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mire baagh e dil meN jo khaar haiN, tiree rahmateN haiN, sitam naheeN! - 11th September 2010, 11:24 AM

doston ko Id aur vinayak chaturthi ki mubaarak baad! kuchh ashaar pesh e khidmat haiN. mulaaizah farmaaye!

mire baagh e dil meN jo khaar haiN, tiree rahmateN haiN, sitam naheeN!
"jise tere gham se ho waasitah, woh khizaaN bahaar se kam naheeN!" - Shakeel Badayuni

woh jo mazhaboN ne dikhayee thee, rakhaa maine us pe qadam naheeN,
maiN maqam e dil kaa huN raah_gir, miree raah dair o haram naheeN!

yeh har ik janam nayaa pairhan, kabhee is badan, kabhee us badan!
mujhe aglii baar nah bhejiyo, "naheeN iske baad janam naheeN!"

nah hee ranj o gham kaa aseer hai, nah masar'ratoN se ameer hai,
woh jo khud se ho gayaa aashanaa, use kaif o gham kaa bharam naheeN!

zaraa baaz aa! woh hee naimateN, kaheeN ashq ashq rulaa nah de,
jinheN toone zaa'e kiyaa sadaa, tire waasite jo aham naheeN!
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yeh har ik janam nayaa pairhan, kabhee is badan, kabhee us badan!
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Dheer Sahab ! Aadaab ! Eid Aur vinayak chaturthi ki aapko bhi bahut bahut mubaaraqbaad ... !

Aapki Nayi peshkash ke Sabhi ashaar Padhte hi besaaqta muh se nikalta hai Wah ..wah ...wah ... !

ek se badh ke ek ...sher pesh kiye hai ... aapne ! kisi ek ko khaas kehna mushkil hoga... zindagi ke bahut kareeb ka ehsaas karaati ...aapki Qalam mujhe behad pasand aai....tahe dil se daad hazir hai...aise hi behtar qalaam ke saath humeshaa aate rahen... likhte rahen aage bhi ... khush rahen...

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doston ko Id aur vinayak chaturthi ki mubaarak baad! kuchh ashaar pesh e khidmat haiN. mulaaizah farmaaye!

mire baagh e dil meN jo khaar haiN, tiree rahmateN haiN, sitam naheeN!
"jise tere gham se ho waasitah, woh khizaaN bahaar se kam naheeN!" - Shakeel Badayuni

woh jo mazhaboN ne dikhayee thee, rakhaa maine us pe qadam naheeN,
maiN maqam e dil kaa huN raah_gir, miree raah dair o haram naheeN!

yeh har ik janam nayaa pairhan, kabhee is badan, kabhee us badan!
mujhe aglii baar nah bhejiyo, "naheeN iske baad janam naheeN!"

nah hee ranj o gham kaa aseer hai, nah masar'ratoN se ameer hai,
woh jo khud se ho gayaa aashanaa, use kaif o gham kaa bharam naheeN!

zaraa baaz aa! woh hee naimateN, kaheeN ashq ashq rulaa nah de,
jinheN toone zaa'e kiyaa sadaa, tire waasite jo aham naheeN!
dheer bhai
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bahut khoob.......dil se daad....lajawaab
aur ye sher bahut hi pasand aaya


woh jo mazhaboN ne dikhayee thee, rakhaa maine us pe qadam naheeN,
maiN maqam e dil kaa huN raah_gir, miree raah dair o haram naheeN!


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Dheer ji, namaste!

Aapko bhii dheroN mubarakbaad Eid aur Vinayak Chaturthii kii!...

Ek baar fir se bahut achchhii ghazal kahi hai aapne. daad aur mubarakbaad kabuul keejiye!

Saare sher's dil ko chhoo gaye, par ye do sher's dil me utar gaye.

nah hee ranj o gham kaa aseer hai, nah masar'ratoN se ameer hai,
woh jo khud se ho gayaa aashanaa, use kaif o gham kaa bharam naheeN!

zaraa baaz aa! woh hee naimateN, kaheeN ashq ashq rulaa nah de,
jinheN toone zaa'e kiyaa sadaa, tire waasite jo aham naheeN!


