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jism jal rahaa hai - Semi item no (An attempt) - 10th September 2014, 11:00 AM

My solo attempt at writing a semi-item number

jism jal rahaa hai aa jaao naa, sanam mere
bekaraar hai ye dil aa jaao naa, sanam mere

aa, zaraa meri baahoN ko sanam tu tham le naa
aa, zaraa meri aaNkhoN se tu baateN kar le naa
maiN yahaaN tere bina, tu vahaaN mere bina,
jal rahe haiN dono hi pyaar meN, sanam mere

jism jal rahaa hai aa jaao naa, sanam mere
bekaraar hai ye dil aa jaao naa, sanam mere

aag hai dhuaaN si kyuN, tez hai havaa bhii kyuN
bujhtii shamaa hai kyuN, dhadkane javaaN bhii kyuN
mauj sard si uTHii, saaNs bhii hai behkii kyuN,
mehfileN javaaN kar le aaj phir, sanam mere

jism jal rahaa hai aa jaao naa, sanam mere
bekaraar hai ye dil aa jaao naa, sanam mere

aa, zaraa meri zulfoN meN sanam tu kho jaa naa
aa, zaraa mere hoTHoN se sanam tu pii jaa naa
pyaas ye mere tan kii, bujhe naa, tere binaa,
ye sharaab bhii kuchh naa kar sakii, sanam mere

jism jal rahaa hai aa jaao naa, sanam mere
bekaraar hai ye dil aa jaao naa, sanam mere
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जिस्म जल रहा है आ जाओ ना, सनम मेरे |
बेकरार है ये दिल आ जाओ ना, सनम मेरे ||

आ, ज़रा मेरी बाहों को सनम तू थाम ले ना |
आ, ज़रा मेरी आँखों से तू बातें कर ले ना ||
मैं यहां तेरे बिना, तू वहां मेरे बिना,
जल रहे हैं दोनों ही प्यार में, सनम मेरे ||

जिस्म जल रहा है आ जाओ ना, सनम मेरे |
बेकरार है ये दिल आ जाओ ना, सनम मेरे ||

आग है धुंआ सी क्यों, तेज़ है हवा भी क्यों |
बुझती शमा है क्यों, धड़कनें जवाँ भी क्यों ||
मौज सर्द सी उठी, सांस भी है बहकी क्यों,
महफिलें जवाँ कर ले आज फिर, सनम मेरे ||

जिस्म जल रहा है आ जाओ ना, सनम मेरे |
बेकरार है ये दिल आ जाओ ना, सनम मेरे ||

आ, ज़रा मेरी ज़ुल्फ़ों में सनम तू खो जा ना |
आ, ज़रा मेरे होठों से सनम तू पी जा ना ||
प्यास ये मेरे तन की, बुझे ना, तेरे बिना,
ये शराब भी कुछ ना कर सकी, सनम मेरे ||

जिस्म जल रहा है आ जाओ ना, सनम मेरे |
बेकरार है ये दिल आ जाओ ना, सनम मेरे ||



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10th September 2014, 03:19 PM

Adil bhai,

chalay bhi aao kahaN chupay ho sanam hamaray ..
hamaray dil ki hur aik dhadkan tumhe pukaray.. sanam hamaray
iss zameeN per yeH semi item-number khoob raha.... dherooN daad!

Likhte rahiye,

DuaooN ke saath,


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Adil bhai,

chalay bhi aao kahaN chupay ho sanam hamaray ..
hamaray dil ki hur aik dhadkan tumhe pukaray.. sanam hamaray
iss zameeN per yeH semi item-number khoob raha.... dherooN daad!

Likhte rahiye,

DuaooN ke saath,
Hassanbhai,

Sunita dii ne ek kaam diya tha hameN, bas ussi ko khatm karne meN lagaa hooN...

jald hi haazir honge



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Hassanbhai,

Sunita dii ne ek kaam diya tha hameN, bas ussi ko khatm karne meN lagaa hooN...

jald hi haazir honge
jee bhai.. mujhe bhi ussi ka intezaar hai...


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jee bhai.. mujhe bhi ussi ka intezaar hai...
already posted..
http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthr...341#post468341



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Oho kya item number hai sach meiN aag laga di mehfil meiN bahot khoob nazm hui hai dear dheron daad
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