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<<<<<<kitni Hi Gazal Banayi>>>>>>>> -
17th October 2003, 02:56 PM
Hum sochte the ki tum sada saath doge humara,
Yahi sochkar chodi thi apni hi parchayi humne,
Jab jana ki tere ghar me chirag jalta hi nahi,
Apni mehfil me shama bhi na jalayi humne,
Khuda ko khwab me bhi humne na dekha kabhi,
Teri hi ulfat samji thi khudayi humne,
Farishtey aakar pooche lehad me meri barbadi ki daasta,
Meri wafa dekh teri jafa bhi na batlayi humne,
Apne ashko ko syaahi banaya alfaaz banakar jazbaat,
Pyar ke kore kaagaz par dil ki kalam chalayi humne,
Mat poocho kya kya likha hijar me mere,
Kitne hi geet kitni hi shayri kitni hi gazale banayi humne.
[Lehad-kabr, Hijar-daastan. ]
Lul's_The_Great
E jhoke safar waha le chal,
Jaha dil hota hai hasrat nahi hoti......
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helloooooooooooo -
19th October 2003, 12:46 PM
muje lagta hai meri post kisi ko pasand nahi aayi.agar aapko achchi na lagi ho to bhi reply ya.so that i'll try to improve.
Lul's_The_Great
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20th October 2003, 12:57 PM
nahe lul je
sache bat batain
to hum na ap ki post dekhi he ab
bakhuda
bohat omda poem
ap kay mounki tareef nahe ha
lakin ap ki ya poem really bohat omda ha
main to un logon na jinhon na abhi tak ap ki poem nahe pare
un ko recomend karon ga
kay is poem ko zaror parain
bohat he omda
hasalay gazal ha ap ka ya shair
Farishtey aakar pooche lehad me meri barbadi ki daasta,
Meri wafa dekh teri jafa bhi na batlayi humne,
bohat heomda
likhtay rhain
anas
do sache bol ,ek pyar bhuri muskan,thora pyar
kuch ziada mang lia keya hum ne,aa dostoo
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hiiiiiiiiiii -
24th October 2003, 08:50 AM
Hi,
Anas Ji,
Thanks a lot for replying.Muje to laga ki meri post kisi ko pasand nahi aayi.Par ab esa nahi hai.Thanks for the complement.
Ok by.
God bless you.
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24th October 2003, 02:33 PM
Dilki kalam achha likhi hein aapne. Likhte rahiyega. Shukriiya. Some how I missed this, sorry. Take care. God bless you.
*Aapni Parwaaz-e-Takhayyull Hain Zamane Se Juda
Jiss Jagah Koyi Na Pahuncha Wahaan Tak Pahunche
Main Samajhta Huun Harr Dil Mein Khuda Rehta Hain
Mera Paigam Mohabbat Hain Jaahan Tak Pahunche**
*~~~Ahsan Sherazi Jee~~~**
*Pure Love**
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28th October 2003, 08:17 PM
Hi, Shimul ji
thanks for your reply.
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29th October 2003, 03:04 PM
namaste... lul..ji..
wah yar.. .bahut khoob likha hai .. apne..bahut khub.. padh kar..sukoon .. mila... dil ko chu gayi apki yeah kalam yar.... waise too puri ki puri kalam bemisaal hai .. but.. these lines...are the best.. -->
Jab jana ki tere ghar me chirag jalta hi nahi,
Apni mehfil me shama bhi na jalayi humne,
Farishtey aakar pooche lehad me meri barbadi ki daasta,
Meri wafa dekh teri jafa bhi na batlayi humne,
aise hi likhte rahiye.. aur mehfil..sajate rahiye...
bye and take care..
Lamha Lamha...saSein Khatam hoo rai hai...
Zindagi Maut ke pehlu mein soo rai hai...
Us bewafa se na pucho meri maut ki wajah...
Woh to bus zamane ko dikhane ke liye roo rai hai...
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hiiiiii -
29th October 2003, 05:04 PM
Hi, me aur tanhai
Khushi hui ki apko meri post pasand aayi.And thank you for the reply.
Lul's_The_Great
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29th October 2003, 05:46 PM
LuL Jee
Aapsse iss site pe kaBHi RaBta NaHi Hua MaGaR apki kaLam BaHUt KHooBsuRaT Hai BaHut Hi acHHi GHazaL LikHi Hai aapNe maiN BaDNaseeB THaa ki aBHi tak maHRooM THaa isse ..
aapNe BeHaD KHooBsuRaT alfaazoN me juzBaat aDaayGi ki Hai ..
TaReef QaBuL FaRmaaiye
DeR se aaNe ke Liye MUaafi ka TaLaBGaaR HuN
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30th October 2003, 12:13 AM
lul ji jawab nahin aa ki is ghazal ka
Farishtey aakar pooche lehad me meri barbadi ki daasta,
Meri wafa dekh teri jafa bhi na batlayi humne,
Apne ashko ko syaahi banaya alfaaz banakar jazbaat,
Pyar ke kore kaagaz par dil ki kalam chalayi humne,
specialy in shers ka
keep writing plz
~~~~~~~Khushiii~~~~~~~
smile n make others also smile
those sparkling eyes
A 100 watt smile
the majestic walk
the cheerful talk
truly charming personality
Guess,thats enough abt me :D
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thx -
31st October 2003, 09:59 AM
Hi, Kshitiz ji
AApki reply ke liye shukriya.AAp isi tarah reply dete rahenge to i'll try to write even more better.
Ok bye.
GOd bless you.
Hi, Khushi ji,
Thanks for reading my post and replying back to it.
Bye.
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hi -
31st October 2003, 11:41 AM
Jab jana ki tere ghar me chirag jalta hi nahi,
Apni mehfil me shama bhi na jalayi humne,
pyaar ki ada to koi apse seekhe bhut acha likha hai apne yuhi likhte rahiye.
sakhi
कुछ ऐसे पल जिनको संजोना है ,
शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे
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2nd November 2003, 01:31 PM
hi,
Sakhi ji
Thanks a lot for appreciation.
God bless you.
Bye
Lul's_The_Great
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hello -
3rd November 2003, 02:07 PM
Lul Ji,
aapki yah line mujhe bahaut achchhi lagi.
Hum sochte the ki tum sada saath doge humara,
Yahi sochkar chodi thi apni hi parchayi humne,
achchha likha hai aapne. per laga jaise kuchh khoya khoya sa hai. dekhiyega..mujhe jo laga vo maine kah diya. samay ki bandish hai so esse jayada abhi nahi likh paunga.
Akant...
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आहट सी कोइ आये तो समझ लेना कि तुम हो...
AahaT si koi aaye to samajh lena ki tum ho...
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hiiiiiiiii -
3rd November 2003, 05:06 PM
Hi, Akant ji
Aapka reply padhkar achcha laga.
ok bye
take care
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