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25th September 2014, 12:49 PM
SDC ke sabhi maujooda Hazraat ko Shaad ka aadaab... Tarhee misre par ek koshish pesh kar raha hoon......... padhiyega, aur bataiyega kaisii lagee...
ye tarhee ghazal hai isliye Maqtaa avoid kar raha hoon....
tanhaa sa rah gayaa hoon main apne mazaar meiN,
Lagtaa nahii hai dil meraa ujDe dayaar meiN.
is baar faqat khaar* hi aayeN hain shaakh par,
kya kya khile they Gul yahaaN pichlii bahaar meiN.
khaar- Kaante
aa jaae ab kazaa* to mileN raahateN mujhko,
zindaa to huN magar huN isii intezaar meiN.
Kazaa- maut
Tum bhi yahaan se bin ruke hi kooch kar gaye,
koyee sadaa bachee nahee, merii pukaar meiN.
Sadaa- aawaaz
Sochaa tha maykashii meiN bhulaa dungaa gham sabhii,
Shaayad tujhe hii bhool gayaa hoon Khumaar meiN.
Khumaar- Nashaa
is dil se itnii dillagee naa kiijiye saahab,
ye Toot jaae naa kaheeN yooN baar baar meiN.
Khaas kar ke Maikash saahab aur Raj saahab ki farmaaish par maqta pesh hai
Zaahid sharaab aur pilaa, Shaad kar Mujhe,
Baaki hai muddateN abhi Allah ki maar meiN.
Shaad......
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25th September 2014, 01:07 PM
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SDC ke sabhi maujooda Hazraat ko Shaad ka aadaab... Tarhee misre par ek koshish pesh kar raha hoon......... padhiyega, aur bataiyega kaisii lagee...
ye tarhee ghazal hai isliye Maqtaa avoid kar raha hoon....
tanhaa sa rah gayaa hoon main apne mazaar meiN,
Lagtaa nahii hai dil meraa ujDe dayaar meiN.
is baar faqat khaar* hi aayeN hain shaakh par,
kya kya khile they Gul yahaaN pichlii bahaar meiN.
khaar- Kaante
aa jaae ab kazaa* to mileN raahateN mujhko,
zindaa to huN magar huN isii intezaar meiN.
Kazaa- maut
Tum bhi yahaan se bin ruke hi kooch kar gaye,
koyee sadaa bachee nahee, merii pukaar meiN.
Sadaa- aawaaz
Sochaa tha maykashii meiN bhulaa dungaa gham sabhii,
Shaayad tujhe hii bhool gayaa hoon Khumaar meiN.
Khumaar- Nashaa
is dil se itnii dillagee naa kiijiye saahab,
ye Toot jaae naa kaheeN yooN baar baar meiN.
Shaad......
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Bahut umdaaH...Shaad ji.....Bahut touching.....aur jo baat mujhe behad pasand aayee wo ye ki jajbaat apne wazood me zinda hai is peshkash me.....aksar alfaazon ke rawaanagi jazbaaton ko dabaa deti hai......par ye to jaise paani me cheeni ki tarah ghuli hui nazm hai.....bahot bahot pasand aayi.....dhero daad aapko.....
aapka
Pankaj...
Bahut gumraah karna chahta hai aaina mujhko !
Magar wo apni hi fitrat se hardam haar jaata hai !! (Pankaj Mishra 'Nawaab')
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25th September 2014, 01:13 PM
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Originally Posted by sameer'shaad'
SDC ke sabhi maujooda Hazraat ko Shaad ka aadaab... Tarhee misre par ek koshish pesh kar raha hoon......... padhiyega, aur bataiyega kaisii lagee...
ye tarhee ghazal hai isliye Maqtaa avoid kar raha hoon....
tanhaa sa rah gayaa hoon main apne mazaar meiN,
Lagtaa nahii hai dil meraa ujDe dayaar meiN.
is baar faqat khaar* hi aayeN hain shaakh par,
kya kya khile they Gul yahaaN pichlii bahaar meiN.
khaar- Kaante
aa jaae ab kazaa* to mileN raahateN mujhko,
zindaa to huN magar huN isii intezaar meiN.
