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15th January 2007, 05:44 PM
Pyaare dostoN,
ek Ghazal pesh-e-khidmat hai, paRhiye aur izhaar-e-khayaal zaroor farmaayeN:
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Matla arz hai:
maiN baat dil se kahta huuN yah baat merii maaniYe!
mil jaaYe gaa sab kuch waheeN dar par Khudaa ke jaaniYe!
yeh zindagee kee raah pyaare! muKhtaSar hee jaaniYe!
hai lamHah lamHah qeematee kuch mol to pehchaaniYe!
Sher:
gar HauSile ooNche hoN to baadal bhee Khud chhaT jaaYeN ge
kaT jaayeNgii duShwaariyaaN jo kaam dil meiN Thaaniye!
jab un ke paas aataa hooN maiN woh door mujh se jaate haiN
hai un ke dil meN baat kyaa yeh raaz kaise jaaniYe?
chehre ke peechhe haiN chhupe chehre bohat, ShakleN hazaar
duShman kee kyaa pehchaan hai aur dost kis ko jaaniYe?
TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!
Maqta Haazir hai:
kucHh lafz^ haiN TooTe :Mayank:, eHsaas kucHh bikhre huwe
yaaroN se maiN kehtaa huuN :mujh ko jaaniye, pehchaaniYe:!
-Mayank
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15th January 2007, 06:11 PM
Assalam walekum mayank ji,
kya khoob likha hai aapne,
aapki is ghazal ka,ek alag hi andaaz hai,
padhte waqt bhi kafi achha lag raha hai,
khaas kar aapke yeh ashaar......
TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa,
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!
wow really nice..
Allah aapko aur tarakki de AAMIN,,
ALLAH HAFIZ
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Gale se milte hi,jitne Gile the bhul gaye,
warna yaad thi hum ko,shikayatein kya_kya.
**********(¨`·.·´¨) Always *************
`·.¸(¨`·.·´¨) Keep
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forever..
and ever and ever!
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15th January 2007, 08:02 PM
Mayank Bhai..
Behad khoobsoorat shabdon me aapne apne ehsaas-e-bayaan kiye hain..
Jab Matla padha.. to laga.. vaah yehi sabse sundar hoga... sher padha.. to woh aur bhi sundar tha.. aur Maqta ke to kya kehne..
Mujhe poori hi ghazal behad pasand aayi..
Ek bahut hi achi ghazal pesh karne ke liye daad aur mubarakbaad dono hi kubool keejiye..
Take Care..
~Priya
"Dikha kar khawaab in aankhon ko, De gaye aansoon in mein Tum..
Kaise chalka doo yeh aansoon, In mein bhi To rehTe ho Tum.."
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16th January 2007, 09:17 AM
bahut accha lagga aapki gazal ko padna...dil se daad kabool kijiye.
aapki dost
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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16th January 2007, 05:19 PM
mayank ji ko mera namskaaR,
mayank ji sach me aapki gazal ko paRhna bahot hi achha laga , aapne itni khoobsoorti se apne pyaare se ehsaasoN ko is meiN jo sajaya haiN dil khus ho gaya
puri gazal bahot hi badhiya aur sab se ziyadah matla bahot hji pasaNd aaya mujhe
dil se n ikli daad kubul kareN
khus raheN aur apna khayal rakheN
aapka dost
dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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17th January 2007, 07:18 PM
Munfairy jee:
w-asallam,
Ghazal ki pasandagii ke liye tah-e-dil se Shukriyah! Husn-e-nazar hai aap ki jo yeH gahzal aap ko pasand aayii hai.. KoShiSh rahegii kii aage aur behtar likh sakuuN...yuuN hii aati raheN..
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25th January 2007, 09:58 AM
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Mayank Bhai..
Behad khoobsoorat shabdon me aapne apne ehsaas-e-bayaan kiye hain..
Jab Matla padha.. to laga.. vaah yehi sabse sundar hoga... sher padha.. to woh aur bhi sundar tha.. aur Maqta ke to kya kehne..
Mujhe poori hi ghazal behad pasand aayi..
Ek bahut hi achi ghazal pesh karne ke liye daad aur mubarakbaad dono hi kubool keejiye..
Take Care..