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Pranaam!

aapki Ghazal bahot hi behterin rahii.n.. aapko paRhnaa aik alag hi baat haii.. yuuNhi bazm ki Shaan baRhaate rahe.n! dil se daad!

KhuSh rahe.n... apnaa Khayaal raKhe.n

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doston ko Id aur vinayak chaturthi ki mubaarak baad! kuchh ashaar pesh e khidmat haiN. mulaaizah farmaaye!

mire baagh e dil meN jo khaar haiN, tiree rahmateN haiN, sitam naheeN!
"jise tere gham se ho waasitah, woh khizaaN bahaar se kam naheeN!" - Shakeel Badayuni

woh jo mazhaboN ne dikhayee thee, rakhaa maine us pe qadam naheeN,
maiN maqam e dil kaa huN raah_gir, miree raah dair o haram naheeN!

yeh har ik janam nayaa pairhan, kabhee is badan, kabhee us badan!
mujhe aglii baar nah bhejiyo, "naheeN iske baad janam naheeN!"

nah hee ranj o gham kaa aseer hai, nah masar'ratoN se ameer hai,
woh jo khud se ho gayaa aashanaa, use kaif o gham kaa bharam naheeN!

zaraa baaz aa! woh hee naimateN, kaheeN ashq ashq rulaa nah de,
jinheN toone zaa'e kiyaa sadaa, tire waasite jo aham naheeN!
wah kya baat hai, dheer saheb bahut hi umda khayal...mujhe bahut pasaNd aayee ye ghazal...daad hi daad haazir hai janaab....qubuul kijiyega...


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doston ko Id aur vinayak chaturthi ki mubaarak baad! kuchh ashaar pesh e khidmat haiN. mulaaizah farmaaye!

mire baagh e dil meN jo khaar haiN, tiree rahmateN haiN, sitam naheeN!
"jise tere gham se ho waasitah, woh khizaaN bahaar se kam naheeN!" - Shakeel Badayuni

woh jo mazhaboN ne dikhayee thee, rakhaa maine us pe qadam naheeN,
maiN maqam e dil kaa huN raah_gir, miree raah dair o haram naheeN!

yeh har ik janam nayaa pairhan, kabhee is badan, kabhee us badan!
mujhe aglii baar nah bhejiyo, "naheeN iske baad janam naheeN!"

nah hee ranj o gham kaa aseer hai, nah masar'ratoN se ameer hai,
woh jo khud se ho gayaa aashanaa, use kaif o gham kaa bharam naheeN!

zaraa baaz aa! woh hee naimateN, kaheeN ashq ashq rulaa nah de,
jinheN toone zaa'e kiyaa sadaa, tire waasite jo aham naheeN!
bahot khoob sahab..aapki baateN ab humse nahi khuda se ho rahi hai..neiki aur bandagee ki raah par aur bhi aage badho..


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doston ko Id aur vinayak chaturthi ki mubaarak baad! kuchh ashaar pesh e khidmat haiN. mulaaizah farmaaye!

aapko bhi vinayak chaturti aur eid ki dohri mubarakbaad...


aapki ghazal nazar nawaaz huyi.....kuch baate zehn me aayi....so pooch raha hu....karam nawaazi ka mutamanni




mire baagh e dil meN jo khaar haiN, tiree rahmateN haiN, sitam naheeN!
"jise tere gham se ho waasitah, woh khizaaN bahaar se kam naheeN!" - Shakeel Badayuni

aapke ulaa me jo dusra 'hain' hai...vo `mashkook o mayuub nazar aa raha hai...tasalli talab hai...
aapke nazariyaat ka besabri se intezaar rahega.....kyuke is mas'ale ka jawaab mai bahut dino se dhund raha hu....




woh jo mazhaboN ne dikhayee thee, rakhaa maine us pe qadam naheeN,
maiN maqam e dil kaa huN raah_gir, miree raah dair o haram naheeN!

