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11th August 2007, 02:14 PM
Bazm-e-shayri ko manu kaa salaam.paish-e-khidmat hai ek taazaa nayi likhi ghazal , mujhe yakeen hai ki ghazal sab ko pasand aayegi kyun ki is men maine apne sab jazbat nichor kar rakh diye hai aur kaafi mehnat bhi ki hai, mai ummid kartaa hoon aap apne mashahvare se ise jaroor navaaziyega
To matlaa paish hai Gaur farmaayiyega
Kar sitam hamnashiin muskuraane lage
Un fizaaN ko gale ham lagaane lage
aur aage
Kuchh rahi hi nahi mujh ko meri khabar
Is kadar zehn men voh samaane lage
chaandani kyaa sanam hai tere saamne
Rukh ke aage tere sab fasaane lage
Kyaa pataa hai tumhe jehmateN ishq ki
Tum ko paane men ham ko zamaane lage
Kyaa ghazab ka nasha tha nazar men teri
Bin piye hi kadam ladkhadaane lage
Sab lutaa kar bhi ham mutma-iin* ho gaye
Ishq men haath kyaa kyaa khazaane lage
Beraham thi nahi itni dooriyaaN kabhi
Faasle bhi sazaa ab sunaane lage
Jab huii shaam un ka khayaal aa gaya
Lab mere Yeh ghazal gungunaane lage
Beasar bazm men thi kavish hi meri
Chhor kar bazm log laut jaane lage
Jab hame jakhm dil ke sataane lage
Ashk hii the vafaa jo nibhaane lage
*mutma-iin = Befikra
aap ki raay muntzir hoon
regards
manu
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11th August 2007, 05:24 PM
MANU BHAI KO MERA AADAB ....................janab bahut hi umda kalaam apne pesh kiya hai dili daad hazir hai kubool ho..................aap ka apna
"Do Pal Ruka Khushio.n ka Karwan"
Dunia ke sitam ki koi perwah nahi mujhko,
wo kyoun mujhpe ungliya uthaye ja rahe hain.
Jis shaks ko janta tha ek chehre se ''kashif''
Uske kitne chehre samne laye ja rahe hain.
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11th August 2007, 06:22 PM
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Bazm-e-shayri ko manu kaa salaam.paish-e-khidmat hai ek taazaa nayi likhi ghazal , mujhe yakeen hai ki ghazal sab ko pasand aayegi kyun ki is men maine apne sab jazbat nichor kar rakh diye hai aur kaafi mehnat bhi ki hai, mai ummid kartaa hoon aap apne mashahvare se ise jaroor navaaziyega
To matlaa paish hai Gaur farmaayiyega
Kar sitam hamnashiin muskuraane lage
Un fizaaN ko gale ham lagaane lage
aur aage
Kuchh rahi hi nahi mujh ko meri khabar
Is kadar zehn men voh samaane lage
chaandani kyaa sanam hai tere saamne
Rukh ke aage tere sab fasaane lage
Kyaa pataa hai tumhe jehmateN ishq ki
Tum ko paane men ham ko zamaane lage
Kyaa ghazab ka nasha tha nazar men teri
Bin piye hi kadam ladkhadaane lage
Sab lutaa kar bhi ham mutma-iin* ho gaye
Ishq men haath kyaa kyaa khazaane lage
Beraham thi nahi itni dooriyaaN kabhi
Faasle bhi sazaa ab sunaane lage
Jab huii shaam un ka khayaal aa gaya
Lab mere Yeh ghazal gungunaane lage
Beasar bazm men thi kavish hi meri
Chhor kar bazm log laut jaane lage
Jab hame jakhm dil ke sataane lage
Ashk hii the vafaa jo nibhaane lage
*mutma-iin = Befikra
aap ki raay muntzir hoon
regards
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manu ji bohat acha laga aapka kalaam parrh ker aur ye do ashaar bohat ache lagay yunhi likhte rahiye.....
Sab lutaa kar bhi ham mutma-iin* ho gaye
Ishq men haath kyaa kyaa khazaane lage
Beraham thi nahi itni dooriyaaN kabhi
Faasle bhi sazaa ab sunaane lage
Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin
ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin
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11th August 2007, 06:35 PM
wah Wah Wah
bahot Khoob
Kitne mare kitne aabhi rahoo.N me hai Kuch aa.Nsoo baki nigahoo.N me hai
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11th August 2007, 07:22 PM
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MANU BHAI KO MERA AADAB ....................janab bahut hi umda kalaam apne pesh kiya hai dili daad hazir hai kubool ho..................aap ka apna
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shukriyah kaashif sahab yuhi aate rahiyega
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11th August 2007, 10:28 PM
azeezaah manu bhaa'ii:
namskaaR...
aapka aNdaaz-e-bayaaN to be-Shak laa-jawaab hay huZuur.. kamaal ke aSh'aar ko liYe ess baar aap bazm meiN haaZir huye haiN.. aik dil-pazeer aur umdaah Ghazal aapki aor sey hum sab ko paRhne ko mili..har Sher Bahot hi Khuub rahe.. bas aap YuuNhii liKhate raheN hum aapko paRhte raheNge.. huZuur ess pur-aSar Ghazal par merii dilii daad-o-mubaarakbaad ko qabUl farmaaYeN...
apnaa Khayaal raKheN... KhuSh raheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat...Jsk
aapka
~ Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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12th August 2007, 01:11 AM
namaskar manu ji,
bahut acha janab, great rhythm and great use of beautiful word. it was a pleasant read. aap yuhin likte rahein.
aapka dost
manish
Life is filled with goodbyes, a million goodbyes, and it hurts every time....and every time my heart dies a little...