~Priya
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hello Priya:
Kaisi ho? aap ko Ghazal pasand aaii isay aap ki husn-e-nazar hi kahuuNga.. verna ham kyaa haiN yeh to ham jaan,te hi haiN. yeh to ek chhhoti sii koShiSh hai.. aap ne merii ess koSHiSh par hausila afzaayi kii ess se hame aage likhne meiN sahulaat hogii.. ummeed hai aap aage bhii yuuN hii paRhti raheNgii.. aap kii daad aur mubaarak baad dono ko maiN tah-e-dil se qubool karta huuN aur aap ko Shukriya ada karta huuN.
Mayank
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25th January 2007, 10:00 AM
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bahut accha lagga aapki gazal ko padna...dil se daad kabool kijiye.
aapki dost
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Sunita jee:
Namsate:
aap ne ess koShiSh ko pasand kiya jaan kar behad khuShi huii.. koShiSh rahegii kii aage bhii aisa likheN jo aap ko pasand aaye.. yuuN hi bazm meiN aati raheN.. Shukriyah!
-Mayank
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25th January 2007, 10:02 AM
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mayank ji ko mera namskaaR,
mayank ji sach me aapki gazal ko paRhna bahot hi achha laga , aapne itni khoobsoorti se apne pyaare se ehsaasoN ko is meiN jo sajaya haiN dil khus ho gaya
puri gazal bahot hi badhiya aur sab se ziyadah matla bahot hji pasaNd aaya mujhe
dil se n ikli daad kubul kareN
khus raheN aur apna khayal rakheN
aapka dost
dhaval
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Sunita jee:
Dear Dhaval,
itne saare pyaar bhare lafzoN se nawaaZne ke liye tah-e-dil Shukriya ada karta huuN.. Ghazal kii pasandagii ke liye ek baar phir se Shukriya... yuuN hii bazm meiN aate raheN..
Mayank
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25th January 2007, 07:15 PM
mayank bhaiya tak nacheez ghayal ka salaam pahunche,
bhaiya bas dil cheer diya aapne, pehli to aapne kaafiya hi aisa chuna hai ki, poore kalaam me bahut tehjeeb aa gayi hai...!
aur saath me sher v aise hain ki bas dil se bas ek haaye hi nikal paayi...!
waise ye do sher bahut dil fareb rahe...!
chehre ke peechhe haiN chhupe chehre bohat, ShakleN hazaar
duShman kee kyaa pehchaan hai aur dost kis ko jaaniYe?
TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!
bas bhaiya aage v aap yunhi likhte rahiye...! taki hum jaise nacheez kuch seekhte rahen...!
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28th January 2007, 05:19 PM
yeh zindagee kee raah pyaare! muKhtaSar hee jaaniYe!
hai lamHah lamHah qeematee kuch mol to pehchaaniYe!
Namaskar Mayank ji
Kayi din baad aapki nayi rachna parhi.....it's beautiful....mere daad kabul kijeyega.......haan lamhah lamhah hi to zindagi banti hay......jisney lamhon ka mol jaan liya shayad usney zindagi ka mol jaan liya.....yuun hi likhtey rahiye....
With Regards
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29th January 2007, 01:33 PM
hi mayank ji
kese ho??
aapne bahut hi achchha likha hai..
yeh zindagee kee raah pyaare! muKhtaSar hee jaaniYe!
hai lamHah lamHah qeematee kuch mol to pehchaaniYe!
mayank ji ye line mujhe behad pasand aayi..
wah mayank ji wah...
DERI SE PADHA HAI PAR AAJ SIRF AAPKI IS RACHNA NE AANKHON KO NAHI DIL KO BHI CHHUA HAI
LOG KAHTE HAIN WAH KOI ISE AAPKI KALA KAHTA HAI
HUM JANTE HAI KI KAHI AAPKA DIL AAJ FIR SE DUKHA HAI
JAB JAB BHI AAPKI KOI RACHNA AANKHO SE GUJARI HAI
JO PADHKAR MUKARATE THE UNKA BHI SIR JHUKA HAI
ese hi likhte rahiyega
milte rahiyega
aapka dost
Merul.