Kazaa- maut
Tum bhi yahaan se bin ruke hi kooch kar gaye,
koyee sadaa bachee nahee, merii pukaar meiN.
Sadaa- aawaaz
Sochaa tha maykashii meiN bhulaa dungaa gham sabhii,
Shaayad tujhe hii bhool gayaa hoon Khumaar meiN.
Khumaar- Nashaa
is dil se itnii dillagee naa kiijiye saahab,
ye Toot jaae naa kaheeN yooN baar baar meiN.
Shaad......
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waaaaaaaaaaahhhhh!!!
Shoaibbhai,
aapkii qalam se aur ek zor shor kii kaavish.....
bhai,
agar khafaa na ho toh, aakhir ke sher meN 'ye Toot jaae naa kaheeN yooN baar baar meiN', 'meiN' kuch khatak sa rahaa hai..... agar 'baar' se aapka matlab 'burden'/'boz' hai toh uskii repetition nahi hogii, aur agar uske maani 'again & again' hai toh 'meiN' kaa hona sahi nahi lag rahaa...
agar gustaakhi huii ho toh muaafee ka arzmand hooN......
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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25th September 2014, 02:06 PM
Wah Sameer sb.
bohut damdaar aur lajawaab kalam hai.
Bahadur Shah Zafar ki Ghazal ke misre ko aap ne bakhoobi nibhate hue Ghazal mukammal kardi. oh misra hai..lagta nahin hai jee mera ujde dayar men.
Shayeri ka hunar qabil-e-tareef hai.
Mubarak ho.
Mujeeb Parwaaz.
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25th September 2014, 11:13 PM
Shaad
Sher se hi kuch kahungi
Ek Naya hausla -jahaan badal dega
Kalam ki dhaar - kathin dager badal dega
tufanoon se takraye jo kashti tere hausla mat haar
Qalam tumhara tufaanon ka rukh badal dega
take care
Di
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25th September 2014, 11:50 PM
kya baat hai shoiab bhai.....mehfil loot lee aapne to......dil se nikke ehsaaso ko mera salaam.......bahut hee khoob.....
एक हाथ में दिल उनके एक हाथ में खंजर था
चेहरे पे दोस्त का मुखौटा अजीब सा मंजर था
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26th September 2014, 03:32 PM
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Bahut umdaaH...Shaad ji.....Bahut touching.....aur jo baat mujhe behad pasand aayee wo ye ki jajbaat apne wazood me zinda hai is peshkash me.....aksar alfaazon ke rawaanagi jazbaaton ko dabaa deti hai......par ye to jaise paani me cheeni ki tarah ghuli hui nazm hai.....bahot bahot pasand aayi.....dhero daad aapko.....
aapka
Pankaj...
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bahot inaayat hai aapki pankaj saahab...... behad mamnoon hoon jo aapne apne keemtee lafzon se nawaazaa aur khaak lafzon ki pazeeraai farmaai.....
behad shukriyaa aapka...
Shaad...
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26th September 2014, 10:14 PM
is baar faqat khaar hi aayeN hain shaakh par,
kya kya khile they Gul yahaaN pichlii bahaar meiN. ye sher bahut hi pasand aaya hume shaad saheb.. is gazal ke liye dheroon daad aapko.. likhte rahe yu hi.. or apne naam ki trah hamesha kush rahe..
