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8th September 2014, 10:59 AM
pehle karte ho hairaaN phir karte ho pashemaaN
kia iraaday le kar aaye the meri basti meiN jaaN!?
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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8th September 2014, 11:47 AM
waaaah bohat khooob... aur Naaz shikayat unhi se kii
jaati hai jinheN apna samjha jata hai....
jis adaa se barbaad hue haiN, kyuN ho pashemaan-nazaarii?
ab to fitrat ban chali hai 'parStaar' ki beqaraari-o-be-bezaari..
pashemaan nazaarii : penitent gaze
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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8th September 2014, 12:00 PM
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Waaahhhhh! A very thoughtful sarcastic remark....well done jij
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Thanx a lot saali sahiba........
Mohabbat ke ye silsile na the
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Waaaahhhhhh! too good jij your insight on life & human behaviour is truly commendable...impressive
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Thank you so much for the appreciation saali sahiba...bohat shukriya
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wahhhh! kia baat hai sir.... be-had umdaaH khayaal.
zamaanay ki haqeeqat .. aik kaDwi haqeeqat.. dherooN daad....
waaahh! Ananth sir.. yeHi zindagi ki sacchai hai ..
bohat bohat khoob... aap ne aik sabQ diya hai .. ke zindagi aise
guzaarni chahiye...... hats off!
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Bohat bohat shukriya Hassan bhai...thanx a lot
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pehle karte ho hairaaN phir karte ho pashemaaN
kia iraaday le kar aaye the meri basti meiN jaaN!?
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Waaaahhhh!!! Bohat khoob Hassan bhai
Mohabbat ke ye silsile na the
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8th September 2014, 12:06 PM
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itnii baada-noshii karne de k hojaye halaq kHuu.n-chakaa.n*
kahin nikal jaaye gham-e-zindagi sa.ng-e-kHuu.n-baar**
* blood drenched
**with oozing blood
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Bahot khoob thought hai jij lekin misra e saani meiN thodi confusion hai mujhe
did you mean 'kii' or 'kaash' nikal jaaye gham-e-zindagi sang-e-khooN-baar"
kyunki 'kahin' word ek confusion create kar raha hai i think ap ek wish kar rahe haiN ki 'hopefully sorrows of life would come out with the oozing of blood' so according to my limited khowledge i think 'kahin' ko symbolically bhi use nahiN kar sakte i wud really like zarraji's opinion on this...aur jij hats off what a thought brilliant
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Thanx a lot saali sahiba....u raised a good point...i would also like to know zarraa sahabs opinion on this...according to my limited knowledge “kahii.n...“ also means “ke“ or ‘‘of“ and “lest“. I think you are hinting at kahiin as a symbol for “place “...which is not what I meant here.Anyways, respected Aadeil & Zarraa sahab‘s viewpoints are much awaited.
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lol jij zarraji ko humeiN kaha tha break lene ab hum hi unke liye sawaal lekar baithey hain
Waise is baat par humare ustaad ki commentary zaruri hai nahiN to hum student apni limited knowledge ki wajahse kuch ka kuch matlab nikaltey rahenge
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sab se pehle to Ananth sahab ke is sher par beshumaar daad !!
waah waah waah waah waah waah !!! khoon ke saath gham nikal jaaye !! kis qadar pur-asar aur ba-lutf (shayari ke hisaab se ba-lutf ) bayaan hai !! dher saaree daad is par.
bas ek chhoti si baat aur. Ananth sahab, lafz "khoon-baar" mujhe ek adjective sa jaan parh raha hai, apni limited knowledge ke daayre mein. aap agar use as adjective maan kar nazr-e-saani kar lein agar aap ko theek lage and decide accordingly.
aur ek baar phir Ananath sahab aur N@zneen ji ka shukriya ki unhone ek bahaut hi achchha learning based discussion chherh ke is activity ka sahi maqsad haasil karne ka kaam kiya hai.
meri sabhi members jo is activity ko follow kar rahe hain un se appeal karta hoon ki agar is muamale par roshni daal sakein to humein seekhne ka mauka mulega.