Quote:
Originally Posted by Mayank
Pyaare dostoN,
ek Ghazal pesh-e-khidmat hai, paRhiye aur izhaar-e-khayaal zaroor farmaayeN:
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Matla arz hai:
maiN baat dil se kahta huuN yah baat merii maaniYe!
mil jaaYe gaa sab kuch waheeN dar par Khudaa ke jaaniYe!
yeh zindagee kee raah pyaare! muKhtaSar hee jaaniYe!
hai lamHah lamHah qeematee kuch mol to pehchaaniYe!
Sher:
gar HauSile ooNche hoN to baadal bhee Khud chhaT jaaYeN ge
kaT jaayeNgii duShwaariyaaN jo kaam dil meiN Thaaniye!
jab un ke paas aataa hooN maiN woh door mujh se jaate haiN
hai un ke dil meN baat kyaa yeh raaz kaise jaaniYe?
chehre ke peechhe haiN chhupe chehre bohat, ShakleN hazaar
duShman kee kyaa pehchaan hai aur dost kis ko jaaniYe?
TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!
Maqta Haazir hai:
kucHh lafz^ haiN TooTe :Mayank:, eHsaas kucHh bikhre huwe
yaaroN se maiN kehtaa huuN :mujh ko jaaniye, pehchaaniYe:!
-Mayank
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!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!
Dhoka diya tha jab tumne mujhe,
Tab dil se me naraz tha,
Phir socha ki dil se tumhe nikal du,
Magar woh kambakth dil bhi tumhare paas tha.
Merul~~~~~~~~~~>
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30th January 2007, 07:15 PM
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mayank bhaiya tak nacheez ghayal ka salaam pahunche,
bhaiya bas dil cheer diya aapne, pehli to aapne kaafiya hi aisa chuna hai ki, poore kalaam me bahut tehjeeb aa gayi hai...!
aur saath me sher v aise hain ki bas dil se bas ek haaye hi nikal paayi...!
waise ye do sher bahut dil fareb rahe...!
chehre ke peechhe haiN chhupe chehre bohat, ShakleN hazaar
duShman kee kyaa pehchaan hai aur dost kis ko jaaniYe?
TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!
bas bhaiya aage v aap yunhi likhte rahiye...! taki hum jaise nacheez kuch seekhte rahen...!
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Ghaayal jee:
aap ko ess Ghazal meiN se do-ek Sher pasand kiye, jaan kar khushi huii.. HaalaNkii maiN ne koShiSh yeh kee thee kii puuri Ghazal pasand aaye... Theek hai aage shaayad koShiSh kuchh rang laaye.. waise ess zameen par likhana kuchh mushkil sa laga tha, kyoN kii bohat hi kam qaafiye haiN, jin ko istemaal karna paRta hai.. phir bhii aap ne ess koShiSh ko saraaha to dil baaGh-baaGh huaa,, yuuN hii likhate raheN..
-Mayank
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31st January 2007, 01:25 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by Mayank
Pyaare dostoN,
ek Ghazal pesh-e-khidmat hai, paRhiye aur izhaar-e-khayaal zaroor farmaayeN:
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Matla arz hai:
maiN baat dil se kahta huuN yah baat merii maaniYe!
mil jaaYe gaa sab kuch waheeN dar par Khudaa ke jaaniYe!
yeh zindagee kee raah pyaare! muKhtaSar hee jaaniYe!
hai lamHah lamHah qeematee kuch mol to pehchaaniYe!
Sher:
gar HauSile ooNche hoN to baadal bhee Khud chhaT jaaYeN ge
kaT jaayeNgii duShwaariyaaN jo kaam dil meiN Thaaniye!
jab un ke paas aataa hooN maiN woh door mujh se jaate haiN
hai un ke dil meN baat kyaa yeh raaz kaise jaaniYe?
chehre ke peechhe haiN chhupe chehre bohat, ShakleN hazaar
duShman kee kyaa pehchaan hai aur dost kis ko jaaniYe?
TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!
Maqta Haazir hai:
kucHh lafz^ haiN TooTe :Mayank:, eHsaas kucHh bikhre huwe
yaaroN se maiN kehtaa huuN :mujh ko jaaniye, pehchaaniYe:!