Darkness falls on me like rain... just one drop at a time....
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12th August 2007, 12:36 PM
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Bazm-e-shayri ko manu kaa salaam.paish-e-khidmat hai ek taazaa nayi likhi ghazal , mujhe yakeen hai ki ghazal sab ko pasand aayegi kyun ki is men maine apne sab jazbat nichor kar rakh diye hai aur kaafi mehnat bhi ki hai, mai ummid kartaa hoon aap apne mashahvare se ise jaroor navaaziyega
To matlaa paish hai Gaur farmaayiyega
Kar sitam hamnashiin muskuraane lage
Un fizaaN ko gale ham lagaane lage
aur aage
Kuchh rahi hi nahi mujh ko meri khabar
Is kadar zehn men voh samaane lage
chaandani kyaa sanam hai tere saamne
Rukh ke aage tere sab fasaane lage
Kyaa pataa hai tumhe jehmateN ishq ki
Tum ko paane men ham ko zamaane lage
Kyaa ghazab ka nasha tha nazar men teri
Bin piye hi kadam ladkhadaane lage
Sab lutaa kar bhi ham mutma-iin* ho gaye
Ishq men haath kyaa kyaa khazaane lage
Beraham thi nahi itni dooriyaaN kabhi
Faasle bhi sazaa ab sunaane lage
Jab huii shaam un ka khayaal aa gaya
Lab mere Yeh ghazal gungunaane lage
Beasar bazm men thi kavish hi meri
Chhor kar bazm log laut jaane lage
Jab hame jakhm dil ke sataane lage
Ashk hii the vafaa jo nibhaane lage
*mutma-iin = Befikra
aap ki raay muntzir hoon
regards
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Dear manu,
sab se pahle ek achchhi koShish par mubaarak baad deta huuN.. aap kii yeh Ghazal achchhee lagee.. ess liye mere jaaniib se mubaarak baad qubool keejiye... kuchh ek jagah jo GhaltiyaaN haiN un kii niShaandehii ho chuki hai ab agar aap us par dubaara mehnat kareNge to Ghazal nikhar jaayegii... yuuN hii likhate raheN..
Mayank
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13th August 2007, 12:18 PM
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MANU BHAI KO MERA AADAB ....................janab bahut hi umda kalaam apne pesh kiya hai dili daad hazir hai kubool ho..................aap ka apna
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kaashif ji shukriyaah aap ka housala-afsai ke liye
yunhi aate rahiyega janaab
apna khayaal rakhiyegaa
ALLAH-HAAFIS
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manu
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13th August 2007, 12:33 PM
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azeezaah manu bhaa'ii:
namskaaR...
aapka aNdaaz-e-bayaaN to be-Shak laa-jawaab hay huZuur.. kamaal ke aSh'aar ko liYe ess baar aap bazm meiN haaZir huye haiN.. aik dil-pazeer aur umdaah Ghazal aapki aor sey hum sab ko paRhne ko mili..har Sher Bahot hi Khuub rahe.. bas aap YuuNhii liKhate raheN hum aapko paRhte raheNge.. huZuur ess pur-aSar Ghazal par merii dilii daad-o-mubaarakbaad ko qabUl farmaaYeN...
apnaa Khayaal raKheN... KhuSh raheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat...Jsk
aapka
~ Dhaval
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Dhaval taaro khoob khoob aabhaar amaa thri bhoolo chhe te sudhaaree ne fari ahin muku chhu
Jab hame Zakhm dil ke sataane lage
Ashk hii the vafaa jo nibhaane lage
Kuchh rahi hi nahi mujh ko apni khabar
Is qadar zehn men voh samaane lage
chaandanii eik hi kyaa hai mere sanam
sab tere rukh ke aage fasaane lage
Kyaa pataa hai tumheN zehmateN ishq ki
Tum ko paane men ham ko zamaane lage
Kyaa ghazab ka nasha tha nazar men tiree
Bin piye hi qadam ladkhadaane lage
Sab lutaa kar bhi ham mutma,in* ho gaye
Ishq men haath kyaa kyaa khazaane lage
itni berehm to thii na doorii kabhii
Faasile bhi sazaa ab sunaane lage
Jab huii shaam un ka khayaal aa gaya
Lab mere Yeh ghazal gungunaane lage
Beasar bazm men thi ghazal hi meri
Chhod kar bazm hii log jaane lage
Julm kar ke sanam muskurane lage
voh bahaareN gale ham lagaane lag
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14th August 2007, 08:47 AM
Bahut khoon Acharya G
Achha laga apko padh kar
Badnaseeb bhi nahi par mera naseeb bhi nahi Maana ke main ameer nahi par gareeb bhi nahi Dil ki gehraaiyon mein chhipaya hai jise Woh door bhi nahi mujhse par kareeb bhi nahi Chahta to hoon dena usko khushiyan saare jahan ki par mil jaayein unke gham "Jasdeep" itna khushnaseeb bhi nahi
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14th August 2007, 10:32 AM
manu ji namaskaar
bahut khoob likha hai aapne....accha laga aapko padna....yu hi likhtey rahiye aur humey padne ka mokka detey rahiye.