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Bohat bohat shukriya Zarraa sahab nawazish k liye...and as far as the discussion is concerned we shall wait for Aadeil sahabs views too before concluding anything on this topic
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itnii baada-noshii karne de k hojaye halaq kHuu.n-chakaa.n*
kahin nikal jaaye gham-e-zindagi sa.ng-e-kHuu.n-baar**
let there be so much wine drinking that the throat gets blood-drenched
lest the sorrow of life flows away along with oozing blood
Ananthji, Naaz, Zarraasaab,
aap sabse pehle to maazrat-khvaah hooN jo itnii der se iis mudde pe javaab de rahaa hooN... magar ek to weekend tha aur dusra, mera maannaa hai ki agar koii discussion ho rahii hai to usspe thoRi information gather karnaa zarurii hota hai to lijiye.... Ananthji ke sher kii pehle hi English tarjumaaii kar dii hai aur niche merii raaye
behad khubusrat sher kahaa aur maine aap sab ke comments aur Zarraasaab kii explanation ko bhii paRHaa aur mere hisaab se ye sher bahot hi khubsurat baat bayaaN kar jaati hai... ek gehre dard ko shaayar ne iis qadr bayaaN kiya hai ki ek misaal ban jaaye...
Zarraasaab ne bahot hi umdaa mudda uTHaayaa hai khuu.n-baar jumle ko leke...
yahaaN pe meri nazar jaati hai pure jumle saNg-e-khuuN-baar pe....
yahaaN shaayad Ananthji ne saNg ko 'saath'/together ke maanee meN pesh kiya hai, jab ki urdu zubaan meN uska maanee hota hai 'stone'. to wahaaN urdu shaayrii paRhne wale ke dimaag meN uljhan paida karta hai ye jumla... uske alaavaa jaise Zaraasaab ne jo baat kahi hai, khuu.n-baar ko leke, to us pe bhii gaur karnaa zarurii hai... wo ek adjective hai...
kuchh ashaar shoraoN ke khuu.n-baar jumle pe....
yuN gavaaraa hai ye kHuu.n-baar ufuq kaa manzar
is ke partav meN hameN taaza jahaaN milte haiN
-- Moin Ahsan Jazbi
vo mahaktaa huaa jhoNkaa tha ki neze kii anii
chhuu ke gayaa hai to khuu.n-baar kiyaa hai mujhko
-- Abdur Rahim Nashtar
aur Mirza Ghalib saab ko kaise bhul sakte haiN?
tab naaz-e-giraaN maaigi-e-ashk bajaa hai
jab laKHt-e-jigar diida-e-KHuu.n-baar meN aave
aur
dast-gaah-e-diida-e-kHuu.n-baar-e-majnuuN dekhnaa
yak-bayaabaaN jalva-e-gul farsh-e-paa-andaaz hai
ab Ghalib saab kii baat to niraali hai unke bayaanaat hamesha se hi dilchasp hote haiN to khuu.n-baar ko leke unke jumle bhii niraale haiN.. jahaaN unhoN ne dono ashaar meN use symbolic rakhe haiN...
ab agar gaur kareN pehle do ashaar pe to vahaaN khuu.n-baar ko kiis tarah istemaal kiya hai wo zehn meN lenaa zarurii hai...
pehle sher meN Moin saab kehte haiN ki khuu.n-baar ufuq ka manzar uNhe gavaaraa hai (khuu.n-baar ufuq) horizon oozing blood....
jaise Zarraasaab ne kahaa hai, yahaaN iise ek adjective kii tarah istemaal kiya hai....
dusre sher meN Nashtar saab kehte haiN ki neze kii anii jab unko chhuu ke gayii to uNhe khuuN-baar kar gayii... (to live oozing blood)....
to agar dusre sher ke liyaaz meN hum Ananthji ka sher paRHey to wo qaabil-e-taarif hai... aur bilkul jaaiiz hai...
sirf jumla-e-'sa.ng-e-khuu.n-baar' ki jagah agar 'khuu.n-baar ho kar' kaa istemaal kareN...
to agar ye sher yuN kahaa jaaye..
itnii baada-noshii karne de k hojaye halaq kHuu.n-chakaa.n
kahin nikal jaaye gham-e-zindagi kHuu.n-baar ho kar
to puri baat ayaan ho jaati hai....
meri bas adnaa si raaye qaayam kii hai...
