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Kya yeh Pyaar ka izhaar tha??? -
7th October 2009, 11:38 PM
Kuch ranjisho.n ka ranj tha Kuch apni chahato.n pe naaz tha Har baar aaine ne mere mujhse Puchha teri chahato.n ka raaz tha Har zulm tera ha.ns ke saha Sehma sa mai.n umm'eed ka talabgaar tha Kuch ishq tera mere sar chad' bola Kuch vaado.n pe tere aitbaar tha Thukraata raha duniya ko mai.n Har aarzoo ko meri sirf tera intzaar tha Di hoti saza mujhe mere har jurm ki Mai.n to kab se hi khatawaar tha Muskurate hue tum chale gaye aise Kya 'ik baar' ka mai.n aisa gunahgaar tha Bulaya to bahut tujhe lekin tu na aayaa Samjha mai.n Shayad yehi tere pyaar ka izhaar tha...... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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Very Nice Post..... -
19th October 2009, 04:55 PM
Vikram ji,
Yeh aapki ghazal mujhe dil ko chu gayi.....  Vibhuti.... |
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19th October 2009, 05:02 PM
Kuch ranjisho.n ka ranj tha
Kuch apni chahato.n pe naaz tha Har baar aaine ne mere mujhse Puchha teri chahato.n ka raaz tha Har zulm tera ha.ns ke saha Sehma sa mai.n umm'eed ka talabgaar tha Kuch ishq tera mere sar chad' bola Kuch vaado.n pe tere aitbaar tha Thukraata raha duniya ko mai.n Har aarzoo ko meri sirf tera intzaar tha Di hoti saza mujhe mere har jurm ki Mai.n to kab se hi khatawaar tha Muskurate hue tum chale gaye aise Kya 'ik baar' ka mai.n aisa gunahgaar tha Bulaya to bahut tujhe lekin tu na aayaa Samjha mai.n Shayad yehi tere pyaar ka izhaar tha Vikram jIi........... Bahut khoob, achchi lagi aapki nayi koshish aur sabi sher .., Orange highlighted sher bahut khoob lage.. Daad kabool kijiye.. Likhate rhaiye.. Khush rhaiye.. Khuda hafez..... 
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Thanks Vibhuti ji..... |
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Thanks Vibhuti ji..... -
19th October 2009, 08:13 PM
Thanks Vibhuti aapko meri ek koshish pasand aayee...
Vaise bhi jahaa.n aap jaise, Khwahish ji, Zidd, Mayus saaheb, Ajay Nidaan ji aur Parinita jaise qadar daan hoN toh wahan likhne ka Maza hi Kuch aur hai........ Aap bhi apni ek aadh post daal hi deejiye KyoN hmsab logoN ko vanchit kar rakha hai...... Zaroor likhiye aur post kijiye Regards, Vikram Jethi Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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Khwahish ji bahut bahut Shukriya......... |
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Khwahish ji bahut bahut Shukriya......... -
19th October 2009, 08:54 PM
Khwahish ji,
Aapka bahut bahut Shukriya, apni tareeff se juda ek aur cheez mujhe samajh me aa gayee. Jis tarha aapne mere shabdo'n ko ek khoobsurat dhancha diya hai, vo ek bahut behtar tariqa mana jaata hai kisi ko samjhane ka. Jis manin'd aapne meri post ka jawaab mere betarteeb ash'aar'on ko saleeke se sajja kar diya....... Samjhne ka bhi Maza aa gaya........ Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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19th October 2009, 09:24 PM
Vikram jee,
SDC parivaar meiN aapka Swagat hai pahli bar aapki rachna se ru-ba-ru hui bahot hi khubsoorat nazm kahi hai aapne Dil ki baat bakhubi bayaan hui hai nazm meiN ehesaas apnasa laga Umiid hai aapki kalam se jald hi nayi nazm dekhne ko milegi Youn hi kahte rahiye khus rahiye Diya  Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz. Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai Goodbye SDC Diya |
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Shukriya aapka!!! |
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Shukriya aapka!!! -
20th October 2009, 02:34 AM
Diya ji,
Aapka bahut bahut Shukriya, ek aap haiN jinhoNe mujhe iss mehfil me shareek hone ka mauka diya........ Aur ek maiN hu ke bina kisi rasam ya riwayat ko nibhaaye, bina Kuch bataaye aur sune be-baaki aur badtamizi se iss parivaar me ghus gaya...... Mera istkbaal karne ke liye MaiN Aapka tahe dil se shukrguzaar hu... Agar aap kahiN bhi koi kami lage to yeh guzaarish hai ki ussi Waqt mujhe tok de.... MaiN to Yaha'N seekhne aur dost banaane aaya hu.... Umm'eed Karta hu ki ye silsila chalta rahega...... Vikram Jethi Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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20th October 2009, 03:57 AM