god bless u
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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15th August 2007, 04:58 PM
Kyaa ghazab ka nasha tha nazar men teri
Bin piye hi kadam ladkhadaane lage
Sab lutaa kar bhi ham mutma-iin* ho gaye
Ishq men haath kyaa kyaa khazaane lage
adab manu ji..bahut zabardast likha aapne..bahut acha laga padhker..yeh ashar bahut pasand aye.likhte rahen yunhin
yun bin bulaaye milne chala aata hai,
gham ko mujh se yeh unsiyat kaisi??
--akelijaan--
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18th August 2007, 10:47 AM
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manu ji bohat acha laga aapka kalaam parrh ker aur ye do ashaar bohat ache lagay yunhi likhte rahiye.....
Sab lutaa kar bhi ham mutma-iin* ho gaye
Ishq men haath kyaa kyaa khazaane lage
Beraham thi nahi itni dooriyaaN kabhi
Faasle bhi sazaa ab sunaane lage
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koi to ho ji aap ka bhi tah-e-dil se shukrguaajr hoon hosla afsaai ke liye.
yunhi aate rahiyega janaab
regards
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18th August 2007, 07:21 PM
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wah Wah Wah
bahot Khoob
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nihar ji aap ka bahut bahut shukriya hosla-afsaai ke liye
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19th August 2007, 12:41 PM
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namaskar manu ji,
bahut acha janab, great rhythm and great use of beautiful word. it was a pleasant read. aap yuhin likte rahein.
aapka dost
manish
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musafir ek pal Urf manish ji aap ka bahut bahut shukriyaa mujhe jaan kar khishi hui ki aap ka naam bhi manish hai, meraa naam bhi manish hai log pyar se mujhe aur mai bhi apne aap ko pyar se manu kehtaa hoon.
khush rahe aur yuni aate rahioyega janaab
regards
manu urf manish
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19th August 2007, 05:20 PM
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Bazm-e-shayri ko manu kaa salaam.paish-e-khidmat hai ek taazaa nayi likhi ghazal , mujhe yakeen hai ki ghazal sab ko pasand aayegi kyun ki is men maine apne sab jazbat nichor kar rakh diye hai aur kaafi mehnat bhi ki hai, mai ummid kartaa hoon aap apne mashahvare se ise jaroor navaaziyega
To matlaa paish hai Gaur farmaayiyega
Kar sitam hamnashiin muskuraane lage
Un fizaaN ko gale ham lagaane lage
aur aage
Kuchh rahi hi nahi mujh ko meri khabar
Is kadar zehn men voh samaane lage
chaandani kyaa sanam hai tere saamne
Rukh ke aage tere sab fasaane lage
Kyaa pataa hai tumhe jehmateN ishq ki
Tum ko paane men ham ko zamaane lage
Kyaa ghazab ka nasha tha nazar men teri
Bin piye hi kadam ladkhadaane lage
Sab lutaa kar bhi ham mutma-iin* ho gaye
Ishq men haath kyaa kyaa khazaane lage
Beraham thi nahi itni dooriyaaN kabhi
Faasle bhi sazaa ab sunaane lage
Jab huii shaam un ka khayaal aa gaya
Lab mere Yeh ghazal gungunaane lage
Beasar bazm men thi kavish hi meri
Chhor kar bazm log laut jaane lage
Jab hame jakhm dil ke sataane lage
Ashk hii the vafaa jo nibhaane lage
*mutma-iin = Befikra
aap ki raay muntzir hoon
regards
manu
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Sach, Hame ye bahot pasand aaya!
Reshma,
Dunya ke sitam ka koi hisaab nahi, Lekin meri houslo ka bhi jawaab nahi...
