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Ghazal:aks hai.n ham aaiinaa dikhlaaye.n kyaa -
14th March 2009, 12:29 PM
shayri.com ke sabhii dosto.n ko mere salaam, ek taazi Ghazal ke saath haazir huu.n.. apni raa'ey se zaruur nawaaziyegaa
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haal-e-soz-e-dil tumhe batlaaye.n kyaa
ashk kaa paimaanaa phir chalkaaye.n kyaa
naar-e-ulfat ai sanam bhaDkaaye.n kyaa!
ham tumhaare aur qareeb aa jaaye.n kyaa!
dil me.n dhaDhkan ban ke ham bas jaaye.n ge!
jism do hai.n jaan ek ho jaaye.n kyaa?
kyu.n nahii.n kartee hamaaraa aitbaar?
"aks hai.n ham aaiinaa dikhlaaye.n kyaa"
ishq dozakh bhii hai, jannat bhii hai ishq
dekhiye qismat me.n apnii paaye.n kyaa?
ham zamee.n kii Khaak tum nuur-e-falak
to kshitiz par ,chal ke ham mil jaaye.n kyaa!
zindagii ke pech-o-kham me.n pha.ns gaye
kyaa kare.n! ab roye.n kyaa! muskaaye.n kyaa!
ab kahaa.n :Ghaafil: woh shauq-e-shaairee!
aap hee farmaaiye, farmaaye.n kyaa?
-Mayank
haal-e-soz-e-dil: dil ke dard ka haal
naar-e-ulfat: ishq ki aag
dozakh: hell
jannat:heaven
kshitiz: horizon
falak: aasamaa.n
pech-o-kham: Twist and turns
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14th March 2009, 03:07 PM
हाल-ए-सोज़-ए-दिल तुम्हे बतलायें क्या
अश्क का पैमाना फिर छलकायें क्या
may I show you the state of my heart pain
may I spill the cup of my tears once again
नार-ए-उल्फ़त! ऐ सनम भड्कायें क्या
हम तुम्हारे और क़रीब आ जायें क्या
the fire of love,my dear, may I blow
may I come closer to you, a bit more
दिल में धड्कन बन के हम बस जायेंगे
जिस्म दो हैं जान एक हो जायें क्या?
As a heart beat, in your heart I will reside
To become a single life, let the two souls unite
क्युं नहीं करती हमारा ऐतबार?
"अक्स हैं हम आईना दिखलायें क्या"
Why am I never worthy of your trust
Let me show you a mirror,I am your reflect
इश्क़ दोज़ख भी है, जन्नत भी है इश्क़
देखिये क़िस्मत में अपनी पायें क्या
love is hell and love is also heavenly
lets see what I get from my destiny
हम ज़मीं की ख़ाक तुम नूर-ए-फ़लक
तो उफ़ुक़ पर ,चल के हम मिल जायें क्या
I am the dust of earth,and in the sky you shine as light
Shall we walk upto the horizons ,and there we unite
ज़िन्दगी के पेच-ओ-खम में फंस गये
क्या करें! अब रोयें क्या! मुस्कायें क्या!
lost I am in the twists and turns of life in deep
confused I am,should I smile or should I weep
अब कहां :ग़ाफ़िल: वो शौक़-ए-शाइरी!
आप ही फ़रमाइये, फ़रमायें क्या?
for poetry,.. Ghaafil now hardly have any interest
what should I say..,why don't you suggest
-मयंक
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14th March 2009, 09:35 PM
Sir,
Mashaallah Kyaa qalaam hai,
Har ek sher, har ek lafz dil ko chhoo kar gayaa hai, Dil se daad kubul kijiye. Neverthless, to say keep writing.
Ye lines mujhe khaas taur se pasand aayiN-
ham zamee.n kii Khaak tum nuur-e-falak
to kshitiz par ,chal ke ham mil jaaye.n kyaa!
zindagii ke pech-o-kham me.n pha.ns gaye
kyaa kare.n! ab roye.n kyaa! muskaaye.n kyaa!
ab kahaa.n :Ghaafil: woh shauq-e-shaairee!
aap hee farmaaiye, farmaaye.n kyaa?
