheez ke alfaaz kaam pad jayenge..

Ek behtreen peshkash per dil se nikali daad kabool kijiye....

Likhaye rahiye..
Khush rahiye...
Khuda Hafez.....
khwaaish saahib !

jee aapne itne khuubsuurat andaaz meiN tareef kii ... ghazal kii khoobsooratii aur barh gayii ...

hausla afzaaii ka aage bhi talabgaar rahunga ...

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Kshitiz Bhai...

Ek arse baad Bazm mein aaya ...aur tumhari ghazal padi.... wohi dard-o-gam..wohi tez dhaar abhi bhi barkaraar hai...

Kush Raho.......
aman bhai kahaN ho ?

tumhaari to koi khair khabar hi nahi hai ...

itne dinoN baad tumhe dekha behad khushi huii ...

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Shitiz jiiiiii..................bahut khoobbbbbbbbb aapne bahut hi jabardast likha hai, har sher khud bolta lagta hai, ahsaas to masha-allah !



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bahut dino baad aapki koi gazal padne ko miili bahut accha laga padkar.

kush rahiye
bazm mein aate rahiye
sunita jee kaisi haiN aap ?

jee aapkii tareef hamesha hi sukuuN pahuchaatii hai ...

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Kshitiz jee...

kaise hain aap?

Mah sha allah .... Ghazal behterreen lagii ... har sher dil mein chu sa gaya ho ... Hamesha ki tarah

Kisi ek sher ko chunn te toh na insaafi hogii ..

Yu hi likhte rahye ..mehfil sajate rahye


take good care

mandeep
mandeep jee !

kaisi haiN aap .. ?

ashaar aapko pasand aaye ... inhe shaya karne ka sabab poora hua ...

hausla afzaaii ka tah e dil se shukriya ..

yuN hi rabta banaaye rakhiye

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Kshitiz Ji.......bahut khub likha hai aapne......Ghazal ke ehsaas ulfat ka dard bayaan karte lagte hai......har ek sher taarif ka hakdaar hai......maine bahut time baad itni umda ghazal padhi hai.....main aapki Ghazal ke sabhi shero ko dil se daad deta hu......kabul kijiye..........the best........
naresh saahib aapka tareef karne ka andaaz bhi ghazal jaisa hai mujhe aapki zubaan behad pasand hai ...

alaaH aapke zurf ko barkat bakhshe ...

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kshitiz bhai...

Mujhe ab tumhari burai karni hai... kabhi kuch aisa likha .. mujhe nahi kehna har baar ki isse accha kahiN nahi .. sach kahuN pehle sher ko padh ke laga tha mauka mil gaya .. par mera mauka hoton se nikal ke muskaan maiN badalta chala gaya padhte padhte ..... bohat hi umda .. lajawaab...

Bas dil jeet liya

Kunaal
kunnu kaise ho bhai !

saree baateiN theek haiN , mujhe ye batao ki phone kab karoge ...

aapka aitbaar kaun kare
roz ka intezaar kaun kare

ye sher khaas tumhaare liye tha

tareef karne ka andaaz wahi purana hai , tumhe saath dekh ke hamesha khushi hotii hai !

jahaN bhi ho khush raho !

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simply great, wonderful, superb, mind blowing... kshitiz jii...

sare words chhote lagte hain aapki taareef ke liye...

mujhe apki ye ghazal behadd pasand aayi.... hats of to u...
saare ehsaas naye se lage... or waise bhi aapka kopi jawab nhi hai...

so thanks to u ki aapne itni ghazal humse share ki...

khush rahiye ..

apna khayal rakhiye...

vicky
vicky bhai ...

behad sharminda huN aapka shukriya na adaa kar paane ka ... darasal pichle kayii dinoN se sdc ke deedaar to mumkin ho paa rahe the magar tasalli se waQt nahi nikal paa raha tha ...

khair aapki hausla afzaaii hamaare sar aaNkhoN pe ...

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Bahot khoob Kshitiz bhai,

bahot hi umda peshkash....yeh sher dil ke qareeb raha

tujhe haQ diya hai maine mere saath dillagii ka
mere dil se khel jab tak tera dil bahal na jaaye


god bless u..dil se daad kubool kijiye.

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pradhuman saahib !

kaise haiN aap ??? jee ghazal pasand aane ke liye bahut bahut shukriya !!!

aapki zarra nawaazi ka maiN intehaaN mamnoon huN !