-Mayank
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hi mayank ji
chehre ke peechhe haiN chhupe chehre bohat, ShakleN hazaar
duShman kee kyaa pehchaan hai aur dost kis ko jaaniYe?
apka ye sher bahut acha laga. ek such ko darshata hua.
yun to puri gazal hi achi lagi.
meri daad kubul karo.
sakhi
कुछ ऐसे पल जिनको संजोना है ,
शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे
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3rd February 2007, 01:43 PM
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yeh zindagee kee raah pyaare! muKhtaSar hee jaaniYe!
hai lamHah lamHah qeematee kuch mol to pehchaaniYe!
Namaskar Mayank ji
Kayi din baad aapki nayi rachna parhi.....it's beautiful....mere daad kabul kijeyega.......haan lamhah lamhah hi to zindagi banti hay......jisney lamhon ka mol jaan liya shayad usney zindagi ka mol jaan liya.....yuun hi likhtey rahiye....
With Regards
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Shukriya Sukanya jee:
aap kii daad hame tah-e-dil se qubool hai..aap ne bilkul sahii jaan liya hai.. lekin un ka kya kareN jo sab kuchh jaan kar bhi zindagii nahiiN jeena chaahate.. bazm meiN aati raheN... aap ko yahaaN dekh kar khushi huii...
Mayank
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hi -
4th February 2007, 03:32 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by Mayank
Pyaare dostoN,
ek Ghazal pesh-e-khidmat hai, paRhiye aur izhaar-e-khayaal zaroor farmaayeN:
***************************************
Matla arz hai:
maiN baat dil se kahta huuN yah baat merii maaniYe!
mil jaaYe gaa sab kuch waheeN dar par Khudaa ke jaaniYe!
yeh zindagee kee raah pyaare! muKhtaSar hee jaaniYe!
hai lamHah lamHah qeematee kuch mol to pehchaaniYe!
Sher:
gar HauSile ooNche hoN to baadal bhee Khud chhaT jaaYeN ge
kaT jaayeNgii duShwaariyaaN jo kaam dil meiN Thaaniye!
jab un ke paas aataa hooN maiN woh door mujh se jaate haiN
hai un ke dil meN baat kyaa yeh raaz kaise jaaniYe?
chehre ke peechhe haiN chhupe chehre bohat, ShakleN hazaar
duShman kee kyaa pehchaan hai aur dost kis ko jaaniYe?
TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!
Maqta Haazir hai:
kucHh lafz^ haiN TooTe :Mayank:, eHsaas kucHh bikhre huwe
yaaroN se maiN kehtaa huuN :mujh ko jaaniye, pehchaaniYe:!
-Mayank
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waah waah mayank janaab aap ko bahut din baad padhane ka yeh anubhav kaabil-e-taarif rahaa, aise hi likhte raho , khudaa aap ko aur hunarmand kare yahi dua hai
dil ki gahraayyoN se dad haazir hai aap ke is kalaam par
regards
manu
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4th February 2007, 07:24 PM
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Originally Posted by Mayank
Pyaare dostoN,
ek Ghazal pesh-e-khidmat hai, paRhiye aur izhaar-e-khayaal zaroor farmaayeN:
***************************************
Matla arz hai:
maiN baat dil se kahta huuN yah baat merii maaniYe!
mil jaaYe gaa sab kuch waheeN dar par Khudaa ke jaaniYe!
yeh zindagee kee raah pyaare! muKhtaSar hee jaaniYe!
hai lamHah lamHah qeematee kuch mol to pehchaaniYe!
Sher:
gar HauSile ooNche hoN to baadal bhee Khud chhaT jaaYeN ge
kaT jaayeNgii duShwaariyaaN jo kaam dil meiN Thaaniye!
jab un ke paas aataa hooN maiN woh door mujh se jaate haiN
hai un ke dil meN baat kyaa yeh raaz kaise jaaniYe?
chehre ke peechhe haiN chhupe chehre bohat, ShakleN hazaar
duShman kee kyaa pehchaan hai aur dost kis ko jaaniYe?
TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!
Maqta Haazir hai:
kucHh lafz^ haiN TooTe :Mayank:, eHsaas kucHh bikhre huwe
yaaroN se maiN kehtaa huuN :mujh ko jaaniye, pehchaaniYe:!