With best wishes
-Rashid
Quote:
Originally Posted by Mayank
shayri.com ke sabhii dosto.n ko mere salaam, ek taazi Ghazal ke saath haazir huu.n.. apni raa'ey se zaruur nawaaziyegaa
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haal-e-soz-e-dil tumhe batlaaye.n kyaa
ashk kaa paimaanaa phir chalkaaye.n kyaa
naar-e-ulfat ai sanam bhaDkaaye.n kyaa!
ham tumhaare aur qareeb aa jaaye.n kyaa!
dil me.n dhaDhkan ban ke ham bas jaaye.n ge!
jism do hai.n jaan ek ho jaaye.n kyaa?
kyu.n nahii.n kartee hamaaraa aitbaar?
"aks hai.n ham aaiinaa dikhlaaye.n kyaa"
ishq dozakh bhii hai, jannat bhii hai ishq
dekhiye qismat me.n apnii paaye.n kyaa?
ham zamee.n kii Khaak tum nuur-e-falak
to kshitiz par ,chal ke ham mil jaaye.n kyaa!
zindagii ke pech-o-kham me.n pha.ns gaye
kyaa kare.n! ab roye.n kyaa! muskaaye.n kyaa!
ab kahaa.n :Ghaafil: woh shauq-e-shaairee!
aap hee farmaaiye, farmaaye.n kyaa?
-Mayank
haal-e-soz-e-dil: dil ke dard ka haal
naar-e-ulfat: ishq ki aag
dozakh: hell
jannat:heaven
kshitiz: horizon
falak: aasamaa.n
pech-o-kham: Twist and turns
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Tu AndheroN -ujaaloN me mila kar mujhko
Zindagi ab to sawaloN me mila kar mujhko
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AAp ko bhee Hamara salam
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haal-e-soz-e-dil tumhe batlaaye.n kyaa
ashk kaa paimaanaa phir chalkaaye.n kyaa
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Agar yakin hai ke Ashk ke paimaane chalkenge to rahene dijeeye....
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naar-e-ulfat ai sanam bhaDkaaye.n kyaa!
ham tumhaare aur qareeb aa jaaye.n kyaa!
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wah wah.............( intezaar kijeeye koi to iska jawab zaroor dega)
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dil me.n dhaDhkan ban ke ham bas jaaye.n ge!
jism do hai.n jaan ek ho jaaye.n kyaa?
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Bahot khoob
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kyu.n nahii.n kartee hamaaraa aitbaar?
"aks hai.n ham aaiinaa dikhlaaye.n kyaa"
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arz hai..............
Kaise dilaye.N tumhen Ulfat ka yakin??
Kaho tum to dil cheer ke dikhlaaye kyaa??.
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ishq dozakh bhii hai, jannat bhii hai ishq
dekhiye qismat me.n apnii paaye.n kyaa?
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bilkul sahi farmaya hai aapne........................
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ham zamee.n kii Khaak tum nuur-e-falak
to kshitiz par ,chal ke ham mil jaaye.n kyaa!
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wah.... wah................. Khawab mein bhi mila ja sakta hai ....
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zindagii ke pech-o-kham me.n pha.ns gaye
kyaa kare.n! ab roye.n kyaa! muskaaye.n kyaa!
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Na................ rona to kabhi nahi chahiye............
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ab kahaa.n :Ghaafil: woh shauq-e-shaairee!
aap hee farmaaiye, farmaaye.n kyaa?
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Neki aur puch ??? Farmaayiye jo bhi aap ka dil kare.................
Mayankjee
Bahot khoob rahi yeh ghazal...........
Muje wakyi tajjub hota hai ke aap kaise likhte hai aisi ghazale.N?? ...... Har baar koi naya andaaz dekhne ko milta hai...... Thodi Tips hame.N bhee batade.n ke har baar naye andaaz mein ghazal kaise pesh ki jaye???