Ananthji, ya kisii aur shaayar kaa agar alag interpretation ho to their opinions are also welcome
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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8th September 2014, 12:07 PM
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qatl ke lagta hai mere is qadar charche huwe
ke tamaashaayee pashemaaN saNg qaatil ke huwe
- zarraa
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tere mustaqil* faislon se hi teri hayaat hai
kabhi pashemaanii** na karna intikhaab*** k baad
*firm
**regret
***choice
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wah wah...bohat khoob. ...................
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
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8th September 2014, 12:07 PM
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waaaah bohat khooob... aur Naaz shikayat unhi se kii
jaati hai jinheN apna samjha jata hai....
jis adaa se barbaad hue haiN, kyuN ho pashemaan-nazaarii?
ab to fitrat ban chali hai 'parStaar' ki beqaraari-o-be-bezaari..
pashemaan nazaarii : penitent gaze
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Waaaaaahhhhhhhh!!!!! Kya baat hai Hassan bhai...great lines...dheron daad
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8th September 2014, 12:20 PM
Adil bhai,
Pehle to aap ke tajziye aur chaan-bheen ke liye, maiN aap ko
daad pesh karta hooN. Lekin jahaN tak meri kam-aqli hai
zubaan-e-Urdu meiN .. sung ke maiyne ... saath ke bhi haiN....
toH mere hisaab se Ananth sir ke sher meiN amendment na bhi
ki jaye to its understood.
e.g. sang ho lena.... accompany!
Aap meri raaye se ikhtilaaf bhi kar saktay haiN!
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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8th September 2014, 12:23 PM
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tu hai ghareeb to kya na ho pashemaan
tera dil bada hai ameeron ki tijoriyon se
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Originally Posted by ananthpak
tere mustaqil* faislon se hi teri hayaat hai
kabhi pashemaanii** na karna intikhaab*** k baad
*firm
**regret
***choice
Your life is all about your firm decisions....never regret after u have made a choice.
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waaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!
Ananthji,
dono ashaar behad hi gehre aur inter-related haiN jo har aam insaan se juDe bayaanaat karte haiN.............
dheroN dheroN daad.................
Adil
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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8th September 2014, 12:24 PM
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Waaaahhhh!!! Bohat khoob Hassan bhai
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Waaaaaahhhhhhhh!!!!! Kya baat hai Hassan bhai...great lines...dheron daad
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mohabbatoN se nawaazne ke liye bohat bohat
shukriyaaH Ananth sir! I'm highly obliged.
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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8th September 2014, 12:31 PM
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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8th September 2014, 12:31 PM
beti ke janam pe na ho pashemaaN!
kal yeHi roshan kare gi tera jahaN....
janam : birth
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
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8th September 2014, 12:36 PM
Wese to Adil bhai aisi bohat si misaleN haiN,
jin meiN shoar'aa ne sang word saath ke taur pe istemaal kiya ho..
lekin abhi maiN Faiz Ahmed Faiz saheb ki ghazal ka matla pesh karta hooN:-
na ghanwao nawak-e-neem-kash, dil reza reza ganwa diya
jo bacche haiN sung samait loH, tan-e-daag daag luta diya ..
umeed hai ab koi abhaam nahi rahe ga!
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tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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8th September 2014, 12:38 PM
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qatl ke lagta hai mere is qadar charche huwe
ke tamaashaayee pashemaaN saNg qaatil ke huwe
- zarraa
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waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhh!!!!
Zarraasaab,
bahot hi khub sher kahaa hai...
aur ab charche iisii lafz 'saNg' pe hue haiN ....
ab aapne bhii uska istemaal kiya hai to aapse bhii uspe koii suggestion/explanation maangtaa hooN.....
gustaakhii ke liye muaafee ka arz-mand hooN....
