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kaun jeeta kaun hara bata dena -
10th May 2006, 10:39 AM
kabhee kabhee shayri ke sites par bas rajneeti dekhata hoon shayri nahee tab dukh hota hai gahara dukh hota hai . kishayri ek kone main paree karah rahee hai aur ham is uljhan main hai kise kis kursi par baithaya gaya hai. nakalee votings best shayri ke liye har kadam par rajneeti kal bahut dukh huya ye soch soch ke tab ye shayri kahee. hamaree is site par balki ksiee behe shayri kee site par shayri ke siwa kuch bhee aham na ho ye kamana karata hoon. mujhe kamaron kee safayee ka kam bhee de diya jaye aur kah de koyee issee se shayri zinda rahegee to main kar loonga mera is se khoon ka rishta hai isee liye jab shayri rotee hai main bhee rota hoon
Anil shoharat-e-chand ko bant-te kaise chandni ko kat-te kaise apne apana hisse ke liye larayee zaree thee ab sochata hoon udas dil se tum hare the ki ghzal haree thee par tum ko ohdon ka fikr tha shayree ka kahan kaheen zikr tha tum sochte rahe ksie kya eenam milta hai khushboo kis ke hisse ayegee phoolon pe kis ka nam milta hai ek kash-m-kash main asman-e-ashar ka nizam bigar gaya gazal-o-geet bikhar gaye khar zinda rahe sare gulab mar gaye apne apne kad kee fikr rahee chand aur channdnee ka kad kam hota raha tum apas main uljhe rahe chand shayer tha rota raha sach kahoon tum jahan ho woh bazm-e-sukhan nahee bas jalsazee hai main yahan rah nahee sakta ye charcha-e-ahsas nahee sirk kabootar bazee hai jab failsla aye mujhe jaga dena kaun jeeta kaun hara bata dena main sukhanvar hoon geeton kee lashen ghar utha layoonga tanha baith ke murda geet gayoonga tum bas neend se jaga dena kaun jeeta kaun hara bata dena kho gaye hain woh log ab un kee justzoo hai |
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kya kahun???? -
10th May 2006, 12:25 PM
bhaiya mai kya kahun kya na kahun kuch samajh nahi aa raha hai...
aaj aankhen bhar aayi ye post padhke..aapne sahi kaha hai ki shayri site par ab sirf shayri nahi panapti balki kuch or chijen hi hone lagi hai..par ek baat sochiye ki ye sab karne waale or koi nahi hai hum hi hai..hum hi kassurwaar hai agar hum chahe to in sab ko rok sakte hai... par aaj sabko apni reputation apni seat ki lagi hai..har koi apna ek alag mukaam pana chahta hai..apna ek alag mukaam pana bura nahi basharte wo doosro ko hurt na kare tab tak hi.. kher aapki ye anu thoda bahut samjhi hai jo aapne kehna chaha hai is post k jariye.. ek ek lafj mei sacchai hai aapke khushi hui kisi ne to soch se sacchai ki taraf kadam badhaya.... thanx from d core of my heart  
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anamika -
10th May 2006, 12:32 PM
hamaree anamika bahut achha laga aaj tumhara parahana. ho sakta hai tumahre baad koyee na parhe na kahe kcuh is par. par ek insan ne bhee dil se meree baat ko mahsoos kar liya to meree kavita maree apnee ankhon main amar ho gayee. bahut bahut shukriya tumhara aur jab bhee kam maro shari par kavita par us ke charano main baith ke karana us ke sar par baith ke nahee. aaj mujhe 4 log jante hain to meree shayree kee wajah se main ise bahgwan ka darza nahee doon to bas mauj mastee kee baat rah jatee hai
Anil kho gaye hain woh log ab un kee justzoo hai |
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10th May 2006, 01:45 PM
anil ji aapki yah posr us dard ko bayan karti hai jo aaj kal sites main faila hua sa hai ...........anmika ne sab kah diya jo isko pad ke mere jahan bhi aaye they ...........kavitaa bahvano ko vayakt karne ka mdhayam hai ......usko kavitaa main hi range rahne de toh jayda accha hai .........par jab yah sab jahan per chha jata hai toh kavitaa kahan ho pati hai ..........sirf rajneeti hi rah jati hai ........umeed hai aapki yah post bahut se logo ko sachai ka ehasas karwaygi aur fir se shayrari , payr dard ko izhaar karne ka sundhar madhaym ban jayegi.................