Yunhi likhte rahiye ...Duwao.N ke saath
Ghazal
~*~Kaash Dil ki aawaz mein aisa asar ho jaaye
Jise Hum Yaad karte hai use Khabar ho jaaye ~*~
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15th March 2009, 09:26 PM
Bohat khoob mayank ji bohat acha likha hai aap ne likhte rahiyega
Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin
ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin
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16th March 2009, 12:22 PM
Bahot khoob Mayank ji....................
Dil se daad qubool kijiye
Fezan
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Koi Aisa Kamaal Ho Jaye Zindigi Be-Misaal Ho Jaye
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Masha Allah, Bahot khub gazal likhi hai aapne har ek ashar behtrin hai. Likhtye rahiye.
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16th March 2009, 04:22 PM
mayank ji, bahot hi khubsurti se hale-dil sunaya hai app ne daad kabool kijiye, bahot khaub, yun hi likhte rahe, rake care, bye
koi pyaar chahe to koi jahan chahe,
koi doulat chahe to koi shaan chahe,
hum to jindagi ke sataye huwe hai,
‘Eliyas’ to khudase do gaaz zameen aur kafan chahe
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17th March 2009, 05:10 PM
Mayank Bhai..
Aapne to dil nikaal ke rakh diya....
SUBHAAN-ALLAH!!!!!!!!!
Take Care..
~Priya
"Dikha kar khawaab in aankhon ko, De gaye aansoon in mein Tum..
Kaise chalka doo yeh aansoon, In mein bhi To rehTe ho Tum.."
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24th March 2009, 12:09 PM
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Sir,
Mashaallah Kyaa qalaam hai,
Har ek sher, har ek lafz dil ko chhoo kar gayaa hai, Dil se daad kubul kijiye. Neverthless, to say keep writing.
Ye lines mujhe khaas taur se pasand aayiN-
ham zamee.n kii Khaak tum nuur-e-falak
to kshitiz par ,chal ke ham mil jaaye.n kyaa!
zindagii ke pech-o-kham me.n pha.ns gaye
kyaa kare.n! ab roye.n kyaa! muskaaye.n kyaa!
ab kahaa.n :Ghaafil: woh shauq-e-shaairee!
aap hee farmaaiye, farmaaye.n kyaa?
With best wishes
-Rashid
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Rashid saahab,
Ghazal ki pasandeegi ke liye tah-e-dil se shukriyah.. aap khud bhi ek achchhe shayar hai.n to aap ki pasandagee khaas maaene rakhti hai... yuu.n hi aage bhi apni aara se nawaazte rahe.n..
shurkriyah!
-Mayank
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24th March 2009, 12:58 PM
hmmm mayankji...so romantic.....isse shari-e-ishq mein post karna tha na
neways...dil se daad is khussurat si ghazal ke liye...........
mausam
Jaane kya samjha woh mujhe
Jaane kya samjhi main useN
Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se
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24th March 2009, 04:53 PM
Arre baap re...
Mayank bhai ... aapne to apna kad itna ooNcha kar liya hai .. ki ab kuch kehte banta nahi .. tareef sooraj ko diya dikhane wali baat jaisi rahegi .. mujhe bohat acchi lagi .. ek alag hi nazariya hai mera iske prati ... jab milunga bataunga ...
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KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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27th March 2009, 01:17 PM
purvi jee:
Ghazal ki pasandeegi aur khaaksaar ki hausila afzaai ke liye aap ka shukr-guzaar huu.n.... aap ne jis andaaz se Ghazal ki taarif ki hai us se meri bohat hausila afzaiii huii hai.. shukriyah!
