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saNkaroN kaaNTe chubheN, jab ek gul haaNsil huaa! - 2nd May 2008, 07:26 PM

dostoN ko dheer kaa salaam!!
kaise haiN aap?
aik adnaa see kaavish aapkee haazir hai!! aapkii beshqimat raa'i kaa intzaar rahegaa!! shukriyaa!!
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chupke chupke gham khushee ke bhes meiN daakhil huaa!
saNkaroN kaaNTe chubheN, jab ek gul haaNsil huaa!

khaak'e paa* huN,khaak meiN paidaa huaa,pal bhee gayaa!
kuchh buzurgoN kee duaa, kuchh aap hee qaabil huaa!

khaak e paa = paaoN kee dhool

phir uThee hai mauj koee us nigaah e naaz meiN,
phir waheeN dil Doob jaayegaa, agar gaafil* huaa!

gaafil = laaparwaah (careless)

maangane se kyaa milaa,kis vaasate arz e wafaa?
dil agar aayaa kisee pe,khud hi daryaa dil huaa!


kisliye itnaa gumaaN kaisee yeh tarje guft'goo?
kyoN tiraa har lafz jaise nashtar e qaatil huaa?

zeest ke panne palaT'taa hee rahaa, paRhte rahaa,
dil rahaa jaahil ke jaahil,par na yeh kaamil* huaa!

kaamil = learned

jab kabhee saayaa bhee tanhaa choR ke jaataa rahaa,
tab to bas bhagvaan hee gham meiN mire shaamil huaa!

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dil azeez Dheer BHaiya:

Namaste!!

kaise haiN aap??.. ummid kartaa huuN aap Theek Thaak hoNge..

aur huZuur aapki Ghazal to bahot hi Khuub rahii.. aapka aaNdaaz to beHteriN haii hi.. saath hi saath aapki umdaah soch bhee Ghazal meiN nazar aa rahii hay.. Ghazal ke sabhee Sher mujhe pasaNd aaYeN par yeh Sher sab se beHteriN saa lagaa mujHe..
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YuuNhi liKhate rahiYe.. aur bazm kii aunaq afzA'ii karte rahiye..!

mere dil se niklii hu'ii DheroN saarii mubaaraqbaad qabUl keejiYeNgaa..!!

KhuSh raheN.. apnaa Khayaal raKheN..!

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

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dostoN ko dheer kaa salaam!!
kaise haiN aap?
aik adnaa see kaavish aapkee haazir hai!! aapkii beshqimat raa'i kaa intzaar rahegaa!! shukriyaa!!
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chupke chupke gham khushee ke bhes meiN daakhil huaa!
saNkaroN kaaNTe chubheN, jab ek gul haaNsil huaa!

khaak'e paa* huN,khaak meiN paidaa huaa,pal bhee gayaa!
kuchh buzurgoN kee duaa, kuchh aap hee qaabil huaa!

khaak e paa = paaoN kee dhool

phir uThee hai mauj koee us nigaah e naaz meiN,
phir waheeN dil Doob jaayegaa, agar gaafil* huaa!

gaafil = laaparwaah (careless)

maangane se kyaa milaa,kis vaasate arz e wafaa?
dil agar aayaa kisee pe,khud hi daryaa dil huaa!


kisliye itnaa gumaaN kaisee yeh tarje guft'goo?
kyoN tiraa har lafz jaise nashtar e qaatil huaa?

zeest ke panne palaT'taa hee rahaa, paRhte rahaa,
dil rahaa jaahil ke jaahil,par na yeh kaamil* huaa!

kaamil = learned

jab kabhee saayaa bhee tanhaa choR ke jaataa rahaa,
tab to bas bhagvaan hee gham meiN mire shaamil huaa!

wah wah wah dheer ji main kis shair ki tareef karoon kiski nahi ...... aapki poori ghazal itni zaberdast lagi hai mujhe ke alfaz hi nahi bayan kerne ke liye tamaam ashar bohat ba maani hain sab se acha chun'na in main se mere liye behad mushkil hai dili daad qubool karain yunhi likhte rahiyega dheer ji khush rahain ameen


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dostoN ko dheer kaa salaam!!
kaise haiN aap?
aik adnaa see kaavish aapkee haazir hai!! aapkii beshqimat raa'i kaa intzaar rahegaa!! shukriyaa!!
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chupke chupke gham khushee ke bhes meiN daakhil huaa!
saNkaroN kaaNTe chubheN, jab ek gul haaNsil huaa!