apne apne kad kee fikr rahee chand aur channdnee ka kad kam hota raha tum apas main uljhe rahe chand shayer tha rota raha sach kahoon tum jahan ho woh bazm-e-sukhan nahee bas jalsazee hai main yahan rah nahee sakta ye charcha-e-ahsas nahee sirk kabootar bazee hai jab failsla aye mujhe jaga dena kaun jeeta kaun hara bata dena main sukhanvar hoon geeton kee lashen ghar utha layoonga tanha baith ke murda geet gayoonga tum bas neend se jaga dena kaun jeeta kaun hara bata dena with best wishes ranju |
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10th May 2006, 02:08 PM
samajh nahin paa rahi hoon ki kya kahoon!
rajneeti......isne shayari mein bhi ghar bana liya....bahut afsos hota hai ye sab jankar...dukh hota hai bahut dukh hota hai.... ...aapni ek bahut hi acha kadam uthaya hai...apni kavita ke jariye jo aap kehna chahte hain shayad unhe kuch samajh aaye..... .... |
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hi -
10th May 2006, 02:26 PM
aap ka pm inbox full hai bhaiya ho sake to khaali kar de.
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shukriya ranajna -
10th May 2006, 08:15 PM
bahut hee dil se parha hai tumhe har ghav is kavita ka aur bahut pyar se uttar bhee diya us ka. abharee hoon tum is kavita par ayeen aur jinhe meree baat main sach dikha un main se ek banee mere liye ye kavita bahut keemat rakhtee hai bahut udas ho ke kahe emaine shukriya tum ne use samjha
Anil kho gaye hain woh log ab un kee justzoo hai |
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shukriya -
10th May 2006, 08:17 PM
wafa har baar kee tarah is khas waqt par mera sath dene kiye bahut bahut shukriya apana khayal rakahana aur mujeh salah bhee detee rahana
Anil kho gaye hain woh log ab un kee justzoo hai |
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manu -
10th May 2006, 08:18 PM
manu pm box khale ekar diya hai par yahan kaho na kya kahana hai achee buree ajisee bhee lagee jhoothee sachee jaisee bhee lagee yahan bata do
Anil kho gaye hain woh log ab un kee justzoo hai |
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11th May 2006, 06:50 AM
kuch chhoti si b aato.N ka un fasana hua
rishta tha gahra jane kaise anjaana hua dosti se jal uth the log,khel koi khel gaya doton ladhe unki kushi ka bahana hua bus itna hi 
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sharrdha -
11th May 2006, 07:27 AM
dhanyavad sharrdha tum ne bhee ek dard ko dekha meree si kavita main swabhimano kee larayee main kayee baar dost kho jate hain paraye ho jate hain unhe awaz zaroor dena dost laute zaroor hain muskan ke sath
Anil kho gaye hain woh log ab un kee justzoo hai |
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Re: kaun jeeta kaun hara bata dena -
11th May 2006, 03:52 PM
Mat poochon auron ke dukh mein yeh prem kavi kyun rota hai...