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28th March 2009, 09:35 AM
naar-e-ulfat ai sanam bhaDkaaye.n kyaa!
ham tumhaare aur qareeb aa jaaye.n kyaa!
ham zamee.n kii Khaak tum nuur-e-falak
to kshitiz par ,chal ke ham mil jaaye.n kyaa!
ab kahaa.n :Ghaafil: woh shauq-e-shaairee!
aap hee farmaaiye, farmaaye.n kyaa?
janaab mayank saheb.,
aapki ghazal padhi, behad khoobsurat ehsaas hain,har sher qabil-e-tareef hai,iska english translation bhi bohat lajawaab hai,....ye dono sher aur maqta hame behad acche lage ,ek aur khoobsurat ghazal per dil se daad qubool kijiye...yuhi likhte rahiye....
zainy
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
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28th March 2009, 01:59 PM
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kyu.n nahii.n kartee hamaaraa aitbaar?
"aks hai.n ham aaiinaa dikhlaaye.n kyaa"
ishq dozakh bhii hai, jannat bhii hai ishq
dekhiye qismat me.n apnii paaye.n kyaa?
zindagii ke pech-o-kham me.n pha.ns gaye
kyaa kare.n! ab roye.n kyaa! muskaaye.n kyaa!
ab kahaa.n :Ghaafil: woh shauq-e-shaairee!
aap hee farmaaiye, farmaaye.n kyaa?
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Aadaab !
moHtaram mayank jee aik mudaat ke baa'd app hi ki ghazal per app se mukhaatib hone ka sharf milaa hai , yeh ashaa'r mujhe munfarid lage ... aur behtreen bhi ,
app ka andaaz-e-bayaaN maqtaa meN kuch kuch Mirza Ghaalib jaisa laga ,
khuda wande ta'aalaa se duaa go hoN keh app ki soch aur app k andaaz-e-bayaN ko mazeed Quwat bakhshieN
aik behtreen ghazal per meri jaanib se teh dili se daad qabool fermaaiye
likhte rahieN
Mujeeb
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28th March 2009, 04:26 PM
namaskaar mayank jii..................kya tareef karuN aapki kalam ki, lafz nahi mil rahe tareef ke liye......har sher ki baat nahi karuNgi har lafz tareef ke kabil hai.....dil ki gahrayo.n se daad hazir hai.....!
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30th March 2009, 11:47 AM
dil-azeez MayaNk bhaa'ii:
namaste!
bahot hi naGhz Ghazal kahi hay aapne...waah waah!! bazm ki raunaq YuuNhi baRhaate raheN! Ghazal ke aSh'aar dil ko chhu gayeN! daad!
KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
aapka
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30th March 2009, 12:28 PM
Mayank bhai................. aap kuch karte kyun nai
i mean u write so well, why don't u publish ur book or something
really wonderful poetry..... !
hats off for you
Save me from the safety of my SILENCE
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Bohat khoob mayank ji bohat acha likha hai aap ne likhte rahiyega
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kaisi hai.n aap?ummeed hai sab khairyat se hogaa.. muaaf keejiyega, ek arse ke baad, jawaab de raha huu.n..
aap ki merii yeh chhoTi si koshish achchhi lagii, jaan kar behad khushii huii... ummeed hai ki aage bhii yuu,.n hi hausila afzaaii karti rahe.ngii...
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Subhan_allah Ghaafil saheb hamesha ki tarah appka yeh kalam bhi bohat bohat khoobsurat hain mujhe yeh sher bohat ziyada pasand aaya...
ishq dozakh bhii hai, jannat bhii hai ishq
dekhiye qismat me.n apnii paaye.n kyaa?
Jhoot kehdu yeh meri fitrat me nahi shamil
Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta...
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10th July 2009, 09:35 PM
apki yeh ghazal meri nazron se kaise chook gayi...
asusual bahut acchi lagi yeh ghazal bhi... abh faltoo tareef toh karni nahi mujhe... waise toh poori ghazal bahut acchi hai ... per dil chu gaye teen sher...
dil me.n dhaDhkan ban ke ham bas jaaye.n ge!
jism do hai.n jaan ek ho jaaye.n kyaa?
kyu.n nahii.n kartee hamaaraa aitbaar?
