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2nd October 2010, 04:28 PM
Mehfil ko Zainy ka Salaam..
Bohat dino baad kuch likhne ka mann kiya.....ummid hai aapko pasand aayega..
Aapki raey ka intezaar rahega
Ghair Muraddif Ghazal hai,
Behr :Mutaqarib Musamman Salim
122/122/122/122
Yeh kaisa hai bandhan hamaara tumhaara
HuuN mai ik kinaara ,ho tum ik kinaara
Na shikwa koyi ,naa shikayat hai tumse
ZubaaN bhi hai khamosh,or dil bhi haara
Mere aashiyaane se, gum jo huye tum
Huye ghamzada phool-o-kaante bhi yaara
Na puche koi humse furqat ki bateiN
Na poocho gham-e hijr kaise guzaara
Nazar ko nazar ki nazar lag na jaaye
Hai charoN taraf bas tera hi nazaara
DuaaooN me meri asar ho bas itna
Ho deedaar-e-mehboob mere khudaara
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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2nd October 2010, 04:38 PM
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Originally Posted by zainy
Mehfil ko Zainy ka Salaam..
Bohat dino baad kuch likhne ka mann kiya.....ummid hai aapko pasand aayega..
Aapki raey ka intezaar rahega
Ghair Muraddif Ghazal hai,
Behr :Mutaqarib Musamman Salim
122/122/122/122
Yeh kaisa hai bandhan hamaara tumhaara
HuuN mai ik kinaara ,ho tum ik kinaara
Na shikwa koyi ,na shikayat hai tumse
ZubaaN bhi hai khamosh,or dil bhi haara
Mere aashiyaane se, gum jo huye tum
Huye ghamzada phool-o-kaante bhi yaara
Na puche koi humse furqat ki bateiN
Na poocho shab-e hijr kaise guzaara
Nazar ko nazar ki nazar lag na jaaye
Hai charoN taraf bas tera hi nazaara
DuaaooN me meri asar ho bas itna
Ho deedaar-e-mehboob mere khudaara
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zainy jii
radhe radhe
wah bahut khoob saare ashar ek se badh kar ek hain dil se daad
duaon ke saath
mujhe is ghazal ke ye teen sher dil ko jyada bha gaye
Na puche koi humse furqat ki bateiN
Na poocho shab-e hijr kaise guzaara
Nazar ko nazar ki nazar lag na jaaye
Hai charoN taraf bas tera hi nazaara
DuaaooN me meri asar ho bas itna
Ho deedaar-e-mehboob mere khudaara
Aapka Apna Ishk
'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है
इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है
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2nd October 2010, 05:39 PM
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Mehfil ko Zainy ka Salaam..
Bohat dino baad kuch likhne ka mann kiya.....ummid hai aapko pasand aayega..
Aapki raey ka intezaar rahega
Ghair Muraddif Ghazal hai,
Behr :Mutaqarib Musamman Salim
122/122/122/122
Yeh kaisa hai bandhan hamaara tumhaara
HuuN mai ik kinaara ,ho tum ik kinaara
Na shikwa koyi ,na shikayat hai tumse
ZubaaN bhi hai khamosh,or dil bhi haara
Mere aashiyaane se, gum jo huye tum
Huye ghamzada phool-o-kaante bhi yaara
Na puche koi humse furqat ki bateiN
Na poocho shab-e hijr kaise guzaara
Nazar ko nazar ki nazar lag na jaaye
Hai charoN taraf bas tera hi nazaara
DuaaooN me meri asar ho bas itna
Ho deedaar-e-mehboob mere khudaara
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bahut khoobsurat ghazal kahi hai aapne zainy ji...
bahut achha laga padh kar...
daad haazir hai qubuul kijiyega...
'E Taahire Laahuti!!!
Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali
Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho
Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi....
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2nd October 2010, 06:21 PM
Yeh kaisa hai bandhan hamaara tumhaara
HuuN mai ik kinaara ,ho tum ik kinaara
very nice zainy ji...
ye sher bahut pasand aaya..
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2nd October 2010, 06:27 PM
Nazar ko nazar ki nazar lag na jaaye
Hai charoN taraf bas tera hi nazaara
DuaaooN me meri asar ho bas itna
Ho deedaar-e-mehboob mere khudaara
Bahut Khoob ... Zainy Ji !
Sabhi sher bahut khoobsurat likhe hai aapne ... ghazal ke ehsaas dil ko chhuu ke jaate dikhe ... bayaani aur rawaangi purkashish rahi .... wahi ashaar ke khayal gehraai liye hue nazar aaye ... ek umdaa peshkash ... tahe dil se daad hazir hai ... aise hi likhti rahen aage bhi ... khush rahen ....