ula misre me'raah' ki kami khalti hai zara....
agar aisa ho to?
woh jo mazhaboN ne dikhayee rah=thee ke badle?

maqam e dil me shayad typo ho gaya hai.....(maqaam)?

mere khayaal se lafz 'raahgeer' hai....raahgir nahi
is lihaaj se ye wazn se kharij hai



yeh har ik janam nayaa pairhan, kabhee is badan, kabhee us badan!
mujhe aglii baar nah bhejiyo, "naheeN iske baad janam naheeN!"

tewar badal gaye sahab.......aisa munaasib hai?
meter par asar nahi hoga? taktee me hone ke bavjuud?
kyuki adaa karte huyee tone change karna hoga....





nah hee ranj o gham kaa aseer hai, nah masar'ratoN se ameer hai,
woh jo khud se ho gayaa aashanaa, use kaif o gham kaa bharam naheeN!

yaha sahab zara ' kaif o gham ' samaj nahi aaya
ya to kaif e gham hota
ya
khauf 0 gham hota.......ya khauf e gham...


zaraa baaz aa! woh hee naimateN, kaheeN ashq ashq rulaa nah de,
jinheN toone zaa'e kiyaa sadaa, tire waasite jo aham naheeN!


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Dheer Sahab ! Aadaab ! Eid Aur vinayak chaturthi ki aapko bhi bahut bahut mubaaraqbaad ... !

Aapki Nayi peshkash ke Sabhi ashaar Padhte hi besaaqta muh se nikalta hai Wah ..wah ...wah ... !

ek se badh ke ek ...sher pesh kiye hai ... aapne ! kisi ek ko khaas kehna mushkil hoga... zindagi ke bahut kareeb ka ehsaas karaati ...aapki Qalam mujhe behad pasand aai....tahe dil se daad hazir hai...aise hi behtar qalaam ke saath humeshaa aate rahen... likhte rahen aage bhi ... khush rahen...

duaaon ke saath...
Naresh ji,
namaste!
aapkee muhabbat aur zar'rah_nawaazee hai ke aapne har ek sher par dil khol ke daad luTaayee. is faraaG_dili ke liye behad shukriya!
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dheer bhai
radhe radhe

bahut khoob.......dil se daad....lajawaab
aur ye sher bahut hi pasand aaya


woh jo mazhaboN ne dikhayee thee, rakhaa maine us pe qadam naheeN,
maiN maqam e dil kaa huN raah_gir, miree raah dair o haram naheeN!


duaon ke saath
Ishq bhai!
radhe radhe,
daad sar aankhon par!

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Dheer ji, namaste!

Aapko bhii dheroN mubarakbaad Eid aur Vinayak Chaturthii kii!...

Ek baar fir se bahut achchhii ghazal kahi hai aapne. daad aur mubarakbaad kabuul keejiye!

Saare sher's dil ko chhoo gaye, par ye do sher's dil me utar gaye.

nah hee ranj o gham kaa aseer hai, nah masar'ratoN se ameer hai,
woh jo khud se ho gayaa aashanaa, use kaif o gham kaa bharam naheeN!

zaraa baaz aa! woh hee naimateN, kaheeN ashq ashq rulaa nah de,
jinheN toone zaa'e kiyaa sadaa, tire waasite jo aham naheeN!


Aapka bahut bahut shukriya Dheer ji. aage bhii saath banaye rakhiyega.
Mann saheb namaste!
darj ashaar pasand farmaane ke liye bahut dhanyavad. ummeed hai bazm aise hee rawaaN rahegee.
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Pranaam!

aapki Ghazal bahot hi behterin rahii.n.. aapko paRhnaa aik alag hi baat haii.. yuuNhi bazm ki Shaan baRhaate rahe.n! dil se daad!

KhuSh rahe.n... apnaa Khayaal raKhe.n

duaao.n ke saath ijaazat

aapka

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yeh meraa saubhagya hai ke shaairee ke zariye tum jaise dost aur qadr_daan milte haiN. shaan e bazm to mere binaa bhee khoob raushan hai aur khudaaraa aise hee raushan raheN! koshish yeh hee rahegee kii is raushnee kaa faaidah maiN bhee uThaataa rahuN.