khaak'e paa* huN,khaak meiN paidaa huaa,pal bhee gayaa!
kuchh buzurgoN kee duaa, kuchh aap hee qaabil huaa!

khaak e paa = paaoN kee dhool

phir uThee hai mauj koee us nigaah e naaz meiN,
phir waheeN dil Doob jaayegaa, agar gaafil* huaa!

gaafil = laaparwaah (careless)

maangane se kyaa milaa,kis vaasate arz e wafaa?
dil agar aayaa kisee pe,khud hi daryaa dil huaa!


kisliye itnaa gumaaN kaisee yeh tarje guft'goo?
kyoN tiraa har lafz jaise nashtar e qaatil huaa?

zeest ke panne palaT'taa hee rahaa, paRhte rahaa,
dil rahaa jaahil ke jaahil,par na yeh kaamil* huaa!

kaamil = learned

jab kabhee saayaa bhee tanhaa choR ke jaataa rahaa,
tab to bas bhagvaan hee gham meiN mire shaamil huaa!

Dheer saahab,


aap ki yeh Ghazal behad pasand aayee... paRh lar lutf haasil huaa.. yuu.n hii likhate rahe.n....

ek khuubsuurat Ghazal par mere jaanib sedaad haazir hai!

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dostoN ko dheer kaa salaam!!
kaise haiN aap?
aik adnaa see kaavish aapkee haazir hai!! aapkii beshqimat raa'i kaa intzaar rahegaa!! shukriyaa!!
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chupke chupke gham khushee ke bhes meiN daakhil huaa!
saNkaroN kaaNTe chubheN, jab ek gul haaNsil huaa!

khaak'e paa* huN,khaak meiN paidaa huaa,pal bhee gayaa!
kuchh buzurgoN kee duaa, kuchh aap hee qaabil huaa!

khaak e paa = paaoN kee dhool

phir uThee hai mauj koee us nigaah e naaz meiN,
phir waheeN dil Doob jaayegaa, agar gaafil* huaa!

gaafil = laaparwaah (careless)

maangane se kyaa milaa,kis vaasate arz e wafaa?
dil agar aayaa kisee pe,khud hi daryaa dil huaa!


kisliye itnaa gumaaN kaisee yeh tarje guft'goo?
kyoN tiraa har lafz jaise nashtar e qaatil huaa?

zeest ke panne palaT'taa hee rahaa, paRhte rahaa,
dil rahaa jaahil ke jaahil,par na yeh kaamil* huaa!

kaamil = learned

jab kabhee saayaa bhee tanhaa choR ke jaataa rahaa,
tab to bas bhagvaan hee gham meiN mire shaamil huaa!




kaise hain Dheer ji
or apki nayi lyf kaisi chal rahi hai..umeed karti hu sab acche se hoga

apki yeh ghazal dil ke kareeb rahi...bahut khoobsoorti se racha hai aapne isko...tarreff karni nahi ati mujhe..innna kahungi ki har lafz apne mein wzan liye hai

aap bas aise hi mehfil ki raunaq badhate rahiye


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jab yaad karte hai kisi ko
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maangane se kyaa milaa,kis vaasate arz e wafaa?
dil agar aayaa kisee pe,khud hi daryaa dil huaa!


kaise hain aap dheerji..............chaliye shaadi ke baad apne apna wada rakha is baar bhi ek khoobsurat kalam likha hain apne..uparwala sher dl azeez laga dil se daad kubool kare....aur yunhi is mehfil ki ronak badhate rahe......

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dostoN ko dheer kaa salaam!!
kaise haiN aap?
aik adnaa see kaavish aapkee haazir hai!! aapkii beshqimat raa'i kaa intzaar rahegaa!! shukriyaa!!
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chupke chupke gham khushee ke bhes meiN daakhil huaa!
saNkaroN kaaNTe chubheN, jab ek gul haaNsil huaa!

khaak'e paa* huN,khaak meiN paidaa huaa,pal bhee gayaa!
kuchh buzurgoN kee duaa, kuchh aap hee qaabil huaa!

khaak e paa = paaoN kee dhool

phir uThee hai mauj koee us nigaah e naaz meiN,
phir waheeN dil Doob jaayegaa, agar gaafil* huaa!

gaafil = laaparwaah (careless)

maangane se kyaa milaa,kis vaasate arz e wafaa?
dil agar aayaa kisee pe,khud hi daryaa dil huaa!


kisliye itnaa gumaaN kaisee yeh tarje guft'goo?
kyoN tiraa har lafz jaise nashtar e qaatil huaa?

zeest ke panne palaT'taa hee rahaa, paRhte rahaa,
dil rahaa jaahil ke jaahil,par na yeh kaamil* huaa!

kaamil = learned

jab kabhee saayaa bhee tanhaa choR ke jaataa rahaa,
tab to bas bhagvaan hee gham meiN mire shaamil huaa!
Behad khoobsurat ghazal kahi hai dheer jee , vaise bhee aap ka andaaz-e-bayaa.n to qaabil-e-taariif hotaa hee hai. aap ki yeh ghazal behad hii khoobsoorat aur khud me mukammal lagi mujhe, abhi vaqt ki kamii ke kaaran jyada aa nahi paa raha varna aap ki is ghazal mera hee pehla reply hota.........