Mujse ab Shayriya nahi hoti,
mujhe Lafzo ne maar dala hai...nm
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27th September 2014, 04:27 AM
kar diya na phir kamaal!
amaa tum meri jaan le kar hi maanoge!!!!
kya fiiqr-o-lehja hai, "Subhaan-Allah" sadke jaauN tumhaare jigar
go ek shikayat hai is baar : maqta se mehroom rakh kar na-iNsaafi kar di miyaaN
tumhaari pareshaani bhi bajaa hai lekin tarahi Ghazal meiN bhi maqta kehne ki poori ijaazat hai, darj kiyo to aur lutf aavega
mubarak ho
ek bakraa udhaar hai tum par, yaad rakhio!
rab raakha
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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29th September 2014, 10:28 AM
Waah bahut khoob shaad ji....ek aur behtareen gazal.....dil se daad....
अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी
आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे
madhu..
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bahot bahot shukriyaa aapki muhabbaton ke liye Aadil saahab.....
mujhe behad khushi huii ye jaankar ke aapko ye ghazal pasand aa sakii.....
aur jis sher par aapne nishandehii ki hai wo kaafii simple aur saada sa sher hai... ye aapko pareshan kaise kar gaya ye merii samajh ke baahar hai.... khair aapne sawaal kiyaa hai to jawaab dena mera farz hai.... baar aur bhaar me farq hai, isliye bojh se relate nahi kar sakte hain ise...... aur baar baar yaani again and again.....
agar aap oolaa ko dhyan se padhiye fir se to saani relate karne me aasaani ho jaaegi aapko...
sher hai "is dil se itni dillagee na kijiye sahab" lafz itnii par zor dijiye , itni baar yaani bahot baar yaani baar baar.... so saani aisa rahega ke baar baar ki dillagee me kahin ye toot na jaae ....
shukriyaa aapka ek baar fiir se,,, aate rahiyega
Shaad....
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5th October 2014, 10:14 AM
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Wah Sameer sb.
bohut damdaar aur lajawaab kalam hai.
Bahadur Shah Zafar ki Ghazal ke misre ko aap ne bakhoobi nibhate hue Ghazal mukammal kardi. oh misra hai..lagta nahin hai jee mera ujde dayar men.
Shayeri ka hunar qabil-e-tareef hai.
Mubarak ho.
Mujeeb Parwaaz.
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behad shukriyaa aapki beintehaaN khuloos aur pazeeraai ke liye Mujeeb saahab..... Jee haan zafar ka kalaam ka ek sher ko tahree misre ki tarah maine isme istemaal kiyaa hai... aur bahot shukriyaa jo aapne ise pasand kiyaaa aate rahiyegaa.....
Shaad...
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6th October 2014, 02:34 PM
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SDC ke sabhi maujooda Hazraat ko Shaad ka aadaab... Tarhee misre par ek koshish pesh kar raha hoon......... padhiyega, aur bataiyega kaisii lagee...
ye tarhee ghazal hai isliye Maqtaa avoid kar raha hoon....
tanhaa sa rah gayaa hoon main apne mazaar meiN,
Lagtaa nahii hai dil meraa ujDe dayaar meiN.
is baar faqat khaar* hi aayeN hain shaakh par,
kya kya khile they Gul yahaaN pichlii bahaar meiN.
khaar- Kaante
aa jaae ab kazaa* to mileN raahateN mujhko,
zindaa to huN magar huN isii intezaar meiN.
Kazaa- maut
Tum bhi yahaan se bin ruke hi kooch kar gaye,
koyee sadaa bachee nahee, merii pukaar meiN.
Sadaa- aawaaz
Sochaa tha maykashii meiN bhulaa dungaa gham sabhii,
Shaayad tujhe hii bhool gayaa hoon Khumaar meiN.
Khumaar- Nashaa
is dil se itnii dillagee naa kiijiye saahab,
ye Toot jaae naa kaheeN yooN baar baar meiN.
Shaad......
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Shaad bhai....speecless....superb
reps added +++
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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7th October 2014, 08:06 PM
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Shaad
Sher se hi kuch kahungi
Ek Naya hausla -jahaan badal dega
Kalam ki dhaar - kathin dager badal dega
tufanoon se takraye jo kashti tere hausla mat haar
Qalam tumhara tufaanon ka rukh badal dega
take care
Di
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Sukanya dee.....
bahot bahot shukriyaa aapka , is andaaz se aapne daad aur duaaen diin uske liye main aapka bahot shukrguzaar hoon..... aati rahiyega
Shaad.....