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duaaon ke saath ....
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
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2nd October 2010, 08:01 PM
Ghair Muraddif Ghazal hai,
Yaqeen maniye sabse zyda khushi is baat ki hai ke meri nazar ke samne pehli baar itni khoobi se kisi ne is kaam ko anjaam diya hai...........warna to aise kalam aisi koshishe mano kho kar reh gayee ho aur sirf batein reh gayee hai.
Bohat bohat mubarakbaad Zainy Jee jo aapne yeh jurrat dikhayee..........main dil se aapka shukriyaa ada karta hu.
Nazar ko nazar ki nazar lag na jaaye
Hai charoN taraf bas tera hi nazaara
Kya baat hai kya andaaz hai wahhhhhh khushi se dil jhoom gaya......
Reps for you for making an attempt and doing your best. rep+++++
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2nd October 2010, 08:37 PM
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa ,
ko’ii tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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3rd October 2010, 05:16 AM
doosra sher wazn se khariz hai ... baaki baad main aaunga .. tabiyat bohat kharaab hai
KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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3rd October 2010, 12:58 PM
zainy:
namaste!
Ghazal bahot umdaah rahii.n..! yeh Sher mujhe Khaas pasand aaya
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Nazar ko nazar ki nazar lag na jaaye
Hai charoN taraf bas tera hi nazaara
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dil se daad aur duaae.n!
bazm ki Shaan baRhaate rahe.n..! KhuSh rahe.n!
duaao.n ke saath ijaazat
aapka
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*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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3rd October 2010, 06:08 PM
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Mehfil ko Zainy ka Salaam..
Bohat dino baad kuch likhne ka mann kiya.....ummid hai aapko pasand aayega..
Aapki raey ka intezaar rahega
Ghair Muraddif Ghazal hai,
Behr :Mutaqarib Musamman Salim
122/122/122/122
Yeh kaisa hai bandhan hamaara tumhaara
HuuN mai ik kinaara ,ho tum ik kinaara
Na shikwa koyi ,na shikayat hai tumse
ZubaaN bhi hai khamosh,or dil bhi haara
Mere aashiyaane se, gum jo huye tum
Huye ghamzada phool-o-kaante bhi yaara
Na puche koi humse furqat ki bateiN
Na poocho gham-e hijr kaise guzaara
Nazar ko nazar ki nazar lag na jaaye
Hai charoN taraf bas tera hi nazaara
DuaaooN me meri asar ho bas itna
Ho deedaar-e-mehboob mere khudaara
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zany ji bahoot hi achchha likha aapne. maine chhaha ke aapke in sheron me se best chun ke nikaalu.n .par aisa nahi kar paaii kyonki har share ek se baD kar ek laga.
Rashmi Sharma
path par kaante bahut hain tere
par manjil par jaana too.ne
dar na jatilata se jeewan ki
isko saral banana too.ne
pasat na hone paye honsle
khud ka sahas khud hi juta le
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4th October 2010, 12:15 AM
kya baat hai bahut achchhi gazal kahi
कुछ ऐसे पल जिनको संजोना है ,
शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे
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4th October 2010, 12:49 AM
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zainy jii
radhe radhe
wah bahut khoob saare ashar ek se badh kar ek hain dil se daad
duaon ke saath
mujhe is ghazal ke ye teen sher dil ko jyada bha gaye
Na puche koi humse furqat ki bateiN
Na poocho shab-e hijr kaise guzaara
Nazar ko nazar ki nazar lag na jaaye
Hai charoN taraf bas tera hi nazaara
DuaaooN me meri asar ho bas itna
Ho deedaar-e-mehboob mere khudaara
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Ghazal ki tareef ke liye bohat bohat shukriyah Rajinder ji...mujhe khushi hai ke aapko meri ghazal pasand aayi
Yuhi saath dete rahiye..
Thanks for the reps......................
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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4th October 2010, 12:54 AM
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Mehfil ko Zainy ka Salaam..
Bohat dino baad kuch likhne ka mann kiya.....ummid hai aapko pasand aayega..
