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Mitti daldo ab koi ke pareshan hun mein… -
6th September 2003, 02:39 PM
jab dil tanhaai mein doobta hai kuch tootne ki awaaz aati hai. nazre charo or ghabrakar dekhti hai aur dhoondhti hain ke kya toot gaya??...lekin phir ek halki si hasi hoto pe ajati hai aur yaad aata hai ke ye jo toota hai woh kuch aur nahi mera dil hai.unki yaadon ki dastak itni tez thi ke mere dil ke darwaaze toot gaye phir ek baar....
Khoon mein lipti ek laash hun mein, Jaane kyun aaj itni udaas hun mein, Bekafan bechain yaha padi hun mein, Jaane kiska utra hua libaas hun mein, Sabki nazron ka khuaf lagti hun mein, Jane kaisi veeran kaali raat hun mein, Raste ka akela mayus pathar hun mein, Jane kiska toota hua khwaab hun mein, Soch me yuhi lahuluhan padi hun mein, Jane kiska daba kuchla gulab hun mein, Ek khali kabr ki aaj talabgaar hun mein, Mitti daldo ab koi ke pareshan hun mein Subha Kii Gard MeiN Naa Kho JaayeiN Aa ! Tere Gham MeiN Jaagtii AankheiN Kam Se Kam Aik Raat So JaayeiN." **~*FaRhAnA*~** |
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6th September 2003, 02:46 PM
Farhana ji,
kya qayaamat likhi hai aapne!! Dard se sisakte hue apke alfaaz paR kar dil kaaNp sa gaya hai.. waqai.. tanhai me bewafai ki yaadein ghazab kar jaati hain.. dil to tooTa hua tha hi, iske TukRon ko bhi biker jaati hain. Aksar aise kalaam paRne milte hain jo behad khubsoorat hote hai.. itne ki tareef kiye bina raha nahi jaata.. lekin inme itna dard simTa hota hai, ki inki shaan me kuchh kehna, tareef kum, tauheen zyada lagti hai... Bas.. yahi kahenge.. ki aap likhti rahein.. |
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shukriya! -
6th September 2003, 02:54 PM
kaisi hain aap afshaan?bada accha laga aapka reply padhke.aur apki tareef ke liye shukriya.sahi kaha apne tanhaai mein aksar bewafa ki yaadein gazab kar jati hain!!dil jab rota hai toh uske aasun kisiko nazar nahi aate hain aur mujhe toh aankhon se rone ki aadat bhi nahi rahi hai ab,kyun kisiko apne assun dikhayen jab yeh aasun paani se bhi halke kisiko lagte hain.khair yeh toh zindagi hai...jiye jarahe hain jane kis ummeed ke sahare....kat jayegi umar yuhin..
kisine kaha hai, toofane yaas,dard ki lehren,hujume gham.. sarmaya bas yahi hai dil-e-bekarar ka...... Subha Kii Gard MeiN Naa Kho JaayeiN Aa ! Tere Gham MeiN Jaagtii AankheiN Kam Se Kam Aik Raat So JaayeiN." **~*FaRhAnA*~** |
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Zor E Ishq hai |
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Zor E Ishq hai -
6th September 2003, 05:46 PM
lagta hai aap ko kafi dard mila hai zindagi main
koie baat nahi ager aap ka dard kaam hoo duwa kaorwga Gam woh cheez hai Gam woh cheez hai Gam woh cheez hai Jisse kagaz chipkaye jaate hain zara muskura na ok B'coz pyar hi zindagi hai aur zindagi pyar hai |
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thanx -
7th September 2003, 10:27 PM
hi nasir,
apka bahaut bahaut shukriya jo aapne mujhe hasane ki koshish ki...gham toh bahaut mile hain haan par aap ki badaulat has bhi liya humne.aise hi hamein hasate rahiyega....bada accha laga apka reply padhke.keep in touch.bye. Subha Kii Gard MeiN Naa Kho JaayeiN Aa ! Tere Gham MeiN Jaagtii AankheiN Kam Se Kam Aik Raat So JaayeiN." **~*FaRhAnA*~** |
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7th September 2003, 10:33 PM
Rukhsana jee