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mujhe waQt rahte mil lo mere paas aa ke baitho
kahiN raat dhalte dhalte mera dam nikal na jaaye

tujhe haQ diya hai maine mere saath dillagii ka
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wow!!....this one is really superb......hamesha ki tarah, behad khoobsurat ehsaas hain hai....dil se daad qubool kijiye kshitiz jee...yuhi likhte rahiye..


zainy jee kaisi haiN aap ???

aaj kal aana jaana behad kam ho chala hai .. darasal masruufiyatoN ke chalte shayri kabhi kabhi tham si jaati hai ... khair

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kshitiz saheb


aadaab aur namaste


aapki yeh Ghazal padhi aur bhai yaqeen kijiyega aakhirii she'r paDhne ke baad jo jumlaa zabaan par tha yeh tha ke "Kshitiz miyaaN ab kiyaa aapne insaaf lukhnow ki mitti ke saath"


subhaan allah....kya kehne haiN is Ghazal ke....dheroN daad qabuul ho bhai


allah kare zor-e-qalam aur ziyaada...!!!


aapki kaavisheN dhooNdnii padeNgii, dekheN to kaun-kaun se gohar chhupa ke rakkhe haiN aapne hamari nazar se !!


aap par nazar rahegi aage se


jeete rahiye
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maikash
maiQash bhai ... sehat kaisi hai aapkii ???

maiN lafzoN meiN bayaaN nahi kar sakta kis Qadar sharminda huN ... magar ye jumla hai na ... maiN der karta nahi der ho jaatii hai mere liye hi bana hai ...

aapne apne keemtii waQt ka ek beshkeemtii hissa mere hisse ke liye muQarrar kiya ... be-intehaaN khushii huii !!!

ghazal par aapki nazareiN inaayat yuN hui ki laga kisi ka rootha naseeb saNwar gaya ...

aage bhi hausla afzaaii ka talabgaar rahunga !

daad tah e dil se Qubuul kee gayii ...

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mashaa ALLAH ...


kiyaa kahoN kuch smajh nahieN aa raha ...wallah ! bahut khoob . kshitiz saaHeh wallah kamal likha hai app ne . zor-e-kalam aur ziyaadah ...






kiyoN keh is thread per jitne bhi aHbaab aaye sabhi ko bahut pasand aaya kshitiz saaheb ka kalam isi baat ko mad e nazar rakhte huwe
mera sabhi moderator se iltejaa hai keh is ghazal ko kuch waqt ke liye sticky ker diyaa , aHsaan mand rahoNga app ka .


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mujeeb bhai ... kaise mizaaj haiN ???

behad muafi chaahta huN saahib ... der se haaziri de raha huN ... magar masruufiyat ek aisi mazbuurii hai jo insaan se jo na karaaye vo thoRa hai ...

aapka tareef karne ka andaaz bhi nirala hai ...

meri khushnasibi ki ghazal aapkii nazaroN meiN Qaabil e daad hai ...

aage bhi issi rabt ko kaayam rakhna chaahunga !!!

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Khsitiz Saaheb...!

Aap ke ghazal ka kya kehna...!

Har ek sher pe dil se aah aur waah dono nikal gayi. Bahot khoob likha hai aapne. Bahut hi khoob!

Aur kya kahein, bas duaa karte hein aap yun hi likhte rahein taaki hum aap se seekh sakein...!

Apna khayaal rakhein, ok...?




Jeene ke liye mujhe ek sapna dedo
Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai

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haaziraat e buzm ko mera sallam !

merii jaanib aapki masroofiyaat kii chaahat ke silsile kuch ashaar ke zariye aapse arz e tamanna huN ..

mulaahza farmaaeiN !


tujhe yaad karte karte kahiN shaam dhal na jaaye
tere intzaar meiN hi ye samaaN badal na jaaye

mujhe waQt rahte mil lo mere paas aa ke baitho
kahiN raat dhalte dhalte mera dam nikal na jaaye

tujhe haQ diya hai maine mere saath dillagii ka
mere dil se khel jab tak tera dil bahal na jaaye

zaraa ban ke sakht dil tum mere faatihe pe aana
mujhe dekh khaak hote kahiN dil pighal na jaaye

meri khaak se sharaare uRR uRR ke phir rahe haiN
meri gor pe na aana kahiN paaNv jal na jaaye

kabhi sochna safar meiN , jo bana tha tera saathii
kamii uss ki tujh ko manzil pe aa ke khal naa jaaye ...
Kshitiz sahab Aadaab.........

Janta hun aapki is gazal per maine pahele bhi reply kiya hai, per yakin janiye aapki yeh gazal bahut dil ki gehrai mein bas gayi hai........ Ise baar baar padhne ko ji chahta hai aur is padhne ke liye aapko dhundna padta hai, phir is gazal tak pahunchta hun, isliye is per reply kiya ke aage jab bhi padhna chahun to jaldi mil jaye.......

Aapki gazal ke khayal hi kuch aise hai ke mere dil ke behad kareeb se guzarte hai shayad aapne bhi kuch aisa mehsus kiya ho yeh gazal kehne se pahele,

Daad daad daad......... Khaksaar ke alfaaz tarif ke kabil nahi rahe sahab...

