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Post Kaise?? - 18th May 2004, 02:11 PM

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DhaDkan kaise sunaauN tujhe?
Dil ka haal bataaun tujhe?

Ek baar dekh le muD kar tu,
MinnatoN se bulaauN tujhe.

PaR le tu zubaan ashkoN ki,
Kaise main manaauN tujhe?

Dil me bas ulfat hai teri,
Kaise yakeen dilaauN tujhe?

Pyaar se baRi daulat na koi,
Baat ye kaise samjhaauN tujhe?

Tere bin jeena hai mushkil,
Mar kar kya dikhlaauN tujhe??
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Re: Kaise?? - 18th May 2004, 02:52 PM

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DhaDkan kaise sunaauN tujhe?
Dil ka haal bataaun tujhe?

Ek baar dekh le muD kar tu,
MinnatoN se bulaauN tujhe.

PaR le tu zubaan ashkoN ki,
Kaise main manaauN tujhe?

Dil me bas ulfat hai teri,
Kaise yakeen dilaauN tujhe?

Pyaar se baRi daulat na koi,
Baat ye kaise samjhaauN tujhe?

Tere bin jeena hai mushkil,
Mar kar kya dikhlaauN tujhe??
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Dear Afshan Jee, Dilki dhadkan sunai deti hogi zaroor baas thodi si der hi sahi? Aur haan, sunkar bhi nahin sunte hai aise bhi hai Insaan...keya kijiyega? Bohot khub haal-e-dil bayan kiya hai, in a very simple words but at the same time really so touching.......ek gana: Kaise kahun ke tum mere keya ho*Jaane yeh baas mera dil*Padbat Ghata se kehta hai keya Amber ko Dharti ne di keya Sada...Khamoshion ki haar dastan meri nazar se poochon zara Alfaz milna hai mushkil Keise kahun ke tum mere keya ho....... Ek aur baas: Keise mukhde se nazre haataoon ke tujh mein hai Rab dikhta*Rab dikhta dikhta dikhta*tujhe dekhna meri Pooja hai tu hi tu hai aur na douja hai Nahin tere nazaron se jii bharta rahen samne tu yehi Jii karta.......(yeh gana hai lekin mujhe bohot bohot achha lagta hai) Hosake tou suniyega zaroor...Yunhi likhte rahiyega. Koi aisi line nahin mili jo dilko na chhoo gaayi ho.......
Dilki gehraion se nikli daad qabul kijiyega. Khush rahiye yeh Duwaon ke sath izazat chahungi. Take care. God bless you. Allah Hafiz.

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18th May 2004, 02:56 PM

Shimul ji..

Waqt ek aisi shay hi na jaane kab haath se nikal jaata hai.. kisi ki nazron ko paRne me zyada der na ho jaaye.. Aapke dono naghme bohat pasand aaye.. infact aapka har geet achha lagta hai.. yunhi gungunaate rahiye, aur huasla baRaate rahiye.. Shukria! And take care..


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18th May 2004, 03:19 PM

Wassalam,
Jee aap sahi kehte ho...kahin der na ho jaaye...lekin kisi ko yaakin dilana bhi tou kitni muskil, hai na? Dilki Zuban koi samajh tou lete hai lekin hadhka pata sab keya mehsoos kar paate hai? Nahin na...aur yehi tou rona hai, keya kare...aisa na ho ke tu aaye aur main na rahun....... yeh bhi hosakta hai, hai na? Ek qawali hai: Chahaton ki Duniya mein dekh aisa hota hai ek pal jo hashta hai baar baar rota hai...Kuch nahin karsakte hai hum...majbur hai baas...anyway...shukriya aapka jo aapne waqt nikala aur mujhe reply ki. Khush rahiye yeh Duwaon ke sath izazat chahungi. Take care. God bless you.
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hi - 18th May 2004, 10:10 PM

banno...
kasi ho?
aaj kal tumhara likha parh kar khushi hoti hay..
likhti raho..
apna khiyal rakhna...


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18th May 2004, 11:24 PM

Tere bin jeena hai mushkil,
Mar kar kya dikhlaauN tujhe??


