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Ye zameeN ye AASMAAN jala do..! -
1st March 2006, 12:49 AM
Aadaab phir se...
Kalam ne phir guhaar lagayi hai .. udasi liye hue ye bahaar aayi hai ... fisal na jayeN saNsoN ki sadak se ... aansuouN ki jinpe fuhaar aayi hai... gham ke sehra maiN faNse dildaar kitne... kuch kar na sake laachaar kitne... yakeeN hai khaak maiN jagah mil hi jayegi... tabi ro ke chitkaar lagayi hai... aur kalam ne phir guhaar lagayi hai...
°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°
Mere dil ka har armaan jala do…
Mere Jeene ka samaan jala do…
Na rakho aadam* mujh ko ab…
wo bhatakta hua imaan jala do…
*Human, manushya
kar do rukhsat mujhe jahaN se..
Roz marne ka farmaan jala do…
Mita do nishani mere wazood ki…
ViraniyoN se ghira makaan jala do…
Bana diya gunahgar nazroN ne…
ye teer aur ye kamaan jala do…
Ban jauN waakai ‘saccha_pyar’…
Ghoor raha wo gumaan jala do…
Mil na jauN hawaoN main yaar…
Ye zameen, ye aasman jala do…
haN aaj tum ye zameeN jala do...
haN aaj tum ye aasman jala do..
°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°
--Kunal Gautam (01-03-2006)
KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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1st March 2006, 01:08 AM
Kunal,
Bahut khoob mere dost... bahut acha likha hai... kuch pal yaad aa gaye... bus yunhi dil ko chuta hua likhte raha karo... bahut khoob......
Take Care
Rohin
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1st March 2006, 10:59 AM
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Kunal,
Bahut khoob mere dost... bahut acha likha hai... kuch pal yaad aa gaye... bus yunhi dil ko chuta hua likhte raha karo... bahut khoob......
Take Care
Rohin
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Shukriya rohiN...
tumne gaur kiya meri likhai pe ... tumhare dil ko chua .. mehnat safal si hui
Kunal
KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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Re: Ye zameeN ye AASMAAN jala do..! -
1st March 2006, 11:20 AM
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Originally posted by sacccha_pyar
Aadaab phir se...
Kalam ne phir guhaar lagayi hai .. udasi liye hue ye bahaar aayi hai ... fisal na jayeN saNsoN ki sadak se ... aansuouN ki jinpe fuhaar aayi hai... gham ke sehra maiN faNse dildaar kitne... kuch kar na sake laachaar kitne... yakeeN hai khaak maiN jagah mil hi jayegi... tabi ro ke chitkaar lagayi hai... aur kalam ne phir guhaar lagayi hai...
°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°
Mere dil ka har armaan jala do...
Mere Jeene ka samaan jala do...
Na rakho aadam* mujh ko ab...
wo bhatakta hua imaan jala do...
*Human, manushya
kar do rukhsat mujhe jahaN se..
Roz marne ka farmaan jala do...
Mita do nishani mere wazood ki...
ViraniyoN se ghira makaan jala do...
Bana diya gunahgar nazroN ne...
ye teer aur ye kamaan jala do...
Ban jauN waakai 'saccha_pyar'...
Ghoor raha wo gumaan jala do...
Mil na jauN hawaoN main yaar...
Ye zameen, ye aasman jala do...
haN aaj tum ye zameeN jala do...
haN aaj tum ye aasman jala do..
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--Kunal Gautam (01-03-2006)
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Dear kunal Hamesha ki tarah bohat hi umda likha hai..Niche likhi hui hi jayada achi lagi vaise pura hi acha hi hai.."Kalam ne phir guhaar lagayi hai .. udasi liye hue ye bahaar aayi hai ... fisal na jayeN saNsoN ki sadak se ... aansuouN ki jinpe fuhaar aayi hai... gham ke sehra maiN faNse dildaar kitne... kuch kar na sake laachaar kitne... yakeeN hai khaak maiN jagah mil hi jayegi... tabi ro ke chitkaar lagayi hai... aur kalam ne phir guhaar lagayi hai...