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8th October 2014, 02:53 PM
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kya baat hai shoiab bhai.....mehfil loot lee aapne to......dil se nikke ehsaaso ko mera salaam.......bahut hee khoob.....
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bahot bahot shukiyaa aapka Aru bhai........ aapki daad aur duaaon se mamnoon hoon aapka... aate rahen
Shaad....
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8th October 2014, 09:20 PM
Sameer ji ko raj ka bhut saara pyar bhara namaskaar...janaab bahadur shah jaffar ki yaad jinda kar di aapne...bakamaal gazal or maikash bhai ki shikayat bhi wazib hai makkta keh hii do ab miyyan...Raj..
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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9th October 2014, 01:01 PM
Maikash bhai aur Rajveer saahab.....
aap dono ka tahe dil se mashkoor o mamnoon hoon jo bazm me aapne dastak dee... aur mujh haqeer ko apni duaaon se nawaazaa.....
aap dono se awwal to muaafii ka talabgaar hooon jo takheer me pesh huaa , khair derii ke ewaz me maine uski bharpaai karne ki koshish ki hai aur aap dono ke huqum ki tameel karte hue maine ghazal me apna Maqtaa shaamil kar diyaa hai..... aap pahli post me hi use dekh sakte hain.....
Aage bhi aate raheN, aur duaaon me yaad rakkhen...
Shaad.....
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9th October 2014, 01:03 PM
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Shaad bhai....speecless....superb
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bahot bahot shukriyaa aapke pyaar aur duaaon ke liye sunita dee.... aati rahiyega aur khush rahiye... thanks for reps...
Shaad...
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9th October 2014, 01:39 PM
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Waah bahut khoob shaad ji....ek aur behtareen gazal.....dil se daad....
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Dhanyawaad aapka dil ki gahraaiyon se Madhu ji..... aati rahiyega...
Shaad....
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is baar faqat khaar hi aayeN hain shaakh par,
kya kya khile they Gul yahaaN pichlii bahaar meiN. ye sher bahut hi pasand aaya hume shaad saheb.. is gazal ke liye dheroon daad aapko.. likhte rahe yu hi.. or apne naam ki trah hamesha kush rahe..
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inaayat hai aapki tabaah saahab...
tashreef laate raheN
Shaad....
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9th October 2014, 01:41 PM
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kya baat hai shoiab bhai.....mehfil loot lee aapne to......dil se nikke ehsaaso ko mera salaam.......bahut hee khoob.....
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bahot bahot shukriyaa aapka Aru bhai jo aapne is andaaz me hamaari tareefen ki hain......
khush rahen aur apna khayaal rakhen....
Shaad....
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11th October 2014, 06:41 PM
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SDC ke sabhi maujooda Hazraat ko Shaad ka aadaab... Tarhee misre par ek koshish pesh kar raha hoon......... padhiyega, aur bataiyega kaisii lagee...
ye tarhee ghazal hai isliye Maqtaa avoid kar raha hoon....
tanhaa sa rah gayaa hoon main apne mazaar meiN,
Lagtaa nahii hai dil meraa ujDe dayaar meiN.
is baar faqat khaar* hi aayeN hain shaakh par,
kya kya khile they Gul yahaaN pichlii bahaar meiN.
khaar- Kaante
aa jaae ab kazaa* to mileN raahateN mujhko,
zindaa to huN magar huN isii intezaar meiN.
Kazaa- maut
Tum bhi yahaan se bin ruke hi kooch kar gaye,
koyee sadaa bachee nahee, merii pukaar meiN.
Sadaa- aawaaz
Sochaa tha maykashii meiN bhulaa dungaa gham sabhii,
Shaayad tujhe hii bhool gayaa hoon Khumaar meiN.