Aapki raey ka intezaar rahega
Ghair Muraddif Ghazal hai,
Behr :Mutaqarib Musamman Salim
122/122/122/122
Yeh kaisa hai bandhan hamaara tumhaara
HuuN mai ik kinaara ,ho tum ik kinaara
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aadab
aap mahfil me aane ka sharf haasil huwaa waheen ke kalaam se khusboo ki pazeeraayi ka onwaan bhi milaa aap belaa shubhaa bahot achhaa likhtee hain jise dil aawez dil geer qaraar diyaa ja saktaa hai
do kinaaron ke bandhan ki tashbeeh pahli baar nazar se guzree subhaanallah is naadir khiyaal ki jitnee bhi taareef ki jaaye kam hai
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Na shikwa koyi ,na shikayat hai tumse
ZubaaN bhi hai khamosh,or dil bhi haara
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ek mashri khaatoon ke be basee ki daastaane hayaat ko aap ne ek shree paikar me dhaal diyaa hai aise khushkun khiyaal ek aorat se hi mumkin hain daad haazir hai
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Mere aashiyaane se, gum jo huye tum
Huye ghamzada phool-o-kaante bhi yaara
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gulon ko murjhaate dekhaa thaa magar kaanton ko bhi ghamzadah ki tarkeeb kiyaa khoob nikaali hai aap ne khoob hai
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Na puche koi humse furqat ki bateiN
Na poocho gham-e hijr kaise guzaara
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waah kiyaa adaa e be neyaazi hai aise khiyaalaat ke haamil shakhs ke saleeqe ka paurahan kitnaa oumdah hogaa
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Nazar ko nazar ki nazar lag na jaaye
Hai charoN taraf bas tera hi nazaara
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aap ki is sher se yaad aayaa taqreeban 18 saal qabl kisee ne sunaayaa thaa jo aaj bhi haafeze ki tijori me min w an mahfooz hai
nazar ko naza ki nazar se bachaana
nazar ko nazar se nazar lag na jaaye
badaa oumdah khiyaal pesh kiyaa hai aap ne
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DuaaooN me meri asar ho bas itna
Ho deedaar-e-mehboob mere khudaara
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is mukhtasar tar khwaahish ke kiyaa kahne isee sho"oor ki bolandee ko shaairee ke meraaj kahte hain
itnee oumdah ghazal pe dil se mobaarakbaad qabool farmaayen
mukhlis
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4th October 2010, 01:12 AM
Aap jab bhii likhte ho kamaal ka likhte ho..
Nazar ko nazar ki nazar lag na jaaye
Hai charoN taraf bas tera hi nazaara
Iss sher ko kisii ki nazar na lage
Khoobsoorat hai bahut aur pyaara
Daad kubuul kijiye.
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4th October 2010, 08:57 AM
Yeh kaisa hai bandhan hamaara tumhaara
HuuN mai ik kinaara ,ho tum ik kinaara
Zainy Jii,
Its very good to read you after very long time,
Tamaam ghazal bohat achi likhi hai aap nay,
Lekin quoted shair kuch ziyada hi pasand aaya,
DuaooN k saath ijazat,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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4th October 2010, 11:39 AM
Zainy SAHiba,
aadaab!
bahut achchheee ghazal kahee hai aapne. aapkaa har kalaam pichhle se behtar hotaa jaa rahaa hai. allah kareN zor e kalam aur ziyadah.
khairandesh
Dheer
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4th October 2010, 05:25 PM
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bahut khoobsurat ghazal kahi hai aapne zainy ji...
bahut achha laga padh kar...
daad haazir hai qubuul kijiyega...
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Shukriyah Vikram sahab,
Mujhe khushi hai ke aapko ghazal pasand aayi..
Yuhi saath dete rahiye..
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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4th October 2010, 05:28 PM
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Yeh kaisa hai bandhan hamaara tumhaara
HuuN mai ik kinaara ,ho tum ik kinaara
very nice zainy ji...
ye sher bahut pasand aaya..
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Thanks a lot Shipra ji.........................................
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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5th October 2010, 08:07 AM
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Nazar ko nazar ki nazar lag na jaaye
Hai charoN taraf bas tera hi nazaara
DuaaooN me meri asar ho bas itna
Ho deedaar-e-mehboob mere khudaara
Bahut Khoob ... Zainy Ji !
Sabhi sher bahut khoobsurat likhe hai aapne ... ghazal ke ehsaas dil ko chhuu ke jaate dikhe ... bayaani aur rawaangi purkashish rahi .... wahi ashaar ke khayal gehraai liye hue nazar aaye ... ek umdaa peshkash ... tahe dil se daad hazir hai ... aise hi likhti rahen aage bhi ... khush rahen ....
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Yeh tou aapki darya dili hai Naresh ji jo aapne is adna si koshish ko pasand kiya..
Inshallah koshish rahegi ke aur bhi accha likhuN,
Yuhi saath dete rahiyega...
Daad aur duaaeN dono ke liye bohat bohat shukriyah....
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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6th October 2010, 07:29 AM
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Mehfil ko Zainy ka Salaam..