bahut dard liye hei ye work aapka. Magar hila deta hei ye sach me. itna dard to sirf dil me paida hota hei magar kalam se isko bahut kam likh sakte hein. aapne bahut ache se kiya ye. Raste ka akela mayus pathar hun mein, Jane kiska toota hua khwaab hun mein, इस भरे शहर में हम Dard-e-Sush, जो न पाया उसे भी खोते हैं! lab pe muskaan ko liye ae dost, kandhon pe laash apni dhote hein is bhare sheher me ham dard-e-sush, jo na paaya use bhi khote hein |
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7th September 2003, 10:34 PM
Mere khudaya maaf karna mujhe
farhana jee galti se rukhsana likh diya mene. i m sorry indeed. halat bahut kharab hei apni ab to apna bhi pata bhool gaye hein jese इस भरे शहर में हम Dard-e-Sush, जो न पाया उसे भी खोते हैं! lab pe muskaan ko liye ae dost, kandhon pe laash apni dhote hein is bhare sheher me ham dard-e-sush, jo na paaya use bhi khote hein |
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hi -
7th September 2003, 10:59 PM
Dard-e-sush sahab,
kaise hain aap???hehe well apne toh mera naam hi badal diya.khair humne aapki maufi kubool ki.ghalti hojati hai kabhi kabhi...shukriya apki tareef ke liye.mera dard toh isse bhi zyada hai par isse kaapte hue lafz nahi mil parahe the isliye yahi likh paayi.keep in touch......magar aindah naam yaad rakhiyega.hehe. Subha Kii Gard MeiN Naa Kho JaayeiN Aa ! Tere Gham MeiN Jaagtii AankheiN Kam Se Kam Aik Raat So JaayeiN." **~*FaRhAnA*~** |
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very good |
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very good -
8th September 2003, 08:33 PM
wah frahana ji
mujhe lagta hai app mujh se zyadah is dard main doob chuki hoo wese app ne boohat accha likha hai mujhe bohat accha laga keep it up good ur unknown replier HBK(heart broken kid) |
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thanx -
9th September 2003, 12:06 AM
mustaqim ji,
kaise hain aap???sahi akha apne mera dard toh samundar se bhi gehra hai aasmaan se bhi vishaal hai....khair ab aadat hogayi hai.aapko mera likkha pasand aaya meri khush naseebi..keep in tuch.apki dost. Subha Kii Gard MeiN Naa Kho JaayeiN Aa ! Tere Gham MeiN Jaagtii AankheiN Kam Se Kam Aik Raat So JaayeiN." **~*FaRhAnA*~** |
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15th September 2003, 10:05 AM
Der se aane ki gustakhi ki hai..maafi chahta huun..
Aapne jo likha farhana ji usne dil ko cheer diya..apni mayoosi ko shabdon mein khoob dhaala hai aapne.. aapke dard ne dil ko hila karr rakh diya.. chal waha chal jahan tere jaise aur bhi hai... |
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shukriya -
15th September 2003, 12:14 PM
hello varinder
der aye durust aye varinderji,hehe. mujhe khushi hai ke apko meri ye peshkash bhi pasand aayi...jab tak apka feedback nahi milta likhna bekaar lagta hai...aur haan apko maafi mangne ki zarurat nahi hai...apke ke liye sab maaf hai..take care alwaz Subha Kii Gard MeiN Naa Kho JaayeiN Aa ! Tere Gham MeiN Jaagtii AankheiN Kam Se Kam Aik Raat So JaayeiN." **~*FaRhAnA*~** |
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23rd October 2003, 01:27 AM
farhana je .. mei jab bhi shayri.com pe aaya isko padha har baar ..
meri pehchaan bayaan hei is kalam me ..... rok na saka phir se reply karne se khuda hafiz इस भरे शहर में हम Dard-e-Sush, जो न पाया उसे भी खोते हैं! lab pe muskaan ko liye ae dost, kandhon pe laash apni dhote hein is bhare sheher me ham dard-e-sush, jo na paaya use bhi khote hein |
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23rd October 2003, 02:16 AM
Dard hi dard hein. Mein toh aur bhi der se reply kar rahi hu.