Kya baat hai mohtarma marne ki baateiN kar rahi hai aap.. khairiyat to hai...? maut lafz se kuch ashaar pesh-e-nazar karta hoon..

ishq ne dil me.n jagaa kii to qazaa bhii aa_ii
dard duniyaa me.n jab aayaa to davaa bhii aa_ii

lo! masihaa ne bhii, allaah ne bhii yaad kiyaa
aaj biimaar ko hichakii bhii, qazaa bhii aa_ii

dekh ye jaadaa-e-hastii hai, sambhal kar "Fani"
piichhe piichhe vo dabe paao.N qazaa bhii aa_ii

Badayuni sahaab ka kalaam hai...ummeed hai aap ko pasand aayaa hoga ... aur aap ka likha beshak hame pasand aaya hai.. likhte rahiye....


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19th May 2004, 11:25 AM

Shimul ji,

LOL.. Mohabbat ki shiddat, ehsaas ki gehraii, chaahat ki hadh.. ye hum khud aksar naap nahi paate hain, to kisi ko kya kahein? Bas umeed kar sakte hain.. umeed aur untezaar.. wo gaana hai na : Hum intezaar karenge tera qayaamat tak, Khuda kare ke qayaamat ho aur tu aaye.

Reply ke liye bohat shukria.. achha laga aapse baat karke..


Khan bhai!

Kaise hain aap?? Hum to theek hain.. A1, Zabardast! hmm.. aaj kal shayad kuchh zyada hi 'Inspired' hain.. isi liye kuchh bhi kuchh bhi likhte hain aur yahaan aap sab par zulm karne ke liye post kar dete hain..! Aap bhai ho, isi liye khushi hoti hai.. yunhi ghum aur hushi me shaamil rehna.. Dua karne ke liye nahi kahenge kyunki wo to aap bina maange hi de dete hain.. Apna khayaal rakhiyega.. Allah Hafiz!



Janaab Talib!

Salaam aur aadaab!



Haan.. kabhi kabhi aisi baatein bhi zehen me aa jaati hain.. ab khayaalon par kahaan bas chalta hai apna?? Kabhi aasmaan me uRaan bharte hain, to kabhi gehri, andheri gufaaoN me kho jaate hain..

Bohat khubsoorat kalaam pesh kiya hai aapne! Pasand NA aane ka sawaal hi nahi uTHta..LOL! Lekin filhal to hume intezaar hai aapke agle kalaam ka.. bohat din ho gaye.. kuchh arz kar hi dijiye!

Chaliye.. atreef ke liye shukria kubool kijiye.. Apna khayaal rakhiyega aur duaoN me yaad rakhiyega.. Allah Hafiz!


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achchha likha hai aapne - 19th May 2004, 12:56 PM

Batane or jataane se kuchh haasil na hoga ey dil
Wo dil to tumhaari nazroN me sab parh jaaega...
Tum bhi to parho un nigaahoN ko kabhi...
Saara vaakya...khud-b-khud saamne aa jaaega.

Banno ji aapke jazbaatoN ki kard karta hooN, or aapki is rachna me chupe dard ko bhi samajh sakta hooN...bahut gehra likha hai aapne...ye to bas yooNhi apne khayalaat pesh kar diye hai...abhi chalta hooN...KaheeN Meena ji ne parh liya to kaan kheeNch leNgi mere....ye parhkar.

bye and take care..

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Re: Kaise?? - 19th May 2004, 01:16 PM

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DhaDkan kaise sunaauN tujhe?
Dil ka haal bataaun tujhe?

Ek baar dekh le muD kar tu,
MinnatoN se bulaauN tujhe.

PaR le tu zubaan ashkoN ki,
Kaise main manaauN tujhe?

Dil me bas ulfat hai teri,
Kaise yakeen dilaauN tujhe?

Pyaar se baRi daulat na koi,
Baat ye kaise samjhaauN tujhe?

Tere bin jeena hai mushkil,
Mar kar kya dikhlaauN tujhe??
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meri banno,

Mujae maut se nafrat nahi
Par
Mujae zindgi se pyaar hai
Aur is liyae hi
Maie jina chahti hu
Aur is liyae hi
Maie tumhara pyaar
Chahti hu.....

