<<<<<<kitni Hi Gazal Banayi>>>>>>>>

[lul]

Hum sochte the ki tum sada saath doge humara,
Yahi sochkar chodi thi apni hi parchayi humne,

Jab jana ki tere ghar me chirag jalta hi nahi,
Apni mehfil me shama bhi na jalayi humne,

Khuda ko khwab me bhi humne na dekha kabhi,
Teri hi ulfat samji thi khudayi humne,

Farishtey aakar pooche lehad me meri barbadi ki daasta,
Meri wafa dekh teri jafa bhi na batlayi humne,

Apne ashko ko syaahi banaya alfaaz banakar jazbaat,
Pyar ke kore kaagaz par dil ki kalam chalayi humne,

Mat poocho kya kya likha hijar me mere,
Kitne hi geet kitni hi shayri kitni hi gazale banayi humne.

[Lehad-kabr, Hijar-daastan. ]

[lul]

muje lagta hai meri post kisi ko pasand nahi aayi.agar aapko achchi na lagi ho to bhi reply ya.so that i'll try to improve.

[anas]

nahe lul je
sache bat batain
to hum na ap ki post dekhi he ab
bakhuda
bohat omda poem
ap kay mounki tareef nahe ha
lakin ap ki ya poem really bohat omda ha
main to un logon na jinhon na abhi tak ap ki poem nahe pare
un ko recomend karon ga
kay is poem ko zaror parain
bohat he omda


hasalay gazal ha ap ka ya shair

Farishtey aakar pooche lehad me meri barbadi ki daasta,
Meri wafa dekh teri jafa bhi na batlayi humne,

bohat heomda
likhtay rhain
anas

[lul]

Hi,
Anas Ji,
Thanks a lot for replying.Muje to laga ki meri post kisi ko pasand nahi aayi.Par ab esa nahi hai.Thanks for the complement.
Ok by.
God bless you.

[Shimul]

Dilki kalam achha likhi hein aapne. Likhte rahiyega. Shukriiya. Some how I missed this, sorry. Take care. God bless you.

[lul]

Hi, Shimul ji
thanks for your reply.

[mein_aur_tanhai]

namaste... lul..ji..

wah yar.. .bahut khoob likha hai .. apne..bahut khub.. padh kar..sukoon .. mila... dil ko chu gayi apki yeah kalam yar.... waise too puri ki puri kalam bemisaal hai .. but.. these lines...are the best.. -->

Jab jana ki tere ghar me chirag jalta hi nahi,
Apni mehfil me shama bhi na jalayi humne,


Farishtey aakar pooche lehad me meri barbadi ki daasta,
Meri wafa dekh teri jafa bhi na batlayi humne,



aise hi likhte rahiye.. aur mehfil..sajate rahiye...

bye and take care..

[lul]

Hi, me aur tanhai

Khushi hui ki apko meri post pasand aayi.And thank you for the reply.

[kshitiz]

LuL Jee

Aapsse iss site pe kaBHi RaBta NaHi Hua MaGaR apki kaLam BaHUt KHooBsuRaT Hai BaHut Hi acHHi GHazaL LikHi Hai aapNe maiN BaDNaseeB THaa ki aBHi tak maHRooM THaa isse ..

aapNe BeHaD KHooBsuRaT alfaazoN me juzBaat aDaayGi ki Hai ..

TaReef QaBuL FaRmaaiye

DeR se aaNe ke Liye MUaafi ka TaLaBGaaR HuN

[khushiii]

lul ji jawab nahin aa ki is ghazal ka
Farishtey aakar pooche lehad me meri barbadi ki daasta,
Meri wafa dekh teri jafa bhi na batlayi humne,

Apne ashko ko syaahi banaya alfaaz banakar jazbaat,
Pyar ke kore kaagaz par dil ki kalam chalayi humne,

specialy in shers ka
keep writing plz

[lul]

Hi, Kshitiz ji
AApki reply ke liye shukriya.AAp isi tarah reply dete rahenge to i'll try to write even more better.
Ok bye.
GOd bless you.


Hi, Khushi ji,
Thanks for reading my post and replying back to it.
Bye.

[sakhi1909]

Jab jana ki tere ghar me chirag jalta hi nahi,
Apni mehfil me shama bhi na jalayi humne,

pyaar ki ada to koi apse seekhe bhut acha likha hai apne yuhi likhte rahiye.
sakhi

[lul]

hi,
Sakhi ji

Thanks a lot for appreciation.
God bless you.
Bye

[akant]

Lul Ji,

aapki yah line mujhe bahaut achchhi lagi.

Hum sochte the ki tum sada saath doge humara,
Yahi sochkar chodi thi apni hi parchayi humne,

achchha likha hai aapne. per laga jaise kuchh khoya khoya sa hai. dekhiyega..mujhe jo laga vo maine kah diya. samay ki bandish hai so esse jayada abhi nahi likh paunga.


Akant...

[lul]

Hi, Akant ji
Aapka reply padhkar achcha laga.
ok bye
take care