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wah kya baat hai, dheer saheb bahut hi umda khayal...mujhe bahut pasaNd aayee ye ghazal...daad hi daad haazir hai janaab....qubuul kijiyega...
saHeb! aisee dili daad kisee ko naa-qaabil e qabool kaise ho saktee hai .. woh to sar aankhoN par.

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doston ko Id aur vinayak chaturthi ki mubaarak baad! kuchh ashaar pesh e khidmat haiN. mulaaizah farmaaye!

aapko bhi vinayak chaturti aur eid ki dohri mubarakbaad...

namaste Zidd saHeb! mubaarakbaad kaa behad shukriyaa!

aapki ghazal nazar nawaaz huyi.....kuch baate zehn me aayi....so pooch raha hu....karam nawaazi ka mutamanni

meree khush_naseebee saHeb! wajaahateN likhne se pehle ye arz kartaa huN ke yeh mehz mere kam ilm se baabat haiN. darj misre inse bhee behtar shakloN meN kahe jaa sakte haiN. dostoN ke tabsare ke baad hee kahaanee aur aage baDhegee.



mire baagh e dil meN jo khaar haiN, tiree rahmateN haiN, sitam naheeN!
"jise tere gham se ho waasitah, woh khizaaN bahaar se kam naheeN!" - Shakeel Badayuni

aapke ulaa me jo dusra 'hain' hai...vo `mashkook o mayuub nazar aa raha hai...tasalli talab hai...
aapke nazariyaat ka besabri se intezaar rahega.....kyuke is mas'ale ka jawaab mai bahut dino se dhund raha hu....
"mashkook o MAYUUB????" misra kamzor ho saktaa hai mayuub naheeN.
par maiN aapke sawaal ko Theek se samajh naheeN paayaa. zaraa tafseel se likhiyegaa. agar aap "haiN" ke do baar ke istimaal kee taraf ishaaraa kar rahe haiN to aisa us waqt naagavaar maalooom hotaa haiN jab ek hee lafz kaa doosaree baar istemaal bhartee kaa ho. yahaaN jis tarah se misra adaa huaa hai, mere khayaal se doosre 'haiN' kee zaroorat hai. magar misra is se behtar ho sakta hai aur is se inkaar naheeN kiyaa jaa sakta. koee tajweez aap bhee sochiye.




woh jo mazhaboN ne dikhayee thee, rakhaa maine us pe qadam naheeN,
maiN maqam e dil kaa huN raah_gir, miree raah dair o haram naheeN!

ula misre me'raah' ki kami khalti hai zara....
agar aisa ho to?
woh jo mazhaboN ne dikhayee rah=thee ke badle?
donoN misroN ko saath paDhne ke binaa sher kaisa ? moujudah shakl mujhe "rah" ke istemaal se behtar jaan paDtee hai. aap khud hee sochiye ki sher meN teen daf'h lafz e raah kaisaa lagegaa?
maqam e dil me shayad typo ho gaya hai.....(maqaam)?

mere khayaal se lafz 'raahgeer' hai....raahgir nahi
is lihaaj se ye wazn se kharij hai
aapne bilkul saheeh farmaayaa. asl lafz raahgeer hee hai. misre ko dobaara aise bhee kahaa jaa saktaa hai .

maiN huN raahgeer e maqaam e dil, meree raah dair o haram naheeN!

is qotahi se waaqif karaane ke liye behad shukriyaa hazoor!



yeh har ik janam nayaa pairhan, kabhee is badan, kabhee us badan!
mujhe aglii baar nah bhejiyo, "naheeN iske baad janam naheeN!"

tewar badal gaye sahab.......aisa munaasib hai?
meter par asar nahi hoga? taktee me hone ke bavjuud?
kyuki adaa karte huyee tone change karna hoga....