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20th August 2007, 04:09 PM
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Bazm-e-shayri ko manu kaa salaam.paish-e-khidmat hai ek taazaa nayi likhi ghazal , mujhe yakeen hai ki ghazal sab ko pasand aayegi kyun ki is men maine apne sab jazbat nichor kar rakh diye hai aur kaafi mehnat bhi ki hai, mai ummid kartaa hoon aap apne mashahvare se ise jaroor navaaziyega
To matlaa paish hai Gaur farmaayiyega
Kar sitam hamnashiin muskuraane lage
Un fizaaN ko gale ham lagaane lage
aur aage
Kuchh rahi hi nahi mujh ko meri khabar
Is kadar zehn men voh samaane lage
chaandani kyaa sanam hai tere saamne
Rukh ke aage tere sab fasaane lage
Kyaa pataa hai tumhe jehmateN ishq ki
Tum ko paane men ham ko zamaane lage
Kyaa ghazab ka nasha tha nazar men teri
Bin piye hi kadam ladkhadaane lage
Sab lutaa kar bhi ham mutma-iin* ho gaye
Ishq men haath kyaa kyaa khazaane lage
Beraham thi nahi itni dooriyaaN kabhi
Faasle bhi sazaa ab sunaane lage
Jab huii shaam un ka khayaal aa gaya
Lab mere Yeh ghazal gungunaane lage
Beasar bazm men thi kavish hi meri
Chhor kar bazm log laut jaane lage
Jab hame jakhm dil ke sataane lage
Ashk hii the vafaa jo nibhaane lage
*mutma-iin = Befikra
aap ki raay muntzir hoon
regards
manu
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manu bhai ko raj ka namaskaar........janaab itnii puari gazal par meri daad kabool kare......sach mein aap bhut acha likhte ho............ daad kabool karna......raj.......
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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21st August 2007, 01:38 AM
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Dear manu,
sab se pahle ek achchhi koShish par mubaarak baad deta huuN.. aap kii yeh Ghazal achchhee lagee.. ess liye mere jaaniib se mubaarak baad qubool keejiye... kuchh ek jagah jo GhaltiyaaN haiN un kii niShaandehii ho chuki hai ab agar aap us par dubaara mehnat kareNge to Ghazal nikhar jaayegii... yuuN hii likhate raheN..
Mayank
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sukriyaaH mayank janab aap aaye bahaar aayi,
yunhi aate rahiyegaa
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manu
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Bahut khoon Acharya G
Achha laga apko padh kar
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jasdeep ji behad shukriyaah aap ja is hoasla -afsaai ke liye
yunhi aate rahiyega janaab ham jaise dosto ki mehfil men
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21st August 2007, 09:25 PM
hazrat e Khumar Barabanqvi saHeb ki zamiinoN se milti kulti zameenoN par likhii in dinoN ye tisrii gazal mere saamne hai !!
bahut achchhe se mehnat ki hai Acharya saHeb ... merii daad qabool kijiyegaa!
ye kuch sher hai jo meraa dhyaan zyaadaa khnch te hai!
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chaandani kyaa sanam hai tere saamne
Rukh ke aage tere sab fasaane lage
is sher ko fir se dekh lijiyegaa!!
Kyaa pataa hai tumhe jehmateN ishq ki
Tum ko paane men ham ko zamaane lage
bahut khoob !!
Sab lutaa kar bhi ham mutma-iin* ho gaye
Ishq men haath kyaa kyaa khazaane lage
ye bhii bahut achchhaa sher hai!
Beasar bazm men thi kavish hi meri
Chhor kar bazm log laut jaane lage
ye sher bhii sudhaar ki gunjaayish rakhtaa hai!
Jab hame jakhm dil ke sataane lage
Ashk hii the vafaa jo nibhaane lage
yahaaN dono misroN me.n rab't banaane ki zarurat hai!! dekhiyegaa!
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kul milaa kar yahii kahungaa ki bahut achchhii gazal! kisii kii zamiin pe gazal kahne me zyaada tar ye hotaa hai ki mauroof ki gazal ko saamne rakh kar padhne kii fitrat hotii hai!
agar ham apne hisaab se dekhe to bahut hii achchaa kalaam!!! likhte rahiyegaa!!
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22nd August 2007, 08:51 PM
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Bazm-e-shayri ko manu kaa salaam.paish-e-khidmat hai ek taazaa nayi likhi ghazal , mujhe yakeen hai ki ghazal sab ko pasand aayegi kyun ki is men maine apne sab jazbat nichor kar rakh diye hai aur kaafi mehnat bhi ki hai, mai ummid kartaa hoon aap apne mashahvare se ise jaroor navaaziyega
To matlaa paish hai Gaur farmaayiyega
Kar sitam hamnashiin muskuraane lage
Un fizaaN ko gale ham lagaane lage
aur aage
Kuchh rahi hi nahi mujh ko meri khabar
Is kadar zehn men voh samaane lage
chaandani kyaa sanam hai tere saamne
Rukh ke aage tere sab fasaane lage
Kyaa pataa hai tumhe jehmateN ishq ki
Tum ko paane men ham ko zamaane lage
Kyaa ghazab ka nasha tha nazar men teri
Bin piye hi kadam ladkhadaane lage
Sab lutaa kar bhi ham mutma-iin* ho gaye
Ishq men haath kyaa kyaa khazaane lage
Beraham thi nahi itni dooriyaaN kabhi
Faasle bhi sazaa ab sunaane lage
Jab huii shaam un ka khayaal aa gaya
Lab mere Yeh ghazal gungunaane lage
Beasar bazm men thi kavish hi meri
Chhor kar bazm log laut jaane lage
Jab hame jakhm dil ke sataane lage
Ashk hii the vafaa jo nibhaane lage
*mutma-iin = Befikra
aap ki raay muntzir hoon
regards
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hey MANU,
bahut hi khubsoorat ehsaas hai apke.........i m glad ki maine aap ki ye gazal padhi.....warna bahut hi pyari gazal miss kar jati.............har ek lafz dil ko chu gaya.......infact maine ise baar baar padha........par padhne se dil nahi bhara..............gr8 job................
keep it up............take care.................
aap ki dost,
LAMHA..............