"aks hai.n ham aaiinaa dikhlaaye.n kyaa"
ishq dozakh bhii hai, jannat bhii hai ishq
dekhiye qismat me.n apnii paaye.n kyaa?
Taec kaer
SHWETA
jab yaad karte hai kisi ko
wo waqt suhana hota hai
uth jati hai kalam likhne ko
wo pyar deewana hota hai
kar deti hai haal-e-dil bayaan
wo kalaam shayraana hota hai
jab yaad karte hai kisi ko
wo waqt suhana hota hai...
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21st July 2009, 08:03 PM
mohtarma, Ghazal ki pasandagii ke liye aap ka behad shukr-guzaar huu.n.. ummeed hai ki aage bhi isi tarah koshish zaari rahegii....
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21st July 2009, 08:06 PM
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Bahot khoob Mayank ji....................
Dil se daad qubool kijiye
Fezan
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Fezan jee,
aadaab arz hai
aap ki daad dil se qubool hai.. aap khud ek achche shayar hai.n, to aap ki pasandagii bhii khaas mayne rakhti hii hai..tah-e-dil se shukriyah hausila afzaaii ke liye...
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Masha Allah, Bahot khub gazal likhi hai aapne har ek ashar behtrin hai. Likhtye rahiye.
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sameer saahab,
Ghazal ki pasandagii ke liye aap ka maamuun huu.n.. Ghazal aur us ke har aashaar aap ko pasand aaye, yeh mere liye khushi kii baat hai.. yuu.n hi aage bhi apni raa;ey aur daad se nawaazte rahe.n
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mayank ji, bahot hi khubsurti se hale-dil sunaya hai app ne daad kabool kijiye, bahot khaub, yun hi likhte rahe, rake care, bye
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eliyas saahab,
aap ko Ghazal pasand aayee jaan kar khushii huii...Ghazal ki pasandagii ke liye, aap ka tah-e-dil se shukr-guzaar huu.n.. bazm me.n aate rahe.n
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27th July 2009, 03:28 PM
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Mayank Bhai..
Aapne to dil nikaal ke rakh diya....
SUBHAAN-ALLAH!!!!!!!!!
Take Care..
~Priya
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moderator saahiba,
Ghazal ki pasandagii ke liye to aap ka shukr-guzaar huu.n. aap ko Ghazal bhaayee, khush qismati hai merii.. waise aap kahaa.n ghuum ho nazar hii nahii.n aa rahii ho.. sab khairiyat to hai na?
apna khayaal rakkho..
Mayank
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27th July 2009, 05:36 PM
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shayri.com ke sabhii dosto.n ko mere salaam, ek taazi Ghazal ke saath haazir huu.n.. apni raa'ey se zaruur nawaaziyegaa
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haal-e-soz-e-dil tumhe batlaaye.n kyaa
ashk kaa paimaanaa phir chalkaaye.n kyaa
naar-e-ulfat ai sanam bhaDkaaye.n kyaa!
ham tumhaare aur qareeb aa jaaye.n kyaa!
dil me.n dhaDhkan ban ke ham bas jaaye.n ge!
jism do hai.n jaan ek ho jaaye.n kyaa?
kyu.n nahii.n kartee hamaaraa aitbaar?
"aks hai.n ham aaiinaa dikhlaaye.n kyaa"
ishq dozakh bhii hai, jannat bhii hai ishq
dekhiye qismat me.n apnii paaye.n kyaa?
ham zamee.n kii Khaak tum nuur-e-falak
to kshitiz par ,chal ke ham mil jaaye.n kyaa!
zindagii ke pech-o-kham me.n pha.ns gaye
kyaa kare.n! ab roye.n kyaa! muskaaye.n kyaa!
ab kahaa.n :Ghaafil: woh shauq-e-shaairee!
aap hee farmaaiye, farmaaye.n kyaa?