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hello - 19th May 2004, 01:23 PM

hello
apki rachn aparhi
"kaise" word kitna chota per kitna bara iska arth hai???sab kuch is ek word mein simta hua hai,,,kaise ..kaise aur kaise????issey hum nizat bhi nahi pa saktey...
apke derd ko in lagzon ne baakhoobi utara ahi,,,,keep smiling

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19th May 2004, 01:27 PM

Batane or jataane se kuchh haasil na hoga ey dil
Wo dil to tumhaari nazroN me sab parh jaaega...
Tum bhi to parho un nigaahoN ko kabhi...
Saara vaakya...khud-b-khud saamne aa jaaega.

chaand dost,

ek umra se raah dekhti rahi...
Batane or jataane se
kuchh haasil n huaa ey dil,
par maine yah to talasha hi nahi kabhi...
oonke paas dil thha bhi ya nahi.........

ek umra se dhundhti rahi
sara vakyaa.. oon nigaahon maie
shayed meri aankh maie jyada hi nami thhi
khud ki chhavi bhi n pa saki oon nigaahon maie.

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Re: achchha likha hai aapne - 19th May 2004, 01:38 PM

[QUOTE]Originally posted by Chaand
[B]Batane or jataane se kuchh haasil na hoga ey dil
Wo dil to tumhaari nazroN me sab parh jaaega...
Tum bhi to parho un nigaahoN ko kabhi...
Saara vaakya...khud-b-khud saamne aa jaaega.

...abhi chalta hooN...KaheeN Meena ji ne parh liya to kaan kheeNch leNgi mere....ye parhkar.

hey............. chaand,

muje ab lag raha hai ..... kahi yah meri to kaan khinchaai nahi hui???????? haan haso tum...... muje budhhu banaya..... khair koi baat nahi. lol
   
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19th May 2004, 03:12 PM

Kitna achha reply likha tha.. PC stall ho gaya.. reply bhi uR gaya. chalo, ab phir likhte hain!


Chaand saahab Adaab!


LOL.. are.. itna achha sher kehne ke liye meena aapke kaan kyu kheechegi?? Kyu meena?

hmm.. baat to aapne sahi kagi hai.. shayad hum hi uski nazron ko paR nahi paate.. uske ankahe lafz sun nahi paate.. uske dil ka haal jaan nahi paate.. ho sakta hai waqt ke saath humaari ye khaami bhi puuri ho jaaye..

Chaliye.. humaare kalaam aur jazbaat ko samajhhne ke liye aur unhe saraahne ke liye shukria!


Meena!

Wah!.. kya baat kahi hai.. gehri baat ko saadgi se kehna koi tumse seekhe! sach aha.. jab kisi ka pyaar hi zindagi ban jaata hai..to ye jeevan pyaara ho jaata hai.. kisi ne kuchh din pehle ye geet gungunaaya tha..

'tumse nigahe chaar karne lage ....hum jindagi se pyar karne lage .....darte na the mout se ab magar darne lage '

ek umra se raah dekhti rahi...
Batane or jataane se
kuchh haasil n huaa ey dil,
par maine yah to talasha hi nahi kabhi...
oonke paas dil thha bhi ya nahi.........

ek umra se dhundhti rahi
sara vakyaa.. oon nigaahon maie
shayed meri aankh maie jyada hi nami thhi
khud ki chhavi bhi n pa saki oon nigaahon maie.


Dekha Chaand ji?? Hai na meri meena bilkul haazir jawaab???

Waise meena tumhaari kaan khichhaii nahi ho rahi.. hum logon ki aisi jurrat kahaan.. bas, thodi Taang khichaai kar rahe hain..tumhe humaare kaan kheechne ka mauka de rahe hain.. kyu Chaand ji??



Swati ji,

kab, kaise, kyu? kuchh sawaal sawaal hi reh jaate hain, unka jawaab hota nahi.. magar unke jawaab ki khoj me aksar zindagi guzar jaati hai.. Aapne is kalaam ko apna waqt diya.. bohat bohat shukria!


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hello - 19th May 2004, 05:16 PM

Afshan ji,

sachchi aapki rachana padh ke pyar ka khumar chadh aaya. really its a very beautiful creation from your side... kai din koi love based shayri padh raha hoon aapki. man bahut khush hai...aap bhi khush rahiye..


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19th May 2004, 05:39 PM

Akant ji!

Kaise hain aap??

Ji haan.. pyaar ke vishay par kuchh din ho gaye the likhe hue.. around 1 hafta pehle 'Intezaar - Yaar' naam ki ghazal likhi thi aur ab ye..is kalaam ka aap par itna gehra asar hua, ye jaan kar behad khushi hui!! Aapne jo aaj rachna post ki hai, wo behtareen hai.. isi liye aapse is kalaam ki tareef sun kar garv hua.. Yunhi himmat bandhaate rahiyega.. apna khayaal rakhiyega.. aur yunhi waqt nikaal kar likhte rahiyega aur yahaan doston ke saamne pesh karte rahiyega..Take care!