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23rd August 2007, 10:03 AM
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Bahut khoon Acharya G
Achha laga apko padh kar
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jasdeep jee aap ka behad shukriyaah jo aap ne apna keemati vaqt de kar is naacheez ke kalam ko padhaa aur pasand kiyaa, aage bhi ummid hai aap yunhi saath dete rahenge
aate rahiyega janab
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24th August 2007, 12:32 PM
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manu ji namaskaar
bahut khoob likha hai aapne....accha laga aapko padna....yu hi likhtey rahiye aur humey padne ka mokka detey rahiye.
god bless u
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Sunitaa ji bahut bahut shukriyaah mujhe padhane aur sarahnae ke liye aap bhi kuchh kam achha nahi likahte aap ko apni post par dekh achha laga.
yunhi aate rahiyega mahotarma
regards
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25th August 2007, 11:42 PM
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Bazm-e-shayri ko manu kaa salaam.paish-e-khidmat hai ek taazaa nayi likhi ghazal , mujhe yakeen hai ki ghazal sab ko pasand aayegi kyun ki is men maine apne sab jazbat nichor kar rakh diye hai aur kaafi mehnat bhi ki hai, mai ummid kartaa hoon aap apne mashahvare se ise jaroor navaaziyega
To matlaa paish hai Gaur farmaayiyega
Kar sitam hamnashiin muskuraane lage
Un fizaaN ko gale ham lagaane lage
aur aage
Kuchh rahi hi nahi mujh ko meri khabar
Is kadar zehn men voh samaane lage
chaandani kyaa sanam hai tere saamne
Rukh ke aage tere sab fasaane lage
Kyaa pataa hai tumhe jehmateN ishq ki
Tum ko paane men ham ko zamaane lage
Kyaa ghazab ka nasha tha nazar men teri
Bin piye hi kadam ladkhadaane lage
Sab lutaa kar bhi ham mutma-iin* ho gaye
Ishq men haath kyaa kyaa khazaane lage
Beraham thi nahi itni dooriyaaN kabhi
Faasle bhi sazaa ab sunaane lage
Jab huii shaam un ka khayaal aa gaya
Lab mere Yeh ghazal gungunaane lage
Beasar bazm men thi kavish hi meri
Chhor kar bazm log laut jaane lage
Jab hame jakhm dil ke sataane lage
Ashk hii the vafaa jo nibhaane lage
*mutma-iin = Befikra
aap ki raay muntzir hoon
regards
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waah waah manubhaiyaa kamaal ka likhaa hai,aap ko mahino baad padha mazaa aa gaya, kya chal raha hai life men, aap ko padhaayi kaisi chal rahi hai?
ham aap ko office men miss karte hai. aap ka nayaa number ho to bataana
apna khayaal rakhna
anu
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27th August 2007, 12:57 PM
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Kyaa ghazab ka nasha tha nazar men teri
Bin piye hi kadam ladkhadaane lage
Sab lutaa kar bhi ham mutma-iin* ho gaye
Ishq men haath kyaa kyaa khazaane lage
adab manu ji..bahut zabardast likha aapne..bahut acha laga padhker..yeh ashar bahut pasand aye.likhte rahen yunhin
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akeli jaan aap ka bahut bahut shukriyaah mujhe padhane ke liye aur sraahnae ke liye aap ko jo sher pasand aaye voh mere bhi khaas hai, haqmaree soch shaayad kuchh had tak miltee hai yunhii aage bhi saath dete rahenge yeh aap se ummid kartaa hoon
aate rahiyega mahotarmaa
regards
manu
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28th August 2007, 09:30 PM
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Sach, Hame ye bahot pasand aaya!
Reshma,
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Thanx Reshma ji aap jaise dost hai hosala dene ke liye tabhi to ham jaise zindagi se haare log kuchh likh paate hai, aap ko mera kalaam achha laga yeh jaan kar mujhe khushi hui, aage bhi yunhi aate rahiyega,aur apna khayaal rakhiyega.
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29th August 2007, 09:50 AM
Aadab Manu bhaaii
kese hai aap?
Manu bhai bahut hi behtareen rachna ko rubaru karwaya hai aaj aapne, bas padhne mein thodi der ho gayi.
dil se nikle ehsaason pe daad hazir hai, har alfaaz mein dard nazar aa raha tha,
Jab huii shaam un ka khayaal aa gaya
Lab mere Yeh ghazal gungunaane lage
Jab hame jakhm dil ke sataane lage
Ashk hii the vafaa jo nibhaane lage
yuhi sath dete rahiyega
aapka dost
Merul
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!
Dhoka diya tha jab tumne mujhe,
Tab dil se me naraz tha,
Phir socha ki dil se tumhe nikal du,
Magar woh kambakth dil bhi tumhare paas tha.