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Shukriya..
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1st March 2006, 11:23 AM
kunal
mujhe bhaut psand aaya aapki ye rachna
ek msg ek tadap khud ko mitakar kuch paa lene ki chah
sab kuch achha laga
har ek line is wonderful , touchy
bhaut achhi lagi
ab kya kahun words hi nahi mil rahe
shrdh
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bahut hee achee hai -
1st March 2006, 11:31 AM
kunal ab tumhe kahee kuch bura bhee likhana hoga . jo parhata hoon tareef karnee artee hai log sochte honeg bas tum mere bahut apne ho to tareef karata hoon mujeh basheer badra kee shayree is liye bahut achee lagtee hai bahut sarl hote hai sher un ke wahee baat is ghazalmain dekhee original achee aur sachee
kar do rukhsat mujhe jahaN se..
Roz marne ka farmaan jala do…
Mita do nishani mere wazood ki…
ViraniyoN se ghira makaan jala do…
wah kunal again 22 sal kee umra main itana ooncha likhne kee iazaat nahee hai apnee age 32 bataya karo ke yakeen ho sake tum ne kahee hai
khush raho aur jsie pyar karo bahut dils e karo
Anil
mere ashar ko mahoob samjh ke chhoomte the jo
kho gaye hain woh log ab un kee justzoo hai
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1st March 2006, 11:46 AM
kar do rukhsat mujhe jahaN se..
Roz marne ka farmaan jala do...
Hi Kunal..
Bahot Khub likha he aapne.. keep it up.. likhte rahiye..
take care..
Naaz
Jindgi Tujse Har Ek Sans Pe Samjhota Karu,
Shokh He Muze Jine Ka Magar Itna Bhi Nahi
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1st March 2006, 11:50 AM
Na rakho aadam* mujh ko ab…
wo bhatakta hua imaan jala do…
is ghazal ka sab se achha sher likha maine par mujhe bahut gaharyee se bataye is main kya kya chipa hai
Anil
mere ashar ko mahoob samjh ke chhoomte the jo
kho gaye hain woh log ab un kee justzoo hai
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Subha Kii Gard MeiN Naa Kho JaayeiN
Aa ! Tere Gham MeiN Jaagtii AankheiN
Kam Se Kam Aik Raat So JaayeiN."
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Re: Re: Ye zameeN ye AASMAAN jala do..! -
1st March 2006, 05:06 PM
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Originally posted by Diggaj_Dave
Dear kunal Hamesha ki tarah bohat hi umda likha hai..Niche likhi hui hi jayada achi lagi vaise pura hi acha hi hai.."Kalam ne phir guhaar lagayi hai .. udasi liye hue ye bahaar aayi hai ... fisal na jayeN saNsoN ki sadak se ... aansuouN ki jinpe fuhaar aayi hai... gham ke sehra maiN faNse dildaar kitne... kuch kar na sake laachaar kitne... yakeeN hai khaak maiN jagah mil hi jayegi... tabi ro ke chitkaar lagayi hai... aur kalam ne phir guhaar lagayi hai...
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Shukriya..
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Diggaj ji..
shukriya aapne meri tukbandi pe nazar ki ..
yuN hi sath rahiyega ...
Kunal
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1st March 2006, 07:22 PM
bade bhai ko chote ka aadaab,janab kya ho gaya hai aaj kal aapko,aapke likhne ki frequency bahut jyada high ho gayi hai. .par ek baat hai aap kar rahe hain poori toofani shayri.bas dil me utarne wale kalaam hi likh rahe hain aap aaj kal.bas guzarish hai ki yunhi likhte rahiye huzoor.
aapka CHOTA
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1st March 2006, 08:25 PM
Kunal, tumhi bataao main yahan kya tippani doon....?
