jindgi nu akhri salam kinj khan

[Dr. Preet Chhou]

Dosto maafi chhavanga k thonu mein bdi der to kuj likh nahi skea, asl vich thodi sarean di poetry eni sohni hai, k menu sab kuj apna fikka najr aunda hai , umid krda ha thonu meri najm pasand avega

Mein roj sochda han k jijndgi nu aj akhri slam bula lavan,
fir sochda han k kuj ku drd hor hnda lavan ,
meri jindgi tan dukhan da ek gehra smuder hai,
jo lkh chahun te v hasdi nahi,
dil da gam halka krn lae rona kon nahi chahunda ,
ronde te hmdardi jtave o akh ta disdi nahi,
peedan da praga ta mere v hath vich hai,
sochda han k kise bthi vich tal devan ,
par mere lae ta o marjani bthi v hun machdi nahi,
maa meri menu hloon k vekhdi hai,
kd mooh te hasa avega kol beh khud nu sekdi hai ,
me jd chlea c usnu ta mudtan ho gaean ,
jra ku ther ja jinddi e menu has ta len de ,
terian rehmtan di gthri kas ta len de
aa apan doven beth k dukh sukh chnd lae e ,
shyd najr aa jve kuj sukh apan doven vand lae e ,
thodi der ther ja bs hune swer hon wali e .
apan nu kon udikda hai jo apan nu der hon wali e ,
menu pata hai kal tu mere nal fer ladengi,
meri chup nu todn lae khani koi navin ghdengi,
kio even kaml khidaundi hain,
beet gae ne jo pal ohnu kio sheeshe vich sjaundi hain,
kuj to soch kuj ta rkh shrm hya ,
piche mud ta vekh tere jkhma cho kina lhoo dul gea,
Preet V ta tere vang chlda hi gea c,
Tu hi das usda kina ku mul pea,

.........................................alvida dosto j jindgi rhi ta fer milage
ro ta pal do pal lae rhe han, kosish hai kal has k mlange .

[rishi22722]

Dr. Sahib,

Kafi dungai tak gaye ho... Je kar share alag alag kar dio ta parna asaan rahega... Gustakhi Muaf karna pls...

Regards,

Rishi

[Dr. Preet Chhou]

Originally Posted by rishi22722

Dr. Sahib,

Kafi dungai tak gaye ho... Je kar share alag alag kar dio ta parna asaan rahega... Gustakhi Muaf karna pls...

Regards,

Rishi

thanks for suggestion i will try , it willl be bettr if u can do it . i want this according to you

[tilakji]

Dr sahib bahut vadhiyaa likhiyaa hai. Bas jo man ch aavey likh diyaa karo. baaki sab karan karaaun waalaa te uppar baithaa hai. Likhan waalaa vi ohi hundaa hai te sunan waalaa vi. Daad vi ossey koloN mildi hai te critic remarks vi.

wasdey raho

tilak...

[ABABBU]

Originally Posted by Dr. Preet Chhou

Dosto maafi chhavanga k thonu mein bdi der to kuj likh nahi skea, asl vich thodi sarean di poetry eni sohni hai, k menu sab kuj apna fikka najr aunda hai , umid krda ha thonu meri najm pasand avega

Mein roj sochda han k jijndgi nu aj akhri slam bula lavan,
fir sochda han k kuj ku drd hor hnda lavan ,
meri jindgi tan dukhan da ek gehra smuder hai,
jo lkh chahun te v hasdi nahi,
dil da gam halka krn lae rona kon nahi chahunda ,
ronde te hmdardi jtave o akh ta disdi nahi,
peedan da praga ta mere v hath vich hai,
sochda han k kise bthi vich tal devan ,
par mere lae ta o marjani bthi v hun machdi nahi,
maa meri menu hloon k vekhdi hai,
kd mooh te hasa avega kol beh khud nu sekdi hai ,
me jd chlea c usnu ta mudtan ho gaean ,
jra ku ther ja jinddi e menu has ta len de ,
terian rehmtan di gthri kas ta len de
aa apan doven beth k dukh sukh chnd lae e ,
shyd najr aa jve kuj sukh apan doven vand lae e ,
thodi der ther ja bs hune swer hon wali e .
apan nu kon udikda hai jo apan nu der hon wali e ,
menu pata hai kal tu mere nal fer ladengi,
meri chup nu todn lae khani koi navin ghdengi,
kio even kaml khidaundi hain,
beet gae ne jo pal ohnu kio sheeshe vich sjaundi hain,
kuj to soch kuj ta rkh shrm hya ,
piche mud ta vekh tere jkhma cho kina lhoo dul gea,
Preet V ta tere vang chlda hi gea c,
Tu hi das usda kina ku mul pea,

.........................................alvida dosto j jindgi rhi ta fer milage
ro ta pal do pal lae rhe han, kosish hai kal has k mlange .