-Mayank
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Just too Good Mayank ji.... ek ek sher sidhe me utar rahe hain... bahoot bahoot achha laga aapko padhna
Anant se bhi aage... itni si khwahish hai :)
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10th February 2007, 12:46 AM
wah! bahut khoob!
umda ghazal par daad qabool kijiyega!
chehre ke peechhe haiN chhupe chehre bohat, ShakleN hazaar
duShman kee kyaa pehchaan hai aur dost kis ko jaaniYe?....waah!
Aaina mujhse meri pehli si surat maange
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10th February 2007, 09:31 AM
mayank sir namaskar
kaise hai.n janab
bahut khoob gazal likhi hai aapne, or maqta!! maqta to kamal hai janab.
is sher per meri khas taur se daad kabool farmaiyega.
TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!
shukriya
dilip
" Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab
Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai
mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya
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10th February 2007, 10:58 AM
janab mayank bhai aadaab..aapki aaj ki nazm bhi kaabile tareef hai..plzz yoon hi likha karen..apna khayal rakhen...
shaad
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10th February 2007, 02:39 PM
wah wah mayank ji bahut hi achha likha hain aapne seedhe dil tak baat pahuchi hai. padhkar bahut achha laga.
aise hi likhte rahiyega
aksar yaad karte hain un guzre hue lamho ko
aksar yaad karte hain un tere diye zakmhon ko
kuch na baaki bacha hai jeevan mein hamaare
jo jeene ko saathi tu na raha
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11th February 2007, 04:05 PM
Mayank Sahaab Adaab,
TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!
Bohot khoob bhai..bohot khoob..yeh sher kaafi pasand aayaa... daad qubool farmaaiyye.
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14th February 2007, 01:48 PM
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hi mayank ji
kese ho??
aapne bahut hi achchha likha hai..
yeh zindagee kee raah pyaare! muKhtaSar hee jaaniYe!
hai lamHah lamHah qeematee kuch mol to pehchaaniYe!
mayank ji ye line mujhe behad pasand aayi..
wah mayank ji wah...
DERI SE PADHA HAI PAR AAJ SIRF AAPKI IS RACHNA NE AANKHON KO NAHI DIL KO BHI CHHUA HAI
LOG KAHTE HAIN WAH KOI ISE AAPKI KALA KAHTA HAI
HUM JANTE HAI KI KAHI AAPKA DIL AAJ FIR SE DUKHA HAI
JAB JAB BHI AAPKI KOI RACHNA AANKHO SE GUJARI HAI
JO PADHKAR MUKARATE THE UNKA BHI SIR JHUKA HAI
ese hi likhte rahiyega
milte rahiyega
aapka dost
Merul.
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Merul jee:
Ghazal ki pasandagii ke liye tah-e-dil se SHurkiyah! DostoN ka pyaar saath meiN raha to be-Shaq maiN yuuN hi likhata rahuNga..
Mayank
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21st February 2007, 05:02 PM
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hi mayank ji
chehre ke peechhe haiN chhupe chehre bohat, ShakleN hazaar
duShman kee kyaa pehchaan hai aur dost kis ko jaaniYe?
apka ye sher bahut acha laga. ek such ko darshata hua.
yun to puri gazal hi achi lagi.
meri daad kubul karo.
sakhi
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Sakhi Jee:
Sher aur puurii ki pasandagii ke liye tah-e-dil se Shukriyah! husn-e-nazar hai aap ki jo aap ne ess koShish ko saraaha..
Dada qubool hai
Mayank
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22nd February 2007, 04:01 PM
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waah waah mayank janaab aap ko bahut din baad padhane ka yeh anubhav kaabil-e-taarif rahaa, aise hi likhte raho , khudaa aap ko aur hunarmand kare yahi dua hai
dil ki gahraayyoN se dad haazir hai aap ke is kalaam par
regards
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Manu Thanks a lot,
Ghazal kii pasandagii aur hausila parzaaii ke liye tah-e-dils e Shurkiyah! huzuur husn-e-nazar hai aap kii jo aap ne hame ess laayaq samjha.. dili daad dil se qubool hai.. bazm meiN yuuN hii aate raheN..
Mayank
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22nd February 2007, 04:05 PM
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Just too Good Mayank ji.... ek ek sher sidhe me utar rahe hain... bahoot bahoot achha laga aapko padhna
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Shukriyah! Garima...