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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8th September 2014, 12:55 PM
Adil bhai,
Hum iss adab ki meHfil meiN seekhne sikhaane ke liye haiN,
kuch maiN aap se sekhooN ga.. kuch aap mujhe se,
aur aise hi yeH sisila chalta rahe ga... meri baat ko samajhne
ke liye teh-e-dil se shukriyaaH!
I'm happy that we've very sensible members at SDC.
Take care,
Regards,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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8th September 2014, 12:58 PM
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pehle karte ho hairaaN phir karte ho pashemaaN
kia iraaday le kar aaye the meri basti meiN jaaN!?
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oh! oh! oh!
kya baat hai, Hassanbhai.........
waakaii ek fusuun hai iis sher meN.....
sarcasm in pain...........
waaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhh!!!!
bahot hi khub...............
dheroN dheroN daad.....
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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oh! oh! oh!
kya baat hai, Hassanbhai.........
waakaii ek fusuun hai iis sher meN.....
sarcasm in pain...........
waaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhh!!!!
bahot hi khub...............
dheroN dheroN daad.....
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Adil bhai,
Bohat bohat shukriyaaH! .. wese jab sacche jazboN ko jab alfaazoN ka roop
diya jaaye to kuch aise hi khiyalaat umaD aatay haiN....
aik baar phir se shukriyaaH!
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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8th September 2014, 01:23 PM
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tumhare sher ke jawaab meiN meri ek koshish.........
JaaN bhi kehte ho pashemaaN bhi kartey ho
Ye adaa bhi dil-bar mere dil loot le gayii
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waaaah bohat khooob... aur Naaz shikayat unhi se kii
jaati hai jinheN apna samjha jata hai....
jis adaa se barbaad hue haiN, kyuN ho pashemaan-nazaarii?
ab to fitrat ban chali hai 'parStaar' ki beqaraari-o-be-bezaari..
pashemaan nazaarii : penitent gaze
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waaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhh!!!
dono ne behad hi khub surat ashaar pesh kiye haiN........
dheroN dheroN daad.............
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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8th September 2014, 01:55 PM
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beti ke janam pe na ho pashemaaN!
kal yeHi roshan kare gi tera jahaN....
janam : birth
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ek behad anmol baat karii hai, Hassanbhai............
dheroN dheroN dheroN daad aur waaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhh hi waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhh....
iis besh-kimmatii sher per.....
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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8th September 2014, 02:25 PM
ek adnaa si koshish... meri bhii
arey insaan! tu kitnaa hai pashemaan?
kare bad-karm jab bhii, zudd-pashemaan*?
(*repenting too soon)
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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8th September 2014, 02:44 PM
pashemaanoN meN uNkaa kya hisaab hai
kare zulm aamii* pe band-e-naqaab** hai
(*commoner, aam aadmii; **hidden, closed behind veil)
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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8th September 2014, 02:48 PM
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waaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhh!!!
dono ne behad hi khub surat ashaar pesh kiye haiN........
dheroN dheroN daad.............
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Originally Posted by aadeil
ek behad anmol baat karii hai, Hassanbhai............
dheroN dheroN dheroN daad aur waaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhh hi waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhh....
iis besh-kimmatii sher per.....
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Adil bhai..
Mashkoor-o-manoon hooN aap ni inayat ke liye,
ke aap ne khaak lafzooN ko itni tarjeeH-o-wuqqat bakhshi.....
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tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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8th September 2014, 02:49 PM
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ek adnaa si koshish... meri bhii
arey insaan! tu kitnaa hai pashemaan?
kare bad-karm jab bhii, zudd-pashemaan*?
(*repenting too soon)
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Adil bhai....
Sher qaabil-e-daad hai lekin misra-saani zara samjha deN..
aur bad-karm ke meaning kia haiN! ...