bas chot kisi ko lagti hai aur dard kisi ko hota hai... door kahin koi darpan toote.. tadap ke mein reh jata hooon. mohtaram anil saheb aapki rachna ko padh kar Kishor kumar ke gaye is geet ka yeh antara barbas mere jehan mein ubhar aaya...ise mein yahan aapke liye likh diya..shayad is mauke par mein yehi keh sahunga. hamesha ki tarah bahoot suljha hua kalaam pesh kiya hai aapne. meri daad kubool kijiye -MANOJ karte hai jo "kureel" se gila karte rahein. |
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11th May 2006, 09:12 PM
Anil ji,
Aap ka dard aur bebasi khoob ubhar aaye hain iss kalam me. aaise hi masoom se ehsaas hum sab ki nazar karte rahiyega aur apna khyaal rakhiyega. |
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shukruta manoj -
12th May 2006, 10:23 AM
tum meree shayri kee mere kalam kee nabz achee tarah pakar lete ho bahut achha lagata hai aap ka remark parhana bas meree shayri par kabhee kabhee ate zaroor rahen shayri jaise logon kee talash main hai tum un main se ho
Anil kho gaye hain woh log ab un kee justzoo hai |
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shukriya -
12th May 2006, 10:25 AM
devangi shukriya meree nazm ke dard kos amjhne ke liye aur yoon hee parhte rahana
Anil kho gaye hain woh log ab un kee justzoo hai |
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hi -
12th May 2006, 10:35 AM
DEar anilbhaiya mujhe ye pata hai ke aap ne ye kyun likha hai, aap hamesha hi se achha likhte ho ,aap ke chahne vaale aap ka dard bakhubi samajhate hai,aap ke dard ko maine kavitaa mai dhalne ki koshish ki hai, jise aap ne pasand kiya hai,aap khush rahiye, yahi dua hai,mai abhi shayad chhota hu aap ko salaah dene ke liye, is liye aap se jyaada kuchh nahi nahuna, bas aap se yahi iltijaa hai ke aap aise hi likhte rahiyea mai hamesha ap ke saath hoo.
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12th May 2006, 02:37 PM
hi
anil ji apki is rachna ko padhkar bas itna hi kehna chahungi' "he khoob se he khoob tar kahan ab dekhye ja ka theharti he nazar kahan" ye khwahish to her insaan hi rakhta he ki uska muqam awwal ho lakin aap yahan per kis politics ki baat kar rahe hain kuch samjh nahi aya mujhey q ki main yahan bahut waqfe ke baad ati hoon aur chuninda logon ko hi [padhti hoon shayad isliye kya ap mujhey bataenge ki aisa yahan kya ho raha he ki apko is tarah ki rachan likhne per majboor kar diya isko padhkar mujhey bakhubi andaza ho gaya he ki apko shayri se kis qadar pyar he mujhey ek sher yaad a raha he "shyri khel nahi jise ladka khele humne pachpan baras hain is fun main papad bele" ummid karti hoon ki sabhi ne apki is rachna ke zariye mile messege ko samjh liya hoga aur age khayal rakhenge keep writing take care bye Zindagi ko tumne mohbbat bana diya |
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12th May 2006, 03:46 PM
hi
anil ji apki is rachna ko padhkar bas itna hi kehna chahungi' "he khoob se he khoob tar kahan ab dekhye ja ka theharti he nazar kahan" ye khwahish to her insaan hi rakhta he ki uska muqam awwal ho lakin aap yahan per kis politics ki baat kar rahe hain kuch samjh nahi aya mujhey q ki main yahan bahut waqfe ke baad ati hoon aur chuninda logon ko hi [padhti hoon shayad isliye kya ap mujhey bataenge ki aisa yahan kya ho raha he ki apko is tarah ki rachan likhne per majboor kar diya isko padhkar mujhey bakhubi andaza ho gaya he ki apko shayri se kis qadar pyar he mujhey ek sher yaad a raha he "shyri khel nahi jise ladka khele humne pachpan baras hain is fun main papad bele" ummid karti hoon ki sabhi ne apki is rachna ke zariye mile messege ko samjh liya hoga aur age khayal rakhenge keep writing take care bye Zindagi ko tumne mohbbat bana diya |
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shukriya -
12th May 2006, 04:53 PM
manu bahut bahut shukriya tum to meree shayri ko andar se prh lete ho poora jan jate ho aise hee parhne walaon ka sahara rahata hai mujeh bas ate rahana
Anil kho gaye hain woh log ab un kee justzoo hai |
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shukriya rubina -
12th May 2006, 04:55 PM
yahan koyee aisee baat nahe ehuyee rubina par kabhee kabhee shayer log har site par larate hain main bara ke too bara meree site tere site aur jane kya kya shayri ko bhool ke abs taqat ke liye tab dukh hota hai aur aisa dukh aisee shayri ko paida karata hai
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