Pata nehi keise miss hogayi hein mujhse. Aap toh bohot achha likhti hein. Samunder se gehra dard aapki hein, janke bohot mehsoosh huyi. Waise bhi samajh toh ati hein. Mein toh duwa karsakti hu ke aapko chain mile, kuch hi sahi. Baas aur samajh sakti hu, aur kuch nehi hu mein. Shukriya. Aapna khayal rakhiyega. Khuda Hafiz. Jiss Jagah Koyi Na Pahuncha Wahaan Tak Pahunche Main Samajhta Huun Harr Dil Mein Khuda Rehta Hain Mera Paigam Mohabbat Hain Jaahan Tak Pahunche** *~~~Ahsan Sherazi Jee~~~** *Pure Love** |
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23rd October 2003, 02:18 AM
Great Jee, shukriya aapka ke mein aaj yeh kalam parsaki. Dilse shukriya kabul kijiyega. Aapna khayal rakhiyega. God bless you.
Jiss Jagah Koyi Na Pahuncha Wahaan Tak Pahunche Main Samajhta Huun Harr Dil Mein Khuda Rehta Hain Mera Paigam Mohabbat Hain Jaahan Tak Pahunche** *~~~Ahsan Sherazi Jee~~~** *Pure Love** |
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24th September 2005, 03:22 AM
Once again..
this one is outstanding.. Regards इस भरे शहर में हम Dard-e-Sush, जो न पाया उसे भी खोते हैं! lab pe muskaan ko liye ae dost, kandhon pe laash apni dhote hein is bhare sheher me ham dard-e-sush, jo na paaya use bhi khote hein |
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susheel -
24th September 2005, 07:46 AM
bade lambe arse baad is shayri pe meri nazar padi hai aur woh bhi susheel ji apki wajah se.thank u so much itni tareef ke liye.
Subha Kii Gard MeiN Naa Kho JaayeiN Aa ! Tere Gham MeiN Jaagtii AankheiN Kam Se Kam Aik Raat So JaayeiN." **~*FaRhAnA*~** |
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shimul -
24th September 2005, 07:49 AM
bade arse baad apki is tareef ka jawab de rahi hoon.maafi chahti hoon....thanks so much.ummeed hai ki aap yuhin mujhe apni raye aur mashwarhe se waqif karati rahengi.thanks again.take care.bye
Subha Kii Gard MeiN Naa Kho JaayeiN Aa ! Tere Gham MeiN Jaagtii AankheiN Kam Se Kam Aik Raat So JaayeiN." **~*FaRhAnA*~** |
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24th September 2005, 11:15 AM
ye sach me ek bemisaal creation hai farhana... bahut bahutexpressive... ek ek lafz reality show kar raha hai... maano sabhi ke thake dil ko nichod kar lafzo me piro diya... great job dear
 take care ****** Your attitude towards life decides Life's attitude towards you... |
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pallavi -
24th September 2005, 07:54 PM
thanks so much pallaviji.i m glad you too liked it.take care.
Subha Kii Gard MeiN Naa Kho JaayeiN Aa ! Tere Gham MeiN Jaagtii AankheiN Kam Se Kam Aik Raat So JaayeiN." **~*FaRhAnA*~** |
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24th April 2007, 02:22 PM
This one is amaging... One of the bests I ever read.
God Blees U Farhana. Regards इस भरे शहर में हम Dard-e-Sush, जो न पाया उसे भी खोते हैं! lab pe muskaan ko liye ae dost, kandhon pe laash apni dhote hein is bhare sheher me ham dard-e-sush, jo na paaya use bhi khote hein |
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24th April 2007, 03:54 PM
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Farhana ji...aslaam wale-kum....aapki gazal kaya kahu....bahut kamaal ka likha hai aapne....har sher dil ko chu gaya...kisi ek sher ki tareef nahi kar sakti har sher lajwaab hai....kudha aapki kalam aur jayada hunar se nawaze. aapki dost .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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bhut khub -
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