DR. PREET bahut komal ehsaas ne.meri nizzi samajh ehi hai ki bhawna je bazari kar ke likhia ta oh kahdia bhawnawa. jad tusi likhde ho ta uss wele sirf tuhanu hi eh ehsaas hunda hai ki tusi kis nu samarpit ho ke likh rahe ho.sach hi bahut sohni rachna hai.likhde reha karo.

[sunita thakur]

Mein roj sochda han k jijndgi nu aj akhri slam bula lavan,
fir sochda han k kuj ku drd hor hnda lavan ,

meri jindgi tan dukhan da ek gehra smuder hai,
jo lkh chahun te v hasdi nahi,

dil da gam halka krn lae rona kon nahi chahunda ,
ronde te hmdardi jtave o akh ta disdi nahi,

peedan da praga ta mere v hath vich hai,
sochda han k kise bthi vich tal devan ,

par mere lae ta o marjani bthi v hun machdi nahi,
maa meri menu hloon k vekhdi hai,

kd mooh te hasa avega kol beh khud nu sekdi hai ,
me jd chlea c usnu ta mudtan ho gaean ,

jra ku ther ja jinddi e menu has ta len de ,
terian rehmtan di gthri kas ta len de

aa apan doven beth k dukh sukh chnd lae e ,
shyd najr aa jve kuj sukh apan doven vand lae e ,

thodi der ther ja bs hune swer hon wali e .
apan nu kon udikda hai jo apan nu der hon wali e ,

menu pata hai kal tu mere nal fer ladengi,
meri chup nu todn lae khani koi navin ghdengi,

kio even kaml khidaundi hain,
beet gae ne jo pal ohnu kio sheeshe vich sjaundi hain,

kuj to soch kuj ta rkh shrm hya ,
piche mud ta vekh tere jkhma cho kina lhoo dul gea,

Preet V ta tere vang chlda hi gea c,
Tu hi das usda kina ku mul pea,


Preet g......namaskaar.........tuhanu padna bahut changa lagiya....dil de ahsaas aida hi saanje karde raho.....!

kush raho te kushiya.n maande raho

[rishi22722]

Originally Posted by tilakji

Dr sahib bahut vadhiyaa likhiyaa hai. Bas jo man ch aavey likh diyaa karo. baaki sab karan karaaun waalaa te uppar baithaa hai. Likhan waalaa vi ohi hundaa hai te sunan waalaa vi. Daad vi ossey koloN mildi hai te critic remarks vi.

wasdey raho

tilak...

Tilak ji, tusi bilkul theek furmaya hai... Mein ta khud kal da apne comments karke preshan haan... Aje meri kavita ta godian de bhar vi nahi hoi te, ek suljhe hoe shayar nu salah den di gustakhi kar baitha... Mein ta Dr. Sahib nu niji tor te milke gustakhi di khima yachna karan bare soch riha haan... par schedule aje kafi busy hai... Dr. Sahib pls mind na karna meri salah lai...

Dobara araz karda haan ke mere kehan da jo matlab si oh Sunita ji ne solve kar dita hai... Thanx Sunita Ji...



Regards,

Rishi

[SAJAN1984]

Dr Sahib bahut badhiya hai
kafi dungai vich likhi hai. samajhan waste dil to dimag da nal hona jaruri hai .

Originally Posted by Dr. Preet Chhou

Dosto maafi chhavanga k thonu mein bdi der to kuj likh nahi skea, asl vich thodi sarean di poetry eni sohni hai, k menu sab kuj apna fikka najr aunda hai , umid krda ha thonu meri najm pasand avega

Mein roj sochda han k jijndgi nu aj akhri slam bula lavan,
fir sochda han k kuj ku drd hor hnda lavan ,
meri jindgi tan dukhan da ek gehra smuder hai,
jo lkh chahun te v hasdi nahi,
dil da gam halka krn lae rona kon nahi chahunda ,
ronde te hmdardi jtave o akh ta disdi nahi,
peedan da praga ta mere v hath vich hai,
sochda han k kise bthi vich tal devan ,
par mere lae ta o marjani bthi v hun machdi nahi,
maa meri menu hloon k vekhdi hai,
kd mooh te hasa avega kol beh khud nu sekdi hai ,
me jd chlea c usnu ta mudtan ho gaean ,
jra ku ther ja jinddi e menu has ta len de ,
terian rehmtan di gthri kas ta len de
aa apan doven beth k dukh sukh chnd lae e ,
shyd najr aa jve kuj sukh apan doven vand lae e ,
thodi der ther ja bs hune swer hon wali e .
apan nu kon udikda hai jo apan nu der hon wali e ,
menu pata hai kal tu mere nal fer ladengi,
meri chup nu todn lae khani koi navin ghdengi,
kio even kaml khidaundi hain,
beet gae ne jo pal ohnu kio sheeshe vich sjaundi hain,
kuj to soch kuj ta rkh shrm hya ,
piche mud ta vekh tere jkhma cho kina lhoo dul gea,
Preet V ta tere vang chlda hi gea c,
Tu hi das usda kina ku mul pea,

.........................................alvida dosto j jindgi rhi ta fer milage
ro ta pal do pal lae rhe han, kosish hai kal has k mlange .