kahaaN ke aur kaise tewar saHeb zaraa raushnee Daale to behtar hogaa...
mujhe sher rawaaN bhee lag rahaa hai aur wazn meN bhee. agar aap thoDaa khul ke likhe to maiN kuchh jawaab de saktaa huN.


nah hee ranj o gham kaa aseer hai, nah masar'ratoN se ameer hai,
woh jo khud se ho gayaa aashanaa, use kaif o gham kaa bharam naheeN!

yaha sahab zara ' kaif o gham ' samaj nahi aaya
ya to kaif e gham hota
ya
khauf 0 gham hota.......ya khauf e gham...


kaif o gham par aapkaa aitraaz samajh nah sakaa. sher meN yah arz karne kee koshish huee hai ke, woh shaks jisko self realization ho jaaye use khushee aur gham kaa koee bharam naheeN rahtaa. uske liye saaree kaifiyateN ek see hotee hai.faqeeraanah mizaaj! aapne woh sher to sunaa hee hogaa,

gham aur khushee kaa fark nah mehsoos ho jahaaN,
maiN dil ko us maqaam pe laataa chalaa gayaa!

yahaaN khauf o gham yah phir kaif e gham kee gunjaaish hee naheeN hai.


zaraa baaz aa! woh hee naimateN, kaheeN ashq ashq rulaa nah de,
jinheN toone zaa'e kiyaa sadaa, tire waasite jo aham naheeN!


aapke aakhiri sher ne allama iqbal sahab ke jawaab-e- shikwa ki yaad taaza kar di
meree khush_naseebee saHeb ke mere do qauDee ke sher ne aap ko kalaam e al'lama Iqbal kee yaad dilaa dee.

yeh ek taalib e ilm kaa mukhtasar waqt meN mukhtasar ilm ke saath kahee gayaa adnaa saa kalaam thaa saheb jiske har sher ko ahl e ilm behtar banaa sakte haiN. aise kalaam par aapne apne taasuraat zaahir kiye, wo hee mere liye kisee daad se kam naheeN. iltijaa hai ke aise hee saath dete rahe taake ilm kee nayee raaheN khultee raheN.

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meree khush_naseebee saHeb ke mere do qauDee ke sher ne aap ko kalaam e al'lama Iqbal kee yaad dilaa dee.

yeh ek taalib e ilm kaa mukhtasar waqt meN mukhtasar ilm ke saath kahee gayaa adnaa saa kalaam thaa saheb jiske har sher ko ahl e ilm behtar banaa sakte haiN. aise kalaam par aapne apne taasuraat zaahir kiye, wo hee mere liye kisee daad se kam naheeN. iltijaa hai ke aise hee saath dete rahe taake ilm kee nayee raaheN khultee raheN.

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jee dheer sahab .....ek baar phir pranaam...

mujhe 'hain' ke wazn par shak aur aib mehsuus hua ( mashkook o maayoob)
kyuke aapne dusre 'hain' ko sakit bana diya hai......so yehi poochna tha ki ye munasib hai?......aitraaz wazn ke lihaaj se tha.....dusri koi baat nahi...
dobara 'hain' ki wazahat farmaaye zahmat ke liye shukriya

baki wazahat ke hai uske liye bahut shukriya....hamaare ilm me bhi bahut izaafa hua ....

ek baar phir behad shukriya

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jee dheer sahab .....ek baar phir pranaam...

mujhe 'hain' ke wazn par shak aur aib mehsuus hua ( mashkook o maayoob)
kyuke aapne dusre 'hain' ko sakit bana diya hai......so yehi poochna tha ki ye munasib hai?......aitraaz wazn ke lihaaj se tha.....dusri koi baat nahi...
dobara 'hain' ki wazahat farmaaye zahmat ke liye shukriya

baki wazahat ke hai uske liye bahut shukriya....hamaare ilm me bhi bahut izaafa hua ....

ek baar phir behad shukriya

regards
Namaste Zidd saHeb,
ab baat mere samajh aaye ..aap doosare 'haiN' ko short (digitally 1) lene kee or ishaaraa kar rahe haiN..jahaaN tak meraa khayaal hai, is tarah kaa istemaal jaaez hai.
misaal ke taur par yeh sher