-Mayank
haal-e-soz-e-dil: dil ke dard ka haal
naar-e-ulfat: ishq ki aag
dozakh: hell
jannat:heaven
kshitiz: horizon
falak: aasamaa.n
pech-o-kham: Twist and turns
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Mayank ji,
bahottttt hi umdaa....
kis sher ki taarif karun maiN..ek muqammal ghazal pesh karne pe dil se daad deta hun..
yeh kuch sher bahot hi zyada dil ko chu gaye:
ham zamee.n kii Khaak tum nuur-e-falak
to kshitiz par ,chal ke ham mil jaaye.n kyaa!
zindagii ke pech-o-kham me.n pha.ns gaye
kyaa kare.n! ab roye.n kyaa! muskaaye.n kyaa!
ab kahaa.n :Ghaafil: woh shauq-e-shaairee!
aap hee farmaaiye, farmaaye.n kyaa?
yeh padhkar aisa laga jaise mano maiN shunya hun...phir se sarjan karna hai...
khush rahiye..god bless u
aapka dost,
Pradhyuman
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gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai?
musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai?
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27th July 2009, 06:37 PM
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Originally Posted by Mayank
haal-e-soz-e-dil tumhe batlaaye.n kyaa
ashk kaa paimaanaa phir chalkaaye.n kyaa
naar-e-ulfat ai sanam bhaDkaaye.n kyaa!
ham tumhaare aur qareeb aa jaaye.n kyaa!
dil me.n dhaDhkan ban ke ham bas jaaye.n ge!
jism do hai.n jaan ek ho jaaye.n kyaa?
kyu.n nahii.n kartee hamaaraa aitbaar?
"aks hai.n ham aaiinaa dikhlaaye.n kyaa"
ishq dozakh bhii hai, jannat bhii hai ishq
dekhiye qismat me.n apnii paaye.n kyaa?
ham zamee.n kii Khaak tum nuur-e-falak
to kshitiz par ,chal ke ham mil jaaye.n kyaa!
zindagii ke pech-o-kham me.n pha.ns gaye
kyaa kare.n! ab roye.n kyaa! muskaaye.n kyaa!
ab kahaa.n :Ghaafil: woh shauq-e-shaairee!
aap hee farmaaiye, farmaaye.n kyaa?
-Mayank
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Mayank ji.......Main aapki Ghazal ki kaha se taarif shuru karu......mujhe bhi pata nahi......sabhi sher itne umda hai ki.....taarif ke liye alfaaz dhund pana mushkil ho raha hai.........bas itna kahunga .......bahut khub likha hai aapne.......aise hi likhte rahiyega.........aur mujhe aapki nayi rachna ka intezaar rahega......khush rahiye.......
tahe dil se daad detaa hu.......kabul farmaiyega..........
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
---Naresh Mehra----
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10th August 2009, 05:52 PM
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hmmm mayankji...so romantic.....isse shari-e-ishq mein post karna tha na
neways...dil se daad is khussurat si ghazal ke liye...........
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mausam jee...
kaisi hai.n aap?
aap ko Ghazal pasand aayee, jaan kar behad khushi huii..... aur rahi baat shayri-e ishq me.n rehne kii to kyaa keejiye, shaayad isay dard ka ghar zyaadah pasand hai.. isiliye, yahii.n zyaadah rahta hai..
aap ke daad ke liye tah-e-dil se shukriyah! aur der se jawaab dene ke liye mazrat bhee
-mayank
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10th August 2009, 07:58 PM
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kyu.n nahii.n kartee hamaaraa aitbaar?
"aks hai.n ham aaiinaa dikhlaaye.n kyaa"
ishq dozakh bhii hai, jannat bhii hai ishq
dekhiye qismat me.n apnii paaye.n kyaa?
zindagii ke pech-o-kham me.n pha.ns gaye
kyaa kare.n! ab roye.n kyaa! muskaaye.n kyaa!
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Kiya umda ashaar hein sahab,
daad hazir hei inke hazur,
bauhat hee alaa'a andaz e bayaan
eik do arz karte chalein gu ke hum tou tifl e maktab hein phir bhi aap se asaatza ko mehaz eik khayal se aagaah karte jayen socha......