[Dr. Preet Chhou]

Originally Posted by rishi22722

Dr. Sahib,

Kafi dungai tak gaye ho... Je kar share alag alag kar dio ta parna asaan rahega... Gustakhi Muaf karna pls...

Regards,

Rishi

rishi ji ssa, thode wkt to vapisi kr ria han maaf kreo , thode sujhav vich esa ta kuj v nai c jis da bura mnaya mein, tusi ta bhut sulje hoe shyer ho, mein thodi ghoon ghoon wali khani v pdi bhut ache te uch koti de writer ho tusi , mere lae ena wakt kdea bhut shukrya

[Dr. Preet Chhou]

Originally Posted by tilakji

Dr sahib bahut vadhiyaa likhiyaa hai. Bas jo man ch aavey likh diyaa karo. baaki sab karan karaaun waalaa te uppar baithaa hai. Likhan waalaa vi ohi hundaa hai te sunan waalaa vi. Daad vi ossey koloN mildi hai te critic remarks vi.

wasdey raho

tilak...

maf krna tilk ji mein lae paunchya , par dil nu bhut skoon milda hai jd thode vrga shyer v sanu ena pyar bjkshda hai . tusi sachhi es mehfil de bjurgan di tran ho , jd tk thodea reply na aave udo tk dil nu tassli hi nahi hundi k kuj likhea hai , once again thanks for spend time

[Dr. Preet Chhou]

Originally Posted by A-BABBU

DR. PREET bahut komal ehsaas ne.meri nizzi samajh ehi hai ki bhawna je bazari kar ke likhia ta oh kahdia bhawnawa. jad tusi likhde ho ta uss wele sirf tuhanu hi eh ehsaas hunda hai ki tusi kis nu samarpit ho ke likh rahe ho.sach hi bahut sohni rachna hai.likhde reha karo.

o mere khuda tera kinj shukr adaa kran chote jehe nimane nu nu ina man bkshea mere dostan ne , babu ji bhut bhut shukrya thoda , mere lae time kdya

[Dr. Preet Chhou]

Originally Posted by sunita virender

Mein roj sochda han k jijndgi nu aj akhri slam bula lavan,
fir sochda han k kuj ku drd hor hnda lavan ,

meri jindgi tan dukhan da ek gehra smuder hai,
jo lkh chahun te v hasdi nahi,

dil da gam halka krn lae rona kon nahi chahunda ,
ronde te hmdardi jtave o akh ta disdi nahi,

peedan da praga ta mere v hath vich hai,
sochda han k kise bthi vich tal devan ,

par mere lae ta o marjani bthi v hun machdi nahi,
maa meri menu hloon k vekhdi hai,

kd mooh te hasa avega kol beh khud nu sekdi hai ,
me jd chlea c usnu ta mudtan ho gaean ,

jra ku ther ja jinddi e menu has ta len de ,
terian rehmtan di gthri kas ta len de

aa apan doven beth k dukh sukh chnd lae e ,
shyd najr aa jve kuj sukh apan doven vand lae e ,

thodi der ther ja bs hune swer hon wali e .
apan nu kon udikda hai jo apan nu der hon wali e ,

menu pata hai kal tu mere nal fer ladengi,
meri chup nu todn lae khani koi navin ghdengi,

kio even kaml khidaundi hain,
beet gae ne jo pal ohnu kio sheeshe vich sjaundi hain,

kuj to soch kuj ta rkh shrm hya ,
piche mud ta vekh tere jkhma cho kina lhoo dul gea,

Preet V ta tere vang chlda hi gea c,
Tu hi das usda kina ku mul pea,


Preet g......namaskaar.........tuhanu padna bahut changa lagiya....dil de ahsaas aida hi saanje karde raho.....!

kush raho te kushiya.n maande raho

sunitaq ji bhut bhut mehrbani thodi jo nimane lae time hi nhi kdhya , meri galti nu v sudhar dita , bhut achi dividation kiti hai, shukrya sunita ji shukrya

[Dr. Preet Chhou]

Originally Posted by SAJAN1984

Dr Sahib bahut badhiya hai
kafi dungai vich likhi hai. samajhan waste dil to dimag da nal hona jaruri hai .

thanks sajan ji jo apne veer nu eni halla sheri diti bhut bhut shukrya .