Ghazal ki pasandagii ke liye tah-e-dil se Shukriyah! aap ka reply paRh kar khushii huii.. YuuN hii bazm meiN aati raho..
Mayank
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24th April 2007, 04:18 PM
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wah! bahut khoob!
umda ghazal par daad qabool kijiyega!
chehre ke peechhe haiN chhupe chehre bohat, ShakleN hazaar
duShman kee kyaa pehchaan hai aur dost kis ko jaaniYe?....waah!
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Dear Wafa:
Daad ke liye tah-e-dil se Shukriyah! yuuN hii aate raheN.. aap ne jo SHer pasand kiya hai woh darasal mera bhii pasandidah Sher hai.. YuuN hii aati raheN..
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24th April 2007, 04:21 PM
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mayank sir namaskar
kaise hai.n janab
bahut khoob gazal likhi hai aapne, or maqta!! maqta to kamal hai janab.
is sher per meri khas taur se daad kabool farmaiyega.
TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!
shukriya
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Dilip Jee:
aap kii daad aur Ghazal ki pasandagii ke liye maiN Shukr-guzaar huuN.. aap ne waqt nikal kar Ghazal paRhii aur hausaila afzaayi ke liye ess ke liye khaas taur par Shurkiyah!YuuN hii mehfil meiN aate raheN...
Mayank
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24th April 2007, 04:24 PM
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janab mayank bhai aadaab..aapki aaj ki nazm bhi kaabile tareef hai..plzz yoon hi likha karen..apna khayal rakhen...
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Sameer SaaHeb,
aadaab! kahaaN haiN aap aaj kal nazar hi nahiIN aate.. amashruuf haiN ya phir laparwaahi ho rahi hai..
Ghazal kii pasandagii ke liye maiN aap ka SHukr-guzaar huuN.. aap jaise sabhii dostoN ka saath raha to maiN yuuN hii likhata rahUNga,. Hamesha.. aap bhii apna Khayal rakhiye...
Mayank
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24th April 2007, 04:24 PM
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Originally Posted by Mayank
Pyaare dostoN,
ek Ghazal pesh-e-khidmat hai, paRhiye aur izhaar-e-khayaal zaroor farmaayeN:
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Matla arz hai:
maiN baat dil se kahta huuN yah baat merii maaniYe!
mil jaaYe gaa sab kuch waheeN dar par Khudaa ke jaaniYe!
yeh zindagee kee raah pyaare! muKhtaSar hee jaaniYe!
hai lamHah lamHah qeematee kuch mol to pehchaaniYe!
Sher:
gar HauSile ooNche hoN to baadal bhee Khud chhaT jaaYeN ge
kaT jaayeNgii duShwaariyaaN jo kaam dil meiN Thaaniye!
jab un ke paas aataa hooN maiN woh door mujh se jaate haiN
hai un ke dil meN baat kyaa yeh raaz kaise jaaniYe?
chehre ke peechhe haiN chhupe chehre bohat, ShakleN hazaar
duShman kee kyaa pehchaan hai aur dost kis ko jaaniYe?
TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!
Maqta Haazir hai:
kucHh lafz^ haiN TooTe :Mayank:, eHsaas kucHh bikhre huwe
yaaroN se maiN kehtaa huuN :mujh ko jaaniye, pehchaaniYe:!
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aji mayank saheb....aapko pahchantey bhi hai.n aur jantey bhi hai.n
aapki gazal ka har sher bahut accha lagga...lajwaab khayaal pesh kiye hai aapne. yu hi likhtey rahiye....!
regards
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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24th April 2007, 04:34 PM
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Originally Posted by Mayank
Pyaare dostoN,
gar HauSile ooNche hoN to baadal bhee Khud chhaT jaaYeN ge
kaT jaayeNgii duShwaariyaaN jo kaam dil meiN Thaaniye!
TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!