Khumaar- Nashaa
is dil se itnii dillagee naa kiijiye saahab,
ye Toot jaae naa kaheeN yooN baar baar meiN.
Khaas kar ke Maikash saahab aur Raj saahab ki farmaaish par maqta pesh hai
Zaahid sharaab aur pilaa, Shaad kar Mujhe,
Baaki hai muddateN abhi Allah ki maar meiN.
Shaad......
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Shaad bhai
Kya kahuun, teen chaar dafa padh chuka hoon aur lagtaa hai ki baar baar padhun..
Pur asar shayad mein bayaan nahi kar paaungaa aur aapka maktaa to bas kamaal hai
Nacheez ka salaam qubool kijiye is khoobsurat nazm par..
Yunhi likhte rahiYeGaa
aapka apna
Qasid
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क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ
रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है
'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें
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14th October 2014, 12:20 PM
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Shaad bhai
Kya kahuun, teen chaar dafa padh chuka hoon aur lagtaa hai ki baar baar padhun..
Pur asar shayad mein bayaan nahi kar paaungaa aur aapka maktaa to bas kamaal hai
Nacheez ka salaam qubool kijiye is khoobsurat nazm par..
Yunhi likhte rahiYeGaa
aapka apna
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Anu bhai..... aapki beintehaan muhabbat aur khuloos hai jo hame aapka ehsaanmand kar detaa hai..... aapne jis tarah se nacheez ke adnaa aur khaak lafzon ki pazeeraai farmaai hai wo qaabile deed hai aapka ehsaan hai mujh par....
guzaarish karta hoon ke aage bhi aapkaa saath aur pyaar miltaa rahega yunhi.... tashreef laate rahen
Shaad.....
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14th October 2014, 10:08 PM
aadaab shaad bhai
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Lagtaa nahii hai dil meraa ujDe dayaar meiN
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bahut hi umda sher , mukamal wazeh or behtreen khayaal , daad qabool fermaaieN
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kya kya khile they Gul yahaaN pichlii bahaar meiN.
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wah wah , huzoor kiya kehny , kamaal hai shaad bhai
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zindaa to huN magar huN isii intezaar meiN.
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aik sher yaad aa raha hai jagjeet saHb ki ghazal ka
dafn ker do hamien ke saans mily
saans kuch dair se thami si hai
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koyee sadaa bachee nahee, merii pukaar meiN.
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arre ... waah waah waah ! meHfil aapki huwi , loot lee meHfil apne
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Shaayad tujhe hii bhool gayaa hoon Khumaar meiN.
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wah wah !
miyaaN itna acha na likha karo keh lafz hi na mileN tareef ke liye :P
bahut bahut bahut khoob , kamaal ker diya appne shaad bhai
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is dil se itnii dillagee naa kiijiye saahab,
ye Toot jaae naa kaheeN yooN baar baar meiN.
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poori ghazal kamaal hai moHteram
likhty rahien ...
daad qabool fermaaien .
reps ll be added if available
i am your FAN shaad bhai
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14th October 2014, 10:16 PM
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SDC ke sabhi maujooda Hazraat ko Shaad ka aadaab... Tarhee misre par ek koshish pesh kar raha hoon......... padhiyega, aur bataiyega kaisii lagee...
ye tarhee ghazal hai isliye Maqtaa avoid kar raha hoon....
tanhaa sa rah gayaa hoon main apne mazaar meiN,
Lagtaa nahii hai dil meraa ujDe dayaar meiN.
is baar faqat khaar* hi aayeN hain shaakh par,
kya kya khile they Gul yahaaN pichlii bahaar meiN.
khaar- Kaante
aa jaae ab kazaa* to mileN raahateN mujhko,
zindaa to huN magar huN isii intezaar meiN.
Kazaa- maut
Tum bhi yahaan se bin ruke hi kooch kar gaye,
koyee sadaa bachee nahee, merii pukaar meiN.