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tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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8th September 2014, 02:51 PM
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pashemaanoN meN uNkaa kya hisaab hai
kare zulm aamii* pe band-e-naqaab** hai
(*commoner, aam aadmii; **hidden, closed behind veil)
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waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahh! Waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhh!
Adil bhai... kabhi kabhi aap kamaal hi kar dete ho,
bohat aala khayaal pesh kiya hai .. aur kia takhuyyul hai janab..
wahh waah..... naqab ke peeche ki khoobsorati dekhne ke to
hum bhi khuwaahaaN haiN.... janay kab deekh paatay haiN
too good..... daad hi daad.....
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tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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8th September 2014, 02:55 PM
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ek behad anmol baat karii hai, Hassanbhai............
dheroN dheroN dheroN daad aur waaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhh hi waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhh....
iis besh-kimmatii sher per.....
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Adil bhai,,
Bohat bohat shukriyaaH pasandeedgi ke liye ...
lekin jo dil meiN baat thii aur aaj kal jo dekhta hooN apne aas paas...
to bohat dukh hota hai... meri yeH koshsih ussi dard ke naam.. aik peghaam sabhi ke liye...
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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8th September 2014, 03:01 PM
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Adil bhai....
Sher qaabil-e-daad hai lekin misra-saani zara samjha deN..
aur bad-karm ke meaning kia haiN! ...
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Hassanbhai,
ek adnaa si koshish kii hai ek insaan kii fitrat ko leke...
pehle bad-karm ke maanii keh deta hooN, bad-karm ka maanii hai, kuu-karm ya bad-deeds....
aur har insaan kii ye fitrat hoti hai ki, jab bhii bad-karm karta hai to pashemaan hota hai, aur phir bad-karm kartaa hai aur ye silsila khatm nahi hota
toh, misra-e-ulaa meN tanz hai, 'arey insaan! tu kitnaa pashemaan hote rahega?'
aur misra-e-saanii meN usii tanz meN...
kuu-karm karte rehtaa hai aur turant pashemaan bhii hota hai?'.....
koii galtii huii ho kahiN to zaahir kijiyegaa
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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8th September 2014, 03:05 PM
PashemaaN hu maiN yehi soch soch kar,
ki barsoN door rehkar kaise jiya hai tu..!
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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8th September 2014, 03:06 PM
pehle to itnii taarif ke liye aapka shukriya adaa kartaa hooN... aur janaab ek ishaaraa band-e-naqaab kii taraf, toh hameshaa naqaab ke pichhe khubsurtii nahi hoti
kaii zulm band-e-naqaab hote haiN jo hum jaise aam insaanoN ko sehne paRte haiN jab ki hum toh usme shaamil bhii nahi... aise naqaab-posh ke zulm ke pashemaan ka kya hisaab lagaayenge hum aur aap?
duaaoN ke saath.......
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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8th September 2014, 03:07 PM
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PashemaaN hu maiN yehi soch soch kar,
ki barsoN door rehkar kaise jiya hai tu..!
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waaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhh!!!! Di,
dilse nikle iis jazbaat pe hamaare dil se dheroN dheroN daad.......
duaaoN ke saath....
Adil
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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8th September 2014, 03:07 PM
waahhh .. Adil bhai.... zaberdast.... behad umdaH aur ba-kamal sher hai..
DherooN dherooN daad pesh-e-nazar hai...
lekin mere hisaab se yeH lafz bad-karm nahi ho ga bad-karam ho ga..
tabhi maiN pehli nazar meiN nahi samajh paya...
aap ikhtilaaf-e-raaye bhi rakh saktay haiN...
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tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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8th September 2014, 03:10 PM
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PashemaaN hu maiN yehi soch soch kar,
ki barsoN door rehkar kaise jiya hai tu..!
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waaah waaah bajii...
aap ne meHfil-e-fusoon-e-alfaaz meiN come back aik dhamakay daar sher ke saath kiya hai
too good baaji.... iss ba-kamal aur be-misaal sher ke liye dherooN daad
pesh-e-khidmat hai...