Sab kuch jala dene pe tule ho...yeh bhi koyi baat huyi? tau hum next meet kahan kareinge? socha tumne....?
guddo di
hope to see a nice piece of creation in ishq section...
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1st March 2006, 09:00 PM
Bana diya gunahgar nazroN ne…
ye teer aur ye kamaan jala do…
Ban jauN waakai ‘saccha_pyar’…
Ghoor raha wo gumaan jala do
Hello My sweet brother
Kaise ho Kunal ..... Dil ko chuu gayi tumhari Rachna.......Na jalney dena aisa ek jahan banao.......manzil nahin duur...waqt bura hay to kya ...vishwas apna kabhi na jalao.....
Take Care
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Re: Ye zameeN ye AASMAAN jala do..! -
1st March 2006, 09:01 PM
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Originally posted by sacccha_pyar
Aadaab phir se...
Kalam ne phir guhaar lagayi hai .. udasi liye hue ye bahaar aayi hai ... fisal na jayeN saNsoN ki sadak se ... aansuouN ki jinpe fuhaar aayi hai... gham ke sehra maiN faNse dildaar kitne... kuch kar na sake laachaar kitne... yakeeN hai khaak maiN jagah mil hi jayegi... tabi ro ke chitkaar lagayi hai... aur kalam ne phir guhaar lagayi hai...
°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°
Mere dil ka har armaan jala do…
Mere Jeene ka samaan jala do…
Na rakho aadam* mujh ko ab…
wo bhatakta hua imaan jala do…
*Human, manushya
kar do rukhsat mujhe jahaN se..
Roz marne ka farmaan jala do…
Mita do nishani mere wazood ki…
ViraniyoN se ghira makaan jala do…
Bana diya gunahgar nazroN ne…
ye teer aur ye kamaan jala do…
Ban jauN waakai ‘saccha_pyar’…
Ghoor raha wo gumaan jala do…
Mil na jauN hawaoN main yaar…
Ye zameen, ye aasman jala do…
haN aaj tum ye zameeN jala do...
haN aaj tum ye aasman jala do..
°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°
--Kunal Gautam (01-03-2006)
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wow dd bahut acchi kavita likhi hai bade bhai bahut umda yuhi likhte raho...........
meri har chahat se pehle ek chahat hogi
wo chahat hamesha tum hogi
ab to chahna hi reh gaya hai zindagi main
na jane yeh chahat kab puri hogi
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2nd March 2006, 12:20 AM
kunaalbhai,
aapki ek ke baad ek nayab ghazalon ko padhkar shayad reply karne ke koi alfaaz nahi milte...
Feel at loss of words ,(just lik farhana she also gave a blank reply )
TRULY MAGNIFICENT.....
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ye duniyaa ho yaa vo duniyaa ab Khvaahish-e-duniyaa kaun kare
jo aag lagaaii thii tum ne us ko to bujhaayaa ashko.n ne
jo ashko.n ke bha.Dakaaii hai us aag ko Tha.nDaa kaun kare
jab kashtii saabit-o-saalib thii, saahil kii tamannaa kisako thii
ab aisii shikastaa kashtii me.n saahil kii tamannaa kaun kare
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2nd March 2006, 12:44 PM
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kunal
mujhe bhaut psand aaya aapki ye rachna
ek msg ek tadap khud ko mitakar kuch paa lene ki chah
sab kuch achha laga
har ek line is wonderful , touchy
bhaut achhi lagi
ab kya kahun words hi nahi mil rahe
shrdh
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Shraddha ..
tumne mujhe padha .. ye karam hai mujhpe ... warna in ehsason ko samjhne waale kam hi milte hai ... tumhe accha laga khushi hai
yuN hi sath raho
Kunal
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Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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2nd March 2006, 01:17 PM
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wow dd bahut acchi kavita likhi hai bade bhai bahut umda yuhi likhte raho...........