NAAR ki jagha agar AATISH lafz kar diiya jaye tou dekhiye ga ...NAAR akcar jahanum aur NAARI jahanumiyon ke liye istimaal kiya jata hai aur is mein vo nazakat nahi apa rahee hei
dosree baat ZAMEEN KI KHAAK kee bajaiyae a gar GARD E RAAH kar diya jaye
yunhee baat zehan mein ayee
umeed hei ye jasarat garaan na guzre gee tabiyat pe
eik umda kalam ke hazur Maham ki daad haazir hei
Qabul kijiye
ye dil soye hoay jazbon ka hei aisa mehal jis mein
kisii jazbe ka ab mumkin nahi bedaar ho jana
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eik lamha e visaal tha vaapis na aaska
vo waqt ki micaal tha vaapis na aasaka
mujh ko mere vajud se jo kar gaya judaa
kaisa vo baakamal tha vaapis na asaka
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11th August 2009, 09:11 PM
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Arre baap re...
Mayank bhai ... aapne to apna kad itna ooNcha kar liya hai .. ki ab kuch kehte banta nahi .. tareef sooraj ko diya dikhane wali baat jaisi rahegi .. mujhe bohat acchi lagi .. ek alag hi nazariya hai mera iske prati ... jab milunga bataunga ...
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kunaal bhaii,
Ghazal aap ko achchhi lagii jaan kar behad khushii huiii... aap ki pasandagii khaas maaene rakhti hai mere liye.. aur rahii baat kad u.nchaakar lene ki to bhaii, log kahte hai.n ki 18-20 saal ki umr hone ke baad insaan ki kad baDhti nahii.n hai, utni hi rehti hai...
khair, mazaaq ki baat ek taraf, aap ko yahaa.n dekh kar achcha laga.. ummeed hai ki aap ki taraf se bhi kuchh naya paDhne ko milegaa...
-mayank
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11th August 2009, 09:15 PM
zainy saahiba
aadaab arz hai
Ghazal ki pasandagii ek liye aap ka tah-e-dil se shukr-guzaar huu.n.. aur aap ne jis andaaz se taareef kee hai, is se meri kaafi hausiala afzaaii huii hai.. english translation ko pasand karne ke liye bhi aap ka shukriya adaa karta huu.n.. english translation me.n hamaari ek dost ne hamaari kaafi madad ki hai, aap usay zaruur jaanti ho.ngii...
aap ki daad qubool hai.. yuu.n hi aati rahe.n
Mayank
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11th August 2009, 09:20 PM
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Aadaab !
moHtaram mayank jee aik mudaat ke baa'd app hi ki ghazal per app se mukhaatib hone ka sharf milaa hai , yeh ashaa'r mujhe munfarid lage ... aur behtreen bhi ,
app ka andaaz-e-bayaaN maqtaa meN kuch kuch Mirza Ghaalib jaisa laga ,
khuda wande ta'aalaa se duaa go hoN keh app ki soch aur app k andaaz-e-bayaN ko mazeed Quwat bakhshieN
aik behtreen ghazal per meri jaanib se teh dili se daad qabool fermaaiye
likhte rahieN
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janaab mujeeb saahab,
aadaab arz hai..
Ghazal ki pasaandagii ke liye aap ka tah-e-dil se shukr-guzaar huu.n... aap ne Ghazal passand farmaaya yeh mere liye behad khushii kii baat hai.. aapne jin ashaaro.n ko chuna hai, woh ashaar mujhe bhii behad pasand hai..
maqte me.n aap ko andaaz kuchh mirza Ghaalib jaisa lagaa.. yeh to mere liye behad hausila aur izzat afzaaii kii baat hai.. kyun ki, woh sher-o-shayri ke khuda hai.n aur unhe paDhkar bohat kuchh seekhaa hai ham ne.. aur hamaari Ghazal par un ke andaaz nazar aana intahaaii masarrat ki baat hai,...