Sadaa- aawaaz
Sochaa tha maykashii meiN bhulaa dungaa gham sabhii,
Shaayad tujhe hii bhool gayaa hoon Khumaar meiN.
Khumaar- Nashaa
is dil se itnii dillagee naa kiijiye saahab,
ye Toot jaae naa kaheeN yooN baar baar meiN.
Khaas kar ke Maikash saahab aur Raj saahab ki farmaaish par maqta pesh hai
Zaahid sharaab aur pilaa, Shaad kar Mujhe,
Baaki hai muddateN abhi Allah ki maar meiN.
Shaad......
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kyaa baat hai shaad saheb, aap ne to apni kalam se ghazab dhaaya hai dilo.N par, maashaallah mehfil hee loot li janaab, behad khoob likha hai. Dil aa gaya aap ki is ghazal par.
reagrds
manu
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14th October 2014, 11:26 PM
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Originally Posted by sameer'shaad'
SDC ke sabhi maujooda Hazraat ko Shaad ka aadaab... Tarhee misre par ek koshish pesh kar raha hoon......... padhiyega, aur bataiyega kaisii lagee...
ye tarhee ghazal hai isliye Maqtaa avoid kar raha hoon....
tanhaa sa rah gayaa hoon main apne mazaar meiN,
Lagtaa nahii hai dil meraa ujDe dayaar meiN.
is baar faqat khaar* hi aayeN hain shaakh par,
kya kya khile they Gul yahaaN pichlii bahaar meiN.
khaar- Kaante
aa jaae ab kazaa* to mileN raahateN mujhko,
zindaa to huN magar huN isii intezaar meiN.
Kazaa- maut
Tum bhi yahaan se bin ruke hi kooch kar gaye,
koyee sadaa bachee nahee, merii pukaar meiN.
Sadaa- aawaaz
Sochaa tha maykashii meiN bhulaa dungaa gham sabhii,
Shaayad tujhe hii bhool gayaa hoon Khumaar meiN.
Khumaar- Nashaa
is dil se itnii dillagee naa kiijiye saahab,
ye Toot jaae naa kaheeN yooN baar baar meiN.
Khaas kar ke Maikash saahab aur Raj saahab ki farmaaish par maqta pesh hai
Zaahid sharaab aur pilaa, Shaad kar Mujhe,
Baaki hai muddateN abhi Allah ki maar meiN.
Shaad......
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Waah, kyaa baat hai Shaad miyaan... bahut umda aashaar pesh kiye hain tumne... Har ek sher pasand aaya mujhe... Daad kubool karo... yun hi likhte raho!
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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16th October 2014, 11:55 AM
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aadaab shaad bhai
bahut hi umda sher , mukamal wazeh or behtreen khayaal , daad qabool fermaaieN
wah wah , huzoor kiya kehny , kamaal hai shaad bhai
aik sher yaad aa raha hai jagjeet saHb ki ghazal ka
dafn ker do hamien ke saans mily
saans kuch dair se thami si hai
arre ... waah waah waah ! meHfil aapki huwi , loot lee meHfil apne
wah wah !
miyaaN itna acha na likha karo keh lafz hi na mileN tareef ke liye :P
bahut bahut bahut khoob , kamaal ker diya appne shaad bhai
poori ghazal kamaal hai moHteram
likhty rahien ...
daad qabool fermaaien .
reps ll be added if available
i am your FAN shaad bhai
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Mujeeb bhai aadaab......
behad masarrat ka sabab hai aapka ye khat mere liye......
jis andaaz se aapne nacheez ke kalaam ki pazeeraai farmaai hai wo mere liye khud ek misaal hai..... is darja muhabbat aur khuloos haasil hota rahe yahi meri ghazlon ka haasil hai.....
aur mureed to mujhe aapne bana liya hai sarkaar... is andaaz se tareef karenge to bandaa aapki hi yaad me baitha rahegaa......
aate rahhna bhai..... khush rahiye
Shaad.....