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sorrry bhaiya ke wajah dd likh liya
meri har chahat se pehle ek chahat hogi
wo chahat hamesha tum hogi
ab to chahna hi reh gaya hai zindagi main
na jane yeh chahat kab puri hogi
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5th March 2006, 02:50 PM
Mere Bhai Kunnu..........
Dard bhara Kalaam.....ek aag.....ek jwala..........sab kutch raakh karne ki khwahish.........
har ek misra bayani mein maahir hai..........daad kabool karo......
khush rahoo.........
tumhara apna............
**(*·.¸(`·.¸ ¸.·´)¸.·*)**
*·.¸Paigaam -e- Aman¸.·*
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inhan ankhaaon vicho kadi, tere hanju vaghe si.....
aaj ki hoye, jehda ^AMAN^ da lahoo vagda ae......
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6th March 2006, 01:50 PM
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kunal ab tumhe kahee kuch bura bhee likhana hoga . jo parhata hoon tareef karnee artee hai log sochte honeg bas tum mere bahut apne ho to tareef karata hoon mujeh basheer badra kee shayree is liye bahut achee lagtee hai bahut sarl hote hai sher un ke wahee baat is ghazalmain dekhee original achee aur sachee
kar do rukhsat mujhe jahaN se..
Roz marne ka farmaan jala do…
Mita do nishani mere wazood ki…
ViraniyoN se ghira makaan jala do…
wah kunal again 22 sal kee umra main itana ooncha likhne kee iazaat nahee hai apnee age 32 bataya karo ke yakeen ho sake tum ne kahee hai
khush raho aur jsie pyar karo bahut dils e karo
Anil
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Anil yaar..
Bura hi likhta huN maiN,,, par samajh nahi aata ki sabko kyuN aisa lagt hai maiN accha likhta huN... par han sacchi aur original likhne ka shauk mujhe hai .. is fun ki daad ke liye main shukriya ada karta huN .. yahaN aapne mujhe sahir sahab se compare kiya .. badi izzat ki baat hai ye .. jaanta huN unke barabar to kabhi pahunch nahi sakta .. par koshish rahegi .. ki yahaN ek naya mukaam banauN ...
aur phir wahi kahunga .. dil kab parwaan ho jaye .. iska andza koi nahi laga sakta .. kabhi kabhi 3 saal ke bacche pc chalane lagte haiu .. kabhi kabhi log 50 saal maiN bhi bachpane se nikal nahi paate...
aap aaye shukriya .. aur mera salaam aapke naam ..
aapka apna
kunal
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6th March 2006, 01:51 PM
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kar do rukhsat mujhe jahaN se..
Roz marne ka farmaan jala do...
Hi Kunal..
Bahot Khub likha he aapne.. keep it up.. likhte rahiye..
take care..
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Naaz...
Tumhe acccha laga khushkismati meri ...
Kunal
KunaaL (Sifar).........
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7th March 2006, 12:46 PM
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Na rakho aadam* mujh ko ab…
wo bhatakta hua imaan jala do…
is ghazal ka sab se achha sher likha maine par mujhe bahut gaharyee se bataye is main kya kya chipa hai
Anil
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anil yaar ...
MaiN bhi janta tha ye ki koi is par nishan dehi kare na kare ... aap zaroor yahan pe rukeNge .. kyuNki gazal ka ye sher sabse mamooli .. sabse be tuka.. par sabse gehra sher hai ... yuN to har sher apne aap maiN bohat gehri soch lekar rakha tha maine .. aur alfaz utne hi kam... par aap ki dichaspi ko dekhte hue ,, yahan is gazal ke is sher ke bare main batana chahunga
Na rakho aadam* mujh ko ab…
wo bhatakta hua imaan jala do…
duniya maiN waise isaan ab bacha hi kon hai ... mujhe bhi ab insaaN banne ka koi shok nahi ... meri bhi insaani seerat ko na rako... par koshish karuN to kaise karun... ki mera imaan abhi tak mujhmeN kahin saNse le raha hai .. us imaan ko koi khatham kar de to maiN bhi insaan na rahuN.. is mittinuma jalaadoN ke sehar ka maiN bhi jallaad ban jauN ....
umeed hai aapko ab ise samajhne main aasaani hogi..