Bus ilteja hai aapse ke bazm mein aaker apni nayi kalam se ruberu karaiye.......

Khush rhaiye,
Apna khayal rakhiye,
Khuad hafez


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25th June 2012, 02:12 PM

meena didi ...

aapko cal ki thi phone utha nahi ...

bahut din baad idhar aaya to dekha kuch jawaab adhoore pade hue haiN...

bas unhi ke zariye haal jaan ne ki koshish meiN ...

apna khyaal rakhiye..


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pulkit bhai ...
2009 ki guftgu 2012 meiN poorii karna bhi litna ajeeb hai na ...
kya kare na yahaaN aane ka waqt milta hai na man karta hai ...
phir bhi dil nahi maanta...

khair ... kuch to andar tha jo baahar nikla iss baare meiN tum kahiN se ghalat nahi

taareef ke liye shukriya nahi kahunga

apna khyaal rakho


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25th June 2012, 02:51 PM

mayank bhai...
kaise haiN aap?
bahut dinoN baad pichle kuch dinoN se idhar aana jana laga hai...

aapka msg padha aur jawaab bhi nahi diya
kya kareiN jawaab ho to deiN ???

aapka gunehgaar huN jo chaahe saza de dijiye ...
baaki jin ashaar ki baat aapne karii meri zubaaN pe to vo babeher hi haiN ...

mauka mile to phone kijiyega ya apna number msg kar dijiyega mujhse kahiN miss ho gaya hai , aapse baat karke hamesha maza aata hai

apna khyaal rakhiye
khush rahiye


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haaziraat e buzm ko mera sallam !

merii jaanib aapki masroofiyaat kii chaahat ke silsile kuch ashaar ke zariye aapse arz e tamanna huN ..

mulaahza farmaaeiN !


tujhe yaad karte karte kahiN shaam dhal na jaaye
tere intzaar meiN hi ye samaaN badal na jaaye

mujhe waQt rahte mil lo mere paas aa ke baitho
kahiN raat dhalte dhalte mera dam nikal na jaaye

tujhe haQ diya hai maine mere saath dillagii ka
mere dil se khel jab tak tera dil bahal na jaaye

zaraa ban ke sakht dil tum mere faatihe pe aana
mujhe dekh khaak hote kahiN dil pighal na jaaye

meri khaak se sharaare uRR uRR ke phir rahe haiN
meri gor pe na aana kahiN paaNv jal na jaaye

kabhi sochna safar meiN , jo bana tha tera saathii
kamii uss ki tujh ko manzil pe aa ke khal naa jaaye ...

waaah !!! khshitij ji ... waqayee ek nayab qalaam hai !! ek jaadoo sa paida kar diya hai khayaal, jazbaat, alfaaz, rawaanee, bayaan ki umkdagi ne ... jaise ki ek mayajaal ....ek tilism .... jisse padhne waalaa qattayee bahar naheen nikal payega.... aapko dheron daad ....
   
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haaziraat e buzm ko mera sallam !

merii jaanib aapki masroofiyaat kii chaahat ke silsile kuch ashaar ke zariye aapse arz e tamanna huN ..

mulaahza farmaaeiN !


tujhe yaad karte karte kahiN shaam dhal na jaaye
tere intzaar meiN hi ye samaaN badal na jaaye

mujhe waQt rahte mil lo mere paas aa ke baitho
kahiN raat dhalte dhalte mera dam nikal na jaaye

tujhe haQ diya hai maine mere saath dillagii ka
mere dil se khel jab tak tera dil bahal na jaaye

zaraa ban ke sakht dil tum mere faatihe pe aana
mujhe dekh khaak hote kahiN dil pighal na jaaye

meri khaak se sharaare uRR uRR ke phir rahe haiN
meri gor pe na aana kahiN paaNv jal na jaaye

kabhi sochna safar meiN , jo bana tha tera saathii
kamii uss ki tujh ko manzil pe aa ke khal naa jaaye ...
Ji Bhaut,Bhaut Sunder......................

tujhe haQ diya hai maine mere saath dillagii ka
mere dil se khel jab tak tera dil bahal na jaaye

zaraa ban ke sakht dil tum mere faatihe pe aana
mujhe dekh khaak hote kahiN dil pighal na jaaye



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Jo Humpe Guzari Guzarey Chale Gaye

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28th June 2012, 05:28 PM

WAH !!!! "mere dil se khel jab tak tera dil bahal na jaaye"....WAH !! WAH!!! Bohot khoob..... Saare lines achhe hai...magar yeh wala....bhas dil ko choo gaya. Likhte rahiyega.... Badiya hai....


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