Maqta Haazir hai:
-Mayank
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MayanK Sir..
aana hi pada ek purasar kavish pe apne lafzoN ko bikherne .. aur yakeen maniye in do sheroN ne ek gazab ka jaadoo chalaya dil pe ... ek taraf himmat se bhare baaju .. aur doosri taraf apne andar ke haal ko kisi ko keh dene ki khata wo bhi itne dilkash andaaz maiN .. mera salaam aapki koshish ke liye ...
aise hi likhte raho ...
khaaksaar
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KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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24th April 2007, 04:36 PM
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wah wah mayank ji bahut hi achha likha hain aapne seedhe dil tak baat pahuchi hai. padhkar bahut achha laga.
aise hi likhte rahiyega
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Reena jee:
dil kii baat dil tak pahuNchi ess se zeyaadah khushii kii baat kya ho sakti hai?.. aap ko Ghazal paRh kar achchhca laga jaan kar khushi huii.. koShish karuNga kii aage bhii likh sakuuN.. aap bhii yuuN bazm meiN aati raheN.. ijjat aur hausila afzaayi ke liye Shukriyah!
Mayank
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24th April 2007, 04:38 PM
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Mayank Sahaab Adaab,
TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!
Bohot khoob bhai..bohot khoob..yeh sher kaafi pasand aayaa... daad qubool farmaaiyye.
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Talib jee:
aadaab aur namaste:
reply karne meiN der huii, ess liye ma-azrat khwaah huuN.. pata nahiiN yeh post kahaaN chhup gaya tha.. kahiiN nazar hii nahiiN aa raha thaa.. aaj nazar aaya to sochaa kii sab se pahle yehi kaam kar luuN.. aap ne Ghazal ke Sher pasand kiye yeh ham jaise nau-maShq ke liye behad khushi kii baat hai aur maiN aap ka mamuun huuN.. aap kii daad hame dil se qubuul hai. mehfil meiN aate raheN..
Mayank
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25th April 2007, 12:26 PM
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aji mayank saheb....aapko pahchantey bhi hai.n aur jantey bhi hai.n
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yeh to un ke liye hai jo mujhe jaan,te aur pehchaante nahiiN haiN, aap ke liye thoRe na hai
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aapki gazal ka har sher bahut accha lagga...lajwaab khayaal pesh kiye hai aapne. yu hi likhtey rahiye....!
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Sunita jee:
aap ne ek baar phir se khaaksar kii hausila afzaayii kee, aur Ghazal ke har Sher ko pasand kiya jaan kar behad khuShi huii.. koShish rahegii kii aahe bhii bazm meiN kuchh na kuchh likh kar pesh karta rahuuN.. maiN aap ka Shukrguzaar huuN dil se.. yuuN hii aati raheN..
Mayank
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25th April 2007, 12:35 PM
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yeh to un ke liye hai jo mujhe jaan,te aur pehchaante nahioiN haiN, aap ke liye thoRe na hai
Sunita jee:
aap ne ek baar phir se khaaksar kii hausila afzaayii kee, aur Ghazal ke har Sher ko pasand kiya jaan kar behad khuShi huii.. koShish rahegii kii aahe bhii bazm meiN kuchh na kuchh likh kar pesh karta rahuuN.. maiN aap ka Shukrguzaar huuN dil se.. yuuN hii aati raheN..
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hehehehe
aapka jawaab dene ka andaaz bahut pasand aaya....
yu mahfil ko hamesha kush-gabaar banaye rahkiye.
god bless u
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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4th May 2007, 07:21 PM
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MayanK Sir..
aana hi pada ek purasar kavish pe apne lafzoN ko bikherne .. aur yakeen maniye in do sheroN ne ek gazab ka jaadoo chalaya dil pe ... ek taraf himmat se bhare baaju .. aur doosri taraf apne andar ke haal ko kisi ko keh dene ki khata wo bhi itne dilkash andaaz maiN .. mera salaam aapki koshish ke liye ...
aise hi likhte raho ...
khaaksaar
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Dear Kunaal,
aap kii yeh taariif to mere Ghazal se bhii bhaari lagii mujhe.. yeh mere liye bohat hausilah afzaayi hai..tah-e-dil se Shukrguzaar huuN maiN aap ka.. maiN to saaf lafzoN meiN yehii kahuuNga kii husn-e-nazar hai aap kii... jo aap ne ess tarah Ghazal ko saraaha hai.. ummeed hao yeh dilkash daad aage bhii yuuN hii miltii rahegii..take care
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8th May 2007, 02:16 PM
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hehehehe
aapka jawaab dene ka andaaz bahut pasand aaya....
yu mahfil ko hamesha kush-gabaar banaye rahkiye.
god bless u
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