Kunal
KunaaL (Sifar).........
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7th March 2006, 12:48 PM
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nice reply .....
KunaaL (Sifar).........
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7th March 2006, 12:54 PM
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bade bhai ko chote ka aadaab,janab kya ho gaya hai aaj kal aapko,aapke likhne ki frequency bahut jyada high ho gayi hai. .par ek baat hai aap kar rahe hain poori toofani shayri.bas dil me utarne wale kalaam hi likh rahe hain aap aaj kal.bas guzarish hai ki yunhi likhte rahiye huzoor.
aapka CHOTA
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Mere yaar mere bhai...
tumhara aadaab kabool kiya .. likhne ki gati thodi badh is liye gayi thi .. ki kahiN kinare se milne lage the,.. jab tak raheNge .. kalam chalaate raheNge... tumhe acche lage khushi hui .. tareef aur maan dene ke liye shukriya...
tumhara bhai
Kunal
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7th March 2006, 12:56 PM
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Kunal, tumhi bataao main yahan kya tippani doon....?
Sab kuch jala dene pe tule ho...yeh bhi koyi baat huyi? tau hum next meet kahan kareinge? socha tumne....?
guddo di
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Guddo didi
aap aa hi gayiN isse badi tippani aur kya hogi ...
aur is jahaN maiN waise bacha kya hai .. sirf nazron ke dhoke ke alawa.. armaan jal gaye to samjho sab jal gaya .. zameeni vistaar pe koi kya gaur kare...
Kunal
KunaaL (Sifar).........
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Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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7th March 2006, 12:58 PM
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Bana diya gunahgar nazroN ne…
ye teer aur ye kamaan jala do…
Ban jauN waakai ‘saccha_pyar’…
Ghoor raha wo gumaan jala do
Hello My sweet brother
Kaise ho Kunal ..... Dil ko chuu gayi tumhari Rachna.......Na jalney dena aisa ek jahan banao.......manzil nahin duur...waqt bura hay to kya ...vishwas apna kabhi na jalao.....
Take Care
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Meri Di..
MaiN accha huN.. aap kahiye.. khair aapse bhi yahi kahunga.. ki jahaN maiN jalne ke liye bacha kya hai .. ab to isi umeed maiN jee rahe hai ki .. naya jahaN basane maiN kaamyaab jaroor hoNge hum..
Kunal
KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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7th March 2006, 08:01 PM
nice
but need improvement
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Re: Ye zameeN ye AASMAAN jala do..! -
7th March 2006, 08:30 PM
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Originally posted by sacccha_pyar
Aadaab phir se...
Kalam ne phir guhaar lagayi hai .. udasi liye hue ye bahaar aayi hai ... fisal na jayeN saNsoN ki sadak se ... aansuouN ki jinpe fuhaar aayi hai... gham ke sehra maiN faNse dildaar kitne... kuch kar na sake laachaar kitne... yakeeN hai khaak maiN jagah mil hi jayegi... tabi ro ke chitkaar lagayi hai... aur kalam ne phir guhaar lagayi hai...
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Mere dil ka har armaan jala do…
Mere Jeene ka samaan jala do…
Na rakho aadam* mujh ko ab…
wo bhatakta hua imaan jala do…
*Human, manushya
kar do rukhsat mujhe jahaN se..
Roz marne ka farmaan jala do…
Mita do nishani mere wazood ki…
ViraniyoN se ghira makaan jala do…
Bana diya gunahgar nazroN ne…
ye teer aur ye kamaan jala do…
Ban jauN waakai ‘saccha_pyar’…
Ghoor raha wo gumaan jala do…
Mil na jauN hawaoN main yaar…
Ye zameen, ye aasman jala do…
haN aaj tum ye zameeN jala do...
haN aaj tum ye aasman jala do..