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dostoN ko dheer kaa salaam!!
kaise haiN aap?
aik adnaa see kaavish aapkee haazir hai!! aapkii beshqimat raa'i kaa intzaar rahegaa!! shukriyaa!!
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chupke chupke gham khushee ke bhes meiN daakhil huaa!
saNkaroN kaaNTe chubheN, jab ek gul haaNsil huaa!

khaak'e paa* huN,khaak meiN paidaa huaa,pal bhee gayaa!
kuchh buzurgoN kee duaa, kuchh aap hee qaabil huaa!

khaak e paa = paaoN kee dhool

phir uThee hai mauj koee us nigaah e naaz meiN,
phir waheeN dil Doob jaayegaa, agar gaafil* huaa!

gaafil = laaparwaah (careless)

maangane se kyaa milaa,kis vaasate arz e wafaa?
dil agar aayaa kisee pe,khud hi daryaa dil huaa!


kisliye itnaa gumaaN kaisee yeh tarje guft'goo?
kyoN tiraa har lafz jaise nashtar e qaatil huaa?

zeest ke panne palaT'taa hee rahaa, paRhte rahaa,
dil rahaa jaahil ke jaahil,par na yeh kaamil* huaa!

kaamil = learned

jab kabhee saayaa bhee tanhaa choR ke jaataa rahaa,
tab to bas bhagvaan hee gham meiN mire shaamil huaa!


salaam huzoor, kaise haiN aap...?? muddatoN baad aaapse mukhatib hua hun, aur aapko padhne ka mauka mila...!! aapse kaafi naraazgi hai mujhe, par uski baateN baad meN kabhi tasalli se akele meN kareNge...!!

ghazal har baar ki tarah kaabil-e-taareef hai,

phir uThee hai mauj koee us nigaah e naaz meiN,
phir waheeN dil Doob jaayegaa, agar gaafil* huaa!


ye sher mere khayaal se haasil-e-ghazal raha...!! par kahiN na kahiN thoda sa painapan kam laga dheer ke hissab se shayad dheer ke apne khud ke standards hiN itne unche haiN ki aapse bahut umeedeN rehti haiN, umeed hai aage v apko padhne ka mauka milta rahega, bas yuNhi aate raheN mehfileN sajaate raheN, aur hum jaisoN ko sikhaate raheN...!!



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dil azeez Dheer BHaiya:

Namaste!!

kaise haiN aap??.. ummid kartaa huuN aap Theek Thaak hoNge..

aur huZuur aapki Ghazal to bahot hi Khuub rahii.. aapka aaNdaaz to beHteriN haii hi.. saath hi saath aapki umdaah soch bhee Ghazal meiN nazar aa rahii hay.. Ghazal ke sabhee Sher mujhe pasaNd aaYeN par yeh Sher sab se beHteriN saa lagaa mujHe..


YuuNhi liKhate rahiYe.. aur bazm kii aunaq afzA'ii karte rahiye..!

mere dil se niklii hu'ii DheroN saarii mubaaraqbaad qabUl keejiYeNgaa..!!

KhuSh raheN.. apnaa Khayaal raKheN..!

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

aapka

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bhaai ghazal kaisee bhee hoN, tum hoNslaa afzayee kar hee dete ho!! waqt kam hai , magar likhna to hai hee naheeN to kuchh dinoN meiN bhool hee jayeNge sab mujhe !!!
tuhaaree daad aur duaa'oN kaa mamnoon huN dost!!
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wah wah wah dheer ji main kis shair ki tareef karoon kiski nahi ...... aapki poori ghazal itni zaberdast lagi hai mujhe ke alfaz hi nahi bayan kerne ke liye tamaam ashar bohat ba maani hain sab se acha chun'na in main se mere liye behad mushkil hai dili daad qubool karain yunhi likhte rahiyega dheer ji khush rahain ameen
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ghazal to adnaa see kaavish hai, magar yeh aapkaa pyaar hai shaa'iree ke liye jo itnee him'mat afzaayee kartee hai!! aapkee daad sar aaNkhoN pe!!