Bohat dino baad kuch likhne ka mann kiya.....ummid hai aapko pasand aayega..
Aapki raey ka intezaar rahega
Ghair Muraddif Ghazal hai,
Behr :Mutaqarib Musamman Salim
122/122/122/122
Yeh kaisa hai bandhan hamaara tumhaara
HuuN mai ik kinaara ,ho tum ik kinaara
Bhut hi khoob matla kaha hai aapne jawaab nahi, yaqeenan do kinaaroN ke bandhan ki soch abhi tak nazr se nahi guzri, daad qubool keejiye apne is mukhtalif andaaaz e bayaaN ke liyN
Na shikwa koyi ,na shikayat hai tumse
ZubaaN bhi hai khamosh,or dil bhi haara
acha ehsaas hai
Mere aashiyaane se, gum jo huye tum
Huye ghamzada phool-o-kaante bhi yaara
khoob bhut khoob.............
Na puche koi humse furqat ki bateiN
Na poocho gham-e hijr kaise guzaara
aapka ye sher paDte hi Waseem sahab ka ek sher yaad aa gaya paish e khidmat hai shayad meri nazar mai unke jo chuninda aashaar honge unme se ye ek hoga
kya dukh hai samandar ko, bata bhi nahi sakta
aansu ki tarah aankh mai aa bhi nahi sakta
aapki is soch ki nazr behad aur behisaab daad jiski nisbat se ye khyaal zehen mai utar aaya qubool keejiy
Nazar ko nazar ki nazar lag na jaaye
Hai charoN taraf bas tera hi nazaara
acha hai.............
DuaaooN me meri asar ho bas itna
Ho deedaar-e-mehboob mere khudaara
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achi kaawish hai khoob............................
ek dilfareb ghazal ke liyN aapki khidmat mai beshumaar daad hazir hai qubool keejiye, umeed karta huN ke aap jald hi hame ek apne ek aur dilfareb kalaam se nawaazengi, khush rahiye
reps+++++
aslam
you.n na samjhoge kinare pe khade rehkar tum
behta dariya hu.n mujhy haath se choo kar daikho
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6th October 2010, 11:36 PM
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Ghair Muraddif Ghazal hai,
Yaqeen maniye sabse zyda khushi is baat ki hai ke meri nazar ke samne pehli baar itni khoobi se kisi ne is kaam ko anjaam diya hai...........warna to aise kalam aisi koshishe mano kho kar reh gayee ho aur sirf batein reh gayee hai.
Bohat bohat mubarakbaad Zainy Jee jo aapne yeh jurrat dikhayee..........main dil se aapka shukriyaa ada karta hu.
Nazar ko nazar ki nazar lag na jaaye
Hai charoN taraf bas tera hi nazaara
Kya baat hai kya andaaz hai wahhhhhh khushi se dil jhoom gaya......
Reps for you for making an attempt and doing your best. rep+++++
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Sajid sahab,
Zarranawaazi ke liye behad shukrguzaar huuN !
Aapne mujhe iss Qaabil samjha aur itnee izzat o afzaayii kee !
Taareef karne meiN aapka jawaab nahi !
Mujhe khushi hai ke aapko meri adnaa si koshish pasand aayi
Mubaarakbad tah-e-dil se Qabool kee ! aapne itna khyaal rakha meharbaanii aapki !
Ashaar pasand aaye meri khushnasiibii ... aage bhi hausla afzaaii ki talabgaar rahungi !
Yuhi saath dete rahiye .................................
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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9th October 2010, 08:00 PM
Zainy saheba aadab ,,,
Apke liye ye koi nai baath to nahi ke jub kaheti ho lajawab kaheti ho app ..wah kya kahene hain is ghazal ke ..ik nahi balke hazarah dad apki is rawan dawan ghazal pe ...
Na puche koi humse furqat ki bateiN
Na poocho gham-e hijr kaise guzaara
Is sher ki jitni tareef karna suraj ko diya dekhane wali baath hogi ... aise khayal ko ap jaisi sukhan shinaas hi khalam bandh kar sakti hai ...gham-e-hijr pori zeest ki natwani pe dalalat karta hai ..wah wah kya kahene hain wah ..dad behad o hisab..
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10th October 2010, 11:42 PM
Yeh kaisa hai bandhan hamaara tumhaara
HuuN mai ik kinaara ,ho tum ik kinaara
waah kiya khoob hai
tum ik kinara main ik kinara!
Na shikwa koyi ,na shikayat hai tumse
ZubaaN bhi hai khamosh,or dil bhi haara
bahut khoob!
