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Love Bolo kya karen - 11th December 2010, 01:22 PM
DARD-E-TANHAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN
RAT DHAL AAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

AB KAHAN DHUNDHEN VO AANKHEN JEEL SEE
TISHNGI CHHAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

PYAR DHOKHA HAI YAHI KAHTA THA DIL
JNAA PE BAN AAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

JINDGI KI TALKHIYAN TANHAIYAN VEERANIYAN
JAISE PARCHHAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

YE JUDAYEE ODH LEE HAMNE JAMANE KE LIYE
BE KHTA krishna SAZA PAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

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DARD-E-TANHAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN
RAT DHAL AAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

AB KAHAN DHUNDHEN VO AANKHEN JEEL SEE
TISHNGI CHHAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

PYAR DHOKHA HAI YAHI KAHTA THA DIL
JNAA PE BAN AAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

JINDGI KI TALKHIYAN TANHAIYAN VEERANIYAN
JAISE PARCHHAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

YE JUDAYEE ODH LEE HAMNE JAMANE KE LIYE
BE KHTA krishna SAZA PAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

KRISHNA
achi koshish..yunhi likhte rahiye..mujhe bahot pasand aayi aapki yeh kaavish..

god bless,

aapka dost,
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DARD-E-TANHAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN
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TISHNGI CHHAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

PYAR DHOKHA HAI YAHI KAHTA THA DIL
JNAA PE BAN AAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

JINDGI KI TALKHIYAN TANHAIYAN VEERANIYAN
JAISE PARCHHAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

YE JUDAYEE ODH LEE HAMNE JAMANE KE LIYE
BE KHTA krishna SAZA PAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

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har sher bahut acha laga
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PYAR DHOKHA HAI YAHI KAHTA THA DIL
JNAA PE BAN AAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

JINDGI KI TALKHIYAN TANHAIYAN VEERANIYAN
JAISE PARCHHAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

YE JUDAYEE ODH LEE HAMNE JAMANE KE LIYE
BE KHTA krishna SAZA PAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

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jaaaaaaaaaaan pe ban ayi hai bolo kiyaa karen
to ye hain hamare kirishna bhai ... waaaaaaah kiya kahne bahot khoob are mere bhayi is ki bas dohaayi hi di ja saktee hai is rog ka koi ilaaj nahi ise laa ilaaj kahaa jaataa hai
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11th December 2010, 10:34 PM
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AB KAHAN DHUNDHEN VO AANKHEN JEEL SEE
TISHNGI CHHAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

PYAR DHOKHA HAI YAHI KAHTA THA DIL
JNAA PE BAN AAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

JINDGI KI TALKHIYAN TANHAIYAN VEERANIYAN
JAISE PARCHHAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

YE JUDAYEE ODH LEE HAMNE JAMANE KE LIYE
BE KHTA krishna SAZA PAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

KRISHNA
Krishna Ji ...... bahut hi umdaa soch ke saath likhi hai aapne yeh tamaam ghazal ... sabhi ashaar bahut khoobsurat bane hai ... tahe dil se daad hazir hai ... aise hi likhte rahen aur aate rahen aage bhi ... khush rahen ...

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bahut khoob..............dil se daad
duaon ke saath

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12th December 2010, 08:23 PM
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YE JUDAYEE ODH LEE HAMNE JAMANE KE LIYE
BE KHTA krishna SAZA PAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

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god bless,

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pradhyuman ji,aapko pasand aayee to meri kosish kamyab hui.bahut-bahut shukriya.

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bahut bahut shukriy fikr sahib,aapne pasand kiya to mujhe hausla mila SHUKRIYA

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to ye hain hamare kirishna bhai ... waaaaaaah kiya kahne bahot khoob are mere bhayi is ki bas dohaayi hi di ja saktee hai is rog ka koi ilaaj nahi ise laa ilaaj kahaa jaataa hai
saade lafzon me ap ni dilee jazbaat is khoobsoortee se peroyaa hai ki parh ke mazaa aa gayaa
khush rahen likhte rahen
aap ka masood
masood bhai,aapki duaon se khushi aur hausla dono mile--bahut shukriya
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Krishna Ji ...... bahut hi umdaa soch ke saath likhi hai aapne yeh tamaam ghazal ... sabhi ashaar bahut khoobsurat bane hai ... tahe dil se daad hazir hai ... aise hi likhte rahen aur aate rahen aage bhi ... khush rahen ...

duaaon ke saath ....
mehra sahib,aapki duaon ne hamesha mera hausla badhaya hai,aapki daad sir aankhon par,bahut bahut shukriya
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DARD-E-TANHAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN
RAT DHAL AAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

AB KAHAN DHUNDHEN VO AANKHEN JEEL SEE
TISHNGI CHHAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

PYAR DHOKHA HAI YAHI KAHTA THA DIL
JNAA PE BAN AAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

JINDGI KI TALKHIYAN TANHAIYAN VEERANIYAN
JAISE PARCHHAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

YE JUDAYEE ODH LEE HAMNE JAMANE KE LIYE
BE KHTA krishna SAZA PAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

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20th December 2010, 05:16 PM
Bohat khoob Krishna jee.........kafi impressive rahi aapki yeh peshkash. Par chend bato par aapka dhiyaan kheechna chahuga.