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20th May 2004, 10:44 AM

Afshaan Ji..

waah! . waah! Bahut khoob farmaaya hai aap ne.. Padh kar behad khushii huii aur dil se khud wa khud aap ki taareef mai waah! waah! ki aawaaz aane lagi...

Pyaar se baRi daulat na koi,
Baat ye kaise samjhaauN tujhe?

Tere bin jeena hai mushkil,
Mar kar kya dikhlaauN tujhe??

Afshaan ji yah line to bahut achhhii likhii hai aap ne... Par ye nalaayak ne ne bhi kuch aap ke sher ka jawaab dene ki himmat ki hai.....

marne ki baat naa kar dilbaar...
tere sang jinaa hai mujhe....

tera pyaar hi hai doulat merii....
tu chahe mujhe mai chahooN tujhe...

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20th May 2004, 03:30 PM

DhaDkan kaise sunaauN tujhe?
Dil ka haal bataaun tujhe?

Ek baar dekh le muD kar tu,
MinnatoN se bulaauN tujhe.

PaR le tu zubaan ashkoN ki,
Kaise main manaauN tujhe?

Dil me bas ulfat hai teri,
Kaise yakeen dilaauN tujhe?

Pyaar se baRi daulat na koi,
Baat ye kaise samjhaauN tujhe?

Tere bin jeena hai mushkil,
Mar kar kya dikhlaauN tujhe??

afshan...bahut hi acha ...kitni gehrayi mein likha hai aapne....meri daad kabool kijiyega...take care


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20th May 2004, 03:54 PM

marne ki baat naa kar dilbaar...
tere sang jinaa hai mujhe....

tera pyaar hi hai doulat merii....
tu chahe mujhe mai chahooN tujhe...

-Wah! Wah! LOL.. HUmaari purri ghazal ko aapne apne ashaar se 'null and void' kar diya.. Bohat khoob!

Tareef aur hausla afzai ke liye bohat bhat shukria!


Roopali ji,

Aapne humaari ghazal ko apna waqt aur apne anmol alfaaz diye.. aapka tahe dil se shukria.. shayad dil ki gehraii se liha hai.. isi liye kalaam bhi gehra ho gaya..


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20th May 2004, 04:11 PM

Hi Didi,

No need to die, Just keep writing such wonderful words.. Nebody wud fall for u... And u cud make him hear the heartbeats with the help of stethoscope... just kiddin.....

'Null' .. 'VOID'... Why r u speakin the programming terms.... Plz don't get into this lne.. The competition is already very severe....

Neways, Keep witin the good things... Take Care....

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hi. - 20th May 2004, 06:48 PM

pyaari sweetu.

how r u?
bahot dino ke baad aapaki taraf se kuchh sun ne ko mila..chalo aapako thodi furasat to mili...
afshan hamesha ki tarah bahot hi kam words me dil ka pura dard izahaar kar dena....yahi to aapaki khubi he sweetu..anyway bahot hi bahetarin kalaam he ye hamesha ki tarah...ha par ek baat hame pasand nahi aai........

Tere bin jeena hai mushkil,
Mar kar kya dikhlaauN tujhe??

jara bhi achha nahi laga hame ha.
agar me moderator hota to ye line ko remove hi kar deta..hahahaha.


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21st May 2004, 02:43 PM

banno

bohat khoob likha hai tum ne.
riwayeti aur pehle bhi kahi gaee baatein magar tumhara apna andaaz liye.
khaas taur per yeh shayr parh ker mere chere par bharpoor muskurahat aayee hai banno.
kyun ??? yeh mein khud naheen samajh paya.

"Tere bin jeena hai mushkil,
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baharhaal yeh tumhari ek aur achchi kaawish hai.
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22nd May 2004, 11:27 AM

Pulkit!

LOL.. humaari shayri paR kar to sab duur bhaag jaaenge! Next thing you know, the US is considering Banno's shayri a weapon of mass destruction aur ye Null and Void to law me bhi use kiya jaata hai na?? Because thats where I learn it.. and don't worry, I don't have the intellect required for programming..!! You take care of yourself!



Shyamu!

Kaise ho??