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16th October 2014, 12:07 PM
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Originally Posted by sameer'shaad'
SDC ke sabhi maujooda Hazraat ko Shaad ka aadaab... Tarhee misre par ek koshish pesh kar raha hoon......... padhiyega, aur bataiyega kaisii lagee...
ye tarhee ghazal hai isliye Maqtaa avoid kar raha hoon....
tanhaa sa rah gayaa hoon main apne mazaar meiN,
Lagtaa nahii hai dil meraa ujDe dayaar meiN.
is baar faqat khaar* hi aayeN hain shaakh par,
kya kya khile they Gul yahaaN pichlii bahaar meiN.
khaar- Kaante
aa jaae ab kazaa* to mileN raahateN mujhko,
zindaa to huN magar huN isii intezaar meiN.
Kazaa- maut
Tum bhi yahaan se bin ruke hi kooch kar gaye,
koyee sadaa bachee nahee, merii pukaar meiN.
Sadaa- aawaaz
Sochaa tha maykashii meiN bhulaa dungaa gham sabhii,
Shaayad tujhe hii bhool gayaa hoon Khumaar meiN.
Khumaar- Nashaa
is dil se itnii dillagee naa kiijiye saahab,
ye Toot jaae naa kaheeN yooN baar baar meiN.
Khaas kar ke Maikash saahab aur Raj saahab ki farmaaish par maqta pesh hai
Zaahid sharaab aur pilaa, Shaad kar Mujhe,
Baaki hai muddateN abhi Allah ki maar meiN.
Shaad......
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Waah Shaad Sahab.....kini behatreen Ghazal se nawaza hai aapne ........har sher dil ko chhu gaya....
matle ne hi itna dikash raha ..ki kya kahne....
Dili daad qabool keejiyega....
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16th October 2014, 03:33 PM
bahut achee ash aar hain bahut achaa lagaa padh ke
mere ashar ko mahoob samjh ke chhoomte the jo
kho gaye hain woh log ab un kee justzoo hai
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17th October 2014, 06:04 PM
Wah...kitni behtrin gazal likhi hai apne...kabil e tarif...
If you have it [love],
you don't need to have anything else.
If you don't have it,
it doesn't matter much what else you do have.
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18th October 2014, 01:15 AM
Shaad Sahaab Aadaab ... !
Wallaah janab kyaa sanjeedgi hai aapki kalam meiN ... har sher behad umda huaa hai janab ...
Badi hi gehri aur umda fikr ko khoobsurat lafzoN meiN kalam baNd kiya hai aapne ...
Is umdaa shahkaar par meri dili daad kabul kijiye ...
Maqte ka kya kahuN janab waqai ek rindana khayaal ko ujagar kiya hai aapne ...
Likhte rahiye janab ....
Shaad O aabaad rahiye ....
Khudaa Hafez...
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18th October 2014, 10:05 AM
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kyaa baat hai shaad saheb, aap ne to apni kalam se ghazab dhaaya hai dilo.N par, maashaallah mehfil hee loot li janaab, behad khoob likha hai. Dil aa gaya aap ki is ghazal par.
reagrds
manu
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aapki inaayat hai manu bhai..... aapko mere ehsaas pasand aaye ye mere liye bahot khushi ki baat hai..... aate rahiyega
shukriyaa
Shaad.....
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18th October 2014, 10:14 AM
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Waah, kyaa baat hai Shaad miyaan... bahut umda aashaar pesh kiye hain tumne... Har ek sher pasand aaya mujhe... Daad kubool karo... yun hi likhte raho!
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aapki pasandeedgii ka bahot bahot shukriyaa Pulkit bhaiyaa.....
aap tashreef laaye mere liye bahot badii baat hai.... aate rahiyega....
Shaad.....