Mere aashiyaane se, gum jo huye tum
Huye ghamzada phool-o-kaante bhi yaara
waah!
Na puche koi humse furqat ki bateiN
Na poocho gham-e hijr kaise guzaara
Kisi ko ae poochnae ki himmat bhi to darkar chaiyae
Nazar ko nazar ki nazar lag na jaaye
Hai charoN taraf bas tera hi nazaara
Achcha!
DuaaooN me meri asar ho bas itna
Ho deedaar-e-mehboob mere khudaara
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11th October 2010, 02:39 PM
Shukriyah Lamha..............
Mujhe khushi hai ke aapko ghazal pasand aayi.......................
Thanks for the reps..........
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PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
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11th October 2010, 03:01 PM
Zainy Ji bhot bhot mubarakbad bhot khubsurat peshkesh rahi aapki
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doosra sher wazn se khariz hai ... baaki baad main aaunga .. tabiyat bohat kharaab hai
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Ek choti si spelling mistake thi ,jo maine theek kar diya hai...ab aap dubaara padhiye, aapko sher sahi wazn me dikhega...
Ab aapki tabiyat kaisi hai Kunaal ji..apna khayaal rakhiyega...
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11th October 2010, 05:35 PM
Yeh kaisa hai bandhan hamaara tumhaara
HuuN mai ik kinaara ,ho tum ik kinaara
Matlaa khaas pasand hai hameiN...! Bandhan aur uss ke do kinaare...bahut khubsurat khayaal...!
Na shikwa koyi ,naa shikayat hai tumse
ZubaaN bhi hai khamosh,or dil bhi haara
Uff, ishq maiN ye kaisi kaisi majbooriyaN...! Bahut khoob...!
Mere aashiyaane se, gum jo huye tum
Huye ghamzada phool-o-kaante bhi yaara
Hmmm...! aashiyaane ( nest ) ( in the place of phuulwaari ya gulsitaaN )pehle misre main aur dusre misre maiN phool o kaNte ka hona hameiN baDaa pyaara sa lagaa...! I can imagine a pair of doves with their nest in a garden...!
Na puche koi humse furqat ki bateiN
Na poocho shab-e hijr kaise guzaara
Yaha sher ne to dil looT hi liyaa hai...! Very beautiful...!
Nazar ko nazar ki nazar lag na jaaye
Hai charoN taraf bas tera hi nazaara
Iss sher maiN jo word play hai, iss ke taH tak hum pahuNch nahiN sakte...! Maybe I'm too simple-minded...! Sab ne kahaa ki accha hai to hamein bhi accha lagaa...!
DuaaooN me meri asar ho bas itna
Ho deedaar-e-mehboob mere khudaara
Isse maqta nahiN kaheiNge kyuNki aap ke taqallus nahiN hai iss maiN...! But I should say that the last sher is my favourite one...!
Well, Bitiya...! Do accept my praise for this marvellous ghazal and keep coming with such creations, ok...?
Take very good care of yourself...!
With blessings
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Jeene ke liye mujhe ek sapna dedo
Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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13th October 2010, 12:14 PM
zainy saheba aadab .
kaisi hain app ?
Apki is umdah ghazal pe phir dad hazir hai ... apki ghazal ghaniyat ne dubara parhne pe majboor kar diya to ghazal ki jaanib ruq kar liya to saath saath ye dekhne ko mila ke apne "Gham-e-hijr ko Shab-e-hijr se bada diya hai ... kya app wazahat karne ki zahemat karnegi ? is talib-e-ilm ko khuch nahi sikhne ko naseeb hoga ...shab-e-guzara ?raath guzari jaati hai aur din guzara jaata hai ....?
umid hai ke apko maazi ki ilteja aur mazrat dono yaad hi honge ? gareeb ki koi baath na ganwar guzri ho to mazrat khaw hon .. wazahat kar ke uljhan door kar den to maherbaani hogi ...allah apko khush rakhe
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Zainy saheba aadab ,,,
Apke liye ye koi nai baath to nahi ke jub kaheti ho lajawab kaheti ho app ..wah kya kahene hain is ghazal ke ..ik nahi balke hazarah dad apki is rawan dawan ghazal pe ...
Na puche koi humse furqat ki bateiN
Na poocho gham-e hijr kaise guzaara
Is sher ki jitni tareef karna suraj ko diya dekhane wali baath hogi ... aise khayal ko ap jaisi sukhan shinaas hi khalam bandh kar sakti hai ...gham-e-hijr pori zeest ki natwani pe dalalat karta hai ..wah wah kya kahene hain wah ..dad behad o hisab..
Khadim
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Changes made........