Ghazal ki pasandagii ke liye ek baar phir se shukriya....
yuu.n hii aate rahe.n
Mayank
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11th August 2009, 09:23 PM
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namaskaar mayank jii..................kya tareef karuN aapki kalam ki, lafz nahi mil rahe tareef ke liye......har sher ki baat nahi karuNgi har lafz tareef ke kabil hai.....dil ki gahrayo.n se daad hazir hai.....!
reps +++++++++++++++++++++
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sunita jee
namaskaar
aap ko yeh chhoTi si koshish pasand aayee jaan kar khushii huii... aur aap ne jin lafzo.n se Ghazal ki taareef kii hai, is ne mujeh la-jawaab kar ke rakh diya hai.. mai.n aap ka tah-e-dil se shukr-guzaar huu.n..
yuu.n hi bazm me.n aati rahe.n
Mayank
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11th August 2009, 09:25 PM
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dil-azeez MayaNk bhaa'ii:
namaste!
bahot hi naGhz Ghazal kahi hay aapne...waah waah!! bazm ki raunaq YuuNhi baRhaate raheN! Ghazal ke aSh'aar dil ko chhu gayeN! daad!
KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
aapka
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Dhaval bhaii,
jai shree krishna...
aap hamesha waqt nikaal kar hame paDh hi lete ho, aur hausila afzaii bhii karte ho, yeh hamaare liye behad khushii ki baat hai.. aap ka tah-e-dil se shukriya, is chhoTi sii koshish ko pasand karne ke liye...
ummeed hai ki aage bhi aap se daad milti rahegii...
mayank
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11th August 2009, 09:33 PM
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Mayank bhai................. aap kuch karte kyun nai
i mean u write so well, why don't u publish ur book or something
really wonderful poetry..... !
hats off for you
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book publish..hahahaha
abhi yahaa.n likh raha huu.n bohat hai.. abhee to yahaa.n ke dosto.n ko hii bore kar raha huu.n, book publish karuu.nga to loh lahii.n apne baal na no.nch le.n..
khair, mazaaq ki baat alag rahii... Ghazal ki pasandagii ke liye, aap ka shukr-guzaar huu.n.. bazm me.n aate rahe.n
-Mayank
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11th August 2009, 09:35 PM
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Subhan_allah Ghaafil saheb hamesha ki tarah appka yeh kalam bhi bohat bohat khoobsurat hain mujhe yeh sher bohat ziyada pasand aaya...
ishq dozakh bhii hai, jannat bhii hai ishq
dekhiye qismat me.n apnii paaye.n kyaa?
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sajid bhaii,.
kaise ho aap? ummeed hai ki khairiyat se ho.nge..
aap ne Gahzal pasand farmaaya yeh mere liye behad khushi kii baat hai.. aap ki husn-e-nazar hai jo Ghazal aap ko, is qadar bhaiii hai..
aap ka tah-e-dil se shukriyah!
mayank
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11th August 2009, 09:40 PM
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apki yeh ghazal meri nazron se kaise chook gayi...
asusual bahut acchi lagi yeh ghazal bhi... abh faltoo tareef toh karni nahi mujhe... waise toh poori ghazal bahut acchi hai ... per dil chu gaye teen sher...
dil me.n dhaDhkan ban ke ham bas jaaye.n ge!
jism do hai.n jaan ek ho jaaye.n kyaa?
kyu.n nahii.n kartee hamaaraa aitbaar?
"aks hai.n ham aaiinaa dikhlaaye.n kyaa"
ishq dozakh bhii hai, jannat bhii hai ishq
dekhiye qismat me.n apnii paaye.n kyaa?
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shweta jee:
as usual, aap hame paDhti hi ho to Ghazal ki pasandagii ke liye, as usual mai.n aap ka shukr-guzaar huu.n.. ummeed karta huu.n ki aap as usual hamaari hausila afzaaii karti rahe.ngii..
jin 3 sher ko aap ne khaas taur par pasand kiya us ke liye as usual mai.n aap ka alag se shukr-guzaar huu.n
Mayank
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