LOL.. achha hai moderator nahi ho.. warna naa jaane kitno ki ghazalein cut ho jaati!! Ab dil me jo aaya, so likh diya.. tumhe kuchh hadh tak pasand abhi aaya.. to chalta hai..LOL.. hmm.. fursat to nikaalni paRti hai janaab.. kahin ye jazbaat dil me hi reh gaye to mushkil ho jaaegi! Chalo.. tum apna khayaal rakhna.. yunhi dost ka saath dete rehna.. aur muskuraate rehna!


Musharraf Saahab!

Shayad aapko ye ghazal 'funny' lagi, isi liye muskuraahat chha gayi! Lekin seriously, aapko ye ghazal pasand aayi jaan kar bohat achha laga.. dil ko sukun hota hai jab bayaan kiye jazbaat koi samajhhta hai aur unhe saraahta hai.. khaaskar jab ye tareef aap karein.. Koshish rahegi ki aage bhi kuchh yunhi likhein jo aapko pasand aaye.. DuaoN me yaad rakhiyega..


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22nd May 2004, 12:22 PM

Hi,

Good to know that ur away from the prammin field, And where the law is concern, I know a few words 'Falter', 'Breach', 'Impeachment' and 'Prosecution'... Else it's a stranger to me...

Am happy to hear that Us ppl are considering ur Shayris as a weapon of mass destruction... Coz if they fight against my India, we ppl wud be pepped up.... and firangis won't get a word of that...

Neways, take care

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23rd May 2004, 01:47 PM

LOL.. the 'Firangis' won't have a clue whether you hit them with shayri or 'Mumbayya' and you seem to know all the words you should stay away from, which is good............. I think....

Anyhow.. Thanks once again for reading this and apreciating it.. You take care.. have fun.. and stay in touch!


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Afshan Dost!
Sabse pehle to der se reply karne ki maafi chaahti hun!

Aapne bahut hi pyari si nazm pesh ki hai!
Bahut achi lagi..

DhaDkan kaise sunaauN tujhe?
Dil ka haal bataaun tujhe?

Ek baar dekh le muD kar tu,
MinnatoN se bulaauN tujhe.

PaR le tu zubaan ashkoN ki,
Kaise main manaauN tujhe?

Dil me bas ulfat hai teri,
Kaise yakeen dilaauN tujhe?

Pyaar se baRi daulat na koi,
Baat ye kaise samjhaauN tujhe?

Tere bin jeena hai mushkil,
Mar kar kya dikhlaauN tujhe??


Bahut khoob!
Keep it up!!!



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Priya!

Kaisi ho?? Kaii dino se aapse koi raabta nahi hua.. maafi chaahte hain.. aur aapne is nazm ko paRa, ise apna waqt aur apne alfaaz diye, humaai hausla afzai ki.. ye sab to jab bhi kiya jaaye, wahi sahi waqt hota hai.. kabhi der nahi hoti.. Tareef ke liye tahe dil se shukria!


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Hi Sanam,

Kaii dino baad tumse raabta hua hai.. Bohat achha laga! Umeed hai ki tum theek hogi..

hmmm.. sahi kaha tumne.. aksar kisi ke pyaar me khud ko yun bhool jaate hain ki aaine me dekhnein bhi to usi ka aks nazar aaye.. Aisa pyaar paana, jo aapko usi tarah apnaaye jaise aap ho, bohat mushkil hota hai.. aur aise me apni pehchaan kho dena behad aasaan. Chaar lines me tumne bohat gehri baat keh di.. Tah e dil se shukria.. ye baat yaad rahegi!

Apna khayaal rakhna!


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Mujhe yakeen nahin ho raha ke maine is ghazal par ab tak reply mnahin diya,jabke isse main pehle pad chuka huun

Choti beher ki rani,yahan bhi khoob keh gayi tum..

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Veeru!!

Chalo, der se hi aaye, aaye to sahi!! Aisa bhi hota hai..

Hmmm.. achha hai ki sabko chhoti beher me likhi ghazal pasand aati hai.. kyunki hume baRi beher me likhna to aata hi nahi..

Tum waqt nikaal kar yahaan aate ho to bohat achha lagta hai! Yunhi tareef karte rehna..

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Tere bin jeena hai mushkil,
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Meeta ji,

Ghazal paRne ke liye, aur use saraahne ke liye bohat bohat shukria.. koshish rahegi ki aage bhi achha likhein.. Thank you once again..


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