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--Kunal Gautam (01-03-2006)
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KuNal Dear....
Tumhare shabdon me ek dard aur ajeeb si tadap paayi, pehle reply nahi kar paayi thi... by the way tumne hamensha ki tarhaa bahut khubsurat likha hain... daad kubul karna dear. yun hi nahi par iss se bhi achha likhte rehna. apna achhe se khyaal rakhna aur khush rehne ki koshish karna.
With love.
Yours truly,
Parul.
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8th March 2006, 12:25 AM
Mere dil ka har armaan jala do…
Mere Jeene ka samaan jala do…
Na rakho aadam* mujh ko ab…
wo bhatakta hua imaan jala do…
Waaaaaaaaahhh...!
kar do rukhsat mujhe jahaN se..
Roz marne ka farmaan jala do…
Mita do nishani mere wazood ki…
ViraniyoN se ghira makaan jala do…
Bahut khoob... alag saa asar hai bayaani me...
Bana diya gunahgar nazroN ne…
ye teer aur ye kamaan jala do…
Ban jauN waakai ‘saccha_pyar’…
Ghoor raha wo gumaan jala do…
uff.....2 2 good...!
Mil na jauN hawaoN main yaar…
Ye zameen, ye aasman jala do…
haN aaj tum ye zameeN jala do...
haN aaj tum ye aasman jala do..
Waaaaaaaahhh...
Kunal,
Yaar.. chhoti behar ho yaa badii... teri poetries line me a hi jaati hain...aur asar to bass kya kehne...marne-maarne ke kalaam mujhe kam pasand hain... magar yeh accha laga... likhte rhao yun hi...khayal rakho...thhaand rakho...
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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8th March 2006, 12:30 PM
na jalega imaan.. na hi jalega samaan..
na jalegi dharti.. na hi jalega aasmaan...
jalana hai kuch to apni maayoosi jala do..
is chehre ki muskaan vaapis lauta do...
~Priya
"Dikha kar khawaab in aankhon ko, De gaye aansoon in mein Tum..
Kaise chalka doo yeh aansoon, In mein bhi To rehTe ho Tum.."
~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ Sirf Tanu Ki ChaahaT...... ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~
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8th March 2006, 06:26 PM
aapke prati khud ko samarpan karta hun... khushnaseebi hi hai .. ki ek heera aisa bhi hai is jahan e shayri main ... kunal bhai ek din dekhna aapka naam poore jahan main hoga.. aapki ye rachna mujhe behad pasand aayi .,... mere dil ke kareeb rahegi humesha .. aur sabse khash baat .. baten jitni gehri hai .. alfaz utne hi gehre... ye sirf aap hi kar sakte hai ....
aapka
Raj
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8th March 2006, 09:33 PM
my jigrii
aapni tasvir ko aankho se lagata kyon hain.
ek taraf mari taraf dekh tera jata kya hain.
meri rushwaai main hain tu bhi barabar sharik.
mere kisse mere yaaro ko sunata kyon hain.
aapni tasvir ko aankho se lagata kyun hain.
paas raha kar bhi na pahchan saka tu mujhko.
dur se dekh kar hath hilata kyon hain.
aapni tasvir ko aankho se lagata kyon hain
ek baaar meri taraf dekh tera jata kya hain
umar bhar apni giebaan se ulajhne wale.
tu mujeh mere saye se darata kyo hain
aapni tasvir...............
main tera kuch bhi nahi houn magar itna to bata.
dekh kar mujhko tere jehan main aata kya hain.
ek najar ..................................
apni tasveer ko....................
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Re: Re: Ye zameeN ye AASMAAN jala do..! -
13th March 2006, 12:58 PM
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wow dd bahut acchi kavita likhi hai bade bhai bahut umda yuhi likhte raho...........
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Mehul ...
accha hai mujhe isi janam maiN doosri upadhi de di ... please teesri mat dena ...
KunaaL (Sifar).........