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19th October 2014, 09:16 AM
Sameer Bhai ,
Aapko per ke aisa laga jaisi aap SDC ke Aamir Khan ho , very versatile shayar,
jo likhta kabhi 2 hai per uskii shayree mein dum hota hai
Tum bhi yahaan se bin ruke hi kooch kar gaye,
koyee sadaa bachee nahee, merii pukaar meiN.
Vaise tau saree ghazal chchi lagee , per ye ahsaar dil ko chu gaye ,,
Wah janab
Sanjay Sehgal
khone Pane ki daur mein yun uljha hai har bashar ,
Isee kashmeqash mein kat raha Zindagee ka safar.
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19th October 2014, 09:14 PM
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Waah Shaad Sahab.....kini behatreen Ghazal se nawaza hai aapne ........har sher dil ko chhu gaya....
matle ne hi itna dikash raha ..ki kya kahne....
Dili daad qabool keejiyega....
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merii khushnaseebi hai Harash bhaiyaa jo aaapko ye saada si ghazal bhaa gayee.... aapki inaayat aur behad muhabbat se main mamnoon hooon....
aate rahiyegaa.... apna khayaal rakhiye
Shaad....
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20th October 2014, 12:23 PM
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bahut achee ash aar hain bahut achaa lagaa padh ke
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bahot bahot shukriyaa aapka Anil bhaiyaa.... aate rahiyegaa
Shaad...
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20th October 2014, 12:23 PM
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Wah...kitni behtrin gazal likhi hai apne...kabil e tarif...
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inaayat hai aapki Palu........ shukriyaa tahe dil se aapka....
Shaad....
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20th October 2014, 12:32 PM
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Shaad Sahaab Aadaab ... !
Wallaah janab kyaa sanjeedgi hai aapki kalam meiN ... har sher behad umda huaa hai janab ...
Badi hi gehri aur umda fikr ko khoobsurat lafzoN meiN kalam baNd kiya hai aapne ...
Is umdaa shahkaar par meri dili daad kabul kijiye ...
Maqte ka kya kahuN janab waqai ek rindana khayaal ko ujagar kiya hai aapne ...
Likhte rahiye janab ....
Shaad O aabaad rahiye ....
Khudaa Hafez...
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Sameer saahab aadaab..... mudaat huii ke aap ne bazm me dastek naahii dii thii... aaur aaj jo aapko yahaan moujood paaya to dil ko behad tasalli auur sukoon haaasil huaa hai..... ye mojezaa to aapki karaamaate-beenaaii kaa hai jo ghoore pe bhi gauhar dhund nikaalte hain.... aapko ye adnaa se jazbaat pasand aaye baraae karam mehrbaaani hai aapkii... ummeed karunga ke aage bhi ye hasrat aapko dekhne ki poorii hotii rahe , aur aaap apni aamad banaae rakkheN.....
Duaaon ka talabgaar hoon.....
Shaad......
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21st October 2014, 11:23 AM
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Sameer Bhai ,
Aapko per ke aisa laga jaisi aap SDC ke Aamir Khan ho , very versatile shayar,
jo likhta kabhi 2 hai per uskii shayree mein dum hota hai
Tum bhi yahaan se bin ruke hi kooch kar gaye,
koyee sadaa bachee nahee, merii pukaar meiN.
Vaise tau saree ghazal chchi lagee , per ye ahsaar dil ko chu gaye ,,
Wah janab
Sanjay Sehgal
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hahahahhaha waaahhh kyaa andaaz hai aapki tareefoN ka sanjay saahab....
isiliye mujhe shiqaayat rahtii hai ke aap aate to hain magar bahot deriii se....
kyonki aapki tareef ke binaa ye mahfil adhurii si jaan padtee hai.....
aapki bahot bahot inaayat aur mehrbaani huii hai mujh par.... aate rahiyegaa..... khush rahiye
Shaad.....
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25th October 2014, 10:58 AM
Thanks to one and all for your lovely wishes and love regards my work...
Shaad....
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