Merul~~~~~~~~~~>
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31st August 2007, 09:52 AM
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manu bhai ko raj ka namaskaar........janaab itnii puari gazal par meri daad kabool kare......sach mein aap bhut acha likhte ho............ daad kabool karna......raj.......
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hello rajveer ji
kaise hai aap? aap ne kahaa Mai bahut achha likhtaa hoon, magar mai yeh manat hoon ki aap mijh se bhi be-had achha likhte hai, ye to aap ka badappan hai jo aap mujhe padhate hai aap ka bahut bahut shukriyaa mujhe padhane ke liye aur hosala dene ke liye.
yunhii aate rahiyega
regards
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4th September 2007, 07:44 PM
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manu bhai ko raj ka namaskaar........janaab itnii puari gazal par meri daad kabool kare......sach mein aap bhut acha likhte ho............ daad kabool karna......raj.......
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raajverr ji namshakaar
aap ka shukriyaa
regards
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4th September 2007, 08:07 PM
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Kar sitam hamnashiin muskuraane lage
Un fizaaN ko gale ham lagaane lage
aur aage
Kuchh rahi hi nahi mujh ko meri khabar
Is kadar zehn men voh samaane lage
chaandani kyaa sanam hai tere saamne
Rukh ke aage tere sab fasaane lage
Kyaa pataa hai tumhe jehmateN ishq ki
Tum ko paane men ham ko zamaane lage
Kyaa ghazab ka nasha tha nazar men teri
Bin piye hi kadam ladkhadaane lage
Sab lutaa kar bhi ham mutma-iin* ho gaye
Ishq men haath kyaa kyaa khazaane lage
Beraham thi nahi itni dooriyaaN kabhi
Faasle bhi sazaa ab sunaane lage
Jab huii shaam un ka khayaal aa gaya
Lab mere Yeh ghazal gungunaane lage
Beasar bazm men thi kavish hi meri
Chhor kar bazm log laut jaane lage
Jab hame jakhm dil ke sataane lage
Ashk hii the vafaa jo nibhaane lage
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Manu Ji,
Bahut hi umda gazal liki hai aapne. Is gazal mein dard saaf jhalakta hai. waise to main bahut zyada posts par reply nahin karta par isse padhkar laga ki reply na karna nainsaafi hogi isliye ye a;faaz likhe.
Dil se Daad Haazir hai..
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7th September 2007, 06:54 AM
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Bazm-e-shayri ko manu kaa salaam.paish-e-khidmat hai ek taazaa nayi likhi ghazal , mujhe yakeen hai ki ghazal sab ko pasand aayegi kyun ki is men maine apne sab jazbat nichor kar rakh diye hai aur kaafi mehnat bhi ki hai, mai ummid kartaa hoon aap apne mashahvare se ise jaroor navaaziyega
To matlaa paish hai Gaur farmaayiyega
Kar sitam hamnashiin muskuraane lage
Un fizaaN ko gale ham lagaane lage
aur aage
Kuchh rahi hi nahi mujh ko meri khabar
Is kadar zehn men voh samaane lage
chaandani kyaa sanam hai tere saamne
Rukh ke aage tere sab fasaane lage
Kyaa pataa hai tumhe jehmateN ishq ki
Tum ko paane men ham ko zamaane lage
Kyaa ghazab ka nasha tha nazar men teri
Bin piye hi kadam ladkhadaane lage
Sab lutaa kar bhi ham mutma-iin* ho gaye
Ishq men haath kyaa kyaa khazaane lage
Beraham thi nahi itni dooriyaaN kabhi
Faasle bhi sazaa ab sunaane lage
Jab huii shaam un ka khayaal aa gaya
Lab mere Yeh ghazal gungunaane lage
Beasar bazm men thi kavish hi meri
Chhor kar bazm log laut jaane lage
Jab hame jakhm dil ke sataane lage
Ashk hii the vafaa jo nibhaane lage
*mutma-iin = Befikra
aap ki raay muntzir hoon
regards
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Jay Ambe,
Namaste Manu Ji, Tame bahuj saras lakhyu chhe ...pyaar na hasi-khushi ane dukh-dard na pahelu ne tame khoob saari rite pesh karyu chhe. its just too good .... yunhi likhate rahiyega....apanaa khayaal rakhiyega
Bhagwaan ji aapko hammesha khush rakhe,
Aapki Dost: Gudia
Jay Ambe.
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Puri Hoke Bhi Jo Puri Na Ho Hoon Zindagi Ki Wo Ankahi Kahaani......
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Ek Aaina Jiski Tasveer Dhundhla Gai,
Ek Dil Jiski Dhadkan Ruksi Gai,
Ek Zindagi Jiski Manzil Ka Koi Pata Hi Nahi,
Ek Daaman Jahaan Se Khushiyaan Galti Se Bhi Guzarti Nahi.
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8th September 2007, 10:49 AM
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hazrat e Khumar Barabanqvi saHeb ki zamiinoN se milti kulti zameenoN par likhii in dinoN ye tisrii gazal mere saamne hai !!
bahut achchhe se mehnat ki hai Acharya saHeb ... merii daad qabool kijiyegaa!
ye kuch sher hai jo meraa dhyaan zyaadaa khnch te hai!