Na puche koi humse furqat ki bateiN
Na poocho shab-e hijr kaise guzaara
Yeh change aapne kisse pooch ke kiya aur agar kiya to iski ittelah q nahi di, aapke pass editing option hai iska matlab yeh bilkool nahi ke aap iska galat fayda uthaye. Jab hum kisi ka kalam padhte hai to usi kalaam ke aitbaar par daad dete hai.............agar aap beech me kuch bhi utha ke daal de ya change kar de jo kabil_e_tareef na ho to aisa lagta hai humne bhi bina sher samjhe tareef ki hai.
Aainda aapko koi bhi change karna ho to pehle ittila de aur meri raye me to jo bhi changes ho woh bataye aur dusre monitor se changes karwaye..........in your own thread you have to act like any other member.
Woh to Abdul Qadeer saheb ne notice kar liya warna hame to pata hi nahi chalta, it's really quite upsetting and surprsing. Kya aapne pehle bhi aisa kiya hai apni thread me, agar kiya ho to bata de taki main dobara aapke kalam padh saku aur dobara aapko comment de saku.
Maine aisi koi baat nahi kahi hai jo aapki naraazgi ka sabab bane isiliye maafi ka nahi aapse jawab ka talabgaar hu.
Jhoot kehdu yeh meri fitrat me nahi shamil
Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta...
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13th October 2010, 03:47 PM
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Zainy saheba aadab ,,,
Apke liye ye koi nai baath to nahi ke jub kaheti ho lajawab kaheti ho app ..wah kya kahene hain is ghazal ke ..ik nahi balke hazarah dad apki is rawan dawan ghazal pe ...
Na puche koi humse furqat ki bateiN
Na poocho gham-e hijr kaise guzaara
Is sher ki jitni tareef karna suraj ko diya dekhane wali baath hogi ... aise khayal ko ap jaisi sukhan shinaas hi khalam bandh kar sakti hai ...gham-e-hijr pori zeest ki natwani pe dalalat karta hai ..wah wah kya kahene hain wah ..dad behad o hisab..
Khadim
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Changes made........
Na puche koi humse furqat ki bateiN
Na poocho shab-e hijr kaise guzaara
Yeh change aapne kisse pooch ke kiya aur agar kiya to iski ittelah q nahi di, aapke pass editing option hai iska matlab yeh bilkool nahi ke aap iska galat fayda uthaye. Jab hum kisi ka kalam padhte hai to usi kalaam ke aitbaar par daad dete hai.............agar aap beech me kuch bhi utha ke daal de ya change kar de jo kabil_e_tareef na ho to aisa lagta hai humne bhi bina sher samjhe tareef ki hai.
Aainda aapko koi bhi change karna ho to pehle ittila de aur meri raye me to jo bhi changes ho woh bataye aur dusre monitor se changes karwaye..........in your own thread you have to act like any other member.
Woh to Abdul Qadeer saheb ne notice kar liya warna hame to pata hi nahi chalta, it's really quite upsetting and surprsing. Kya aapne pehle bhi aisa kiya hai apni thread me, agar kiya ho to bata de taki main dobara aapke kalam padh saku aur dobara aapko comment de saku.
Maine aisi koi baat nahi kahi hai jo aapki naraazgi ka sabab bane isiliye maafi ka nahi aapse jawab ka talabgaar hu.
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aisa bhi kya gunaah kar diya bhayee
choti choti batoN ko dil se nahi lagate
baaki diyaaN gallaN chaddo .. dil saaf hona chahida
ajkal munde kudiyaaN nu sab maaaf honaa chahidaa
The .. Gurdas maan
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13th October 2010, 04:14 PM
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aisa bhi kya gunaah kar diya bhayee
choti choti batoN ko dil se nahi lagate
baaki diyaaN gallaN chaddo .. dil saaf hona chahida
ajkal munde kudiyaaN nu sab maaaf honaa chahidaa
The .. Gurdas maan
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Mere bhai baat choti nazar aati hai par hai nahi, Abdul Qadeer saheb ne bohat mohabbat aur aqeedat ke sath jis sher ki tareef ki thi usi sher ko change kar diya gaya, aapko andaza bhi hai yeh kitna galat hai............khair yaha koi yeh nahi keh raha ke kisi ne koi Gunaah kiya hai. Chend sawaal hai jinka reply Zainy Jee hi de sakti hai.........aur mera sawaal bhi unse hi hai.