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Ye teeno sher bahut achy hai . Kuch ishq tera mere sar chad' bola Kuch vaado.n pe tere aitbaar tha Thukraata raha duniya ko mai.n Har aarzoo ko meri sirf tera intzaar tha Di hoti saza mujhe mere har jurm ki Mai.n to kab se hi khatawaar tha baki ke bas aise hi ki do l;ine jod di ho akele misre(line) ka matlab doosri se alag sa laga acha likhte ho keep writing |
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20th October 2009, 02:28 PM
Vikram Jii,,
Aik beautiful composition pesh karnay per dil se daad qabool kijiye,,,,,, Rep +++, Take care,, tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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20th October 2009, 02:49 PM
Vikram jee ,
is pareevar meiN har koi apne marzi se hi samil hota hai yeh mahfil hi aisa ki jo ek bar aagaya toh fir isika hoke rah jata hai gustakhi to humse hui jee aap itne din se pareevar mein ho magar humne swagat karne mein der kar diye ab to chhoti moti bate bazi nok jhok chalta rahega umiid hai aapki safar achhi rahegi Diya Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz. Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai Goodbye SDC Diya |
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Bahut Shukriya aapka...... |
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Bahut Shukriya aapka...... -
20th October 2009, 07:53 PM
[QUOTE=janumanu;370477]Ye teeno sher bahut achy hai .
Kuch ishq tera mere sar chad' bola Kuch vaado.n pe tere aitbaar tha Thukraata raha duniya ko mai.n Har aarzoo ko meri sirf tera intzaar tha Di hoti saza mujhe mere har jurm ki Mai.n to kab se hi khatawaar tha baki ke bas aise hi ki do l;ine jod di ho akele misre(line) ka matlab doosri se alag sa laga Janaab, Aapko meri koshish ka hissa pasand aaya, main aapka tahe dil se shukrguzaar Hu... Baaki to aap ki sohbat me jald seekh jaunga... Vikram Jethi acha l Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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Thanks a ton...... |
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Thanks a ton...... -
20th October 2009, 08:06 PM
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Aap jaise shayar ko agar meri ek pankti bhi bha jaaye to main Khud ko Kuch naseeb samjhta hu.... Jo teen sher aapko achhe lage uske liye Shukriya baaki aap ki sohbat meiN Kabhi na Kabhi to seekh hi jaunga.... Aap aise hi dil se apni rae dete rahiye aur mujhe yakeeN hai ki mujh jaisa tedhi medhi line likhne wala bhi Kuch seekh jayega.... Thanks a lot... Vikram Jethi Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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20th October 2009, 08:18 PM
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Aapki hausla afzai ka tahe dil se Shukriya kabool kare.n... Sach me aap jaise shayar se tareeff mili, soch kar achha lagta hai.... Reps ka bhi sukriya.... Khaaksaar, Vikram Jethi Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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20th October 2009, 08:35 PM
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Diya ji, Thanks a lot, Aapne jis tarah se baat kar apna hone ka ehsaas krvaya hai uska Shukriya, dil se achha laga Aapka aNdaaz.... Bilkul theek kaha hai aapne, aage to kai aisi mulaqateN hoNgi aur hm aapas me kisi cheez par sehamat ya asehamat honge.... Maza toh issi baat meiN aata hai, jee to koi bhi jaata hai.... Shukriya...... Vikram Jethi Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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21st October 2009, 02:01 PM
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dil se daad...kabul kare.. duaaon ke saath...  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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21st October 2009, 11:25 PM
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Naresh ji, Aapka bahut bahut dhayavaad Ke aapko meri yeh koshish kabile daad lagi... Mujhe ab afsos bhi hota hai ki main Pehle sdc meiN KyoN nahi aaya. Aap sabhi ka pyaar aur hausla mujh meiN zaroor ek achha badlaav layega... Pehle maine Kabhi kisi forum pe nahi likha issliye adab bhi Kuch kam hai mujhme lekin Pehle ki tarah ab main likh kar fadta nahi hu..... Aap agar Aise hi mera hausla buland karte rahe toh zaroor ek na ek din main Kuch achha likh jaunga...... Thanks Vikram Jethi Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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