RAT DHAL AAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

yaha raat dhal aayee hai kaha hai aapne, agar aap khud gaur_o_fikr kare to aapko ehsaas hoga ke kahi kuch galat hai......din dhalta hai shaam hoti hai aur raat apna safar shuru karti hai yaha raat DHAL aayee hai kehna munasib nahi laga.

Dusri baat.

BE KHTA krishna SAZA PAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

Agar krishna aapka takhallus hai to aapko bohat ehitiyaat de kaam lena hai.......aisa bilkool mehsoos na ho ke aap zabardasti apna takhallus sher me shumaar kar rahe hai jaisa ki aapne yaha kiya hai.........Be khata saza.......bohat achcha flow tha par krishna ne yaha flow ko ya rhym ko bemaza kar diya. Aur please thoda waqt nikaal kar speel check kar liya kare padhne walo ko aasani rahegi.

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DARD-E-TANHAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN
RAT DHAL AAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

AB KAHAN DHUNDHEN VO AANKHEN JEEL SEE
TISHNGI CHHAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

PYAR DHOKHA HAI YAHI KAHTA THA DIL
JNAA PE BAN AAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

JINDGI KI TALKHIYAN TANHAIYAN VEERANIYAN
JAISE PARCHHAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

YE JUDAYEE ODH LEE HAMNE JAMANE KE LIYE
BE KHTA krishna SAZA PAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN


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krishna ji namaskar,

wah, bahut khoobsurat ghazal kahi hai aapne...padh kar behad achha laga...mere daad dil se haazir hai, qubuul kijiyega...

'E Taahire Laahuti!!!
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JNAA PE BAN AAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

JINDGI KI TALKHIYAN TANHAIYAN VEERANIYAN
JAISE PARCHHAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

YE JUDAYEE ODH LEE HAMNE JAMANE KE LIYE
BE KHTA krishna SAZA PAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

KRISHNA


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Hello krishnaji .........nayaab koshish ,,,,,,,,,,i like it,,,,,,,,well done !!!!!!!!
   
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Its so good!!!! nayab koshish he aapki dil ke zazbaato ko samne lane ke liye......that's like it........well done !!! Thanks lot for sharing with all..
sneha ji,apne pasand kiya to hamari koshish kamyab hui.bahut bahut shukriya
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Bohat khoob Krishna jee.........kafi impressive rahi aapki yeh peshkash. Par chend bato par aapka dhiyaan kheechna chahuga.

RAT DHAL AAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

yaha raat dhal aayee hai kaha hai aapne, agar aap khud gaur_o_fikr kare to aapko ehsaas hoga ke kahi kuch galat hai......din dhalta hai shaam hoti hai aur raat apna safar shuru karti hai yaha raat DHAL aayee hai kehna munasib nahi laga.

Dusri baat.

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Agar krishna aapka takhallus hai to aapko bohat ehitiyaat de kaam lena hai.......aisa bilkool mehsoos na ho ke aap zabardasti apna takhallus sher me shumaar kar rahe hai jaisa ki aapne yaha kiya hai.........Be khata saza.......bohat achcha flow tha par krishna ne yaha flow ko ya rhym ko bemaza kar diya. Aur please thoda waqt nikaal kar speel check kar liya kare padhne walo ko aasani rahegi.

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DARD-E-TANHAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN
RAT DHAL AAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

AB KAHAN DHUNDHEN VO AANKHEN JEEL SEE
TISHNGI CHHAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

PYAR DHOKHA HAI YAHI KAHTA THA DIL
JNAA PE BAN AAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

JINDGI KI TALKHIYAN TANHAIYAN VEERANIYAN
JAISE PARCHHAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

YE JUDAYEE ODH LEE HAMNE JAMANE KE LIYE
BE KHTA krishna SAZA PAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN


Yeh zaruri nahi meri batein sahi ho maine jo mehsoos kiya aapse keh diya. Please keep writing.

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sneha ji,apne pasand kiya to hamari koshish kamyab hui.bahut bahut shukriya
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krishna ji namaskar,

wah, bahut khoobsurat ghazal kahi hai aapne...padh kar behad achha laga...mere daad dil se haazir hai, qubuul kijiyega...
vikramjethi saheb namaskar,aapki daad sir aankhon par,der se hazir hone k liye mafi chahta hun. bahut bahut shukriya
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DARD-E-TANHAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN
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AB KAHAN DHUNDHEN VO AANKHEN JEEL SEE
TISHNGI CHHAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

PYAR DHOKHA HAI YAHI KAHTA THA DIL
JNAA PE BAN AAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

JINDGI KI TALKHIYAN TANHAIYAN VEERANIYAN
JAISE PARCHHAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

YE JUDAYEE ODH LEE HAMNE JAMANE KE LIYE
BE KHTA krishna SAZA PAYEE HAI BOLO KYA KAREN

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ji bhaut khoob..................maqta khas raha........................


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Hey Radhika ji,,,,,,you are absolutely right ,,,I agree with your comment,,,,Thanks lot,,,,
   
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relay kya kehana.................. I also feel like that.
   
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Radhika ji,aapki daad se hausla bhi mila aur khushi bhi bahut bahut shukriya.
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relay kya kehana.................. I also feel like that.
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Hey Radhika ji,,,,,,you are absolutely right ,,,I agree with your comment,,,,Thanks lot,,,,
sneha ji,aapka bahut shukriya jo apko gazal achchhi lgi aur aapne kaee bar padhkar ise waqt diya.

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