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chaandani kyaa sanam hai tere saamne
Rukh ke aage tere sab fasaane lage
is sher ko fir se dekh lijiyegaa!!
Kyaa pataa hai tumhe jehmateN ishq ki
Tum ko paane men ham ko zamaane lage
bahut khoob !!
Sab lutaa kar bhi ham mutma-iin* ho gaye
Ishq men haath kyaa kyaa khazaane lage
ye bhii bahut achchhaa sher hai!
Beasar bazm men thi kavish hi meri
Chhor kar bazm log laut jaane lage
ye sher bhii sudhaar ki gunjaayish rakhtaa hai!
Jab hame jakhm dil ke sataane lage
Ashk hii the vafaa jo nibhaane lage
yahaaN dono misroN me.n rab't banaane ki zarurat hai!! dekhiyegaa!
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kul milaa kar yahii kahungaa ki bahut achchhii gazal! kisii kii zamiin pe gazal kahne me zyaada tar ye hotaa hai ki mauroof ki gazal ko saamne rakh kar padhne kii fitrat hotii hai!
agar ham apne hisaab se dekhe to bahut hii achchaa kalaam!!! likhte rahiyegaa!!
mukhlis
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dheer ji aap ka tah-e-dil se mamnoon hoon ki yeh ghazal ko aap ne padha aur pasnad kiyaa, magar aap ko bataana chahta hoon ki maine hazrat e Khumar Barabanqvi saHeb kii koi ghazal aaj tak padhii nahii hai, isi liye mujhe yeh maaloom nahi ki yeh ghazal uski zameen men hai ki nahee mujhe bas itne maaloom hai ki yrh ghazal ke khayaalaat mere dimaag men aaye to maine use behr mai dhalane ki koshish ki to yeh behr (212-212-212-212) huii yaani " "behr-e-mutdaarik musamman saalim" phir jaise khayaal aate gaye main unhe isi traha behr men dhalata gaya aur yrh ghazal ban gayi. Men akshar yahi kartaa hoon jo khayaal dimaag men aate hai vo dekhtaa hoon ki kaun see behr man hai yaa kaun see behr ke nazdeek hai phe use likhane ki koshish kartaa hon usi behr men.bas mujhe thori roman men problem ho rahi hai, kyun ki roman meri kamzor hai,aap agar us par kuchh mashahvara de to mere ilm men izaafaa hoga.
aap aaye bahut hee achaa lagaa, aage bhi aise sath dete rahiyegaa,
regards
manu
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8th September 2007, 03:07 PM
Kyaa ghazab ka nasha tha nazar men teri
Bin piye hi kadam ladkhadaane lage
Sab lutaa kar bhi ham mutma-iin* ho gaye
Ishq men haath kyaa kyaa khazaane lage
Dear Manu,
Bahut hi badhiya ghazal likhi hai tumne... bahut hi accha laga padhkar... khaaskar yeh oopar highlight kiye aashaar mujhe bahut pasand aaye... daad kubool karna aur likhte rehna dost...
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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8th September 2007, 11:12 PM
Meri ghazal aap ko itnee pasand aayi ye jaan kar bahut khushi hui,
lamhaa aap aayi to bahut achha lagaa,yunhee aate raho
regards
manu
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14th September 2007, 12:52 PM
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waah waah manubhaiyaa kamaal ka likhaa hai,aap ko mahino baad padha mazaa aa gaya, kya chal raha hai life men, aap ko padhaayi kaisi chal rahi hai?
ham aap ko office men miss karte hai. aap ka nayaa number ho to bataana
apna khayaal rakhna
anu
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thanx anu for coming to my post.
regards
manu
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14th September 2007, 01:10 PM
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Bazm-e-shayri ko manu kaa salaam.paish-e-khidmat hai ek taazaa nayi likhi ghazal , mujhe yakeen hai ki ghazal sab ko pasand aayegi kyun ki is men maine apne sab jazbat nichor kar rakh diye hai aur kaafi mehnat bhi ki hai, mai ummid kartaa hoon aap apne mashahvare se ise jaroor navaaziyega
To matlaa paish hai Gaur farmaayiyega
Kar sitam hamnashiin muskuraane lage
Un fizaaN ko gale ham lagaane lage
aur aage
Kuchh rahi hi nahi mujh ko meri khabar
Is kadar zehn men voh samaane lage
chaandani kyaa sanam hai tere saamne
Rukh ke aage tere sab fasaane lage
Kyaa pataa hai tumhe jehmateN ishq ki
Tum ko paane men ham ko zamaane lage
Kyaa ghazab ka nasha tha nazar men teri
Bin piye hi kadam ladkhadaane lage
Sab lutaa kar bhi ham mutma-iin* ho gaye
Ishq men haath kyaa kyaa khazaane lage
Beraham thi nahi itni dooriyaaN kabhi
Faasle bhi sazaa ab sunaane lage
Jab huii shaam un ka khayaal aa gaya
Lab mere Yeh ghazal gungunaane lage
Beasar bazm men thi kavish hi meri
Chhor kar bazm log laut jaane lage
Jab hame jakhm dil ke sataane lage
Ashk hii the vafaa jo nibhaane lage
*mutma-iin = Befikra
aap ki raay muntzir hoon
regards
manu
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hello hai ji
ab kya kahoon mujhe to tareef karni aati nahi.... oe upper se yeh urdu ke word jo sir ko paar kar jaate hai... per dil se kehti hoon ik ik shabd accha laga
der se reply kar rahi hu wajah pehle thread dekha hi nahi tha.. ana jo nahi hota yahan per...