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Dheer saahab,


aap ki yeh Ghazal behad pasand aayee... paRh lar lutf haasil huaa.. yuu.n hii likhate rahe.n....

ek khuubsuurat Ghazal par mere jaanib sedaad haazir hai!

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bhaai aap jaise umdaa shaayar kee kalaam pe naz'r nah paRee to kalaam adhuraa saa lagtaa hai!! kahaaN the ap itne dinoN. sab khairiyat se hai naa??
aapkee daad ke liye mamnoon huN!!

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kaise hain Dheer ji
or apki nayi lyf kaisi chal rahi hai..umeed karti hu sab acche se hoga

apki yeh ghazal dil ke kareeb rahi...bahut khoobsoorti se racha hai aapne isko...tarreff karni nahi ati mujhe..innna kahungi ki har lafz apne mein wzan liye hai

aap bas aise hi mehfil ki raunaq badhate rahiye


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yeh saade se alfaaz he to taarif ke sahee maa'inee sikhaate hai kuhulika ji!! dil se nikla har lafz sachchaa hotaa hai ... shaayree kee tarah use savaarne kee zarurat hee naheeN!! shukriyaa!!
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kaise hain aap dheerji..............chaliye shaadi ke baad apne apna wada rakha is baar bhi ek khoobsurat kalam likha hain apne..uparwala sher dl azeez laga dil se daad kubool kare....aur yunhi is mehfil ki ronak badhate rahe......

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Behad khoobsurat ghazal kahi hai dheer jee , vaise bhee aap ka andaaz-e-bayaa.n to qaabil-e-taariif hotaa hee hai. aap ki yeh ghazal behad hii khoobsoorat aur khud me mukammal lagi mujhe, abhi vaqt ki kamii ke kaaran jyada aa nahi paa raha varna aap ki is ghazal mera hee pehla reply hota.........

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aap jaise shayar jinhe shaayree kee itnee kadr ho!! woh der saver aa hee jaayeNge, so taakhir se koee shikaayat naheeN!! sarwar saHeb ne bataayaa keh aap urdu kaa course kar rahe hai?? meree shubhkaamnaaye aap ke saath hai!! kaash mere maiN bhee is jaanib kuchh waqt nikal paataa. khair koee baat naheeN , aap hee se seekh lenge ... kahaaN jaayeNge hamse bach ke ....

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salaam huzoor, kaise haiN aap...?? muddatoN baad aaapse mukhatib hua hun, aur aapko padhne ka mauka mila...!! aapse kaafi naraazgi hai mujhe, par uski baateN baad meN kabhi tasalli se akele meN kareNge...!!

ghazal har baar ki tarah kaabil-e-taareef hai,

phir uThee hai mauj koee us nigaah e naaz meiN,
phir waheeN dil Doob jaayegaa, agar gaafil* huaa!


ye sher mere khayaal se haasil-e-ghazal raha...!! par kahiN na kahiN thoda sa painapan kam laga dheer ke hissab se shayad dheer ke apne khud ke standards hiN itne unche haiN ki aapse bahut umeedeN rehti haiN, umeed hai aage v apko padhne ka mauka milta rahega, bas yuNhi aate raheN mehfileN sajaate raheN, aur hum jaisoN ko sikhaate raheN...!!
maiN Theek huN hazrat !! aap kaisee haiN? aur bhalaa mujh se kya khataa ho gayee. bejhijhak bataaye, kaan pakaRne ke liye taiyaar huN. aik aur guzaarish hai , jis bhee sher meiN tumhe kuchh gaRbaR lage... bataa diyaa karo. kisee baat par tabaadalaa e khayaal se shayad maiN bhee kuchh seekh lo aur tum bhee!!

aate rahnaa aur apnaa khayaal rakhnaa!!

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bahut khoobsurat gazal.............tareef ke liye lafaz kum lag rahe haiN.....bahut accha laga dheer aapko padke.....bhaiya shaadi ki mubarakbaad kabool kijiye.....kush rahiye aur mahfil ko yoon hi apni gazlo.n se mahkate rahiye.


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bahut khoobsurat gazal.............tareef ke liye lafaz kum lag rahe haiN.....bahut accha laga dheer aapko padke.....bhaiya shaadi ki mubarakbaad kabool kijiye.....kush rahiye aur mahfil ko yoon hi apni gazlo.n se mahkate rahiye.


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Bahut khoob Dheer ji!

Daad kubool keejiye!

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