Aate rahiye aur aise hi jalway bekhairtay rahiye....
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tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
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8th September 2014, 03:17 PM
HSN bhai...pehli baar es thread par sher post kiya hai...bahut dinoN se soch rhi thi ki kuch post karuN par himmat nahi ho rhi thi...kyuki yahan sabhi ke sher bahut kamaal ke hote hai...to aaj bahut himmat juta ke aaye hu es thread par
aap to bahut acche shayar ho muje saaf saaf bata dijiye ki kya yeh sher sahi ban paya hai ?
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8th September 2014, 03:17 PM
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tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
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8th September 2014, 03:20 PM
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HSN bhai...pehli baar es thread par sher post kiya hai...bahut dinoN se soch rhi thi ki kuch post karuN par himmat nahi ho rhi thi...kyuki yahan sabhi ke sher bahut kamaal ke hote hai...to aaj bahut himmat juta ke aaye hu es thread par
aap to bahut acche shayar ho muje saaf saaf bata dijiye ki kya yeh sher sahi ban paya hai ?
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Baaji.. aap aisa keH kar mujhe sharmindaH kar rahi haiN,
aap ka hur sher, hur kalaam ba-kamaal hota hai.. aur iss baat ke hum
shuru se qaayal haiN.....aur jahaN tak rahi iss sher ki baat to iss sher
ki jitni bhi tareef ki jaye kam hai..... aik baar phir se dherooN daad ka
guldasta aap ke iss besh-qeemati sher ke liye...
Apna khayal rakhiye ga,
DuaooN ke saath,
Aap ka bhai,
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tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
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8th September 2014, 05:00 PM
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waahhh .. Adil bhai.... zaberdast.... behad umdaH aur ba-kamal sher hai..
DherooN dherooN daad pesh-e-nazar hai...
lekin mere hisaab se yeH lafz bad-karm nahi ho ga bad-karam ho ga..
tabhi maiN pehli nazar meiN nahi samajh paya...
aap ikhtilaaf-e-raaye bhi rakh saktay haiN...
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Hassanbhai
daad ke liye phirse shukriya
ab lafz karam ke maanee jahaaN tak maiN samjhaa hooN to wo ehsaan hai jaise rehmo karam karnaa. Aur karm ka matlab hai act or deed. Ye meri Urdu kii kam aqlii bhii ho sakti haiN. Vaise aise masle uTHaate rahiyega taaki hamaare ilm meN muzaafaa hota rahe
aur shaayar dostoN kii raaye kaa bhii intezaar rahega
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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8th September 2014, 10:11 PM
[QUOTE=N@zneen;467916] Waaaaahhhhhhh! behad umdaa PS dil fareb andaaz meiN shikayat kar rahe ho too good....waise kisse shikayat kar rahe ho
tumhare sher ke jawaab meiN meri ek koshish.........JaaN bhi kehte ho pashemaaN bhi kartey ho
Ye adaa bhi dil-bar mere dil loot le gayii
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bohat khoob saali sahiba.......
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8th September 2014, 10:31 PM
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Hassanbhai
daad ke liye phirse shukriya
ab lafz karam ke maanee jahaaN tak maiN samjhaa hooN to wo ehsaan hai jaise rehmo karam karnaa. Aur karm ka matlab hai act or deed. Ye meri Urdu kii kam aqlii bhii ho sakti haiN. Vaise aise masle uTHaate rahiyega taaki hamaare ilm meN muzaafaa hota rahe
aur shaayar dostoN kii raaye kaa bhii intezaar rahega
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aadaab !
sab se pehly to ma'zrat keh binaa ijjazat madakhlat ker rahaa hoN kiyoN keh na to mai shayar hoN or naa hi koi adeeb , lughat se lafz dhoondh ker appke saamny pesh ker rahaa hoN ho sakta hai appki koi madad ho jaaey
karam = sakhawat , bakhshish , naik amal , sharafat
generosity; nobleness; goodness, kindness; beneficence; grace, favour; action, deed
karm = amal , faSl , naSeeb , Qismat
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