Jab hame jakhm dil ke sataane lage
Ashk hii the vafaa jo nibhaane lage
yeh sher mujhe bahut bahut bahut bahut bahut bahut bahut bahut bahut
pasand aaya... aansoon hi to saath nibhate hai dard mein.... baki sab bhaag jaate hai... koi saath nahi deta
aap yun hin likhte rahiye
tc ji
SHWETA
jab yaad karte hai kisi ko
wo waqt suhana hota hai
uth jati hai kalam likhne ko
wo pyar deewana hota hai
kar deti hai haal-e-dil bayaan
wo kalaam shayraana hota hai
jab yaad karte hai kisi ko
wo waqt suhana hota hai...
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duniya mein kitna gam hai
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15th September 2007, 01:48 AM
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Aadab Manu bhaaii
kese hai aap?
Manu bhai bahut hi behtareen rachna ko rubaru karwaya hai aaj aapne, bas padhne mein thodi der ho gayi.
dil se nikle ehsaason pe daad hazir hai, har alfaaz mein dard nazar aa raha tha,
Jab huii shaam un ka khayaal aa gaya
Lab mere Yeh ghazal gungunaane lage
Jab hame jakhm dil ke sataane lage
Ashk hii the vafaa jo nibhaane lage
yuhi sath dete rahiyega
aapka dost
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hi merul tu kem chhe? shu chaale che surat ma aajkaal.
mari ghazal ne vaanchava ane pasand karvaa badal taaro khoob khoob abhaar
aamaj aavato rehje dost,ane taari kavitaa pan mast chhe,mai vaanchi mane bahu gami.
regards
manu
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16th September 2007, 12:50 AM
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Bazm-e-shayri ko manu kaa salaam.paish-e-khidmat hai ek taazaa nayi likhi ghazal , mujhe yakeen hai ki ghazal sab ko pasand aayegi kyun ki is men maine apne sab jazbat nichor kar rakh diye hai aur kaafi mehnat bhi ki hai, mai ummid kartaa hoon aap apne mashahvare se ise jaroor navaaziyega
To matlaa paish hai Gaur farmaayiyega
Kar sitam hamnashiin muskuraane lage
Un fizaaN ko gale ham lagaane lage
aur aage
Kuchh rahi hi nahi mujh ko meri khabar
Is kadar zehn men voh samaane lage
chaandani kyaa sanam hai tere saamne
Rukh ke aage tere sab fasaane lage
Kyaa pataa hai tumhe jehmateN ishq ki
Tum ko paane men ham ko zamaane lage
Kyaa ghazab ka nasha tha nazar men teri
Bin piye hi kadam ladkhadaane lage
Sab lutaa kar bhi ham mutma-iin* ho gaye
Ishq men haath kyaa kyaa khazaane lage
Beraham thi nahi itni dooriyaaN kabhi
Faasle bhi sazaa ab sunaane lage
Jab huii shaam un ka khayaal aa gaya
Lab mere Yeh ghazal gungunaane lage
Beasar bazm men thi kavish hi meri
Chhor kar bazm log laut jaane lage
Jab hame jakhm dil ke sataane lage
Ashk hii the vafaa jo nibhaane lage
*mutma-iin = Befikra
aap ki raay muntzir hoon
regards
manu
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Waah, Manu Ji...! BaDiyaa kalaam likha hai aapne...! Isse
parhkar to dil ko bahut sukoon milaa...!
5th sher ka to hum diwaana ho gaye...!
Yunhi likhte rahein, theek hai...?
Duaaon ke saath
Jeene ke liye mujhe ek sapna dedo
Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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19th September 2007, 11:00 PM
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Manu Ji,
Bahut hi umda gazal liki hai aapne. Is gazal mein dard saaf jhalakta hai. waise to main bahut zyada posts par reply nahin karta par isse padhkar laga ki reply na karna nainsaafi hogi isliye ye a;faaz likhe.
Dil se Daad Haazir hai..
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amit ji kaise hai aap, aap ka tah-e-dil se shukraguaar hoon jo aap ne vaqt nikaal kar mujhe padhaa kyunki mujhe pata hai jo marketing ya marketing reserch ki line men hote hai un ke liye vaqt nikaalana bahut hee mushkil baat hoti hai.aap ne meri ghazal par apne raay ke kuchh alphaaz rakh kar usko kuchhh insaaf diyaa .izzat di us ke liye aap ka shukriyaah. mai aage bhi koshish karoonga ki aap ki ummido par khara utar sakoo, yunhee ate rehna dost.aur han tum bhi achha likhate ho apni kavitaayen laate rehna
regards
manu
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