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Namaste Zidd saHeb,
ab baat mere samajh aaye ..aap doosare 'haiN' ko short (digitally 1) lene kee or ishaaraa kar rahe haiN..jahaaN tak meraa khayaal hai, is tarah kaa istemaal jaaez hai.
misaal ke taur par yeh sher

(1222 1222 1222 1222)

mare jaate haiN terii bevafaa_ii dekhane vaale
chiraaG e subh hai shaam e judaa_ii dekhane vaale! -- Daag Dehlvi


maine kaheeN is par aitraaz naheeN dekhaa. agar aisaa kisee ahl e ilm ne kahaa hai to ye mere liye bhee seekhne waalee baat hogee. is par mujhe zaroor likhiyegaa.

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aapka bahut bahut shukriya dheer sahab.....
ye mera confusion theek karne ka....

mai bahut dino se is masle par phasaa hua tha....ek baar raziaji ne Bhi isi tarah 'hain' istemaal kiya tha aur maine unse bhi poocha tha...magar vo jawaab dena bhuul gayin shayad

mujhe pata nahi kyu 'hain' ke adaigi par shak hai....bus dimaag me khurapaat hai yu samjh lijiye.....magar jab daag sahab ne bandhaa hai to phir discussion wahi khatm.........

once again thanks a lot....

regards

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woh jo mazhaboN ne dikhayee thee, rakhaa maine us pe qadam naheeN,
maiN maqam e dil kaa huN raah_gir, miree raah dair o haram naheeN!

yeh har ik janam nayaa pairhan, kabhee is badan, kabhee us badan!
mujhe aglii baar nah bhejiyo, "naheeN iske baad janam naheeN!"

nah hee ranj o gham kaa aseer hai, nah masar'ratoN se ameer hai,
woh jo khud se ho gayaa aashanaa, use kaif o gham kaa bharam naheeN!

zaraa baaz aa! woh hee naimateN, kaheeN ashq ashq rulaa nah de,
jinheN toone zaa'e kiyaa sadaa, tire waasite jo aham naheeN!

ji saare hi ashaar bhaut khoob rahe..............ye kuch khaas raha....very nice........

yeh har ik janam nayaa pairhan, kabhee is badan, kabhee us badan!
mujhe aglii baar nah bhejiyo, "naheeN iske baad janam naheeN!"



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aapka bahut bahut shukriya dheer sahab.....
ye mera confusion theek karne ka....

mai bahut dino se is masle par phasaa hua tha....ek baar raziaji ne Bhi isi tarah 'hain' istemaal kiya tha aur maine unse bhi poocha tha...magar vo jawaab dena bhuul gayin shayad

mujhe pata nahi kyu 'hain' ke adaigi par shak hai....bus dimaag me khurapaat hai yu samjh lijiye.....magar jab daag sahab ne bandhaa hai to phir discussion wahi khatm.........

once again thanks a lot....

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woh jo mazhaboN ne dikhayee thee, rakhaa maine us pe qadam naheeN,
maiN maqam e dil kaa huN raah_gir, miree raah dair o haram naheeN!

yeh har ik janam nayaa pairhan, kabhee is badan, kabhee us badan!
mujhe aglii baar nah bhejiyo, "naheeN iske baad janam naheeN!"

nah hee ranj o gham kaa aseer hai, nah masar'ratoN se ameer hai,
woh jo khud se ho gayaa aashanaa, use kaif o gham kaa bharam naheeN!

zaraa baaz aa! woh hee naimateN, kaheeN ashq ashq rulaa nah de,
jinheN toone zaa'e kiyaa sadaa, tire waasite jo aham naheeN!

ji saare hi ashaar bhaut khoob rahe..............ye kuch khaas raha....very nice........

yeh har ik janam nayaa pairhan, kabhee is badan, kabhee us badan!
mujhe aglii baar nah bhejiyo, "naheeN iske baad janam naheeN!"[/QUOTE]


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