Jhoot kehdu yeh meri fitrat me nahi shamil
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13th October 2010, 04:34 PM
Sajid bhai ki baat 100 feesdi sahi hai ... aur main to ye kehta hun edit option sabke liye khola jaye ... ki wo apni post ko edit kar sakeN
KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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13th October 2010, 05:39 PM
I don't see what Zainy Ji has done so wrong...! Waise Radhika Ji ki shaayri ko edit bhi kiya gayaa hai ( Dhaval Ji ne )...!
http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthread.php?t=71475
Waise aap ne bhi on request apne post ko edit karwaaya tha, Sajid Ji...!
http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthread.php?t=71306
Kya kissi ko eitraaz houa...?
In a civilised society if one makes a statement he can always withdraw it
same way Qadeer ji can withdraw his praise...!
Zainy is the mod of this forum too, why should she have asked others mods to edit her post...?
Jeene ke liye mujhe ek sapna dedo
Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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13th October 2010, 05:53 PM
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Mehfil ko Zainy ka Salaam..
Bohat dino baad kuch likhne ka mann kiya.....ummid hai aapko pasand aayega..
Aapki raey ka intezaar rahega
Ghair Muraddif Ghazal hai,
Behr :Mutaqarib Musamman Salim
122/122/122/122
Yeh kaisa hai bandhan hamaara tumhaara
HuuN mai ik kinaara ,ho tum ik kinaara
Na shikwa koyi ,naa shikayat hai tumse
ZubaaN bhi hai khamosh,or dil bhi haara
Mere aashiyaane se, gum jo huye tum
Huye ghamzada phool-o-kaante bhi yaara
Na puche koi humse furqat ki bateiN
Na poocho shab-e hijr kaise guzaara
Nazar ko nazar ki nazar lag na jaaye
Hai charoN taraf bas tera hi nazaara
DuaaooN me meri asar ho bas itna
Ho deedaar-e-mehboob mere khudaara
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hello zainy jee.......... bahut hee umda ghzal hai aapki ...ek ek aashaar mujhe pasand aaye
Nazar ko nazar ki nazar lag na jaaye
Hai charoN taraf bas tera hi nazaara
Na shikwa koyi ,naa shikayat hai tumse
ZubaaN bhi hai khamosh,or dil bhi haara
ye lines bahur pasand aayein.
एक हाथ में दिल उनके एक हाथ में खंजर था
चेहरे पे दोस्त का मुखौटा अजीब सा मंजर था
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13th October 2010, 06:53 PM
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zainy saheba aadab .
kaisi hain app ?
Apki is umdah ghazal pe phir dad hazir hai ... apki ghazal ghaniyat ne dubara parhne pe majboor kar diya to ghazal ki jaanib ruq kar liya to saath saath ye dekhne ko mila ke apne "Gham-e-hijr ko Shab-e-hijr se bada diya hai ... kya app wazahat karne ki zahemat karnegi ? is talib-e-ilm ko khuch nahi sikhne ko naseeb hoga ...shab-e-guzara ?raath guzari jaati hai aur din guzara jaata hai ....?
umid hai ke apko maazi ki ilteja aur mazrat dono yaad hi honge ? gareeb ki koi baath na ganwar guzri ho to mazrat khaw hon .. wazahat kar ke uljhan door kar den to maherbaani hogi ...allah apko khush rakhe
khadim
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QADEER SAHAB,
maanti huun ke ek baar ghazal post karne ke baad changes karna theek baat nahi hai, per kabhi kuch sher aur kuch alfaaz ko lekar uljhan lagi rehti hai...
kayi members haiN yahaan per jo apni writings post karne ke baad bhi changes karte hai...maine aysa kuch naya nahi kiya hai jo aap sab itna naraaz ho rahe haiN...
roz mujhe koi na koi member pm karta hai, ke zainy ji zara isay edit kar dijiye...
well agar bohat zyada farq nahi padh raha hai tou aysa karna koi gunaah nahi hai
Phir bhi agar aapko aysa lagta hai tou, koshish karungi aagey se apni kisi bhi ghazal me koi change na karun..
Inshallah aapko aagey se koi shikayat ka maukha nahi dungi,,
Is ghalti ke liye aap sab maafi ki talabgaar huun...
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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Zainy saheba aadab ,,,
Apke liye ye koi nai baath to nahi ke jub kaheti ho lajawab kaheti ho app ..wah kya kahene hain is ghazal ke ..ik nahi balke hazarah dad apki is rawan dawan ghazal pe ...
Na puche koi humse furqat ki bateiN
Na poocho gham-e hijr kaise guzaara
Is sher ki jitni tareef karna suraj ko diya dekhane wali baath hogi ... aise khayal ko ap jaisi sukhan shinaas hi khalam bandh kar sakti hai ...gham-e-hijr pori zeest ki natwani pe dalalat karta hai ..wah wah kya kahene hain wah ..dad behad o hisab..