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13th March 2006, 01:12 PM
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kunaalbhai,
aapki ek ke baad ek nayab ghazalon ko padhkar shayad reply karne ke koi alfaaz nahi milte...
Feel at loss of words ,(just lik farhana she also gave a blank reply )
TRULY MAGNIFICENT.....
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Deep ,
hum kahaN kuch likhte hai ... bas aapke kuch alfaaz hi inki keemat hai ... ye de diya karie ... aur nahi chaiye kuch
Kunal
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Re: Re: Re: Ye zameeN ye AASMAAN jala do..! -
13th March 2006, 01:17 PM
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sorrry bhaiya ke wajah dd likh liya
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shukriya upadhi wapas dene ke liye
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13th March 2006, 01:21 PM
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Mere Bhai Kunnu..........
Dard bhara Kalaam.....ek aag.....ek jwala..........sab kutch raakh karne ki khwahish.........
har ek misra bayani mein maahir hai..........daad kabool karo......
khush rahoo.........
tumhara apna............
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aman bhai ...
shukriya ... aapko itni fursta mili hum tak aane ke liye ...
aapki daad sir mathe ...
aapka bhai
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13th March 2006, 01:26 PM
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nice
but need improvement
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thanx for comment..
koshish jaari rahegi...
kunal
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Re: Re: Ye zameeN ye AASMAAN jala do..! -
13th March 2006, 09:11 PM
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KuNal Dear....
Tumhare shabdon me ek dard aur ajeeb si tadap paayi, pehle reply nahi kar paayi thi... by the way tumne hamensha ki tarhaa bahut khubsurat likha hain... daad kubul karna dear. yun hi nahi par iss se bhi achha likhte rehna. apna achhe se khyaal rakhna aur khush rehne ki koshish karna.
With love.
Yours truly,
Parul.
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Priye parul...
ye tadap to har jagah hai .. har kisi ka dard yahaN sir chad ke bolta hai ... khair jagah hi aisi hai ... tumne jehmat akhir utha hi li reply karne ki .. mujhe behad accha laga ... umeed hai tumhara sath humesha milta rahega...
Tumhara apna
Kunal
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13th March 2006, 09:14 PM
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Kunal,
Yaar.. chhoti behar ho yaa badii... teri poetries line me a hi jaati hain...aur asar to bass kya kehne...marne-maarne ke kalaam mujhe kam pasand hain... magar yeh accha laga... likhte rhao yun hi...khayal rakho...thhaand rakho...
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maiN bas yahi keh sakta huN .. ki haN maiN dard pe likhtha huN .. par dard ko aisi had maiN rakhta huN .. ki woh chu bhi jaye .. aur lafz chube bbhi nahi
aap aaye isse badi aur kya baat ...
aapka apna
kunal
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14th March 2006, 12:14 AM
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na jalega imaan.. na hi jalega samaan..
na jalegi dharti.. na hi jalega aasmaan...
jalana hai kuch to apni maayoosi jala do..
is chehre ki muskaan vaapis lauta do...
~Priya
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Priya
abhi kuch nahi keh sakta tumhare bare maiN ... bas soch hi sakta huN ...
khair tum aayi accha laga ...
kunal
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16th March 2006, 11:41 AM
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aapke prati khud ko samarpan karta hun... khushnaseebi hi hai .. ki ek heera aisa bhi hai is jahan e shayri main ... kunal bhai ek din dekhna aapka naam poore jahan main hoga.. aapki ye rachna mujhe behad pasand aayi .,... mere dil ke kareeb rahegi humesha .. aur sabse khash baat .. baten jitni gehri hai .. alfaz utne hi gehre... ye sirf aap hi kar sakte hai ....
aapka
Raj
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Raj bhai...
aapka aana sada hi mujhe KhushiyoN ki ooNchai deta hai ... par aap jis tarah tareef karte hai ... kabhi kabhi sochta huN .. is kabil huN bhi ya nahi .. khair aap aaye mujhe padha ..
Shukriya
Apka apna
Kunal
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