Khadim
Qadeertopchi
Changes made........
Na puche koi humse furqat ki bateiN
Na poocho shab-e hijr kaise guzaara
Yeh change aapne kisse pooch ke kiya aur agar kiya to iski ittelah q nahi di, aapke pass editing option hai iska matlab yeh bilkool nahi ke aap iska galat fayda uthaye. Jab hum kisi ka kalam padhte hai to usi kalaam ke aitbaar par daad dete hai.............agar aap beech me kuch bhi utha ke daal de ya change kar de jo kabil_e_tareef na ho to aisa lagta hai humne bhi bina sher samjhe tareef ki hai.
Aainda aapko koi bhi change karna ho to pehle ittila de aur meri raye me to jo bhi changes ho woh bataye aur dusre monitor se changes karwaye..........in your own thread you have to act like any other member.
Woh to Abdul Qadeer saheb ne notice kar liya warna hame to pata hi nahi chalta, it's really quite upsetting and surprsing. Kya aapne pehle bhi aisa kiya hai apni thread me, agar kiya ho to bata de taki main dobara aapke kalam padh saku aur dobara aapko comment de saku.
Maine aisi koi baat nahi kahi hai jo aapki naraazgi ka sabab bane isiliye maafi ka nahi aapse jawab ka talabgaar hu.
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Sadke jaaun aapke andaaze guftagu per huzoor....
kya aapko waqay aysa lagta hai ke, koi gunaah -e azeem ho gaya hai mujhse jo itna bhala bura keh diya aapne..
abhi kuch hi din pehle ki baat thi ke aapne khud mods se apni ghazal me post karne ke baad changes karwaya tha, infact maine khud us ghazal per changes kiye they, aapke request per..link danny ji ne upar post me diya hua hai.
ab is baare me kya jawaab hai aapke paas..
aap kare tou mistake, hum kare tou gunaah...
Amazing..
khair agar aapko bhi buraa laga ho tou chaliye aapse bhi maafi maang lete,ho sake tou maaf kar dijiye..
Inshallah!. aysa dubara nahi hoga...
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
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13th October 2010, 07:07 PM
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zainy:
namaste!
Ghazal bahot umdaah rahii.n..! yeh Sher mujhe Khaas pasand aaya
dil se daad aur duaae.n!
bazm ki Shaan baRhaate rahe.n..! KhuSh rahe.n!
duaao.n ke saath ijaazat
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~Dhaval
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Shukriyah Dhaval bhai...
yuhi saath dete rahiye..............
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
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13th October 2010, 11:26 PM
originaly posted by zainy ji
Nazar ko nazar ki nazar lag na jaaye
Hai charoN taraf bas tera hi nazaara
bahut hi khoobsurat rahi aap ki yeh gazal,or mera tou ek hi kehna hai
Chalo ek kalikh ka teeka lagalo
bahut ghoor rehay heiN buri nazar wale tumko.
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14th October 2010, 12:40 AM
Sajid sahab aapne jo bhi kaha hoga wo yaqeenan kisi ke liyN aapke dil mai bepanah izzat ki badolat hi kaha hoga magr ye lehja?? kya adab ka lehja hai??
Mizaaj hi mai buzurgoN se hum nahi baDle
wo chehre mohre ki saari shabahateiN bhi gayiN (NM)
khush rahiye
aslam
you.n na samjhoge kinare pe khade rehkar tum
behta dariya hu.n mujhy haath se choo kar daikho
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14th October 2010, 01:10 AM
Main Aslam Jee kee baaton se sahmat hoon. Main achchhi tarah se samajhta hoon Sajid jee ki aapne achchhe hriday se hee kaha hai.
SDC hamari apni family hai. Ye baatein nihayat hee tuchh kism kee hain. Duniya bahut badi hai aur ye baatein bahut chhotee hain. logon ke dil mein bahut gham hai, jaise ki ham sabke dil me. hame aage barhna hai. piichhe nahi lautna hai. ham sab dost hain. aur hasi mazak to ham karte hain. Iss particulur context main Zainy jee ne mazakiya lahze main aisa kiya hai ye main achchhii tarah samajhta hoon. Hamare Indian subcontinent ka culture aisa hai. Let's not fight amongst ourselves. Ham sab ek doosre ke shukraguzaar hain. Hame kisi ko nhai dikhana ki ham bahut achhe aur paak saaf hain. koi bhee nahi ho sakta. hame khud ke ander jhaankna hai. ham sab insaan hain aur dost hain.
Let's make a fresh departure altogether. Let's be together.
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